Run: 2026-02-25-01KJ950H2ZY75XWTWE0WEE3SYZ

Run Details

Duration:
26.0s
Cost:
$0.002847
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Harlow descended the narrow, reeking stairwell, each step a deliberate placement of her polished heel. The air grew colder, thicker, laced with the metallic tang of damp concrete and something else… something like old blood and ozone. Detective Quinn pulled her collar tighter, her salt-and-pepper hair barely visible beneath the brim of her fedora. Eighteen years on the force, and she’d never quite gotten used to the smell of places forgotten by the city above. This was worse than any abandoned warehouse or derelict dockside. This was *underneath*. The uniformed officers guarding the makeshift cordon looked pale, their flashlights cutting shaky beams through the gloom. They’d clearly never expected to be assigned a scene like this. Harlow nodded curtly, not breaking stride. Her sharp jawline was set, her brown eyes scanning, cataloging every detail. The worn leather watch on her left wrist ticked with a silence loud in the oppressive hush. She reached the bottom of the stairs and stepped into a vast, cavernous space. An abandoned Tube station. Not just derelict; this place had been *activated*. Banners of faded, midnight-blue silk hung from the arched ceiling, strung between corroded metal supports. Alcoves carved into the tunnel walls, usually for emergency equipment, were now draped with shimmering fabrics or filled with oddly shaped, dark wooden crates. An undeniable current of unseen energy thrummed beneath the decay. This was the Veil Market, and it had moved its current haunt to this forgotten artery beneath Camden. They’d bypassed the usual entry protocols, but the bone token requirement still spoke volumes about the ‘clients’ who frequented this place. And the reason for which she was here. The crime scene itself was cordoned off near what might have once been a ticket booth. It wasn’t a body. Not this time. It was worse. It was an absence, a void where something significant had been, and the chaotic residue it left behind. She ducked under the yellow tape. A young constable, barely out of his teens, flinched. “Detective Quinn. We’ve secured the area. Forensics are on their way, but… well, it’s a bit weird.” “Weird is my specialty, Constable,” Harlow clipped, her voice low and steady, carrying the authority of her military-grade bearing. Her eyes swept over the scene. A raised platform, now bare, was surrounded by a scattering of what looked like finely ground obsidian, not dust but something that caught the faint emergency lighting like crushed night. There were no footprints here that made sense, no forced entry marks on the metal shutters of the alcoves, no sign of a conventional struggle. Just this immaculate spill of the dark powder. And a faint, persistent scent of bitter almonds, too faint for the rookies to notice, but sharp enough to prick Harlow’s senses. Then she saw her. Standing by a display case that held what looked like intricately carved lockets, her curly red hair a vibrant splash against the muted, oppressive tones, was Eva Kowalski. Eva, her informant, her reluctant expert on the city’s underbelly of the arcane. Eva, with her round glasses perched on her nose and a worn leather satchel brimming with books slung over her shoulder. She was adjusting her glasses, a nervous habit of tucking a stray curl behind her left ear, her freckled face scrunched in concentration. Harlow felt a familiar flicker of annoyance mixed with reluctant gratitude. “Kowalski? What are you doing here? Did you call this in?” Eva looked up, her green eyes widening slightly behind her lenses. “Detective. No, not me. I was… following a lead on the purported ‘Whispers of Eldoria’ auction. Heard this market might be setting up shop around here. I have a… friend in the Met who knows I have an interest in these things. He thought I might be able to identify some of the merchandise if anything turned up. I was looking into that display case when they found… whatever this is.” She gestured vaguely at the obsidian dust. Harlow crossed the gap between them, her boots crunching softly on patches of grit. “Friend in the Met? Thorne?” Eva gave a small nod, tucking her hair again. “He mentioned the unusual access required for this particular venue was being handled by a special unit. He didn’t say why. Until you arrived. And then he called me.” “He knows I’ve been hunting for this place,” Harlow said, her gaze sweeping back to the obsidian spill. “And the people who use it. The ones trafficking in… unusual commodities. Commodities that might be connected to Morris’s case.” The unexplained circumstances, the supernatural origins she couldn't articulate but felt in her bones. That gnawing uncertainty that haunted her. “This isn’t a theft, is it?” Eva asked softly, stepping closer, her own keen eyes examining the area. “There’s no disruption. No signs of forced retrieval. Just… an offering? Or a residue left behind.” Harlow knelt, her movements economical, almost military. She scooped a tiny amount of the obsidian dust into a clear plastic evidence bag. It felt unnaturally cold, even through the plastic. “The official report is a missing artifact. Something called the ‘Heartstone of Aethelred.’ Apparently, it was stored on that platform. High value, black market. Expected it to be a smash-and-grab through the back service tunnels, or a deal gone wrong. But there’s no indication of either.” “The Heartstone,” Eva murmured, her brow furrowing. She reached into her satchel, her fingers sifting through papers and small cloth-bound books. “From what I recall from ancient texts… the Heartstone wasn't a gem in the traditional sense. It was said to be a focal point, a binding agent. Responsible for anchoring certain dimensional doorways. Or, conversely, for sealing them. It’s incredibly dangerous if misused. The ‘missing artifact’ explanation feels… insufficient, doesn’t it?” Eva’s voice was quiet, filled with academic observation, yet edged with a growing unease. “Insufficient is an understatement,” Harlow agreed, standing up. Her eyes were fixed on the edge of the obsidian spill. It wasn’t a perfect circle. It was irregular, almost… flowing. As if it had spilled from an invisible point, not a physical object being dragged away. “There’s no drag marks, no signs of a tool being used to pry it loose. But the powder… it’s not just obsidian dust, is it? It feels… charged.” Eva nodded her assent. “It’s infused with residual energy. The ‘Shade’ crafters who make these tools… they often imbue them with safeguards. Or anchors. This feels like the remnants of a successful extraction, but done by means that bypassed physical interaction.” She paused, a flicker of recognition in her eyes. “It’s how some entities can pull objects, or even people, from one plane to another without leaving a trace of their passage. They leave behind a… signature of displacement.” Harlow’s gaze sharpened. “A signature of displacement. You mean like… like when Morris…” She stopped herself, the words catching in her throat. The memory of her partner, dissolved into nothingness during a raid three years ago, a raid that had seemed impossibly supernatural even then, but she'd dismissed it as shock, as hallucination. Now, here again. “Like when something is ripped from its mooring.” Eva’s green eyes met hers, softening with understanding. “Something like that, Detective. This powder… it’s a detritus. A consequence.” Harlow walked slowly around the platform, her military bearing unwavering, but her mind racing. She circled the area where the missing Heartstone had been. She noted the faint, almost imperceptible scent of bitter almonds again. It wasn't associated with decomposition. It was… something else. A chemical, perhaps. Or a ritualistic component. “Forensics will get bogged down trying to identify this powder as a mineral. They won’t find anything conventional,” Harlow mused aloud, more to herself than to Eva. “They’ll miss the energy. The *wrongness* of it.” She looked at the smooth, unblemished metal of the platform. No scratches, no dents. If the Heartstone was physically pried away, there should be *some* mark. “The Veil Market is known for its Shade artisans,” Eva said, pulling a small, tarnished brass object from another pocket in her satchel. It was a compass, its casing etched with intricate, interlocking sigils that seemed to shift in the dim light. A faint patina of verdigris clung to its surface. “This is a Veil Compass. Crafted by one of them. A tool to navigate dimensional currents, or locate supernatural points of interest. The needle… it’s supposed to point towards the nearest rift or portal. Mine has been twitching erratically since I entered this station.” Harlow took the compass, turning it over in her gloved hand. The needle, usually steady, was quivering, oscillating wildly between the cardinal points, as if overwhelmed by the ambient energy. “So, the energy signature here is strong enough to throw this off?” “Or it’s very close to several points of disruption,” Eva corrected. “Which is concerning. The Heartstone being used as a lock is one thing. But if it’s been *taken*… and this market is active… it means whatever took it is using this space to operate, or perhaps returning to it.” Harlow handed the compass back. “The bitter almond scent,” she said, focusing. “I’ve smelled it before. Not in a crime scene, but during some simulations. Chemical warfare training. Certain nerve gases had that smell. Cyanides.” Eva frowned, pushing her glasses up her nose. “Cyanide often leaves residue. Chemical analysis would pick that up. But this… this doesn’t feel like a chemical weapon, Detective. The nature of the energy here is far more… esoteric.” Harlow ignored her. Her eyes were once again fixed on the obsidian powder. She looked past it, towards the shadowed alcoves, the draped fabrics. They fluttered slightly, though there was no discernible draft. The silence in the vast space wasn't empty; it was filled with waiting. “They didn’t *take* it,” Harlow murmured, the pieces clicking into place with a chilling finality. It wasn't about forceful removal. It was about *activation*. “They didn’t pry it loose. They *used* it. The Heartstone wasn't stolen; it was deployed. It wasn't removed from its mooring; it *was* the mooring, and it's been… awakened.” Eva tilted her head, listening intently. “Awakened? You mean it’s active, not missing?” “The ‘missing artifact’ is a cover,” Harlow said, her voice hardening. “Or a misunderstanding by whoever reported it. Whoever was here didn't steal the Heartstone. They harnessed it. Used its properties to open something. Or to move something through. The obsidian powder isn't evidence of extraction; it’s the *byproduct* of the process. Like exhaust fumes. And the bitter almond scent… it’s not cyanide. It’s the residue of whatever energy or substance was *channeled*. This isn’t a theft; it’s a gateway being opened.” She stood, her gaze sweeping across the dark, cavernous space. The Veil Market wasn't just a place for illicit trade. It was a nexus. A point where the fabric of reality could be thinned, or breached. And whatever had been accessed, or whatever had accessed this place, was now loose in her city. “This isn’t about a missing object,” Harlow concluded, her gaze meeting Eva’s, a grim understanding dawning. “This is about containment. And Morris… he must have stumbled into something like this. Directly. And they… they just dissolved him.” Her voice was barely a whisper, the military precision cracking for just a moment, revealing the raw fear and resolve beneath. They hadn't just killed her partner; something had *unmade* him. And based on the void left where the Heartstone had been, and the lingering, unnatural chill in the air, whatever that something was, it was still very close. Harlow’s eyes scanned the cavernous space again, her deductive mind already working past the ‘what’ and ‘how’ towards the ‘who’ or ‘what else.’ The chalk outline was missing, but the impression was burned into her vision. She followed the irregular spill of obsidian dust with her eyes, tracing its impossible flow. It didn’t lead to a door, or a tunnel, or any conventional exit. It simply dissipated into the shadows, into the unnerving, pulsating darkness of the Veil Market. And the needle on Eva's Veil Compass, now resting on a nearby crate, finally stopped its frantic spinning and settled, pointing resolutely into the deepest, darkest part of the abandoned station. Not towards an exit. But deeper in.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
50.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags20
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"She gestured vaguely [vaguely]"
1"Eva asked softly [softly]"
2"Harlow mused aloud [aloud]"
dialogueSentences37
tagDensity0.541
leniency1
rawRatio0.15
effectiveRatio0.15
82.82% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2037
totalAiIsmAdverbs7
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count2
1
adverb"softly"
count2
2
adverb"slowly"
count1
3
adverb"very"
count2
highlights
0"slightly"
1"softly"
2"slowly"
3"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
36.18% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2037
totalAiIsms26
found
0
word"gloom"
count1
1
word"scanning"
count1
2
word"silence"
count2
3
word"oppressive"
count2
4
word"silk"
count1
5
word"chaotic"
count1
6
word"familiar"
count1
7
word"flicker"
count2
8
word"furrowing"
count1
9
word"perfect"
count1
10
word"charged"
count1
11
word"unwavering"
count1
12
word"racing"
count1
13
word"etched"
count1
14
word"intricate"
count1
15
word"navigate"
count1
16
word"fluttered"
count1
17
word"chilling"
count1
18
word"whisper"
count1
19
word"resolve"
count1
20
word"chill"
count1
21
word"scanned"
count1
22
word"tracing"
count1
highlights
0"gloom"
1"scanning"
2"silence"
3"oppressive"
4"silk"
5"chaotic"
6"familiar"
7"flicker"
8"furrowing"
9"perfect"
10"charged"
11"unwavering"
12"racing"
13"etched"
14"intricate"
15"navigate"
16"fluttered"
17"chilling"
18"whisper"
19"resolve"
20"chill"
21"scanned"
22"tracing"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"flicker of emotion"
count1
highlights
0"a flicker of recognition"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences114
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences114
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences132
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen78
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans12
markdownWords12
totalWords2037
ratio0.006
matches
0"underneath"
1"activated"
2"wrongness"
3"some"
4"taken"
5"take"
6"activation"
7"used"
8"was"
9"byproduct"
10"channeled"
11"unmade"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions16
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions51
wordCount1256
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity1.51
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Quinn1
Tube1
Veil4
Market3
Camden1
Harlow19
Eva17
Kowalski1
Heartstone3
Compass1
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Harlow"
2"Eva"
3"Kowalski"
4"Heartstone"
5"Compass"
places(empty)
globalScore0.744
windowScore0.5
1.19% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences84
glossingSentenceCount5
matches
0"something like old blood and ozone"
1"looked like finely ground obsidian, not d"
2"looked like intricately carved lockets, h"
3"seemed impossibly supernatural even then, but she'd dismissed it as shock, as hallucination"
4"sigils that seemed to shift in the dim light"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords0.982
wordCount2037
matches
0"not dust but something"
1"Not in a crime scene, but during some simulations"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences132
matches(empty)
90.96% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs33
mean61.73
std28.91
cv0.468
sampleLengths
088
163
2122
344
432
5110
689
722
889
919
1038
1158
1234
1376
1486
1573
1679
1764
1819
1951
2061
2195
2242
2350
2435
2538
2646
2753
2813
2982
3053
3196
32117
83.72% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount7
totalSentences114
matches
0"been *activated"
1"was cordoned"
2"was surrounded"
3"were fixed"
4"being dragged"
5"was filled"
6"been accessed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs211
matches
0"was adjusting"
1"was quivering"
34.63% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount7
flaggedSentences5
totalSentences132
ratio0.038
matches
0"Not just derelict; this place had been *activated*."
1"The silence in the vast space wasn't empty; it was filled with waiting."
2"“They didn’t pry it loose. They *used* it. The Heartstone wasn't stolen; it was deployed. It wasn't removed from its mooring; it *was* the mooring, and it's been… awakened.”"
3"“Or a misunderstanding by whoever reported it. Whoever was here didn't steal the Heartstone. They harnessed it. Used its properties to open something. Or to move something through. The obsidian powder isn't evidence of extraction; it’s the *byproduct* of the process. Like exhaust fumes. And the bitter almond scent… it’s not cyanide. It’s the residue of whatever energy or substance was *channeled*. This isn’t a theft; it’s a gateway being opened.”"
4"They hadn't just killed her partner; something had *unmade* him."
82.72% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount934
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"faded, midnight-blue silk"
1"small cloth-bound books."
adverbCount43
adverbRatio0.046038543897216275
lyAdverbCount17
lyAdverbRatio0.018201284796573874
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences132
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences132
mean15.43
std13.02
cv0.844
sampleLengths
015
116
26
317
421
510
63
717
811
96
1012
1117
1214
134
148
1515
1624
1710
1818
1921
208
2116
224
233
243
2518
266
279
2817
2919
306
3130
3225
338
3422
354
3628
3713
3821
3923
4011
4111
4211
4378
4414
455
469
4729
4818
4934
43.94% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats12
diversityRatio0.3181818181818182
totalSentences132
uniqueOpeners42
60.61% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences110
matches
0"Just this immaculate spill of"
1"Then she saw her."
ratio0.018
85.45% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount37
totalSentences110
matches
0"They’d clearly never expected to"
1"Her sharp jawline was set,"
2"She reached the bottom of"
3"They’d bypassed the usual entry"
4"It wasn’t a body."
5"It was worse."
6"It was an absence, a"
7"She ducked under the yellow"
8"Her eyes swept over the"
9"She was adjusting her glasses,"
10"She gestured vaguely at the"
11"She scooped a tiny amount"
12"It felt unnaturally cold, even"
13"She reached into her satchel,"
14"Her eyes were fixed on"
15"It wasn’t a perfect circle."
16"It was irregular, almost…"
17"She paused, a flicker of"
18"She stopped herself, the words"
19"She circled the area where"
ratio0.336
46.36% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount91
totalSentences110
matches
0"Harlow descended the narrow, reeking"
1"The air grew colder, thicker,"
2"something like old blood and"
3"Detective Quinn pulled her collar"
4"This was worse than any"
5"This was *underneath*."
6"The uniformed officers guarding the"
7"They’d clearly never expected to"
8"Harlow nodded curtly, not breaking"
9"Her sharp jawline was set,"
10"The worn leather watch on"
11"She reached the bottom of"
12"An abandoned Tube station."
13"Banners of faded, midnight-blue silk"
14"Alcoves carved into the tunnel"
15"An undeniable current of unseen"
16"This was the Veil Market,"
17"They’d bypassed the usual entry"
18"The crime scene itself was"
19"It wasn’t a body."
ratio0.827
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount3
totalSentences110
matches
0"As if it had spilled"
1"Now, here again."
2"If the Heartstone was physically"
ratio0.027
44.82% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences51
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"The uniformed officers guarding the makeshift cordon looked pale, their flashlights cutting shaky beams through the gloom."
1"A raised platform, now bare, was surrounded by a scattering of what looked like finely ground obsidian, not dust but something that caught the faint emergency l…"
2"Standing by a display case that held what looked like intricately carved lockets, her curly red hair a vibrant splash against the muted, oppressive tones, was E…"
3"The memory of her partner, dissolved into nothingness during a raid three years ago, a raid that had seemed impossibly supernatural even then, but she'd dismiss…"
4"Harlow walked slowly around the platform, her military bearing unwavering, but her mind racing."
5"It was a compass, its casing etched with intricate, interlocking sigils that seemed to shift in the dim light."
6"The needle, usually steady, was quivering, oscillating wildly between the cardinal points, as if overwhelmed by the ambient energy."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags20
uselessAdditionCount7
matches
0"Harlow said, her gaze sweeping back to the obsidian spill"
1"Eva murmured, her brow furrowing"
2"She paused, a flicker of recognition in her eyes"
3"She stopped, the words catching in her throat"
4"Harlow mused aloud, more to herself than to Eva"
5"Harlow murmured, the pieces clicking into place with a chilling finality"
6"Harlow said, her voice hardening"
14.86% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags10
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"Eva murmured (murmur)"
1"Harlow agreed (agree)"
2"Eva corrected (correct)"
3"Harlow murmured (murmur)"
4"Harlow concluded (conclude)"
dialogueSentences37
tagDensity0.27
leniency0.541
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.27
73.6086%