Run: 2026-02-25-01KJ950ZDE9HRV9B8Y623PFPV0

Run Details

Duration:
41.3s
Cost:
$0.016925
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rain hammered the pavement, kicking up a fine mist that blurred the neon signs of Soho into bleeding smudges of emerald and crimson. Harlow Quinn’s boots slapped the asphalt in a rhythmic, punishing cadence. Water sluiced off the brim of her coat and trickled down her neck, but she didn't break her stride. Thirty yards ahead, a figure in a water-logged jacket vaulted over a stack of discarded crates. "Stop, Herrera! You’re just adding a resisting charge to the pile!" Tomás didn't look back. His short, curly hair sat plastered to his skull, dark and heavy with the deluge. He banked hard left, his sneakers skidding on the slick cobbles of an alleyway that smelled of damp cardboard and rancid grease. Quinn rounded the corner a second later. Her heart hammered against her ribs, a dull ache she’d learned to ignore over eighteen years on the force. She reached out, fingers grazing the rough brick of the alley wall to steady her balance as she navigated a pile of overflowing bin bags. "I can't go back, Quinn! You don't know what they'll do!" Tomás’s voice drifted back, thin and frayed, barely audible over the roar of the downpour. He clutched his left forearm—the one Quinn knew bore a jagged scar—and squeezed through a gap in a rusted chain-link fence. Quinn hit the fence with her shoulder, the metal groaning as she forced her way after him. "I know enough to know you’re running with the wrong crowd. This ends tonight, Tommy. Give it up!" The chase spilled out of Soho and drifted toward the winding, light-starved fringes of Camden. The architecture here felt different—heavier, more oppressive. The streetlamps flickered with a rhythmic, pulsing frequency that made the shadows dance. Quinn’s lungs burned. She checked the worn leather watch on her left wrist. They’d been running for twenty minutes. Most suspects folded after ten. Herrera had the panicked stamina of a man who feared the destination more than the pursuit. They reached the Regent's Canal. The water was a black ribbon of ink, agitated by the falling rain. Tomás scrambled down a concrete embankment, his Saint Christopher medallion swinging wildly from his neck, catching a sliver of light from the bridge above. He didn't head for the towpath. Instead, he lunged toward a boarded-up entrance to a disused Tube station, a cavernous maw trapped behind plywood and rot. "Nowhere to run now!" Quinn skidded to the edge of the embankment. She pulled her torch from her belt and clicked it on. The beam sliced through the dark, illuminating Tomás as he tore at a loose section of the plywood. His olive skin looked grey in the artificial light. He fumbled with something in his pocket, his fingers trembling with a frantic, jerky energy. "Stay back, Harlow. You’ve got no jurisdiction where I’m going." Tomás pulled out a small, jagged object—a sliver of polished bone the size of a thumb. "Step away from the door, Tommy. Put your hands behind your head." Quinn moved down the slope, her movements sharp and calculated. She kept her right hand near her hip, though she hadn't drawn her weapon yet. The air near the station entrance felt thick, heavy with the scent of copper and old incense. It was a smell that triggered a cold, visceral memory of the night she lost Morris. The same unnatural pressure in the back of her jaw. Tomás pressed the bone token against a scorched mark on the station door. The wood didn't creak; it sighed. A section of the plywood swung inward on invisible hinges, revealing a staircase that plummeted into a darkness so absolute the torchlight seemed to dissolve at the threshold. "You don't want to follow me down there. You’re human, Quinn. Just human." Tomás stepped over the threshold. His silhouette vanished instantly, swallowed by the subterranean gloom. Quinn reached the door. She kicked the plywood further open, hearing it thud against the interior stone. The air rising from the depths was warm and smelled of spice, ozone, and something metallic. This wasn't a standard squat. This was the entrance to the Veil Market. She’d heard the whispers in the holding cells, the fevered ramblings of informants who swore there was a city beneath the city that only moved during the full moon. She looked at her watch again. The moon was hidden by the storm, but the calendar didn't lie. "I’m coming in, Herrera! Don't make me use the lead!" Quinn tightened her grip on the torch. She peered down the stairs and saw a flickering, amber glow deep below. Shadows moved against the distant walls—distorted, elongated shapes that didn't quite match the human forms that cast them. A low hum vibrated in the soles of her boots, a subterranean throb that felt like a giant’s heartbeat. She thought of Morris. She thought of his badge sitting in her top drawer and the way the official report had called his death a 'gas leak accident.' There had been no gas leak. There had been these same strange scents and a man who disappeared into a door that shouldn't have been there. Quinn stepped into the stairwell. The temperature jumped ten degrees. The rain outside became a muffled, distant memory. The brickwork of the station changed as she descended. The modern tiling crumbled away, replaced by hand-cut stone and iron grates that dripped with a viscous, glowing fluid. She rounded a bend in the stairs and stopped. The tunnel opened into a wide, cavernous platform. It wasn't an abandoned Tube station anymore. Stalls made of driftwood and scrap metal lined the tracks. Lanterns filled with pale, fluttering moths hung from the ceiling, casting a sickly violet light over a crowd of figures draped in heavy cloaks and masks. In the center of the market, Tomás stood near a merchant whose skin looked like cured leather. He was handing over the bone token, his eyes darting toward the stairs. Quinn stepped out onto the platform. The chatter of the market died instantly. A dozen heads turned in her direction. Some wore porcelain masks with frozen, weeping expressions; others had hoods pulled so low their faces were nothing but voids. "Police! nobody move!" The command felt small in the vast, echoing space. One of the cloaked figures, a giant of a man with arms the size of Quinn's torso, stepped into her path. He didn't have a weapon, but the way he tilted his head suggested he didn't need one. "Tomás Herrera, you are under arrest!" Quinn kept her eyes locked on Tommy. He looked at her with a mixture of pity and terror. He didn't run further. He stood frozen between the detective and the deep, ink-black tunnels that led further into the Market's gut. "You should have stayed in the rain, Quinn." Tomás backed away from the merchant, merging into a group of tall, spindly figures draped in shimmering silk. The giant in front of Quinn stepped closer. He smelled of dry earth and old paper. He didn't speak, but Quinn felt the pressure in her ears spike. The crowd began to close in, a slow, silent tide of the strange and the hidden. Quinn’s hand went to the grip of her pistol. She felt the sharp jawline of her face tighten. The military precision of her training fought against the primitive urge to bolt back up the stairs. This was the territory that had swallowed her partner. "I'm not leaving without him." The giant raised a hand. His fingers were too long, possessing an extra joint that clicked like a beetle’s shell. "He hasn't paid the toll for a guest." The voice didn't come from the giant’s mouth; it echoed directly inside Quinn’s skull, cold and vibrating. Tomás was slipping away, his Saint Christopher medallion the last thing visible as he ducked behind a tapestry of woven hair. Quinn narrowed her eyes, her brown iris catching the violet moth-light. She didn't look at the giant. She looked at the path Tomás had taken. "I'll pay whatever the cost is." Quinn took a step forward, her boot crunching on a layer of discarded teeth that covered the platform floor like gravel. The giant didn't move, his eyeless mask staring her down. Behind him, the Veil Market breathed—a living, shifting organism of secrets and shadows. She felt the weight of her eighteen years of service settle on her shoulders. She could turn around, walk up those stairs, and tell the Superintendent that Herrera had vanished into the London fog. It would be easy. It would be safe. Quinn holstered her torch and reached into her pocket, pulling out her silver whistle. She didn't blow it. She gripped it like a brass knuckle. "Move." The giant shifted his weight, the floorboards groaning under his mass. The market-goers began to hiss, a sound like steam escaping a pipe. Quinn pushed past the giant’s shoulder, her coat brushing against his rough, cold cloak. He didn't stop her, but his head swiveled one hundred and eighty degrees to watch her pass. She plunged into the thick of the market, the air growing hot and heavy with the smell of roasting meat and metallic blood. Tomás was a shadow against a shadow now, heading for the very edge of the platform where the tracks vanished into a tunnel painted with glowing, swirling runes. "Tommy! I’m still behind you!" Her voice bounced off the stone, lost in the sudden roar of a wind that shouldn't have existed underground. She reached the edge of the platform. The tracks below weren't steel; they were lines of white ash laid out in perfect, shimmering rows. Tomás stood at the entrance of the dark tunnel, his hand gripping the cold stone of the archway. He looked back one last time, his olive skin slick with sweat. "Don't come any further, Harlow. This part of the map isn't for you." He stepped back into the dark. Quinn didn't hesitate. She jumped down onto the ash tracks, the white powder puffing up in a cloud around her knees. She ran toward the tunnel's mouth, her leather watch ticking a steady, frantic beat against her pulse. The light of the market faded behind her. The violet lanterns became pinpricks. The silence of the tunnel was absolute, broken only by the sound of her own breathing and the distant, rhythmic clicking of the giant’s fingers from somewhere far behind. She saw the glint of the Saint Christopher medallion twenty yards ahead. "You're not the only one who can survive in the dark, Herrera." Quinn increased her pace, her sharp jaw set, her eyes tracking the movement of the curly-haired man who knew too much about the things that lived in the cracks of the world. The tunnel narrowed, the walls pressing in until she could feel the cold dampness of the stone through her sleeves. The ground beneath her feet sloped sharply downward. The ash gave way to smooth, polished bone. "Harlow, stop!" Tomás’s voice was right in front of her now, but she couldn't see him. The darkness had become a physical weight, pressing against her eyes. She reached out, her fingers catching the fabric of a damp jacket. "Got you." She spun him around, her movements a blur of practiced efficiency. She went for the cuffs, but her hands met something else. Something cold and wet. "I told you to stop." Tomás wasn't standing. He was kneeling. And he wasn't alone. Quinn adjusted her grip, her fingers sliding over the Saint Christopher medallion. It was hot—scorching hot. She pulled back, the metal searing her palm. In the sudden flare of heat from the medallion, she saw them. Figures sat in the shadows of the tunnel, their eyes like polished coins reflecting a light that didn't exist. They weren't merchants. They weren't buyers. "He's the one who brought the Law." The voice came from the walls themselves. Quinn stood her ground, her hand dropping to her side, her fingers searching for the cold steel of her weapon. She didn't look at Tomás. She looked at the shadows. "Detective Harlow Quinn. Metropolitan Police. You’re all under—" The word died in her throat as the tunnel floor began to hum. The runes on the walls didn't just glow; they bled. Tomás looked up at her, his eyes wide. "They don't care about your badge, Harlow. They care about your blood." A figure stepped out of the deepest shadow. It was tall, impossibly thin, and wore a suit that looked like it was tailored from raven feathers. It held a silver tray, and on that tray sat a single, rusted badge. Quinn’s heart stopped. She recognized the dent in the silver. She recognized the scratched serial number. It was Morris's badge. "Where did you get that?" The figure in the feathers tilted its head. It didn't have a face, only a smooth surface of polished obsidian where eyes and a mouth should have been. "A trade was made." Quinn took a step forward, her military precision replaced by a raw, jagged hunger for the truth. "Who traded it?" The figure gestured toward the darker depths of the tunnel, past where Tomás knelt trembling on the bone-slick floor. "The one who wants to meet you." Quinn looked at Tomás, then at the badge, then at the infinite dark of the lower Veil. The rain-soaked streets of London felt a million miles away. This was the territory of the unexplained, the place where partners disappeared and official reports lied. She took a breath, the salt-and-pepper hair on her head bristling as a cold draft swept up from the deep. She didn't turn back. "Lead the way." The figure in feathers turned and glided into the gloom. Tomás scrambled to his feet, clutching his arm, his face a mask of regret. Quinn followed, her boots clicking on the bone floor, her shadow stretching out before her until it merged with the dark. The heat of the medallion slowly faded, leaving nothing but the smell of ozone and the heavy, rhythmic thrum of the market's hidden heart. The tunnel opened into a vast vault, the ceiling lost in a swirling mist of golden spores. In the center of the vault sat a table carved from a single piece of dark wood. A man sat there, his back to them, his hands folded neatly in front of him. "You're late, Detective." The voice was familiar. Too familiar. Quinn froze, her hand hovering over her holstered gun. She knew that voice. She’d heard it every morning for ten years before the "gas leak." "Morris?" The man didn't turn around. He tapped a rhythm on the table, the sound echoing like a drum in the silence of the vault. "The Law doesn't reach this far down, Harlow. But justice? Justice is a different currency entirely." Tomás backed away, his eyes darting between the detective and the man at the table. "I brought her like you asked. Now let me go." The man at the table waved a hand, a casual, dismissive gesture. Tomás didn't wait. He turned and bolted back toward the market, his sneakers slapping the bone floor until the sound faded into the distance. Quinn stood alone in the vault, her gaze fixed on the back of the man she had mourned for three years. She took a step, then another, her movement mechanical. "Turn around." The man didn't move. "You aren't ready to see what the Market does to a soul, Harlow. You should have stayed in the rain." Quinn reached the edge of the table. She reached out, her hand trembling as she touched the shoulder of his coat. It was the same wool. The same scent of cheap tobacco and peppermint. "Turn. Around." He began to rotate the chair, the wood groaning. Quinn braced herself, her heart a frantic bird in a cage. The chair clicked into place. The face that looked back at her wasn't Morris. It was a mask made of his skin, stitched together with silver wire, the eyes behind the holes glowing with a faint, pulsing emerald light. "Morris is gone, Detective. I’m just the landlord." The figure stood up, towers of shadow rising behind him. Quinn didn't pull her gun. She didn't run. She looked at the mask, at the silver wire, and at the badge sitting on the table. "What did you do with him?" The landlord smiled, the skin of the mask stretching unnaturally. "I didn't do anything. He sold himself to pay for your life." Quinn’s hand dropped. The leather watch on her wrist felt cold. The air in the vault grew still, the golden spores settling like dust on her shoulders. "Now, let's talk about the debt you've inherited."
created_at"2026-02-25T01:01:14.549Z" 2/25/2026, 1:01:14 AM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags2
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences41
tagDensity0.049
leniency0.098
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
94.64% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2800
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"very"
count1
1
adverb"sharply"
count1
2
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"sharply"
2"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
33.93% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2800
totalAiIsms37
found
0
word"rhythmic"
count4
1
word"navigated"
count1
2
word"oppressive"
count1
3
word"flickered"
count1
4
word"dance"
count1
5
word"maw"
count1
6
word"calculated"
count1
7
word"gloom"
count2
8
word"depths"
count2
9
word"standard"
count1
10
word"vibrated"
count1
11
word"throb"
count1
12
word"porcelain"
count1
13
word"echoing"
count2
14
word"silk"
count1
15
word"echoed"
count1
16
word"the last thing"
count1
17
word"tapestry"
count1
18
word"weight"
count3
19
word"perfect"
count1
20
word"pulse"
count1
21
word"silence"
count2
22
word"glint"
count1
23
word"could feel"
count1
24
word"searing"
count1
25
word"familiar"
count2
26
word"mechanical"
count1
highlights
0"rhythmic"
1"navigated"
2"oppressive"
3"flickered"
4"dance"
5"maw"
6"calculated"
7"gloom"
8"depths"
9"standard"
10"vibrated"
11"throb"
12"porcelain"
13"echoing"
14"silk"
15"echoed"
16"the last thing"
17"tapestry"
18"weight"
19"perfect"
20"pulse"
21"silence"
22"glint"
23"could feel"
24"searing"
25"familiar"
26"mechanical"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences206
matches(empty)
80.44% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount4
hedgeCount5
narrationSentences206
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences246
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen33
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2793
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions9
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions88
wordCount2480
uniqueNames16
maxNameDensity1.41
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Soho2
Quinn35
Camden1
Regent1
Canal1
Saint4
Christopher4
Tube2
Tomás22
Morris4
Veil3
Market3
Tommy1
Superintendent1
Herrera2
London2
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Regent"
2"Saint"
3"Christopher"
4"Tomás"
5"Morris"
6"Market"
7"Tommy"
8"Herrera"
places
0"Soho"
1"Veil"
2"London"
globalScore0.794
windowScore0.667
89.76% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences166
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"quite match the human forms that cast them"
1"felt like a giant’s heartbeat"
2"looked like cured leather"
3"looked like it was tailored from raven fe"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2793
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences246
matches
0"knew that voice"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs115
mean24.29
std18.87
cv0.777
sampleLengths
069
111
241
351
411
536
617
718
875
968
104
1161
1210
1316
1412
1568
1647
1713
1814
1975
2018
2110
2257
2354
2418
2537
2651
2730
2840
293
3047
316
3240
338
3418
3544
3644
375
3820
398
4017
4146
426
4344
4442
4525
461
4754
4851
495
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences206
matches
0"was hidden"
1"was tailored"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs399
matches
0"was handing"
1"was slipping"
2"wasn't standing"
3"was kneeling"
15.10% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount7
semicolonCount5
flaggedSentences11
totalSentences246
ratio0.045
matches
0"He clutched his left forearm—the one Quinn knew bore a jagged scar—and squeezed through a gap in a rusted chain-link fence."
1"The architecture here felt different—heavier, more oppressive."
2"Tomás pulled out a small, jagged object—a sliver of polished bone the size of a thumb."
3"The wood didn't creak; it sighed."
4"Shadows moved against the distant walls—distorted, elongated shapes that didn't quite match the human forms that cast them."
5"Some wore porcelain masks with frozen, weeping expressions; others had hoods pulled so low their faces were nothing but voids."
6"The voice didn't come from the giant’s mouth; it echoed directly inside Quinn’s skull, cold and vibrating."
7"Behind him, the Veil Market breathed—a living, shifting organism of secrets and shadows."
8"The tracks below weren't steel; they were lines of white ash laid out in perfect, shimmering rows."
9"It was hot—scorching hot."
10"The runes on the walls didn't just glow; they bled."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount898
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount19
adverbRatio0.021158129175946547
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.0066815144766146995
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences246
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences246
mean11.35
std6.5
cv0.573
sampleLengths
023
111
219
316
411
54
615
722
87
919
1025
1111
1215
1321
1417
1518
1615
177
1813
193
2010
216
225
2316
245
2513
2624
276
2820
294
308
3111
3218
339
3415
3510
3616
3712
3810
3915
4017
4116
4210
4313
446
4528
4613
475
489
494
36.18% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats34
diversityRatio0.1991869918699187
totalSentences246
uniqueOpeners49
16.26% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences205
matches
0"Instead, he lunged toward a"
ratio0.005
67.80% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount78
totalSentences205
matches
0"His short, curly hair sat"
1"He banked hard left, his"
2"Her heart hammered against her"
3"She reached out, fingers grazing"
4"He clutched his left forearm—the"
5"She checked the worn leather"
6"They’d been running for twenty"
7"They reached the Regent's Canal."
8"He didn't head for the"
9"She pulled her torch from"
10"His olive skin looked grey"
11"He fumbled with something in"
12"She kept her right hand"
13"It was a smell that"
14"His silhouette vanished instantly, swallowed"
15"She kicked the plywood further"
16"She’d heard the whispers in"
17"She looked at her watch"
18"She peered down the stairs"
19"She thought of Morris."
ratio0.38
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount195
totalSentences205
matches
0"Harlow Quinn’s boots slapped the"
1"Water sluiced off the brim"
2"Tomás didn't look back."
3"His short, curly hair sat"
4"He banked hard left, his"
5"Quinn rounded the corner a"
6"Her heart hammered against her"
7"She reached out, fingers grazing"
8"Tomás’s voice drifted back, thin"
9"He clutched his left forearm—the"
10"Quinn hit the fence with"
11"The chase spilled out of"
12"The architecture here felt different—heavier,"
13"The streetlamps flickered with a"
14"Quinn’s lungs burned."
15"She checked the worn leather"
16"They’d been running for twenty"
17"Herrera had the panicked stamina"
18"They reached the Regent's Canal."
19"The water was a black"
ratio0.951
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences205
matches(empty)
ratio0
50.49% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences116
technicalSentenceCount15
matches
0"Rain hammered the pavement, kicking up a fine mist that blurred the neon signs of Soho into bleeding smudges of emerald and crimson."
1"He banked hard left, his sneakers skidding on the slick cobbles of an alleyway that smelled of damp cardboard and rancid grease."
2"The streetlamps flickered with a rhythmic, pulsing frequency that made the shadows dance."
3"Tomás scrambled down a concrete embankment, his Saint Christopher medallion swinging wildly from his neck, catching a sliver of light from the bridge above."
4"A section of the plywood swung inward on invisible hinges, revealing a staircase that plummeted into a darkness so absolute the torchlight seemed to dissolve at…"
5"She’d heard the whispers in the holding cells, the fevered ramblings of informants who swore there was a city beneath the city that only moved during the full m…"
6"Shadows moved against the distant walls—distorted, elongated shapes that didn't quite match the human forms that cast them."
7"A low hum vibrated in the soles of her boots, a subterranean throb that felt like a giant’s heartbeat."
8"There had been these same strange scents and a man who disappeared into a door that shouldn't have been there."
9"He was handing over the bone token, his eyes darting toward the stairs."
10"He stood frozen between the detective and the deep, ink-black tunnels that led further into the Market's gut."
11"Quinn took a step forward, her boot crunching on a layer of discarded teeth that covered the platform floor like gravel."
12"Quinn increased her pace, her sharp jaw set, her eyes tracking the movement of the curly-haired man who knew too much about the things that lived in the cracks …"
13"Quinn stood her ground, her hand dropping to her side, her fingers searching for the cold steel of her weapon."
14"Quinn followed, her boots clicking on the bone floor, her shadow stretching out before her until it merged with the dark."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags2
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
78.3759%