Run: 2026-02-25-01KJ95113437FKK4FQS1DSD0NR

Run Details

Duration:
32.2s
Cost:
$0.013626
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The ancient oak standing stones in Richmond Park didn't just mark a boundary; they hummed. Aurora gripped the Heartstone Pendant through the fabric of her jacket, her thumb tracing the smooth, thumbnail-sized crimson gem. It pulsed against her palm, a rhythmic heat that matched the frantic thudding in her chest. Beside her, Isolde Varga glided over the uneven roots, her waist-length silver hair trailing behind like a frozen waterfall. The Half-Fae didn't crush a single blade of grass, her feet leaving the dew-heavy earth undisturbed as if she weighed no more than a breath of wind. "The shimmer thickens where the light dies," Isolde whispered, her pale lavender eyes fixed on a gap between two gnarled trunks. "Step where the shadow bleeds, or the Veil will tear more than your clothes." Aurora glanced back at the third member of their party. Nyx remained a humanoid silhouette, a shifting patch of midnight that seemed to absorb the twilight filtered through the canopy. Only their faintly glowing violet eyes betrayed their position. "I have spent three centuries avoiding the touch of sunlight," the Shade’s voice carried the rasp of wind through dead leaves. "Tearing is a mercy compared to the glare of a Prince's realm." They stepped through. The sensation hit Aurora like a wall of physical pressure. One moment, the damp, cool scent of a London evening filled her lungs; the next, the air turned heavy, tasting of overripe peaches and caramelised sugar. The transition didn't involve a door or a gate. Instead, the world simply folded. The green-grey hues of the Grove snapped into a staggering, vibrant amber. Aurora stumbled, her boots sinking into soil that felt like crushed velvet. She squinted against the light. Overhead, the sky glowed a constant, warm gold, like the inside of a honey jar. There was no sun, just an all-encompassing radiance that cast no distinct shadows. "Dymas," Isolde announced, her voice losing its melodic edge. "The belly of the world. Do not eat the fruit, Aurora. Not even if the hunger makes you weep." The landscape ahead defied the geometry of Earth. Sprawling vineyards stretched toward the horizon, but the vines didn't climb trellises. They spiralled upward into the air, weaving themselves into living towers and arches that dripped with clusters of grapes the size of plums. The fruit shimmered with an internal, oily light—deep purples, neon greens, and translucent reds that looked like liquid gems. Aurora reached down to her hip, her fingers brushing the hilt of the moonsilver dagger Isolde had gifted her. The metal felt ice-cold, a sharp contrast to the suffocating warmth of the Dymasian air. "The Heartstone is screaming," Aurora muttered, pulling the pendant out. The crimson gem didn't just pulse anymore; it glowed with a frantic, internal fire. "It’s pointing toward those orchards." She gestured to a cluster of trees further down the slope. Their leaves were broad and waxy, swaying in a breeze that carried the scent of roasting meat and exotic spices. It was an intoxicating aroma, one that made her stomach groan despite the sandwich she’d bolted down at the Golden Empress two hours ago. "The Prince’s kitchens lie beyond the groves," Nyx said, their form flickering as they struggled to maintain a solid shape in the brilliant amber light. "Belphegor does not welcome tourists. The souls contracted here are bound by their own appetites. See that they do not share their feast." They descended the slope. As they moved deeper, the silence of the realm became apparent. There were no birds, no insects—only the heavy, wet sound of fruit falling from the vines and the distant, rhythmic clatter of metal on stone. Aurora stepped over a fallen pear that had split open on the path. Instead of juice, a thick, golden syrup oozed from the white flesh, smelling so intensely of vanilla and cream that she felt a momentary wave of dizziness. She shook her head, focusing on the crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist. The old mark always itched when her nerves frayed. "The architecture here is... wrong," Aurora observed, pointing toward a structure rising from the centre of the vineyards. It looked like a cathedral made of bone and polished copper. Huge, sweeping buttresses supported a roof that seemed to be thatched with dried lavender and wheat. There were no straight lines; every wall curved and swelled, reminiscent of a stomach or a wine cask. Isolde slowed her pace, her silver hair shimmering as she turned her head. "Gluttony is not merely the act of eating, Rory. It is the refusal to be satisfied. The buildings grow because the hunger never ends. They add a stone for every vintage, a beam for every banquet." A low, resonant chime echoed through the valley. It wasn't the sound of a bell, but the vibration of a massive crystal being struck. As the sound wave passed over them, the Heartstone in Aurora's hand flared bright enough to blind. "Someone knows we’ve crossed the boundary," Nyx hissed, their silhouette thinning out until they were little more than a smudge of charcoal against the amber ground. "The Wardens of the Veil are not the only ones who watch the rifts." The path narrowed, leading them into a grove where the trees were laden with heavy, pendulous fruits shaped like human hearts. The skin of the fruit was a delicate, translucent pink, and as Aurora walked past, she could swear she saw them beat. The air grew thicker, more humid. The smell of sugar was being replaced by something more primal—the scent of a hearth, of fat dripping into a fire, of heavy red wine spilled on old wood. Aurora drew the moonsilver blade. The cold radiated up her arm, clearing the fog of the scents. "Isolde, you said the Prince contracts souls," Aurora said, her eyes scanning the dense foliage. "Where are they?" The Half-Fae stopped at the edge of a clearing. In the centre sat a long table made of a single slab of white marble. It was piled high with silver platters, crystal carafes, and bowls of steaming delicacies that shouldn't have stayed hot in the open air. Around the table, a dozen figures sat in high-backed chairs. They didn't speak. They didn't look up. They moved with a mechanical, frantic grace, shovelling handfuls of dark, glistening grains and meat into their mouths. Their clothes were fine—velvets and silks that would have cost a fortune in London—but they were stained and tattered. One man, his face gaunt despite the grease on his chin, reached for a bottle. His hands shook. "They are the guests who forgot how to leave," Isolde whispered. The man at the table suddenly froze. He turned his head, his eyes widening. They weren't the eyes of a mortal; they were dull, the colour of curdled milk. "Fresh salt," the man croaked, his voice cracking from disuse. He stood up, his chair scraping harshly against the marble floor. The other diners followed suit, their movements synchronised and jerky. They didn't look like monsters, but the way they stared at Aurora’s throat made her skin crawl. "They aren't eating because they're hungry," Aurora realised, stepping back and raising the Fae blade. "They eat to fill the void where their souls used to be," Nyx replied, drifting forward to stand between Aurora and the table. "And they are always looking for a new seasoning." One of the diners, a woman in a shredded Regency-style gown, lunged. She didn't use a weapon; she reached out with fingers tipped in jagged, unkempt nails, her mouth hanging open to reveal teeth filed to sharp points. Aurora didn't wait. She pivoted, the moonsilver blade cutting a shimmering arc through the amber light. The metal didn't just slice; it hissed as it met the woman’s skin, leaving a trail of frost in its wake. The diner shrieked, the sound more like a teakettle than a human cry, and recoiled, clutching a hand that was now blackened and smoking. "The blade bites deep in Dymas," Isolde noted, her expression impassive as she watched the other diners begin to circle. "The cold of the Fae is anathema to the heat of the Prince's greed." "Great, so I’m a walking ice cube in an oven," Aurora muttered, her grip tightening on the hilt. "How do we get past without becoming the main course?" The Heartstone Pendant suddenly jerked in her other hand. It wasn't just pulsing; it was pulling. The silver chain strained against her neck as the gem pointed toward a heavy, arched door at the base of the bone-and-copper cathedral. "The pendant wants the cellar," Aurora said, her blue eyes darting between the encroaching diners. "If we're going, we go now." Nyx didn't answer with words. They expanded, their shadow-form billowing outward like an ink cloud in water. The violet glow of their eyes stretched into long, jagged streaks. The clearing plunged into a temporary, artificial night, the amber sky blotted out by Nyx’s sheer presence. The diners wailed, stumbling back from the sudden cold and the terrifying absence of light. "Run, Laila," the Shade’s voice boomed from the darkness, using the name only their closest allies knew. Aurora didn't hesitate. She bolted toward the cathedral, her boots pounding the soft, perfumed earth. Isolde was a silver blur beside her, her movements effortless even as the ground turned to a chaotic tangle of roots and discarded bones. They reached the door—a massive slab of dark wood reinforced with bands of rusted iron. Aurora slammed her shoulder into it, but it didn't budge. "It’s warded!" she shouted, the heat of the Heartstone now blistering against her chest. Isolde stepped forward, her pale hand hovering over the iron bands. "A lock of hunger requires a key of sacrifice," the Seer murmured. She took Aurora’s hand, the one holding the moonsilver dagger, and guided the tip toward the centre of the door. "The blade cuts the magic, Rory. But the intent must be yours. Give the door a taste of the cold it fears." Aurora pressed the tip of the dagger into the dark wood. The Moonsilver flared blue, a brilliant, freezing light that raced through the iron bands. The wood groaned, then shrivelled, turning to grey ash where the magical frost touched it. With a heavy thud, the door swung inward. A blast of cold air hit them—not the magical cold of the blade, but the damp, earthy chill of a deep cellar. The scent of sugar vanished, replaced by the sharp, acidic tang of fermenting grapes and old stone. "Inside," Aurora commanded, glancing back. Nyx was retreating, their shadow-form shrinking as the amber light of Dymas fought back. The diners were recovery, their pale eyes fixed on the open doorway. They scrambled into the darkness, and Aurora hauled the heavy door shut. She slid a bolt home, its iron teeth snapping into place with a finality that echoed through the subterranean chamber. For a moment, they stood in total darkness. Then, the Heartstone Pendant began to glow, casting a steady, crimson light over their surroundings. They weren't in a simple cellar. The room was vast, the ceiling supported by pillars carved to look like weeping willow trees. Rows upon rows of giant oak barrels lined the walls, each one taller than a man. But it wasn't wine inside the barrels. A faint, musical humming vibrated through the wood—a thousand different voices singing in a low, mournful harmony. "The Grand Reserve," Isolde said, her voice sounding small in the enormous space. Aurora walked to the nearest barrel. A brass plaque was bolted to the front. It didn't list a year or a grape variety. It simply read: *Regret. London, 1892.* "They’re bottling emotions," Aurora whispered, her hand hovering near the wood. She could feel the vibration of the voices against her skin. "Belphegor isn't just feeding souls. He’s distilling them." "The most exquisite flavours are those of lost potential," Nyx said, their form solidifying back into the silhouette of a man. "A vintage of sorrow is far more intoxicating than any juice." The Heartstone pulsed again, its light flickering toward the back of the chamber where a smaller, more ornate door stood partially ajar. Unlike the others, this door was made of clear glass, etched with patterns of vines and thorns. Aurora moved toward it, her heart hammering. The closer she got, the more the pendant reacted, the crimson glow turning almost white. "Whatever we came for," Aurora said, stepping over a pile of broken glass, "it’s behind that door." She pushed it open. The room beyond was a perfect cube, the walls lined with mirrors. In the centre, suspended by silver wires from the ceiling, was a single, crystal decanter. It held a liquid that shifted between every colour of the spectrum, swirling with a life of its own. As they entered, the mirrors didn't reflect the room. Instead, they showed different versions of Aurora. In one, she was back in Cardiff, wearing a barrister's robes. In another, she was at the Golden Empress, laughing with Yu-Fei. In a third, she was standing over the body of a man she didn't recognise, the moonsilver blade dripping with dark blood. "Ignore the glass," Isolde warned, her voice sharp. "The mirrors of Dymas show you what you crave, not what is real." Aurora kept her eyes fixed on the decanter. She reached out, her fingers trembling. The Heartstone was so hot now she could smell the faint scent of scorched cotton from her jacket. "The Essence of Longing," Nyx whispered. "The Prince’s most guarded prize." "Why did the Heartstone lead me here?" Aurora asked, her hand inches from the crystal. "Because it was carved from the same mountain as the vessel," Isolde replied. "Like calls to like. But be warned, Aurora. To take the Essence is to declare war on the Prince of Gluttony. He does not take kindly to those who steal from his table." Aurora looked at her reflection in the nearest mirror. The version of her in the barrister's robes was crying. The version with the bloody blade was smiling. She closed her eyes, took a breath of the cold, damp air, and gripped the decanter. The moment her skin touched the crystal, the entire cathedral above them shook. A roar, deep and resonant as an earthquake, tore through the floorboards. "The Prince is awake," Nyx said, their violet eyes widening. The amber light from the vineyards began to leak through the cracks in the ceiling, no longer warm and inviting, but searing and fierce. The liquid in the decanter flared, turning a violent, angry red. Aurora tucked the vessel under her arm, her knuckles white. "Then I guess we're skipping dessert," she said.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags29
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences47
tagDensity0.617
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
93.91% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2463
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"intensely"
count1
1
adverb"suddenly"
count2
highlights
0"intensely"
1"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
26.92% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2463
totalAiIsms36
found
0
word"tracing"
count1
1
word"pulsed"
count2
2
word"rhythmic"
count2
3
word"velvet"
count1
4
word"shimmered"
count1
5
word"warmth"
count1
6
word"pulse"
count1
7
word"stomach"
count2
8
word"silence"
count1
9
word"structure"
count1
10
word"echoed"
count2
11
word"crystal"
count5
12
word"scanning"
count1
13
word"marble"
count2
14
word"mechanical"
count1
15
word"glistening"
count1
16
word"pounding"
count1
17
word"effortless"
count1
18
word"chaotic"
count1
19
word"raced"
count1
20
word"chill"
count1
21
word"vibrated"
count1
22
word"could feel"
count1
23
word"potential"
count1
24
word"etched"
count1
25
word"perfect"
count1
26
word"searing"
count1
highlights
0"tracing"
1"pulsed"
2"rhythmic"
3"velvet"
4"shimmered"
5"warmth"
6"pulse"
7"stomach"
8"silence"
9"structure"
10"echoed"
11"crystal"
12"scanning"
13"marble"
14"mechanical"
15"glistening"
16"pounding"
17"effortless"
18"chaotic"
19"raced"
20"chill"
21"vibrated"
22"could feel"
23"potential"
24"etched"
25"perfect"
26"searing"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences162
matches(empty)
98.77% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount5
narrationSentences162
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"begin to"
2"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences180
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen36
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords3
totalWords2455
ratio0.001
matches
0"Regret. London, 1892."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions25
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions94
wordCount2029
uniqueNames24
maxNameDensity1.63
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Richmond1
Park1
Heartstone7
Pendant3
Isolde12
Varga1
Half-Fae2
Aurora33
Shade2
London3
Grove1
Earth1
Dymasian1
Golden2
Empress2
Fae3
Nyx10
One3
Regency-style1
Seer1
Moonsilver1
Dymas1
Cardiff1
Yu-Fei1
persons
0"Pendant"
1"Isolde"
2"Varga"
3"Half-Fae"
4"Aurora"
5"Shade"
6"Earth"
7"Empress"
8"Fae"
9"Nyx"
10"Seer"
11"Moonsilver"
12"Dymas"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"London"
3"Golden"
4"Cardiff"
globalScore0.687
windowScore0.667
61.35% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences141
glossingSentenceCount5
matches
0"midnight that seemed to absorb the twilight filtered through the canopy"
1"felt like crushed velvet"
2"looked like liquid gems"
3"looked like a cathedral made of bone and"
4"roof that seemed to be thatched with dried lavender and wheat"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.407
wordCount2455
matches
0"not the magical cold of the blade, but the damp, earthy chill of a deep cellar"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences180
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs78
mean31.47
std17.79
cv0.565
sampleLengths
096
135
239
333
43
562
645
728
862
934
1029
1155
1248
1340
1462
1518
1645
1713
1836
1941
2040
2143
2235
2317
2418
2582
2637
2711
2829
2910
3038
3115
3232
3338
3461
3534
3628
3739
3821
3945
4015
4117
4239
4325
4414
4511
4612
4720
4822
4948
92.27% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount6
totalSentences162
matches
0"being struck"
1"being replaced"
2"was piled"
3"were stained"
4"was bolted"
5"was made"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount5
totalVerbs345
matches
0"was pulling"
1"wasn't just pulsing"
2"was retreating"
3"was standing"
4"was crying"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount8
semicolonCount8
flaggedSentences15
totalSentences180
ratio0.083
matches
0"The ancient oak standing stones in Richmond Park didn't just mark a boundary; they hummed."
1"One moment, the damp, cool scent of a London evening filled her lungs; the next, the air turned heavy, tasting of overripe peaches and caramelised sugar."
2"The fruit shimmered with an internal, oily light—deep purples, neon greens, and translucent reds that looked like liquid gems."
3"The crimson gem didn't just pulse anymore; it glowed with a frantic, internal fire."
4"There were no birds, no insects—only the heavy, wet sound of fruit falling from the vines and the distant, rhythmic clatter of metal on stone."
5"There were no straight lines; every wall curved and swelled, reminiscent of a stomach or a wine cask."
6"The smell of sugar was being replaced by something more primal—the scent of a hearth, of fat dripping into a fire, of heavy red wine spilled on old wood."
7"Their clothes were fine—velvets and silks that would have cost a fortune in London—but they were stained and tattered."
8"They weren't the eyes of a mortal; they were dull, the colour of curdled milk."
9"She didn't use a weapon; she reached out with fingers tipped in jagged, unkempt nails, her mouth hanging open to reveal teeth filed to sharp points."
10"The metal didn't just slice; it hissed as it met the woman’s skin, leaving a trail of frost in its wake."
11"It wasn't just pulsing; it was pulling."
12"They reached the door—a massive slab of dark wood reinforced with bands of rusted iron."
13"A blast of cold air hit them—not the magical cold of the blade, but the damp, earthy chill of a deep cellar."
14"A faint, musical humming vibrated through the wood—a thousand different voices singing in a low, mournful harmony."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2053
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"smooth, thumbnail-sized crimson"
adverbCount54
adverbRatio0.026302971261568435
lyAdverbCount12
lyAdverbRatio0.0058451047247929854
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences180
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences180
mean13.64
std6.44
cv0.472
sampleLengths
015
119
216
319
427
521
614
710
820
99
1021
1112
123
1310
1426
159
165
1712
1812
195
2015
2113
229
2319
248
2512
2623
2719
2819
2915
3010
3114
325
3311
3420
3524
3625
3723
384
3911
4025
4113
4227
4313
449
4518
4611
4716
4818
4913
34.44% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats28
diversityRatio0.2722222222222222
totalSentences180
uniqueOpeners49
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences157
matches
0"Only their faintly glowing violet"
1"Instead, the world simply folded."
2"Instead of juice, a thick,"
3"Then, the Heartstone Pendant began"
4"Instead, they showed different versions"
ratio0.032
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount39
totalSentences157
matches
0"It pulsed against her palm,"
1"They stepped through."
2"She squinted against the light."
3"They spiralled upward into the"
4"She gestured to a cluster"
5"Their leaves were broad and"
6"It was an intoxicating aroma,"
7"They descended the slope."
8"She shook her head, focusing"
9"It looked like a cathedral"
10"It wasn't the sound of"
11"It was piled high with"
12"They didn't speak."
13"They didn't look up."
14"They moved with a mechanical,"
15"Their clothes were fine—velvets and"
16"His hands shook."
17"He turned his head, his"
18"They weren't the eyes of"
19"He stood up, his chair"
ratio0.248
49.17% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount129
totalSentences157
matches
0"The ancient oak standing stones"
1"Aurora gripped the Heartstone Pendant"
2"It pulsed against her palm,"
3"The Half-Fae didn't crush a"
4"Isolde whispered, her pale lavender"
5"Aurora glanced back at the"
6"Nyx remained a humanoid silhouette,"
7"the Shade’s voice carried the"
8"They stepped through."
9"The sensation hit Aurora like"
10"The transition didn't involve a"
11"The green-grey hues of the"
12"Aurora stumbled, her boots sinking"
13"She squinted against the light."
14"Isolde announced, her voice losing"
15"The landscape ahead defied the"
16"They spiralled upward into the"
17"The fruit shimmered with an"
18"Aurora reached down to her"
19"The metal felt ice-cold, a"
ratio0.822
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences157
matches(empty)
ratio0
75.19% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences95
technicalSentenceCount9
matches
0"It pulsed against her palm, a rhythmic heat that matched the frantic thudding in her chest."
1"The Half-Fae didn't crush a single blade of grass, her feet leaving the dew-heavy earth undisturbed as if she weighed no more than a breath of wind."
2"The fruit shimmered with an internal, oily light—deep purples, neon greens, and translucent reds that looked like liquid gems."
3"Their leaves were broad and waxy, swaying in a breeze that carried the scent of roasting meat and exotic spices."
4"Huge, sweeping buttresses supported a roof that seemed to be thatched with dried lavender and wheat."
5"It was piled high with silver platters, crystal carafes, and bowls of steaming delicacies that shouldn't have stayed hot in the open air."
6"The diner shrieked, the sound more like a teakettle than a human cry, and recoiled, clutching a hand that was now blackened and smoking."
7"The Moonsilver flared blue, a brilliant, freezing light that raced through the iron bands."
8"She slid a bolt home, its iron teeth snapping into place with a finality that echoed through the subterranean chamber."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags29
uselessAdditionCount11
matches
0"Isolde announced, her voice losing its melodic edge"
1"Aurora said, her eyes scanning the dense foliage"
2"the man croaked, his voice cracking from disuse"
3"Aurora muttered, her grip tightening on the hilt"
4"Aurora said, her blue eyes darting between the encroaching diners"
5"she shouted, the heat of the Heartstone now blistering against her chest"
6"Isolde said, her voice sounding small in the enormous space"
7"Aurora whispered, her hand hovering near the wood"
8"Nyx said, their form solidifying back into the silhouette of a man"
9"Isolde warned, her voice sharp"
10"Nyx said, their violet eyes widening"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags25
fancyCount14
fancyTags
0"Isolde whispered (whisper)"
1"Isolde announced (announce)"
2"Aurora muttered (mutter)"
3"Aurora observed (observe)"
4"Nyx hissed (hiss)"
5"Isolde whispered (whisper)"
6"the man croaked (croak)"
7"Isolde noted (note)"
8"Aurora muttered (mutter)"
9"she shouted (shout)"
10"the Seer murmured (murmur)"
11"Aurora whispered (whisper)"
12"Isolde warned (warn)"
13"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences47
tagDensity0.532
leniency1
rawRatio0.56
effectiveRatio0.56
76.4227%