Run: 2026-02-25-01KJ952N1N21PHTXA8FN01BXV7

Run Details

Duration:
40.9s
Cost:
$0.016718
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The sky over Soho didn't just leak; it collapsed. Cold, grey sheets of water hammered the asphalt, turning the streetlights into blurred smears of amber and white. Detective Harlow Quinn adjusted the collar of her wax coat, the stiff fabric scraping against her sharp jaw. Water dripped from her closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair, stinging her eyes, but she didn't blink. She kept her gaze fixed on the figure across the street. Tomás Herrera stood under the distinctive green neon sign of The Raven’s Nest. The buzzing light cast a sickly hue over his olive skin, making him look like a ghost caught in mid-manifestation. He pulled his hood up, but not before Quinn saw the glint of the Saint Christopher medallion swinging against his chest. He checked his watch—a frantic, jerky movement—and then bolted. Quinn moved. She didn't run yet; she drifted through the shadows of the doorways with a military precision that eighteen years on the force had etched into her marrow. Her boots splashed through a deep puddle, but she didn't break her stride. She focused on the rhythm of his retreat. He’s spooked. The chase led them away from the polished grit of the bar district and toward the jagged edges of Camden. The rain intensified, a relentless roar that drowned out the hum of distant traffic. Tomás took a sharp right into a narrow alleyway choked with overflowing bins and the stench of sodden cardboard. Quinn accelerated, her breath hitching in a controlled cadence. She reached the mouth of the alley just as Tomás cleared a chain-link fence at the far end with the practiced ease of a man used to escaping. "Police! Stay where you are, Herrera!" Her voice cut through the downpour, hard and flat. Tomás didn't even look back. He dropped onto the other side and vanished into the darkness of an overgrown lot. Quinn hit the fence, her fingers catching in the cold wire. She hauled herself over, the leather strap of her watch snagging momentarily before she wrenched it free. She landed in the mud on the other side, her knees absorbing the impact, and surged forward. He wasn't heading for the main roads. He was angling toward the old canal, toward the places where the city’s bones showed through the skin. They tore through a graveyard of rusted shipping containers. Quinn saw the flash of his sneakers, the swing of his arms. He was younger, faster, but Quinn had the stamina of a predator. She knew how to track. She followed the sound of his heavy breathing and the rhythmic slap of his feet on wet stone. Tomás lunged toward a corrugated iron shack tucked behind a row of Victorian warehouses. He didn't go through the door. He vanished behind it, into a gap in the foundation that shouldn't have been there. Quinn reached the gap seconds later. It wasn't just a hole; it was the mouth of a concrete throat. A flight of stairs, slick with green algae and decades of filth, spiraled down into the earth. The air rising from the depths felt different—colder, charged with a static that made the hair on her arms stand up. It smelled of ozone and ancient, stagnant water. "Don't do it, Tomás. There's nowhere to go down there." Her voice echoed off the damp concrete. From the darkness below, the only answer was the fading scrape of boots on metal. Quinn pulled her flashlight from her belt, clicking it on. The beam cut a narrow path through the gloom, illuminating the rusted remains of an old Tube station. This wasn't on the official maps. The walls were tiled in a cracked, Victorian white, stained with long streaks of rust that looked like dried blood. She descended. Each step was a calculated risk. The temperature plummeted. Her breath began to bloom in front of her face in pale, ghostly clouds. At the bottom of the stairs, the tunnel opened into a wide platform. The tracks were long gone, replaced by a flooring of packed earth and jagged wooden planks. Tomás stood fifty feet away, his back to a massive iron gate. He wasn't running anymore. He was fumbling with something in his pocket. "Hands where I can see them!" Quinn leveled her light at his face. He squinted, his dark curls plastered to his forehead. He looked less like a criminal and more like a man walking to his own execution. His hand came out of his pocket, clutching a small, white Object. "You shouldn't be here, Detective. This isn't your jurisdiction." "Everything in this city is my jurisdiction. Drop whatever's in your hand and move away from the gate." Tomás looked at the heavy iron bars behind him. Beyond them, the tunnel glowed with a faint, flickering violet light. Figures moved in the haze—tall, distorted shadows that didn't pace like humans. The sound of a hundred muffled conversations drifted through the bars, a low, buzzing hum that vibrated in Quinn’s teeth. "I can't do that. I have a patient. Someone who doesn't exist to people like you." "I don't care about your off-the-books clinic, Tomás. I care about who’s paying you. I care about the people you’re protecting." He raised the white object—a jagged piece of polished bone, etched with symbols that seemed to writhe under the beam of her flashlight. "You want the truth about what happened to Morris? It’s through there. But you can't walk through without a price." Quinn flinched at the mention of her partner’s name. The pain was sudden and sharp, a cold needle in her chest. She stepped forward, her boots crunching on something that sounded like glass but looked like teeth. "You don't talk about him. You don't get to use his name." "I'm the only one who knows where the pieces went, Quinn. He wasn't just killed. He was harvested." Tomás slammed the bone token into a slot in the gate. The iron groaned, a sound of metal screaming against metal. The gates began to grind open, revealing the entrance to the Veil Market. The air that rushed out was hot and smelled of spices, sulfur, and something floral that made Quinn’s head swim. Inside, the abandoned station had been transformed. Stalls draped in heavy silks lined the old tracks. Lanterns filled with glowing blue liquid hung from the ceiling. People—if they were people—haggled over jars of shimmering dust and crates of blackened iron. It was a subterranean hive of the impossible. Tomás stepped over the threshold, his silhouette blurring as he entered the violet light. He turned back, his expression a mix of pity and warning. "Once you go in, the Met can't help you. You leave the badge at the door, or you don't come back at all." Quinn looked at the gate. Her hand went to her holster, the familiar weight of her sidearm offering no comfort here. The shadow of the Market stretched out toward her, beckoning with the promise of answers she had hunted for three years. The damp cold of the tunnel pressed against her back, urging her forward or pushing her away. She looked at her watch. The leather was ruined, soaked through with rain and grime. The second hand ticked forward, relentless. "I'm coming for you, Herrera." She stepped to the edge of the light. The air felt thick, like water, resisting her entry. She forced her leaden legs to move, crossing the invisible line between the world she knew and the one that had swallowed her partner whole. A man with skin like cracked parchment and eyes the color of milk stepped into her path, his hand extended. "Token, traveler? Or perhaps a memory for the toll?" Quinn didn't look at him. She kept her eyes on Tomás, who was disappearing into the throng of the Market. She reached into her pocket, her fingers brushing against a small brass button she had kept since Morris’s funeral. "I'm not here to trade." The man leaned in, his breath smelling of ozone. "Everyone here trades, Detective. You just haven't realized what you've already spent." He stepped aside, a mocking bow guiding her deeper into the labyrinth. The sounds of the Market surged around her—the clink of coins, the hiss of steam, and a low, melodic chanting that seemed to pulse from the very walls. Quinn pushed through a crowd of figures draped in heavy, hooded cloaks, her eyes darting between the stalls. She lost sight of Tomás’s hood. The Market was a geographical impossibility, aisles stretching further than the station's footprint should have allowed. She passed a merchant selling rows of silver-stoppered vials. Inside the glass, shadows flickered and danced, clawing at the walls. A hand caught her elbow. Quinn spun, her fist clenched, ready to strike. "Easy, Harlow. You'll draw the wrong kind of attention." She found herself staring into the face of a woman she didn't recognize, but the voice was familiar—a low, raspy tone she had heard in the background of a dozen wiretaps. The woman wore a mask carved from dark wood, the features frozen in a wide, toothy grin. "Who are you?" "A friend of the clique. And a fan of your persistence. But you’re a long way from the station house." The woman pulled Quinn behind a heavy tapestry, into a small alcove lit by a single, guttering candle. The scent of jasmine was suffocatingly thick. "Where is Herrera?" "He’s heading for the Apothecary. He’s got delivery to make. Something fragile. Something that shouldn't be in this world." Quinn adjusted her grip on her flashlight, using it as a baton. "I'm taking him in. Him and whatever he's carrying." The masked woman laughed, a dry, rattling sound. "You'll take nothing but a shallow grave if you keep shouting. Look around you. Do you see any laws here? Do you see any handcuffs?" Quinn peaked around the tapestry. Two figures in long, grey coats moved past, their faces obscured by shadows that didn't move with the light. They carried long staves tipped with glowing crystals. They didn't walk; they glided. "The Wardens," the woman whispered. "They don't like trespassers. Especially ones with brass in their pockets." "I don't care about the Wardens. I want Herrera." "Then you’d better move. He’s almost at the Inner Circle. Once the gate closes for the lunar cycle, you’ll be trapped here until the next full moon. And trust me, Harlow, you don't have the constitution for a month in the Veil." The woman pushed Quinn back out into the main thoroughfare. The crowd had thickened. A group of creatures with elongated limbs and skin like wet bark were hauling a heavy stone chest toward the center of the station. The violet light was pulsing faster now, a heartbeat in the dark. Quinn saw a flash of olive skin. Tomás was climbing a set of stairs that led toward a raised platform where a man in gold-flecked robes waited. In Herrera's hand, the bone token was glowing with a fierce, white intensity. She lunged forward, shoving past a group of cloaked figures. "Herrera!" Tomás froze at the top of the stairs. He looked down at her, his face a mask of desperation. The man in the gold robes reached out for the object in Tomás’s hand. "Don't do it, Tomás! Whatever they promised you, it’s a lie!" The Wardens turned. Their crystal-tipped staves began to hum, a high-pitched whine that set Quinn’s nerves on fire. They began to move toward her, their movements synchronized and terrifyingly fast. Tomás looked at the object, then at Quinn, then at the man in the robes. He hesitated, his Saint Christopher medallion swinging wildly as he shook his head. "It’s the only way to save her, Quinn! I’m sorry!" He handed the bone to the robed man. A shockwave of cold air ripped through the Market. The lanterns flickered and died, leaving the station in a terrifying, violet-tinged twilight. The Wardens accelerated, their staves flashing as they leveled them at Quinn’s chest. She didn't retreat. She reached for the heavy brass button in her pocket, her fingers closing tight around the cold metal. "The badge stays," she hissed to herself. She ducked under the first swing of a Warden’s staff, the crystal whistling inches above her head. She drove her shoulder into the creature’s midsection. It felt like hitting a wall of iced smoke. The Warden didn't fall; it dissipated and reformed instantly, its grip tightening on the staff. "Tomás! Stand down!" But Tomás was already moving toward the back of the platform, vanishing through a heavy velvet curtain with the robed man. Quinn scrambled up the stairs, her boots slipping on the smooth stone. The Wardens were right behind her, their presence a weight that made it hard to breathe. She reached the curtain and tore it aside. The space beyond wasn't a room. It was another tunnel, narrower and darker, leading deeper into the Camden sewers. But the walls here weren't brick. They were lined with shelves, and on those shelves sat hundreds of jars. Inside each jar, a small, pulsing light flickered. Some were blue, some were white. One, in the very center of the back wall, was a dull, aching red. Quinn stopped. Her heart hammered against her ribs, a frantic bird in a cage. She knew that color. She knew the rhythm of that pulse. "Morris?" she whispered, the name a ghost on her lips. The red light throbbed in response. From the shadows at the end of the tunnel, Tomás Herrera’s voice drifted back to her, hollow and broken. "I told you, Quinn. He was harvested. Now do you want to see the rest of him?" She stepped forward, the heat of the Market at her back and the cold of the grave ahead. The Wardens stopped at the entrance to the tunnel, their staves dimming. They didn't follow. They simply watched, their masked faces unreadable. Quinn reached out a hand toward the red jar. The glass was warm. Beneath her fingertips, she felt a vibration, a low hum that synchronized with the ticking of her ruined watch. "Harlow." The voice didn't come from the jar. It came from the darkness behind her. She turned, her flashlight beam cutting through the gloom. Standing at the entrance to the tunnel, his salt-and-pepper hair messy and his eyes wide with a fear she had never seen, was a man who looked exactly like the partner she had buried three years ago. But he wasn't breathing. And he didn't have a shadow. "Harlow, you shouldn't have come," the figure said, his voice overlapping with the hum of the jars. "You're not part of the trade." "Morris?" Quinn’s voice broke. She didn't drop her guard, but the military precision of her stance wavered. The figure stepped into the light. His clothes were the ones he had died in—the brown leather jacket, the faded jeans. But there was a hole in his chest where his heart should have been, and inside that hole, a faint, violet light mirrored the glow of the Market. "The clique... they didn't just kill me, Harlow. They fragmented me. I'm the security for the shipment now." Behind him, more shadows began to coalesce. The Wardens stepped back, bowing their heads. Something much larger was moving in the depths of the Market, something that made the ground tremble. Tomás Herrera appeared beside the figure of Morris, his face pale and tear-streaked. "I’m sorry, Detective. I really am. But the deal is struck." He held up a second bone token, this one black and jagged. He pressed it against the wall of the tunnel, and the shelves began to retract, revealing a massive, iron-bound door that hummed with a power that made Quinn’s teeth ache. "What's behind that door, Tomás?" Quinn demanded, her voice regaining its edge. "The rest of the collection," Morris’s ghost answered. The door began to creak open, and a blast of frigid, salt-scented air hit Quinn, carrying with it the sound of a thousand weeping voices. Quinn looked at the jar in her hand, then at the man who wore her partner’s face. She didn't have a token. she didn't have a permit. All she had was a badge in her pocket and a debt that had gone unpaid for too long. She stepped toward the open door.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags7
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences41
tagDensity0.171
leniency0.341
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
94.52% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2736
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"very"
count2
1
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
30.56% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2736
totalAiIsms38
found
0
word"glint"
count1
1
word"etched"
count2
2
word"practiced ease"
count1
3
word"predator"
count1
4
word"rhythmic"
count1
5
word"depths"
count2
6
word"charged"
count1
7
word"echoed"
count1
8
word"gloom"
count2
9
word"calculated"
count1
10
word"vibrated"
count1
11
word"familiar"
count2
12
word"weight"
count2
13
word"pulse"
count2
14
word"flickered"
count3
15
word"tapestry"
count2
16
word"grave"
count2
17
word"intensity"
count1
18
word"crystal"
count2
19
word"synchronized"
count2
20
word"tinged"
count1
21
word"velvet"
count1
22
word"throbbed"
count1
23
word"unreadable"
count1
24
word"wavered"
count1
25
word"fragmented"
count1
highlights
0"glint"
1"etched"
2"practiced ease"
3"predator"
4"rhythmic"
5"depths"
6"charged"
7"echoed"
8"gloom"
9"calculated"
10"vibrated"
11"familiar"
12"weight"
13"pulse"
14"flickered"
15"tapestry"
16"grave"
17"intensity"
18"crystal"
19"synchronized"
20"tinged"
21"velvet"
22"throbbed"
23"unreadable"
24"wavered"
25"fragmented"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"jaw/fists clenched"
count1
highlights
0"fist clenched"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences191
matches(empty)
45.62% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount4
hedgeCount9
narrationSentences191
filterMatches
0"look"
1"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
1"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences225
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen42
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2726
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions10
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions89
wordCount2286
uniqueNames18
maxNameDensity1.44
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Soho1
Harlow1
Quinn33
Herrera4
Raven1
Nest1
Saint2
Christopher2
Camden2
Tomás18
Victorian2
Tube1
Object1
Veil1
Market9
Morris3
Wardens5
Warden2
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Herrera"
3"Raven"
4"Saint"
5"Christopher"
6"Tomás"
7"Victorian"
8"Market"
9"Morris"
10"Wardens"
11"Warden"
places
0"Soho"
1"Camden"
2"Object"
3"Veil"
globalScore0.778
windowScore0.667
58.54% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences164
glossingSentenceCount6
matches
0"looked like dried blood"
1"symbols that seemed to writhe under the beam of her flashlight"
2"sounded like glass but looked like teeth"
3"looked like teeth"
4"chanting that seemed to pulse from the very walls"
5"felt like hitting a wall of iced smoke"
6"appeared beside the figure of Morris, his face pale and tear-streaked"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2726
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences225
matches
0"knew that color"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs104
mean26.21
std18.11
cv0.691
sampleLengths
071
163
250
32
462
528
66
774
825
956
1035
1165
1210
1322
1454
1554
1624
176
1844
199
2018
2152
2216
2321
2423
2520
2637
2712
2818
2954
3048
3125
3223
3359
3421
355
3642
3720
389
3939
405
419
4212
4358
4442
4513
469
4748
483
4920
97.91% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences191
matches
0"were tiled"
1"been transformed"
2"was ruined"
3"were lined"
0.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount12
totalVerbs368
matches
0"wasn't heading"
1"was angling"
2"wasn't running"
3"was fumbling"
4"was disappearing"
5"were hauling"
6"was pulsing"
7"was climbing"
8"was glowing"
9"was already moving"
10"wasn't breathing"
11"was moving"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount10
semicolonCount5
flaggedSentences13
totalSentences225
ratio0.058
matches
0"The sky over Soho didn't just leak; it collapsed."
1"He checked his watch—a frantic, jerky movement—and then bolted."
2"She didn't run yet; she drifted through the shadows of the doorways with a military precision that eighteen years on the force had etched into her marrow."
3"It wasn't just a hole; it was the mouth of a concrete throat."
4"The air rising from the depths felt different—colder, charged with a static that made the hair on her arms stand up."
5"Figures moved in the haze—tall, distorted shadows that didn't pace like humans."
6"He raised the white object—a jagged piece of polished bone, etched with symbols that seemed to writhe under the beam of her flashlight."
7"People—if they were people—haggled over jars of shimmering dust and crates of blackened iron."
8"The sounds of the Market surged around her—the clink of coins, the hiss of steam, and a low, melodic chanting that seemed to pulse from the very walls."
9"She found herself staring into the face of a woman she didn't recognize, but the voice was familiar—a low, raspy tone she had heard in the background of a dozen wiretaps."
10"They didn't walk; they glided."
11"The Warden didn't fall; it dissipated and reformed instantly, its grip tightening on the staff."
12"His clothes were the ones he had died in—the brown leather jacket, the faded jeans."
82.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2310
adjectiveStacks3
stackExamples
0"terrifying, violet-tinged twilight."
1"massive, iron-bound door"
2"frigid, salt-scented air"
adverbCount40
adverbRatio0.017316017316017316
lyAdverbCount11
lyAdverbRatio0.004761904761904762
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences225
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences225
mean12.12
std6.64
cv0.548
sampleLengths
09
118
218
315
411
513
620
721
89
92
1027
1113
128
132
1420
1514
1619
179
1828
196
209
215
2215
2311
2417
2517
267
2718
289
2912
3012
315
3218
3314
346
3515
366
3713
3817
3921
408
4110
427
4315
4410
4518
466
4720
482
496
38.89% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats25
diversityRatio0.2311111111111111
totalSentences225
uniqueOpeners52
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences187
matches(empty)
ratio0
59.57% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount75
totalSentences187
matches
0"She kept her gaze fixed"
1"He pulled his hood up,"
2"He checked his watch—a frantic,"
3"She didn't run yet; she"
4"Her boots splashed through a"
5"She focused on the rhythm"
6"She reached the mouth of"
7"Her voice cut through the"
8"He dropped onto the other"
9"She hauled herself over, the"
10"She landed in the mud"
11"He wasn't heading for the"
12"He was angling toward the"
13"They tore through a graveyard"
14"He was younger, faster, but"
15"She knew how to track."
16"She followed the sound of"
17"He didn't go through the"
18"He vanished behind it, into"
19"It wasn't just a hole;"
ratio0.401
13.48% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount167
totalSentences187
matches
0"The sky over Soho didn't"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn adjusted the"
2"Water dripped from her closely"
3"She kept her gaze fixed"
4"Tomás Herrera stood under the"
5"The buzzing light cast a"
6"He pulled his hood up,"
7"He checked his watch—a frantic,"
8"She didn't run yet; she"
9"Her boots splashed through a"
10"She focused on the rhythm"
11"The chase led them away"
12"The rain intensified, a relentless"
13"Tomás took a sharp right"
14"Quinn accelerated, her breath hitching"
15"She reached the mouth of"
16"Her voice cut through the"
17"Tomás didn't even look back."
18"He dropped onto the other"
19"Quinn hit the fence, her"
ratio0.893
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences187
matches(empty)
ratio0
70.77% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences109
technicalSentenceCount11
matches
0"The rain intensified, a relentless roar that drowned out the hum of distant traffic."
1"The air rising from the depths felt different—colder, charged with a static that made the hair on her arms stand up."
2"The walls were tiled in a cracked, Victorian white, stained with long streaks of rust that looked like dried blood."
3"He raised the white object—a jagged piece of polished bone, etched with symbols that seemed to writhe under the beam of her flashlight."
4"The damp cold of the tunnel pressed against her back, urging her forward or pushing her away."
5"The sounds of the Market surged around her—the clink of coins, the hiss of steam, and a low, melodic chanting that seemed to pulse from the very walls."
6"Tomás was climbing a set of stairs that led toward a raised platform where a man in gold-flecked robes waited."
7"Beneath her fingertips, she felt a vibration, a low hum that synchronized with the ticking of her ruined watch."
8"Standing at the entrance to the tunnel, his salt-and-pepper hair messy and his eyes wide with a fear she had never seen, was a man who looked exactly like the p…"
9"He pressed it against the wall of the tunnel, and the shelves began to retract, revealing a massive, iron-bound door that hummed with a power that made Quinn’s …"
10"Quinn looked at the jar in her hand, then at the man who wore her partner’s face."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags7
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"she whispered, the name a ghost on her lips"
1"the figure said, his voice overlapping with the hum of the jars"
2"Quinn demanded, her voice regaining its edge"
52.44% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"the woman whispered (whisper)"
1"she hissed (hiss)"
2"she whispered (whisper)"
3"Quinn demanded (demand)"
dialogueSentences41
tagDensity0.146
leniency0.293
rawRatio0.667
effectiveRatio0.195
67.0322%