Run: 2026-02-25-01KJ953VFV36D7NP75PQA8GRV4

Run Details

Duration:
20.8s
Cost:
$0.010415
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The air thickened, pressing down like a velvet shroud woven with the scent of ozone and crushed honeysuckle. Aurora’s bright blue eyes narrowed, scanning the ancient oak standing stones that marked the boundary of Isolde’s grove. The wildflowers – impossible, year-round blooms of cerulean and crimson – shimmered, their petals vibrating with an excess of magic. What little sunlight filtered through the canopy seemed to stutter, caught between worlds. The Heartstone Pendant, a deep crimson gemstone the size of her thumbnail, pulsed against her sternum. Not a gentle thrum this time, but a fervent throb, a beat that echoed Aurora’s own quickening heart. It burned with a warmth that spread through her chest, a warning and a beacon all at once. “The Veil stretches thin here,” Isolde Varga’s voice, like windchimes in a distant storm, flowed from beside her. The Half-Fae seer stood motionless, her silver hair spilling to her waist, catching the stuttering light so it glowed like spun moonlight. Her pale lavender eyes, vast and ancient, stared into the swirling distortions between the final two standing stones. “A door opens for those with willing feet, though the path ahead demands more than mere will.” Nyx, a towering silhouette of living shadow, shimmered into a solid form beside Isolde. Their faintly glowing violet eyes fixed on the unfolding void. A low, resonant sound, like a deep whisper carried on a gale, emanated from their form. “A familiar scent. Fleshy desire, unbound.” Nyx turned their head, a smooth, indistinct contour, towards Aurora, and the faint glow of their eyes seemed to deepen. “You feel its pull, little moth.” Aurora ignored Nyx’s baiting. Her left wrist, where a crescent-shaped scar from a childhood accident rested, tingled with a phantom ache. She gripped the cold, leaf-shaped hilt of the Fae-Forged Blade at her hip, its moonsilver material a comforting anchor. “Pull? It feels more like a shove. And a headache coming on.” Isolde merely smiled, a knowing tilt of lips that promised riddles and little comfort. “Heed the Heartstone, child. It knows where hunger dwells.” With a gesture so subtle it could have been merely the wind stirring her sleeve, Isolde drifted forward. Her feet, Aurora noted, as always, left no impression on the mossy ground. The distortion between the stones intensified, coiling and unraveling like smoke in a wind tunnel. It wasn't a hole, but a *shift*—a sudden giving way of reality. One moment they were in the cool, verdant calm of the Fae Grove, the next, a breath of air different from any Aurora had ever known enveloped them. It was warm, not hot, but the pervasive warmth of a humid summer evening after a storm. It felt heavy too, thick in her lungs, carrying a dizzying perfume. Above them, the sky was a deep, unblinking amber, vast and seamless, without sun or cloud, casting everything in a perpetual twilight glow. The ground beneath her worn boots was soft, almost spongy, yielding. It was the same rich, dark loam, but imbued with an alien quality, as if the very soil hummed with an invisible energy. “Well,” Aurora murmured, pushing a strand of straight black hair from her eyes, “that’s… different.” Before them, the landscape stretched into an overwhelming panorama of excess. Not a single tree resembled anything she'd ever seen on Earth. Some bore leaves of impossible colours – deep crimson, acid green that pulsed with an inner light, and shimmering violet. They twisted into convoluted shapes, some unfurling like elaborate fans, others drooping in heavy, fleshy folds. Grapevines, thick as sequoia trunks, snaked upwards, draped over unseen structures, laden with clusters of fruit the size of small pumpkins. The grapes themselves glowed with an internal radiance, shades of deep ruby, sapphire, and emerald, so ripe they seemed ready to burst. “Dymas,” Isolde said, her voice barely a whisper, yet clear in the heavy air. “Where gluttony takes form.” Nyx moved past Aurora, their shadowy form rippling, seemingly less constrained by the solid world here. They paused beside a massive plant whose blossoms were like gaping mouths, thick with pollen that drifted in iridescent motes. “A feast for all senses. And a trap for the unwary.” Their voice was a dry rasp in the sweet-laden air. Aurora took a step further, the Heartstone a steady, insistent warmth. She wanted to touch everything, to understand the textures, the impossible colours. A waterfall cascaded in the distance, but the liquid wasn’t water; it was a pearlescent nectar, impossibly thick, shimmering with a mild luminescence as it crashed into a pool below. The sound was a deep, steady gurgle, like a hungry stomach. “The air,” Aurora said, trying to identify the overwhelming scent. “It’s sweet, almost sickly. Like overripe fruit and… cinnamon?” Isolde nodded, her eyes closed for a moment, savoring or enduring the aroma. “The Prince of Gluttony ensures his realm ever reflects his nature. Every breath, a taste.” They walked, the spongy ground muffling their steps. Or, rather, it muffled Aurora's and Nyx's steps. Isolde still floated silently, leaving no disturbance in her wake. The density of the flora was immense, a thick tapestry of leaves, vines, and gargantuan blossoms. Strange, iridescent insects, the size of songbirds, buzzed between the flowers, their wings catching the amber light in flashes of purple and gold. They looked more like jewels than living creatures. Aurora stopped before a bush whose berries, the colour of amethyst and larger than her thumb, pulsed with a faint, steady light. She reached out instinctively, then pulled her hand back. “Are these...safe?” Nyx manifested a more defined hand, long and shadowy, and plucked one of the berries. They ran a shadowy thumb over its surface, then brought it close to their indistinct face. There was no eating, no consumption for a Shade, but an observation. “A sweet lie. The fruit of craving, born from longing, grown in excess.” The berry’s light dimmed, almost resentfully, as Nyx dropped it to the ground, where it immediately began to ferment, a tiny puff of gas escaping. “Everything here,” Aurora observed, her practical mind trying to categorize the impossible, “is designed to tempt. To indulge.” Isolde’s pale lavender eyes opened, fixed on a distant structure that peeked above the riotous canopy. It was a tower, not made of stone or metal, but of what looked like solidified sugar or crystal, catching the amber light and scattering it in shimmering facets. “Be wary, Rory. For indulgence has a price. Minds can be dulled, wills can be bent, and desires can turn to chains.” The landscape shifted as they moved deeper. The vineyards gave way to immense orchards, where trees sagged under the weight of fruits of every conceivable shape and colour. Some were smooth and polished like jade, others rough and spiky, exuding a sticky sap that glistened like honey. The sheer scale was disorienting. A single apple might feed a village for a week. From somewhere far off, Aurora heard a faint, ethereal music. It was a deep, resonant sound, like plucked strings and humming voices, both alluring and unsettling. It seemed to carry on the thick air, rising and falling like a deep breath. “What is that?” she asked, tilting her head. “The celebration,” Isolde answered simply. “Here, feasts are eternal. And the chefs… well, they are not always willing participants.” Aurora felt a shiver run down her spine. The codex had mentioned "helbound souls contracted from Earth" as master chefs. The wonder of the exotic land suddenly gave way to a chilling understanding of its darker purpose. This wasn't merely a paradise of indulgence; it was a prison built from desire. They came to a clearing, a vast expanse of emerald-green grass that rippled in low, silent waves. In the center stood a colossal plant, so enormous it looked like an organic monument. Its single, central stalk, wider than a bus, spiraled upwards, capped by a flower that dwarfed even the massive fruits. The petals, a brilliant sunset orange fading to a deep fuchsia at the tips, slowly unfurled and retracted, a rhythmic, silent pulse. From its heart, a plume of fragrant steam rose, smelling of roasted nuts and exotic spices. “It breathes,” Rory whispered, fascinated despite herself. The flower emitted a low hum, a deep, bass note that resonated in her bones. Nyx approached it, their shadow-flesh appearing to absorb the ambient light, making the flower’s colours seem even more vibrant by contrast. “A lure. A promise. Its nectar drives madness in mortals, yet grants eternal, blissful satiety.” “Blissful satiety, at what cost?” Rory murmured, her hand still on the Fae-Forged Blade. The moonsilver felt colder here, almost aggressively so, a small defiance against the oppressive warmth. Her intelligence kicked in, trying to dissect the mechanisms of this realm. It wasn’t brute force, but seduction. Not an army to fight, but a hunger to resist. Her own childhood cravings for sweets, for escape, seemed pitifully small in comparison to the scale of desire engineered here. Isolde walked around the enormous flower, her gaze sweeping the horizon where the amber sky met the distant, hazy outlines of more organic architecture. "Prince Belphegor knows the heart of longing. He does not enslave with chains of iron, but chains of pleasure." Aurora took a deep breath, the heavy perfume of the land filling her lungs, making her head feel light. "So, this is Dymas. Gluttony embodied." She looked at Nyx, then at Isolde. "What could anyone possibly want here that would be worth the risk?" Nyx gave a silent, spectral shrug. "Perhaps what one cannot find anywhere else. Or perhaps, what one believes they *need*." As they continued, a narrow path, almost swallowed by the overgrown foliage, appeared between two massive, intertwined trees that wept viscous, golden sap. The air grew thicker here, the smells more concentrated, a dizzying concoction that made Aurora instinctively quicken her pace. The Heartstone was now a steady, dull ache, no longer pulsing with warning but humming with a deep resonance, as if it had found its home. The path twisted deeper into what felt like an endless garden maze. The ambient hum of the realm grew louder, punctuated by the occasional distant pop, like an overripe grape bursting, or a deeper, guttural groan that seemed to eman come from the earth itself. The beauty was still overwhelming, but the unease had intensified, a prickle at the back of Aurora's neck. This place was not merely wondrous; it was sentient, a living entity dedicated to consumption. And they were walking through its very maw.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
57.14% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags14
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"The berry’s light dimmed almost [almost]"
1"Isolde answered simply [simply]"
dialogueSentences28
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio0.143
effectiveRatio0.143
88.59% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1753
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"very"
count2
1
adverb"suddenly"
count1
2
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"suddenly"
2"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1753
totalAiIsms36
found
0
word"velvet"
count1
1
word"scanning"
count1
2
word"shimmered"
count2
3
word"pulsed"
count3
4
word"throb"
count1
5
word"echoed"
count1
6
word"warmth"
count4
7
word"beacon"
count1
8
word"whisper"
count2
9
word"familiar"
count1
10
word"desire"
count3
11
word"comforting"
count1
12
word"unraveling"
count1
13
word"stomach"
count1
14
word"tapestry"
count1
15
word"structure"
count1
16
word"crystal"
count1
17
word"weight"
count1
18
word"down her spine"
count1
19
word"chilling"
count1
20
word"rhythmic"
count1
21
word"pulse"
count1
22
word"resonated"
count1
23
word"oppressive"
count1
24
word"spectral"
count1
25
word"resonance"
count1
26
word"maw"
count1
highlights
0"velvet"
1"scanning"
2"shimmered"
3"pulsed"
4"throb"
5"echoed"
6"warmth"
7"beacon"
8"whisper"
9"familiar"
10"desire"
11"comforting"
12"unraveling"
13"stomach"
14"tapestry"
15"structure"
16"crystal"
17"weight"
18"down her spine"
19"chilling"
20"rhythmic"
21"pulse"
22"resonated"
23"oppressive"
24"spectral"
25"resonance"
26"maw"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences100
matches
0"felt a shiver"
57.14% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount5
narrationSentences100
filterMatches
0"feel"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences113
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen38
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans2
markdownWords2
totalWords1756
ratio0.001
matches
0"shift"
1"need"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions9
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
90.55% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions57
wordCount1514
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity1.19
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Isolde"
discoveredNames
Isolde12
Heartstone3
Pendant1
Aurora18
Varga1
Half-Fae1
Nyx10
Fae-Forged2
Blade2
Fae4
Grove1
Earth1
Shade1
persons
0"Isolde"
1"Aurora"
2"Varga"
3"Nyx"
places
0"Fae"
1"Grove"
2"Earth"
globalScore0.906
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences95
glossingSentenceCount7
matches
0"seemed ready to burst"
1"form rippling, seemingly less constrained by"
2"looked like solidified sugar or crystal,"
3"looked like an organic monument"
4"seemed pitifully small in comparison to the scale of desire engineered here"
5"felt like an endless garden maze"
6"groan that seemed to eman come from the earth itself"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches6
per1kWords3.417
wordCount1756
matches
0"Not a gentle thrum this time, but a fervent throb, a beat"
1"not hot, but the pervasive warmth of a humid summer evening after a storm"
2"not made of stone or metal, but of what looked like solidified sugar"
3"Not an army to fight, but a hunger to resist"
4"not enslave with chains of iron, but chains of pleasure"
5"no longer pulsing with warning but"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences113
matches(empty)
95.35% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs34
mean51.65
std24.98
cv0.484
sampleLengths
069
152
275
372
452
554
655
786
815
9101
1018
1157
1264
1319
1428
1573
1633
1781
1818
1967
2062
2141
228
2319
2451
2590
2622
2736
2877
2943
3044
3120
3268
3386
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences100
matches(empty)
85.06% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs232
matches
0"were like gaping"
1"was disorienting"
2"was still overwhelming"
3"were walking"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount4
semicolonCount3
flaggedSentences6
totalSentences113
ratio0.053
matches
0"The wildflowers – impossible, year-round blooms of cerulean and crimson – shimmered, their petals vibrating with an excess of magic."
1"It wasn't a hole, but a *shift*—a sudden giving way of reality."
2"Some bore leaves of impossible colours – deep crimson, acid green that pulsed with an inner light, and shimmering violet."
3"A waterfall cascaded in the distance, but the liquid wasn’t water; it was a pearlescent nectar, impossibly thick, shimmering with a mild luminescence as it crashed into a pool below."
4"This wasn't merely a paradise of indulgence; it was a prison built from desire."
5"This place was not merely wondrous; it was sentient, a living entity dedicated to consumption."
86.73% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1520
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"cold, leaf-shaped hilt"
1"same rich, dark loam,"
adverbCount63
adverbRatio0.04144736842105263
lyAdverbCount18
lyAdverbRatio0.011842105263157895
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences113
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences113
mean15.54
std6.32
cv0.407
sampleLengths
018
118
220
313
416
518
618
718
822
918
1017
1114
1210
1316
1426
156
164
1717
1819
1912
2014
2127
2213
2315
2412
2528
2617
2712
2823
2911
3023
3115
3211
3311
3420
3516
3621
3722
3814
394
4016
4120
4221
4311
4412
4530
4611
4710
489
4913
49.26% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats11
diversityRatio0.35398230088495575
totalSentences113
uniqueOpeners40
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences100
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount28
totalSentences100
matches
0"It burned with a warmth"
1"Her pale lavender eyes, vast"
2"Their faintly glowing violet eyes"
3"Her left wrist, where a"
4"She gripped the cold, leaf-shaped"
5"Her feet, Aurora noted, as"
6"It wasn't a hole, but"
7"It was warm, not hot,"
8"It felt heavy too, thick"
9"It was the same rich,"
10"They twisted into convoluted shapes,"
11"They paused beside a massive"
12"Their voice was a dry"
13"She wanted to touch everything,"
14"They walked, the spongy ground"
15"They looked more like jewels"
16"She reached out instinctively, then"
17"They ran a shadowy thumb"
18"It was a tower, not"
19"It was a deep, resonant"
ratio0.28
40.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount84
totalSentences100
matches
0"The air thickened, pressing down"
1"Aurora’s bright blue eyes narrowed,"
2"The wildflowers – impossible, year-round"
3"The Heartstone Pendant, a deep"
4"It burned with a warmth"
5"Isolde Varga’s voice, like windchimes"
6"The Half-Fae seer stood motionless,"
7"Her pale lavender eyes, vast"
8"Nyx, a towering silhouette of"
9"Their faintly glowing violet eyes"
10"A low, resonant sound, like"
11"Nyx turned their head, a"
12"Aurora ignored Nyx’s baiting."
13"Her left wrist, where a"
14"She gripped the cold, leaf-shaped"
15"Isolde merely smiled, a knowing"
16"Her feet, Aurora noted, as"
17"The distortion between the stones"
18"It wasn't a hole, but"
19"It was warm, not hot,"
ratio0.84
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences100
matches
0"Before them, the landscape stretched"
1"Or, rather, it muffled Aurora's"
ratio0.02
17.37% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences74
technicalSentenceCount13
matches
0"Aurora’s bright blue eyes narrowed, scanning the ancient oak standing stones that marked the boundary of Isolde’s grove."
1"The Half-Fae seer stood motionless, her silver hair spilling to her waist, catching the stuttering light so it glowed like spun moonlight."
2"It was the same rich, dark loam, but imbued with an alien quality, as if the very soil hummed with an invisible energy."
3"They paused beside a massive plant whose blossoms were like gaping mouths, thick with pollen that drifted in iridescent motes."
4"Isolde’s pale lavender eyes opened, fixed on a distant structure that peeked above the riotous canopy."
5"Some were smooth and polished like jade, others rough and spiky, exuding a sticky sap that glistened like honey."
6"They came to a clearing, a vast expanse of emerald-green grass that rippled in low, silent waves."
7"Its single, central stalk, wider than a bus, spiraled upwards, capped by a flower that dwarfed even the massive fruits."
8"Aurora took a deep breath, the heavy perfume of the land filling her lungs, making her head feel light."
9"As they continued, a narrow path, almost swallowed by the overgrown foliage, appeared between two massive, intertwined trees that wept viscous, golden sap."
10"The air grew thicker here, the smells more concentrated, a dizzying concoction that made Aurora instinctively quicken her pace."
11"The Heartstone was now a steady, dull ache, no longer pulsing with warning but humming with a deep resonance, as if it had found its home."
12"The ambient hum of the realm grew louder, punctuated by the occasional distant pop, like an overripe grape bursting, or a deeper, guttural groan that seemed to …"
17.86% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags14
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"Aurora said, trying to identify the overwhelming scent"
1"Aurora observed, her practical mind trying to categorize the impossible,"
2"Rory murmured, her hand still on the Fae-Forged Blade"
7.14% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags8
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"Aurora murmured (murmur)"
1"Aurora observed (observe)"
2"Rory whispered (whisper)"
3"Rory murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences28
tagDensity0.286
leniency0.571
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.286
66.4068%