Run: 2026-02-25-01KJ9576N1SFCNWYDRZQT3DM4P

Run Details

Duration:
17.8s
Cost:
$0.008597
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The air shimmered, twisting like heat from a desert road, then tore open. Not a violent rip, but a silent unzipping, revealing a chasm of impossible colours. Rory’s breath caught, a cold knot tightening in her chest. The Heartstone Pendant, a deep crimson pulse on her breast, throbbed against her ribs, a drumbeat of anticipation. They stepped through the tear, a transition less like walking and more like falling into a denser, sweeter atmosphere. The moment their boots touched the foreign ground, the portal stitched itself shut behind them, leaving them stranded. Light, the colour of aged brandy, spilled from a sky that held no sun. Instead, vast, slow-moving eddies of amber cloud drifted through the zenith, painting the world below in a perpetual twilight glow. The air, thick and opulent, clung to Rory’s tongue, tasting of fermented fruit and exotic spices, too rich, too sweet. It coated her lungs, a sensation of eating the very air itself. Beneath her, the ground offered no firm resistance. It felt like walking on a carpet of moss and crushed petals, each step sinking slightly into a springy, fragrant loam. Giant, swollen grapevines, their trunks thicker than old oak trees, twisted skyward, laden with clusters of fruit the size of apples. Each grape shimmered with an inner luminescence, their skins a riot of purples, emeralds, and golds. The sheer abundance overwhelmed her senses, a visual cacophony of growth pushing against itself. “Dymas,” Rory breathed, the name a whisper swallowed by the vibrant stillness. Her hand instinctively found the hilt of the Fae-Forged Blade at her hip, its cold moonsilver a stark contrast to the cloying warmth around her. The crescent scar on her wrist thrummed, a forgotten pulse of ancient memory returning to life. Nyx, a deeper shadow against the amber light, stood motionless beside her, violet eyes scanning the horizon. Not a blink, not a twitch. A faint breeze, heavy with the scent of flowering nectarines and roasting meats, stirred the edges of their ethereal form, but they remained a silent sentinel. Isolde moved with the grace of wind, her silver hair catching the strange light. She stood a few paces away, her pale lavender eyes fixed on a cluster of blossoming trees that spilled petals like liquid sunbeams onto a path woven from woven vines. She left no prints in the soft ground. “A feast for the eyes,” Isolde’s voice, a soft chime, hung in the heavy air. “And a burden for the soul.” Rory picked a grape, its skin cool and firm beneath her fingers. The fruit burst in her mouth, a torrent of syrup and alcohol, sharp and sweet, almost too much to bear. She swallowed, feeling the heat bloom in her stomach, a dizzying jolt. “No wonder it’s Gluttony,” Rory cleared her throat, the words sounding guttural after the refined explosion in her mouth. “It’s like the whole place is trying to make you eat it.” Nyx turned its head, the movement fluid and silent. “The bounty is boundless,” a whisper echoed, not from Nyx’s lips directly, but seeming to emanate from the shadowed presence itself. “Yet what it demands is more.” They followed a winding path carpeted with crimson and gold leaves, deeper into the sprawling landscape. Here, the grapevines gave way to orchards where trees bore fruit no artist could conjure. Pomegranates grew alongside glistening, impossibly blue berries, and pale, fragrant melons split open on branches, offering glimpses of amber flesh and jewel-like seeds. Everything dripped with ripeness, with juice, with the promise of more. Deep, throaty rumblings echoed from unseen distances, interspersed with the high-pitched trill of some unseen creature. It sounded like distant laughter, or perhaps the contented sigh of a satiated beast. Rory spotted what looked like a colossal silver pumpkin nestled among the roots of a colossal, sprawling tree with leaves like velvet. Its skin, reflecting the amber sky, pulsed with a subtle luminescence. She knelt, tracing a finger over its cool, smooth surface. No stem, no visible attachment – it simply rested there, perfectly formed, a testament to an alien cultivation. “It holds no purpose here but to exist,” Isolde said, her voice soft, as if she read Rory’s thought. “A beauty born of pure excess.” A sudden gust of wind, laden with the thick, cloying smell of honey and roasted meat, swept through the grove. The leaves rustled with a sound like dry bones scattering. Rory looked up, peering through the dense canopy. She spotted a structure in the distance, partially obscured by the intertwining foliage: a tower, its bricks glowing with a faint warmth, rising from the heart of the forest. It seemed to be constructed from stacked, luminous geodes. “That’s new,” Rory commented, pushing through a curtain of silver leaves that felt like woven silk. They resisted her touch, then parted, revealing a wider vista. Before them stretched a valley, a breathtaking spectacle of agricultural art. Terraced gardens, each level a different colour, cascaded down the gentle slopes. Rivers of what looked like liquid honey flowed through sculpted channels, feeding beds of gigantic, crimson-tipped mushrooms and fields of iridescent grains that shimmered like scattered diamonds. In the immediate foreground, peculiar, round creatures with multi-faceted eyes, resembling inflated armadillos, grazed contentedly on clumps of glowing moss, their movements slow and deliberate. A low hum, a resonant thrum, vibrated through the ground beneath Rory’s feet. It was the sound of countless tiny processes, of life thriving and growing and consuming, all at once. The Heartstone beat a steady rhythm, warm against her skin, a counterpoint to the distant, indistinct clamour. “The air carries the weight of a thousand kitchens,” Nyx observed, a whisper of a breeze. Its spectral form seemed to stretch, subtly, as if absorbing some invisible current from the overwhelming environment. “A tapestry woven of desire and fulfilment.” A cascade of brilliant blue flowers, their petals tasting faintly of ginger and mint, grew by the honey river. Rory ran her hand over them, feeling a cool tingle. “This place…it’s not just growing food, is it?” Rory asked, looking toward the distant geodesic tower, now more clearly visible. It glowed with a soft, pulsing light. “It feels like it’s *breathing*.” Isolde’s eyes, pale lavender, seemed to pierce the opulent landscape, seeing something beyond the visible. “What is sown in abundance, often starves the spirit,” the seer murmured, her voice carrying a resonance that cut through the richness of the air. “Such gardens grow only at a bitter cost.” The armadillo-like creatures, aware of their presence, lifted their segmented heads, their multi-faceted eyes reflecting the amber sky and the intruders. They did not flee, nor did they show aggression, but merely continued their slow, rhythmic chewing. Their breath, expelled in tiny puffs, smelled faintly of sweet hay and damp earth. Rory sensed no malice, only placid contentment. As they moved closer to the honey river, the hum grew louder, revealing itself as the combined sound of countless iridescent insects, like fat, glittering bees, buzzing around the water’s edge. They were harvesting the liquid, their small bodies collecting the glistening gold. Rory knelt by the river, dipping her finger into the thick, warm current. It had the consistency of warm syrup, and a taste that was pure, rich honey with an elusive, floral aftertaste. Too much of it, she knew, would be sickly sweet. “No trace of suffering,” Rory observed, withdrawing her finger, wiping it on her trousers. “No sweat, no toil. It just…is.” She gestured around at the effortless bounty. Nyx’s shadow-head tilted slightly, its violet eyes fixed on the distant tower. Its form wavered, a subtle ripple in the fabric of dark. “Suffering whispers in the silences between the feasts,” Nyx’s voice was barely audible now, a breath on the wind. “A silent prayer for an emptiness to feel anew.” Rory felt a prickle of unease. The beauty here was absolute, the abundance overwhelming. But behind Nyx’s words, she sensed the underlying truth of this place. Gluttony wasn’t just about food; it was about insatiable desire, a constant craving for more, regardless of the consequences. The effortless plenty was a mask, hiding something darker. A small, emerald-feathered bird, its beak long and curved like a sickle, landed on a branch above them, its throat swelling as it emitted a series of rapid, echoing calls. The sound was melodic, almost musical, yet carried a strange undertone of longing. The amber sun seemed to pulse with each note. Rory looked back at the serpentine path they had followed, then to the imposing tower that glimmered in the distance, a beacon of otherworldly power. The Fae-Forged Blade felt heavier at her side, a solid, cold anchor in this world of sensory excess. The air grew thicker with the scent of spices, not just fruit, but notes of cardamom and saffron. Perhaps a true feast awaited them, one that involved more than just passive indulgence. Perhaps one that demanded participation.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags11
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"She gestured around [around]"
dialogueSentences20
tagDensity0.55
leniency1
rawRatio0.091
effectiveRatio0.091
86.54% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1486
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"very"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count2
2
adverb"perfectly"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"slightly"
2"perfectly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1486
totalAiIsms44
found
0
word"shimmered"
count3
1
word"pulse"
count3
2
word"throbbed"
count1
3
word"anticipation"
count1
4
word"cacophony"
count1
5
word"whisper"
count3
6
word"stark"
count1
7
word"warmth"
count2
8
word"scanning"
count1
9
word"sentinel"
count1
10
word"stomach"
count1
11
word"echoed"
count2
12
word"glistening"
count2
13
word"velvet"
count1
14
word"pulsed"
count1
15
word"tracing"
count1
16
word"testament"
count1
17
word"structure"
count1
18
word"constructed"
count1
19
word"silk"
count1
20
word"vibrated"
count1
21
word"weight"
count1
22
word"spectral"
count1
23
word"tapestry"
count1
24
word"desire"
count2
25
word"resonance"
count1
26
word"rhythmic"
count1
27
word"effortless"
count2
28
word"wavered"
count1
29
word"echoing"
count1
30
word"imposing"
count1
31
word"beacon"
count1
32
word"otherworldly"
count1
highlights
0"shimmered"
1"pulse"
2"throbbed"
3"anticipation"
4"cacophony"
5"whisper"
6"stark"
7"warmth"
8"scanning"
9"sentinel"
10"stomach"
11"echoed"
12"glistening"
13"velvet"
14"pulsed"
15"tracing"
16"testament"
17"structure"
18"constructed"
19"silk"
20"vibrated"
21"weight"
22"spectral"
23"tapestry"
24"desire"
25"resonance"
26"rhythmic"
27"effortless"
28"wavered"
29"echoing"
30"imposing"
31"beacon"
32"otherworldly"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences91
matches
0"felt a prickle"
80.06% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences91
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences99
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen31
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords1
totalWords1487
ratio0.001
matches
0"breathing"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions8
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
87.50% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions35
wordCount1360
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity1.25
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Heartstone2
Pendant1
Rory17
Fae-Forged2
Blade2
Nyx7
Isolde4
persons
0"Heartstone"
1"Rory"
2"Blade"
3"Nyx"
4"Isolde"
places(empty)
globalScore0.875
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences90
glossingSentenceCount6
matches
0"felt like walking on a carpet of moss a"
1"sounded like distant laughter, or perhaps"
2"looked like a colossal silver pumpkin nes"
3"felt like woven silk"
4"looked like liquid honey flowed through s"
5"as if absorbing some invisible current from the overwhelming environment"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches4
per1kWords2.69
wordCount1487
matches
0"Not a violent rip, but a silent unzipping, revealing a chasm of impossible colours"
1"not from Nyx’s lips directly, but seeming to emanate from the shadowed presence itself"
2"no purpose here but"
3"not just fruit, but notes of cardamom"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences99
matches(empty)
79.53% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs34
mean43.74
std18.73
cv0.428
sampleLengths
055
137
266
380
453
549
652
721
844
931
109
1127
1265
1330
1461
1525
1676
1726
1875
1948
2040
2129
2232
2315
2433
2558
2643
2743
2827
2923
3028
3154
3252
3380
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences91
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs194
matches
0"were harvesting"
85.14% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount1
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences99
ratio0.02
matches
0"No stem, no visible attachment – it simply rested there, perfectly formed, a testament to an alien cultivation."
1"Gluttony wasn’t just about food; it was about insatiable desire, a constant craving for more, regardless of the consequences."
82.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1366
adjectiveStacks3
stackExamples
0"vast, slow-moving eddies"
1"gigantic, crimson-tipped mushrooms"
2"small, emerald-feathered bird,"
adverbCount52
adverbRatio0.03806734992679356
lyAdverbCount18
lyAdverbRatio0.013177159590043924
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences99
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences99
mean15.02
std6.1
cv0.406
sampleLengths
013
114
210
318
419
518
614
720
820
912
108
1121
1221
1316
1414
1512
1625
1716
1817
196
2026
2114
2230
238
2415
256
2612
2720
2812
2919
3012
319
3221
336
3416
3515
3623
3711
3816
3914
4022
4111
4210
4318
4419
456
4620
4710
488
4929
56.57% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats9
diversityRatio0.3939393939393939
totalSentences99
uniqueOpeners39
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences91
matches
0"Instead, vast, slow-moving eddies of"
1"Too much of it, she"
2"Perhaps a true feast awaited"
3"Perhaps one that demanded participation."
ratio0.044
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount23
totalSentences91
matches
0"They stepped through the tear,"
1"It coated her lungs, a"
2"It felt like walking on"
3"Her hand instinctively found the"
4"She stood a few paces"
5"She left no prints in"
6"She swallowed, feeling the heat"
7"They followed a winding path"
8"It sounded like distant laughter,"
9"Its skin, reflecting the amber"
10"She knelt, tracing a finger"
11"She spotted a structure in"
12"It seemed to be constructed"
13"They resisted her touch, then"
14"It was the sound of"
15"Its spectral form seemed to"
16"It glowed with a soft,"
17"They did not flee, nor"
18"Their breath, expelled in tiny"
19"They were harvesting the liquid,"
ratio0.253
53.41% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount74
totalSentences91
matches
0"The air shimmered, twisting like"
1"Rory’s breath caught, a cold"
2"The Heartstone Pendant, a deep"
3"They stepped through the tear,"
4"The moment their boots touched"
5"The air, thick and opulent,"
6"It coated her lungs, a"
7"It felt like walking on"
8"Each grape shimmered with an"
9"The sheer abundance overwhelmed her"
10"Rory breathed, the name a"
11"Her hand instinctively found the"
12"The crescent scar on her"
13"Nyx, a deeper shadow against"
14"A faint breeze, heavy with"
15"Isolde moved with the grace"
16"She stood a few paces"
17"She left no prints in"
18"Isolde’s voice, a soft chime,"
19"Rory picked a grape, its"
ratio0.813
54.95% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences91
matches
0"Before them stretched a valley,"
ratio0.011
77.92% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences66
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"She stood a few paces away, her pale lavender eyes fixed on a cluster of blossoming trees that spilled petals like liquid sunbeams onto a path woven from woven …"
1"She spotted a structure in the distance, partially obscured by the intertwining foliage: a tower, its bricks glowing with a faint warmth, rising from the heart …"
2"Rivers of what looked like liquid honey flowed through sculpted channels, feeding beds of gigantic, crimson-tipped mushrooms and fields of iridescent grains tha…"
3"Its spectral form seemed to stretch, subtly, as if absorbing some invisible current from the overwhelming environment."
4"It had the consistency of warm syrup, and a taste that was pure, rich honey with an elusive, floral aftertaste."
5"Rory looked back at the serpentine path they had followed, then to the imposing tower that glimmered in the distance, a beacon of otherworldly power."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags11
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"Rory breathed, the name a whisper swallowed by the vibrant stillness"
1"Isolde said, her voice soft, as if she read Rory’s thought"
2"Nyx observed, a whisper of a breeze"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"Rory breathed (breathe)"
1"Rory commented (comment)"
2"Nyx observed (observe)"
3"the seer murmured (murmur)"
4"Rory observed (observe)"
dialogueSentences20
tagDensity0.35
leniency0.7
rawRatio0.714
effectiveRatio0.5
74.7869%