Run: 2026-02-25-01KJ959SEBZSX06V9PVHCXCBK8

Run Details

Duration:
31.9s
Cost:
$0.012879
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
I hoisted the heavy wooden crate of Tanqueray onto the bar, the wood grain groaning against the polished mahogany. My knuckles turned white. One of the bottles rattled, a sharp glass-on-glass chime that cut through the low hum of the Soho evening. Silas didn't look up from the glass he polished. He moved with a rhythmic, measured grace, his hazel eyes fixed on the lint he chased with a white linen cloth. His silver signet ring caught the dim amber light, casting a distorted jagged reflection onto the bar's surface. "The delivery from the Golden Empress is late," Silas said. His voice carried that quiet authority, the kind that didn't need volume to command a room. He shifted his weight, his left leg favouring the injury he never spoke about. "Yu-Fei had a rush on the duck. I told her I’d swing by after the gin is settled." I wiped a bead of sweat from my forehead with the back of my hand. The small crescent-shaped scar on my left wrist pulsed, a faint silver reminder of a life I’d left behind in Cardiff. The heavy brass-fitted door of The Raven's Nest creaked open. A man stepped inside, framed by the green neon glow from the sign outside. He shook a black silk umbrella, sending a spray of raindrops across the sawdust-covered floor. He wore a crisp tailored navy Italian wool suit that screamed of Chancery Lane and high-stakes litigation. I froze, a bottle of gin halfway to the shelf. "Rory?" The name felt like a physical blow. Nobody in London called me Rory. Here, I was the girl from the flat upstairs, the delivery runner, or the quiet shadow in the corner of the bar. "Gareth." I set the bottle down. My heart hammered against my ribs like a trapped bird. Gareth vaulted the gap between the door and the bar in three long strides. He looked different. The soft-edged, stuttering boy who’d sat next to me in Criminal Law had vanished. In his place stood a man with sharp cheekbones and a sleek expensive silver Swiss watch that glinted as he ran a hand through his perfectly groomed hair. "I thought it was you. I saw you through the window a block back, carrying those takeaway bags. I couldn't believe my eyes." He paused, his gaze sweeping over my faded black t-shirt and the smudges of grease on my jeans. "What are you doing here, Rory? You just... disappeared. Your father had the police out for months." I leaned back against the shelves, the cold glass of the bottles pressing into my spine. "I live here. I work. It’s a life." "It’s a disaster." Gareth gestured to the room. The Raven's Nest sat in a comfortable state of decay. Faded black-and-white photographs of forgotten jazz musicians lined the walls, interspersed with old yellowed nautical maps that Silas claimed showed the locations of his old sins. The air smelled of stale hops, expensive tobacco, and the ozone of a London thunderstorm. "You were the top of the class. You were going to be a barrister. Now you’re... what? Tending bar in a Soho dive?" "I prefer the term 'hidden gem'," Silas interjected. He placed the polished glass on the counter with a definitive click. His eyes stayed on Gareth, lingering just a second too long on the set of the man's shoulders. Silas had a way of reading people like a dossier. "And I don't believe we've had the pleasure, Mr...?" "Gareth Thorne. Junior Partner at Miller, Thorne, and Associates." Gareth didn't offer his hand. He kept his focus on me, his eyes filled with a pity that made my skin crawl. "Your mother is distraught, Rory. She still keeps your room exactly the way you left it. The posters, the books. Everything." "Jennifer always did like a museum," I said. The bitterness in my voice surprised me. I reached for a rag and started scrubbing a non-existent stain on the mahogany. "Why are you in London, Gareth? Soho isn't exactly the hunting ground for corporate lawyers on a Tuesday night." "I’m representing a client in a property dispute on Greek Street. But that’s irrelevant." He stepped closer, the smell of his expensive sandalwood cologne clashing with the salt-and-vinegar scent of the bar snacks. "I saw Evan last week." The rag stopped moving. I felt the blood drain from my face, a cold numbness spreading from my fingertips to my chest. "He’s looking for you, Rory. He hasn't stopped. He’s... he’s changed. He’s sober now. He says he wants to make amends for the accident." My wrist burned. I tucked the crescent scar out of sight, my fingers curling into a fist. "It wasn't an accident." "He’s a powerful man now, Rory. His father’s firm merged. If you just came back, if you talked to him, we could settle the legalities of the flat in Cardiff. You’re still on the deed. It’s an administrative nightmare." Silas moved then. He didn't rush, but suddenly he stood at the tap right in front of Gareth. He began pouring a Guinness, the dark liquid swirling into a creamy tan head. "The lady expressed her lack of interest, Mr Thorne. In my establishment, we value the peace. We respect the privacy." Gareth finally looked at Silas, his lip curling in a slight sneer. "This is a private matter between old friends. I don't see how the help is involved." Silas didn't blink. He topped off the pint and set it on a thick cardboard coaster. "London is a very large city, yet it has a funny way of shrinking when people start looking for things they shouldn't. You should drink your Stout. It’s on the house. Then you should find your client on Greek Street." Gareth laughed, a dry hollow sound that echoed off the maps on the wall. "You think this is some sort of movie? I’m here to bring a friend home. Rory, look at yourself. You’re hiding in the dark. You’re delivering noodles. It’s beneath you." He reached out to grab my arm, his fingers aiming for the wrist I was trying to hide. I flinched back, my heel catching on the edge of the gin crate. "Don't touch me." My voice was a thin wire, ready to snap. Gareth’s face hardened. The mask of the concerned friend slipped, revealing the predatory edge of the man who won cases by breaking witnesses. "You always were dramatic. Evan was right about that. You run away from your problems and expect everyone else to clean up the mess. Your father’s reputation is in tatters because of your little disappearing act." "My father's reputation was built on lies and expensive Scotch," I spat. The front door opened again. A gust of wind rumbled through the bar, rattling the maps. A tall figure in a heavy drenched trench coat stood in the entrance. He didn't shake his umbrella. He didn't move. He just stared through the gloom at the three of us huddled at the bar. Gareth checked his watch, a slow smug smile spreading across his face. "I told him you might be here. He didn't believe me at first. He said you were too smart to stay this close to the surface." I looked at the man in the doorway. The light from the green neon sign hit his face, revealing the familiar sharp line of a jaw I’d once loved and the cold dead eyes I’d spent two years trying to forget. Evan stepped into the room. "Hello, Laila," he said, using the name I’d used when we first met in that little old dusty university library. The heavy glass Guinness pint in Silas's hand shattered. He didn't drop it. He squeezed it until the thick shards bit into his palm, the dark Stout mixing with the bright red blood that began to drip onto the mahogany bar. Evan reached into his coat pocket and pulled out a small black leather notebook. "We have so much to discuss." Gareth stepped aside, clearing the path between the predator and the prey. "I'll leave you two to it," Gareth said, his voice devoid of any warmth. "I have a dinner at eight." Evan walked forward, his boots thudding heavily on the sawdust. He didn't look at Silas. He didn't look at the bar. He kept his eyes fixed on the scar on my wrist. Silas reached under the bar, his bloody hand disappearing into the shadows beneath the till. The sound of a heavy metal slide racking home echoed through the silent bar. "The Nest is closed for the night," Silas said, his voice a low growl of thunder. Evan stopped. He looked at the shotgun barrel now resting on the edge of the bar, then back at me. "You always did pick the most interesting places to hide, Rory." He reached into his other pocket and produced a heavy silver Zippo lighter. He flicked it open. The flame danced in the draft. "But I think it’s time we burnt it all down."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags7
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences35
tagDensity0.2
leniency0.4
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
90.07% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1510
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"perfectly"
count1
1
adverb"suddenly"
count1
2
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"perfectly"
1"suddenly"
2"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
50.33% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1510
totalAiIsms15
found
0
word"rhythmic"
count1
1
word"measured"
count1
2
word"weight"
count1
3
word"pulsed"
count1
4
word"reminder"
count1
5
word"silk"
count1
6
word"comfortable"
count1
7
word"echoed"
count2
8
word"gloom"
count1
9
word"familiar"
count1
10
word"shattered"
count1
11
word"predator"
count1
12
word"warmth"
count1
13
word"flicked"
count1
highlights
0"rhythmic"
1"measured"
2"weight"
3"pulsed"
4"reminder"
5"silk"
6"comfortable"
7"echoed"
8"gloom"
9"familiar"
10"shattered"
11"predator"
12"warmth"
13"flicked"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"knuckles turned white"
count1
highlights
0"knuckles turned white"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences87
matches(empty)
93.60% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences87
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences115
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen41
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1510
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions47
wordCount1023
uniqueNames19
maxNameDensity1.17
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Tanqueray1
Soho1
Cardiff1
Raven2
Nest2
Italian1
Chancery1
Lane1
London2
Rory1
Criminal1
Law1
Swiss1
Silas12
Gareth11
Guinness2
Stout1
Evan4
Zippo1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Rory"
3"Law"
4"Silas"
5"Gareth"
6"Stout"
7"Evan"
places
0"Soho"
1"Cardiff"
2"Chancery"
3"Lane"
4"London"
5"Criminal"
globalScore0.913
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences65
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"felt like a physical blow"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1510
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences115
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs72
mean20.97
std13.17
cv0.628
sampleLengths
042
148
210
330
418
536
610
746
810
91
1035
111
1215
1359
1423
1518
1617
1716
188
193
2056
2123
228
2340
249
259
2622
2721
288
2921
3019
3114
3219
335
3422
3524
3617
374
3839
3932
4020
4112
4216
4316
4440
4514
4630
4731
483
499
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences87
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs162
matches
0"was trying"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences115
ratio0
matches(empty)
82.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1035
adjectiveStacks3
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped scar"
1"heavy brass-fitted door"
2"old yellowed nautical maps"
adverbCount18
adverbRatio0.017391304347826087
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.003864734299516908
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences115
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences115
mean13.13
std7.97
cv0.607
sampleLengths
019
14
219
39
421
518
610
716
814
918
1015
1121
1210
1314
1415
1517
1610
171
187
196
2022
211
225
2310
2414
253
2614
2728
2823
2918
3017
3116
328
333
345
3510
3626
3715
3823
398
4012
4118
4210
439
449
455
4617
4721
488
497
36.96% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats15
diversityRatio0.25217391304347825
totalSentences115
uniqueOpeners29
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences82
matches(empty)
ratio0
15.12% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount42
totalSentences82
matches
0"I hoisted the heavy wooden"
1"My knuckles turned white."
2"He moved with a rhythmic,"
3"His silver signet ring caught"
4"His voice carried that quiet"
5"He shifted his weight, his"
6"I wiped a bead of"
7"He shook a black silk"
8"He wore a crisp tailored"
9"I froze, a bottle of"
10"I set the bottle down."
11"My heart hammered against my"
12"He looked different."
13"He paused, his gaze sweeping"
14"I leaned back against the"
15"He placed the polished glass"
16"His eyes stayed on Gareth,"
17"He kept his focus on"
18"I reached for a rag"
19"He stepped closer, the smell"
ratio0.512
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount79
totalSentences82
matches
0"I hoisted the heavy wooden"
1"My knuckles turned white."
2"Silas didn't look up from"
3"He moved with a rhythmic,"
4"His silver signet ring caught"
5"His voice carried that quiet"
6"He shifted his weight, his"
7"I wiped a bead of"
8"The small crescent-shaped scar on"
9"The heavy brass-fitted door of"
10"A man stepped inside, framed"
11"He shook a black silk"
12"He wore a crisp tailored"
13"I froze, a bottle of"
14"The name felt like a"
15"Nobody in London called me"
16"Here, I was the girl"
17"I set the bottle down."
18"My heart hammered against my"
19"Gareth vaulted the gap between"
ratio0.963
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences82
matches(empty)
ratio0
48.52% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences53
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"He wore a crisp tailored navy Italian wool suit that screamed of Chancery Lane and high-stakes litigation."
1"The soft-edged, stuttering boy who’d sat next to me in Criminal Law had vanished."
2"In his place stood a man with sharp cheekbones and a sleek expensive silver Swiss watch that glinted as he ran a hand through his perfectly groomed hair."
3"He kept his focus on me, his eyes filled with a pity that made my skin crawl."
4"He reached out to grab my arm, his fingers aiming for the wrist I was trying to hide."
5"The mask of the concerned friend slipped, revealing the predatory edge of the man who won cases by breaking witnesses."
6"The light from the green neon sign hit his face, revealing the familiar sharp line of a jaw I’d once loved and the cold dead eyes I’d spent two years trying to …"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags7
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"Gareth said, his voice devoid of any warmth"
1"Silas said, his voice a low growl of thunder"
92.86% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Silas interjected (interject)"
1"I spat (spit)"
dialogueSentences35
tagDensity0.2
leniency0.4
rawRatio0.286
effectiveRatio0.114
76.4260%