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Run: 2026-02-25-01KJ959YJRD6FDYRX0X1WRFG3V
Run Details
Model:
Gemini 2.5 Flash (Reasoning)
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Mystery: examining a crime scene
Duration:
25.1s
Cost:
$0.012294
Provider:
Google AI Studio
Evaluation summary
Score
Evaluator
Details Link
40.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
(details)
65.32%
AI-ism adverb frequency
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism character names
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
(details)
36.42%
AI-ism word frequency
(details)
100.00%
Cliché density
(details)
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
(details)
100.00%
Filter word density
(details)
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
(details)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
(details)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
(details)
54.49%
Name drop frequency
(details)
33.72%
Narrator intent-glossing
(details)
0.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
(details)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
(details)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
(details)
99.21%
Passive voice overuse
(details)
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
(details)
99.24%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
(details)
91.09%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
(details)
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
(details)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
(details)
58.78%
Sentence opener variety
(details)
90.91%
Adverb-first sentence starts
(details)
100.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
(details)
37.27%
Subject-first sentence starts
(details)
45.45%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
(details)
77.92%
Technical jargon density
(details)
65.00%
Useless dialogue additions
(details)
3.66%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
(details)
76.6159%
Overall
Model input
System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>
Model response
Messages
Meta
AI
The air hung heavy, a
metallic tang of damp earth and rust permeating Detective Harlow Quinn’s lungs. Faint light splintered through a grated opening high above, painting the abandoned Tube station's
gloom
in
fractured
streaks.
Water wept down cracked concrete
walls, pooling in brackish puddles between the grime-caked tracks.
Her boot heels echoed a
sharp staccato as she descended the rickety aluminium ramp, past the yellow tape that sliced through the cavernous space. Uniformed officers moved with an uncertain caution, their movements hushed in the vast,
echoing
chamber. Forensics technicians, gloved and masked, bent over luminous sheets, their flashlights carving clinical arcs across the scene.
The usual cacophony of a
murder investigation – the clipped radios, urgent calls, the hurried exchange of intelligence –
was
absent.
A profound, unnatural quiet swallowed
sound. Harlow drew a deep breath. Her eyes, sharp and brown, swept over the tableau.
Graffiti marred every surface, sprawling
tentacles of spray paint consuming the original advertisements. Yet,
something
felt off. Too still.
The dust lay thick on
the deserted platforms, undisturbed save for the clumsy prints of first responders. No discarded rubbish. No faint scent of stale urine or forgotten decay that typically clung to such places. Just the cold, metallic damp. "Detective." DS Davies, lean and pale, approached, his breath misting in the
chill
. "Glad you're here. This one's... unusual." Harlow offered a terse nod. "What do we have, Davies?"
She glanced at the worn
leather
watch
on her left wrist. "Single male, mid-thirties, found slumped against the pillar, near the tracks."
Davies hitched a thumb towards
a distant scene. "No ID on him. No conventional entry or exit points. Tunnel seals are intact at either end. No signs of struggle, no forced entry anywhere in the immediate vicinity here. Uniformed patrol stumbled on it during a routine sweep. They actually fell through one of the surface grates after a tip-off about squatters. Lucky it
was
only a few feet drop." "A routine sweep in an abandoned station under Camden? That's new,"
Harlow said, her gaze fixed
on the body outline. "And no ID? In this area, someone always talks."
The Metropolitan Police's grip on
the city's myriad forgotten spaces
was
tight, if often grudgingly maintained.
Davies shifted, his eyes darting
around the cavernous space. "That's the thing, guv. No one knew this section of the line existed until now. It's not on the old maps, not even the
really
old ones. It's like it just… appeared." Harlow’s sharp jaw tightened. "Just appeared? What's the preliminary cause of death?" "That’s where it gets
really
weird, Detective."
Davies lowered his voice
. "Body's intact. No visible wounds, no obvious trauma. No blood. But..."
He trailed off, pulling a
hand through his thinning hair. "Forensics are saying... they can't get a temperature reading, and rigor mortis is uneven. Like he’s been dead for hours, but also just minutes." Harlow felt a
familiar
prickle along her nape. She remembered Morris, the impossible, inexplicable things that had surrounded his last case. She pushed it down. "Show me." They walked towards the pillar. The
silence
deepened, broken only by a distant drip of water. As they drew closer, Harlow saw the body. A man, dressed in what
looked like good quality, if slightly old
-fashioned, tailoring.
He sat upright, propped against
a concrete support, his head lolling to one side.
His eyes were open, staring
at nothing.
His face held a rictus
of
profound
surprise, almost fear. "And her." Davies gestured to a figure with a shock of curly red hair, perched on an upturned crate a little further down the platform.
She wore round glasses that
caught the weak light. A worn leather satchel lay open beside her, spilling books onto the grimy concrete. Eva Kowalski. Harlow recognised her from sporadic,
slightly
unnerving reports from other divisions. An "occult specialist" the museum sometimes lent out when things got too strange for conventional archaeology. "What's she doing here?" Harlow’s voice
was
flat. "She
was
apparently already here when uniformed showed up," Davies offered, "researching obscure transit lines. Said she knew this place existed, even if maps didn't. Insisted she could help. We've kept her from touching anything, but..." He shrugged. "Said her expertise might be 'relevant'." Harlow ignored him, her gaze fixed on the body.
She moved with her characteristic
military precision, stepping over scattered fragments of brick, avoiding disturbing the faint sheen of dust.
She knelt, her gloved hands
hovering. The man's skin had a peculiar translucence, like old wax.
It wasn't the usual pallor
of death.
Instead, it was as if
his vitality had been
carefully
,
completely
, extracted. No, not extracted. Emptied. Harlow
scanned
the immediate area. The dust. A thick, uniform layer covering everything. And yet, around the body, on the concrete immediately adjacent to the man's slumped figure, the dust
was
slightly
thinner.
Not swept away, but almost
... repelled. A faint,
perfectly
circular demarcation line. "No blood trail, not a drop," Davies reiterated, clearly unnerved. "What about his shadow?" Eva Kowalski's voice cut through the stillness, calm and oddly strong for someone so slight.
She had approached, moving with
a quiet confidence that jarred with the 'nervous habit' mentioned in her files.
She tucked a strand of
curly red hair
behind
her left ear. "Have either of you noticed?" Harlow straightened, turning
slowly
to face Eva. The occult researcher's green eyes, magnified by her glasses, held a disquieting
intensity
. "His shadow?"
Harlow repeated, a ghost of a challenge in her voice
. "Look at the way the light hits him from the grate," Eva gestured with careful precision towards the distant opening. "You see the pillar’s shadow, the broken railing’s shadow, even yours and the sergeant’s. But his? It's... flat. Lacking depth. It doesn't fall across the track as it should, not with that light source. It's almost consumed by the shadow *
behind
* him." Harlow turned back to the body, her brow
furrowed
. The afternoon sun, breaking through the high grate, cast long, distorted shadows across the station floor. Davies pointed a flashlight. The man's shadow *
was
* there, a dark stain against the concrete, but it lacked the crisp, defined edges of the other shadows.
It appeared fuzzy, somehow less
substantial,
as if clinging desperately to the wall directly behind him, instead of stretching out
. Like a photographic negative gone wrong. "Interesting observation, Miss Kowalski,"
Harlow allowed, her voice guarded
. "Anything else you've found in your 'research' of abandoned Tube lines?" Eva’s gaze remained fixed on the body. "This isn't just an abandoned Tube line, Detective."
She spoke softly, yet her
words held a sharp edge. "This is a former entry point to the Veil Market. Or at least, it
was
. A place where trade isn't always of this world." "The Veil Market," Harlow repeated, testing the words. "And what
precisely
do they trade in, Miss Kowalski? Ghostly goods and invisible information?" Sarcasm laced her tone, but she watched Eva closely. "Enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, esoteric information," Eva corrected, meeting Harlow’s gaze without flinching. "And sometimes, things more... fundamental. Like essences. Or life force."
She pointed a slender finger
to a small, smooth object half-buried in the dust near the victim’s outstretched hand.
It looked like a carved
piece of bone, bleached white and intricately worked with fine grooves. "That is a bone token. An entry currency to the Market. Its presence here means he wasn't just passing through." Davies peered at the token, frowning. "Looks like a piece of old ivory. Could be a souvenir." "Or evidence,"
Harlow countered, her eyes still on the bone
. The unusual stillness of the air, the unscientific temperature of the body, the bizarre shadow – they all
started to
coalesce with Eva’s words. It made her
stomach
churn
. Morris. "That token," Eva continued, "is often used in exchanges where a price beyond coin is demanded. Sometimes, it's a memory. Sometimes, a year from one's life. And sometimes, it's a soul." Her green eyes, earnest
behind
the glasses,
flickered
to the victim. "I believe this man did not die of conventional means, Detective. He looks drained. Hollowed out. As if
something
was
ripped from him. The uneven rigor mortis, the lack of discernible temperature, the phantom shadow... these are consistent with a
profound
energetic displacement." Harlow knelt again, ignoring the dirt. She studied the faint ring in the dust, the almost-clean circle around the body.
Not a cleaning, but a boundary
. An energy, repelling the fine particles. Could it be? She ran a gloved finger over the section of concrete. It felt colder than the rest, much colder,
not a natural damp chill, but a sort of hungry cold
. A cold that absorbed. She remembered the fear on the man’s face, the open eyes. A surprised terror,
not of a killer, but of a process
. Of
being *taken
from*. "No visible wounds, you said, Davies." Harlow spoke
slowly
, her gaze sweeping from the man’s stiff, waxy face to the peculiar shadow clinging to the wall. "But what if the wound isn’t visible? What if it's
something
internal,
something
... pulled out?" She studied the area again. She saw it now, a subtle distortion in the air itself, just above the man’s chest, like heat haze but in reverse, a wobbling emptiness. Too subtle for
standard
forensics, but undeniable once you looked for it. A tremor in the light, where no light should waver. Davies looked between Harlow and Eva, his face a mask of confusion. "Pulled out? What, like... his guts?" Harlow shook her head, her eyes distant, fixed on the man’s impossible shadow. "No, Davies. Something else." Her mind
raced
, connecting the unsettling cold, the phantom shadow and the waxy skin to the vague, terrifying reports from Morris’s final case. The impossible wounds, the inexplicable drain of life. The way the light had
seemed to
bend around *
something
* in the old warehouse,
something
that had
pulsed
with an unnatural hunger. She had dismissed it then, rationalised it, but the memory now surged, raw and undeniable. The man hadn't just died here. He had
been emptied
. And Eva, with her strange theories and books, saw the footprint of the draining. Harlow looked at the bone token, at the flat, anemic shadow, at the cold concentric ring in the dust. She saw what Davies and the forensics team, bound by their empirical training, had missed. She saw the evidence of a transaction, completed, and horrifically, paid in full.
created_at
"2026-02-25T01:06:08.606Z"
2/25/2026, 1:06:08 AM
model
"google/gemini-2.5-flash"
app_id
182717
external_user
(null)
streamed
true
cancelled
false
latency
1395
moderation_latency
(null)
generation_time
25076
tokens_prompt
1149
tokens_completion
4156
native_tokens_prompt
1073
native_tokens_completion
4789
native_tokens_completion_images
0
native_tokens_reasoning
2396
native_tokens_cached
0
num_media_prompt
(null)
num_input_audio_prompt
(null)
num_media_completion
0
num_search_results
(null)
origin
"https://ncbench.com/"
is_byok
false
finish_reason
"stop"
native_finish_reason
"STOP"
usage
0.0122944
router
(null)
provider_responses
0
endpoint_id
"16c01e26-9b91-4d22-b487-ed35634b017d"
is_byok
false
latency
1395
model_permaslug
"google/gemini-2.5-flash"
provider_name
"Google AI Studio"
status
200
api_type
"completions"
id
"gen-1771981568-JborkBWkL7GpmusJMir0"
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(null)
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provider_name
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Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
40.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
25
adverbTagCount
4
adverbTags
0
"things got too [too]"
1
"Davies reiterated clearly [clearly]"
2
"She spoke softly [softly]"
3
"Harlow spoke slowly [slowly]"
dialogueSentences
41
tagDensity
0.61
leniency
1
rawRatio
0.16
effectiveRatio
0.16
65.32%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount
1730
totalAiIsmAdverbs
12
found
0
adverb
"really"
count
2
1
adverb
"slightly"
count
3
2
adverb
"carefully"
count
1
3
adverb
"completely"
count
1
4
adverb
"perfectly"
count
1
5
adverb
"slowly"
count
2
6
adverb
"softly"
count
1
7
adverb
"precisely"
count
1
highlights
0
"really"
1
"slightly"
2
"carefully"
3
"completely"
4
"perfectly"
5
"slowly"
6
"softly"
7
"precisely"
100.00%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
36.42%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount
1730
totalAiIsms
22
found
0
word
"gloom"
count
1
1
word
"fractured"
count
1
2
word
"echoed"
count
1
3
word
"echoing"
count
1
4
word
"cacophony"
count
1
5
word
"profound"
count
3
6
word
"chill"
count
2
7
word
"familiar"
count
1
8
word
"silence"
count
1
9
word
"scanned"
count
1
10
word
"swept away"
count
1
11
word
"intensity"
count
1
12
word
"furrowed"
count
1
13
word
"stomach"
count
1
14
word
"churn"
count
1
15
word
"flickered"
count
1
16
word
"standard"
count
1
17
word
"raced"
count
1
18
word
"pulsed"
count
1
highlights
0
"gloom"
1
"fractured"
2
"echoed"
3
"echoing"
4
"cacophony"
5
"profound"
6
"chill"
7
"familiar"
8
"silence"
9
"scanned"
10
"swept away"
11
"intensity"
12
"furrowed"
13
"stomach"
14
"churn"
15
"flickered"
16
"standard"
17
"raced"
18
"pulsed"
100.00%
Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
0
maxInWindow
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
116
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
1
hedgeCount
2
narrationSentences
116
filterMatches
0
"watch"
hedgeMatches
0
"started to"
1
"seemed to"
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences
131
gibberishSentences
0
adjustedGibberishSentences
0
longSentenceCount
0
runOnParagraphCount
0
giantParagraphCount
0
wordSaladCount
0
repetitionLoopCount
0
controlTokenCount
0
maxSentenceWordsSeen
62
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans
4
markdownWords
5
totalWords
1733
ratio
0.003
matches
0
"behind"
1
"was"
2
"taken from"
3
"something"
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions
10
unquotedAttributions
0
matches
(empty)
54.49%
Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions
56
wordCount
1204
uniqueNames
11
maxNameDensity
1.91
worstName
"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity
3
worstWindowName
"Harlow"
discoveredNames
Detective
1
Harlow
23
Quinn
1
Tube
1
Davies
11
Metropolitan
1
Police
1
Morris
3
Kowalski
2
Eva
11
Sarcasm
1
persons
0
"Harlow"
1
"Quinn"
2
"Davies"
3
"Police"
4
"Morris"
5
"Kowalski"
6
"Eva"
7
"Sarcasm"
places
(empty)
globalScore
0.545
windowScore
0.667
33.72%
Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences
86
glossingSentenceCount
4
matches
0
"looked like good quality, if slightly old"
1
"it was as if his vitality had been carefully, completely, extracted"
2
"as if clinging desperately to the wall directly behind him, instead of stretching out"
3
"appeared fuzzy somehow less substantial, as if clinging desperately to the wall directly behind him, instead of stretching out"
4
"looked like a carved piece of bone, bleac"
0.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches
4
per1kWords
2.308
wordCount
1733
matches
0
"Not swept away, but almost"
1
"Not a cleaning, but a boundary"
2
"not a natural damp chill, but a sort of hungry cold"
3
"not of a killer, but of a process"
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
0
totalSentences
131
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
36
mean
48.14
std
25.71
cv
0.534
sampleLengths
0
73
1
59
2
73
3
19
4
21
5
80
6
45
7
41
8
12
9
56
10
27
11
68
12
77
13
8
14
44
15
64
16
4
17
45
18
10
19
54
20
32
21
62
22
77
23
20
24
49
25
31
26
79
27
17
28
40
29
85
30
68
31
26
32
93
33
18
34
85
35
71
99.21%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount
2
totalSentences
116
matches
0
"being *taken"
1
"been emptied"
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
0
totalVerbs
194
matches
(empty)
99.24%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount
3
semicolonCount
0
flaggedSentences
2
totalSentences
131
ratio
0.015
matches
0
"The usual cacophony of a murder investigation – the clipped radios, urgent calls, the hurried exchange of intelligence – was absent."
1
"The unusual stillness of the air, the unscientific temperature of the body, the bizarre shadow – they all started to coalesce with Eva’s words."
91.09%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1131
adjectiveStacks
1
stackExamples
0
"lay open beside her,"
adverbCount
49
adverbRatio
0.04332449160035367
lyAdverbCount
18
lyAdverbRatio
0.015915119363395226
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
131
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
131
mean
13.23
std
9.52
cv
0.72
sampleLengths
0
17
1
18
2
14
3
24
4
15
5
17
6
21
7
6
8
5
9
9
10
13
11
4
12
2
13
17
14
3
15
15
16
5
17
13
18
6
19
5
20
16
21
19
22
61
23
20
24
25
25
9
26
32
27
4
28
8
29
11
30
21
31
24
32
8
33
13
34
4
35
2
36
5
37
11
38
8
39
13
40
14
41
7
42
10
43
25
44
9
45
14
46
2
47
11
48
16
49
8
58.78%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
8
diversityRatio
0.3893129770992366
totalSentences
131
uniqueOpeners
51
90.91%
Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount
3
totalSentences
110
matches
0
"Just the cold, metallic damp."
1
"Instead, it was as if"
2
"Too subtle for standard forensics,"
ratio
0.027
100.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount
32
totalSentences
110
matches
0
"Her boot heels echoed a"
1
"Her eyes, sharp and brown,"
2
"She glanced at the worn"
3
"He trailed off, pulling a"
4
"She remembered Morris, the impossible,"
5
"She pushed it down."
6
"They walked towards the pillar."
7
"He sat upright, propped against"
8
"His eyes were open, staring"
9
"His face held a rictus"
10
"She wore round glasses that"
11
"She moved with her characteristic"
12
"She knelt, her gloved hands"
13
"It wasn't the usual pallor"
14
"She had approached, moving with"
15
"She tucked a strand of"
16
"It appeared fuzzy, somehow less"
17
"She spoke softly, yet her"
18
"She pointed a slender finger"
19
"It looked like a carved"
ratio
0.291
37.27%
Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount
93
totalSentences
110
matches
0
"The air hung heavy, a"
1
"Water wept down cracked concrete"
2
"Her boot heels echoed a"
3
"Forensics technicians, gloved and masked,"
4
"The usual cacophony of a"
5
"A profound, unnatural quiet swallowed"
6
"Harlow drew a deep breath."
7
"Her eyes, sharp and brown,"
8
"Graffiti marred every surface, sprawling"
9
"The dust lay thick on"
10
"DS Davies, lean and pale,"
11
"Harlow offered a terse nod."
12
"She glanced at the worn"
13
"Davies hitched a thumb towards"
14
"Harlow said, her gaze fixed"
15
"The Metropolitan Police's grip on"
16
"Davies shifted, his eyes darting"
17
"Harlow’s sharp jaw tightened."
18
"Davies lowered his voice"
19
"He trailed off, pulling a"
ratio
0.845
45.45%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount
1
totalSentences
110
matches
0
"Yet, something felt off."
ratio
0.009
77.92%
Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences
44
technicalSentenceCount
4
matches
0
"Her boot heels echoed a sharp staccato as she descended the rickety aluminium ramp, past the yellow tape that sliced through the cavernous space."
1
"She remembered Morris, the impossible, inexplicable things that had surrounded his last case."
2
"It appeared fuzzy, somehow less substantial, as if clinging desperately to the wall directly behind him, instead of stretching out."
3
"The way the light had seemed to bend around *something* in the old warehouse, something that had pulsed with an unnatural hunger."
65.00%
Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags
25
uselessAdditionCount
3
matches
0
"Harlow repeated, a ghost of a challenge in her voice"
1
"Harlow allowed, her voice guarded"
2
"Harlow countered, her eyes still on the bone"
3.66%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
7
fancyCount
6
fancyTags
0
"Harlow repeated (repeat)"
1
"She spoke softly (speak)"
2
"Harlow repeated (repeat)"
3
"Eva corrected (correct)"
4
"Eva continued (continue)"
5
"Harlow spoke slowly (speak)"
dialogueSentences
41
tagDensity
0.171
leniency
0.341
rawRatio
0.857
effectiveRatio
0.293
76.6159%