Run: 2026-02-25-01KJ95EYKTV8JGWJSVGAAF4SCB

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
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Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

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The metallic tang of old blood was almost overpowering, thick enough to coat Quinn's tongue. She swung her torch beam low, catching the glint of scattered glass across the pitted flooring of what had once been a bustling Underground platform. It wasn't the blood, or the shattered lamps, or the general air of squalor that pricked at her. It was the stillness. An unnatural, absolute stillness clinging to the scene like cobwebs. "Detective Quinn? Glad you could make it." The voice, tinny with apprehension, echoed from further down the platform. Quinn didn't reply, her gaze fixed, scanning. Not just the immediate area, but the periphery, the tunnels branching off, the shadowed recesses where anything might churn. Seventeen years walking crime scenes, eighteen years climbing the ranks, and this one felt… wrong. Deeply, fundamentally wrong. She finally turned the beam onto the uniformed officer, a young man whose face was pale beneath his cap. PC Davies. He clutched a clipboard, its edges dog-eared, as if it offered some sort of shield against the oppressive atmosphere. "They're saying... well, the preliminary report's a mess, Ma'am," Davies stammered, gesturing vaguely. "Victim looks like he fell. Hit his head. Hard. Probably during some sort of... scuffle." He cleared his throat, his eyes darting nervously towards the shadowy ends of the platforms. "But the energy signatures are off the charts. Forensics is baffled. Said the readings are like nothing they've ever seen outside a lab. And his boots..." Quinn moved past him, her boots crunching on shattered glass, an unnecessary percussion in the profound quiet. The victim lay near a defunct ticket booth, sprawled unnaturally. A man, middle-aged, dressed in dark, expensive-looking wool that struck Quinn as incongruous with the grimy surroundings. His eyes stared blankly at the arched roof, wide with an unspeakable horror that seemed etched into his very soul. But there was no sign of a struggle. No defensive wounds marred his skin. His hands rested by his sides, palms up, as if he’d calmly laid himself down to rest. Davies was right about the energy readings, though. A faint, almost subliminal hum prickled the hairs on Quinn's arms, raising gooseflesh beneath her trench coat. "A scuffle that leaves no marks?" Quinn murmured, stooping to examine the matted dust and grime around the body. The glass shards were from a lamp, likely a security fixture of some kind that had been systematically smashed. Yet the victim’s expensive clothing was pristine, save for a single smear of grey dust on his left shoulder. And his polished leather shoes, far too clean for this environment, were entirely unscuffed. "The paramedics said he was already gone when they got here, Ma'am," Davies offered, his voice trembling now. "Looked like he just… dropped. Then the weird readings started spiking. The initial call was disturbance, but then it escalated. They said it was like... like the ground swallowed the noise." Quinn traced a finger along the victim's jawline. It was sharp, defined, but strangely cool to the touch. Too cool. Not the clammy chill of decomposition that usually accompanied a body gone cold, but an unsettling, dry coldness that seemed to emanate from within. She circled him slowly, her torch beam sweeping over the abandoned platform, delving into the recesses of the deep, disused station. This wasn't just an abandoned piece of the Underground. It was nestled deep beneath Camden, a nexus that had its own whispered legends and its own dark reputation. A place where the mundane bled into the… other. The Veil Market. Her partner, Morris, would have loved this. He’d always been drawn to the fringe, the places where reality frayed at the edges, where rational explanations dissolved into myth. Before he… She shook her head, forcing the unwelcome memory away. Davies was watching her, his breath misting in the cool air. "Dropped?" Quinn echoed, her sharp eyes catching something near the victim’s outstretched right hand. A faint shimmer, almost invisible unless the torchlight hit it just so. She knelt, careful not to disturb anything, her movements economical and precise. It was a small, tarnished brass compass. Its face was etched with intricate, protective sigils that seemed to writhe slightly in her torchlight. A patina of verdigris coated its hexagonal casing. A Veil Compass. Crafted by a Shade artisan, no doubt. This wasn't standard police issue, not by a long chalk. She’d seen a few of these before, in cases that had subsequently vanished into the 'unexplained' file cabinet, cases that bore the faint, shimmering mark of the impossible. They pointed towards supernatural convergences, towards tears in the fabric of the world. "What's that, Ma'am?" Davies edged closer, his professional curiosity battling with a palpable sense of dread. "Just... an item of interest," Quinn replied, her voice carefully neutral, betraying none of the sudden, cold certainty that settled in her gut. She stood, her gaze sweeping over the blood spatter, the shattered glass, the victim's placid expression. It all felt like a stage set. The obvious clues – the presumed fall, the suggestion of a fight – were distractingly loud, like a poorly orchestrated symphony. But underneath, the silence screamed volumes. "This man, Mr. Davies, he didn't fall. He didn't scuffle. And he certainly didn't just 'drop'." She pulled out her own worn leather watch. The mechanism ticked with relentless, ordinary precision, a comforting anchor in the sea of strangeness. This wasn't simple. Not anywhere near it. "The report said 'disturbance', Davies. What kind of disturbance did the witness hear?" Quinn asked, her eyes scanning the tunnel entrances, searching for any sign of recent passage, any anomaly that Davies, focused on the dead man, might have missed. "Just shouting, Ma'am. Muffled. Then silence. The witness was..." Davies hesitated, looking around nervously as if expecting figures to emerge from the gloom. "He was on the street, near an entrance. Said it was like... like the ground swallowed the noise. Completely." *The ground swallowed the noise.* Quinn felt a familiar, icy dread creep down her spine. Morris had reported similar anomalies. Whispers of places where sound simply ceased to exist, swallowed by something vast and unseen. Anomalies that had, in the end, swallowed him whole three years ago. "And the energy readings?" she pressed, needing to anchor herself in tangible, if inexplicable, data. "What exactly were they spiking *from*?" Davies' brow furrowed. He flipped through the pages of his clipboard, his lips moving silently. "They were... everywhere, Ma'am. Not localised. It’s like the entire station was... pulsing. But the epicentre seems to be... closer to that tunnel." He pointed towards a dark, gaping maw to her left, a stark shadow against the grime-caked brickwork. "The one that's sealed off. Or supposed to be." "Sealed off," Quinn repeated flatly, a wry smile playing on her lips. She walked towards the tunnel entrance Davies indicated. Thick, reinforced metal plating was bolted across it, stained with rust and age, appearing impassable. But as she neared, her torchlight played over the worn metal. A faint, almost imperceptible scratch mark, fresh against the old corrosion, caught her eye near the bottom. It looked as if something dense and sharp had been dragged across it with considerable force. And the air around it felt… colder. Thinner. Dangerously so. She knelt again, her torch beam playing over the damaged plating. There was a faint, metallic odour emanating from the scratch, distinct from the blood and decay. Sharper. Acrid. Zinc, or something like it. She remembered the Veil Compass. Its needle, now resting in her palm, was twitching, almost imperceptibly, towards this very tunnel. "The Veil Market schedules shift," Quinn murmured to herself, not really expecting Davies to understand the implications. "Moves locations every full moon. Always moving. Always… accessible. Someone used this entrance, Davies. Or rather, something did." Davies swallowed hard, shifting his weight. "Ma'am, that tunnel hasn't been open in thirty years. It leads to the old service tunnels. Blocked off after... well, after the incidents." "Incidents," Quinn repeated, the word tasting like ash. "Right. And this victim? Any identification?" "Wallet was found on him, Ma'am. Mr. Silas Thorne. A collector, the preliminary report says. Specialised in… esoteric artifacts. Had a key card for this place, apparently. Unauthorised access, naturally. He wasn't supposed to be here." A collector. Of esoteric artifacts. Found dead in an abandoned, supposedly sealed-off section of station, in a place rumoured to border something far stranger than the Metropolitan Police usually dealt with. And with a magical compass clutched in his hand. It wasn't adding up. It wasn't adding up at all. Quinn stood, her gaze drifting back to the victim's wide, staring eyes. They weren't just staring in horror. There was a strange, vacant quality to them, as if something fundamental had been… scooped out. Not removed, but utterly emptied. Not just his life, but his very essence. "He didn't just drop, Davies," Quinn stated, her voice hardening into something cold and sharp. "And this wasn't an accident." She looked from the compass, its intricate sigils seeming to pulse, to the scratched tunnel, then back to the victim. "Someone, or something, brought him here. And whatever it was, it didn't want him to leave." She took a step closer to the sealed tunnel, the faint hum of energy from the Veil Compass growing stronger against her palm. The sigils on its face seemed to glow with an inner, otherworldly light, a silent, urgent warning. "This wasn't just a disturbed individual trying to access a black market," Quinn continued, her voice low and intense, cutting through the heavy air. "This was an invitation. And it appears Mr. Thorne accepted. Or perhaps," she added, her eyes narrowing as a dawning horror spread across her face, "he was the key." Suddenly, from the depths of the sealed tunnel, a faint *thrumming* began to resonate, a low vibration that seemed to travel through the very bedrock of the city, a physical tremor that made the shattered glass on the floor rattle. The Veil Compass in Quinn’s hand grew warm, its needle spinning wildly now, not pointing, but *searching* frantically. The air grew heavy, charged, the faint metallic odour sharpening into something acrid and burning, the smell of spent magic and something ancient and hungry. Davies let out a choked gasp, fumbling frantically for his radio, his face a mask of sheer terror. Quinn’s eyes narrowed, the salt-and-pepper hair stark against the grimness of her face. She knew that *thrumming*. It was the sound of a door being forced open. A door that had been locked for a very good reason. And Silas Thorne hadn't just accepted an invitation; he'd been bait. The energy spike wasn't fading. It was building, growing exponentially, and the only direction the compass needle would settle, before it was ripped from her hand by an unseen force, was *towards* the tunnel. With a distressed mechanical shriek, the compass flew from her grasp, vanishing whole into the oppressive blackness, followed instantly by a guttural, inhuman roar that ripped through the silence, echoing from the heart of the sealed tunnel with raw, uncontainable malice.The metallic tang of old blood was almost overpowering, thick enough to coat Quinn's tongue. She swung her torch beam low, catching the glint of scattered glass across the pitted flooring of what had once been a bustling Underground platform. It wasn't the blood, or the shattered lamps, or the general air of squalor that pricked at her. It was the stillness. An unnatural, absolute stillness clinging to the scene like cobwebs. "Detective Quinn? Glad you could make it." The voice, tinny with apprehension, echoed from further down the platform. Quinn didn't reply, her gaze fixed, scanning. Not just the immediate area, but the periphery, the tunnels branching off, the shadowed recesses where anything might churn. Seventeen years walking crime scenes, eighteen years climbing the ranks, and this one felt… wrong. Deeply, fundamentally wrong. She finally turned the beam onto the uniformed officer, a young man whose face was pale beneath his cap. PC Davies. He clutched a clipboard, its edges dog-eared, as if it offered some sort of shield against the oppressive atmosphere. "They're saying... well, the preliminary report's a mess, Ma'am," Davies stammered, gesturing vaguely. "Victim looks like he fell. Hit his head. Hard. Probably during some sort of... scuffle." He cleared his throat, his eyes darting nervously towards the shadowy ends of the platforms. "But the energy signatures are off the charts. Forensics is baffled. Said the readings are like nothing they've ever seen outside a lab. And his boots..." Quinn moved past him, her boots crunching on shattered glass, an unnecessary percussion in the profound quiet. The victim lay near a defunct ticket booth, sprawled unnaturally. A man, middle-aged, dressed in dark, expensive-looking wool that struck Quinn as incongruous with the grimy surroundings. His eyes stared blankly at the arched roof, wide with an unspeakable horror that seemed etched into his very soul. But there was no sign of a struggle. No defensive wounds marred his skin. His hands rested by his sides, palms up, as if he’d calmly laid himself down to rest. Davies was right about the energy readings, though. A faint, almost subliminal hum prickled the hairs on Quinn's arms, raising gooseflesh beneath her trench coat. "A scuffle that leaves no marks?" Quinn murmured, stooping to examine the matted dust and grime around the body. The glass shards were from a lamp, likely a security fixture of some kind that had been systematically smashed. Yet the victim’s expensive clothing was pristine, save for a single smear of grey dust on his left shoulder. And his polished leather shoes, far too clean for this environment, were entirely unscuffed. "The paramedics said he was already gone when they got here, Ma'am," Davies offered, his voice trembling now. "Looked like he just… dropped. Then the weird readings started spiking. The initial call was disturbance, but then it escalated. They said it was like... like the ground swallowed the noise." Quinn traced a finger along the victim's jawline. It was sharp, defined, but strangely cool to the touch. Too cool. Not the clammy chill of decomposition that usually accompanied a body gone cold, but an unsettling, dry coldness that seemed to emanate from within. She circled him slowly, her torch beam sweeping over the abandoned platform, delving into the recesses of the deep, disused station. This wasn't just an abandoned piece of the Underground. It was nestled deep beneath Camden, a nexus that had its own whispered legends and its own dark reputation. A place where the mundane bled into the… other. The Veil Market. Her partner, Morris, would have loved this. He’d always been drawn to the fringe, the places where reality frayed at the edges, where rational explanations dissolved into myth. Before he… She shook her head, forcing the unwelcome memory away. Davies was watching her, his breath misting in the cool air. "Dropped?" Quinn echoed, her sharp eyes catching something near the victim’s outstretched right hand. A faint shimmer, almost invisible unless the torchlight hit it just so. She knelt, careful not to disturb anything, her movements economical and precise. It was a small, tarnished brass compass. Its face was etched with intricate, protective sigils that seemed to writhe slightly in her torchlight. A patina of verdigris coated its hexagonal casing. A Veil Compass. Crafted by a Shade artisan, no doubt. This wasn't standard police issue, not by a long chalk. She’d seen a few of these before, in cases that had subsequently vanished into the 'unexplained' file cabinet, cases that bore the faint, shimmering mark of the impossible. They pointed towards supernatural convergences, towards tears in the fabric of the world. "What's that, Ma'am?" Davies edged closer, his professional curiosity battling with a palpable sense of dread. "Just... an item of interest," Quinn replied, her voice carefully neutral, betraying none of the sudden, cold certainty that settled in her gut. She stood, her gaze sweeping over the blood spatter, the shattered glass, the victim's placid expression. It all felt like a stage set. The obvious clues – the presumed fall, the suggestion of a fight – were distractingly loud, like a poorly orchestrated symphony. But underneath, the silence screamed volumes. "This man, Mr. Davies, he didn't fall. He didn't scuffle. And he certainly didn't just 'drop'." She pulled out her own worn leather watch. The mechanism ticked with relentless, ordinary precision, a comforting anchor in the sea of strangeness. This wasn't simple. Not anywhere near it. "The report said 'disturbance', Davies. What kind of disturbance did the witness hear?" Quinn asked, her eyes scanning the tunnel entrances, searching for any sign of recent passage, any anomaly that Davies, focused on the dead man, might have missed. "Just shouting, Ma'am. Muffled. Then silence. The witness was..." Davies hesitated, looking around nervously as if expecting figures to emerge from the gloom. "He was on the street, near an entrance. Said it was like... like the ground swallowed the noise. Completely." *The ground swallowed the noise.* Quinn felt a familiar, icy dread creep down her spine. Morris had reported similar anomalies. Whispers of places where sound simply ceased to exist, swallowed by something vast and unseen. Anomalies that had, in the end, swallowed him whole three years ago. "And the energy readings?" she pressed, needing to anchor herself in tangible, if inexplicable, data. "What exactly were they spiking *from*?" Davies' brow furrowed. He flipped through the pages of his clipboard, his lips moving silently. "They were... everywhere, Ma'am. Not localised. It’s like the entire station was... pulsing. But the epicentre seems to be... closer to that tunnel." He pointed towards a dark, gaping maw to her left, a stark shadow against the grime-caked brickwork. "The one that's sealed off. Or supposed to be." "Sealed off," Quinn repeated flatly, a wry smile playing on her lips. She walked towards the tunnel entrance Davies indicated. Thick, reinforced metal plating was bolted across it, stained with rust and age, appearing impassable. But as she neared, her torchlight played over the worn metal. A faint, almost imperceptible scratch mark, fresh against the old corrosion, caught her eye near the bottom. It looked as if something dense and sharp had been dragged across it with considerable force. And the air around it felt… colder. Thinner. Dangerously so. She knelt again, her torch beam playing over the damaged plating. There was a faint, metallic odour emanating from the scratch, distinct from the blood and decay. Sharper. Acrid. Zinc, or something like it. She remembered the Veil Compass. Its needle, now resting in her palm, was twitching, almost imperceptibly, towards this very tunnel. "The Veil Market schedules shift," Quinn murmured to herself, not really expecting Davies to understand the implications. "Moves locations every full moon. Always moving. Always… accessible. Someone used this entrance, Davies. Or rather, something did." Davies swallowed hard, shifting his weight. "Ma'am, that tunnel hasn't been open in thirty years. It leads to the old service tunnels. Blocked off after... well, after the incidents." "Incidents," Quinn repeated, the word tasting like ash. "Right. And this victim? Any identification?" "Wallet was found on him, Ma'am. Mr. Silas Thorne. A collector, the preliminary report says. Specialised in… esoteric artifacts. Had a key card for this place, apparently. Unauthorised access, naturally. He wasn't supposed to be here." A collector. Of esoteric artifacts. Found dead in an abandoned, supposedly sealed-off section of station, in a place rumoured to border something far stranger than the Metropolitan Police usually dealt with. And with a magical compass clutched in his hand. It wasn't adding up. It wasn't adding up at all. Quinn stood, her gaze drifting back to the victim's wide, staring eyes. They weren't just staring in horror. There was a strange, vacant quality to them, as if something fundamental had been… scooped out. Not removed, but utterly emptied. Not just his life, but his very essence. "He didn't just drop, Davies," Quinn stated, her voice hardening into something cold and sharp. "And this wasn't an accident." She looked from the compass, its intricate sigils seeming to pulse, to the scratched tunnel, then back to the victim. "Someone, or something, brought him here. And whatever it was, it didn't want him to leave." She took a step closer to the sealed tunnel, the faint hum of energy from the Veil Compass growing stronger against her palm. The sigils on its face seemed to glow with an inner, otherworldly light, a silent, urgent warning. "This wasn't just a disturbed individual trying to access a black market," Quinn continued, her voice low and intense, cutting through the heavy air. "This was an invitation. And it appears Mr. Thorne accepted. Or perhaps," she added, her eyes narrowing as a dawning horror spread across her face, "he was the key." Suddenly, from the depths of the sealed tunnel, a faint *thrumming* began to resonate, a low vibration that seemed to travel through the very bedrock of the city, a physical tremor that made the shattered glass on the floor rattle. The Veil Compass in Quinn’s hand grew warm, its needle spinning wildly now, not pointing, but *searching* frantically. The air grew heavy, charged, the faint metallic odour sharpening into something acrid and burning, the smell of spent magic and something ancient and hungry. Davies let out a choked gasp, fumbling frantically for his radio, his face a mask of sheer terror. Quinn’s eyes narrowed, the salt-and-pepper hair stark against the grimness of her face. She knew that *thrumming*. It was the sound of a door being forced open. A door that had been locked for a very good reason. And Silas Thorne hadn't just accepted an invitation; he'd been bait. The energy spike wasn't fading. It was building, growing exponentially, and the only direction the compass needle would settle, before it was ripped from her hand by an unseen force, was *towards* the tunnel. With a distressed mechanical shriek, the compass flew from her grasp, vanishing whole into the oppressive blackness, followed instantly by a guttural, inhuman roar that ripped through the silence, echoing from the heart of the sealed tunnel with raw, uncontainable malice.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags40
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Quinn repeated flatly [flatly]"
1"Quinn repeated flatly [flatly]"
dialogueSentences60
tagDensity0.667
leniency1
rawRatio0.05
effectiveRatio0.05
62.01% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount3685
totalAiIsmAdverbs28
found
0
adverb"nervously"
count4
1
adverb"very"
count10
2
adverb"slowly"
count2
3
adverb"slightly"
count2
4
adverb"carefully"
count2
5
adverb"completely"
count2
6
adverb"really"
count2
7
adverb"utterly"
count2
8
adverb"suddenly"
count2
highlights
0"nervously"
1"very"
2"slowly"
3"slightly"
4"carefully"
5"completely"
6"really"
7"utterly"
8"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount3685
totalAiIsms90
found
0
word"glint"
count2
1
word"shattered"
count8
2
word"apprehension"
count2
3
word"echoed"
count4
4
word"scanning"
count4
5
word"churn"
count2
6
word"oppressive"
count4
7
word"profound"
count2
8
word"etched"
count4
9
word"pristine"
count2
10
word"traced"
count2
11
word"chill"
count2
12
word"delving"
count2
13
word"intricate"
count4
14
word"standard"
count2
15
word"palpable"
count2
16
word"sense of"
count2
17
word"symphony"
count2
18
word"silence"
count6
19
word"comforting"
count2
20
word"gloom"
count2
21
word"familiar"
count2
22
word"down her spine"
count2
23
word"tangible"
count2
24
word"furrowed"
count2
25
word"maw"
count2
26
word"stark"
count4
27
word"weight"
count2
28
word"pulse"
count2
29
word"otherworldly"
count2
30
word"depths"
count2
31
word"charged"
count2
32
word"mechanical"
count2
33
word"echoing"
count2
highlights
0"glint"
1"shattered"
2"apprehension"
3"echoed"
4"scanning"
5"churn"
6"oppressive"
7"profound"
8"etched"
9"pristine"
10"traced"
11"chill"
12"delving"
13"intricate"
14"standard"
15"palpable"
16"sense of"
17"symphony"
18"silence"
19"comforting"
20"gloom"
21"familiar"
22"down her spine"
23"tangible"
24"furrowed"
25"maw"
26"stark"
27"weight"
28"pulse"
29"otherworldly"
30"depths"
31"charged"
32"mechanical"
33"echoing"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count2
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells4
narrationSentences249
matches
0"y with apprehension"
1"g in horror"
2"y with apprehension"
3"g in horror"
74.01% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount10
narrationSentences249
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences273
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen55
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans12
markdownWords20
totalWords3689
ratio0.005
matches
0"The ground swallowed the noise."
1"from"
2"thrumming"
3"searching"
4"thrumming"
5"towards"
6"The ground swallowed the noise."
7"from"
8"thrumming"
9"searching"
10"thrumming"
11"towards"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions33
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions104
wordCount2939
uniqueNames14
maxNameDensity1.29
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Quinn38
Underground4
Davies24
Camden2
Veil10
Market2
Morris4
Compass8
Shade2
Metropolitan2
Police2
Suddenly2
Silas2
Thorne2
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Davies"
2"Morris"
3"Compass"
4"Police"
5"Silas"
6"Thorne"
places
0"Veil"
globalScore0.854
windowScore0.833
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences195
glossingSentenceCount12
matches
0"seemed etched into his very soul"
1"coldness that seemed to emanate from within"
2"sigils that seemed to writhe slightly in her torchlight"
3"felt like a stage set"
4"as if expecting figures to emerge from the gloom"
5"vibration that seemed to travel through the very bedrock of the city, a physical tremor that made the shattered glass on the floor rattle"
6"seemed etched into his very soul"
7"coldness that seemed to emanate from within"
8"sigils that seemed to writhe slightly in her torchlight"
9"felt like a stage set"
10"as if expecting figures to emerge from the gloom"
11"vibration that seemed to travel through the very bedrock of the city, a physical tremor that made the shattered glass on the floor rattle"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches10
per1kWords2.711
wordCount3689
matches
0"Not just the immediate area, but the periphery, the tunnels branching off, the shadowed reces"
1"Not the clammy chill of decomposition that usually accompanied a body gone cold, but an unsettling, dry coldness"
2"Not removed, but utterly emptied"
3"Not just his life, but his very essence"
4"not pointing, but *searching* frantically"
5"Not just the immediate area, but the periphery, the tunnels branching off, the shadowed reces"
6"Not the clammy chill of decomposition that usually accompanied a body gone cold, but an unsettling, dry coldness"
7"Not removed, but utterly emptied"
8"Not just his life, but his very essence"
9"not pointing, but *searching* frantically"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences273
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs63
mean58.56
std37.08
cv0.633
sampleLengths
072
118
244
340
469
5120
671
749
8135
920
10130
1116
1289
1330
1440
1542
1647
1721
1864
1989
2054
2135
2229
2314
2436
2550
2647
2756
2840
2953
30101
31195
3218
3344
3440
3569
36120
3771
3849
39135
4020
41130
4216
4389
4430
4540
4642
4747
4821
4964
82.72% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount16
totalSentences249
matches
0"was nestled"
1"been drawn"
2"was etched"
3"was bolted"
4"been dragged"
5"being forced"
6"been locked"
7"was ripped"
8"was nestled"
9"been drawn"
10"was etched"
11"was bolted"
12"been dragged"
13"being forced"
14"been locked"
15"was ripped"
0.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount14
totalVerbs452
matches
0"was almost overpowering"
1"was watching"
2"was twitching"
3"wasn't adding"
4"wasn't adding"
5"weren't just staring"
6"was building"
7"was almost overpowering"
8"was watching"
9"was twitching"
10"wasn't adding"
11"wasn't adding"
12"weren't just staring"
13"was building"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount4
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences4
totalSentences273
ratio0.015
matches
0"The obvious clues – the presumed fall, the suggestion of a fight – were distractingly loud, like a poorly orchestrated symphony."
1"And Silas Thorne hadn't just accepted an invitation; he'd been bait."
2"The obvious clues – the presumed fall, the suggestion of a fight – were distractingly loud, like a poorly orchestrated symphony."
3"And Silas Thorne hadn't just accepted an invitation; he'd been bait."
82.74% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1264
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount71
adverbRatio0.05617088607594937
lyAdverbCount30
lyAdverbRatio0.023734177215189875
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences273
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences273
mean13.51
std9.13
cv0.675
sampleLengths
015
125
218
34
410
518
67
719
814
91
103
1119
122
1319
1413
1530
1626
1717
1810
1917
2020
218
226
2317
248
2517
2619
2719
2819
2914
3018
3131
328
3310
342
3524
3621
379
3819
398
401
413
427
4321
442
459
4611
4714
4812
4912
44.87% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats14
diversityRatio0.20146520146520147
totalSentences273
uniqueOpeners55
59.26% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences225
matches
0"Deeply, fundamentally wrong."
1"Suddenly, from the depths of"
2"Deeply, fundamentally wrong."
3"Suddenly, from the depths of"
ratio0.018
81.33% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount78
totalSentences225
matches
0"She swung her torch beam"
1"It wasn't the blood, or"
2"It was the stillness."
3"She finally turned the beam"
4"He clutched a clipboard, its"
5"He cleared his throat, his"
6"His eyes stared blankly at"
7"His hands rested by his"
8"It was sharp, defined, but"
9"She circled him slowly, her"
10"It was nestled deep beneath"
11"Her partner, Morris, would have"
12"He’d always been drawn to"
13"She shook her head, forcing"
14"She knelt, careful not to"
15"It was a small, tarnished"
16"Its face was etched with"
17"She’d seen a few of"
18"They pointed towards supernatural convergences,"
19"She stood, her gaze sweeping"
ratio0.347
66.67% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount177
totalSentences225
matches
0"The metallic tang of old"
1"She swung her torch beam"
2"It wasn't the blood, or"
3"It was the stillness."
4"An unnatural, absolute stillness clinging"
5"The voice, tinny with apprehension,"
6"Quinn didn't reply, her gaze"
7"She finally turned the beam"
8"He clutched a clipboard, its"
9"Davies stammered, gesturing vaguely"
10"He cleared his throat, his"
11"Quinn moved past him, her"
12"The victim lay near a"
13"A man, middle-aged, dressed in"
14"His eyes stared blankly at"
15"His hands rested by his"
16"Davies was right about the"
17"A faint, almost subliminal hum"
18"Quinn murmured, stooping to examine"
19"The glass shards were from"
ratio0.787
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences225
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences113
technicalSentenceCount24
matches
0"He clutched a clipboard, its edges dog-eared, as if it offered some sort of shield against the oppressive atmosphere."
1"A man, middle-aged, dressed in dark, expensive-looking wool that struck Quinn as incongruous with the grimy surroundings."
2"His eyes stared blankly at the arched roof, wide with an unspeakable horror that seemed etched into his very soul."
3"Not the clammy chill of decomposition that usually accompanied a body gone cold, but an unsettling, dry coldness that seemed to emanate from within."
4"It was nestled deep beneath Camden, a nexus that had its own whispered legends and its own dark reputation."
5"Davies was watching her, his breath misting in the cool air."
6"Its face was etched with intricate, protective sigils that seemed to writhe slightly in her torchlight."
7"It looked as if something dense and sharp had been dragged across it with considerable force."
8"There was a strange, vacant quality to them, as if something fundamental had been…"
9"Suddenly, from the depths of the sealed tunnel, a faint *thrumming* began to resonate, a low vibration that seemed to travel through the very bedrock of the cit…"
10"The Veil Compass in Quinn’s hand grew warm, its needle spinning wildly now, not pointing, but *searching* frantically."
11"With a distressed mechanical shriek, the compass flew from her grasp, vanishing whole into the oppressive blackness, followed instantly by a guttural, inhuman r…"
12"He clutched a clipboard, its edges dog-eared, as if it offered some sort of shield against the oppressive atmosphere."
13"A man, middle-aged, dressed in dark, expensive-looking wool that struck Quinn as incongruous with the grimy surroundings."
14"His eyes stared blankly at the arched roof, wide with an unspeakable horror that seemed etched into his very soul."
15"Not the clammy chill of decomposition that usually accompanied a body gone cold, but an unsettling, dry coldness that seemed to emanate from within."
16"It was nestled deep beneath Camden, a nexus that had its own whispered legends and its own dark reputation."
17"Davies was watching her, his breath misting in the cool air."
18"Its face was etched with intricate, protective sigils that seemed to writhe slightly in her torchlight."
19"It looked as if something dense and sharp had been dragged across it with considerable force."
20"There was a strange, vacant quality to them, as if something fundamental had been…"
21"Suddenly, from the depths of the sealed tunnel, a faint *thrumming* began to resonate, a low vibration that seemed to travel through the very bedrock of the cit…"
22"The Veil Compass in Quinn’s hand grew warm, its needle spinning wildly now, not pointing, but *searching* frantically."
23"With a distressed mechanical shriek, the compass flew from her grasp, vanishing whole into the oppressive blackness, followed instantly by a guttural, inhuman r…"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags40
uselessAdditionCount12
matches
0"Davies offered, his voice trembling now"
1"she pressed, needing to anchor herself in tangible, if inexplicable, data"
2"Quinn repeated flatly, a wry smile playing on her lips"
3"Quinn murmured, not really expecting Davies to understand the implications"
4"Quinn stated, her voice hardening into something cold and sharp"
5"Quinn continued, her voice low and intense, cutting through the heavy air"
6"Davies offered, his voice trembling now"
7"she pressed, needing to anchor herself in tangible, if inexplicable, data"
8"Quinn repeated flatly, a wry smile playing on her lips"
9"Quinn murmured, not really expecting Davies to understand the implications"
10"Quinn stated, her voice hardening into something cold and sharp"
11"Quinn continued, her voice low and intense, cutting through the heavy air"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags22
fancyCount18
fancyTags
0"Davies stammered (stammer)"
1"Quinn murmured (murmur)"
2"she pressed (press)"
3"Quinn repeated flatly (repeat)"
4"Quinn murmured (murmur)"
5"Quinn repeated (repeat)"
6"Quinn stated (state)"
7"Quinn continued (continue)"
8"she added (add)"
9"Davies stammered (stammer)"
10"Quinn murmured (murmur)"
11"she pressed (press)"
12"Quinn repeated flatly (repeat)"
13"Quinn murmured (murmur)"
14"Quinn repeated (repeat)"
15"Quinn stated (state)"
16"Quinn continued (continue)"
17"she added (add)"
dialogueSentences60
tagDensity0.367
leniency0.733
rawRatio0.818
effectiveRatio0.6
64.5646%