Run: 2026-02-25-01KJ95FESE2DRHAZWVMQMTS9HA

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Duration:
23.1s
Cost:
$0.009964
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The pressure of the Veil didn’t snap; it stretched, clinging to Aurora’s skin like wet silk before finally yielding. One moment she was standing in the humid, moss-thick air of Richmond Park, and the next, the oxygen changed. It became heavy, saturated with a cloying sweetness that coated the back of her throat. Aurora stumbled, her boots sinking into soil that felt less like dirt and more like damp cake crumbs. She caught her balance, her fingers instinctively brushing the silver chain around her neck. Beneath her shirt, the Heartstone Pendant thrummed with a steady, rhythmic heat against her collarbone—a warning and a beacon. "Welcome to Dymas," a voice whispered, sounding like dry leaves skittering across stone. Aurora turned. Nyx was a jagged tear in the light, a humanoid silhouette of deepest obsidian that seemed to absorb the environment's radiance rather than reflect it. Their violet eyes glowed with a faint, predatory luminescence, flickering as they shifted between a solid form and a hazy, incorporeal mist. Beside them, Isolde Varga stood as she always did—perfectly composed, her silver hair spilling down her back like a frozen waterfall. Aurora glanced down at the ground near the seer’s feet. The dark, loamy earth was undisturbed. Isolde left no footprints, her presence in this realm as ethereal as a dream. "It’s... gold," Aurora said, squinting. The sky was a vast, bruised expanse of warm amber, devoid of a sun but radiating a constant, stifling heat. It cast the landscape in the hues of a permanent sunset. Before them lay a valley that defied every law of nature Aurora had studied in her brief, reluctant stint at Cardiff University. Sprawling vineyards climbed the jagged obsidian cliffs that ringed the horizon, but the vines were thick as ship’s ropes, heaving with clusters of grapes the size of grapefruit. To their left, an orchard of trees with bark like polished copper groaned under the weight of fruit that glowed with internal light—vibrant teals, pulsing oranges, and deep, matte purples. "The Prince of Gluttony does not believe in moderation," Isolde said, her lavender eyes fixed on something far in the distance. She began to walk, her hem brushing against wildflowers that looked like open mouths, their petals veined with something that pulsed like a heartbeat. "To enter Dymas is to be invited to consume. But remember, little bird: the meal that costs nothing often demands the soul as a tip." Aurora followed, keeping close to Nyx. She reached into the sheath at her hip, the hilt of the Fae-Forged Blade providing a sharp, cold comfort against her palm. The moonsilver dagger was a stark contrast to the oppressive warmth of the realm; it felt like a shard of winter held in her hand. They moved deeper into the orchard. The air was thick with the scent of fermenting peaches and exotic spices—cinnamon, star anise, and something sharper, like searing fat on a grill. Every breath felt like a caloric intake. Rory felt a strange, hollow ache in her stomach, a sudden, Ravenous hunger that made her mouth water. "Don't," Nyx hissed, their shadow stretching unnaturally long to wrap around Aurora’s shadow, anchoring her. "The air itself is a lure. It seduces the senses. Focus on the cold, mortal. Focus on the steel." Rory gripped the dagger tighter. "I'm fine. Just... it's a lot to take in." "It is a realm of excess," Nyx replied, their form flickering as they stepped over a stream. Instead of water, the liquid flowing between the banks was a viscous, translucent violet, bubbling softly with the aroma of aged wine. "Belphegor builds his paradise on the appetites of the lost. Every leaf, every drop, is a contract signed in sugar." They reached a grove where the trees were arranged in a perfect, terrifyingly symmetrical circle. In the center stood a table carved from a single block of white marble, stretching thirty feet long. It wasn't set with food, but with silver platters that caught the amber light. Aurora’s eyes were drawn to a single piece of fruit sitting on a pedestal at the head of the table. It looked like a pomegranate, but its skin was translucent, revealing hundreds of seeds that shimmered like rubies. The smell was transcendental—it smelled like her mother’s kitchen on a Sunday morning, like the crisp London air after a rainstorm, like everything she had ever lost and everything she had ever wanted. She found herself stepping toward it. Her hand reached out, her fingers trembling. The small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist, an old childhood reminder of her own clumsiness, felt suddenly itchy. "Aurora." Isolde’s voice wasn't loud, but it cut through the haze like a bell. Rory stopped, her hand inches from the fruit. "The Seer views the path, but the traveler must walk it," Isolde said, her expression unreadable. "Visions are rarely found at the bottom of a bowl, and the belly of a demon is a lonely place to spend eternity." Aurora blinked, the spell breaking. She pulled her hand back, tucking it into the pocket of her jacket. Her heart was hammering against her ribs. "I wasn't going to eat it. I was just... looking." "Dymas makes looking a dangerous act," Nyx murmured. They drifted toward the marble table, their shadowy hand passing through the surface of a silver platter. "The Wardens monitor the rifts, but they rarely come here. Even the strongest of them eventually succumb to the weight of the feast." Rory turned away from the table, focusing on the horizon. The amber sky seemed to be darkening, the warmth turning heavy and suffocating. "The Heartstone is pulsing harder," she said, pulling the pendant out to show them. The deep crimson gemstone was glowing with a frantic, internal light. "Whatever we’re looking for, it’s further in. Toward the center of the valley." "The Great Kitchens," Isolde whispered. "Where the helbound souls toil to satisfy a hunger that has no end. That is where the Veil is thinnest, and where the Prince keeps his most precious ingredients." As they moved past the grove, the landscape shifted. The lush, overripe beauty of the orchards gave way to something more industrial, though no less alien. Towering structures of bronze and bone rose from the earth like giant chimneys, belching clouds of fragrant, golden smoke into the amber sky. The sound reached them then—a low, rhythmic thumping, like a massive drum, accompanied by the clatter of a thousand knives against stone. Rory felt a chill that had nothing to do with her Fae blade. The wonder of the place was curdling into unease. The "excess" wasn't just about food; it was about the consumption of everything. The very ground seemed to groan under the weight of the bounty. They crested a ridge and looked down into a vast bowl in the earth. Tens of thousands of souls moved in synchronized patterns, harvesting, chopping, and stirring in vats the size of cathedrals. There was no talking, no laughter—only the mechanical precision of a workforce driven by an insatiable master. And above it all, floating on a terrace of shimmering glass, sat a palace that looked like it had been spun from sugar and gold. "Is that where Belphegor is?" Aurora asked, her voice small. "He is everywhere in Dymas," Nyx said, their violet eyes narrowed. "He is the hunger in your gut and the sweetness on your tongue. We are in the belly of the beast now, Rory. Try not to get digested." Isolde stepped forward, her silver hair catching the golden smoke. She looked back at Rory, her lavender eyes bright with a warning she couldn't speak plainly. "The path through the feast is narrow, and the guests are never allowed to leave until the plates are licked clean. Keep your blade cold and your heart stone-still." Aurora nodded, her jaw set. She reached down and felt the cold moonsilver of the dagger, then the warmth of the Heartstone. She was a delivery girl from Cardiff, a law school dropout who had fled an abusive ex to find herself in a city of shadows. She had dealt with demanding customers and the cold streets of London. This was just another job, she told herself, even if the stakes were her very soul. "Let's move," she said, her voice steady. "I’m not staying for dessert." They began the descent into the heart of Gluttony, three shadows slipping through a world of golden light, moving toward a kitchen that never slept and a Prince who was always, always hungry.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags12
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences26
tagDensity0.462
leniency0.923
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
82.53% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1431
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"perfectly"
count1
1
adverb"softly"
count1
2
adverb"suddenly"
count1
3
adverb"very"
count2
highlights
0"perfectly"
1"softly"
2"suddenly"
3"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
16.14% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1431
totalAiIsms24
found
0
word"silk"
count1
1
word"rhythmic"
count2
2
word"beacon"
count1
3
word"weight"
count3
4
word"pulsed"
count1
5
word"stark"
count1
6
word"oppressive"
count1
7
word"warmth"
count3
8
word"searing"
count1
9
word"stomach"
count1
10
word"perfect"
count1
11
word"marble"
count2
12
word"shimmered"
count1
13
word"reminder"
count1
14
word"unreadable"
count1
15
word"chill"
count1
16
word"synchronized"
count1
17
word"mechanical"
count1
highlights
0"silk"
1"rhythmic"
2"beacon"
3"weight"
4"pulsed"
5"stark"
6"oppressive"
7"warmth"
8"searing"
9"stomach"
10"perfect"
11"marble"
12"shimmered"
13"reminder"
14"unreadable"
15"chill"
16"synchronized"
17"mechanical"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
1
label"air was thick with"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
1"The air was thick with"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences78
matches
0"felt a chill"
69.60% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences78
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences91
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen34
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1424
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions12
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"This was just another job, she told herself, even if the stakes were her very soul."
96.95% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions51
wordCount1131
uniqueNames20
maxNameDensity1.06
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Veil1
Aurora12
Richmond1
Park1
Heartstone2
Pendant1
Isolde7
Varga1
Cardiff2
University1
Nyx6
Fae-Forged1
Blade1
Ravenous1
Rory6
Sunday1
London2
Fae2
Gluttony1
Prince1
persons
0"Veil"
1"Aurora"
2"Pendant"
3"Isolde"
4"Varga"
5"Nyx"
6"Blade"
7"Rory"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Cardiff"
3"London"
globalScore0.969
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences68
glossingSentenceCount7
matches
0"obsidian that seemed to absorb the environment's radiance rather than reflect it"
1"looked like open mouths, their petals vei"
2"felt like a shard of winter held in her"
3"felt like a caloric intake"
4"looked like a pomegranate, but its skin w"
5"smelled like her mother’s kitchen on a Sun"
6"looked like it had been spun from sugar a"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1424
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences91
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs32
mean44.5
std23.05
cv0.518
sampleLengths
053
151
213
3100
45
553
658
770
853
955
1034
1114
1259
1347
1471
1532
161
1721
1839
1935
2048
2161
2234
2371
2447
2575
2610
2739
2855
2975
3012
3133
91.77% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences78
matches
0"were arranged"
1"were drawn"
2"been spun"
51.85% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs180
matches
0"was standing"
1"was hammering"
2"was glowing"
3"was curdling"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount7
semicolonCount3
flaggedSentences10
totalSentences91
ratio0.11
matches
0"The pressure of the Veil didn’t snap; it stretched, clinging to Aurora’s skin like wet silk before finally yielding."
1"Beneath her shirt, the Heartstone Pendant thrummed with a steady, rhythmic heat against her collarbone—a warning and a beacon."
2"Beside them, Isolde Varga stood as she always did—perfectly composed, her silver hair spilling down her back like a frozen waterfall."
3"To their left, an orchard of trees with bark like polished copper groaned under the weight of fruit that glowed with internal light—vibrant teals, pulsing oranges, and deep, matte purples."
4"The moonsilver dagger was a stark contrast to the oppressive warmth of the realm; it felt like a shard of winter held in her hand."
5"The air was thick with the scent of fermenting peaches and exotic spices—cinnamon, star anise, and something sharper, like searing fat on a grill."
6"The smell was transcendental—it smelled like her mother’s kitchen on a Sunday morning, like the crisp London air after a rainstorm, like everything she had ever lost and everything she had ever wanted."
7"The sound reached them then—a low, rhythmic thumping, like a massive drum, accompanied by the clatter of a thousand knives against stone."
8"The \"excess\" wasn't just about food; it was about the consumption of everything."
9"There was no talking, no laughter—only the mechanical precision of a workforce driven by an insatiable master."
88.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1141
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"humid, moss-thick air"
1"small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount39
adverbRatio0.03418054338299737
lyAdverbCount9
lyAdverbRatio0.007887817703768623
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences91
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences91
mean15.65
std7.37
cv0.471
sampleLengths
019
119
215
318
414
519
613
72
825
922
1021
1110
126
1314
145
1520
1611
1722
1828
1930
2021
2124
2225
236
2422
2525
266
2724
287
2918
3015
3119
325
339
3417
3522
3620
3715
3818
3914
4020
4118
4233
436
447
4519
461
4713
488
4916
58.24% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.3956043956043956
totalSentences91
uniqueOpeners36
44.44% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences75
matches
0"Instead of water, the liquid"
ratio0.013
97.33% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount23
totalSentences75
matches
0"It became heavy, saturated with"
1"She caught her balance, her"
2"Their violet eyes glowed with"
3"It cast the landscape in"
4"She began to walk, her"
5"She reached into the sheath"
6"They moved deeper into the"
7"They reached a grove where"
8"It wasn't set with food,"
9"It looked like a pomegranate,"
10"She found herself stepping toward"
11"Her hand reached out, her"
12"She pulled her hand back,"
13"Her heart was hammering against"
14"They drifted toward the marble"
15"she said, pulling the pendant"
16"They crested a ridge and"
17"She looked back at Rory,"
18"She reached down and felt"
19"She was a delivery girl"
ratio0.307
40.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount63
totalSentences75
matches
0"The pressure of the Veil"
1"It became heavy, saturated with"
2"Aurora stumbled, her boots sinking"
3"She caught her balance, her"
4"a voice whispered, sounding like"
5"Nyx was a jagged tear"
6"Their violet eyes glowed with"
7"Aurora glanced down at the"
8"The dark, loamy earth was"
9"Isolde left no footprints, her"
10"Aurora said, squinting"
11"The sky was a vast,"
12"It cast the landscape in"
13"Isolde said, her lavender eyes"
14"She began to walk, her"
15"Aurora followed, keeping close to"
16"She reached into the sheath"
17"The moonsilver dagger was a"
18"They moved deeper into the"
19"The air was thick with"
ratio0.84
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences75
matches
0"Before them lay a valley"
1"To their left, an orchard"
ratio0.027
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences51
technicalSentenceCount12
matches
0"It became heavy, saturated with a cloying sweetness that coated the back of her throat."
1"Aurora stumbled, her boots sinking into soil that felt less like dirt and more like damp cake crumbs."
2"Nyx was a jagged tear in the light, a humanoid silhouette of deepest obsidian that seemed to absorb the environment's radiance rather than reflect it."
3"Before them lay a valley that defied every law of nature Aurora had studied in her brief, reluctant stint at Cardiff University."
4"Sprawling vineyards climbed the jagged obsidian cliffs that ringed the horizon, but the vines were thick as ship’s ropes, heaving with clusters of grapes the si…"
5"To their left, an orchard of trees with bark like polished copper groaned under the weight of fruit that glowed with internal light—vibrant teals, pulsing orang…"
6"She began to walk, her hem brushing against wildflowers that looked like open mouths, their petals veined with something that pulsed like a heartbeat."
7"Rory felt a strange, hollow ache in her stomach, a sudden, Ravenous hunger that made her mouth water."
8"It looked like a pomegranate, but its skin was translucent, revealing hundreds of seeds that shimmered like rubies."
9"Rory felt a chill that had nothing to do with her Fae blade."
10"And above it all, floating on a terrace of shimmering glass, sat a palace that looked like it had been spun from sugar and gold."
11"They began the descent into the heart of Gluttony, three shadows slipping through a world of golden light, moving toward a kitchen that never slept and a Prince…"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags12
uselessAdditionCount5
matches
0"Isolde said, her lavender eyes fixed on something far in the distance"
1"Nyx replied, their form flickering as they stepped over a stream"
2"Isolde said, her expression unreadable"
3"Aurora asked, her voice small"
4"she said, her voice steady"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags12
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"a voice whispered (whisper)"
1"Nyx hissed (hiss)"
2"Nyx murmured (murmur)"
3"Isolde whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences26
tagDensity0.462
leniency0.923
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.308
70.1175%