Run: 2026-02-25-01KJ95FSW5Z4V9J6G6ADQRR3N3

Run Details

Duration:
26.3s
Cost:
$0.014195
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The green neon sign of The Raven’s Nest cast a faint, emerald glow across the rain-slicked pavement. Inside, the dim light clung to every surface, softening the edges of antique maps tacked to the walls and blurring the faces in the monochrome photographs. A low murmur of conversation and the clink of glasses provided the bar’s constant hum. Rory, perched on a stool at the far end of the long oak counter, traced the rim of an empty water glass with her thumb. The day’s final delivery run had left a dull ache in her shoulders, a familiar thrum of exhaustion beneath her skin. Silas wiped down the rich wood before her, his movements economical, the silver signet ring on his right hand catching the light. “Another quiet one,” Rory said, her voice a low murmur against the bar’s backdrop. Silas grunted, a soft sound. A faint clink of ice cube in his hand accompanied his answer, as he reached for a glass. “They come and go.” His gaze, hazel and keen, held hers for a brief moment before drifting past her shoulder towards the door. The bell above the entrance jingled, a sharp, clear sound that cut through the bar’s usual din. Rory barely registered it, turning her attention to the intricate pattern of a watermark on her glass. The smell of ozone and damp wool drifted inland from the newly opened door as the rain found a temporary lull. A woman stepped inside, shaking out a heavy dark coat. Her hair, a vibrant blonde, glistened under the subdued lighting. Rory heard the crisp click of expensive heels across the polished floorboards, a sound alien to the worn comfort of the Nest. She turned her head slowly, her bright blue eyes meeting a pair of startled green ones across the room. The woman paused, her coat still halfway off, mouth slightly agape. Recognition hit Rory like a cold draft. Chloe. Chloe’s hand dropped from her coat, a small designer handbag clattering against her side. “Rory?” Rory pushed off the stool, her chair scraping against the floorboards, a jarring noise. She felt a familiar tightening in her chest, a knot of unease unraveling from years buried deep. Chloe moved forward, her steps hesitant but determined, weaving between tables. “Oh my god. I thought it was you. I really did.” She reached out, her hand hovering, then clasping Rory’s arm, a grip that felt both tentative and possessive. Her touch felt foreign against Rory’s skin. Rory pulled her arm back, a small, subtle motion. “Chloe. What are you – here?” The last word came out flat, stripped of inflection. She glanced at Silas, who continued to polish a glass, but his gaze remained fixed on the unfolding tableau. Chloe laughed, a brittle sound. “What am *I* doing here? What are *you* doing here? Oh, Rory, it’s been… what? Years. Five? Six?” “Something like that,” Rory said, her voice even. Her straight, shoulder-length black hair swung slightly as she gave a small shake of her head. “You look… different.” Chloe’s gaze swept over Rory’s slightly worn black uniform, the practical trainers, then returned to her face. Her own appearance radiated an effortless polish: a tailored jumpsuit, delicate gold jewellery, and a perfectly styled bob. She looked meticulously curated, a stark contrast to Rory’s unembellished presence. Rory offered a tight smile. “So do you.” “Well, you know.” Chloe gestured vaguely. “London. New job. Moved down here about six months ago. Came here on a recommendation. Old jazz night. I had no idea.” She peered around the dimly lit space. “This is… quaint. Very you, actually, the old you. Secretive.” Her voice dropped, a playful conspiratorial tone. “Still keeping secrets?” Rory’s jaw hardened almost imperceptibly. “Not really. I work here. Deliveries mostly. My flat’s upstairs.” Chloe’s eyes widened, a flicker of something unreadable passing through them. “Deliveries? Rory, you were Pre-Law. Cardiff University. What happened to that?” The question hung in the air, heavy with unspoken judgment. “Things change,” Rory said. She stepped back, putting a little more distance between them. She knew the crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist, usually hidden by her sleeve, felt like it was throbbing. “Clearly.” Chloe’s smile faltered. “I heard… well, things. About Evan. I tried to call. You just vanished. Ghosted everyone.” Her voice held a thin edge of accusation now. “It was messy,” Rory conceded. She kept her gaze steady, refusing to wilt under Chloe’s probing. “I needed a clean break.” “A clean break.” Chloe echoed the phrase, then laughed without humour. “From everything? Us? Our lives? We were all so worried, you know. Eva was beside herself. And then you pop up here, working in a bar. It’s quite the pivot, Rory.” “A choice,” Rory corrected softly. Her eyes flicked to Silas again, standing motionless behind the bar, pretending not to listen, yet missing nothing. His mere presence was a shield, a silent affirmation of her new life. “A bold choice, then,” Chloe said, adjusting the strap of her handbag. “I work for Harrington & Finch now. Corporate Law. Funny, right? Remember all those late nights, cramming for torts? You always knew the answers.” A melancholic note entered her voice. “We were going to conquer the world, weren’t we? You, me, Eva.” “Dreams shift,” Rory said. She folded her arms, her posture closing her off. The conversation felt like picking at an old wound, not to heal it, but to remind herself of the pain. “They do, don’t they?” Chloe’s gaze lingered on Rory’s face, searching for something she couldn’t find. “You’ve changed, Rory. Really changed. You used to be… brighter. More spark.” Her eyes narrowed slightly. “What happened to the girl who believed in all the rules?” A sharp, brittle laugh escaped Rory’s lips, a sound she didn’t recognize as her own. She lifted a hand, gesturing vaguely around the bar. “Rules can be rewritten. Sometimes, they just break.” She caught a glimpse of her own reflection in the darkened glass of a framed photograph: her bright blue eyes held a new kind of depth, her features sharper. The old Rory, the girl from Cardiff, felt like a distant echo. “I suppose so.” Chloe finally gave in, her shoulders slumping. A genuine sigh escaped her. “I did miss you, though. We all did.” She looked around the bar again, as if the answers lay in the dusty bottles or the peeling wallpaper. “What kind of life is this, Rory? Delivering takeaways? You always had so much… ambition.” Rory met Chloe’s gaze unflinchingly. “I have a life. It's mine. And I’m good at what I do.” Her fingers brushed against the small crescent scar on her left wrist, a habitual gesture of comfort. “It’s enough.” Chloe opened her mouth, then closed it. The air between them thickened, heavy with unspoken words, with years of distance and diverging paths. The music from the speakers, a slow, melancholic jazz tune, seemed to underscore the vast chasm that had opened between them. Chloe’s perfectly made-up face creased with a subtle regret, a reflection that Rory herself felt, though she refused to show it.The green neon sign of The Raven’s Nest cast a faint, emerald glow across the rain-slicked pavement. Inside, the dim light clung to every surface, softening the edges of antique maps tacked to the walls and blurring the faces in the monochrome photographs. A low murmur of conversation and the clink of glasses provided the bar’s constant hum. Rory, perched on a stool at the far end of the long oak counter, traced the rim of an empty water glass with her thumb. The day’s final delivery run had left a dull ache in her shoulders, a familiar thrum of exhaustion beneath her skin. Silas wiped down the rich wood before her, his movements economical, the silver signet ring on his right hand catching the light. “Another quiet one,” Rory said, her voice a low murmur against the bar’s backdrop. Silas grunted, a soft sound. A faint clink of ice cube in his hand accompanied his answer, as he reached for a glass. “They come and go.” His gaze, hazel and keen, held hers for a brief moment before drifting past her shoulder towards the door. The bell above the entrance jingled, a sharp, clear sound that cut through the bar’s usual din. Rory barely registered it, turning her attention to the intricate pattern of a watermark on her glass. The smell of ozone and damp wool drifted inland from the newly opened door as the rain found a temporary lull. A woman stepped inside, shaking out a heavy dark coat. Her hair, a vibrant blonde, glistened under the subdued lighting. Rory heard the crisp click of expensive heels across the polished floorboards, a sound alien to the worn comfort of the Nest. She turned her head slowly, her bright blue eyes meeting a pair of startled green ones across the room. The woman paused, her coat still halfway off, mouth slightly agape. Recognition hit Rory like a cold draft. Chloe. Chloe’s hand dropped from her coat, a small designer handbag clattering against her side. “Rory?” Rory pushed off the stool, her chair scraping against the floorboards, a jarring noise. She felt a familiar tightening in her chest, a knot of unease unraveling from years buried deep. Chloe moved forward, her steps hesitant but determined, weaving between tables. “Oh my god. I thought it was you. I really did.” She reached out, her hand hovering, then clasping Rory’s arm, a grip that felt both tentative and possessive. Her touch felt foreign against Rory’s skin. Rory pulled her arm back, a small, subtle motion. “Chloe. What are you – here?” The last word came out flat, stripped of inflection. She glanced at Silas, who continued to polish a glass, but his gaze remained fixed on the unfolding tableau. Chloe laughed, a brittle sound. “What am *I* doing here? What are *you* doing here? Oh, Rory, it’s been… what? Years. Five? Six?” “Something like that,” Rory said, her voice even. Her straight, shoulder-length black hair swung slightly as she gave a small shake of her head. “You look… different.” Chloe’s gaze swept over Rory’s slightly worn black uniform, the practical trainers, then returned to her face. Her own appearance radiated an effortless polish: a tailored jumpsuit, delicate gold jewellery, and a perfectly styled bob. She looked meticulously curated, a stark contrast to Rory’s unembellished presence. Rory offered a tight smile. “So do you.” “Well, you know.” Chloe gestured vaguely. “London. New job. Moved down here about six months ago. Came here on a recommendation. Old jazz night. I had no idea.” She peered around the dimly lit space. “This is… quaint. Very you, actually, the old you. Secretive.” Her voice dropped, a playful conspiratorial tone. “Still keeping secrets?” Rory’s jaw hardened almost imperceptibly. “Not really. I work here. Deliveries mostly. My flat’s upstairs.” Chloe’s eyes widened, a flicker of something unreadable passing through them. “Deliveries? Rory, you were Pre-Law. Cardiff University. What happened to that?” The question hung in the air, heavy with unspoken judgment. “Things change,” Rory said. She stepped back, putting a little more distance between them. She knew the crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist, usually hidden by her sleeve, felt like it was throbbing. “Clearly.” Chloe echoed the word, then laughed without humour. “I heard… well, things. About Evan. I tried to call. You just vanished. Ghosted everyone.” Her voice held a thin edge of accusation now. “It was messy,” Rory conceded. She kept her gaze steady, refusing to wilt under Chloe’s probing. “I needed a clean break.” “A clean break.” Chloe repeated the phrase, then huffed. “From everything? Us? Our lives? We were all so worried, you know. Eva was beside herself. And then you pop up here, working in a bar. It’s quite the pivot, Rory.” “A choice,” Rory corrected softly. Her eyes flicked to Silas again, standing motionless behind the bar, pretending not to listen, yet missing nothing. His mere presence was a shield, a silent affirmation of her new life. “A bold choice, then,” Chloe said, adjusting the strap of her handbag. “I work for Harrington & Finch now. Corporate Law. Funny, right? Remember all those late nights, cramming for torts? You always knew the answers.” A melancholic note entered her voice. “We were going to conquer the world, weren’t we? You, me, Eva.” “Dreams shift,” Rory said. She folded her arms, her posture closing her off. The conversation felt like picking at an old wound, not to heal it, but to remind herself of the pain. “They do, don’t they?” Chloe’s gaze lingered on Rory’s face, searching for something she couldn’t find. “You’ve changed, Rory. Really changed. You used to be… brighter. More spark.” Her eyes narrowed slightly. “What happened to the girl who believed in all the rules?” A sharp, brittle laugh escaped Rory’s lips, a sound she didn’t recognize as her own. She lifted a hand, gesturing vaguely around the bar. “Rules can be rewritten. Sometimes, they just break.” She caught a glimpse of her own reflection in the darkened glass of a framed photograph: her bright blue eyes held a new kind of depth, her features sharper. The old Rory, the girl from Cardiff, felt like a distant echo. “I suppose so.” Chloe finally gave in, her shoulders slumping. A genuine sigh escaped her. “I did miss you, though. We all did.” She looked around the bar again, as if the answers lay in the dusty bottles or the peeling wallpaper. “What kind of life is this, Rory? Delivering takeaways? You always had so much… ambition.” Rory met Chloe’s gaze unflinchingly. “I have a life. It’s mine. And I’m good at what I do.” Her fingers brushed against the small crescent scar on her left wrist, a habitual gesture of comfort. “It’s enough.” Chloe opened her mouth, then closed it. The air between them thickened, heavy with unspoken words, with years of distance and diverging paths. The music from the speakers, a slow, melancholic jazz tune, seemed to underscore the vast chasm that had opened between them. Chloe’s perfectly made-up face creased with a subtle regret, a reflection that Rory herself felt, though she refused to show it.
created_at"2026-02-25T01:09:20.395Z" 2/25/2026, 1:09:20 AM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
0.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags48
adverbTagCount10
adverbTags
0"Chloe gestured vaguely [vaguely]"
1"She peered around [around]"
2"Rory corrected softly [softly]"
3"Her eyes narrowed slightly [slightly]"
4"She looked around [around]"
5"Chloe gestured vaguely [vaguely]"
6"She peered around [around]"
7"Rory corrected softly [softly]"
8"Her eyes narrowed slightly [slightly]"
9"She looked around [around]"
dialogueSentences72
tagDensity0.667
leniency1
rawRatio0.208
effectiveRatio0.208
49.37% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2370
totalAiIsmAdverbs24
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count2
1
adverb"slightly"
count8
2
adverb"really"
count6
3
adverb"perfectly"
count4
4
adverb"very"
count2
5
adverb"softly"
count2
highlights
0"slowly"
1"slightly"
2"really"
3"perfectly"
4"very"
5"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
36.71% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2370
totalAiIsms30
found
0
word"traced"
count2
1
word"familiar"
count4
2
word"intricate"
count2
3
word"unraveling"
count2
4
word"determined"
count2
5
word"effortless"
count2
6
word"stark"
count2
7
word"flicker"
count2
8
word"unreadable"
count2
9
word"unspoken"
count4
10
word"echoed"
count2
11
word"flicked"
count2
12
word"echo"
count2
highlights
0"traced"
1"familiar"
2"intricate"
3"unraveling"
4"determined"
5"effortless"
6"stark"
7"flicker"
8"unreadable"
9"unspoken"
10"echoed"
11"flicked"
12"echo"
33.33% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches6
maxInWindow3
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count4
1
label"hung in the air"
count2
highlights
0"eyes widened"
1"eyes narrowed"
2"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences145
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences145
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences167
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen39
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans4
markdownWords4
totalWords2372
ratio0.002
matches
0"I"
1"you"
2"I"
3"you"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions22
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
16.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions94
wordCount1790
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity2.57
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity4.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Raven2
Nest4
Silas8
Rory46
Chloe32
Cardiff2
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Silas"
3"Rory"
4"Chloe"
places
0"Cardiff"
globalScore0.215
windowScore0.167
20.69% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences116
glossingSentenceCount6
matches
0"felt like it was throbbing"
1"felt like picking at an old wound, not"
2"felt like a distant echo"
3"felt like it was throbbing"
4"felt like picking at an old wound, not"
5"felt like a distant echo"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords0.843
wordCount2372
matches
0"not to heal it, but to remind herself of the pain"
1"not to heal it, but to remind herself of the pain"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences167
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs55
mean43.13
std29.82
cv0.691
sampleLengths
0126
114
246
397
438
515
631
747
843
923
1024
1149
128
1355
1415
1532
1633
1728
1821
1942
2036
2154
2233
2343
2473
2557
2637
27190
2814
2946
3097
3138
3215
3331
3447
3543
3623
3724
3849
398
4055
4115
4232
4333
4433
4521
4640
4736
4854
4933
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences145
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs271
matches
0"was throbbing"
1"was throbbing"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences167
ratio0
matches(empty)
99.46% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1798
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount73
adverbRatio0.040600667408231365
lyAdverbCount36
lyAdverbRatio0.020022246941045607
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences167
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences167
mean14.2
std8.1
cv0.57
sampleLengths
017
126
215
325
421
522
614
75
818
923
1017
1117
1221
1310
1410
1522
1619
1711
187
191
2014
211
2214
2317
2411
2529
267
279
2815
2919
305
3118
328
3316
3420
3518
3611
375
383
396
4029
4117
423
435
4410
4511
4621
474
4810
4919
45.21% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.18562874251497005
totalSentences167
uniqueOpeners31
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences137
matches(empty)
ratio0
79.85% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount48
totalSentences137
matches
0"His gaze, hazel and keen,"
1"Her hair, a vibrant blonde,"
2"She turned her head slowly,"
3"She felt a familiar tightening"
4"She reached out, her hand"
5"Her touch felt foreign against"
6"She glanced at Silas, who"
7"Her straight, shoulder-length black hair"
8"Her own appearance radiated an"
9"She looked meticulously curated, a"
10"She peered around the dimly"
11"Her voice dropped, a playful"
12"She stepped back, putting a"
13"She knew the crescent-shaped scar"
14"Her voice held a thin"
15"She kept her gaze steady,"
16"Her eyes flicked to Silas"
17"His mere presence was a"
18"She folded her arms, her"
19"Her eyes narrowed slightly"
ratio0.35
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount135
totalSentences137
matches
0"The green neon sign of"
1"A low murmur of conversation"
2"Rory, perched on a stool"
3"The day’s final delivery run"
4"Silas wiped down the rich"
5"Rory said, her voice a"
6"Silas grunted, a soft sound."
7"A faint clink of ice"
8"His gaze, hazel and keen,"
9"The bell above the entrance"
10"Rory barely registered it, turning"
11"The smell of ozone and"
12"A woman stepped inside, shaking"
13"Her hair, a vibrant blonde,"
14"Rory heard the crisp click"
15"She turned her head slowly,"
16"The woman paused, her coat"
17"Recognition hit Rory like a"
18"Chloe’s hand dropped from her"
19"Rory pushed off the stool,"
ratio0.985
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences137
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences69
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"The music from the speakers, a slow, melancholic jazz tune, seemed to underscore the vast chasm that had opened between them."
1"The music from the speakers, a slow, melancholic jazz tune, seemed to underscore the vast chasm that had opened between them."
41.67% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags48
uselessAdditionCount8
matches
0"Rory said, her voice a low murmur against the bar’s backdrop"
1"Chloe’s gaze swept, the practical trainers, then returned to her face"
2"She caught, her features sharper"
3"She looked around, as if the answers lay in the dusty bottles or the peeling wallpaper"
4"Rory said, her voice a low murmur against the bar’s backdrop"
5"Chloe’s gaze swept, the practical trainers, then returned to her face"
6"She caught, her features sharper"
7"She looked around, as if the answers lay in the dusty bottles or the peeling wallpaper"
66.67% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags16
fancyCount6
fancyTags
0"Chloe’s smile faltered (falter)"
1"Rory conceded (concede)"
2"Rory corrected softly (correct)"
3"Rory conceded (concede)"
4"Chloe repeated (repeat)"
5"Rory corrected softly (correct)"
dialogueSentences72
tagDensity0.222
leniency0.444
rawRatio0.375
effectiveRatio0.167
69.6539%