Run: 2026-02-25-01KJ95J5SA2Z9X1P28EYWHFZ53

Run Details

Duration:
40.6s
Cost:
$0.015026
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The iron gates of Richmond Park creaked behind Aurora, a shrill, rusted protest that cut through the stagnant London humidity. She didn't look back. Her boots crunched on the gravel path, the sound unnervingly loud in the absence of the city's usual low-frequency hum. Usually, the distant roar of the A3 or the hum of a passing Heathrow flight offered a comfort of civilization. Tonight, the air held its breath. She reached into the collar of her jacket and pulled out the Heartstone. The deep crimson gem sat heavy against her palm, its silver chain slick with the sweat of her neck. It didn't just glow; it throbbed. The light ebbed and flowed like a slow, dying pulse, casting long, rhythmic shadows across the ferns. "Fine. You want me here. I’m here." Her voice sounded thin, stripped of its resonance by the dense canopy. She adjusted the strap of her delivery bag, the weight of the Golden Empress takeout containers shifting against her spine. Yu-Fei hadn't sent her here, but the pendant had. It had practically burned a hole through her shirt since she left the flat above Silas’ bar. The path began to warp. The well-trodden gravel gave way to a carpet of wildflowers—pale, translucent things that didn't belong in a London park in the dead of night. They smelled of ozone and ancient honey. Rory slowed her pace as the ancient oak standing stones loomed out of the darkness. They didn't look like wood. In the moonlight, the bark shimmered with the texture of cured leather, twisted into shapes that suggested agonized limbs. "This wasn't on the map, Silas." She stepped into the center of the grove. The temperature plummeted. One moment the night was a sticky twenty degrees, the next, her breath blossomed into a white cloud before her face. She checked her watch. The digital display flickered, the numbers tumbling into nonsense symbols before the screen cracked from the center out. "Great. Fantastic timing." Rory hiked her jacket up and gripped the Heartstone. It was hot now, a sharp, localized heat that radiated through her fingertips. She scanned the perimeter of the clearing. The oaks stood like sentinels, their branches interlaced so tightly they blocked out the stars. A snap broke the silence. It didn't come from behind her. It came from above. She tilted her head. The upper boughs swayed, though not a puff of wind stirred the wildflowers at her feet. Something heavy shifted in the canopy, a dragging sound like a wet sack being hauled over bark. "Who’s there? I know you’re watching. I haven't got all night." Silence rushed back in, thicker than before. Rory turned in a slow circle, her thumb tracing the crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist. The old injury itched. It always did when her adrenaline spiked. A soft, rhythmic clicking started near one of the standing stones. It sounded like a tongue hitting the roof of a mouth, or perhaps bone knocking against stone. *Click. Click-click. Click.* "Is that you, Evan? If you’ve followed me here, I swear to God—" She stopped. The clicking moved. It was twenty feet to her left, then suddenly ten feet behind her. It was too fast for someone to move through the thick undergrowth without a sound. "This is a joke. A very bad, very expensive joke." Rory reached into her pocket and pulled out her phone. The screen remained black, reflecting only the frantic red pulse of the pendant. She shoved it back and pulled a heavy brass lighter from her pocket, flicking the wheel. The flame stood perfectly still, a tiny yellow spear that didn't flicker. Darkness pooled in the gaps between the trees, a concentrated black that felt more like a physical substance than a lack of light. Something pale moved in the corner of her eye. She whipped her head toward the largest oak. "I saw you." The tree trunk remained motionless, but the shadows at its base seemed to detach. They didn't move toward her. They stretched, elongating into spindly, many-jointed limbs that mimicked the reach of the branches above. A voice drifted through the clearing. It wasn't a human voice. It sounded like the wind whistling through a hollow bone, shaped into the jagged edges of her own name. *Rory...* She stiffened, her fingers whitening around the Heartstone. "I didn't give you permission to use that name." *Laila... Aurora...* The voice layered over itself, a dozen versions of her name whispered in unison. It came from the ground. It came from the flowers. The blossoms began to tilt toward her, their pale petals opening to reveal centers that looked uncomfortably like human gums. Rory took a step back. Her heel caught on a root that hadn't been there moments ago. She stumbled, her hand flying out to catch herself on one of the standing stones. The texture was warm. It pulsed back against her palm, a slow, hydraulic thud that matched the beat of the pendant. "You’re alive. The whole damn place is alive." The clicking intensified. It was everywhere now, a frantic, percussive storm that vibrated in her teeth. Above her, the canopy groaned. A long, thin shadow dropped from a branch, dangling like a spider on a thread. It stopped just above the circle of light cast by the pendant. It was a face, or the suggestion of one. Features stretched thin over a frame that was far too long, eyes like dull coins that caught no reflection. It didn't have a mouth, only a vertical slit that leaked a faint, silver mist. "What do you want? The stone? Take it." She held the Heartstone out, the silver chain dangling. *Not the stone, Malphora...* The voice echoed inside her skull, bypasssing her ears entirely. The creature drifted closer, its limbs unfolding with the sound of snapping dry wood. "Don't call me that. My name is Aurora Carter. I deliver Chinese food in London. I have a flat in Peckham. I am not whatever you think I am." The creature tilted its head. The silver mist from its face curled toward her, smelling of copper and wet earth. It mimicked her movement, tilting its head to the exact same angle. *The blood remembers. The soil remembers.* "I’m leaving. Right now." Rory turned, but the path was gone. Where the gravel trail had been, there was now only a wall of thorns that grew several inches as she watched. The standing stones had shifted, closing the circle. The clearing had shrunk. "Let me out. This wasn't the deal." The clicking died away, replaced by a low, vibrating hum that made the pendant in her hand scream with heat. She dropped it. The Heartstone fell into the wildflowers, and where it touched the earth, the plants shriveled and blackened in a perfect circle. The dangling creature descended further, its long, needle-like fingers brushing the top of her hair. Rory didn't scream. She frozen, her breath coming in shallow, jagged gasps. "You’re not real. This is Richmond Park. There are joggers and deer and—" *There is only the Grove. There is only the hunger.* A second creature emerged from behind the stone she had touched. Then a third. They didn't walk; they drifted, their bodies shimmering in and out of the moonlight like a bad television signal. They weren't solid, but the air around them felt heavy, pressurized. "Silas said this was safe. He said if I had the pendant, nothing would touch me." The creatures stopped. The one in front of her extended a hand, the skin looking like translucent parchment. It pointed to the Heartstone on the ground. *The pendant is not a shield, daughter of the barrister. It is a dinner bell.* Rory looked down at the crimson gem. The glow was no longer rhythmic. It was constant, a blinding, furious red that illuminated the faces of a dozens of things standing just beyond the tree line. They had been there the whole time, watching and waiting for the light to reach its peak. "I'm not my father. I'm not anyone's daughter. I'm just Rory." The lead creature's vertical mouth split open wider. A row of teeth, fine as fishbones, glinted in the red light. *You are the key. And the key must be turned.* Rory reached for the pendant, but the ground beneath it softened into a slurry of mud and rotted petals. The Heartstone sank, swallowed by the Earth. The light didn't vanish; it bled into the soil, turning the entire clearing into a glowing, venous map of red lines. The trees began to lean inward. The ancient oaks groaned, their trunks twisting with an audible screech of fiber. The circle was closing. "Back off!" She pulled a small utility knife from her belt, her hand trembling so violently the blade rattled in its casing. The creature didn't flinch. It reached out and touched the crescent scar on her wrist. The skin there didn't burn. It turned cold—a deep, biting frost that spread up her arm. *The mark is opening...* "It's just a scar. I fell off a bike when I was six." *You fell through a world. And you brought the scent of the void with you.* The ground heaved. A massive root erupted from the center of the grove, tossing Rory off her feet. She landed hard on her side, the takeout bag spilling open. Containers of noodles and rice scattered across the mutated flowers, but the creatures ignored the food. They moved toward her in a synchronized, fluid motion, their long shadows overlapping her body. Rory scrambled backward, her heels digging into the freezing mud. Her hand hit something cold and hard. It was the top of the Heartstone, resurfacing near the edge of a standing stone. It wasn't crimson anymore. It was black, a void-darkness that seemed to suck the very moonlight out of the air. "Stay away from me!" She grabbed the stone. The moment her skin made contact, the clicking sound returned, but this time it was coming from inside her own chest. The lead creature leaned down, its face inches from hers. The silver mist filled her lungs, tasting of a thousand years of forgotten winters. *The Grove has been hungry for a long time, Aurora Carter.* "Then eat something else." She slammed the black stone against the base of the standing stone. The impact didn't shatter the gem; it shattered the silence. A shockwave of sound, like a cathedral bell being struck by a mountain, tore through the grove. The creatures recoiled, their forms flickering wildly. The ground beneath Rory split open, not into mud or soil, but into a jagged, vertical rift that pulsed with a pale, sickly violet light. She looked into the rift and saw a sky with three moons. "What is this? Where is the park?" *This is the truth behind the curtain.* The creature reached for her again, its fingers elongating into claws. Rory didn't look away. She gripped the black pendant until the edges drew blood from her palm. "I don't belong here." *You belong to the one who sent you.* The trees began to scream. It was a high, undulating wail that shook the leaves from the boughs. The red veins in the ground flared, and the flowers began to pull themselves into the earth, dragging the edges of the rift wider. Rory felt the pull. The gravity of the grove changed, tilting toward the violet light. She slid toward the edge of the crack in reality, her boots finding no purchase on the slick, frozen grass. "Silas! Eva! Someone!" *No one hears you in the fold.* The first creature’s hand closed around her ankle. Its grip was like a vice of ice. It didn't pull her toward its mouth; it pulled her toward the rift. "Let go of me!" She kicked out, but her foot passed through the creature’s chest as if it were made of smoke. The cold spread to her hip, numbing her leg entirely. The Heartstone in her hand began to vibrate. It grew larger, the black surface cracking to reveal a white-hot core that hissed against the damp air. "If I'm the key, then I'm locking the door." She shoved the stone into the creature's grasping hand. The reaction was instantaneous. A blinding flare of white light erupted, turning the grove into a stark, colorless void. The scream of the trees reached a deafening crescendo, and then, the world went silent. The pressure in her ears popped. The smell of ozone vanished, replaced by the mundane scent of damp earth and car exhaust. Rory lay on the ground, gasping for air. The grass beneath her was normal green. The oaks were just oaks, their bark silent and still. The sun hadn't come up, but the oppressive, heavy dark had lifted. She looked at her hand. The Heartstone was gone. The silver chain lay snapped in the grass, but the gem had vanished. Her wrist throbbed. She pulled back her sleeve. The crescent-shaped scar was gone. In its place was a thin, glowing line of violet that pulsed beneath her skin, a permanent reminder of the heartbeat of the Grove. A twig snapped in the darkness behind her. "Who's there?" She stood up, her legs shaking. The park was quiet, but it wasn't the silence of peace. It was the silence of something holding its breath, waiting for the next heartbeat. A low growl echoed from the shadows of the nearest oak. It wasn't the creature. It was something heavier, something with teeth and weight. "I said, who is it?" The red light began to bleed back into the soil at her feet, one thin line at a time. Rory backed away, her hand reaching for a knife that was no longer there. The shadows at the edge of the grove began to stretch again. "Not again. Please, not again." *Rory...* The voice was closer now. It didn't come from the air or the trees. It came from the violet line beneath her skin. "Be quiet." She turned and ran, but the more she ran, the more the trees seemed to repeat themselves. Each oak she passed had the same knot, the same pattern of bark, the same agonizing lean. She wasn't leaving the grove. She was circling the drain. The clicking started again, soft and rhythmic, right behind her ear. "I'm not the key." *You are the door.* The ground beneath her feet began to soften once more, the wildflowers blooming in the wake of her footprints, pale and hungry.
created_at"2026-02-25T01:10:38.127Z" 2/25/2026, 1:10:38 AM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags1
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"It had practically [practically]"
dialogueSentences30
tagDensity0.033
leniency0.067
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.067
87.65% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2430
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"tightly"
count1
1
adverb"suddenly"
count1
2
adverb"very"
count3
3
adverb"perfectly"
count1
highlights
0"tightly"
1"suddenly"
2"very"
3"perfectly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
27.98% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2430
totalAiIsms35
found
0
word"throbbed"
count2
1
word"pulse"
count2
2
word"rhythmic"
count4
3
word"resonance"
count1
4
word"weight"
count2
5
word"loomed"
count1
6
word"shimmered"
count1
7
word"flickered"
count1
8
word"scanned"
count1
9
word"sentinels"
count1
10
word"silence"
count5
11
word"tracing"
count1
12
word"flicker"
count1
13
word"pulsed"
count3
14
word"vibrated"
count1
15
word"echoed"
count2
16
word"perfect"
count1
17
word"synchronized"
count1
18
word"shattered"
count1
19
word"stark"
count1
20
word"oppressive"
count1
21
word"reminder"
count1
highlights
0"throbbed"
1"pulse"
2"rhythmic"
3"resonance"
4"weight"
5"loomed"
6"shimmered"
7"flickered"
8"scanned"
9"sentinels"
10"silence"
11"tracing"
12"flicker"
13"pulsed"
14"vibrated"
15"echoed"
16"perfect"
17"synchronized"
18"shattered"
19"stark"
20"oppressive"
21"reminder"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences211
matches(empty)
54.84% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount12
narrationSentences211
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
1"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences241
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen29
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans16
markdownWords108
totalWords2428
ratio0.044
matches
0"Click. Click-click. Click."
1"Rory..."
2"Laila... Aurora..."
3"Not the stone, Malphora..."
4"The blood remembers. The soil remembers."
5"There is only the Grove. There is only the hunger."
6"The pendant is not a shield, daughter of the barrister. It is a dinner bell."
7"You are the key. And the key must be turned."
8"The mark is opening..."
9"You fell through a world. And you brought the scent of the void with you."
10"The Grove has been hungry for a long time, Aurora Carter."
11"This is the truth behind the curtain."
12"You belong to the one who sent you."
13"No one hears you in the fold."
14"Rory..."
15"You are the door."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions5
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions42
wordCount2200
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity0.82
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Richmond1
Park1
Aurora3
London2
Heathrow1
Heartstone10
Golden1
Empress1
Rory18
Grove3
Earth1
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Heartstone"
2"Rory"
3"Grove"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences150
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"sounded like a tongue hitting the roof of"
1"sounded like the wind whistling through a"
2"darkness that seemed to suck the very moonlight out of the air"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.412
wordCount2428
matches
0"not into mud or soil, but into a jagged, vertical rift"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences241
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs106
mean22.91
std17.75
cv0.775
sampleLengths
070
155
27
358
475
56
654
73
844
915
1037
1111
1234
1331
1413
1533
1610
1751
1840
193
2034
2130
221
238
249
252
2644
2753
288
2948
3043
318
329
334
3424
3529
3632
376
384
3940
407
4144
4227
4313
4410
4544
4616
4726
4815
4952
95.29% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount6
totalSentences211
matches
0"being hauled"
1"was gone"
2"being struck"
3"were made"
4"was gone"
5"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs365
matches
0"was coming"
1"wasn't leaving"
2"was circling"
59.87% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount5
flaggedSentences7
totalSentences241
ratio0.029
matches
0"It didn't just glow; it throbbed."
1"The well-trodden gravel gave way to a carpet of wildflowers—pale, translucent things that didn't belong in a London park in the dead of night."
2"They didn't walk; they drifted, their bodies shimmering in and out of the moonlight like a bad television signal."
3"The light didn't vanish; it bled into the soil, turning the entire clearing into a glowing, venous map of red lines."
4"It turned cold—a deep, biting frost that spread up her arm."
5"The impact didn't shatter the gem; it shattered the silence."
6"It didn't pull her toward its mouth; it pulled her toward the rift."
99.39% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount344
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount14
adverbRatio0.040697674418604654
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.00872093023255814
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences241
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences241
mean10.07
std5.95
cv0.591
sampleLengths
020
14
220
320
46
513
619
76
817
97
1012
1120
129
1317
145
1524
167
1715
185
1919
206
218
223
2321
244
2518
263
279
2813
297
3015
315
326
334
344
3516
3617
3711
387
3916
404
417
4211
4317
441
451
461
4713
482
493
35.06% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats36
diversityRatio0.1825726141078838
totalSentences241
uniqueOpeners44
32.84% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences203
matches
0"Usually, the distant roar of"
1"Then a third."
ratio0.01
58.42% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount82
totalSentences203
matches
0"She didn't look back."
1"Her boots crunched on the"
2"She reached into the collar"
3"It didn't just glow; it"
4"Her voice sounded thin, stripped"
5"She adjusted the strap of"
6"It had practically burned a"
7"They smelled of ozone and"
8"They didn't look like wood."
9"She stepped into the center"
10"She checked her watch."
11"It was hot now, a"
12"She scanned the perimeter of"
13"It didn't come from behind"
14"It came from above."
15"She tilted her head."
16"It always did when her"
17"It sounded like a tongue"
18"It was twenty feet to"
19"It was too fast for"
ratio0.404
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount190
totalSentences203
matches
0"The iron gates of Richmond"
1"She didn't look back."
2"Her boots crunched on the"
3"Tonight, the air held its"
4"She reached into the collar"
5"The deep crimson gem sat"
6"It didn't just glow; it"
7"The light ebbed and flowed"
8"Her voice sounded thin, stripped"
9"She adjusted the strap of"
10"Yu-Fei hadn't sent her here,"
11"It had practically burned a"
12"The path began to warp."
13"The well-trodden gravel gave way"
14"They smelled of ozone and"
15"Rory slowed her pace as"
16"They didn't look like wood."
17"She stepped into the center"
18"The temperature plummeted."
19"She checked her watch."
ratio0.936
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences203
matches(empty)
ratio0
62.75% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences107
technicalSentenceCount12
matches
0"The well-trodden gravel gave way to a carpet of wildflowers—pale, translucent things that didn't belong in a London park in the dead of night."
1"It was hot now, a sharp, localized heat that radiated through her fingertips."
2"The flame stood perfectly still, a tiny yellow spear that didn't flicker."
3"They stretched, elongating into spindly, many-jointed limbs that mimicked the reach of the branches above."
4"The blossoms began to tilt toward her, their pale petals opening to reveal centers that looked uncomfortably like human gums."
5"It pulsed back against her palm, a slow, hydraulic thud that matched the beat of the pendant."
6"It was everywhere now, a frantic, percussive storm that vibrated in her teeth."
7"Features stretched thin over a frame that was far too long, eyes like dull coins that caught no reflection."
8"The creature drifted closer, its limbs unfolding with the sound of snapping dry wood."
9"She pulled a small utility knife from her belt, her hand trembling so violently the blade rattled in its casing."
10"It was black, a void-darkness that seemed to suck the very moonlight out of the air."
11"It grew larger, the black surface cracking to reveal a white-hot core that hissed against the damp air."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags1
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
80.4700%