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Run: 2026-02-25-01KJ95J5SA2Z9X1P28EYWHFZ53
Run Details
Model:
Gemini 3 Flash (Preview, Reasoning)
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Horror: alone in an eerie place at night
Duration:
40.6s
Cost:
$0.015026
Provider:
Google AI Studio
Evaluation summary
Score
Evaluator
Details Link
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
(details)
87.65%
AI-ism adverb frequency
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism character names
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
(details)
27.98%
AI-ism word frequency
(details)
100.00%
Cliché density
(details)
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
(details)
54.84%
Filter word density
(details)
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
(details)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
(details)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
(details)
100.00%
Name drop frequency
(details)
100.00%
Narrator intent-glossing
(details)
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
(details)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
(details)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
(details)
95.29%
Passive voice overuse
(details)
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
(details)
59.87%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
(details)
99.39%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
(details)
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
(details)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
(details)
35.06%
Sentence opener variety
(details)
32.84%
Adverb-first sentence starts
(details)
58.42%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
(details)
0.00%
Subject-first sentence starts
(details)
0.00%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
(details)
62.75%
Technical jargon density
(details)
100.00%
Useless dialogue additions
(details)
100.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
(details)
80.4700%
Overall
Model input
System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>
Model response
Messages
Meta
AI
The iron gates of Richmond
Park creaked behind Aurora, a shrill, rusted protest that cut through the stagnant London humidity. She didn't look back.
Her boots crunched on the
gravel path, the sound unnervingly loud in the absence of the city's usual low-frequency hum.
Usually, the distant roar of
the A3 or the hum of a passing Heathrow flight offered a comfort of civilization.
Tonight, the air held its
breath.
She reached into the collar
of her jacket and pulled out the Heartstone.
The deep crimson gem sat
heavy against her palm, its silver chain slick with the sweat of her neck.
It didn't just glow; it
throbbed
.
The light ebbed and flowed
like a slow, dying
pulse
, casting long,
rhythmic
shadows across the ferns. "Fine. You want me here. I’m here."
Her voice sounded thin, stripped
of its
resonance
by the dense canopy.
She adjusted the strap of
her delivery bag, the
weight
of the Golden Empress takeout containers shifting against her spine. Yu-Fei hadn't sent her here, but the pendant had.
It had practically burned a
hole through her shirt since she left the flat above Silas’ bar. The path
began to
warp.
The well-trodden gravel gave way
to a carpet of wildflowers—pale, translucent things that didn't belong in a London park in the dead of night.
They smelled of ozone and
ancient honey.
Rory slowed her pace as
the ancient oak standing stones
loomed
out of the darkness. They didn't look like wood. In the moonlight, the bark
shimmered
with the texture of cured leather, twisted into shapes that suggested agonized limbs. "This wasn't on the map, Silas."
She stepped into the center
of the grove. The temperature plummeted. One moment the night was a sticky twenty degrees, the next, her breath blossomed into a white cloud before her face. She checked her
watch
. The digital display
flickered
, the numbers tumbling into nonsense symbols before the screen cracked from the center out. "Great. Fantastic timing." Rory hiked her jacket up and gripped the Heartstone.
It was hot now, a
sharp, localized heat that radiated through her fingertips.
She scanned the perimeter of
the clearing. The oaks stood like
sentinels
, their branches interlaced so
tightly
they blocked out the stars. A snap broke the
silence
.
It didn't come from behind
her. It came from above. She tilted her head. The upper boughs swayed, though not a puff of wind stirred the wildflowers at her feet. Something heavy shifted in the canopy, a dragging sound like a wet sack
being hauled
over bark. "Who’s there? I know you’re watching. I haven't got all night." Silence rushed back in, thicker than before. Rory turned in a slow circle, her thumb
tracing
the crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist. The old injury itched.
It always did when her
adrenaline spiked. A soft,
rhythmic
clicking started near one of the standing stones.
It sounded like a tongue
hitting the roof of a mouth, or perhaps bone knocking against stone. *Click. Click-click. Click.* "Is that you, Evan? If you’ve followed me here, I swear to God—" She stopped. The clicking moved.
It was twenty feet to
her left, then
suddenly
ten feet behind her.
It was too fast for
someone to move through the thick undergrowth without a sound. "This is a joke. A
very
bad,
very
expensive joke." Rory reached into her pocket and pulled out her phone. The screen remained black, reflecting only the frantic red
pulse
of the pendant. She shoved it back and pulled a heavy brass lighter from her pocket, flicking the wheel. The flame stood
perfectly
still, a tiny yellow spear that didn't
flicker
. Darkness pooled in the gaps between the trees, a concentrated black that felt more like a physical substance than a lack of light. Something pale moved in the corner of her eye. She whipped her head toward the largest oak. "I saw you." The tree trunk remained motionless, but the shadows at its base
seemed to
detach. They didn't move toward her. They stretched, elongating into spindly, many-jointed limbs that mimicked the reach of the branches above. A voice drifted through the clearing. It wasn't a human voice. It
sounded like the wind whistling through a
hollow bone, shaped into the jagged edges of her own name. *Rory...* She stiffened, her fingers whitening around the Heartstone. "I didn't give you permission to use that name." *Laila... Aurora...* The voice layered over itself, a dozen versions of her name whispered in unison. It came from the ground. It came from the flowers. The blossoms
began to
tilt toward her, their pale petals opening to reveal centers that looked uncomfortably like human gums. Rory took a step back. Her heel caught on a root that hadn't been there moments ago. She stumbled, her hand flying out to catch herself on one of the standing stones. The texture was warm. It
pulsed
back against her palm, a slow, hydraulic thud that matched the beat of the pendant. "You’re alive. The whole damn place is alive." The clicking intensified. It was everywhere now, a frantic, percussive storm that
vibrated
in her teeth. Above her, the canopy groaned. A long, thin shadow dropped from a branch, dangling like a spider on a thread. It stopped just above the circle of light cast by the pendant. It was a face, or the suggestion of one. Features stretched thin over a frame that was far too long, eyes like dull coins that caught no reflection. It didn't have a mouth, only a vertical slit that leaked a faint, silver mist. "What do you want? The stone? Take it." She held the Heartstone out, the silver chain dangling. *Not the stone, Malphora...* The voice
echoed
inside her skull, bypasssing her ears entirely. The creature drifted closer, its limbs unfolding with the sound of snapping dry wood. "Don't call me that. My name is Aurora Carter. I deliver Chinese food in London. I have a flat in Peckham. I am not whatever you think I am." The creature tilted its head. The silver mist from its face curled toward her, smelling of copper and wet earth. It mimicked her movement, tilting its head to the exact same angle. *The blood remembers. The soil remembers.* "I’m leaving. Right now." Rory turned, but the path
was gone
. Where the gravel trail had been, there was now only a wall of thorns that grew several inches as she watched. The standing stones had shifted, closing the circle. The clearing had shrunk. "Let me out. This wasn't the deal." The clicking died away, replaced by a low, vibrating hum that made the pendant in her hand scream with heat. She dropped it. The Heartstone fell into the wildflowers, and where it touched the earth, the plants shriveled and blackened in a
perfect
circle. The dangling creature descended further, its long, needle-like fingers brushing the top of her hair. Rory didn't scream. She frozen, her breath coming in shallow, jagged gasps. "You’re not real. This is Richmond Park. There are joggers and deer and—" *There is only the Grove. There is only the hunger.* A second creature emerged from behind the stone she had touched. Then a third. They didn't walk; they drifted, their bodies shimmering in and out of the moonlight like a bad television signal. They weren't solid, but the air around them felt heavy, pressurized. "Silas said this was safe. He said if I had the pendant, nothing would touch me." The creatures stopped. The one in front of her extended a hand, the skin looking like translucent parchment. It pointed to the Heartstone on the ground. *The pendant is not a shield, daughter of the barrister. It is a dinner bell.* Rory looked down at the crimson gem. The glow was no longer
rhythmic
. It was constant, a blinding, furious red that illuminated the faces of a dozens of things standing just beyond the tree line. They had been there the whole time, watching and waiting for the light to reach its peak. "I'm not my father. I'm not anyone's daughter. I'm just Rory." The lead creature's vertical mouth split open wider. A row of teeth, fine as fishbones, glinted in the red light. *You are the key. And the key must be turned.* Rory reached for the pendant, but the ground beneath it softened into a slurry of mud and rotted petals. The Heartstone sank, swallowed by the Earth. The light didn't vanish; it bled into the soil, turning the entire clearing into a glowing, venous map of red lines. The trees
began to
lean inward. The ancient oaks groaned, their trunks twisting with an audible screech of fiber. The circle was closing. "Back off!" She pulled a small utility knife from her belt, her hand trembling so violently the blade rattled in its casing. The creature didn't flinch. It reached out and touched the crescent scar on her wrist. The skin there didn't burn. It turned cold—a deep, biting frost that spread up her arm. *The mark is opening...* "It's just a scar. I fell off a bike when I was six." *You fell through a world. And you brought the scent of the void with you.* The ground heaved. A massive root erupted from the center of the grove, tossing Rory off her feet. She landed hard on her side, the takeout bag spilling open. Containers of noodles and rice scattered across the mutated flowers, but the creatures ignored the food. They moved toward her in a
synchronized
, fluid motion, their long shadows overlapping her body. Rory scrambled backward, her heels digging into the freezing mud. Her hand hit something cold and hard. It was the top of the Heartstone, resurfacing near the edge of a standing stone. It wasn't crimson anymore. It was black, a void-
darkness that seemed to suck the very moonlight out of the air
. "Stay away from me!" She grabbed the stone. The moment her skin made contact, the clicking sound returned, but this time it
was coming
from inside her own chest. The lead creature leaned down, its face inches from hers. The silver mist filled her lungs, tasting of a thousand years of forgotten winters. *The Grove has been hungry for a long time, Aurora Carter.* "Then eat something else." She slammed the black stone against the base of the standing stone. The impact didn't shatter the gem; it
shattered
the
silence
. A shockwave of sound, like a cathedral bell
being struck
by a mountain, tore through the grove. The creatures recoiled, their forms flickering wildly. The ground beneath Rory split open,
not into mud or soil, but into a jagged, vertical rift
that
pulsed
with a pale, sickly violet light. She looked into the rift and saw a sky with three moons. "What is this? Where is the park?" *This is the truth behind the curtain.* The creature reached for her again, its fingers elongating into claws. Rory didn't look away. She gripped the black pendant until the edges drew blood from her palm. "I don't belong here." *You belong to the one who sent you.* The trees
began to
scream. It was a high, undulating wail that shook the leaves from the boughs. The red veins in the ground flared, and the flowers
began to
pull themselves into the earth, dragging the edges of the rift wider. Rory felt the pull. The gravity of the grove changed, tilting toward the violet light. She slid toward the edge of the crack in reality, her boots finding no purchase on the slick, frozen grass. "Silas! Eva! Someone!" *No one hears you in the fold.* The first creature’s hand closed around her ankle. Its grip was like a vice of ice. It didn't pull her toward its mouth; it pulled her toward the rift. "Let go of me!" She kicked out, but her foot passed through the creature’s chest as if it
were made
of smoke. The cold spread to her hip, numbing her leg entirely. The Heartstone in her hand
began to
vibrate. It grew larger, the black surface cracking to reveal a white-hot core that hissed against the damp air. "If I'm the key, then I'm locking the door." She shoved the stone into the creature's grasping hand. The reaction was instantaneous. A blinding flare of white light erupted, turning the grove into a
stark
, colorless void. The scream of the trees reached a deafening crescendo, and then, the world went silent. The pressure in her ears popped. The smell of ozone vanished, replaced by the mundane scent of damp earth and car exhaust. Rory lay on the ground, gasping for air. The grass beneath her was normal green. The oaks were just oaks, their bark silent and still. The sun hadn't come up, but the
oppressive
, heavy dark had lifted. She looked at her hand. The Heartstone
was gone
. The silver chain lay snapped in the grass, but the gem had vanished. Her wrist
throbbed
. She pulled back her sleeve. The crescent-shaped scar
was gone
. In its place was a thin, glowing line of violet that
pulsed
beneath her skin, a permanent
reminder
of the heartbeat of the Grove. A twig snapped in the darkness behind her. "Who's there?" She stood up, her legs shaking. The park was quiet, but it wasn't the
silence
of peace. It was the
silence
of something holding its breath, waiting for the next heartbeat. A low growl
echoed
from the shadows of the nearest oak. It wasn't the creature. It was something heavier, something with teeth and
weight
. "I said, who is it?" The red light
began to
bleed back into the soil at her feet, one thin line at a time. Rory backed away, her hand reaching for a knife that was no longer there. The shadows at the edge of the grove
began to
stretch again. "Not again. Please, not again." *Rory...* The voice was closer now. It didn't come from the air or the trees. It came from the violet line beneath her skin. "Be quiet." She turned and ran, but the more she ran, the more the trees
seemed to
repeat themselves. Each oak she passed had the same knot, the same pattern of bark, the same agonizing lean. She
wasn't leaving
the grove. She
was circling
the drain. The clicking started again, soft and
rhythmic
, right behind her ear. "I'm not the key." *You are the door.* The ground beneath her feet
began to
soften once more, the wildflowers blooming in the wake of her footprints, pale and hungry.
created_at
"2026-02-25T01:10:38.127Z"
2/25/2026, 1:10:38 AM
model
"google/gemini-3-flash-preview-20251217"
app_id
182717
external_user
(null)
streamed
true
cancelled
false
latency
1851
moderation_latency
(null)
generation_time
40514
tokens_prompt
1038
tokens_completion
4467
native_tokens_prompt
963
native_tokens_completion
4848
native_tokens_completion_images
0
native_tokens_reasoning
1615
native_tokens_cached
0
num_media_prompt
(null)
num_input_audio_prompt
(null)
num_media_completion
0
num_search_results
(null)
origin
"https://ncbench.com/"
is_byok
false
finish_reason
"stop"
native_finish_reason
"STOP"
usage
0.0150255
router
(null)
provider_responses
0
endpoint_id
"6e82f652-2693-4b60-bbe0-7362d6e345f0"
is_byok
false
latency
1851
model_permaslug
"google/gemini-3-flash-preview-20251217"
provider_name
"Google AI Studio"
status
200
api_type
"completions"
id
"gen-1771981838-s0rBnADzMSuxOqvxaKIF"
upstream_id
(null)
total_cost
0.0150255
cache_discount
(null)
upstream_inference_cost
0
provider_name
"Google AI Studio"
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
1
adverbTagCount
1
adverbTags
0
"It had practically [practically]"
dialogueSentences
30
tagDensity
0.033
leniency
0.067
rawRatio
1
effectiveRatio
0.067
87.65%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount
2430
totalAiIsmAdverbs
6
found
0
adverb
"tightly"
count
1
1
adverb
"suddenly"
count
1
2
adverb
"very"
count
3
3
adverb
"perfectly"
count
1
highlights
0
"tightly"
1
"suddenly"
2
"very"
3
"perfectly"
100.00%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
27.98%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount
2430
totalAiIsms
35
found
0
word
"throbbed"
count
2
1
word
"pulse"
count
2
2
word
"rhythmic"
count
4
3
word
"resonance"
count
1
4
word
"weight"
count
2
5
word
"loomed"
count
1
6
word
"shimmered"
count
1
7
word
"flickered"
count
1
8
word
"scanned"
count
1
9
word
"sentinels"
count
1
10
word
"silence"
count
5
11
word
"tracing"
count
1
12
word
"flicker"
count
1
13
word
"pulsed"
count
3
14
word
"vibrated"
count
1
15
word
"echoed"
count
2
16
word
"perfect"
count
1
17
word
"synchronized"
count
1
18
word
"shattered"
count
1
19
word
"stark"
count
1
20
word
"oppressive"
count
1
21
word
"reminder"
count
1
highlights
0
"throbbed"
1
"pulse"
2
"rhythmic"
3
"resonance"
4
"weight"
5
"loomed"
6
"shimmered"
7
"flickered"
8
"scanned"
9
"sentinels"
10
"silence"
11
"tracing"
12
"flicker"
13
"pulsed"
14
"vibrated"
15
"echoed"
16
"perfect"
17
"synchronized"
18
"shattered"
19
"stark"
20
"oppressive"
21
"reminder"
100.00%
Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
0
maxInWindow
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
211
matches
(empty)
54.84%
Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
1
hedgeCount
12
narrationSentences
211
filterMatches
0
"watch"
hedgeMatches
0
"began to"
1
"seemed to"
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences
241
gibberishSentences
0
adjustedGibberishSentences
0
longSentenceCount
0
runOnParagraphCount
0
giantParagraphCount
0
wordSaladCount
0
repetitionLoopCount
0
controlTokenCount
0
maxSentenceWordsSeen
29
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans
16
markdownWords
108
totalWords
2428
ratio
0.044
matches
0
"Click. Click-click. Click."
1
"Rory..."
2
"Laila... Aurora..."
3
"Not the stone, Malphora..."
4
"The blood remembers. The soil remembers."
5
"There is only the Grove. There is only the hunger."
6
"The pendant is not a shield, daughter of the barrister. It is a dinner bell."
7
"You are the key. And the key must be turned."
8
"The mark is opening..."
9
"You fell through a world. And you brought the scent of the void with you."
10
"The Grove has been hungry for a long time, Aurora Carter."
11
"This is the truth behind the curtain."
12
"You belong to the one who sent you."
13
"No one hears you in the fold."
14
"Rory..."
15
"You are the door."
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions
5
unquotedAttributions
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions
42
wordCount
2200
uniqueNames
11
maxNameDensity
0.82
worstName
"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity
1.5
worstWindowName
"Rory"
discoveredNames
Richmond
1
Park
1
Aurora
3
London
2
Heathrow
1
Heartstone
10
Golden
1
Empress
1
Rory
18
Grove
3
Earth
1
persons
0
"Aurora"
1
"Heartstone"
2
"Rory"
3
"Grove"
places
0
"Richmond"
1
"Park"
2
"London"
globalScore
1
windowScore
1
100.00%
Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences
150
glossingSentenceCount
3
matches
0
"sounded like a tongue hitting the roof of"
1
"sounded like the wind whistling through a"
2
"darkness that seemed to suck the very moonlight out of the air"
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches
1
per1kWords
0.412
wordCount
2428
matches
0
"not into mud or soil, but into a jagged, vertical rift"
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
0
totalSentences
241
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
106
mean
22.91
std
17.75
cv
0.775
sampleLengths
0
70
1
55
2
7
3
58
4
75
5
6
6
54
7
3
8
44
9
15
10
37
11
11
12
34
13
31
14
13
15
33
16
10
17
51
18
40
19
3
20
34
21
30
22
1
23
8
24
9
25
2
26
44
27
53
28
8
29
48
30
43
31
8
32
9
33
4
34
24
35
29
36
32
37
6
38
4
39
40
40
7
41
44
42
27
43
13
44
10
45
44
46
16
47
26
48
15
49
52
95.29%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount
6
totalSentences
211
matches
0
"being hauled"
1
"was gone"
2
"being struck"
3
"were made"
4
"was gone"
5
"was gone"
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
3
totalVerbs
365
matches
0
"was coming"
1
"wasn't leaving"
2
"was circling"
59.87%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount
2
semicolonCount
5
flaggedSentences
7
totalSentences
241
ratio
0.029
matches
0
"It didn't just glow; it throbbed."
1
"The well-trodden gravel gave way to a carpet of wildflowers—pale, translucent things that didn't belong in a London park in the dead of night."
2
"They didn't walk; they drifted, their bodies shimmering in and out of the moonlight like a bad television signal."
3
"The light didn't vanish; it bled into the soil, turning the entire clearing into a glowing, venous map of red lines."
4
"It turned cold—a deep, biting frost that spread up her arm."
5
"The impact didn't shatter the gem; it shattered the silence."
6
"It didn't pull her toward its mouth; it pulled her toward the rift."
99.39%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
344
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
14
adverbRatio
0.040697674418604654
lyAdverbCount
3
lyAdverbRatio
0.00872093023255814
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
241
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
241
mean
10.07
std
5.95
cv
0.591
sampleLengths
0
20
1
4
2
20
3
20
4
6
5
13
6
19
7
6
8
17
9
7
10
12
11
20
12
9
13
17
14
5
15
24
16
7
17
15
18
5
19
19
20
6
21
8
22
3
23
21
24
4
25
18
26
3
27
9
28
13
29
7
30
15
31
5
32
6
33
4
34
4
35
16
36
17
37
11
38
7
39
16
40
4
41
7
42
11
43
17
44
1
45
1
46
1
47
13
48
2
49
3
35.06%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
36
diversityRatio
0.1825726141078838
totalSentences
241
uniqueOpeners
44
32.84%
Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount
2
totalSentences
203
matches
0
"Usually, the distant roar of"
1
"Then a third."
ratio
0.01
58.42%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount
82
totalSentences
203
matches
0
"She didn't look back."
1
"Her boots crunched on the"
2
"She reached into the collar"
3
"It didn't just glow; it"
4
"Her voice sounded thin, stripped"
5
"She adjusted the strap of"
6
"It had practically burned a"
7
"They smelled of ozone and"
8
"They didn't look like wood."
9
"She stepped into the center"
10
"She checked her watch."
11
"It was hot now, a"
12
"She scanned the perimeter of"
13
"It didn't come from behind"
14
"It came from above."
15
"She tilted her head."
16
"It always did when her"
17
"It sounded like a tongue"
18
"It was twenty feet to"
19
"It was too fast for"
ratio
0.404
0.00%
Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount
190
totalSentences
203
matches
0
"The iron gates of Richmond"
1
"She didn't look back."
2
"Her boots crunched on the"
3
"Tonight, the air held its"
4
"She reached into the collar"
5
"The deep crimson gem sat"
6
"It didn't just glow; it"
7
"The light ebbed and flowed"
8
"Her voice sounded thin, stripped"
9
"She adjusted the strap of"
10
"Yu-Fei hadn't sent her here,"
11
"It had practically burned a"
12
"The path began to warp."
13
"The well-trodden gravel gave way"
14
"They smelled of ozone and"
15
"Rory slowed her pace as"
16
"They didn't look like wood."
17
"She stepped into the center"
18
"The temperature plummeted."
19
"She checked her watch."
ratio
0.936
0.00%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount
0
totalSentences
203
matches
(empty)
ratio
0
62.75%
Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences
107
technicalSentenceCount
12
matches
0
"The well-trodden gravel gave way to a carpet of wildflowers—pale, translucent things that didn't belong in a London park in the dead of night."
1
"It was hot now, a sharp, localized heat that radiated through her fingertips."
2
"The flame stood perfectly still, a tiny yellow spear that didn't flicker."
3
"They stretched, elongating into spindly, many-jointed limbs that mimicked the reach of the branches above."
4
"The blossoms began to tilt toward her, their pale petals opening to reveal centers that looked uncomfortably like human gums."
5
"It pulsed back against her palm, a slow, hydraulic thud that matched the beat of the pendant."
6
"It was everywhere now, a frantic, percussive storm that vibrated in her teeth."
7
"Features stretched thin over a frame that was far too long, eyes like dull coins that caught no reflection."
8
"The creature drifted closer, its limbs unfolding with the sound of snapping dry wood."
9
"She pulled a small utility knife from her belt, her hand trembling so violently the blade rattled in its casing."
10
"It was black, a void-darkness that seemed to suck the very moonlight out of the air."
11
"It grew larger, the black surface cracking to reveal a white-hot core that hissed against the damp air."
100.00%
Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags
1
uselessAdditionCount
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
0
80.4700%