Run: 2026-02-25-01KJ95K5HQ9V9GAQST2PW29NDN

Run Details

Duration:
22.2s
Cost:
$0.010138
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The Veil shimmered, a distortion like heat haze off asphalt, yet far more profound. Rory watched it, a tightness in her chest, the Heartstone pendant pulsing a steady, warm beat against her sternum. The crimson gem, usually a quiet ember, now flared with an inner glow that stained her skin faintly red. It wasn't the winter solstice, but Isolde had spoken of a weakening in the boundary, a tear born of desperation or desire, one that only beings attuned to such things could perceive. Beside her, Nyx was a deeper patch of shadow in the already twilight-dim glade. Their form was unusually substantial tonight, a tall, lean silhouette with eyes that burned like twin facets of polished amethyst. Isolde, a silver-haired wisp of presence, stood before the shimmer, her pale lavender eyes fixed on *something* beyond. No footprints marred the moss at her feet, leaving only the faint indentations of Rory's worn boots. "The passage parts," Isolde's voice was a whisper of dry leaves. "Where desire grows wild, and hunger knows no balm. Step lightly, mortal, lest the feast consume you." Rory took a deep breath, the air in the Fae Grove cool on her lungs. The promise of Dymas. Gluttony. A place of excess. What could be so threatening about abundance? Evan’s manipulations had always started with honeyed words and lavish gifts, a veneer of perfection that hid something rotten. She gripped the cold, leaf-shaped hilt of the Fae-Forged Blade at her hip, the moonsilver hilt a stark contrast to the warming pendant. The shimmering grew, twisting into a vortex of swirling colors only Rory seemed to fully register – the subtle blues and greens of Earth, bleeding into impossible golds and purples. It felt like walking through a dream. She stepped forward, her hand outstretched, testing the air. It wasn’t empty space. It was a tangible pressure, like pushing through thick water. Then, the world bled through. The humidity hit first, thick and cloying, smelling of overripe fruit and something sweet, like fermented wine. It was a physical presence, wrapping around Rory, making her feel heavy, almost drunk on the scent alone. Her eyes, used to the fading light of Earth, were overwhelmed. The sky was a constant, warm amber, as if perpetual sunset had been captured and held fast. It glowed, not with the harsh brilliance of a sun, but with a diffuse, enveloping light that stained everything beneath it in rich, golden hues. Before them, stretching into the hazy distance, lay Dymas. Not a barren land, not a wasteland, but a garden beyond comprehension. Sprawling vineyards unfurled across rolling hills, their trellises lost in the amber light. The vines were impossibly thick, their leaves a deep, polished jade. And the grapes—Rory had never seen anything like them. They hung in clusters the size of a man's fist, shimmering with internal lights – ruby reds so deep they were almost black, emerald greens that glowed, royal purples that pulsed. Some seemed to shift color even as she watched, like liquid jewels. "A generous welcome," Nyx's whisper drifted beside her, almost lost in the sudden, overwhelming hum that permeated the air. It was the sound of a thousand insects, the murmur of distant voices, the low thrum of some unseen mechanism, all woven into a vast, living symphony of indulgence. Isolde merely smiled, a knowing, placid expression. "Where the ground weeps sweetness, and all thirst is quenched. But remember, a cup overfull is prone to spill." Rory took a cautious step onto the path, a broad flagstone track that gleamed with an almost oily luster. It was perfectly smooth, reflecting the amber sky with a deep, dark sheen. The Heartstone in her chest thrummed with increasing intensity, a quick, almost frantic beat now. They began to walk, deeper into Dymas. The vineyards gave way to orchards where trees bent low, their limbs groaning under the weight of colossal fruits. Apples the size of human heads, glowing with internal luminescence. Pears with skins like spun gold. Oranges that split, just slightly, at their bases, revealing succulent, glistening flesh. The air grew thicker with the sweet, heady scent, so potent it almost burned Rory’s nostrils. Her stomach gave an involuntary rumble, a betrayal. "It is... much," she muttered, wiping a bead of sweat from her brow. The constant warmth was beginning to feel oppressive. Nyx solidified further, their shadowed hand reaching out, not quite touching, a monstrously large, purple-black fruit that hung from a low branch. "A feast for the senses, yes. And a trap for the unwary." Their voice held a note of dry amusement, but their glowing eyes scanned the horizon, ever vigilant. Rory tried to pick out individual sounds in the cacophony. Distant laughter, high and clear. The occasional clang of what sounded like an enormous gong. Music, a stringed instrument with a deep, resonant tone, weaving in and out of the general hum. It was beautiful, captivating, yet it had a frantic edge, like a party that had gone on for too long, fuelled by desperation. Through gaps in the orchards, Rory caught glimpses of structures: grand pavilions with silken fabrics fluttering in a breeze she couldn’t feel, their colors vibrant against the amber sky. Farther still, in the distance, a sprawling complex that looked like a palace built for giants, its spires piercing the glowing air. They passed a fountain, its basin overflowing with a viscous, honey-colored liquid that smelled like nectar and spices. Figures moved gracefully around it, their forms human-like but subtly elongated, their skin gleaming under the amber light. They were too far to make out specific features, but they seemed to glide rather than walk, their movements fluid and unhurried as they dipped chalices into the rich liquid. Rory’s scar on her left wrist, usually a pale crescent, now felt oddly sensitive, a faint tingling sensation. She pushed up her sleeve instinctively, but there was nothing to see. Only the familiar, almost forgotten mark. "Do you feel it?" she asked Nyx quietly. "The... richness?" "The *intent*," Nyx corrected, their gaze still sweeping the landscape. "This realm seeks to sate, to drown, to consume. It is a slow seduction." Then, a discovery. Skirting a massive fig tree laden with fruits that pulsed with a soft, inner light, they came across a pathway leading deeper into a dense grove. Here, the gardens were less cultivated, wilder, though still bursting with unearthly flora. Flowers bloomed in hues that defied Earthly pigments: petals like spun glass, stamens that glowed with cold fire, blossoms that slowly unfurled and retracted, as if breathing. A faint, sweet *singing* drifted from the grove. It wasn't human. It was higher, sweeter, full of a strange, melancholic joy. "A siren's call, perhaps," Isolde mused, her silver hair shimmering, catching the faint glints of light from the glowing flowers. "Or just a song of sorrow, dressed up for the show." Rory clutched the Fae-Forged Blade, its cold hilt a grounding force. "What's in there?" "Only what you seek," Isolde replied, as always. Pushing through a curtain of thick, velvety leaves that released a puff of scented pollen, they found a small, circular clearing. In the center, a pedestal of dark, polished stone held a single, magnificent fruit. It was unlike anything else they’d seen: roughly oblong, the size of a melon, with skin like opalescent mother-of-pearl, constantly shifting through a spectrum of soft pastels. A faint, almost imperceptible hum emanated from it. But it was what surrounded the pedestal that caught Rory’s breath. Scattered around the base were dozens of tiny, intricate carvings, perhaps an inch or two tall, made from various fruits and vegetables. Miniature scenes of feasting, of dancing, of figures holding hands. They were ephemeral, beginning to dessicate, their colors fading, yet the artistry was undeniable. Each tiny piece was a testament to extraordinary skill, hinting at the "master chefs" Isolde had spoken of. But one of the carvings, half-rotted, almost invisible under a cluster of glowing moss, depicted a small, slumped figure with a look of utter, profound despair. An artist, wasting away, creating beauty for someone else's unending hunger. Unease truly settled in Rory's stomach now, not just from the cloying sweetness. This wasn't just indulgence; it was compulsion. "The art of torment," Nyx whispered, their form darkening almost imperceptibly, as if absorbing the light around them. "To create perfection for the very entity that consumes you. A common bargain in this realm." The fruit on the pedestal pulsed, brighter now, casting a gentle rainbow wash over the decaying carvings. Rory felt a pull, a deep, unsettling urge, to reach out and touch it, to taste it. To understand its perfection, to be filled by it. Her mouth watered, despite herself. She remembered the description of Dymas: "helbound souls contracted from Earth" often became master chefs here. Was this beautiful, tempting fruit a symbol of their artistry, or their eternal servitude? The Heartstone thrummed a sharp, warning beat. It was reacting to the fruit itself, not just the realm. Rory pulled her hand back, though she hadn't realized she’d extended it towards the opalescent fruit. The air in the clearing felt heavier, the sweet song from the depths of the grove suddenly sounding less joyful, more akin to a lament. "This is not a land of simple feasts," she said, her voice tight. "It's a place where hunger swallows everything, even the hungry themselves." Isolde's pale lavender eyes, for once, lost their usual knowing glint and softened with a touch of pity. "The greatest prison is often gilded, Aurora. And the sweetest chains are forged of desire." Rory imagined the grand feasts, the culinary competitions. All fuelled by the artistry and the pain of these *helbound* souls, endlessly creating perfection only to have it devoured. This beautiful, bounteous land was consuming itself, slowly, deliciously, with every impossible fruit and every intoxicating scent. This wasn't just Gluttony; it was a hungry, smiling maw. And she, Rory Carter, felt a chilling, deep-seated fear that she might just be one more tantalizing morsel.
created_at"2026-02-25T01:11:10.653Z" 2/25/2026, 1:11:10 AM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags11
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences21
tagDensity0.524
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
76.08% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1672
totalAiIsmAdverbs8
found
0
adverb"lightly"
count1
1
adverb"perfectly"
count1
2
adverb"slightly"
count1
3
adverb"slowly"
count2
4
adverb"truly"
count1
5
adverb"very"
count1
6
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"lightly"
1"perfectly"
2"slightly"
3"slowly"
4"truly"
5"very"
6"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1672
totalAiIsms35
found
0
word"shimmered"
count1
1
word"profound"
count2
2
word"desire"
count3
3
word"whisper"
count2
4
word"stark"
count1
5
word"tangible"
count1
6
word"pulsed"
count3
7
word"symphony"
count1
8
word"intensity"
count1
9
word"weight"
count1
10
word"glistening"
count1
11
word"stomach"
count2
12
word"warmth"
count1
13
word"oppressive"
count1
14
word"scanned"
count1
15
word"cacophony"
count1
16
word"complex"
count1
17
word"gleaming"
count1
18
word"familiar"
count1
19
word"intricate"
count1
20
word"dancing"
count1
21
word"ephemeral"
count1
22
word"testament"
count1
23
word"depths"
count1
24
word"glint"
count1
25
word"maw"
count1
26
word"chilling"
count1
27
word"tantalizing"
count1
highlights
0"shimmered"
1"profound"
2"desire"
3"whisper"
4"stark"
5"tangible"
6"pulsed"
7"symphony"
8"intensity"
9"weight"
10"glistening"
11"stomach"
12"warmth"
13"oppressive"
14"scanned"
15"cacophony"
16"complex"
17"gleaming"
18"familiar"
19"intricate"
20"dancing"
21"ephemeral"
22"testament"
23"depths"
24"glint"
25"maw"
26"chilling"
27"tantalizing"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences107
matches(empty)
62.75% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount5
narrationSentences107
filterMatches
0"feel"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
2"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences116
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen32
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans4
markdownWords4
totalWords1673
ratio0.002
matches
0"something"
1"intent"
2"singing"
3"helbound"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions7
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
90.44% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions55
wordCount1511
uniqueNames15
maxNameDensity1.19
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Veil1
Heartstone3
Isolde8
Nyx6
Rory18
Fae3
Grove1
Dymas4
Fae-Forged2
Blade2
Earth2
Earthly1
Pushing1
Gluttony2
Carter1
persons
0"Veil"
1"Heartstone"
2"Isolde"
3"Nyx"
4"Rory"
5"Earth"
6"Carter"
places
0"Fae"
1"Grove"
globalScore0.904
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences95
glossingSentenceCount7
matches
0"felt like walking through a dream"
1"not quite touching, a monstrously large, purple-black fruit that hung from a low branch"
2"sounded like an enormous gong"
3"looked like a palace built for giants, it"
4"smelled like nectar and spices"
5"as if breathing"
6"as if absorbing the light around them"
20.68% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches3
per1kWords1.793
wordCount1673
matches
0"not with the harsh brilliance of a sun, but with a diffuse, enveloping light"
1"Not a barren land, not a wasteland, but a garden beyond comprehension"
2"not a wasteland, but a garden beyond comprehension"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences116
matches
0"leaves that released"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs39
mean42.9
std25.94
cv0.605
sampleLengths
084
169
228
373
460
55
646
742
89
988
1048
1126
1247
137
1471
1521
1651
1765
1851
1966
2036
2110
2224
2369
2421
2531
2614
278
2870
29101
3011
3120
3234
3378
3418
3541
3624
3733
3873
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences107
matches
0"been captured"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs225
matches
0"was beginning"
1"was reacting"
2"was consuming"
19.70% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount3
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences5
totalSentences116
ratio0.043
matches
0"The shimmering grew, twisting into a vortex of swirling colors only Rory seemed to fully register – the subtle blues and greens of Earth, bleeding into impossible golds and purples."
1"And the grapes—Rory had never seen anything like them."
2"They hung in clusters the size of a man's fist, shimmering with internal lights – ruby reds so deep they were almost black, emerald greens that glowed, royal purples that pulsed."
3"This wasn't just indulgence; it was compulsion."
4"This wasn't just Gluttony; it was a hungry, smiling maw."
65.84% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1521
adjectiveStacks4
stackExamples
0"cold, leaf-shaped hilt"
1"large, purple-black fruit"
2"viscous, honey-colored liquid"
3"chilling, deep-seated fear"
adverbCount77
adverbRatio0.05062458908612755
lyAdverbCount32
lyAdverbRatio0.0210387902695595
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences116
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences116
mean14.42
std7.07
cv0.49
sampleLengths
014
119
219
332
414
520
618
717
811
917
1015
114
121
134
147
1519
1623
1730
187
199
204
2110
225
2317
2418
2511
2617
2725
289
2912
3013
3111
329
3331
3412
3519
3629
377
3819
3919
4013
4115
427
4319
4410
456
4612
4716
488
4913
65.52% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.41379310344827586
totalSentences116
uniqueOpeners48
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences106
matches
0"Then, the world bled through."
1"Only the familiar, almost forgotten"
2"Then, a discovery."
3"All fuelled by the artistry"
ratio0.038
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount30
totalSentences106
matches
0"It wasn't the winter solstice,"
1"Their form was unusually substantial"
2"She gripped the cold, leaf-shaped"
3"It felt like walking through"
4"She stepped forward, her hand"
5"It wasn’t empty space."
6"It was a tangible pressure,"
7"It was a physical presence,"
8"Her eyes, used to the"
9"It glowed, not with the"
10"They hung in clusters the"
11"It was the sound of"
12"It was perfectly smooth, reflecting"
13"They began to walk, deeper"
14"Her stomach gave an involuntary"
15"she muttered, wiping a bead"
16"Their voice held a note"
17"It was beautiful, captivating, yet"
18"They passed a fountain, its"
19"They were too far to"
ratio0.283
68.49% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount83
totalSentences106
matches
0"The Veil shimmered, a distortion"
1"Rory watched it, a tightness"
2"The crimson gem, usually a"
3"It wasn't the winter solstice,"
4"Their form was unusually substantial"
5"Isolde, a silver-haired wisp of"
6"Isolde's voice was a whisper"
7"Rory took a deep breath,"
8"The promise of Dymas."
9"A place of excess."
10"Evan’s manipulations had always started"
11"She gripped the cold, leaf-shaped"
12"The shimmering grew, twisting into"
13"It felt like walking through"
14"She stepped forward, her hand"
15"It wasn’t empty space."
16"It was a tangible pressure,"
17"The humidity hit first, thick"
18"It was a physical presence,"
19"Her eyes, used to the"
ratio0.783
94.34% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences106
matches
0"Before them, stretching into the"
1"To understand its perfection, to"
ratio0.019
40.82% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences70
technicalSentenceCount10
matches
0"Evan’s manipulations had always started with honeyed words and lavish gifts, a veneer of perfection that hid something rotten."
1"The sky was a constant, warm amber, as if perpetual sunset had been captured and held fast."
2"They hung in clusters the size of a man's fist, shimmering with internal lights – ruby reds so deep they were almost black, emerald greens that glowed, royal pu…"
3"Rory took a cautious step onto the path, a broad flagstone track that gleamed with an almost oily luster."
4"Oranges that split, just slightly, at their bases, revealing succulent, glistening flesh."
5"Nyx solidified further, their shadowed hand reaching out, not quite touching, a monstrously large, purple-black fruit that hung from a low branch."
6"It was beautiful, captivating, yet it had a frantic edge, like a party that had gone on for too long, fuelled by desperation."
7"Farther still, in the distance, a sprawling complex that looked like a palace built for giants, its spires piercing the glowing air."
8"They passed a fountain, its basin overflowing with a viscous, honey-colored liquid that smelled like nectar and spices."
9"Flowers bloomed in hues that defied Earthly pigments: petals like spun glass, stamens that glowed with cold fire, blossoms that slowly unfurled and retracted, a…"
34.09% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags11
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"Nyx corrected, their gaze still sweeping the landscape"
1"she said, her voice tight"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"she muttered (mutter)"
1"Nyx corrected (correct)"
2"extraordinary skill hinting (hint)"
3"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences21
tagDensity0.333
leniency0.667
rawRatio0.571
effectiveRatio0.381
74.6247%