Run: 2026-02-25-01KJ95Q1VCEFGP1SK4R9TNQ45S

Run Details

Duration:
31.4s
Cost:
$0.003373
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The air of the Fae Grove, thick with the sweet, cloying perfume of perpetual bloom, tore open. It wasn’t a rip, more like a curtain of water parting, revealing not dampness but a sharp, crystalline void. Rory stepped through, her breath catching. Behind her, Nyx flowed, a shadow detaching itself from the familiar mossy rocks, and Isolde followed with her usual unnerving grace. The Grove’s whispering wind died as they crossed the threshold. Before them stretched a landscape that defied earthly comprehension, bathed in a diffused, pearlescent light that seemed to emanate from the very fabric of the ether. Immense, crystalline structures, like colossal quartz formations, pierced a sky the colour of bruised plums. They weren't mountains; they seemed to grow, organic yet mineral, humming with a low, resonant frequency that vibrated in Rory’s teeth. Between these spires, vast, bioluminescent flora pulsed with soft, internal fires, casting shifting, ethereal patterns onto the ground. The ground itself was not soil or stone, but a yielding, spongy mat composed of countless tiny, interlocking fragments that glowed with a faint, internal phosphorescence. Each step produced a soft, squelching resonance, accompanied by a puff of cool, ozone-scented mist. "Where the roots drink the deep song," Isolde murmured, her voice barely disturbing the quiet. Her pale lavender eyes, wide and luminous, swept across the spectacle. "The old songs spoke of such places. Where the echoes of creation still sing." Nyx shifted beside Rory, their humanoid shadow-form flowing like smoke. Their violet eyes, usually glinting, seemed to absorb the alien light. "The energy here is… ancient. Not Fae, not quite Hel. It’s… a genesis." Their voice, a wisp of wind, carried a strange vibration. "It feels like… *waiting*." Rory’s fingers tightened on the Fae-Forged Blade at her hip, its cool moonsilver a familiar anchor. The Heartstone Pendant nestled against her sternum was still, utterly still. No pulse. She focused on her surroundings. The air was impossibly pure, cool on her skin, carrying scents she couldn’t place – sharp, metallic tangs mingling with something reminiscent of petrichor after a storm, but deeper, richer. The silence was not an absence of sound, but a presence; a dense, watchful quietude punctuated only by the subtle, resonant hum of the crystal spires and the soft, organic sighs of the luminous flora. One plant nearby, resembling an enormous unfurled fern, slowly retracted its fronds, revealing a pulsing, sapphire-blue core that sent ripples of light through the spongy ground. It was like watching a slow-motion exhalation of light. "Genesis," Rory murmured, testing the word. She took another step, her boot sinking slightly. A tiny tremor ran through the ground, and a cluster of luminous, bell-shaped flowers nearby chimed, a delicate, pure tone that seemed to hang in the air before fading. "What's waiting, Nyx?" Nyx’s form blurred, stretching towards one of the colossal crystal spires. "The beginning," they whispered. "Or the end, depending on perspective. The threads are… tangled. Like a loom that hasn't woven for epochs." They began to walk, Isolde leading the way, her silver hair a stark contrast to the muted, shimmering tones of their surroundings. She moved with an unhurried grace, her bare feet leaving no impression on the phosphorescent ground. Rory and Nyx followed, the ground yielding slightly with each stride. The crystalline spires loomed, their facets catching and refracting the ambient light, creating dizzying illusions of depth and perspective for Rory. Shadows danced from them, deeper and more profound than any earthly shadow, and Nyx seemed drawn to them, their form occasionally melting into these deep pools only to re-emerge moments later, closer to the group. They passed a grove of what looked like trees, but their trunks were woven from strands of pure, dark energy, coalescing into solid form. Leaves like shards of obsidian hung from their branches, tinkling faintly as if touched by an unseen breeze. Rory reached out, her fingers a hair’s breadth from one of the obsidian leaves. It felt impossibly cold, leeching warmth from the air around it, a stark contrast to the ambient coolness of the place. She pulled her hand back. "Careful, Rory," Isolde’s voice floated back. "Some blooms offer more than nectar." "What are they?" Rory asked, her gaze fixed on the energy trees. Isolde paused, turning. Her expression was unreadable, her gaze distant. "Thoughts given shape. Memory solidified. They cast long shadows, even without a sun." Nyx drifted alongside Rory. "They whisper. Old fears. Old regrets." They pulsed slightly, their form seeming to darken. "I can hear them. Like static on a channel that was never meant to be open." A knot of unease tightened in Rory’s stomach. This place wasn't just alien; it felt resonant. Responsive. As if the very air held memories, or emotions, that could be broadcast. The wonder warred with a primal urge to retreat. They continued, the landscape shifting subtly. The crystal spires gave way to vast, undulating plains where the glowing ground rippled like a slow-moving tide. In the distance, where the plum-coloured sky met the horizon, Rory thought she saw movement – colossal shapes shifting in and out of existence, like glitches in reality. "We are near the Heart," Isolde announced, her voice barely a whisper. "Where the first light was captured." As she spoke, the ground ahead of them began to glow with a more intense, rhythmic pulse. It emanated from a vast, cavernous opening in the side of one of the colossal crystal formations. The opening was not carved, but seemed to have existed, a natural void within the geological-mineral growth. From it spilled a radiance far brighter than the ambient light, a deep, pulsating crimson that seemed to call to something deep within Rory. The Heartstone Pendant around her neck suddenly warmed, a faint thrumming against her skin that intensified with every step they took towards the chasm. Not Hel, not yet. But something connected. Something ancient and powerful. "It's… calling," Rory breathed, her hand instinctively going to the pendant. "The wellspring," Isolde stated, her lavender eyes fixed on the crimson light. "Where forms are made and unmade. Where the echoes are born." Nyx’s form rippled, their edges becoming less defined. "It hums with creation… and oblivion. It is hungry." The air around the chasm thrummed with a palpable energy, warm and thick. The smell sharpened, losing its ozone sharpness and taking on a visceral, almost metallic scent, overlaid with something perfumed and deeply alluring. Rory felt a strange pull, a fascination mixed with a tremor of apprehension. She looked at Isolde, then at Nyx. The seers' prophecy, the Shade’s intuition, the artifact pulsing against her skin… all pointed towards this place. She gripped the handle of the Fae-Forged Blade. She had stepped into the unknown with her companions. Whatever slumbered or waited within the crimson heart, they would face it together. Isolde began to move towards the chasm's entrance. "A bridge of dreams, a path unheard. If you seek the source, you must tread where worlds are stirred." As they approached the opening, the light intensified, washing over them. The humming deepened, becoming a resonant melody that filled their entire beings, a song of raw, untamed creation. The ground beneath them seemed to liquify, no longer spongy but flowing like tar, carrying them gently forward towards the source of the incandescent glow. The first step through the crimson threshold led into immediate, bewildering sensory overload. It wasn't a tunnel, but a vast expanse where light didn't just illuminate but also seemed to have texture. Shimmering curtains of pure energy hung in the air, shimmering like heat haze but cool to the touch. Formless shapes congealed and dissipated in the periphery, like clouds of luminous dust that momentarily took on quasi-physical form before dissolving back into the incandescent atmosphere. Rory gasped, her eyes wide. The world within the chasm was a tapestry woven from pure light and sound. Gigantic, spectral forms drifted in the distance, their outlines blurred, like leviathans swimming in an ocean of stars. The air was thick, warm and vibrating with an overwhelming power that made her skin prickle. It felt like standing in the very heart of a newborn universe. "This is… not a place," Nyx stated, their voice barely audible above the omnipresent hum. "It is a promise. Or a threat." Isolde merely smiled, a faint, knowing curve of her lips. Her silver hair seemed to catch the crimson light, glowing as if it were spun from the same source. "Where the raw material of existence is spun," she murmured, her gaze fixed on the swirling vortex of light at the center of the expanse. The Heartstone Pendant pulsed again, its warmth spreading up Rory’s arm. It felt less like an artifact now, and more like an extension of herself, connected to this place by an invisible, thrumming cord. She felt a strange kinship with the raw, untamed energy that swirled around them, a dizzying sensation of potential, of chaos held barely in check. This was creation in its most elemental state, wild and beautiful and terrifying. The wonders displayed were beyond anything Rory had imagined, a testament to realms that existed beyond the familiar horizons of her world. The path of flowing ground continued, drawing them deeper into the heart of the crystalline realm. The light intensified, but it was no longer just visual. It was a physical presence, a gentle pressure against their skin, a hum that vibrated through their bones. Rory could feel the very air singing around her, charged with an unimaginable power. She had entered an alien realm, a place built of light and energy, where the fundamental rules of existence seemed to bend and fracture. And as they were carried further, she knew this was only the beginning of its secrets.
created_at"2026-02-25T01:13:17.941Z" 2/25/2026, 1:13:17 AM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
33.33% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags12
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Isolde’s voice floated back [back]"
1"They pulsed slightly [slightly]"
dialogueSentences24
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio0.167
effectiveRatio0.167
66.11% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1623
totalAiIsmAdverbs11
found
0
adverb"very"
count4
1
adverb"utterly"
count1
2
adverb"slowly"
count1
3
adverb"slightly"
count3
4
adverb"suddenly"
count1
5
adverb"gently"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"utterly"
2"slowly"
3"slightly"
4"suddenly"
5"gently"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1623
totalAiIsms42
found
0
word"crystalline"
count4
1
word"familiar"
count3
2
word"vibrated"
count2
3
word"pulsed"
count3
4
word"resonance"
count1
5
word"echoes"
count2
6
word"glinting"
count1
7
word"pulse"
count2
8
word"silence"
count1
9
word"crystal"
count4
10
word"stark"
count2
11
word"loomed"
count1
12
word"profound"
count1
13
word"warmth"
count2
14
word"unreadable"
count1
15
word"whisper"
count2
16
word"stomach"
count1
17
word"rhythmic"
count1
18
word"palpable"
count1
19
word"apprehension"
count1
20
word"tapestry"
count1
21
word"spectral"
count1
22
word"potential"
count1
23
word"testament"
count1
24
word"could feel"
count1
25
word"charged"
count1
highlights
0"crystalline"
1"familiar"
2"vibrated"
3"pulsed"
4"resonance"
5"echoes"
6"glinting"
7"pulse"
8"silence"
9"crystal"
10"stark"
11"loomed"
12"profound"
13"warmth"
14"unreadable"
15"whisper"
16"stomach"
17"rhythmic"
18"palpable"
19"apprehension"
20"tapestry"
21"spectral"
22"potential"
23"testament"
24"could feel"
25"charged"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences102
matches
0"a tremor of apprehension"
0.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount13
narrationSentences102
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences114
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen35
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords1
totalWords1625
ratio0.001
matches
0"waiting"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions9
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions54
wordCount1432
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity1.33
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Fae3
Grove2
Nyx9
Isolde10
Rory19
Fae-Forged2
Blade2
Heartstone3
Pendant3
Hel1
persons
0"Nyx"
1"Isolde"
2"Rory"
places
0"Fae"
1"Grove"
globalScore0.837
windowScore0.667
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences87
glossingSentenceCount6
matches
0"light that seemed to emanate from the very fabric of the ether"
1"tone that seemed to hang in the air before fading"
2"seemed drawn to them, their form occasionally melting into these deep pools only to re-emerge moments later, closer to the group"
3"looked like trees, but their trunks were"
4"crimson that seemed to call to something deep within Rory"
5"felt like standing in the very heart of"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches4
per1kWords2.462
wordCount1625
matches
0"not dampness but a sharp, crystalline void"
1"not soil or stone, but a yielding, spongy mat composed of countless tiny, interlock"
2"not an absence of sound, but a presence"
3"no longer spongy but"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences114
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs32
mean50.78
std30.54
cv0.601
sampleLengths
042
157
295
340
448
5134
646
733
8105
982
1012
1112
1223
1334
1439
1552
1618
1775
1835
1911
2023
2117
2235
2367
2427
2554
2676
2765
2822
2954
3094
3198
94.94% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences102
matches
0"were woven"
1"were spun"
2"were carried"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs233
matches
0"was like watching"
17.54% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount3
flaggedSentences5
totalSentences114
ratio0.044
matches
0"They weren't mountains; they seemed to grow, organic yet mineral, humming with a low, resonant frequency that vibrated in Rory’s teeth."
1"The air was impossibly pure, cool on her skin, carrying scents she couldn’t place – sharp, metallic tangs mingling with something reminiscent of petrichor after a storm, but deeper, richer."
2"The silence was not an absence of sound, but a presence; a dense, watchful quietude punctuated only by the subtle, resonant hum of the crystal spires and the soft, organic sighs of the luminous flora."
3"This place wasn't just alien; it felt resonant."
4"In the distance, where the plum-coloured sky met the horizon, Rory thought she saw movement – colossal shapes shifting in and out of existence, like glitches in reality."
87.73% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount984
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"cool, ozone-scented mist."
1"luminous, bell-shaped flowers"
adverbCount33
adverbRatio0.03353658536585366
lyAdverbCount20
lyAdverbRatio0.02032520325203252
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences114
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences114
mean14.25
std7.41
cv0.52
sampleLengths
017
119
26
321
410
526
615
721
818
926
1015
1115
1211
1314
1410
1511
1623
174
1816
1911
202
215
2230
2335
2426
259
266
278
2829
293
3011
314
3218
3322
3416
3511
3621
3735
3824
3918
4014
4121
425
436
446
4512
463
477
4813
494
55.26% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.3684210526315789
totalSentences114
uniqueOpeners42
34.01% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences98
matches
0"all pointed towards this place."
ratio0.01
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount28
totalSentences98
matches
0"It wasn’t a rip, more"
1"They weren't mountains; they seemed"
2"Her pale lavender eyes, wide"
3"Their violet eyes, usually glinting,"
4"Their voice, a wisp of"
5"She focused on her surroundings."
6"It was like watching a"
7"She took another step, her"
8"They began to walk, Isolde"
9"She moved with an unhurried"
10"They passed a grove of"
11"It felt impossibly cold, leeching"
12"She pulled her hand back."
13"Her expression was unreadable, her"
14"They pulsed slightly, their form"
15"They continued, the landscape shifting"
16"It emanated from a vast,"
17"She looked at Isolde, then"
18"She gripped the handle of"
19"She had stepped into the"
ratio0.286
46.73% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount81
totalSentences98
matches
0"The air of the Fae"
1"It wasn’t a rip, more"
2"Rory stepped through, her breath"
3"The Grove’s whispering wind died"
4"They weren't mountains; they seemed"
5"The ground itself was not"
6"Each step produced a soft,"
7"Isolde murmured, her voice barely"
8"Her pale lavender eyes, wide"
9"Nyx shifted beside Rory, their"
10"Their violet eyes, usually glinting,"
11"Their voice, a wisp of"
12"Rory’s fingers tightened on the"
13"The Heartstone Pendant nestled against"
14"She focused on her surroundings."
15"The air was impossibly pure,"
16"The silence was not an"
17"It was like watching a"
18"Rory murmured, testing the word"
19"She took another step, her"
ratio0.827
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences98
matches
0"Before them stretched a landscape"
1"As if the very air"
ratio0.02
2.16% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences66
technicalSentenceCount13
matches
0"Before them stretched a landscape that defied earthly comprehension, bathed in a diffused, pearlescent light that seemed to emanate from the very fabric of the …"
1"They weren't mountains; they seemed to grow, organic yet mineral, humming with a low, resonant frequency that vibrated in Rory’s teeth."
2"The air was impossibly pure, cool on her skin, carrying scents she couldn’t place – sharp, metallic tangs mingling with something reminiscent of petrichor after…"
3"One plant nearby, resembling an enormous unfurled fern, slowly retracted its fronds, revealing a pulsing, sapphire-blue core that sent ripples of light through …"
4"A tiny tremor ran through the ground, and a cluster of luminous, bell-shaped flowers nearby chimed, a delicate, pure tone that seemed to hang in the air before …"
5"The crystalline spires loomed, their facets catching and refracting the ambient light, creating dizzying illusions of depth and perspective for Rory."
6"From it spilled a radiance far brighter than the ambient light, a deep, pulsating crimson that seemed to call to something deep within Rory."
7"The Heartstone Pendant around her neck suddenly warmed, a faint thrumming against her skin that intensified with every step they took towards the chasm."
8"The humming deepened, becoming a resonant melody that filled their entire beings, a song of raw, untamed creation."
9"The air was thick, warm and vibrating with an overwhelming power that made her skin prickle."
10"She felt a strange kinship with the raw, untamed energy that swirled around them, a dizzying sensation of potential, of chaos held barely in check."
11"The wonders displayed were beyond anything Rory had imagined, a testament to realms that existed beyond the familiar horizons of her world."
12"It was a physical presence, a gentle pressure against their skin, a hum that vibrated through their bones."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags12
uselessAdditionCount6
matches
0"Isolde murmured, her voice barely disturbing the quiet"
1"They pulsed slightly, their form seeming to darken"
2"Isolde announced, her voice barely a whisper"
3"Rory breathed, her hand instinctively going to the pendant"
4"Isolde stated, her lavender eyes fixed on the crimson light"
5"Nyx stated, their voice barely audible above the omnipresent hum"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags9
fancyCount8
fancyTags
0"Isolde murmured (murmur)"
1"Rory murmured (murmur)"
2"they whispered (whisper)"
3"Isolde announced (announce)"
4"Rory breathed (breathe)"
5"Isolde stated (state)"
6"Nyx stated (state)"
7"she murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences24
tagDensity0.375
leniency0.75
rawRatio0.889
effectiveRatio0.667
63.4835%