Run: 2026-02-25-01KJ95RR6AB854M1WEH5PQ9ZMQ

Run Details

Duration:
1m 20s
Cost:
$0.038159
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The humid air of the Northern Line didn't reach this far down. Here, eighty feet below the bustle of Camden High Street, the atmosphere tasted of iron filings and ancient soot. Detective Harlow Quinn adjusted the beam of her torch, the circle of white brilliance cutting through the gloom of the South Kentish Town ghost station. Dust motes danced in the artificial light like microscopic ghosts. "Quinn! Over here." DS Miller’s voice echoed off the curved tiling, stripped of its resonance by the layers of grime. He stood twenty yards down the platform, his own silhouette cast long and jagged against a crumbling Bovril advertisement. Quinn hiked her belts and moved. Her boots crunched on fragments of ceramic and glass. She kept her pace measured, a habit from her years in the MPs that she’d never quite shed. Her worn leather watch marked the time at 3:14 AM. Miller gestured toward a bundle of dark fabric slumped against the tracks. "Classic mugging gone south. Squatter, probably. Found some fancy silk on him, though. Maybe he nicked it from a shop up top before he came down to hide." Quinn stood over the body. The man lay face-up, eyes reflecting the torchlight with a glassy, fixed stare. He wore heavy, emerald-green robes that looked out of place against the black grease of the rail bed. "You think he's a squatter?" Quinn crouched, her knees popping in the silence. Miller shrugged, his jacket bunching at the shoulders. "Lots of them down here. They find the old maintenance tunnels. It’s dry, it’s out of the wind. This one just ran into the wrong crowd." Quinn pulled a pen from her breast pocket and used the tip to lift the hem of the green silk. No labels. The stitching was hand-done, intricate, and lacked the uniformity of a factory machine. She moved the light up to the man's throat. A clean, narrow slit ran across the carotid. "Where’s the blood, Miller?" The sergeant frowned, leaning in. "What do you mean? It’s all over his collar." "It's on his collar," Quinn agreed, tilting the beam. "But look at the sleepers. Look at the ballast. A throat wound like that pumps. It sprays. There should be a two-meter radius of arterial splatter. This track is bone dry." Miller rubbed the back of his neck. "Maybe he was killed somewhere else and dumped?" "Through a locked maintenance hatch?" Quinn stood up, her jaw tightening. "The locks were rusted shut from the outside. We had to use the bolt cutters. If he was carried in, the person carrying him didn't leave a single footprint in the dust on those stairs." She turned her light away from the body, sweeping the platform. The station felt larger than it should. The shadows in the alcoves didn't behave quite right; they seemed to linger a beat too long after the light passed. "Look at the ground here," Quinn pointed the beam at a series of round indentations in the thick dust. "These aren't footsteps. They're too regular. And there's a faint residue." She knelt again, touching a pinch of the dust. It wasn't just soot. It was iridescent, shimmering with a violet hue under the LED light. Miller shook his head. "Probably some chemical leak. These old stations are full of asbestos and lead paint. We shouldn't even be breathing this in without masks." "It’s not lead paint." Quinn’s eyes locked onto a small, pale object wedged between two bricks in the platform wall. She reached out, her fingers brushing the cold stone until she snagged it. It was a disc the size of a crown, carved from something white and porous. A bone token. On one side, a stylized eye had been etched with a steady hand. On the other, a series of coordinates. "What've you got?" Miller stepped closer. Quinn slipped the token into an evidence bag, her heart skipping a beat. The bone felt warm through the plastic. Not ambient-temperature warm, but vibrating with a low-frequency hum that resonated in her palm. "Nothing. A button, maybe." She didn't look at him. "Go back up to the surface. Call the forensic team. Tell them I want the specialized kit. The one for high-sensitivity trace evidence." Miller groaned. "Guv, it's three in the morning. The brass is going to kick off if we treat a drifter's death like a high-profile assassination." "This man wasn't a drifter." Quinn shone her torch back on the victim's hands. "Look at the fingernails. Manicured. Look at the skin. No sun damage, no calluses. This man hasn't worked a day of manual labor in his life. And these robes... they aren't stolen. They're tailored to fit him perfectly." She reached into the man's inner pocket, her hand coming away with a small brass object. It was a compass, its casing thick with a green patina of verdigris. The face wasn't marked with North, South, East, or West. Instead, it bore sigils Quinn didn't recognize—curled, thorny symbols that seemed to shift if she looked at them too directly. The needle didn't point toward the magnetic north. It spun in a slow, hypnotic circle before snapping toward the dark mouth of the tunnel leading toward Mornington Crescent. "Something happened here," Quinn whispered. "Something that isn't in the manual." Miller let out a sharp breath. "Look, Quinn, I know you’ve been... on edge since Morris. But don't go looking for ghosts in a Tube tunnel. It’s a murder. We find the blade, we find the guy." Quinn stood, the military precision of her posture making Miller take a half-step back. Her salt-and-pepper hair was a silver crown in the dark. "Morris didn't die because of a 'guy.' He died because of things we didn't see. I’m seeing this, Miller. I’m seeing all of it." She walked to the edge of the platform and jumped down onto the tracks. "Where are you going?" Miller yelled, his voice cracking. Quinn didn't answer. She followed the direction of the brass needle. Ten feet into the tunnel, the air changed. The smell of iron and soot vanished, replaced by the scent of clove, parchment, and something metallic like an approaching thunderstorm. She tracked the violet dust. It formed a path, a shimmering trail that ignored the laws of physics, hovering slightly above the grease-stained gravel. The tunnel walls began to change. The soot-blackened brickwork gave way to smooth, iridescent stone. She swept her light across the ceiling, expecting to see cable housing and dripping pipes. Instead, she found carvings—vast, sprawling murals of markets where the figures had too many limbs and the sky was a bruised purple. "This was here," she muttered to herself. "The Veil Market." A sound echoed from the darkness ahead. A soft, rhythmic clicking, like knitting needles made of glass. Quinn killed her torch. Total darkness swallowed her. She held her breath, pressing her back against the cold stone of the tunnel. The clicking grew louder. A faint, rhythmic glow appeared around the bend—a pulsing, amber light. Quinn didn't move. She reached for her sidearm, her fingers curling around the grip. Her training told her to call for backup, to retreat to the platform, to wait for Miller. Her gut told her Miller wouldn't see the light even if he were standing right next to her. A figure stepped into view. It wasn't a monster. It was a young woman with a wild crown of curly red hair and round glasses that reflected the amber glow. She wore a worn leather satchel slung over her shoulder, and her fingers busy tucking a stray strand of hair behind her left ear. Eva Kowalski looked down at a handheld device that looked suspiciously like the compass in Quinn’s pocket. "Not here either," the girl muttered, her voice surprisingly clear in the damp air. "They moved early. The moon hasn't even peaked." Quinn stepped out from the shadow, her hand still on her weapon but not drawing it. "Looking for something?" Eva jumped, the device nearly slipping from her hand. She stared at Quinn, her green eyes widening behind the lenses of her glasses. She took in Quinn’s sharp jaw, the salt-and-pepper hair, and the badge clipped to her belt. "Detective," Eva said, her voice trembling slightly but regaining its strength. "You're out of your jurisdiction." Quinn stepped into the amber light, noting the way it seemed to emanate from the very air around the girl. "I’m in London. That’s my jurisdiction. You want to tell me why you’re in a restricted Tube tunnel at three a.m.?" Eva adjusted her glasses, her gaze shifting to the floor. She noticed the trail of violet dust. "You shouldn't be touching that. It’s reactive." "I’ve seen a man with his throat cut back there," Quinn said, her voice low and dangerous. "He was wearing emerald green and carrying a compass that doesn't point north. Does that sound like 'reactive' to you?" Eva took a step toward Quinn, her face hardening. "He was a Warden. If he’s dead, then the Market didn't just move. It was evicted." "Evicted by who?" Eva looked past Quinn, toward the darkness of the platform where Miller was likely still radioing for a standard forensics team. "The kind of people who don't leave fingerprints. The kind of people you aren't ready to find, Detective." Quinn produced the evidence bag with the bone token. The amber light from Eva’s device made the etched eye on the bone seem to blink. "I found this. It’s warm. Why is it warm?" Eva reached out, then pulled her hand back as if burned. "Put that away. The frequency is still active. They’re using it as a beacon." "Who?" Quinn demanded. The clicking sound returned, louder this time. It wasn't knitting needles. It was the sound of dozens of hard, chitinous feet tapping against the tunnel walls. From the ceiling. From the tracks. From everywhere. Eva grabbed Quinn’s arm. "We need to go. Now." "I have a crime scene to secure," Quinn snapped, pulling her arm away. "There is no crime scene," Eva said, pointing back toward the platform. Quinn looked. The white light of Miller’s torch was still visible, but the platform itself seemed to be receding, stretching away as if the tunnel were an accordion being pulled apart. The body of the man in green was fading, his form dissolving into the same violet dust that coated the tracks. "What are you doing to it?" Quinn turned on Eva, her hand finally drawing the Glock. "I'm not doing anything!" Eva shouted over the rising clicking noise. "The Veil is closing. When the Market moves, it takes its history with it. If you stay here, you’ll be part of the history." Quinn looked at her watch. The second hand was moving backward. "Miller!" she screamed, turning back toward the platform. But the DS was gone. In his place was a wall of solid, un-quarried stone. The station, the tracks, and the posters of the 1940s had vanished. Quinn and Eva stood in a natural cavern that smelled of wet earth and ancient things. The amber light was the only thing standing between them and a darkness so thick it felt like liquid. "Where are we?" Quinn’s voice was a whisper, her military bearing finally fracturing. Eva didn't answer. She was staring at the ceiling, where hundreds of pale, multifaceted eyes were beginning to open in the dark. "We're in the basement," Eva said, her hand reaching into her satchel. "And the landlords are home." Quinn holstered her gun and took out the brass compass. The needle wasn't spinning anymore. It was pointing straight up. High above, the sound of a London Underground train rumbled through the earth—a reminder of a world that no longer made sense. "How do we get out?" Quinn gripped the verdigris casing until her knuckles turned white. Eva pulled a heavy, leather-bound book from her bag, the pages gilded with silver. "We don't. We negotiate." The first of the creatures dropped from the ceiling, landing with a heavy thud on the cavern floor. It was spindly, its limbs too long for its torso, its skin the color of a drowned man. It didn't have a mouth, but the clicking sound pulsed from its chest. Quinn stepped in front of Eva, her feet finding a wide, stable stance. She didn't have a weapon that could hurt a shadow, but she had eighteen years of holding the line. "I’m Detective Harlow Quinn," she said, her voice echoing with an authority that didn't belong in a cave. "And I’m conducting an investigation." The creature paused, its many eyes rippling in the amber light. Eva whispered behind her, "I don't think they care about the police, Harlow." "They will," Quinn said, her eyes fixed on the thing in front of her. "Everyone answers to someone." The creature tilted its head, the clicking slowing to a low purr. It reached out a long, translucent finger and pointed at the evidence bag in Quinn’s hand. The bone token. "It wants the coin," Eva said. "It’s the toll." "This is evidence," Quinn said, her jaw set. "It's our life," Eva countered. Quinn looked at the token, then at the creature, then at the girl who seemed to know the rules of this impossible place. She didn't like losing evidence. She hated losing control. But her partner had died because he didn't know when to change the game. She tossed the bag. The creature caught it in mid-air with impossible grace. The moment its fingers touched the bone, the amber light flared into a blinding white. The smell of clove intensified, suffocating and sweet. Quinn felt the ground drop away. She hit the floor hard. Cold, hard concrete. The smell of stale urine and damp cigarettes. Quinn blinked, her eyes stinging. She was sitting in the middle of a maintenance closet in Camden Town station. The mop bucket was overturned next to her, and the fluorescent light overhead flickered with a rhythmic hum. "Quinn?" She looked up. DS Miller was standing in the doorway, a paper cup of coffee in his hand. He looked bored. "You okay, guv? You’ve been in here ten minutes. I thought you were checking the hatch locks." Quinn stood up, brushing the grime from her trousers. Her knees ached. Her head spun. She reached into her pocket. The bone token was gone. But the brass compass was still there, the verdigris cold against her palm. "The body," she said, her voice raspy. "In the ghost station. Did the forensics team arrive?" Miller stared at her, a slow frown spreading across his face. "What body? Guv, we haven't even gone down yet. We just got the call about the break-in at the hatch. You said you wanted to scout it first." Quinn looked at her watch. 03:14 AM. The second hand was moving forward again. She pushed past Miller, heading toward the stairs that led to the platform. "Guv? Where are you going?" "To do my job, Miller," she called back, her stride catching its military rhythm. She reached the platform of the active station. It was empty, save for a single figure sitting on a bench at the far end. A young woman with curly red hair and round glasses, reading a book with a silver-gilded spine. Eva Kowalski didn't look up as Quinn approached. She just turned a page. "The coordinates on the token," Quinn said, stopping in front of her. "They weren't for the station." Eva finally looked up, a small, knowing smile playing at the corners of her mouth. "No. They were for the British Museum. Restricted archives. Level four." Quinn felt the weight of the compass in her pocket. "I’m coming for the rest of the story, Eva." Eva closed her book with a soft thud. "I know. Why do you think I stayed?" The sound of an approaching train rumbled through the tunnel, the wind picking up, blowing Quinn’s salt-and-pepper hair across her face. She didn't blink. The mystery wasn't just on the tracks anymore; it was in the marrow of the city itself. "Miller!" Quinn shouted over the roar of the arriving train. "Cancel the forensics kit. Bring me the archives file on the 1941 station closure. All of it." She didn't wait for his response. She stepped onto the train, her reflection in the dark window looking back at her with a grim, relentless determination. The hunt for the Veil Market had begun. High above, the full moon hung over Camden, indifferent and cold, its light unable to reach the secrets buried in the iron and the salt. Quinn checked her watch one last time. The time was exactly what it should be. The doors hissed shut. The train pulled away into the dark. Quinn sat opposite the girl with the red hair, neither of them saying a word as the city sped past them in the gloom. The brass needle in Quinn’s pocket hummed, a secret heartbeat against her thigh. She gripped the pole as the carriage swayed. The station they had just left was already a memory, a flicker of tile and shadow lost to the shifting tides of the London underground. Quinn didn't look back. She watched the tunnel walls, looking for the violet dust, looking for the truth that Morris had died trying to find. The air in the carriage grew thin, tasting of ozone. Quinn adjusted her stance, the military precision never wavering, even as the world around her began to blur. She wasn't an antagonist to the truth; she was its most dangerous pursuer. The train slowed for the next stop. Mornington Crescent. Quinn stood up, her hand steady on the rail. She looked at Eva, who was already disappearing into the crowd of early-morning commuters. "See you at the archives," Quinn whispered to the empty air. She stepped off the train and into the gray light of a London morning, the weight of the supernatural pressing down on her shoulders like a leaden coat. She had a compass that didn't point north and a partner to avenge. That was enough for any detective. She walked toward the exit, the rhythm of her boots clicking against the tiles, a sound that echoed the chitinous feet of the things in the dark. The city was waking up, oblivious to the market that had moved beneath its feet, but Harlow Quinn was wide awake, and she was watching. The street was wet with morning mist. Quinn lit a cigarette, the smoke curling around her sharp jawline. She looked at her watch. 04:00. The day had just started. And she had an appointment with the impossible. She turned the corner, fading into the Camden fog, a silver-haired ghost in a city of millions, chasing a trail of violet dust that only she could see. The investigation wasn't over. It was evolving. Behind her, in the station, the posters on the wall flickered. For a brief second, the Bovril advertisement from 1940 returned, then vanished, replaced by a digital screen. The Veil had settled. The world was normal again. Except for the compass in Quinn's pocket. It was still pointing at the British Museum. It was still humming. And Quinn was still walking. Every step took her further from the manual and closer to the truth. She touched the cold brass one last time before slipping her hand into her coat. "I'm coming for you," she said to the fog. The city didn't answer. It just breathed. Quinn walked on, a detective in search of a crime that had been erased from time itself.
created_at"2026-02-25T01:14:13.584Z" 2/25/2026, 1:14:13 AM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags35
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"a whisper her military bearing finally [finally]"
dialogueSentences80
tagDensity0.438
leniency0.875
rawRatio0.029
effectiveRatio0.025
93.89% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount3274
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"perfectly"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count2
2
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"perfectly"
1"slightly"
2"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
52.66% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount3274
totalAiIsms31
found
0
word"gloom"
count2
1
word"echoed"
count3
2
word"resonance"
count1
3
word"measured"
count1
4
word"silk"
count2
5
word"silence"
count1
6
word"intricate"
count1
7
word"footsteps"
count1
8
word"etched"
count2
9
word"resonated"
count1
10
word"magnetic"
count1
11
word"rhythmic"
count3
12
word"standard"
count1
13
word"beacon"
count1
14
word"whisper"
count1
15
word"reminder"
count1
16
word"pulsed"
count1
17
word"echoing"
count1
18
word"flickered"
count2
19
word"weight"
count2
20
word"flicker"
count1
21
word"wavering"
count1
highlights
0"gloom"
1"echoed"
2"resonance"
3"measured"
4"silk"
5"silence"
6"intricate"
7"footsteps"
8"etched"
9"resonated"
10"magnetic"
11"rhythmic"
12"standard"
13"beacon"
14"whisper"
15"reminder"
16"pulsed"
17"echoing"
18"flickered"
19"weight"
20"flicker"
21"wavering"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"knuckles turned white"
count1
highlights
0"knuckles turned white"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences242
matches(empty)
66.12% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount5
hedgeCount8
narrationSentences242
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
2"seem to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences287
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen38
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords3270
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions28
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions142
wordCount2518
uniqueNames27
maxNameDensity2.46
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Northern1
Line1
Camden4
High3
Street1
Harlow2
Quinn62
South2
Kentish1
Town2
Miller17
Bovril2
North1
East1
West1
Mornington2
Crescent2
Kowalski2
Eva24
Glock1
London3
Underground1
Veil2
Market1
Morris1
British1
Museum1
persons
0"Line"
1"Harlow"
2"Quinn"
3"Miller"
4"Kowalski"
5"Eva"
6"Glock"
7"Veil"
8"Morris"
places
0"Camden"
1"High"
2"Street"
3"South"
4"Kentish"
5"Town"
6"Mornington"
7"Crescent"
8"London"
9"British"
globalScore0.269
windowScore0
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences172
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"symbols that seemed to shift if she looked at them too directly"
1"felt like liquid"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.306
wordCount3270
matches
0"Not ambient-temperature warm, but vibrating with a low-frequency hum"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences287
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs121
mean27.02
std15.47
cv0.573
sampleLengths
066
13
236
343
440
536
613
734
852
94
1014
1140
1215
1346
1439
1530
1625
1727
1833
1938
206
2134
2232
2325
2452
2559
2628
2711
2837
2948
3014
319
3240
3324
3452
3510
3617
374
3833
3949
405
4149
4217
4322
4419
4539
4616
4741
4824
4937
98.01% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount5
totalSentences242
matches
0"been etched"
1"being pulled"
2"was gone"
3"was gone"
4"been erased"
0.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount15
totalVerbs406
matches
0"were standing"
1"wasn't knitting"
2"was staring"
3"were beginning"
4"wasn't spinning"
5"was pointing"
6"was sitting"
7"was standing"
8"was already disappearing"
9"was waking"
10"was watching"
11"was evolving"
12"was still pointing"
13"was still humming"
14"was still walking"
73.17% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount4
semicolonCount3
flaggedSentences7
totalSentences287
ratio0.024
matches
0"The shadows in the alcoves didn't behave quite right; they seemed to linger a beat too long after the light passed."
1"Instead, it bore sigils Quinn didn't recognize—curled, thorny symbols that seemed to shift if she looked at them too directly."
2"Instead, she found carvings—vast, sprawling murals of markets where the figures had too many limbs and the sky was a bruised purple."
3"A faint, rhythmic glow appeared around the bend—a pulsing, amber light."
4"High above, the sound of a London Underground train rumbled through the earth—a reminder of a world that no longer made sense."
5"The mystery wasn't just on the tracks anymore; it was in the marrow of the city itself."
6"She wasn't an antagonist to the truth; she was its most dangerous pursuer."
88.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2541
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"heavy, emerald-green robes"
1"heavy, leather-bound book"
adverbCount63
adverbRatio0.024793388429752067
lyAdverbCount17
lyAdverbRatio0.006690279417552145
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences287
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences287
mean11.39
std7.03
cv0.617
sampleLengths
012
119
225
310
43
517
619
76
89
918
1010
1112
1228
135
1413
1518
1613
178
1826
1920
202
2113
229
238
244
255
269
279
2831
297
308
3111
3235
3311
347
3521
3619
3711
389
394
4012
414
4223
4320
4413
4515
463
4713
487
496
40.91% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats26
diversityRatio0.21328671328671328
totalSentences286
uniqueOpeners61
28.86% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences231
matches
0"Instead, it bore sigils Quinn"
1"Instead, she found carvings—vast, sprawling"
ratio0.009
86.67% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount77
totalSentences231
matches
0"He stood twenty yards down"
1"Her boots crunched on fragments"
2"She kept her pace measured,"
3"Her worn leather watch marked"
4"He wore heavy, emerald-green robes"
5"She moved the light up"
6"She turned her light away"
7"She knelt again, touching a"
8"It wasn't just soot."
9"It was iridescent, shimmering with"
10"She reached out, her fingers"
11"It was a disc the"
12"She didn't look at him"
13"She reached into the man's"
14"It was a compass, its"
15"It spun in a slow,"
16"Her salt-and-pepper hair was a"
17"She walked to the edge"
18"She followed the direction of"
19"She tracked the violet dust."
ratio0.333
3.29% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount211
totalSentences231
matches
0"The humid air of the"
1"Here, eighty feet below the"
2"Detective Harlow Quinn adjusted the"
3"Dust motes danced in the"
4"DS Miller’s voice echoed off"
5"He stood twenty yards down"
6"Quinn hiked her belts and"
7"Her boots crunched on fragments"
8"She kept her pace measured,"
9"Her worn leather watch marked"
10"Miller gestured toward a bundle"
11"Quinn stood over the body."
12"The man lay face-up, eyes"
13"He wore heavy, emerald-green robes"
14"Quinn crouched, her knees popping"
15"Miller shrugged, his jacket bunching"
16"Quinn pulled a pen from"
17"The stitching was hand-done, intricate,"
18"She moved the light up"
19"A clean, narrow slit ran"
ratio0.913
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences231
matches(empty)
ratio0
89.45% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences107
technicalSentenceCount8
matches
0"Not ambient-temperature warm, but vibrating with a low-frequency hum that resonated in her palm."
1"It formed a path, a shimmering trail that ignored the laws of physics, hovering slightly above the grease-stained gravel."
2"It was a young woman with a wild crown of curly red hair and round glasses that reflected the amber glow."
3"The white light of Miller’s torch was still visible, but the platform itself seemed to be receding, stretching away as if the tunnel were an accordion being pul…"
4"The body of the man in green was fading, his form dissolving into the same violet dust that coated the tracks."
5"She looked at Eva, who was already disappearing into the crowd of early-morning commuters."
6"She walked toward the exit, the rhythm of her boots clicking against the tiles, a sound that echoed the chitinous feet of the things in the dark."
7"The city was waking up, oblivious to the market that had moved beneath its feet, but Harlow Quinn was wide awake, and she was watching."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags35
uselessAdditionCount10
matches
0"Quinn crouched, her knees popping in the silence"
1"Quinn stood up, her jaw tightening"
2"Miller yelled, his voice cracking"
3"the girl muttered, her voice surprisingly clear in the damp air"
4"Eva said, her voice trembling slightly but regaining its strength"
5"Quinn said, her voice low and dangerous"
6"Quinn turned on, her hand finally drawing the Glock"
7"Eva said, her hand reaching into her satchel"
8"she said, her voice raspy"
9"she called back, her stride catching its military rhythm"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags24
fancyCount13
fancyTags
0"Quinn agreed (agree)"
1"Quinn whispered (whisper)"
2"Miller yelled (yell)"
3"she muttered (mutter)"
4"the girl muttered (mutter)"
5"Quinn demanded (demand)"
6"Quinn snapped (snap)"
7"Eva shouted (shout)"
8"she screamed (scream)"
9"Eva whispered (whisper)"
10"she called back (call back)"
11"Quinn shouted (shout)"
12"Quinn whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences80
tagDensity0.3
leniency0.6
rawRatio0.542
effectiveRatio0.325
70.7009%