Run: 2026-02-25-01KJ95SKRFS5PC5PYWG8DZ92DV

Run Details

Duration:
30.4s
Cost:
$0.003185
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The descent was a physical act of shedding the ordinary. Detective Harlow Quinn pulled the collar of her coat higher, breathing in the stale chill that clung to the stairwell like cemetery mist. Each clang of her boots on the rusted metal steps seemed to echo not just down, but also *back*, as if the abandoned station remembered every footfall from decades past. Beneath Camden, the air thickened, acquiring a metallic tang that wasn’t just rust but something else, something… sharp. Unfamiliar. She’d been briefed, of course. A disturbance. A report of… well, the report itself was vague, a garbled call from what sounded like a strung-out informant about a ‘place that shouldn’t be.’ But the location was concrete enough: the abandoned Jubilee line platforms, sealed off years ago. Not typically police business, unless someone had decided it was a prime spot for something illicit. But illicit usually meant drugs, or stolen goods, or a clandestine meeting gone sour. This wasn’t shaping up to be any of those. Her partner, DS Morris, had a penchant for the overlooked corners of the city, the forgotten tunnels and subterranean haunts. He’d called them ‘the underskirts of London.’ Harlow hadn’t understood his fascination then. She understood it even less now, not since the void where he’d been. She reached the bottom, stepping onto a platform that felt unnaturally wide, cavernous. The air was still, but thrummed with a low, almost imperceptible vibration. Forensic techs in their sterile white suits moved with a hushed reverence, their headlamps sweeping across the grime-slicked tiles. They looked like surgeons in a charnel house, performing surgery on ghosts. They’d found no body, just… *damage*. Abstract, bewildering damage. Harlow’s eyes swept the scene with practiced precision. Her salt-and-pepper hair, cropped close and severe, offered no distraction. Eighteen years in the Met had etched competence into the sharp lines of her jaw, the steady gaze of her brown eyes. Her worn leather watch, a fixture on her left wrist, marked the relentless march of time, a concept that felt suddenly warped down here. A flicker of movement caught her eye. Near the far end of the platform, blending with the shadows cast by the abandoned tracks, was a figure too small, too colourful to be one of the uniformed officers. Curly red hair, a scattering of freckles, and round glasses perched on her nose. Eva Kowalski. Harlow’s jaw tightened. Kowalski wasn’t Met. She was an independent researcher, a specialist in… well, 'ancient heresies' was how she’d once put it. Eva was Aurora’s childhood friend. Harlow knew of her through whispers, through the fringes of cases that brushed against the inexplicable. Cases like Morris’s. Harlow had authorised Eva’s access, begrudgingly. Her bosses were stumped, the scene was a mess of impossible physics, and frankly, Eva’s peculiar insights sometimes cut through the fog better than standard procedure in these… odd instances. Eva was holding something. A brass object, small enough to cup in one hand, glinting faintly under the harsh work lights. Harlow navigated through the scattered evidence markers, her movements economical, military in their bearing. The uniformed officer in charge, a young sergeant named Davies, met her with a troubled frown. “Detective Quinn. It’s… odd, ma’am.” Davies ran a hand over his close-cropped hair, a nervous gesture that did nothing to reassure her. “Define odd, Sergeant,” Harlow said, her voice low, cutting through the ambient hum. “Well, the report was about trespassing, maybe vandalism. But there’s… this.” He gestured vaguely. “A patch of the platform wall. Looks like burn marks. But it feels cold. Colder than the rest of the tunnel. And the streaks… from the floor up, like something pulled itself out. But there’s no scrape marks, no debris trail from down there.” He pointed to a smear of dark, viscous material clinging to the concrete several feet up the wall. It looked like dried blood, but the consistency was wrong, too gritty, too flaky. Harlow knelt, her gaze dissecting the scene. The air around the ‘burn’ felt stagnant, devoid of the usual dampness. She reached out, hesitated, then touched the wall. Davies was right. It was perceptibly colder, a tangible pocket of unnatural chill seeping into her fingertips. Not the damp cold of an old station, but a dry, biting cold, like the air from a deep freezer. “Forensics?” “Ran samples. Nothing they recognize, ma’am. No accelerants, no known biologicals. They’re baffled. They’ve never seen anything like this residue.” Davies gestured to a collection of bagged samples. Harlow stood, her eyes scanning the expanse of the platform. It was large, cavernous, usually bustling with commuters. Now, it was a tableau of silent chaos. A few discarded newspapers lay undisturbed, coated in a fine layer of dust. Nearby, a dented metal bin sat upright, undisturbed. But in the centre of the platform, the air itself seemed to writhe, an invisible disturbance. “The informant?” “Came in earlier this morning, incoherent. Said he saw ‘them’ down here. The ones from the Market. Said they were ‘tearing something apart’.” Davies swallowed. “They think he’s just some junkie seeing things, ma’am. But then we got the call about the energy surge, faint readings, but enough to trigger an alert at a research facility three blocks away.” The Veil Market. The name itself was a whisper, a rumour of a place that existed only to those who knew where to look, or perhaps, how to stumble. An underground market dealing in things that made even the roughest criminals sweat. Harlow had dismissed it as folklore, urban legend for the conspiracy-minded. Until Morris. She walked towards the streaks of residue. Eva was now closer, her round glasses reflecting the lights as she studied the same area. Her worn leather satchel, bulging with books, lay at her feet like a loyal pet. “Detective Quinn,” Eva said, her voice soft but clear, cutting through the low murmur of the forensics team. She tucked a stray curl behind her left ear, a familiar nervous habit. “You’re seeing the conventional damage. The ruptures, the thermal displacement. But you’re not seeing the… anchor points.” Harlow turned, her expression unreadable. She respected Eva’s knowledge, her obsessive dedication to the obscure. But she didn’t deal in ‘anchor points.’ She dealt in evidence, in facts, in what she could prove. “Anchor points, Dr. Kowalski?” “The residual imprint of a localized dimensional fold,” Eva explained, her eyes bright with intellectual curiosity, mixed with a professional caution. “The residue isn’t blood, Detective. It’s desiccated ectoplasm, a byproduct of an entity tearing itself through a weak point in the veil. The streaks on the wall are where it anchored itself as it passed.” Harlow’s breath hitched, a fractional, involuntary reaction. Ectoplasm. Dimensional fold. Her mind immediately flashed to the fragmented reports, the impossible angles, the cold spots surrounding Morris’s last known location. He’d been investigating the clique too, chasing a lead about stolen artifacts that had led him into the city’s hidden arteries. “And the cold spot?” Harlow asked, her voice hardening, pushing the rising tide of unease back. “Where the energy was most concentrated,” Eva said, crouching beside a small, chalked outline. “It’s not just any spot, Detective. It’s a nodal convergence. The temperature drop is a side effect of extreme energy drain. It's like a localized vacuum, pulling heat from the surrounding air.” She pointed. “This outline here? It's not where decomposition occurred. It's where something stood, or was held, for a significant duration.” Harlow walked over to the outline. It was roughly human-sized, maybe a bit larger. The dust pattern inside it was different, disturbed in a way that suggested heavy pressure, but also, strangely, a lack of friction. As if whatever was there hadn’t *slid* or *dragged*, but had been… held. Rooted. “The Market operates on specific energetic frequencies,” Eva continued, her voice taking on a more urgent cadence. “Items traded there aren’t just enchanted; they're often imbued with energies that can warp space or attract entities. What we're seeing here suggests a powerful object, or perhaps a ritual, that went catastrophically wrong. Or, it went exactly as intended, for a very dangerous purpose.” Harlow’s gaze swept back over the platform, then down towards the tracks, lost in the Stygian darkness. The metallic tang in the air was stronger here, almost coppery. Something else felt wrong. The dust on the undisturbed objects, on the abandoned newspapers, looked too uniform. As if it had settled *after* whatever happened, but before the forensic team arrived. It implied a stillness, a lack of ongoing disturbance. Yet, the energy readings, the damage… She reached into her coat pocket, her fingers closing around the familiar, cool brass of the Veil Compass. She’d kept it, an odd souvenir from a case three years ago that had gone nowhere, but felt… connected. Morris had given it to her, saying it was ‘insurance.’ She brought it out, its verdigris-stained casing cool against her fingertips. The face was etched with tiny, intricate sigils that seemed to shift in the dim light. She held it level, her eyes on the needle. For a moment, nothing. Then, the needle quivered. It spun, not towards any particular point on the platform, but seemed to oscillate wildly, erratically, before settling with an almost violent twitch pointing downwards, towards the absolute blackness of the track cuts. It wasn’t pointing towards a rift, or a portal, in the conventional sense. It was pointing *into* the earth, into the void beneath the station. “That’s… unusual,” Eva murmured, peering at the compass. “They usually point towards an open ingress. Yours seems to be… searching.” Harlow frowned. “Searching for what?” “A residual echo,” Eva speculated. “Or a hidden path. The Veil Market isn’t static; it moves. It operates in pockets, shifting its location. Sometimes it leaves trace signatures, like this place. If something was brought *through* from the Market, or taken *to* it, and the passage was forced, it could leave ripples. Ripples that would confuse a conventional compass, but not one attuned to dimensional flux.” Harlow looked from the compass needle, pointing resolutely into the darkness, to the patch of cold wall, to the unnatural dust that suggested an unnatural stillness. The conventional police report would describe this as vandalism, or perhaps a bizarre accident involving some unknown substance. But the evidence, when examined with the right lens, whispered a different story. A story of unnatural forces, of places like the Veil Market, of entities that tore through reality itself. Her gaze fell upon a section of the platform floor beneath the void where the compass needle pointed. It looked unremarkable, just more grimy concrete. But for a split second, she saw it. Not with her eyes, but with a deeper intuition, a cold dread that rose in her throat. A faint shimmering, like heat haze, but coloured with a faint, nauseating violet. A distortion in the very air, so subtle that the forensic lights and sweeping headlamps missed it, only visible when the ambient light and shadows shifted just so. It was a doorway. Not a physical door, but a tear, a thin, fleeting seam in the fabric of space. And it was already closing, or perhaps, had already closed. The energy readings confirmed it. The residue confirmed it. The compass confirmed it. This wasn’t just a crime scene; it was the aftermath of a breach. “What were they tearing apart, Dr. Kowalski?” Harlow asked, her voice barely a whisper. Her sharp jaw tightened, her brown eyes fixed on the spot where the shimmer had disappeared. She remembered Morris’s last, garbled transmission. ‘They opened something… it’s too much.’ Eva hesitated, her gaze following Harlow’s. “An unknown entity, perhaps. Or a conduit for one. The Market is a place where things are exchanged, Detective. Sometimes, the exchange is a life force. Sometimes, it’s access.” She looked up at Harlow, her freckled face serious. “And sometimes, what is taken isn’t meant to be taken at all.” Harlow didn’t answer. She reached out, her gloved fingertips hovering inches above the spot. The air here felt impossibly thin, brittle. It felt like touching the edge of a wound in reality. The evidence didn’t add up because it wasn’t from *this* reality, not entirely. The clique wasn't just involved in criminal activity; they were dealing with forces that could unmake sections of London, or worse. And her partner had walked right into it. The Veil Compass pulsed faintly in her palm, its needle still twitching, now pointing more directly downward. Somewhere beneath her boots, in the choked darkness, lay the scar of passage. And she suspected, with a chilling certainty, that this was just the beginning. The Veil Market wasn’t just a place for enchanted goods; it was a gateway. And someone had just forced it wide open.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags19
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"He gestured vaguely [vaguely]"
dialogueSentences28
tagDensity0.679
leniency1
rawRatio0.053
effectiveRatio0.053
92.94% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2124
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count1
1
adverb"very"
count2
highlights
0"suddenly"
1"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
38.79% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2124
totalAiIsms26
found
0
word"chill"
count2
1
word"echo"
count2
2
word"footfall"
count1
3
word"clandestine"
count1
4
word"etched"
count2
5
word"flicker"
count1
6
word"standard"
count1
7
word"glinting"
count1
8
word"navigated"
count1
9
word"tangible"
count1
10
word"scanning"
count1
11
word"whisper"
count2
12
word"familiar"
count2
13
word"unreadable"
count1
14
word"fragmented"
count1
15
word"intricate"
count1
16
word"quivered"
count1
17
word"fleeting"
count1
18
word"aftermath"
count1
19
word"pulsed"
count1
20
word"chilling"
count1
highlights
0"chill"
1"echo"
2"footfall"
3"clandestine"
4"etched"
5"flicker"
6"standard"
7"glinting"
8"navigated"
9"tangible"
10"scanning"
11"whisper"
12"familiar"
13"unreadable"
14"fragmented"
15"intricate"
16"quivered"
17"fleeting"
18"aftermath"
19"pulsed"
20"chilling"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences150
matches(empty)
95.24% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences150
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences163
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen62
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans9
markdownWords9
totalWords2124
ratio0.004
matches
0"back"
1"damage"
2"slid"
3"dragged"
4"after"
5"into"
6"through"
7"to"
8"this"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions15
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions65
wordCount1610
uniqueNames14
maxNameDensity1.3
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Harlow"
discoveredNames
Harlow21
Quinn1
Camden1
Morris6
Met2
Kowalski2
Eva14
Aurora1
Davies5
Veil5
Market3
Stygian1
Compass2
London1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Morris"
3"Kowalski"
4"Eva"
5"Aurora"
6"Davies"
7"Market"
places
0"Stygian"
1"Compass"
2"London"
globalScore0.848
windowScore0.667
34.26% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences108
glossingSentenceCount5
matches
0"sounded like a strung-out informant about"
1"looked like surgeons in a charnel house,"
2"looked like dried blood, but the consiste"
3"sigils that seemed to shift in the dim light"
4"felt like touching the edge of a wound"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches5
per1kWords2.354
wordCount2124
matches
0"not just down, but also *back*, as if the abandoned station remembered every fo"
1"Not the damp cold of an old station, but a dry, biting cold, like the air from a deep freezer"
2"not towards any particular point on the platform, but seemed to oscillate wildly, erratically, before settling wit"
3"Not with her eyes, but with a deeper intuition, a cold dread"
4"Not a physical door, but a tear, a thin, fleeting seam in the fabric of space"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences163
matches(empty)
86.45% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs41
mean51.8
std23.45
cv0.453
sampleLengths
082
186
246
365
464
553
683
751
822
913
1090
1164
121
1328
1463
152
1659
1755
1838
1948
2037
2156
2250
2316
2467
2550
2662
2774
2847
2936
3066
3120
325
3366
3475
3591
3656
3742
3856
3974
4065
98.25% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences150
matches
0"been briefed"
1"were stumped"
2"was etched"
40.64% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount6
totalVerbs251
matches
0"wasn’t shaping"
1"was holding"
2"wasn’t pointing"
3"was pointing"
4"was already closing"
5"were dealing"
55.21% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount5
flaggedSentences5
totalSentences163
ratio0.031
matches
0"“Items traded there aren’t just enchanted; they're often imbued with energies that can warp space or attract entities. What we're seeing here suggests a powerful object, or perhaps a ritual, that went catastrophically wrong. Or, it went exactly as intended, for a very dangerous purpose.”"
1"“Or a hidden path. The Veil Market isn’t static; it moves. It operates in pockets, shifting its location. Sometimes it leaves trace signatures, like this place. If something was brought *through* from the Market, or taken *to* it, and the passage was forced, it could leave ripples. Ripples that would confuse a conventional compass, but not one attuned to dimensional flux.”"
2"This wasn’t just a crime scene; it was the aftermath of a breach."
3"The clique wasn't just involved in criminal activity; they were dealing with forces that could unmake sections of London, or worse."
4"The Veil Market wasn’t just a place for enchanted goods; it was a gateway."
99.59% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount593
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount24
adverbRatio0.04047217537942664
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.006745362563237774
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences163
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences163
mean13.03
std10.12
cv0.776
sampleLengths
010
123
230
317
41
51
65
72
83
937
1016
1114
129
1320
1413
1513
1613
1712
1819
1912
205
211
223
238
2410
2522
2624
277
2830
2914
302
313
323
338
349
355
3616
373
386
3928
402
414
4217
4314
4416
4522
4613
4714
4862
4914
50.92% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats12
diversityRatio0.3496932515337423
totalSentences163
uniqueOpeners57
50.51% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences132
matches
0"Then, the needle quivered."
1"Somewhere beneath her boots, in"
ratio0.015
98.79% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount40
totalSentences132
matches
0"She’d been briefed, of course."
1"Her partner, DS Morris, had"
2"He’d called them"
3"She understood it even less"
4"She reached the bottom, stepping"
5"They looked like surgeons in"
6"They’d found no body, just…"
7"Her salt-and-pepper hair, cropped close"
8"Her worn leather watch, a"
9"She was an independent researcher,"
10"Her bosses were stumped, the"
11"He gestured vaguely"
12"He pointed to a smear"
13"It looked like dried blood,"
14"She reached out, hesitated, then"
15"It was perceptibly colder, a"
16"It was large, cavernous, usually"
17"She walked towards the streaks"
18"Her worn leather satchel, bulging"
19"She tucked a stray curl"
ratio0.303
69.85% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount103
totalSentences132
matches
0"The descent was a physical"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn pulled the"
2"Each clang of her boots"
3"She’d been briefed, of course."
4"A report of…"
5"This wasn’t shaping up to"
6"Her partner, DS Morris, had"
7"He’d called them"
8"She understood it even less"
9"She reached the bottom, stepping"
10"The air was still, but"
11"They looked like surgeons in"
12"They’d found no body, just…"
13"Harlow’s eyes swept the scene"
14"Her salt-and-pepper hair, cropped close"
15"Her worn leather watch, a"
16"A flicker of movement caught"
17"Harlow’s jaw tightened."
18"Kowalski wasn’t Met."
19"She was an independent researcher,"
ratio0.78
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount4
totalSentences132
matches
0"Now, it was a tableau"
1"As if whatever was there"
2"As if it had settled"
3"Yet, the energy readings, the"
ratio0.03
71.43% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences70
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn pulled the collar of her coat higher, breathing in the stale chill that clung to the stairwell like cemetery mist."
1"Beneath Camden, the air thickened, acquiring a metallic tang that wasn’t just rust but something else, something…"
2"She reached the bottom, stepping onto a platform that felt unnaturally wide, cavernous."
3"Her worn leather watch, a fixture on her left wrist, marked the relentless march of time, a concept that felt suddenly warped down here."
4"An underground market dealing in things that made even the roughest criminals sweat."
5"He’d been investigating the clique too, chasing a lead about stolen artifacts that had led him into the city’s hidden arteries."
6"A story of unnatural forces, of places like the Veil Market, of entities that tore through reality itself."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags19
uselessAdditionCount5
matches
0"Harlow said, her voice low, cutting through the ambient hum"
1"Harlow asked, her voice hardening, pushing the rising tide of unease back"
2"Eva continued, her voice taking on a more urgent cadence"
3"Harlow asked, her voice barely a whisper"
4"She looked up, her freckled face serious"
7.14% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags9
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"Eva explained (explain)"
1"Eva continued (continue)"
2"Eva murmured (murmur)"
3"Eva speculated (speculate)"
dialogueSentences28
tagDensity0.321
leniency0.643
rawRatio0.444
effectiveRatio0.286
75.2222%