Run: 2026-02-25-01KJBDFBPHKFCHQBZRCKS6BNBH

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Duration:
29.6s
Cost:
$0.012654
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Alibaba

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The stone burned against her sternum. Aurora pressed her palm flat against her coat, feeling the searing heat radiate through the fabric. The crimson gem pulsed like a second heart, syncing with the thud in her own throat. She stood at the edge of the tree line, the ancient oak standing stones looming ahead like silent sentinels in the gloom. No moonlight pierced the canopy here, yet the ground glowed with a faint, sickly luminescence. She checked her watch. The hands spun counter-clockwise. "Stupid thing," she muttered, tapping the glass face. "Stop it." The watch didn't stop. The second hand jittered, then froze. Aurora shoved the device into her pocket and adjusted the collar of her jacket. The air tasted thick, like wet earth and old copper. She had come here to find the source of the signal, the one that had led her away from the city and into the pocket of the world where time went to die. She stepped forward. The grass crunched under her boots, but the sound was wrong. It lacked the dry snap of winter vegetation. It sounded like stepping on bone. Aurora paused, listening. The silence pressed against her ears, heavy and suffocating. No wind. No insects. Just the low hum of the pendant vibrating against her skin. She moved between the stones. Wildflowers bloomed around her ankles, vibrant and impossible. Bluebells that shouldn't exist in November. Roses with petals the colour of dried blood. They brushed against her trousers, leaving a sticky residue that smelled of ozone. Aurora wiped her hand on her jeans and kept walking. "Show yourself," she said. Her voice dropped flat, absorbed instantly by the trees. No answer. She reached the centre of the clearing. A circle of stones formed a perfect ring, enclosing nothing but darkness. The pendant grew hotter. She pulled it out, the silver chain burning her fingers. The crimson gem flared, casting long, distorted shadows against the bark of the oaks. Something shifted in the corner of her vision. Aurora whipped her head round. Nothing but the dense undergrowth. The shadows stretched too far, defying the light source of the stone. She turned back to the circle. The darkness inside the ring wasn't empty. It coiled. "Rory." The name hung in the air. She knew that voice. It sounded like Eva, but wrong. Too smooth. Too close. "Eva?" Aurora called out. She scanned the perimeter. "If this is a joke, it's not funny." No laughter. No rustle of leaves. The pendant pulsed again, faster this time. A warning. She shoved it back into her coat pocket, the heat searing her ribs. She needed to leave. The logic of the place told her to run, but the cool-headed part of her brain, the part that negotiated with abusive exes and delivered food through London traffic, told her to observe. She crouched behind the nearest stone. The ground beneath her knees felt warm. Not sun-warmed. Body-warm. She pulled back her hand. The moss was damp and soft. She looked closer. The moss wasn't green. It was pale, greyish, and pulsing slightly. Like skin. Aurora scrambled to her feet. "Okay," she whispered. "Okay. Not skin. Just moss." The air temperature dropped. Her breath misted in front of her face. The flowers around her feet began to wilt, petals curling inward with a sound like tearing paper. The scent of ozone sharpened, turning acrid. She heard a footstep. It came from behind the stone she had just abandoned. Heavy. Deliberate. Aurora held her breath. She gripped the pendant through her coat, using the heat to ground herself. She counted the seconds. One. Two. Three. The footsteps stopped. She waited. The silence returned, heavier than before. It pressed against her eardrums, demanding she fill it. She didn't dare move. Her muscles locked tight. "Found you." The voice came from everywhere. It vibrated in the stones, in the ground, in her teeth. Aurora spun around. The clearing was empty. The ring of stones stood silent. But the shadows had changed. They no longer matched the trees. They detached themselves from the bark and pooled on the ground, moving like oil. "Who is there?" she demanded. She tried to keep her voice steady. It cracked on the second word. The shadows surged. They flowed toward her, rising up the legs of her trousers. She kicked at them, but they slid through her boots like smoke. The cold bit through her jeans, freezing the skin on her shins. She stumbled back, her heel catching on a root. She fell hard. The pendant flared blindingly bright. The light washed over the clearing, revealing the truth. The shadows weren't shadows. They were figures. Tall, thin, elongated. They stood at the edge of the ring, watching. Their faces were smooth, featureless masks of grey. Aurora scrambled to her feet. She didn't look at them. She looked at the exit. The trees had moved. The path she had entered through was gone. Only a solid wall of ancient oaks blocked her way. The bark shifted, eyes opening in the wood. Hundreds of them. Blinking. "Let me out," she said. The pendant burned so hot it felt like it would melt through her chest. The heat spread, radiating outward. The figures stepped forward. They didn't walk. They glided. One of them stopped inches from her face. It had no mouth, yet the voice came again. "Time is up." Aurora reached for the pendant. She grabbed the silver chain and yanked. The metal bit into her palm, drawing blood. She didn't care. She needed the light. She needed the weapon. The figure raised a hand. Long fingers, too many joints. She swung the pendant like a pendulum. The crimson stone smashed into the figure's chest. The sound was a scream. Not human. Not animal. A sound like metal tearing. The figure recoiled, the grey mask cracking. Black ichor leaked from the fissure. Aurora didn't wait. She ran. She sprinted toward the wall of trees. The figures surged after her, their limbs elongating, reaching out. The air grew thick, resisting her movement. She could feel them grabbing at her coat, her hair, her skin. "Get off me!" She shoved her shoulder into the trunk of the nearest oak. The wood was soft. Spongy. It gave way like flesh. She fell through. The world twisted. The colours inverted. The ground rushed up to meet her. She hit the dirt with a thud that knocked the wind out of her lungs. She lay there, gasping. The air smelled of rain and petrol. Real air. She pushed herself up on her elbows. She was back in Richmond Park. The path was there. The streetlights hummed in the distance. Aurora looked down at her hand. The palm was bleeding, the skin burned red. The pendant lay in the dirt beside her. It was cold. Dead. She picked it up. The gem was black. A twig snapped behind her. Aurora froze. She didn't turn around. She knew the sound. It was the sound of stepping on bone. She gripped the pendant until the edges cut into her skin. "Time is up," the voice whispered, right against her ear. Aurora spun. The figure stood there. The mask was gone. It had her face.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags7
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences14
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
95.86% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1208
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
42.05% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1208
totalAiIsms14
found
0
word"searing"
count2
1
word"pulsed"
count2
2
word"looming"
count1
3
word"sentinels"
count1
4
word"gloom"
count1
5
word"silence"
count2
6
word"perfect"
count1
7
word"scanned"
count1
8
word"footsteps"
count1
9
word"vibrated"
count1
10
word"could feel"
count1
highlights
0"searing"
1"pulsed"
2"looming"
3"sentinels"
4"gloom"
5"silence"
6"perfect"
7"scanned"
8"footsteps"
9"vibrated"
10"could feel"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences186
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences186
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
1"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences193
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen34
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1208
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions6
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
85.84% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions20
wordCount1169
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity1.28
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
November1
Eva1
London1
Richmond1
Park1
Aurora15
persons
0"Eva"
1"Aurora"
places
0"November"
1"London"
2"Richmond"
3"Park"
globalScore0.858
windowScore1
63.79% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences87
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"sounded like stepping on bone"
1"sounded like Eva, but wrong"
2"felt like it would melt through her che"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1208
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences193
matches
0"knew that voice"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs65
mean18.58
std16.8
cv0.904
sampleLengths
06
169
28
310
467
53
652
75
845
913
102
1147
128
1337
141
1520
1616
176
1859
196
2037
215
228
2336
244
2512
2624
273
2825
292
3016
313
3235
3318
343
3544
363
3741
3815
394
4030
415
4228
4317
443
4531
4610
4715
4827
495
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences186
matches
0"was gone"
1"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs220
matches
0"was bleeding"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences193
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1173
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount33
adverbRatio0.028132992327365727
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.004262574595055414
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences193
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences193
mean6.26
std4.6
cv0.734
sampleLengths
06
116
216
322
415
54
64
78
82
94
106
1114
1210
1333
143
1511
168
176
183
199
202
212
2211
235
248
256
268
2713
2810
294
309
312
327
3312
344
3510
3614
378
385
395
4012
416
427
432
441
456
464
476
482
492
32.38% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats34
diversityRatio0.23834196891191708
totalSentences193
uniqueOpeners46
43.01% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences155
matches
0"Just the low hum of"
1"Only a solid wall of"
ratio0.013
47.10% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount67
totalSentences155
matches
0"She stood at the edge"
1"She checked her watch."
2"she muttered, tapping the glass"
3"She had come here to"
4"She stepped forward."
5"It lacked the dry snap"
6"It sounded like stepping on"
7"She moved between the stones."
8"They brushed against her trousers,"
9"Her voice dropped flat, absorbed"
10"She reached the centre of"
11"She pulled it out, the"
12"She turned back to the"
13"She knew that voice."
14"It sounded like Eva, but"
15"She scanned the perimeter."
16"She shoved it back into"
17"She needed to leave."
18"She crouched behind the nearest"
19"She pulled back her hand."
ratio0.432
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount146
totalSentences155
matches
0"The stone burned against her"
1"Aurora pressed her palm flat"
2"The crimson gem pulsed like"
3"She stood at the edge"
4"She checked her watch."
5"The hands spun counter-clockwise."
6"she muttered, tapping the glass"
7"The watch didn't stop."
8"The second hand jittered, then"
9"Aurora shoved the device into"
10"The air tasted thick, like"
11"She had come here to"
12"She stepped forward."
13"The grass crunched under her"
14"It lacked the dry snap"
15"It sounded like stepping on"
16"Aurora paused, listening."
17"The silence pressed against her"
18"She moved between the stones."
19"Wildflowers bloomed around her ankles,"
ratio0.942
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences155
matches(empty)
ratio0
98.21% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences32
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"The logic of the place told her to run, but the cool-headed part of her brain, the part that negotiated with abusive exes and delivered food through London traf…"
1"The figures surged after her, their limbs elongating, reaching out."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags7
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"she muttered (mutter)"
1"she whispered (whisper)"
2"she demanded (demand)"
3"the voice whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences14
tagDensity0.429
leniency0.857
rawRatio0.667
effectiveRatio0.571
80.2752%