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Run: 2026-02-25-01KJBDHGD695T3ZD1E9RTC24BJ
Run Details
Model:
Qwen 3.5 27B
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:
1m 1s
Cost:
$0.012909
Provider:
Alibaba
Evaluation summary
Score
Evaluator
Details Link
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
(details)
95.25%
AI-ism adverb frequency
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism character names
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
(details)
40.59%
AI-ism word frequency
(details)
33.33%
Cliché density
(details)
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
(details)
100.00%
Filter word density
(details)
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
(details)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
(details)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
(details)
0.00%
Name drop frequency
(details)
100.00%
Narrator intent-glossing
(details)
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
(details)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
(details)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
(details)
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
(details)
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
(details)
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
(details)
100.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
(details)
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
(details)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
(details)
37.42%
Sentence opener variety
(details)
30.17%
Adverb-first sentence starts
(details)
87.87%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
(details)
0.00%
Subject-first sentence starts
(details)
45.25%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
(details)
68.45%
Technical jargon density
(details)
100.00%
Useless dialogue additions
(details)
88.78%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
(details)
80.9036%
Overall
Model input
System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>
Model response
Messages
Meta
AI
The ancient oak stones stood
like
sentinels
against the grey London sky, their bark
etched
with runes that hurt the eyes if stared at too long.
Aurora stepped through the gap
in the boundary, the cold air of Richmond Park vanishing behind her. The temperature spiked instantly. Humidity clung to her skin, heavy and sweet.
She pulled the collar of
her jacket tight against the sudden
warmth
.
Nyx materialized from the shadow
of the nearest stone, their violet eyes burning in the
gloom
.
The Shade shifted, solidifying into
a humanoid silhouette of living darkness.
They moved without sound, gliding
over the moss rather than walking on it. "Breath tastes like copper," Nyx whispered.
The voice sounded like wind
rushing through dry leaves.
Aurora adjusted the silver chain
at her throat.
The Heartstone Pendant pressed against
her sternum, radiating a low heat that seeped through her shirt. She touched the gemstone.
It pulsed once, a deep
crimson rhythm matching her heartbeat. "Keep moving,"
Isolde called out
.
The Half-Fae seer led the
way.
Her silver hair flowed down
her back, untouched by the wind that ruffled Aurora’s black locks.
Isolde’s boots made no impression
on the soft earth. She left no footprints.
Aurora watched the ground where
the woman had just passed. The grass remained undisturbed.
They walked deeper into the
grove. Wildflowers bloomed in impossible colours—violets that glowed with their own light, roses the colour of dried blood. The flora defied the season. Winter lay outside the stones, snow dusting the park paths, but here, summer reigned eternal. Aurora drew the Fae-Forged Blade from her belt. The moonsilver metal felt freezing against her palm. A faint luminescence bled from the leaf-shaped edge. She kept the weapon ready, the cold biting into her skin. "Time slips here," Isolde said, her voice
echoing
slightly
as if spoken from the bottom of a well. "An hour inside might be a minute out. Or a day." "Good to know," Aurora replied. She
scanned
the tree line. The oaks twisted in unnatural spirals, their branches reaching toward the amber sky above. The light filtered through the canopy in thick, golden beams. Nyx paused beside a cluster of ferns. The ferns recoiled as the Shade approached, curling their fronds inward. "Something watches," Nyx said.
Their form flickered, dissolving into
smoke before reforming. "The air is thick with eyes." Aurora tightened her grip on the dagger. "Can you see them?" "Shadows have no eyes. I feel the
weight
of them." Nyx pointed a long, dark finger toward the centre of the clearing. "There. The Veil is thin." Aurora followed the gesture. A shimmering distortion
hung in the air
, like heat haze rising from asphalt. It rippled silently. The Heartstone at her neck grew hot enough to sting.
She pulled the pendant out
from under her collar. The crimson gem glowed with an inner light, brighter than before. "Is that a portal?" Aurora asked. "Rifts are wounds," Isolde corrected. She stopped walking.
Her lavender eyes fixed on
the distortion. "They bleed magic. They bleed souls." Aurora stepped closer to the shimmer. The heat radiating from the tear made her sweat. The air
vibrated
with a low hum, a frequency that rattled her teeth.
She could smell ozone and
burnt sugar. "Don't touch it," Nyx warned.
They stood between Aurora and
the rift, their shadowy form stretching long across the ground. "I'm not going to touch it," Aurora said. She sheathed the blade. The metal clicked
softly
against the leather. "I just need to know where it leads." "Hel," Isolde said. The word
hung in the air
, heavy and final. "The scent of Dymas clings to that tear." Aurora looked down at the pendant. The
warmth
spiked again, a sharp
reminder
of the artifact's origin.
She had received it from
an unknown benefactor, a gift wrapped in
silence
. Now the stone demanded attention. "Prince Belphegor's territory," Aurora murmured. She remembered the stories. The realm of Gluttony. Feasts that never ended. "Why is it here?" Aurora asked. "Solstice weakens the barrier," Isolde said.
She turned to face the
group. Her expression remained
unreadable
. "The Veil breathes. Sometimes it inhales. Sometimes it exhales." Nyx drifted closer to the rift. The shadow of the Shade
seemed to
stretch toward the distortion, drawn by a
magnetic
pull. "It calls to me. Aldric." The name
hung in the air
. Aurora frowned. Nyx rarely used the name of their past life. The Shade’s form solidified, becoming more human, more defined. "Who are you calling?" Aurora asked. "Nothing," Nyx said. They shook their head, the violet glow in their eyes dimming. "Just
echoes
." Aurora focused on the shimmer. The distortion widened. A sliver of amber light leaked through, illuminating the dust motes
dancing
in the air. The light smelled of roasted meat and wine. It was a sensory assault, a promise of excess that made her
stomach
turn. "We need to close it," Aurora said. She reached for the dagger again. "Closing a wound requires a stitch," Isolde said. "Or a cauterization." "And if it bleeds out?" "Then the boundary fails."
Isolde stepped back, her silver hair catching the golden light
. "Then the Grove becomes a doorway." Aurora looked at the rift, then at Nyx. The Shade’s hands
were clenched
at their sides. They looked conflicted, torn between the pull of the Hel realm and the duty to the mortal plane. "I can hold it," Nyx said. "My form can bridge the gap." "No," Aurora said. "We don't know what's on the other side." "We know what waits for you," Nyx whispered. "If you go." Aurora touched the scar on her left wrist. The crescent mark felt cold against her thumb. She had fled Evan to find safety. She had fled Cardiff to find a life.
Now she stood in a
pocket of magic, staring at a hole in the world. "Isolde," Aurora said. "What does the vision say?" The Seer looked at the ground. "The path splits." "Which way?" "The way of the knife. The way of the shadow." Isolde raised a hand. "Choose." Aurora looked at the dagger in her hand. The moonsilver hummed in response to the rift. The cold metal burned her palm. She looked at Nyx. The Shade stood ready to dive into the distortion. "Wait," Aurora said. She stepped forward, placing herself between the Shade and the rift. "We don't jump into a hole without a rope." "The rope is already there," Nyx said. They pointed to the pendant. "The stone knows the way." Aurora looked at the Heartstone. It
pulsed
faster now, a frantic rhythm. The heat radiating from it made her shirt stick to her skin. She
could feel
the pull of Dymas, the promise of a feast that would never end. It sounded tempting. It sounded like oblivion. She tightened her grip on the blade. The edge sang in the air. "Stay back," Aurora said to Nyx. "I'll check the perimeter." She moved around the rift, circling the distortion. The ground beneath her boots felt spongy, like walking on a bed of moss. The trees
seemed to
lean in, watching her. She checked the edges of the shimmer. No physical barrier.
Just the air, warping and
bending. She stopped on the opposite side. Nyx stood there now, having moved without sound. "Nothing," Aurora said. "Just the air." "Air is not nothing," Nyx said. "Air carries the breath of the dead." Aurora looked back at Isolde. The Seer watched them from the tree line. She did not move. She did not blink. "We need to seal this," Aurora said. She turned back to the rift. "Nyx, can you anchor the edge?" "I can hold the shadow," Nyx replied. "But I cannot hold the light." "Then I'll hold the light." Aurora stepped closer to the tear. The heat intensified. The smell of roasted meat grew stronger. She could hear the sound of laughter on the other side. Distant. Muffled. She raised the blade. The moonsilver glowed brighter, fighting the amber light of the rift. The two energies clashed, creating a static charge that lifted the hair on her arms. "Careful," Isolde said. "The Veil fights back." Aurora thrust the blade toward the distortion. The tip of the dagger touched the shimmering air. The world shook. A shockwave rippled out, knocking Nyx back into the shadows. Aurora held her ground, her boots sliding in the mud. The blade met resistance. It
felt like cutting through water
. The rift widened. A tendril of amber smoke lashed out, wrapping around Aurora’s wrist. It burned cold. She gritted her teeth and drove the blade deeper. The smoke hissed. The pendant at her neck flared, blindingly bright. "Cut it," Nyx shouted. They lunged forward, grabbing Aurora's shoulder. "Cut it now." Aurora twisted the blade. The metal screamed. The smoke recoiled. The rift
began to
collapse, the amber light fading back into the grey. The heat vanished. The smell of sugar and meat disappeared, replaced by the scent of damp earth. The pendant stopped pulsing. It went cold. Aurora pulled the blade free. She stood breathing hard. The wound in the air sealed with a sound like a snap. The distortion vanished. The trees stood still. The wildflowers stopped glowing. "Done," Aurora said. "Is it?" Isolde asked. She walked toward them, her feet leaving no marks. "The Veil is wounded. It will scar." Aurora wiped the blade on her trousers. The cold metal left a frosty mark on the fabric. She looked at the spot where the rift had been. The air looked normal. Too normal. "We need to leave," Aurora said. "Before it heals." "Or before it opens again," Nyx said. They stood in the shadow of an oak, their form flickering. Aurora turned toward the standing stones. The grey light of London waited beyond the boundary. She checked the time on her
watch
. The second hand had stopped moving. "Time," Aurora said. "How long was we gone?" "Does it matter?" Isolde asked. She stood at the edge of the grove. "The world outside moves. We do not." Aurora looked at the pendant. It hung still against her chest. No
warmth
. No glow. Just a stone. "Let's go," she said. She stepped toward the stones. Nyx followed. Isolde led. The wildflowers dimmed as they passed. The light faded to grey. The air grew cold again. They reached the boundary.
Aurora stepped through the gap
. The wind hit her face, sharp and biting. Snow fell from the sky. She looked back. The stones stood silent. The grove
was gone
. Just trees. Just park. Nyx stood beside her. "It is closed." "For now," Aurora said. She put the blade away. The cold lingered in her hand. She pulled her jacket tighter. The pendant felt heavy. "Next time," Aurora said. "We bring a map." "Maps do not work here," Isolde said. She walked away, her silver hair catching the falling snow. "Only instincts." Aurora watched her go. The Seer vanished into the trees, leaving no footprints in the snow. Nyx dissolved into the shadow of a lamppost. "Where to?" Nyx asked. "Home," Aurora said. "Then we figure out what just happened." She walked down the path. The snow crunched under her boots. The city lights
flickered
in the distance. The pendant remained cold. "Did you feel it?" Nyx asked. "Feel what?" "The hunger," Nyx said. "It tasted you." Aurora stopped. She touched her wrist. The scar felt warm. "I felt it," she said. They walked on. The shadows stretched long. The night deepened. The city slept. The Veil held. For now. Aurora pulled her collar up. The cold bit her neck. She kept walking. The path led back to the flat. Back to the bar. Back to the life she
tried to
keep. The pendant stayed silent. Nyx walked beside her. The Shade did not speak. The
silence
stretched between them. "Isolde," Aurora said. "Did she lie?" "She cannot," Nyx said. "But she can mislead." Aurora looked at the snow. It fell without sound. "Then what was that about the scar?" "Scars remember," Nyx said. "Souls remember." They reached the end of the path. The bar stood ahead. The sign swung in the wind. "Let's go inside," Aurora said. She pushed the door open. The
warmth
hit her. The smell of stale beer and wood polish filled the air. Nyx followed. They faded into the corner. Aurora sat at the counter. She placed the pendant on the wood. It looked small. Innocent. She looked at the reflection in the window. Her eyes looked tired. "Next time," she said. "Next time," Nyx
echoed
. The night continued. The city hummed. The Veil waited.
created_at
"2026-02-25T22:08:33.708Z"
2/25/2026, 10:08:33 PM
model
"qwen/qwen3.5-27b-20260224"
app_id
182717
external_user
(null)
streamed
true
cancelled
false
latency
1170
moderation_latency
(null)
generation_time
61302
tokens_prompt
1816
tokens_completion
5378
native_tokens_prompt
1829
native_tokens_completion
5150
native_tokens_completion_images
(null)
native_tokens_reasoning
2134
native_tokens_cached
0
num_media_prompt
(null)
num_input_audio_prompt
(null)
num_media_completion
0
num_search_results
(null)
origin
"https://ncbench.com/"
is_byok
false
finish_reason
"stop"
native_finish_reason
"stop"
usage
0.0129087
router
(null)
provider_responses
0
endpoint_id
"f3f88554-0c22-4d57-973b-0dec948808e8"
id
"chatcmpl-1f0da70c-3e99-98b2-886a-16e7d84a7e21"
is_byok
false
latency
1170
model_permaslug
"qwen/qwen3.5-27b-20260224"
provider_name
"Alibaba"
status
200
api_type
"completions"
id
"gen-1772057313-NxTTq0kJZ8zJqj1QK1hV"
upstream_id
"chatcmpl-1f0da70c-3e99-98b2-886a-16e7d84a7e21"
total_cost
0.0129087
cache_discount
(null)
upstream_inference_cost
0
provider_name
"Alibaba"
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
55
adverbTagCount
1
adverbTags
0
"Isolde stepped back [back]"
dialogueSentences
98
tagDensity
0.561
leniency
1
rawRatio
0.018
effectiveRatio
0.018
95.25%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount
2104
totalAiIsmAdverbs
2
found
0
adverb
"slightly"
count
1
1
adverb
"softly"
count
1
highlights
0
"slightly"
1
"softly"
100.00%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
40.59%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount
2104
totalAiIsms
25
found
0
word
"sentinels"
count
1
1
word
"etched"
count
1
2
word
"warmth"
count
4
3
word
"gloom"
count
1
4
word
"pulsed"
count
2
5
word
"echoing"
count
1
6
word
"scanned"
count
1
7
word
"flickered"
count
2
8
word
"weight"
count
1
9
word
"vibrated"
count
1
10
word
"reminder"
count
1
11
word
"silence"
count
2
12
word
"unreadable"
count
1
13
word
"magnetic"
count
1
14
word
"echoes"
count
1
15
word
"dancing"
count
1
16
word
"stomach"
count
1
17
word
"could feel"
count
1
18
word
"echoed"
count
1
highlights
0
"sentinels"
1
"etched"
2
"warmth"
3
"gloom"
4
"pulsed"
5
"echoing"
6
"scanned"
7
"flickered"
8
"weight"
9
"vibrated"
10
"reminder"
11
"silence"
12
"unreadable"
13
"magnetic"
14
"echoes"
15
"dancing"
16
"stomach"
17
"could feel"
18
"echoed"
33.33%
Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
3
maxInWindow
3
found
0
label
"hung in the air"
count
3
highlights
0
"hung in the air"
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
283
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
1
hedgeCount
4
narrationSentences
283
filterMatches
0
"watch"
hedgeMatches
0
"seemed to"
1
"began to"
2
"tried to"
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences
326
gibberishSentences
0
adjustedGibberishSentences
0
longSentenceCount
0
runOnParagraphCount
0
giantParagraphCount
0
wordSaladCount
0
repetitionLoopCount
0
controlTokenCount
0
maxSentenceWordsSeen
26
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans
0
markdownWords
0
totalWords
2103
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions
45
unquotedAttributions
0
matches
(empty)
0.00%
Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions
130
wordCount
1715
uniqueNames
19
maxNameDensity
3.15
worstName
"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity
4.5
worstWindowName
"Aurora"
discoveredNames
London
2
Richmond
1
Park
1
Shade
8
Heartstone
3
Pendant
1
Half-Fae
1
Aurora
54
Fae-Forged
1
Blade
1
Isolde
15
Gluttony
1
Nyx
32
Hel
1
Evan
1
Cardiff
1
Seer
3
Dymas
1
Veil
2
persons
0
"Shade"
1
"Pendant"
2
"Aurora"
3
"Blade"
4
"Isolde"
5
"Nyx"
6
"Evan"
7
"Seer"
8
"Veil"
places
0
"London"
1
"Richmond"
2
"Park"
3
"Heartstone"
4
"Cardiff"
globalScore
0
windowScore
0.167
100.00%
Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences
128
glossingSentenceCount
2
matches
0
"sounded like wind rushing through dry leav"
1
"felt like cutting through water"
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches
0
per1kWords
0
wordCount
2103
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
0
totalSentences
326
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
111
mean
18.95
std
13.41
cv
0.708
sampleLengths
0
67
1
40
2
15
3
38
4
5
5
49
6
43
7
35
8
29
9
34
10
18
11
18
12
11
13
27
14
50
15
6
16
21
17
35
18
20
19
27
20
20
21
35
22
17
23
6
24
25
25
27
26
26
27
6
28
16
29
45
30
13
31
11
32
5
33
20
34
34
35
12
36
11
37
11
38
46
39
8
40
9
41
2
42
15
43
35
44
23
45
17
46
47
47
13
48
10
49
46
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount
2
totalSentences
283
matches
0
"were clenched"
1
"was gone"
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
0
totalVerbs
347
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount
1
semicolonCount
0
flaggedSentences
1
totalSentences
326
ratio
0.003
matches
0
"Wildflowers bloomed in impossible colours—violets that glowed with their own light, roses the colour of dried blood."
100.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1719
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
33
adverbRatio
0.019197207678883072
lyAdverbCount
6
lyAdverbRatio
0.0034904013961605585
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
326
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
326
mean
6.45
std
3.76
cv
0.582
sampleLengths
0
26
1
17
2
4
3
8
4
12
5
16
6
11
7
13
8
6
9
9
10
8
11
16
12
4
13
10
14
5
15
6
16
16
17
9
18
4
19
10
20
4
21
6
22
17
23
5
24
15
25
8
26
8
27
8
28
11
29
18
30
11
31
5
32
5
33
14
34
10
35
7
36
11
37
4
38
8
39
6
40
7
41
4
42
22
43
5
44
4
45
13
46
3
47
10
48
9
49
11
37.42%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
41
diversityRatio
0.22392638036809817
totalSentences
326
uniqueOpeners
73
30.17%
Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount
2
totalSentences
221
matches
0
"Just the air, warping and"
1
"Just a stone."
ratio
0.009
87.87%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount
73
totalSentences
221
matches
0
"She pulled the collar of"
1
"They moved without sound, gliding"
2
"She touched the gemstone."
3
"It pulsed once, a deep"
4
"Her silver hair flowed down"
5
"She left no footprints."
6
"They walked deeper into the"
7
"She kept the weapon ready,"
8
"She scanned the tree line."
9
"Their form flickered, dissolving into"
10
"It rippled silently."
11
"She pulled the pendant out"
12
"She stopped walking."
13
"Her lavender eyes fixed on"
14
"She could smell ozone and"
15
"They stood between Aurora and"
16
"She sheathed the blade."
17
"She had received it from"
18
"She remembered the stories."
19
"She turned to face the"
ratio
0.33
0.00%
Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount
214
totalSentences
221
matches
0
"The ancient oak stones stood"
1
"Aurora stepped through the gap"
2
"The temperature spiked instantly."
3
"Humidity clung to her skin,"
4
"She pulled the collar of"
5
"Nyx materialized from the shadow"
6
"The Shade shifted, solidifying into"
7
"They moved without sound, gliding"
8
"The voice sounded like wind"
9
"Aurora adjusted the silver chain"
10
"The Heartstone Pendant pressed against"
11
"She touched the gemstone."
12
"It pulsed once, a deep"
13
"Isolde called out"
14
"The Half-Fae seer led the"
15
"Her silver hair flowed down"
16
"Isolde’s boots made no impression"
17
"She left no footprints."
18
"Aurora watched the ground where"
19
"The grass remained undisturbed."
ratio
0.968
45.25%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount
2
totalSentences
221
matches
0
"Now the stone demanded attention."
1
"Now she stood in a"
ratio
0.009
68.45%
Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences
48
technicalSentenceCount
5
matches
0
"The ancient oak stones stood like sentinels against the grey London sky, their bark etched with runes that hurt the eyes if stared at too long."
1
"The Heartstone Pendant pressed against her sternum, radiating a low heat that seeped through her shirt."
2
"Her silver hair flowed down her back, untouched by the wind that ruffled Aurora’s black locks."
3
"Wildflowers bloomed in impossible colours—violets that glowed with their own light, roses the colour of dried blood."
4
"It was a sensory assault, a promise of excess that made her stomach turn."
100.00%
Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags
55
uselessAdditionCount
1
matches
0
"Isolde stepped back, her silver hair catching the golden light"
88.78%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
49
fancyCount
6
fancyTags
0
"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
1
"Isolde corrected (correct)"
2
"Nyx warned (warn)"
3
"Aurora murmured (murmur)"
4
"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
5
"Nyx shouted (shout)"
dialogueSentences
98
tagDensity
0.5
leniency
1
rawRatio
0.122
effectiveRatio
0.122
80.9036%