Run: 2026-02-25-01KJBEY16PAXY0D9Q1AC952MNH

Run Details

Duration:
39.6s
Cost:
$0.002281
Provider:
Alibaba

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Warm amber light bled through the shimmering distortion of the Veil, coating the pavement of the alleyway in a hue that felt too heavy to be real. Rory stepped forward, the gravel crunching under her boots, though the sound vanished the moment her foot touched the grass beyond the boundary. The air hit her like a physical weight—thick, sweet, and cloying with the scent of overripe plums and aged wine. Nyx drifted to her left, a shifting silhouette against the amber haze. Their violet eyes glowed brighter, reflecting the strange sky. Smell that like rot?" Nyx whispered. The voice sounded like dry leaves scuffing against stone. Rory tightened her grip on the silver chain around her neck. The Heartstone Pendant pulsed against her sternum, a rhythmic warmth that matched the beating of her own heart. She pulled the collar down to show Nyx the glow. It's strong," Rory said. "The stone isn't lying." "Hel does not lie to itself," Isolde said. The Half-Fae seer stepped from the shadows behind them. Her silver hair caught the light, spinning like spun sugar. She moved without sinking her boots into the soft turf, leaving no indentations in the earth behind her. Her pale lavender eyes scanned the sprawling vineyards stretching toward a misted horizon. "You feel it?" Isolde asked, tilting her head. The faint luminescence of the moonsilver blade tucked into Rory's belt flared as the seer spoke, reacting to the ambient magic of the realm. Rory felt the cold metal against her hip. The blade hummed, a vibration she felt in her teeth. "Too warm," she said, rubbing her thumb over the crescent scar on her left wrist. "Usually it's just cold." "Comfort is a trap here," Isolde replied. "Prince Belphegor does not offer hospitality without a price. Indulgence binds." Nyx coalesced fully, their human form hardening out of the smoke. They leaned heavily on the staff of shadow they carried, the wood twisted into knuckles and roots. "Boundaries are thin. I can see the threads of souls tethered to the vines." Rory pushed past the first row of grapevines. The leaves were broad and dark purple, dripping nectar that clung to the air. A low hum vibrated through the ground, coming not from the earth but from the sky itself. Above them, clouds drifted like thick steam, glowing with an internal amber fire. No sun hung here. No moon. Just the constant, warm radiance of something consuming itself. "Where are we?" Rory asked. Her voice echoed, swallowed quickly by the mist. "Past the gates of appetite," Isolde said. She walked toward a distant pavilion, her feet hovering inches above the soil. "We stand in the vineyards of Gluttony." The sight of it made Rory's stomach turn. Giant baskets hung from branches, filled with fruits that pulsed like hearts. One looked like a melon but screamed when Rory drew closer. She stepped back, hand moving to the hilt of the Fae-forged blade. "That one isn't fruit," Rory said. She pointed. "The stem looks like a throat." Nyx reached out a hand made of shadow. Smoke poured over the pulsing fruit, sizzling as it touched. The scream cut off instantly. "Consumed," Nyx said. "They consume the food, the food consumes." "Careful," Isolde warned. She stopped near a stone fountain. Water flowed upward into a hollow sphere, defying gravity. "Liquid memories. Belphegor hoards experiences as wine." Rory took a breath that tasted like honey and dust. "How long?" "Too long for a mortal to stand here without losing the thread," Nyx said. They pointed their staff toward the ground. The shadows lengthened here, stretching out to grab at their ankles. Rory kicked a patch of grass, but it felt spongy, like skin. She felt the urge to scream rising in her throat, a primal instinct to feed, to eat, to never stop consuming. She gripped her wrist, focusing on the scar. The pain of the old cut grounded her. "Stay away from the fountain," Isolde said. "I cannot lie, but they lie through the water." "Show me the way," Rory said. "The stone told me it leads to the center." The stone grew hot. Rory held it up. The crimson gemstone pointed toward the pavilion, the source of the hum. "Gluttony," Isolde murmured, stepping closer to the stone. The silence that followed was heavy, broken only by the humming of the vines. "He eats what remains of the soul, Rory." "I know." "We are not guests." Nyx shifted, their form flickering. "A shadow cannot be consumed. I see the paths." A low growl rumbled through the air. It didn't come from a throat. It came from the ground, as the earth itself was digesting something buried deep. The amber light flickered, casting jagged shadows over their faces. Rory pulled the cloak of her jacket tighter around her shoulders. The fabric felt rough, smelling of rain and old London streets. This warmth was fake. "Let's move." She walked toward the pavilion. The ground felt spongy underfoot now, yielding slightly with each step. She looked down. Tiny tendrils wriggled in the dirt, trying to latch onto her boots. She stomped them away, crushing the organic feel of the world beneath her heel. "Isolde," Nyx said. "I am here," Isolde replied, her voice carrying over the low rumble of the realm. "Don't lie to me." "I do not have the choice." "Then warn us," Nyx hissed. "When the shadows turn." Isolde watched the horizon where the mist parted. "They eat first. Then they keep." Rory adjusted the grip on her blade. The metal was cold against her palm, a stark contrast to the oppressive heat of the sky. She thought of the Flat above Silas's bar, the quiet routine of coffee and paper. Here, time felt viscous. Seconds stretched into minutes. Minutes blurred into hours. "What happens if we don't find the center?" Rory asked. "You starve." Isolde turned. Her eyes were devoid of color now, pools of washed-out grey that mirrored the sky above. "Belphegor offers nothing but consumption. To find him is to find the banquet." Rory looked at the stone again. It pulsed faster, the rhythm accelerating. "It says there's someone ahead." "Or the bait," Nyx corrected. "No," Rory said. She started walking again. Her boots sank an inch deeper into the earth. "It says help." The vines rustled. No wind blew, but the branches shook, dropping heavy seeds that shattered on the pavement. Isolde stepped aside, leaving Rory and Nyx to lead. "Then walk. But do not taste." Rory nodded. She pulled the heart of the pendant against her chest. The warmth seeped into her skin, pushing back the heavy, sugary fog that was creeping into her mind. She focused on the cold steel of the blade at her hip. It was the only thing that felt real. Ahead, the mist parted enough to reveal a long, table of stone stretching into the dark. Servants made of clay and wire scuttled around it, pouring wine that never stopped flowing. They didn't spill a drop. "Servitors," Isolde called out. "Constructed hunger." Nyx moved faster, their form becoming smoke, skirting the legs of the servants. They re-materialized at Rory's other side. "Trap," Nyx said. "They pour the wine because they don't drink." Rory scanned the table. Dozens of empty plates sat at the end. "They don't need food. They take it." "Then we take the offering," Isolde said, her voice dropping to a whisper. "We offer what we have." Rory looked at the stone. "This is mine." "Your blood is not enough," Isolde said. "You will give your memory." The ground trembled. The amber clouds swirled faster, forming a vortex directly above the pavilion. The hum turned into a song, a low, harmonious chord that vibrated in Rory's marrow. Nyx extended a hand of shadow toward the stone. "No." "We must," Isolde said, her eyes locking onto Rory. "It is the price of passage." Rory swallowed the taste of copper that had filled her mouth since the moment they crossed. She stepped into the open space of the clearing, away from the cover of the vines. The heat intensified, pressing against her skin like a heavy wool blanket. "Let's go," Rory said. "Right now." She began to walk toward the table. The stone in her palm burned, the crimson light flaring to match the burning eyes of the statue at the head of the table. "Careful," Nyx warned, reaching out. "I feel it," Rory said. The statue's head tilted. Its mouth opened, revealing rows of jagged teeth made of bone and crystal. The wine in the fountains began to boil. Isolde raised her hand, the Fae blade glinting in the artificial sun. "It is the Prince." Rory tightened her grip on the blade handle. The cold bit her skin. "We aren't eating." "We are," Nyx whispered. The servitors turned their heads in unison, hollow sockets scanning the group. They held platters of meat that writhed on demand. Rory raised her voice. "I'm not here for the feast." A silence fell over the vineyard. The vines stopped rustling. The boiling in the fountains stilled. The only sound was the heavy breathing of Rory herself. The statue did not speak. It only watched. Nyx stepped forward, their shadows elongating, reaching out to touch the statue's legs. The shadows recoiled as if burned. "Nyx?" Rory asked. "It burns," Nyx said. "Something inside it." Isolde looked at the statue, the purple light in her lashes fading. "That is not the Prince. It is a vessel." "A vessel for who?" Rory asked. "Whoever is being fed," Isolde said. Rory looked down at the Heartstone. The pulse had stopped. It sat cold and dead in her hand. Nyx's eyes widened. "It took it back." "It's hungry," Isolde said. "And we are here." Rory shifted her weight, ready to run. The ground beneath her felt unstable, shifting like a fluid. "Then we run before the table wakes up." "I cannot leave," Isolde said. "I must see what he holds." "You have to move," Nyx said, grabbing Rory's arm. The shadow grip was iron-hard. "Now." Rory pulled her arm away. "Wait." She held up the Heartstone. It was dark again. "It stopped. It didn't tell me anything." "Then we are blind," Nyx said. Rory looked at Isolde. The seer was staring at the stone, her face pale. "It is a mirror," Isolde said. "He showed you what you were." Rory looked at the reflection in the gem. Nothing. Just the dark, empty void of the realm. "Show me," Isolde said. "Look deeper." Rory looked closer. In the dark of the gem, she saw a face. A man's face, looking back. He had Rory's eyes. "Who is that?" Nyx asked. "I don't know," Rory said. "But I know him."
created_at"2026-02-25T22:32:52.7Z" 2/25/2026, 10:32:52 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags42
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences91
tagDensity0.462
leniency0.923
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
94.43% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1796
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"quickly"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"quickly"
1"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
22.05% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1796
totalAiIsms28
found
0
word"weight"
count2
1
word"pulsed"
count3
2
word"rhythmic"
count1
3
word"warmth"
count3
4
word"scanned"
count2
5
word"vibrated"
count2
6
word"echoed"
count1
7
word"stomach"
count1
8
word"silence"
count2
9
word"flickered"
count1
10
word"stark"
count1
11
word"oppressive"
count1
12
word"shattered"
count1
13
word"constructed"
count1
14
word"whisper"
count1
15
word"trembled"
count1
16
word"crystal"
count1
17
word"glinting"
count1
18
word"scanning"
count1
19
word"pulse"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"pulsed"
2"rhythmic"
3"warmth"
4"scanned"
5"vibrated"
6"echoed"
7"stomach"
8"silence"
9"flickered"
10"stark"
11"oppressive"
12"shattered"
13"constructed"
14"whisper"
15"trembled"
16"crystal"
17"glinting"
18"scanning"
19"pulse"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes widened"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences175
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences175
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences222
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen39
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1795
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions40
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions100
wordCount1390
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity3.02
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity6
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Veil1
Rory42
Heartstone3
Pendant1
Nyx22
Isolde23
Half-Fae1
Fae-forged1
London1
Flat1
Silas1
Fae3
persons
0"Veil"
1"Rory"
2"Nyx"
3"Isolde"
4"Silas"
places
0"Heartstone"
1"London"
globalScore0
windowScore0
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences100
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"looked like a melon but screamed when Ror"
1"tasted like honey and dust"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.557
wordCount1795
matches
0"not from the earth but from the sky itself"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences222
matches
0"Smell that like"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs91
mean19.73
std14.5
cv0.735
sampleLengths
070
121
215
339
48
58
650
732
837
918
1042
1167
1213
1327
1443
1514
1633
1725
1812
1932
2049
2116
2215
2320
2430
252
2618
2737
2828
2945
303
3115
324
336
349
3514
3651
3710
3833
3917
405
4119
4218
4315
4450
4536
466
4719
4811
4919
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences175
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs264
matches
0"was digesting"
1"was creeping"
2"was staring"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount1
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences222
ratio0.005
matches
0"The air hit her like a physical weight—thick, sweet, and cloying with the scent of overripe plums and aged wine."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1357
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount34
adverbRatio0.025055268975681652
lyAdverbCount10
lyAdverbRatio0.007369196757553427
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences222
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences222
mean8.09
std5.14
cv0.636
sampleLengths
027
123
220
312
49
515
639
74
84
98
109
1110
1218
1313
148
1524
168
1710
1815
194
207
2111
2211
2317
2414
258
2614
2717
2813
294
302
319
325
338
347
3513
367
378
3812
3911
4012
416
422
436
448
4510
465
473
487
493
45.80% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats15
diversityRatio0.3153153153153153
totalSentences222
uniqueOpeners70
48.31% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences138
matches
0"Just the constant, warm radiance"
1"Just the dark, empty void"
ratio0.014
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount37
totalSentences138
matches
0"Their violet eyes glowed brighter,"
1"Her silver hair caught the"
2"She moved without sinking her"
3"Her pale lavender eyes scanned"
4"she said, rubbing her thumb"
5"They leaned heavily on the"
6"Her voice echoed, swallowed quickly"
7"She walked toward a distant"
8"She stepped back, hand moving"
9"She stopped near a stone"
10"They pointed their staff toward"
11"She felt the urge to"
12"She gripped her wrist, focusing"
13"It didn't come from a"
14"It came from the ground,"
15"She walked toward the pavilion."
16"She looked down."
17"She stomped them away, crushing"
18"She thought of the Flat"
19"Her eyes were devoid of"
ratio0.268
7.10% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount125
totalSentences138
matches
0"Rory stepped forward, the gravel"
1"The air hit her like"
2"Nyx drifted to her left,"
3"Their violet eyes glowed brighter,"
4"Rory tightened her grip on"
5"The Half-Fae seer stepped from"
6"Her silver hair caught the"
7"She moved without sinking her"
8"Her pale lavender eyes scanned"
9"Isolde asked, tilting her head"
10"The faint luminescence of the"
11"Rory felt the cold metal"
12"The blade hummed, a vibration"
13"she said, rubbing her thumb"
14"Nyx coalesced fully, their human"
15"They leaned heavily on the"
16"Rory pushed past the first"
17"The leaves were broad and"
18"A low hum vibrated through"
19"Her voice echoed, swallowed quickly"
ratio0.906
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences138
matches(empty)
ratio0
82.32% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences59
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"Warm amber light bled through the shimmering distortion of the Veil, coating the pavement of the alleyway in a hue that felt too heavy to be real."
1"Rory tightened her grip on the silver chain around her neck. The Heartstone Pendant pulsed against her sternum, a rhythmic warmth that matched the beating of he…"
2"The warmth seeped into her skin, pushing back the heavy, sugary fog that was creeping into her mind."
3"Rory swallowed the taste of copper that had filled her mouth since the moment they crossed."
4"Nyx stepped forward, their shadows elongating, reaching out to touch the statue's legs."
77.38% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags42
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"Nyx shifted, their form flickering"
1"Isolde replied, her voice carrying over the low rumble of the realm"
2"Isolde said, her voice dropping to a whisper"
3"Isolde said, her eyes locking onto Rory"
84.07% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags39
fancyCount6
fancyTags
0"Isolde warned (warn)"
1"Isolde murmured (murmur)"
2"Nyx hissed (hiss)"
3"Nyx corrected (correct)"
4"Nyx warned (warn)"
5"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences91
tagDensity0.429
leniency0.857
rawRatio0.154
effectiveRatio0.132
82.0486%