Run: 2026-02-25-01KJBGSST8889F2YFHG04BEQSZ

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Duration:
45.6s
Cost:
$0.003091
Provider:
Alibaba

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The deadbolts slid back with a sharp metallic shriek. I held the handle, ready to throw it open onto a courier, but the frame held nothing but a stranger I thought I had lost for years. Lucien Moreau stepped inside. Rain dripped from his platinum hair onto the welcome mat. He tapped his ivory cane against the floorboards. The sound echoed through the cramped hallway. You didn't knock. Knocking implies permission. I didn't want permission. He closed the door behind him. The click sounded like a gunshot. The three deadbolts clicked into place against my own hand before I could stop him. I checked the chain lock. It remained unfastened. Get out. I need to talk. Talk to my door. He pushed off the wood. His suit was dry despite the weather outside. He wore charcoal perfectly tailored to a frame I had memorised. I remembered the way the fabric pulled across his shoulders. I remembered the coldness of his skin. The scar on my wrist throbbed. A phantom reminder of how things ended. The contract is void. Void contracts get people killed. He moved past me into the living room. Books were stacked everywhere. Scrolls lay across the sofa cushions. The smell of curry rising from below mixed with the dust of old paper. It made his presence feel like an intruder in a sanctuary. I am not a mercenary anymore. You never stopped. He held the cane with one hand. The ivory handle gleamed under the overhead light. He looked at the stack of books behind me. This flat is not a fortress. It is my home. It is a trap. The air shifted. The temperature dropped. I felt the shift in the static of my skin. I stepped back. The cat, Ptolemy, hissed from the bedroom. Fur puffed out as his tail twitched. The beast knew first. Get out. If I leave, you die. I survived Evan. Evan was a man. This is... He gestured to the walls. This is the old world. The Avaros realm. You walked through a door once. You cannot walk through it twice. I didn't walk through a door. Did you not? He walked closer. The cane rested against his thigh. He moved with predatory grace. Slow. Controlled. I saw the heterochromatic eyes again. One amber. One black. The imbalance made me dizzy. It was always unsettling. I saw the mark. What mark? On your hand. I looked down. My right hand was empty. My eyes flicked to my left wrist. The scar sat there. Pale skin against blue veins. I had never shown him the left wrist. He knew that detail only if he had touched me recently. Or watched me sleep. The thought sent a chill through my gut. Don't. Come with me. No. You are running out of time. I said no. Lucien turned. His coat moved in a draft that wasn't there. The scent of ozone filled the room. It smelled like lightning before the storm. Then stay. I am not going to Avaros for you. I am not asking you to go there. He stepped into the light from the window. The rain lashed against the glass. East London blurred below. I looked at the shelves behind him. The books were titles I recognised from my time in Cardiff. Pre-Law texts. Law of Contract. They mocked me. They know where you live. I don't know who they are. You don't have to. A sound from the hallway. I froze. The deadbolts vibrated. Metal groaned against wood. Someone was trying to force the lock. You have friends at your door. I don't have friends. Then why is the wood splintering. The handle jiggled violently. Steel claws scraped against the surface of the door. That isn't a pick. Lucien said. His voice cooled. That isn't human. Then open the door. If I open the door, we fight here. Better here than outside. He turned. He looked at me. The amber eye flashed. The black one seemed to swallow the light. He raised the cane. The blade extended with a sharp hiss. Don't move. You don't order me. Not now. I need you to stand behind me. I don't follow orders. Then you die. The wood cracked. A piece of the frame splintered inward. Darkness pooled in the hallway beyond the gap. It smelled of rot. Of old blood. Rory. Yes. Close your eyes. No. Rory. I said no. The lock snapped. The door burst open. The smell of ozone turned to rot. I saw the eyes. They floated in the darkness. They were not human. They were not from the flat. Something crawled in through the crack before the door even fully swung open. It looked at Lucien. Then it looked at me. Hide. Lucien stepped forward. They weren't human. They weren't from the flat. Something crawled in through the crack before the door even fully swung open. I couldn't breathe. My mouth opened, but no sound came out. The creature lunged. Lucien stepped into its path. His cane slashed through the air. The sound of steel cutting bone echoed through the flat. The creature shrieked. The sound was wrong. It was high and wet. I wanted to run. I stayed. I watched the blade spin in the air. I watched him turn to block another strike. The creature threw Lucien against the bookshelf. Books fell. Scrolls scattered. Rory. Get the exit. No. Go. I did not move. I grabbed a heavy hardback from the pile. My grip tightened. The creature turned. It saw me. It moved too fast. I swung the book. It missed. The creature lunged for my throat. I screamed. The creature stopped. It turned its head slowly. Then it smiled. It wore a face. A face I knew. The face of a man I had left behind. Evan. You never left. The face shifted. It smiled again. Lucien roared. He charged. The door slammed shut behind him. He kicked it open again. The creature turned and vanished into the wall. Lucien stood panting. He looked at me. He looked at the door. Don't. Don't open it again. Why? Because that was not the first one. Who? The one who owns you. I looked at my wrist. The scar pulsed. It throbbed in rhythm with the beating in my chest. I looked at the door. The handle moved. It creaked. It moved again. Lucien drew the blade from his cane. He stood between me and the handle. He did not look at me. He looked at the wood. He looked at the handle. It stopped moving. The handle stopped. Silence filled the room. The smell of copper filled my nose. Blood. Recent. Lucien looked at the floor. His suit was torn at the hem. I saw the blood there. It moved towards the door. The smell grew stronger. It filled the flat. It was not the creature's blood. It was human. It was his. Lucien looked at me. He smiled. It was a bad smile. I am bleeding. You were hurt. No. I am dead. You cannot die. I can if the door opens. He put the tip of the blade against his throat. Don't. He stepped back. He put the blade down. He walked to the window. He opened it. Wait. He stepped onto the ledge. He looked down. The street below was wet. Lucien dropped the cane. It landed on the pavement with a heavy clatter. Stop! He stepped into the air. He did not fall. He hovered. His coat snapped in the wind. His eyes burned. The amber light flickered. Then he threw himself into the dark. The window slammed shut. The lock clicked. The key turned in the lock from the outside. I locked the door. The handle stopped moving. I looked at the door handle. It turned again. Someone was turning the handle from the outside. It was turning slowly. Like a machine. Like a clock. The handle broke. The wood splintered. The door fell open. And I saw the face again. Evan. He stepped inside. He was dead. He was standing. He smiled at me. He held a knife. He held Lucien's blade. It moved. I did not move. I looked at the door. I did not look back.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags0
89.12% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1379
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"perfectly"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count2
highlights
0"perfectly"
1"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
52.86% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1379
totalAiIsms13
found
0
word"echoed"
count2
1
word"throbbed"
count2
2
word"reminder"
count1
3
word"sanctuary"
count1
4
word"flicked"
count1
5
word"chill"
count1
6
word"vibrated"
count1
7
word"charged"
count1
8
word"pulsed"
count1
9
word"silence"
count1
10
word"flickered"
count1
highlights
0"echoed"
1"throbbed"
2"reminder"
3"sanctuary"
4"flicked"
5"chill"
6"vibrated"
7"charged"
8"pulsed"
9"silence"
10"flickered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"sent a shiver through"
count1
highlights
0"sent a chill through"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences294
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences294
filterMatches
0"feel"
1"know"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences294
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen27
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1379
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions2
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions47
wordCount1379
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity1.02
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Moreau1
Ptolemy1
Evan4
Avaros2
London1
Cardiff1
Contract1
Lucien14
You11
Get3
Don5
Rory3
persons
0"Moreau"
1"Ptolemy"
2"Evan"
3"Lucien"
4"You"
5"Get"
6"Rory"
places
0"Avaros"
1"London"
2"Cardiff"
globalScore0.992
windowScore0.833
93.18% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences88
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"sounded like a gunshot"
1"smelled like lightning before the storm"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1379
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences294
matches
0"knew that detail"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs88
mean15.67
std21.05
cv1.344
sampleLengths
036
129
23
37
435
52
64
74
854
94
105
1143
126
1333
144
154
1637
172
185
193
2031
216
2238
234
242
253
2655
271
283
291
306
313
3225
332
348
3552
365
376
384
3921
406
414
426
4313
4412
454
468
474
4829
492
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences294
matches
0"were stacked"
1"was torn"
88.14% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount5
totalVerbs298
matches
0"was always unsettling"
1"was trying"
2"was turning"
3"was turning"
4"was standing"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences294
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1380
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount32
adverbRatio0.02318840579710145
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.005797101449275362
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences294
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences294
mean4.69
std2.83
cv0.604
sampleLengths
09
127
24
310
48
57
63
73
84
96
106
1115
125
133
142
154
164
175
188
1911
2010
217
226
237
244
255
268
274
286
2914
3011
316
323
337
348
359
366
374
384
393
403
4110
423
437
447
454
462
475
483
494
31.97% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats53
diversityRatio0.20408163265306123
totalSentences294
uniqueOpeners60
81.30% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount6
totalSentences246
matches
0"Then why is the wood"
1"Then open the door."
2"Then you die."
3"Then it looked at me."
4"Then it smiled."
5"Then he threw himself into"
ratio0.024
2.11% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount134
totalSentences246
matches
0"I held the handle, ready"
1"He tapped his ivory cane"
2"You didn't knock."
3"I didn't want permission."
4"He closed the door behind"
5"I checked the chain lock."
6"It remained unfastened."
7"I need to talk."
8"He pushed off the wood."
9"His suit was dry despite"
10"He wore charcoal perfectly tailored"
11"I remembered the way the"
12"I remembered the coldness of"
13"He moved past me into"
14"It made his presence feel"
15"I am not a mercenary"
16"You never stopped."
17"He held the cane with"
18"He looked at the stack"
19"It is my home."
ratio0.545
8.78% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount222
totalSentences246
matches
0"The deadbolts slid back with"
1"I held the handle, ready"
2"Lucien Moreau stepped inside."
3"Rain dripped from his platinum"
4"He tapped his ivory cane"
5"The sound echoed through the"
6"You didn't knock."
7"I didn't want permission."
8"He closed the door behind"
9"The click sounded like a"
10"The three deadbolts clicked into"
11"I checked the chain lock."
12"It remained unfastened."
13"I need to talk."
14"He pushed off the wood."
15"His suit was dry despite"
16"He wore charcoal perfectly tailored"
17"I remembered the way the"
18"I remembered the coldness of"
19"The scar on my wrist"
ratio0.902
60.98% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount3
totalSentences246
matches
0"If I leave, you die."
1"If I open the door,"
2"Because that was not the"
ratio0.012
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences15
technicalSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags0
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
86.3930%