Run: 2026-02-25-01KJBHNNG7WEMFYDX7Y1CVY59R

Run Details

Duration:
1m 46s
Cost:
$0.014446
Provider:
Alibaba

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The streetlamps of Richmond Park cast long, orange shadows that seemed to stretch too far, reaching for the line of ancient oaks like grasping fingers. Aurora stopped at the edge of the grass, the damp chill of the London evening biting through her denim jacket. She checked her watch, then the small silver chain tucked beneath her collar. The Heartstone pendant lay cold against her sternum, a deep crimson gem the size of a thumbnail. It had been silent for hours, but as she stepped closer to the standing stones marking the boundary, a faint warmth began to radiate from the stone. "Are you sure this is the spot?" Aurora asked, her voice low. She glanced at the figure shifting beside her. Nyx stood a few paces away, their form less defined than a human silhouette, edges bleeding into the darkness like smoke in a draft. Their violet eyes glowed faintly in the gloom, fixed on the stones. "The Veil is thin here," Nyx whispered. The sound didn't seem to come from a mouth, but rather vibrated in the air around Aurora, like wind moving through dry leaves. "Time bends. Watch your step." Aurora swallowed the sudden lump of anxiety in her throat. She had dealt with abusive exes and demanding delivery routes, but this felt different. This felt like the moment before a jump. She adjusted the strap of her bag, her fingers brushing the small crescent scar on her left wrist, a reminder of a childhood accident that had taught her pain was temporary. She hoped that held true here. "Ready?" she asked. Nyx nodded, a fluid motion that seemed to ripple through the shadow that made up their body. They stepped forward first, passing through the gap between two moss-covered stones. Aurora followed. The transition was not a door opening, but a shift in pressure. The air grew heavier, tasting of ozone and crushed petals. The ambient noise of the city—the distant hum of traffic, the barking of dogs—vanished instantly, replaced by a silence so profound it pressed against Aurora's eardrums. She blinked, her eyes adjusting to the light. It wasn't the orange glare of streetlamps anymore, but a soft, bioluminescent glow emanating from the wildflowers that carpeted the ground. "Whoa," Aurora breathed. The clearing was vast, far larger than the patch of parkland they had entered from. The oaks here were massive, their trunks wide as houses, twisting into shapes that defied gravity. Above, the sky was a twilight violet, dotted with stars that didn't match any constellation Aurora knew. They moved slowly, drifting across the firmament like fish in a deep ocean. "Stay close," Nyx said, their voice carrying a warning edge. "The Grove remembers." Aurora took a step, her boots sinking slightly into the moss. It was soft, springy, and impossibly green. She looked down and saw that the moss seemed to pulse in rhythm with her heartbeat. She looked up again, scanning the perimeter. The standing stones were gone, replaced by a wall of dense, flowering brambles that seemed to shift when she looked directly at them. "Where is Isolde?" Aurora asked. She had expected the Seer to be waiting at the threshold. "She is where the path leads," Nyx replied. They gestured with a hand that flickered between solid and translucent. "Follow the scent of rain." Aurora frowned. It hadn't rained. But as she inhaled, the scent of petrichor filled her nose, sharp and clean. It drew her forward, pulling her deeper into the grove. She walked past a cluster of mushrooms that chimed softly when the wind brushed them. The sound was melodic, a minor chord that resonated in her chest. The Heartstone against her skin grew warmer. Aurora pulled it out from under her shirt. The crimson gem was pulsing now, a slow, rhythmic beat that matched the thrumming in the ground beneath her feet. "It's reacting," she said, holding the pendant up. The inner glow was brighter, casting a red hue on her palm. "Is there a Hel portal here?" Nyx paused, their head tilting. "Not a portal. A wound. The Veil is torn." Aurora's stomach tightened. She knew the lore—rift points were monitored by Wardens, usually sealed before they became a problem. But this place was Fae-touched. The two realms shouldn't overlap so cleanly. "Keep moving," Nyx urged. "The tear is near the center." They pushed through a thicket of silver-barked willows. The branches didn't break; they parted like curtains, revealing a small, circular clearing dominated by a pool of still water. The water was black, reflecting nothing but the violet sky. Surrounding the pool were stones etched with runes that shifted when Aurora looked at them, rearranging themselves into shapes she couldn't quite decipher. Standing by the water was a woman. She was small, barely five-foot-five, with hair like spun silver that reached her waist. Her eyes were pale lavender, glowing with an ethereal light that seemed to pierce the gloom. Isolde. She didn't turn as they approached. She was staring into the black water, her hands clasped behind her back. "You are late," Isolde said. Her voice was melodic but carried a weight that made Aurora's knees feel weak. "The traffic was bad," Aurora said, the joke slipping out before she could stop it. It sounded flat in the heavy air. Isolde turned then. She didn't walk; she glided, her feet leaving no impression on the moss. "Time is a river here, child. It flows faster or slower depending on where you stand. You have walked for an hour. For me, it has been a minute." Aurora looked at her watch. The second hand was spinning wildly, clicking back and forth. "Right. Okay." "The wound," Nyx said, ignoring the time discrepancy. They pointed a shadowy finger at the pool. "It is widening." Isolde looked at the water. A ripple disturbed the surface, though there was no wind. From the black depths, a low, guttural sound emerged, like the growl of a beast waking from a long sleep. The Heartstone in Aurora's hand flared hot, burning her skin. She gasped and dropped it, but it didn't hit the ground. It hovered inches above the moss, spinning slowly. "Gluttony," Isolde whispered. "It smells of Dymas." Aurora picked up the pendant, wincing at the heat. "Dymas? Here?" "A leak," Isolde said. She reached into the folds of her gown and pulled out a slender dagger. The blade was made of a metal that seemed to drink the light, cold and sharp. Moonsilver. She held it out to Aurora. "For the shadow that is not your friend," Isolde said. Aurora took the blade. It was freezing, the cold seeping into her palm instantly. "What do I do?" "Cut the thread," Isolde said, her eyes locking onto Aurora's. "But be warned. The Fae do not like debts unpaid." The water in the pool began to boil. A tendril of black smoke rose from the surface, coiling into a shape that resembled a hand. It reached toward Aurora, grasping. The air temperature plummeted. Aurora's breath misted in front of her face. Nyx stepped forward, their form expanding, becoming solid and dark. "I can hold it." "No," Aurora said, gripping the Fae blade. The cold didn't hurt; it felt like clarity. "I have the stone. It reacts to the rift. I need to close it." She stepped toward the pool. The smoke-hand lashed out, brushing against her cheek. It felt like ice and ash. Aurora didn't flinch. She focused on the pulsing Heartstone, feeling the rhythm of the tear in the world. It was a heartbeat, a wrong beat in the song of the earth. "Cut it," Nyx whispered from behind her. Aurora raised the blade. The silver metal hummed, a high-pitched vibration that made her teeth ache. She didn't aim at the smoke; she aimed at the space between the smoke and the water, the invisible thread connecting the realms. She swung. The blade passed through the air without resistance, but the smoke screamed. It was a sound like tearing metal. The pool shuddered, the black water churning violently. The Heartstone flared blindingly bright, then dimmed to a steady, cool pulse. The smoke dissipated, sucked back into the depths of the pool. Silence returned, heavier than before. Aurora lowered the blade, her arm trembling. The cold had settled into her bones. Isolde nodded, a small, approving gesture. "You have a gift," Isolde said. "Or a curse. It is often the same thing." Aurora looked down at the pendant, then at the blade. The Grove seemed to watch her, the wildflowers turning their faces toward her as if in acknowledgment. The unease hadn't vanished, but it had shifted. It was no longer the fear of the unknown, but the weight of responsibility. "Did we fix it?" Aurora asked. "For now," Isolde said, turning back to the pool. "The Veil is thin this season. The winter solstice approaches. The barrier weakens." Nyx faded back into the shadows of the willows, watching. "Then we have little time." Aurora pocketed the blade, the cold still lingering on her skin. She looked out at the alien sky, the drifting stars, the impossible trees. This wasn't London anymore. It wasn't the world she knew. But as the Heartstone settled against her chest, warm and steady, she knew she couldn't leave it behind. "Lead the way," Aurora said. "I'm ready."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags22
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences41
tagDensity0.537
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
87.21% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1564
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count2
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
2
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"slightly"
2"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
29.67% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1564
totalAiIsms22
found
0
word"chill"
count1
1
word"warmth"
count1
2
word"gloom"
count2
3
word"vibrated"
count1
4
word"reminder"
count1
5
word"silence"
count2
6
word"profound"
count1
7
word"pulse"
count2
8
word"scanning"
count1
9
word"flickered"
count1
10
word"resonated"
count1
11
word"rhythmic"
count1
12
word"stomach"
count1
13
word"etched"
count1
14
word"weight"
count2
15
word"depths"
count2
16
word"churning"
count1
highlights
0"chill"
1"warmth"
2"gloom"
3"vibrated"
4"reminder"
5"silence"
6"profound"
7"pulse"
8"scanning"
9"flickered"
10"resonated"
11"rhythmic"
12"stomach"
13"etched"
14"weight"
15"depths"
16"churning"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences136
matches(empty)
6.30% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount10
narrationSentences136
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"feel"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
2"seem to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences155
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen31
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1561
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions19
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
16.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions70
wordCount1358
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity2.36
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity4.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Richmond1
Park1
London2
Heartstone6
Aurora32
Nyx11
Seer1
Wardens1
Fae-touched1
Fae2
Grove1
Isolde11
persons
0"Heartstone"
1"Aurora"
2"Nyx"
3"Wardens"
4"Fae"
5"Isolde"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"London"
globalScore0.322
windowScore0.167
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences101
glossingSentenceCount9
matches
0"shadows that seemed to stretch too far, reaching for the line of ancient oaks like grasping fingers"
1"felt like the moment before a jump"
2"motion that seemed to ripple through the shadow that made up their body"
3"brambles that seemed to shift when she looked directly at them"
4"quite decipher"
5"light that seemed to pierce the gloom"
6"metal that seemed to drink the light, cold and sharp"
7"felt like clarity"
8"felt like ice and ash"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.641
wordCount1561
matches
0"not a door opening, but a shift in pressure"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences155
matches
0"saw that the"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs51
mean30.61
std22.36
cv0.731
sampleLengths
0102
156
235
369
43
531
677
73
861
913
1064
1116
1224
1356
1435
1526
1614
1731
1810
1961
2038
2119
2219
2322
2445
2517
2619
2764
287
2911
3041
3110
3218
3320
3442
3514
3629
3750
387
3939
402
4150
425
4320
4415
4549
466
4722
4815
4952
97.52% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences136
matches
0"were gone"
1"were monitored"
2"was made"
94.60% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs253
matches
0"was pulsing"
1"was staring"
2"was spinning"
3"was freezing"
32.26% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount3
semicolonCount4
flaggedSentences6
totalSentences155
ratio0.039
matches
0"The ambient noise of the city—the distant hum of traffic, the barking of dogs—vanished instantly, replaced by a silence so profound it pressed against Aurora's eardrums."
1"She knew the lore—rift points were monitored by Wardens, usually sealed before they became a problem."
2"The branches didn't break; they parted like curtains, revealing a small, circular clearing dominated by a pool of still water."
3"She didn't walk; she glided, her feet leaving no impression on the moss."
4"The cold didn't hurt; it felt like clarity."
5"She didn't aim at the smoke; she aimed at the space between the smoke and the water, the invisible thread connecting the realms."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1368
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"lay cold against her"
adverbCount42
adverbRatio0.03070175438596491
lyAdverbCount15
lyAdverbRatio0.010964912280701754
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences155
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences155
mean10.07
std6.09
cv0.604
sampleLengths
025
120
213
317
427
512
68
724
812
97
1023
115
1210
1314
148
1531
166
173
1817
1912
202
2112
2210
2326
248
2521
263
2715
2816
2917
3013
3110
323
3311
347
3516
367
3723
385
3911
408
4111
425
432
443
4514
4610
4715
4812
497
40.97% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats14
diversityRatio0.2645161290322581
totalSentences155
uniqueOpeners41
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences118
matches(empty)
ratio0
67.46% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount45
totalSentences118
matches
0"She checked her watch, then"
1"It had been silent for"
2"She glanced at the figure"
3"Their violet eyes glowed faintly"
4"She had dealt with abusive"
5"She adjusted the strap of"
6"She hoped that held true"
7"They stepped forward first, passing"
8"She blinked, her eyes adjusting"
9"It wasn't the orange glare"
10"They moved slowly, drifting across"
11"It was soft, springy, and"
12"She looked down and saw"
13"She looked up again, scanning"
14"She had expected the Seer"
15"They gestured with a hand"
16"It hadn't rained."
17"It drew her forward, pulling"
18"She walked past a cluster"
19"she said, holding the pendant"
ratio0.381
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount112
totalSentences118
matches
0"The streetlamps of Richmond Park"
1"Aurora stopped at the edge"
2"She checked her watch, then"
3"The Heartstone pendant lay cold"
4"It had been silent for"
5"Aurora asked, her voice low"
6"She glanced at the figure"
7"Nyx stood a few paces"
8"Their violet eyes glowed faintly"
9"The sound didn't seem to"
10"Aurora swallowed the sudden lump"
11"She had dealt with abusive"
12"This felt like the moment"
13"She adjusted the strap of"
14"She hoped that held true"
15"Nyx nodded, a fluid motion"
16"They stepped forward first, passing"
17"The transition was not a"
18"The air grew heavier, tasting"
19"The ambient noise of the"
ratio0.949
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences118
matches(empty)
ratio0
21.98% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences65
technicalSentenceCount11
matches
0"The streetlamps of Richmond Park cast long, orange shadows that seemed to stretch too far, reaching for the line of ancient oaks like grasping fingers."
1"She adjusted the strap of her bag, her fingers brushing the small crescent scar on her left wrist, a reminder of a childhood accident that had taught her pain w…"
2"Nyx nodded, a fluid motion that seemed to ripple through the shadow that made up their body."
3"It wasn't the orange glare of streetlamps anymore, but a soft, bioluminescent glow emanating from the wildflowers that carpeted the ground."
4"The standing stones were gone, replaced by a wall of dense, flowering brambles that seemed to shift when she looked directly at them."
5"They gestured with a hand that flickered between solid and translucent."
6"The sound was melodic, a minor chord that resonated in her chest."
7"The crimson gem was pulsing now, a slow, rhythmic beat that matched the thrumming in the ground beneath her feet."
8"Surrounding the pool were stones etched with runes that shifted when Aurora looked at them, rearranging themselves into shapes she couldn't quite decipher."
9"She was small, barely five-foot-five, with hair like spun silver that reached her waist."
10"The silver metal hummed, a high-pitched vibration that made her teeth ache."
34.09% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags22
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"Aurora asked, her voice low"
1"Nyx said, their voice carrying a warning edge"
2"Aurora said, the joke slipping out before she could stop it"
3"Isolde said, her eyes locking onto Aurora's"
36.36% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags22
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
1"Aurora breathed (breathe)"
2"Nyx urged (urge)"
3"Isolde whispered (whisper)"
4"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences41
tagDensity0.537
leniency1
rawRatio0.227
effectiveRatio0.227
65.3029%