Run: 2026-02-25-01KJBJ7S6Q75PCJ9W1CYH2VKT5

Run Details

Model:: Qwen 3.5 122B
Test:: Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:: Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:: 42.3s
Cost:: $0.012151
Provider:: Alibaba

Evaluation summary

Score	Evaluator	Details Link
0.00%	Adverbs in dialogue tags	(details)
95.50%	AI-ism adverb frequency	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism character names	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism location names	(details)
55.04%	AI-ism word frequency	(details)
100.00%	Cliché density	(details)
100.00%	Emotion telling (show vs. tell)	(details)
65.22%	Filter word density	(details)
100.00%	Gibberish response detection	(details)
100.00%	Markdown formatting overuse	(details)
0.00%	Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)	(details)
73.29%	Name drop frequency	(details)
75.37%	Narrator intent-glossing	(details)
20.14%	"Not X but Y" pattern overuse	(details)
100.00%	Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)	(details)
100.00%	Paragraph length variance	(details)
97.64%	Passive voice overuse	(details)
100.00%	Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse	(details)
100.00%	Em-dash & semicolon overuse	(details)
100.00%	Purple prose (modifier overload)	(details)
100.00%	Repeated phrase echo	(details)
100.00%	Sentence length variance	(details)
51.81%	Sentence opener variety	(details)
38.76%	Adverb-first sentence starts	(details)
71.16%	Pronoun-first sentence starts	(details)
47.21%	Subject-first sentence starts	(details)
100.00%	Subordinate conjunction sentence starts	(details)
44.82%	Technical jargon density	(details)
100.00%	Useless dialogue additions	(details)
100.00%	Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)	(details)
77.8652%	Overall

Model input

System

You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue.

You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex.

Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.

User/Human

<codex>
<character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist">
  <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor>
  <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair>
  <height>5'6"</height>
  <age>25</age>
  <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar>
  <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description>
  <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card">
  <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor>
  <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height>
  <age>ageless</age>
  <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form>
  <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice>
  <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description>
  <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle">
  <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor>
  <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair>
  <height>5'5"</height>
  <age>300 years old</age>
  <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance>
  <speech>speaks in riddles</speech>
  <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints>
  <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion>
  <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description>
  <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory>
</character>

<location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony">
  <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler>
  <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor>
  <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description>
</location>

<location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)">
  <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation>
  <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones>
  <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior>
  <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora>
  <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description>
</location>

<item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas">
  <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor>
  <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial>
  <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size>
  <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior>
  <glow>faint inner glow</glow>
  <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description>
</item>

<item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts">
  <material>moonsilver</material>
  <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape>
  <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature>
  <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow>
  <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power>
  <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo>
  <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description>
</item>

<lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology">
  <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect>
  <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance>
  <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring>
  <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description>
</lore>
</codex>

Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre.

A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition.

Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore.
Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

The air changed the moment they passed the line of ancient oak standing stones. It was not a shift in temperature, but in weight, as if the atmosphere had thickened into water. Aurora Carter felt the pressure in her ears pop and the small crescent scar on her left wrist prickled with a phantom heat. She reached into her coat pocket, her fingers brushing the silver chain of the Heartstone Pendant. It lay dormant against her palm, cool and still, confirming they had not crossed into Hel. Instead, the Fae-Forged Blade at her hip hummed, a low vibration that traveled up her arm and settled in her teeth.

Ahead of her, Isolde Varga walked without touching the ground. The Half-Fae seer moved through the tall grass of the clearing, her silver hair cascading down her back like spilled moonlight, leaving no disturbance in the dew. There were no footprints behind her, only the impression of a path that existed only in memory. Aurora glanced at Nyx, who hovered a few inches off the mossy earth. The Shade’s form was a humanoid silhouette of living shadow, their faintly glowing violet eyes scanning the perimeter with a predatory wariness.

Do not step on the roots, Nyx whispered. Their voice sounded like dry leaves skittering on pavement, carried on a wind that did not blow. The ground remembers where you have been.

I can see the roots, Nyx, Aurora said, keeping her voice low. She adjusted the strap of her messenger bag, feeling the weight of the delivery box inside, a mundane anchor in a world that felt increasingly untethered. This is just a park. Richmond Park.

Isolde stopped and turned. Her pale lavender eyes held no pupils, only a swirling depth that made Aurora feel as though she were looking into a well. Time is a river that flows in many directions here, Isolde said. You think you are walking forward, but you may be walking into yesterday.

Aurora swallowed. She had read the reports on the Veil, knew the lore about the barrier weakening during the solstice, but reading about a pocket realm was different from standing inside it. The sky above was not the grey London overcast she had left behind. It was a perpetual twilight, a bruised purple bleeding into gold, where wildflowers bloomed in clusters that defied the season. Roses with petals of obsidian grew alongside daisies that glowed with their own bioluminescence.

How long have we been here? Aurora asked. She checked her watch. The second hand was ticking, but the rhythm felt wrong, stuttering like a skipping record.

Isolde smiled, a expression that did not reach her eyes. An hour is a minute. A minute is a lifetime. The answer depends on what you wish to remember.

Nyx drifted closer to Aurora, the shadow of their form stretching unnaturally long across the grass. The Veil is thin here, they murmured. I can taste the magic. It is sweet. Like rotting fruit.

Aurora drew the Fae blade from its sheath. The moonsilver was cold to the touch, leaching the heat from her skin. In the dim light of the grove, the dagger glowed with a faint luminescence, casting sharp, silver shadows against the standing stones. She held it out, watching the way the light bent around the edge. It was designed to cut through wards, to sever the bindings of demons, but here, in the heart of the Fae-touched earth, it felt like a key waiting for a lock.

We are looking for a way through, Aurora said. Not just through the grove. Through the Veil.

Isolde stepped closer, her movement fluid, unnerving in its silence. You seek the door that is not a door. The path is not found by walking, but by unmaking.

Aurora felt a chill that had nothing to do with the temperature. She thought of her father in Cardiff, the barrister who taught her to argue facts, to find the truth in the details. This place had no facts. It had only impressions. She looked down at the Heartstone pendant, now visible against the collar of her shirt. It remained dark. If this were Hel, if they were near a portal to Dymas, the crimson gem would be burning against her chest. The silence of the stone was a relief, but also a warning. They were in the Fae realm, and the Fae were dangerous in their own right.

Nyx extended a hand, their fingers dissolving into smoke before reforming. The shadows here are older than the stones. They remember Aldric.

Aurora looked up sharply. You remember?

I remember the fall, Nyx said. The summoning. The fire. I am the ash that did not burn.

Aurora nodded, filing the information away. She knew Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric, trapped between realms in 1643. To stand here with a Shade, a Seer, and a delivery driver was absurd, yet the Fae blade in her hand felt more real than the flat above Silas' bar ever had.

The wind picked up, carrying the scent of ozone and damp earth. The flowers seemed to lean toward them, turning their heads like curious children. Aurora felt the urge to run, to turn back toward the mundane safety of London traffic and traffic lights, but the pull of the unknown was stronger. She tightened her grip on the dagger.

Show us, Aurora said to Isolde. Show us the way through.

Isolde turned and walked deeper into the grove, where the trees grew thick and the light dimmed to a deep indigo. She did not look back. She knew they would follow. Aurora took a breath, the air tasting of ancient magic and possibility, and stepped after them. The ground beneath her boots felt soft, like walking on the belly of a sleeping beast. Nyx glided beside her, a silent guardian of the dark.

As they moved, Aurora noticed the time on her watch had stopped entirely. The second hand was frozen at twelve. She did not panic. In a place where time moved differently, panic was a luxury she could not afford. She focused on the cold weight of the blade, the steady rhythm of her own heartbeat, and the faint, comforting pulse of the Heartstone that remained silent, telling her they were far from the fires of Gluttony. They were in the space between, and for now, that was enough. The trees closed in around them, their branches weaving together to form a canopy that blocked out the sky, sealing them in a world where the rules of physics were merely suggestions. Aurora tightened her coat, pushed forward, and let the unknown lead the way.

Evaluation details

Result

Evaluator

Details

Meta Data

0.00%

Adverbs in dialogue tags

Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs

totalTags

adverbTagCount

adverbTags

0	"her hand felt more [more]"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

leniency

rawRatio

effectiveRatio

95.50%

AI-ism adverb frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)

wordCount

1112

totalAiIsmAdverbs

found

adverb	"sharply"
count	1

highlights

"sharply"

100.00%

AI-ism character names

Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

100.00%

AI-ism location names

Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

55.04%

AI-ism word frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)

wordCount

1112

totalAiIsms

found

word	"weight"
count	3

word	"cascading"
count	1

word	"scanning"
count	1

word	"silence"
count	2

word	"chill"
count	1

word	"comforting"
count	1

word	"pulse"
count	1

highlights

0	"weight"
1	"cascading"
2	"scanning"
3	"silence"
4	"chill"
5	"comforting"
6	"pulse"

100.00%

Cliché density

Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window

totalCliches	0
maxInWindow	0
found	(empty)
highlights	(empty)

100.00%

Emotion telling (show vs. tell)

Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling

emotionTells

narrationSentences

matches

0	"felt a chill"

65.22%

Filter word density

Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words

filterCount

hedgeCount

narrationSentences

filterMatches

0	"feel"
1	"think"
2	"watch"

hedgeMatches

0	"seemed to"

100.00%

Gibberish response detection

Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)

analyzedSentences	92
gibberishSentences	0
adjustedGibberishSentences	0
longSentenceCount	0
runOnParagraphCount	0
giantParagraphCount	0
wordSaladCount	0
repetitionLoopCount	0
controlTokenCount	0
maxSentenceWordsSeen	37
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Markdown formatting overuse

Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting

markdownSpans	0
markdownWords	0
totalWords	1112
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

0.00%

Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)

Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks

totalAttributions

unquotedAttributions

matches

0	"Do not step on the roots, Nyx whispered."
1	"I can see the roots, Nyx, Aurora said, keeping her voice low."
2	"Time is a river that flows in many directions here, Isolde said."
3	"The Veil is thin here, they murmured."
4	"We are looking for a way through, Aurora said."
5	"I remember the fall, Nyx said."
6	"Show us, Aurora said to Isolde."

73.29%

Name drop frequency

Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words

totalMentions

wordCount

1108

uniqueNames

maxNameDensity

1.53

worstName

"Aurora"

maxWindowNameDensity

2.5

worstWindowName

"Aurora"

discoveredNames

Carter	1
Heartstone	3
Pendant	1
Hel	2
Fae-Forged	1
Blade	1
Isolde	7
Varga	1
Half-Fae	1
Nyx	8
Shade	2
Aurora	17
Park	1
Veil	3
London	2
Fae	7
Fae-touched	1
Cardiff	1
Dymas	1
Aldric	2
Seer	1
Gluttony	1
You	3

persons

0	"Carter"
1	"Isolde"
2	"Varga"
3	"Nyx"
4	"Shade"
5	"Aurora"
6	"Aldric"
7	"Seer"
8	"You"

places

0	"Heartstone"
1	"Hel"
2	"Park"
3	"London"
4	"Fae"
5	"Cardiff"
6	"Dymas"

globalScore

0.733

windowScore

0.833

75.37%

Narrator intent-glossing

Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns

analyzedSentences

glossingSentenceCount

matches

0	"sounded like dry leaves skittering on pave"
1	"felt like a key waiting for a lock"

20.14%

"Not X but Y" pattern overuse

Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words

totalMatches

per1kWords

1.799

wordCount

1112

matches

0	"not a shift in temperature, but in weight, as if the atmosphere had thickened into water"
1	"not found by walking, but by unmaking"

100.00%

Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)

Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses

thatCount	0
totalSentences	92
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Paragraph length variance

Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts

totalParagraphs

mean

52.95

std

35.37

0.668

sampleLengths

0	108
1	89
2	32
3	45
4	52
5	79
6	27
7	29
8	34
9	87
10	17
11	29
12	109
13	22
14	6
15	18
16	53
17	59
18	11
19	73
20	133

97.64%

Passive voice overuse

Target: ≤2% passive sentences

passiveCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"was designed"
1	"was frozen"

100.00%

Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse

Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs

pastProgressiveCount

totalVerbs

196

matches

0	"were looking"
1	"was ticking"

100.00%

Em-dash & semicolon overuse

Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons

emDashCount	0
semicolonCount	0
flaggedSentences	0
totalSentences	92
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Purple prose (modifier overload)

Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking

wordCount	835
adjectiveStacks	0
stackExamples	(empty)
adverbCount	21
adverbRatio	0.025149700598802394
lyAdverbCount	8
lyAdverbRatio	0.009580838323353293

100.00%

Repeated phrase echo

Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)

totalSentences	92
echoCount	0
echoWords	(empty)

100.00%

Sentence length variance

Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts

totalSentences

mean

12.09

std

8.04

0.666

sampleLengths

0	14
1	18
2	23
3	16
4	16
5	21
6	10
7	27
8	17
9	13
10	22
11	8
12	17
13	7
14	12
15	26
16	5
17	2
18	4
19	23
20	12
21	13
22	2
23	30
24	13
25	20
26	14
27	6
28	2
29	4
30	15
31	10
32	5
33	5
34	9
35	16
36	7
37	5
38	3
39	3
40	8
41	13
42	22
43	13
44	31
45	9
46	5
47	3
48	10
49	9

51.81%

Sentence opener variety

Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers

consecutiveRepeats	4
diversityRatio	0.33695652173913043
totalSentences	92
uniqueOpeners	31

38.76%

Adverb-first sentence starts

Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb

adverbCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Instead, the Fae-Forged Blade at"

ratio

0.012

71.16%

Pronoun-first sentence starts

Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun

pronounCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"It was not a shift"
1	"She reached into her coat"
2	"It lay dormant against her"
3	"Their voice sounded like dry"
4	"I can see the roots,"
5	"She adjusted the strap of"
6	"Her pale lavender eyes held"
7	"You think you are walking"
8	"She had read the reports"
9	"It was a perpetual twilight,"
10	"She checked her watch."
11	"I can taste the magic."
12	"It is sweet."
13	"She held it out, watching"
14	"It was designed to cut"
15	"We are looking for a"
16	"You seek the door that"
17	"She thought of her father"
18	"It had only impressions."
19	"She looked down at the"

ratio

0.372

47.21%

Subject-first sentence starts

Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject

subjectCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"The air changed the moment"
1	"It was not a shift"
2	"Aurora Carter felt the pressure"
3	"She reached into her coat"
4	"It lay dormant against her"
5	"The Half-Fae seer moved through"
6	"Aurora glanced at Nyx, who"
7	"The Shade’s form was a"
8	"Their voice sounded like dry"
9	"The ground remembers where you"
10	"I can see the roots,"
11	"She adjusted the strap of"
12	"This is just a park."
13	"Isolde stopped and turned."
14	"Her pale lavender eyes held"
15	"Time is a river that"
16	"You think you are walking"
17	"She had read the reports"
18	"The sky above was not"
19	"It was a perpetual twilight,"

ratio

0.826

100.00%

Subordinate conjunction sentence starts

Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction

subConjCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"If this were Hel, if"
1	"To stand here with a"

ratio

0.023

44.82%

Technical jargon density

Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns

analyzedSentences

technicalSentenceCount

matches

0	"Instead, the Fae-Forged Blade at her hip hummed, a low vibration that traveled up her arm and settled in her teeth."
1	"She adjusted the strap of her messenger bag, feeling the weight of the delivery box inside, a mundane anchor in a world that felt increasingly untethered."
2	"It was a perpetual twilight, a bruised purple bleeding into gold, where wildflowers bloomed in clusters that defied the season."
3	"Roses with petals of obsidian grew alongside daisies that glowed with their own bioluminescence."
4	"Nyx extended a hand, their fingers dissolving into smoke before reforming."
5	"She focused on the cold weight of the blade, the steady rhythm of her own heartbeat, and the faint, comforting pulse of the Heartstone that remained silent, tel…"
6	"The trees closed in around them, their branches weaving together to form a canopy that blocked out the sky, sealing them in a world where the rules of physics w…"

100.00%

Useless dialogue additions

Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments

totalTags	1
uselessAdditionCount	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)

Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags

totalTags

77.8652%