Run: 2026-02-25-01KJBK6KC36BNYZB4S76XS2SA6

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58.7s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The glass hit the counter with a sharp crack that echoed off the maps on the wall. Aurora stared at the rim where a hairline fracture had appeared, her thumb pressing against the cold, wet surface. She did not look up when the heavy oak door creaked open, letting in a draft that smelled of rain and old tobacco. "You always did have a heavy hand with the stemware." Aurora froze. Her breath hitched in her throat, a sharp intake that tasted of stale beer and dust. She knew that voice. It had been five years since she heard it, five years since the last time she saw the grey-streaked auburn hair or the neat, trimmed beard that hid a mouth full of secrets. Silas Blackwood stood in the doorway, his silhouette framed by the green neon sign of the Raven's Nest outside. He moved with a slight limp, the old knee injury favouring his left leg as he stepped into the dim light. "Silas." The name felt foreign on her tongue, dry and brittle. "I didn't know you were back." "I didn't tell anyone." He walked to the bar, the floorboards groaning under his weight. He wore a dark coat that had seen better decades, the collar turned up against the damp. "I heard you were living upstairs. I assumed you'd come down eventually." "I've been busy." Aurora wiped the counter with a rag, her movements jerky. She avoided his hazel eyes. They were the same, yet different. Harder. The light in them had dimmed, replaced by a flat, calculating stillness. "Work. Delivery runs. The usual." "The usual doesn't explain the silence, Rory." Silas leaned against the bar, his right hand resting on the wood. The silver signet ring on his finger caught the low light. "You vanished from Cardiff. You vanished from London. You vanished from the people who actually cared." "I had to leave." She kept her eyes on the crack in the glass. "You know why." "I know you ran." He reached out, his fingers brushing the edge of the cracked glass. "But running doesn't make you invisible. It just makes you a target for longer." Aurora dropped the rag. It landed on the floor with a wet slap. "I'm not a target anymore. Evan is gone." "Is he?" Silas tilted his head. "Or did you just think you were safe enough to stop looking over your shoulder?" The air in the bar grew heavy. The smell of copper and old wood seemed to intensify. Aurora felt the small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist throb, a phantom pain from a childhood accident that felt like a brand now. She had thought she had left that life behind when she fled to London. She had thought Silas was just a landlord, a quiet man with a limp who kept the bar open. She had not known he was the Spymaster. She had not known he was watching. "You knew." Her voice was a whisper. "You knew about him. You knew about the flat." "I knew about everything." Silas pushed off the bar. He moved around it, the limp more pronounced now as he closed the distance between them. "That is why I retired. To keep people like you safe. To keep the nest quiet." "And now?" "Now the nest is buzzing." He stopped inches from her. The scent of him was different too. No longer just tobacco and whiskey, but something metallic. Gun oil. Dried blood. "Someone found the ledger, Rory. The one I buried in Prague." Aurora stepped back, her hip hitting the stool. "What ledger?" "The one that proves who paid for the operation that cost me my leg." His hand moved to his pocket. "And who paid for your ex to find you in Cardiff." The silence stretched, tight as a wire. The hum of the fridge in the corner seemed to roar in her ears. Aurora's heart hammered against her ribs. She looked at the door, then at the bookshelf behind the bar that hid the secret room. "They're coming." Silas said it flatly. No panic. Just a statement of fact. "Who?" "The men who own the ledger." He pulled a small, black pistol from his coat. He did not aim it at her. He aimed it at the door. "And they know you're here." Aurora's hand flew to her mouth. "How do they know I'm here?" "Because you're the only one left who remembers the name." Silas turned his head slightly, his eyes fixed on the entrance. "Because you're the only one who can open the safe." The heavy thud of boots on the pavement outside made the floor vibrate. The neon sign outside flickered, casting a sickly green pulse across the room. "Get down." Silas raised the gun. The door handle turned.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags14
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences34
tagDensity0.412
leniency0.824
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
93.77% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount802
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
43.89% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount802
totalAiIsms9
found
0
word"echoed"
count1
1
word"weight"
count1
2
word"calculating"
count1
3
word"silence"
count2
4
word"throb"
count1
5
word"whisper"
count1
6
word"flickered"
count1
7
word"pulse"
count1
highlights
0"echoed"
1"weight"
2"calculating"
3"silence"
4"throb"
5"whisper"
6"flickered"
7"pulse"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences57
matches(empty)
92.73% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences57
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences76
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen34
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords802
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions3
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
79.82% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions21
wordCount570
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity1.4
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Blackwood1
Raven1
Nest1
Aurora8
London1
Silas8
Spymaster1
persons
0"Blackwood"
1"Raven"
2"Aurora"
3"Silas"
places
0"London"
globalScore0.798
windowScore1
89.02% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences41
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"felt like a brand now"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount802
matches(empty)
78.95% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences76
matches
0"knew that voice"
1"left that life"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs27
mean29.7
std23.25
cv0.783
sampleLengths
059
110
295
317
444
542
646
717
830
921
1021
1189
1216
1341
142
1541
1610
1731
1844
1913
201
2133
2212
2331
2426
256
264
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences57
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs86
matches
0"was watching"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences76
ratio0
matches(empty)
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount572
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount13
adverbRatio0.022727272727272728
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.005244755244755245
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences76
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences76
mean10.55
std6.34
cv0.601
sampleLengths
017
119
223
310
42
516
64
733
819
921
1011
116
1215
1317
1412
1513
165
176
181
1912
205
2119
2211
2316
2414
253
2616
2714
284
299
308
316
3215
337
3410
3524
3614
3719
388
397
407
419
429
4316
4416
452
4610
477
489
492
45.61% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats12
diversityRatio0.3684210526315789
totalSentences76
uniqueOpeners28
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences52
matches
0"No longer just tobacco and"
1"Just a statement of fact."
ratio0.038
35.38% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount24
totalSentences52
matches
0"She did not look up"
1"Her breath hitched in her"
2"She knew that voice."
3"It had been five years"
4"He moved with a slight"
5"He walked to the bar,"
6"He wore a dark coat"
7"She avoided his hazel eyes."
8"They were the same, yet"
9"She kept her eyes on"
10"He reached out, his fingers"
11"It landed on the floor"
12"She had thought she had"
13"She had thought Silas was"
14"She had not known he"
15"She had not known he"
16"Her voice was a whisper"
17"He moved around it, the"
18"He stopped inches from her"
19"His hand moved to his"
ratio0.462
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount50
totalSentences52
matches
0"The glass hit the counter"
1"Aurora stared at the rim"
2"She did not look up"
3"Her breath hitched in her"
4"She knew that voice."
5"It had been five years"
6"Silas Blackwood stood in the"
7"He moved with a slight"
8"The name felt foreign on"
9"He walked to the bar,"
10"He wore a dark coat"
11"Aurora wiped the counter with"
12"She avoided his hazel eyes."
13"They were the same, yet"
14"The light in them had"
15"Silas leaned against the bar,"
16"The silver signet ring on"
17"She kept her eyes on"
18"He reached out, his fingers"
19"Aurora dropped the rag."
ratio0.962
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences52
matches(empty)
ratio0
30.08% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences19
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"Her breath hitched in her throat, a sharp intake that tasted of stale beer and dust."
1"It had been five years since she heard it, five years since the last time she saw the grey-streaked auburn hair or the neat, trimmed beard that hid a mouth full…"
2"Aurora felt the small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist throb, a phantom pain from a childhood accident that felt like a brand now."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags14
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"He walked, the floorboards groaning under his weight"
1"Aurora wiped, her movements jerky"
2"Silas leaned, his right hand resting on the wood"
3"He reached out, his fingers brushing the edge of the cracked glass"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags1
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences34
tagDensity0.029
leniency0.059
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
79.4419%