Run: 2026-02-25-01KJBKP9Y7HHYDJMVMXDC7656T

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Duration:
33.0s
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$0.012149
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Alibaba

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The glass shattered against the wall. Shards of amber liquid splashed across the mahogany table, staining the paper maps that covered the surface like fresh blood. Aurora stepped back, her boots scraping against the wooden floorboards. She kept her eyes locked on the man standing opposite her. Julian smiled. It was a thin, stretched expression that didn't reach his eyes. He held his hands open, palms up, as if he hadn't thrown the bottle himself. "That was your father's favourite," Julian said. Aurora didn't answer. She stared at the liquid pooling around the legs of the table. The smell of the spilled drink cut through the haze of stale beer and old leather. It was expensive scotch. The kind you drink to forget, not to celebrate. "You always were good at breaking things," Julian said. "Better than me. Better than anyone in that law lecture hall." Aurora looked at him. She remembered the Julian from Cardiff. He was smaller then, wearing a tie that was too long and a suit that didn't fit right. Now he wore a charcoal jacket with a silver watch that caught the dim light of the bar. The gold chain on his neck glinted like a bite mark. "I didn't come here to catch up," Aurora said. Her voice stayed low. She kept her left wrist in her right hand pocket. The crescent scar there itched whenever the air got heavy. It always did before trouble started. "Nobody comes here to catch up, Rory." He spat her nickname like it was a coin he'd been chewing on. "That name died when you ran away. You left without a word. I spent three years trying to find your parents." Aurora's jaw tightened. She stepped closer. The floorboards creaked under her weight. Behind the bar, a tall man wiped a glass with a rag. He didn't look up. Silas Blackwood. He knew exactly where they stood in the room. He knew exactly who stood on the other side. Silas had eyes that saw too much and a limp that hid a weapon. "You should have told them I was dead," Aurora said. Julian laughed. The sound was sharp, like dry leaves skittering on stone. "Oh, that would have saved you a lot of paperwork." He leaned forward. The smell of mint and tobacco rolled off him. "I heard about Evan. I heard about the way he treated you. I heard about the way he disappeared." Aurora's hand moved to her pocket. She touched the cold metal of the knife she kept there. "Evan is gone." "Gone isn't the same as dead," Julian said. "Some things don't vanish just because you move to London. You think you can hide in a flat above a pub and pretend you're someone else? That's naive, Rory. You were always a little naive." Silas turned a corner of a map with his thumb. The rag in his hand moved slower. The glass he held hung from his fingers, dripping. "Tell me what you want," Aurora said. Julian pulled a folded piece of paper from his jacket. He placed it on the table. It landed with a soft thud next to the spilled drink. "Is this what you wanted? To leave everything behind?" Julian asked. Aurora looked at the paper. It was a photograph. A black and white image of a woman standing on a street corner. The street was in Cardiff. The woman looked like the mother she hadn't seen in five years. She wore a red coat. A coat her mother never wore. "I didn't know she was coming here," Aurora whispered. "Of course you didn't," Julian said. "That was the point." The door to the back room behind the bookshelf swung open. Silas stepped out. He didn't walk. He hopped on his right leg and dragged his left. The silver signet ring on his right hand caught the light as he gestured for the two people at the table to stop. "Julian," Silas said. The name hung in the air like smoke. Julian didn't flinch. He didn't look up at Silas. He looked at Aurora. "I thought Silas was retired." "I am," Silas said. He stopped three paces from the table. "I'm just cleaning up the mess. People don't clean up after themselves anymore. They leave it for others." "Rory here is my responsibility," Julian said. He tapped the table with his knuckles. "She owes me." "I owe no one," Aurora said. Her heart beat faster. The rhythm was loud in her ears. She could hear the hum of the fridge in the kitchen. She could hear the distant traffic outside on the pavement. "Then pay him," Silas said. Julian looked at Silas for the first time. The hazel eyes met the grey-streaked gaze. There was a history between them. A history that smelled of Prague and bad decisions. "You don't know who you're talking about," Julian said. "I know who he was," Silas said. "I know what he did. I know what he plans to do." Aurora looked between them. The air in the bar grew heavy. The smell of copper filled her nose. Blood. Recent. "Sit down," Silas said to Julian. Julian stood. He didn't sit. He smiled again. That thin, stretched expression. "You should have let her go," Julian said. "She was weak." "She's stronger than you," Silas said. Julian pulled a small black object from his pocket. He placed it on the table next to the photograph. It wasn't a gun. It was a remote. A small square button surrounded by a red casing. "Is that the bomb you talked about?" Aurora asked. Julian didn't answer. He looked at Silas. "I have a car waiting outside. The one with the engine running. If you move, the signal stops." Silas didn't move. He looked at the remote. "You think this scares us?" "I think this changes everything," Julian said. The door to the Raven's Nest opened. A man in a black coat stepped inside. He didn't look at Julian. He looked at the remote. He looked at the photograph. "You shouldn't have come back here," the stranger said. Julian turned. His hand hovered over the button. "I was promised payment," Julian said. "Payment is done," the stranger said. He reached into his coat. Julian's finger tightened on the trigger. "Don't," the stranger said. Silas moved. His leg dragged forward, the weight of his old injury forgotten for a second. He grabbed the table. He pulled it forward. The bottle of scotch tipped over. The glass shattered. The glass on the table hit the floor. The stranger dropped to his knees. Julian pressed the button. The sound was loud. A rush of air hit the room. Silas pushed Aurora down. The floor shook. The stranger pulled a weapon. The weapon wasn't a gun. It was a knife. The blade gleamed under the neon green sign. Silas kicked Julian. Julian fell backward. The stranger ran for the door. Aurora looked at the remote. It was still on the table. It wasn't broken. The button hadn't pressed. Julian lay on the floor. He laughed. "You think this is over?" Aurora looked at him. She looked at the door. The stranger was gone. Julian pointed at her. "You're next." Silas stood up. He pulled a gun from his waistband. He pointed it at Julian. "Don't do it," Aurora said. Silas didn't lower the gun. "He's done it already." Julian smiled. "Not yet." The stranger came back through the door. He held a second remote. He pressed it. The lights went out. Aurora felt the floor drop beneath her.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags27
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences45
tagDensity0.6
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1267
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
84.21% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1267
totalAiIsms4
found
0
word"shattered"
count2
1
word"weight"
count2
highlights
0"shattered"
1"weight"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences162
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences162
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences179
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen35
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1267
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions26
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions74
wordCount954
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity3.14
worstName"Julian"
maxWindowNameDensity6
worstWindowName"Julian"
discoveredNames
Aurora19
Julian30
Cardiff2
Blackwood1
Silas19
Prague1
Raven1
Nest1
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Julian"
2"Blackwood"
3"Silas"
4"Nest"
places
0"Cardiff"
1"Prague"
2"Raven"
globalScore0
windowScore0
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences69
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"looked like the mother she hadn't seen in"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1267
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences179
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs68
mean18.63
std15.08
cv0.809
sampleLengths
047
128
27
344
420
557
639
741
862
910
1053
1120
1243
1326
147
1527
1611
1750
189
1910
2050
2111
2218
2329
2417
2538
265
2730
289
2919
3020
316
3212
3311
346
3536
369
3725
3813
397
4030
419
428
436
4411
456
464
4724
4817
496
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences162
matches
0"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs196
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences179
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount955
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount13
adverbRatio0.013612565445026177
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.0020942408376963353
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences179
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences179
mean7.08
std4.68
cv0.661
sampleLengths
06
120
210
311
42
511
615
77
83
912
1016
114
129
139
1411
154
166
1718
1818
1911
209
214
2210
2310
246
2520
2621
273
283
296
3012
314
322
339
349
3514
3610
372
3810
3913
409
4119
426
4311
443
458
4635
4710
487
499
37.15% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats23
diversityRatio0.18994413407821228
totalSentences179
uniqueOpeners34
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences130
matches(empty)
ratio0
56.92% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount53
totalSentences130
matches
0"She kept her eyes locked"
1"It was a thin, stretched"
2"He held his hands open,"
3"She stared at the liquid"
4"It was expensive scotch."
5"She remembered the Julian from"
6"He was smaller then, wearing"
7"Her voice stayed low."
8"She kept her left wrist"
9"It always did before trouble"
10"He spat her nickname like"
11"She stepped closer."
12"He didn't look up."
13"He knew exactly where they"
14"He knew exactly who stood"
15"He leaned forward"
16"She touched the cold metal"
17"He placed it on the"
18"It landed with a soft"
19"It was a photograph."
ratio0.408
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount127
totalSentences130
matches
0"The glass shattered against the"
1"Shards of amber liquid splashed"
2"Aurora stepped back, her boots"
3"She kept her eyes locked"
4"It was a thin, stretched"
5"He held his hands open,"
6"Aurora didn't answer."
7"She stared at the liquid"
8"The smell of the spilled"
9"It was expensive scotch."
10"The kind you drink to"
11"Aurora looked at him."
12"She remembered the Julian from"
13"He was smaller then, wearing"
14"The gold chain on his"
15"Her voice stayed low."
16"She kept her left wrist"
17"The crescent scar there itched"
18"It always did before trouble"
19"He spat her nickname like"
ratio0.977
38.46% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences130
matches
0"Now he wore a charcoal"
ratio0.008
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences28
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"He held his hands open, palms up, as if he hadn't thrown the bottle himself."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags27
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags26
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"He spat (spit)"
1"Aurora whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences45
tagDensity0.578
leniency1
rawRatio0.077
effectiveRatio0.077
83.8917%