Run: 2026-02-26-01KJCRVKT15HR7DEB92H98CNKW

Run Details

Model:
LFM2 24B
Duration:
30.5s
Cost:
$0.000324
Provider:
Together

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rory’s knuckles rapped against the doorframe, sharp enough to echo through the narrow corridor of Silas’ bar. She paused, breath held, listening to the rhythm of boots inside—three quick steps, then a hesitation. Her heart thudded once, hard, against her ribs. “Come in,” she called, voice steady despite the storm inside. The door swung inward, revealing Lucien’s silhouette framed by hallway light. His hair gleamed platinum in the dim glow, the sharp line of his jaw softened only slightly by the faint shadow of stubble. One gloved hand rested casually on the door, the other tucked behind his back, fingers brushing the ivory handle of his cane. “You didn’t answer my messages,” he said, stepping forward. His tone carried neither accusation nor warmth, just the quiet certainty of someone accustomed to being obeyed. “I wasn’t expecting you,” Rory replied, watching him cross the threshold. The scent of leather and something darker—perhaps cedar or ink—followed him. “What brings you here?” Lucien’s gaze flickered over her face, lingering on the crescent scar at her wrist. “You left that behind.” Her fingers twitched near the strap of her bag. “You remember that?” “I remember everything you leave behind.” His voice dropped lower, almost a murmur. “Especially when it’s meant to be forgotten.” Rory swallowed. “You’re not here to stir up trouble.” “No,” he said, moving past her into the flat. “I’m here because trouble found me first.” The living room was cluttered with books stacked haphazardly, scrolls spilling from a wooden chest. A single lamp cast warm pools of light across scattered papers. Rory’s eyes traced the familiar chaos—the half-empty mug on the side table, the faint smudge of dust on the windowsill. It looked untouched since yesterday. Lucien set his cane against the wall and tilted his head toward the couch. “Sit.” She hesitated. “You could’ve knocked.” “I didn’t think you’d let me in.” His gaze met hers, steady and unreadable. “But here we are.” Rory sank onto the edge of the couch, arms crossed. The fabric of her jacket brushed against the armrest, rough beneath her fingertips. “Why now?” “Because I needed to see you.” His voice was calm, but there was something raw beneath it—something she recognized. “Because I couldn’t stop thinking about what happened in Cardiff. About what we left unsaid.” She exhaled sharply, sharp enough to ruffle the curtains. “You think I wanted this?” “I think you wanted to survive.” He stepped closer, close enough that she could see the faint scar along his temple, a pale line that mirrored her own. “And I think you still do.” Rory’s throat tightened. “Survival isn’t enough.” Lucien’s fingers flexed against the cane’s handle. “Neither is running.” The silence stretched between them, thick with memories neither wanted to name. Rory’s pulse hammered in her ears. She remembered the way his eyes had searched hers in that dim pub, the way his hand had brushed hers when he reached for the whiskey bottle. Memories that had festered like wounds. “You knew,” she said suddenly, voice low. “You knew about the job.” His jaw tightened. “I knew about everything.” “And you didn’t say anything.” “I didn’t want to.” His gaze dropped to her lap. “Not then. Not like this.” Rory’s fingers curled into the fabric of her sleeve. “You could’ve warned me.” “I tried.” His voice cracked slightly. “But warnings don’t change things.” She turned to face him fully. The lamplight caught the gold flecks in his eyes, made them gleam like coins. “Then why come here now?” Lucien’s breath hitched. “Because I couldn’t live with the thought of you disappearing again.” The words hung between them, fragile and dangerous. Rory studied his face—the tension in his brow, the way his lips pressed into a thin line. She saw the man she had once loved, the man who had broken her heart and then vanished without explanation. “You left without a word,” she said softly. “Without explanation.” “I didn’t know how.” His voice was barely audible now. “Not at first.” Rory’s chest ached. “You left me alone.” “I know.” His gaze dropped to her hands, clenched in her lap. “I know.” The room felt smaller suddenly, the air thick with everything they hadn’t said. She could feel the weight of his presence pressing against her, the unspoken truths hanging like smoke. “Do you want to talk about it?” she asked, though she already knew the answer. Lucien exhaled slowly. “I want to understand.” Rory shook her head. “There’s nothing left to understand.” He stepped closer, close enough that she could feel the heat radiating from his body. “Then let me try.” She didn’t move away. His hand lifted slowly, fingers brushing the edge of her wrist. The touch was deliberate, careful. She could feel the faint tremor in his palm. “Rory,” he whispered. “Please.” The name slipped from her lips before she could stop it. “Don’t.” His eyes darkened. “You don’t get to decide that.” She stood abruptly, chair scraping against the floor. “I don’t want to hear it.” Lucien watched her, expression unreadable. “Then stay.” She turned to leave. “Wait.” His voice stopped her. “Just… stay.” She froze. The silence stretched, taut as a wire. Then, slowly, she sank back onto the couch. Her heart pounded in her throat. Lucien moved without hesitation, closing the distance between them. His hand settled on her knee, gentle but firm. She didn’t pull away. “Tell me what you need,” he murmured. She swallowed hard. “I don’t know.” His thumb traced the edge of her sleeve. “Then let me ask you something.” “What?” “Have you ever regretted running?” She stared at him. “Yes.” “And yet you came back.” She looked up, eyes searching his. “Why?” He exhaled through his nose. “Because I realized I never stopped caring.” The words struck her like a blow. She closed her eyes. “You left me.” “I know.” His voice was rough now. “And I’m sorry.” She opened her eyes. “Sorry doesn’t fix anything.” “No,” he agreed. “But maybe it’s a start.” The space between them felt charged, electric. Rory studied his face—the vulnerability in his eyes, the way his breath hitched when she looked at him. “Stay,” she said finally. He nodded once. Slowly, carefully, he reached for her hand. Their fingers intertwined. Outside, the city hummed, distant and indifferent. Inside, the silence was no longer heavy—it was alive. And for the first time in months, neither of them moved to leave.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
84.06% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags20
adverbTagCount4
adverbTags
0"she said suddenly [suddenly]"
1"His voice cracked slightly [slightly]"
2"she said softly [softly]"
3"she said finally [finally]"
dialogueSentences69
tagDensity0.29
leniency0.58
rawRatio0.2
effectiveRatio0.116
49.07% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1080
totalAiIsmAdverbs11
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count2
1
adverb"sharply"
count1
2
adverb"suddenly"
count2
3
adverb"softly"
count1
4
adverb"slowly"
count4
5
adverb"carefully"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"sharply"
2"suddenly"
3"softly"
4"slowly"
5"carefully"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
7.41% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1080
totalAiIsms20
found
0
word"echo"
count1
1
word"warmth"
count1
2
word"flickered"
count1
3
word"traced"
count2
4
word"familiar"
count1
5
word"unreadable"
count2
6
word"silence"
count3
7
word"pulse"
count1
8
word"tension"
count1
9
word"could feel"
count3
10
word"weight"
count1
11
word"unspoken"
count1
12
word"charged"
count1
13
word"electric"
count1
highlights
0"echo"
1"warmth"
2"flickered"
3"traced"
4"familiar"
5"unreadable"
6"silence"
7"pulse"
8"tension"
9"could feel"
10"weight"
11"unspoken"
12"charged"
13"electric"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences93
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences93
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences141
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen28
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1072
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions15
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
74.24% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions20
wordCount792
uniqueNames2
maxNameDensity1.52
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Lucien8
Rory12
persons
0"Lucien"
1"Rory"
places(empty)
globalScore0.742
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences60
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.933
wordCount1072
matches
0"neither accusation nor"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences141
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs70
mean15.31
std11.9
cv0.777
sampleLengths
041
110
256
326
426
518
612
720
89
916
1051
1115
125
1318
1425
1534
1614
1734
186
1910
2051
2112
227
235
2415
2513
2611
2725
2814
2945
3010
3113
327
3314
3430
3515
367
379
3819
394
4025
414
4212
439
4414
457
464
477
489
4914
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences93
matches
0"being obeyed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs148
matches(empty)
1.01% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount8
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences7
totalSentences141
ratio0.05
matches
0"She paused, breath held, listening to the rhythm of boots inside—three quick steps, then a hesitation."
1"The scent of leather and something darker—perhaps cedar or ink—followed him."
2"Rory’s eyes traced the familiar chaos—the half-empty mug on the side table, the faint smudge of dust on the windowsill."
3"“Because I needed to see you.” His voice was calm, but there was something raw beneath it—something she recognized."
4"Rory studied his face—the tension in his brow, the way his lips pressed into a thin line."
5"Rory studied his face—the vulnerability in his eyes, the way his breath hitched when she looked at him."
6"Inside, the silence was no longer heavy—it was alive."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount166
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount5
adverbRatio0.030120481927710843
lyAdverbCount0
lyAdverbRatio0
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences141
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences141
mean7.6
std5.41
cv0.712
sampleLengths
017
116
28
310
411
523
622
79
817
911
1011
114
1214
134
149
153
1613
177
182
197
209
217
2215
2311
2420
255
2614
271
282
293
3014
314
3210
3313
342
3519
3615
379
385
3928
406
413
423
437
443
4512
466
4727
486
497
47.87% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.2978723404255319
totalSentences141
uniqueOpeners42
76.63% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences87
matches
0"Then, slowly, she sank back"
1"Slowly, carefully, he reached for"
ratio0.023
0.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount48
totalSentences87
matches
0"She paused, breath held, listening"
1"Her heart thudded once, hard,"
2"she called, voice steady despite"
3"His hair gleamed platinum in"
4"he said, stepping forward"
5"His tone carried neither accusation"
6"Her fingers twitched near the"
7"His voice dropped lower, almost"
8"he said, moving past her"
9"It looked untouched since yesterday."
10"His gaze met hers, steady"
11"His voice was calm, but"
12"She exhaled sharply, sharp enough"
13"He stepped closer, close enough"
14"She remembered the way his"
15"she said suddenly, voice low"
16"His jaw tightened."
17"His gaze dropped to her"
18"His voice cracked slightly"
19"She turned to face him"
ratio0.552
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount81
totalSentences87
matches
0"Rory’s knuckles rapped against the"
1"She paused, breath held, listening"
2"Her heart thudded once, hard,"
3"she called, voice steady despite"
4"The door swung inward, revealing"
5"His hair gleamed platinum in"
6"he said, stepping forward"
7"His tone carried neither accusation"
8"Rory replied, watching him cross"
9"The scent of leather and"
10"Lucien’s gaze flickered over her"
11"Her fingers twitched near the"
12"His voice dropped lower, almost"
13"he said, moving past her"
14"The living room was cluttered"
15"A single lamp cast warm"
16"Rory’s eyes traced the familiar"
17"It looked untouched since yesterday."
18"Lucien set his cane against"
19"His gaze met hers, steady"
ratio0.931
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences87
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences26
technicalSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
75.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags20
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"she called, voice steady despite the storm inside"
1"she said suddenly, voice low"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags11
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"he whispered (whisper)"
1"he murmured (murmur)"
2"he agreed (agree)"
dialogueSentences69
tagDensity0.159
leniency0.319
rawRatio0.273
effectiveRatio0.087
77.1765%