Run: 2026-02-26-01KJCRW0JFN0A88FCCK2CPDQ8X

Run Details

Model:
LFM2 24B
Duration:
39.8s
Cost:
$0.000305
Provider:
Together

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The air tasted of iron and honey as Aurora stepped across the threshold, her boots sinking slightly into moss that pulsed like a heartbeat beneath her soles. Nyx drifted behind her, a silhouette stitched from twilight, their form flickering as if caught between two realities. Isolde moved last, her silver hair trailing like liquid moonlight, eyes fixed on the horizon where the sky bled amber and violet. The ground beneath them was neither earth nor stone but something in between—a surface that shifted underfoot, warm one moment, cold the next, as though the land itself breathed. They had come seeking the Heartstone Pendant, though none had spoken its name aloud. Aurora’s fingers brushed the rough chain around her neck, the gemstone within thrumming faintly, a rhythm that matched the pulse of her own pulse. The air hummed with a sound just beyond hearing, a vibration that made her teeth ache. Nyx tilted their head, their glowing violet eyes reflecting the strange light. “It remembers,” they whispered, their voice a breath against the wind. The forest around them was not a forest at all, but a labyrinth of towering vines that coiled like serpents, their leaves shimmering with bioluminescent veins. Flowers bloomed in colors that defied description—some pulsed with internal fire, others exhaled mist that smelled of forgotten dreams. The ground was alive, roots twisting into arches that framed glimpses of a sky that did not belong to any world they knew. Above, the sun hung low and swollen, casting long shadows that moved independently of their sources. Aurora paused, her breath catching. “This isn’t Dymas,” she murmured, though the word felt inadequate. The air here was thicker, heavier, as though each inhalation required effort. Nyx reached out, fingertips grazing a vine that recoiled at their touch, then reformed into a spiral pattern. “It’s… older,” they said, their tone unreadable. “Older than the Veil.” Isolde knelt, brushing her hand over the moss. It yielded like water, then solidified beneath her palm, leaving no trace. “The Fae Grove’s time moves differently,” she said, more to herself than the others. “But this… this is something else entirely.” Her gaze lifted to the canopy above, where trees with bark like polished obsidian stretched toward the amber sky. Their branches were interwoven with threads of light, strands that hummed in harmony with the Heartstone’s pulse. They pressed forward, the path unfolding beneath them as if the land itself guided their steps. The silence here was not empty but dense, filled with the weight of unseen eyes. Somewhere in the distance, a sound echoed—low, resonant, like a bell struck by a hand that did not exist. Aurora’s skin prickled. Nyx’s form flickered more violently now, their edges blurring as they strained to focus. “It’s watching,” they said, voice strained. “Not with malice. With… curiosity.” A sudden gust swept through, carrying with it the scent of burnt sugar and ozone. The flowers along the path burst into bloom, their petals unfurling to reveal tiny, winged creatures that flitted between the blossoms. They were beautiful, but their wings left trails of smoke that lingered too long, dissolving into the air like ghosts. Aurora reached out, but Nyx grabbed her wrist, their grip surprisingly firm. “Don’t touch,” they hissed. “They’re not of this place.” The group halted, the tension thickening until it felt like a physical thing. Isolde studied the trees, her pale lavender eyes narrowing. “The Heartstone reacts to proximity,” she said slowly. “It’s drawn to the Veil’s remnants.” Her words hung in the air, heavy with meaning. The pendant beneath Aurora’s shirt seemed to burn now, a heat that spread through her ribs. Nyx turned, their shadow stretching unnaturally across the ground. “The Veil is thin here,” they said. “Too thin. The boundaries are fraying.” They pointed upward, where the sky had begun to fracture, revealing glimpses of a realm beyond—vast, starless, and alive with movement. Aurora followed their gaze, her throat dry. “What’s out there?” Before anyone could answer, the ground trembled. A low groan rose from the earth, and the vines around them began to writhe, their tendrils lashing out like serpents. Nyx vanished into the shadows, reappearing atop a nearby trunk, their form now solid, human-like. “Run,” they shouted, though their voice was swallowed by the growing chaos. Aurora stumbled backward, tripping over roots that twisted into snapping jaws. Nyx lunged, their shadowy body coalescing into a blade of darkness that sliced through the air. The creature—a thing of tangled limbs and too many eyes—screeched, dissolving into smoke. Isolde followed, her Fae-Forged Blade gleaming with a cold, silver light. Each strike sent ripples through the air, distorting reality itself. The blade passed through the creature’s form, leaving only a trail of fading embers. When the last fragment of the beast vanished, the forest fell silent. The air smelled of scorched earth and something sweeter, almost floral. Nyx landed gracefully, their form flickering again. “It was a guardian,” they said, voice hollow. “Of the Heartstone.” Aurora’s hands shook as she clutched the pendant closer. “Then why did it lead us here?” Isolde’s gaze drifted to the sky, where the amber light had deepened to a bruised purple. “Because the Veil is weakening,” she said. “And when it breaks…” She trailed off, her words lost in the rustle of leaves. Nyx descended from the tree, their shadow merging with the ground. “We must find the source,” they said. “Before whatever waits beyond decides to come through.” They pressed on, the path now clearer, as if the land itself had chosen their direction. The trees grew taller, their trunks etched with symbols that pulsed in time with the Heartstone’s rhythm. Aurora felt the pendant grow heavier, as though it were pulling her forward, urging her toward something inevitable. Then, a sound—a song. Not sung, but felt, vibrating in their bones. It was ancient, mournful, yet strangely comforting. Nyx froze, their form dimming. “That’s the Fae,” they whispered. “They don’t sing lightly.” Isolde’s eyes widened. “The Grove’s heart,” she breathed. “If we reach it…” The ground beneath them softened, becoming a pool of liquid light. They stood at the edge of a vast expanse, a lake that reflected not the sky above but a swirling cosmos of stars and shadows. At its center floated a structure—a tower of black crystal, its surface etched with the same glowing runes they’d seen on the trees. The Heartstone Pendant burned hotter now, its pulse syncing with the rhythm of the lake’s surface. Aurora approached the water’s edge, her reflection warped by the shifting light. For a moment, she saw not herself but a figure cloaked in shadow, their face obscured. The vision vanished as quickly as it came. Nyx stepped beside her, their voice barely audible. “It’s showing you the Veil,” they said. “The boundary between worlds.” Isolde knelt at the water’s edge, her fingers brushing the surface. It rippled, revealing glimpses of other realms—fields of gold, cities of bone, oceans that sang in languages long dead. “The Heartstone,” she said slowly, “is a key. But keys require locks.” Aurora’s breath hitched. The pendant’s warmth had become a fever. She reached out, her hand hovering over the water, when a hand closed around her wrist. Nyx’s grip was firm, their touch cold as winter. “Don’t,” they warned. “It’s not what you think.” But it was too late. The pendant slipped from her grasp, sinking into the lake with a sound like a sigh. The water stilled, then erupted. From the depths rose a figure—tall, slender, its form composed of shifting shadows and starlight. Its eyes were twin voids, and when it spoke, its voice was the echo of a thousand whispers. “You have come far,” it said, though its mouth did not move. “But the Veil cannot be mended by those who do not understand its price.” Aurora’s heart pounded. “What price?” The figure raised a hand, and the air around them rippled. Images flooded her mind—memories not her own: a child’s laughter, a woman’s tears, a crown of thorns dissolving into ash. The cost of crossing the Veil, she realized. A piece of oneself, given freely or taken by force. Nyx stepped forward, their shadow stretching to form a barrier between Aurora and the entity. “We’ll pay it,” they said. “Whatever it takes.” The figure regarded them, then nodded. “Then let the trial begin.” The lake’s surface darkened, swallowing the tower whole. The world around them dissolved into light and shadow, and Aurora felt herself falling—not down, but inward, into the heart of the Veil itself. Somewhere, a clock struck midnight. The Veil had opened.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
69.57% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags23
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"she said slowly [slowly]"
1"They pointed upward [upward]"
2"she said slowly [slowly]"
dialogueSentences38
tagDensity0.605
leniency1
rawRatio0.13
effectiveRatio0.13
82.72% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1447
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count2
2
adverb"lightly"
count1
3
adverb"quickly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"slowly"
2"lightly"
3"quickly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
20.53% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1447
totalAiIsms23
found
0
word"pulsed"
count3
1
word"pulse"
count4
2
word"unreadable"
count1
3
word"silence"
count1
4
word"weight"
count1
5
word"echoed"
count1
6
word"flickered"
count1
7
word"tension"
count1
8
word"trembled"
count1
9
word"gleaming"
count1
10
word"etched"
count2
11
word"comforting"
count1
12
word"structure"
count1
13
word"crystal"
count1
14
word"warmth"
count1
15
word"depths"
count1
16
word"echo"
count1
highlights
0"pulsed"
1"pulse"
2"unreadable"
3"silence"
4"weight"
5"echoed"
6"flickered"
7"tension"
8"trembled"
9"gleaming"
10"etched"
11"comforting"
12"structure"
13"crystal"
14"warmth"
15"depths"
16"echo"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
1
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"eyes widened"
1"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences108
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences108
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences123
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen30
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1435
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions20
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
90.76% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions47
wordCount1266
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity1.18
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Aurora15
Heartstone4
Pendant2
Isolde7
Nyx14
Fae-Forged1
Blade1
Veil3
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Heartstone"
2"Pendant"
3"Isolde"
4"Nyx"
5"Blade"
6"Veil"
places(empty)
globalScore0.908
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences83
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"felt like a physical thing"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches7
per1kWords4.878
wordCount1435
matches
0"neither earth nor"
1"not a forest at all, but a labyrinth of towering vines"
2"not empty but dense, filled with the weight of unseen eyes"
3"Not sung, but felt, vibrating in their bones"
4"not the sky above but a swirling cosmos of stars"
5"not herself but a figure cloaked in shadow, their face obscured"
6"not down, but inward, into the heart of the Veil itself"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences123
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs31
mean46.29
std25.71
cv0.555
sampleLengths
096
177
284
356
477
578
677
761
853
955
1075
1141
1216
1338
1426
1551
1633
1712
1875
1955
2042
2143
2259
2326
245
2549
2623
2711
2832
295
304
98.77% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences108
matches
0"were interwoven"
1"was swallowed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs231
matches
0"were pulling"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount12
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences11
totalSentences123
ratio0.089
matches
0"The ground beneath them was neither earth nor stone but something in between—a surface that shifted underfoot, warm one moment, cold the next, as though the land itself breathed."
1"Flowers bloomed in colors that defied description—some pulsed with internal fire, others exhaled mist that smelled of forgotten dreams."
2"Somewhere in the distance, a sound echoed—low, resonant, like a bell struck by a hand that did not exist."
3"“Too thin. The boundaries are fraying.” They pointed upward, where the sky had begun to fracture, revealing glimpses of a realm beyond—vast, starless, and alive with movement."
4"The creature—a thing of tangled limbs and too many eyes—screeched, dissolving into smoke."
5"Then, a sound—a song."
6"At its center floated a structure—a tower of black crystal, its surface etched with the same glowing runes they’d seen on the trees."
7"It rippled, revealing glimpses of other realms—fields of gold, cities of bone, oceans that sang in languages long dead."
8"From the depths rose a figure—tall, slender, its form composed of shifting shadows and starlight."
9"Images flooded her mind—memories not her own: a child’s laughter, a woman’s tears, a crown of thorns dissolving into ash."
10"The world around them dissolved into light and shadow, and Aurora felt herself falling—not down, but inward, into the heart of the Veil itself."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1279
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"echoed—low, resonant, like"
adverbCount39
adverbRatio0.03049257232212666
lyAdverbCount14
lyAdverbRatio0.0109460516028147
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences123
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences123
mean11.67
std6.46
cv0.554
sampleLengths
027
118
222
329
414
524
616
712
811
926
1019
1123
1216
135
1410
1512
1618
177
184
198
2012
2114
2226
2317
2416
2515
2619
273
2814
296
305
3115
3221
3320
3412
354
365
3713
389
398
4015
4116
429
437
4427
457
463
477
4821
4915
48.51% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.3008130081300813
totalSentences123
uniqueOpeners37
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences99
matches
0"Somewhere in the distance, a"
1"Then, a sound—a song."
2"Somewhere, a clock struck midnight."
ratio0.03
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount25
totalSentences99
matches
0"They had come seeking the"
1"they whispered, their voice a"
2"she murmured, though the word"
3"they said, their tone unreadable"
4"It yielded like water, then"
5"she said, more to herself"
6"Her gaze lifted to the"
7"Their branches were interwoven with"
8"They pressed forward, the path"
9"they said, voice strained"
10"They were beautiful, but their"
11"she said slowly"
12"Her words hung in the"
13"They pointed upward, where the"
14"they shouted, though their voice"
15"they said, voice hollow"
16"She trailed off, her words"
17"They pressed on, the path"
18"It was ancient, mournful, yet"
19"They stood at the edge"
ratio0.253
15.56% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount88
totalSentences99
matches
0"The air tasted of iron"
1"Nyx drifted behind her, a"
2"Isolde moved last, her silver"
3"The ground beneath them was"
4"They had come seeking the"
5"Aurora’s fingers brushed the rough"
6"The air hummed with a"
7"Nyx tilted their head, their"
8"they whispered, their voice a"
9"The forest around them was"
10"Flowers bloomed in colors that"
11"The ground was alive, roots"
12"Aurora paused, her breath catching."
13"she murmured, though the word"
14"The air here was thicker,"
15"Nyx reached out, fingertips grazing"
16"they said, their tone unreadable"
17"Isolde knelt, brushing her hand"
18"It yielded like water, then"
19"she said, more to herself"
ratio0.889
50.51% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences99
matches
0"Before anyone could answer, the"
ratio0.01
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences58
technicalSentenceCount14
matches
0"Nyx drifted behind her, a silhouette stitched from twilight, their form flickering as if caught between two realities."
1"The ground beneath them was neither earth nor stone but something in between—a surface that shifted underfoot, warm one moment, cold the next, as though the lan…"
2"Aurora’s fingers brushed the rough chain around her neck, the gemstone within thrumming faintly, a rhythm that matched the pulse of her own pulse."
3"The forest around them was not a forest at all, but a labyrinth of towering vines that coiled like serpents, their leaves shimmering with bioluminescent veins."
4"Above, the sun hung low and swollen, casting long shadows that moved independently of their sources."
5"Their branches were interwoven with threads of light, strands that hummed in harmony with the Heartstone’s pulse."
6"They pressed forward, the path unfolding beneath them as if the land itself guided their steps."
7"Somewhere in the distance, a sound echoed—low, resonant, like a bell struck by a hand that did not exist."
8"The flowers along the path burst into bloom, their petals unfurling to reveal tiny, winged creatures that flitted between the blossoms."
9"They were beautiful, but their wings left trails of smoke that lingered too long, dissolving into the air like ghosts."
10"Nyx lunged, their shadowy body coalescing into a blade of darkness that sliced through the air."
11"Aurora felt the pendant grow heavier, as though it were pulling her forward, urging her toward something inevitable."
12"They stood at the edge of a vast expanse, a lake that reflected not the sky above but a swirling cosmos of stars and shadows."
13"It rippled, revealing glimpses of other realms—fields of gold, cities of bone, oceans that sang in languages long dead."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags23
uselessAdditionCount8
matches
0"they whispered, their voice a breath against the wind"
1"she murmured, though the word felt inadequate"
2"they said, their tone unreadable"
3"she said, more to herself than the others"
4"they said, voice strained"
5"they shouted, though their voice was swallowed by the growing chaos"
6"they said, voice hollow"
7"it said, though its mouth did not move"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags19
fancyCount7
fancyTags
0"they whispered (whisper)"
1"she murmured (murmur)"
2"they hissed (hiss)"
3"they shouted (shout)"
4"they whispered (whisper)"
5"she breathed (breathe)"
6"they warned (warn)"
dialogueSentences38
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio0.368
effectiveRatio0.368
71.2525%