Run: 2026-02-26-01KJCRW0MR3CPA6H75SCPNEKMT

Run Details

Model:
LFM2 24B
Duration:
28.3s
Cost:
$0.000312
Provider:
Together

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rory pushed through the swinging door, the bell above it jangling like a warning. The air inside smelled of burnt coffee and old wood, a scent that clung to the back of her throat. She scanned the room, her eyes catching on a figure hunched over a whiskey tumbler at the far end of the bar. The man looked up, and for a heartbeat, the world narrowed to the curve of his jaw, the silver signet ring on his finger catching the dim light. “Rory,” he said, voice low, almost a rumble. She froze. The name felt foreign on his tongue, like a word she’d forgotten how to pronounce. “Still got that sharp tongue,” he added, swirling the amber liquid in his glass. His hands were steady, but the tremor in his left leg—hidden beneath the worn leather jacket—wasn’t. “Still got the same face,” she replied, stepping closer. The bar’s neon sign flickered above them, casting shadows that danced across his cheekbones. “Or did you finally learn to hide the scar?” His laugh was a dry thing. “You remember the accident?” “I remember you.” She tilted her head, studying the lines etched into his face. The once-smooth skin was now a map of wrinkles, the kind that came from years of silence and secrets. He nodded, setting the glass down with deliberate care. “You’re thinner. And… different.” “So are you.” She gestured to his chest, where a faint tattoo peeked beneath his shirt—a serpent coiled around a dagger. “Still playing the rogue, then?” “Still surviving,” he corrected, his gaze dropping to her hands. They were bare, fingers stained with ink from the sketches she’d left on the café table weeks ago. A bartender slid a fresh drink toward Rory without asking. She didn’t touch it. “You moved to London, didn’t you?” “Three years now.” His eyes flicked to hers, searching. “And you?” “Cardiff. Still drawing. Still…” She hesitated, the word catching in her throat. “Still hiding?” He leaned forward, the stool creaking under his weight. “You look like you’ve been running.” The question hung between them, heavy as the smoke curling from a nearby cigarette. Rory’s fingers tightened around the edge of the bar. “I’m not running.” “No.” His smile was bitter. “You’re just… elsewhere.” A pause. The clink of glasses. Somewhere in the distance, a piano played a melody that sounded like a lament. “Do you ever think about it?” she asked suddenly. “About what?” “About the night we got lost in the woods. About the promise we made.” His jaw flexed. “You were the one who insisted on taking the shortcut.” “I was twenty. You were…” He trailed off, staring into his drink. “You were the one who believed in fate.” “And you were the one who believed in me.” Her voice was quieter now, almost a whisper. The bartender refilled her glass, his movements precise. Rory watched the liquid swirl, the way it mirrored the chaos in her chest. “You never told me you were coming back.” “I wasn’t sure you wanted me to.” “Why not?” The question felt like a blade. He met her eyes, and for a moment, she saw the boy she’d known—the one who’d sketched her in the margins of notebooks, who’d whispered dreams of escape. Now, he looked older, harder. “Because I was scared,” he admitted. “Scared you’d see the real me. The one who stayed.” Her breath hitched. “You left.” “I had to.” His voice cracked. “Mama was sick. The hospital bills… I couldn’t afford to stay.” Rory’s fingers brushed the scar on her wrist, a reflexive gesture. “You could’ve called.” “I did.” A beat. “But you were busy building your life. Painting, traveling… living.” “And you were stuck.” The words hung, sharp and unyielding. He didn’t flinch. A silence stretched, thick with everything unsaid. The bar’s music swelled, a melancholic tune that seemed to echo their unspoken regrets. “Do you ever wonder,” she began, her voice steadier now, “if it would’ve been better if we’d stayed?” His gaze dropped to the table, where a single sketch lay folded beneath a napkin. A drawing of her, younger, laughing under a willow tree. The lines were imperfect, but the memory was clear. “Every day,” he said. “But then I think… maybe we were never meant to stay.” Rory’s throat tightened. “Maybe.” The bartender slid a fresh drink toward her. She didn’t drink it. Instead, she reached into her coat, pulling out a small envelope. The paper was creased, the seal broken. “You kept this?” he asked. She nodded. “You never gave it back.” He took it, his hands trembling slightly. Inside was a letter, the ink faded but legible. Her name was written in his handwriting, the letters jagged, urgent. “Read it,” he said. She hesitated, then unfolded the page. The words blurred as her vision shifted. *“If you’re reading this, I’ve failed you. Not as a friend, but as someone who should’ve fought harder. I’m sorry. I’m so sorry.”* Her pulse roared in her ears. The bar seemed to tilt, the walls closing in. He watched her, his expression unreadable. “You never answered.” “I couldn’t.” The admission felt like a wound. “You disappeared. I thought… I thought you’d left.” “No.” His voice was barely audible. “I stayed. Just… not here.” A laugh escaped her, hollow and raw. “You always were a coward.” He stood, the stool scraping against the floor. “Maybe. But I’m here now.” The neon sign flickered again, casting their shadows against the wall—two figures, fractured and incomplete. Rory didn’t move. The weight of years pressed down, but for the first time in years, she felt something shift. Not forgiveness, not yet. But the possibility of it. Outside, the city hummed, indifferent. Inside, the silence spoke louder than any words.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags18
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"she asked suddenly [suddenly]"
1"The admission felt like [like]"
dialogueSentences53
tagDensity0.34
leniency0.679
rawRatio0.111
effectiveRatio0.075
89.65% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount966
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
1"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
17.18% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount966
totalAiIsms16
found
0
word"scanned"
count1
1
word"flickered"
count2
2
word"etched"
count1
3
word"silence"
count3
4
word"flicked"
count1
5
word"weight"
count2
6
word"whisper"
count1
7
word"echo"
count1
8
word"unspoken"
count1
9
word"pulse"
count1
10
word"unreadable"
count1
11
word"fractured"
count1
highlights
0"scanned"
1"flickered"
2"etched"
3"silence"
4"flicked"
5"weight"
6"whisper"
7"echo"
8"unspoken"
9"pulse"
10"unreadable"
11"fractured"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences79
matches
0"was bitter"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences79
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences110
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen29
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords23
totalWords961
ratio0.024
matches
0"“If you’re reading this, I’ve failed you. Not as a friend, but as someone who should’ve fought harder. I’m sorry. I’m so sorry.”"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions15
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
98.68% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions7
wordCount682
uniqueNames1
maxNameDensity1.03
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory7
persons
0"Rory"
places(empty)
globalScore0.987
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences54
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"sounded like a lament"
1"felt like a blade"
2"tune that seemed to echo their unspoken regrets"
3"felt like a wound"
95.94% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords1.041
wordCount961
matches
0"Not as a friend, but as someone who should’ve fought harder"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences110
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs55
mean17.47
std12.75
cv0.729
sampleLengths
084
18
217
330
432
510
633
713
826
928
1020
1111
1212
1317
1426
158
1620
179
182
1914
2013
2120
2217
2330
247
252
2639
2716
285
2917
3014
3114
324
339
3421
3518
3634
3715
384
3930
405
417
4227
434
4413
4523
4615
479
4816
4911
96.38% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences79
matches
0"was creased"
1"was written"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs128
matches(empty)
38.96% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount5
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences4
totalSentences110
ratio0.036
matches
0"His hands were steady, but the tremor in his left leg—hidden beneath the worn leather jacket—wasn’t."
1"“So are you.” She gestured to his chest, where a faint tattoo peeked beneath his shirt—a serpent coiled around a dagger."
2"He met her eyes, and for a moment, she saw the boy she’d known—the one who’d sketched her in the margins of notebooks, who’d whispered dreams of escape."
3"The neon sign flickered again, casting their shadows against the wall—two figures, fractured and incomplete."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount688
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount15
adverbRatio0.02180232558139535
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.00436046511627907
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences110
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences110
mean8.74
std5.59
cv0.64
sampleLengths
014
120
222
328
48
52
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714
816
99
1014
119
126
134
1414
1519
169
174
1821
195
2010
2118
2210
234
246
259
262
2712
2811
296
3014
319
323
335
343
352
364
3714
389
392
4014
413
4210
4312
448
4517
468
4714
488
497
49.70% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.3090909090909091
totalSentences110
uniqueOpeners34
93.90% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences71
matches
0"Somewhere in the distance, a"
1"Instead, she reached into her"
ratio0.028
28.45% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount34
totalSentences71
matches
0"She scanned the room, her"
1"he said, voice low, almost"
2"he added, swirling the amber"
3"His hands were steady, but"
4"she replied, stepping closer"
5"His laugh was a dry"
6"She tilted her head, studying"
7"He nodded, setting the glass"
8"She gestured to his chest,"
9"he corrected, his gaze dropping"
10"They were bare, fingers stained"
11"She didn’t touch it."
12"His eyes flicked to hers,"
13"She hesitated, the word catching"
14"He leaned forward, the stool"
15"His smile was bitter"
16"she asked suddenly"
17"His jaw flexed."
18"He trailed off, staring into"
19"Her voice was quieter now,"
ratio0.479
16.34% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount63
totalSentences71
matches
0"Rory pushed through the swinging"
1"The air inside smelled of"
2"She scanned the room, her"
3"The man looked up, and"
4"he said, voice low, almost"
5"The name felt foreign on"
6"he added, swirling the amber"
7"His hands were steady, but"
8"she replied, stepping closer"
9"The bar’s neon sign flickered"
10"His laugh was a dry"
11"She tilted her head, studying"
12"The once-smooth skin was now"
13"He nodded, setting the glass"
14"She gestured to his chest,"
15"he corrected, his gaze dropping"
16"They were bare, fingers stained"
17"A bartender slid a fresh"
18"She didn’t touch it."
19"His eyes flicked to hers,"
ratio0.887
70.42% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences71
matches
0"Now, he looked older, harder."
ratio0.014
12.99% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences22
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"The bar’s neon sign flickered above them, casting shadows that danced across his cheekbones."
1"The once-smooth skin was now a map of wrinkles, the kind that came from years of silence and secrets."
2"He met her eyes, and for a moment, she saw the boy she’d known—the one who’d sketched her in the margins of notebooks, who’d whispered dreams of escape."
3"The bar’s music swelled, a melancholic tune that seemed to echo their unspoken regrets."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags18
uselessAdditionCount5
matches
0"he said, voice low, almost a rumble"
1"he corrected, his gaze dropping to her hands"
2"She hesitated, the word catching in her throat"
3"He leaned, the stool creaking under his weight"
4"she began, her voice steadier now,"
93.40% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags9
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"he added (add)"
1"he corrected (correct)"
2"he admitted (admit)"
dialogueSentences53
tagDensity0.17
leniency0.34
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.113
76.7328%