Run: 2026-02-26-01KJCRZ2GZ2ANM8T84YCS2MT9N

Run Details

Model:
LFM2 24B
Duration:
29.2s
Cost:
$0.000311
Provider:
Together

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rory pushed through the swinging door, the bell above it jangling like a warning. The air inside smelled of burnt coffee and old wood, a scent that clung to the back of her throat. She scanned the room, her eyes catching on a figure near the back, hunched over a glass of whiskey. The man looked older, his hair thinning, but the sharp angle of his jaw still carried the same defiance she remembered. Her breath hitched. “Rory?” His voice was lower, rougher, as if he’d been chewing gravel. She stepped closer, the floorboards creaking beneath her boots. “Eva said you’d be here.” The words felt too small, inadequate for the weight of what she meant. He didn’t look up. “You didn’t think to ask?” The question hung between them, thick with unspoken things. She reached the table, her fingers brushing the edge of the wood. “I thought you’d be gone.” “Gone?” A dry laugh. “No. Just… different.” His gaze finally met hers, and for a moment, she saw the boy she’d once known—wide-eyed, restless, hungry for something he couldn’t name. Now his eyes were hollow, shadowed by years of choices she couldn’t begin to guess. She sat down, the chair groaning under her weight. The bartender nodded at Silas, who stood nearby, his silhouette framed by the neon glow of the sign. The Raven’s Nest had always been a place of secrets, but tonight it felt like a tomb. “You look like hell,” he said, not unkindly. “I’ve been better.” Her smile was sharp, a blade she’d learned to wield. “And you?” “Same.” He took a sip of his drink, the ice clinking like a warning. “Still drinking to forget?” She frowned. “You knew her?” “Eva.” His jaw tightened. “She was… important.” “Important?” The word curdled in her mouth. “You knew her better than anyone?” A pause. The silence stretched, taut as a wire. Then he spoke, his voice barely above a whisper. “She told me to watch your back.” The bartender slid a fresh glass toward her. She didn’t touch it. “What happened?” His eyes flickered to the door, then back to her. “Nothing.” But the lie was a crack in the wall. She leaned forward, elbows on the table. “Don’t lie to me, Daniel.” His laugh was bitter. “You always did hate the truth.” The room seemed to shrink around them, the noise of the bar fading into a distant hum. She studied his face, the lines etched deeper than she remembered. The boy who’d once stolen apples from the orchard now wore a suit that cost more than her rent. “You’re not the same,” she said. “Neither are you.” His gaze dropped to her hands, calloused from years of work. “You’ve changed.” “So have you.” She tilted her head, studying the way his fingers trembled slightly as he held the glass. “What’s the point of this? Reconnecting after all this time?” He set the glass down, the clink echoing. “Maybe we’re both looking for something.” “Like what?” “Maybe we’re looking for the person we were.” His voice cracked, and for a heartbeat, she saw the fear beneath the bravado. “The one who didn’t run.” The words hit her like a slap. She wanted to argue, to deflect, but the silence between them was a living thing, pulsing with everything they’d never said. The bartender cleared his throat, and the tension snapped taut again. “You always were a drama queen,” she muttered, but there was no heat in it. He smiled, a sad, crooked thing. “And you were a fool.” The admission hung there, fragile. She wanted to reach across the table, to bridge the gap between who they’d been and who they’d become. Instead, she watched the shadows dance on the walls, remembering the nights they’d spent plotting escapes, dreaming of lives beyond the town’s borders. “Do you ever think about it?” she asked suddenly. “The life we could’ve had?” His eyes narrowed. “You mean the life where you left?” “Yeah.” He exhaled, a long, slow breath. “I thought about it. Every day. Until I stopped.” The admission was a wound. She wanted to press further, to dig into the cracks, but the weight of it pressed against her ribs. Instead, she reached for her drink, the liquid burning her throat. “You still work at the bar?” “Still.” His voice was flat. “It’s… familiar.” “Familiar?” “Like a ghost.” He gestured to the empty chairs around them. “You’re not here to visit, are you?” She hesitated. The truth was a stone in her mouth, heavy and unyielding. “I’m not sure anymore.” The bartender appeared, refilling her glass without asking. The alcohol burned, but it didn’t dull the ache. She looked at Daniel, at the way his shoulders slumped under the weight of something unsaid. “You ever wonder,” she began, then stopped. The words felt too raw, too dangerous. He leaned in, his voice a whisper. “Every day.” The room seemed to hold its breath. Outside, the city buzzed, indifferent. Inside, two old friends sat in the wreckage of their past, the silence louder than any argument. “Do you think we’ll ever catch up?” she asked. He didn’t answer. Instead, he reached across the table, his hand hovering over hers. The space between them was a chasm, but neither moved. The bartender called out a name. Silas turned, his expression unreadable. “One more round?” “No,” she said, standing abruptly. The chair screeched against the floor. Daniel stood too, his movements slow, deliberate. “You don’t have to go.” “I know.” Her voice was steady, but her heart was a storm. He didn’t follow her out. The door swung shut behind her, the bell jingling like a final note. The night stretched ahead, vast and unknowable, and for the first time in years, she felt the weight of time pressing down on her chest, relentless and unyielding.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
82.35% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags18
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"The words felt too [too]"
1"she asked suddenly [suddenly]"
2"she began then [then]"
dialogueSentences51
tagDensity0.353
leniency0.706
rawRatio0.167
effectiveRatio0.118
84.68% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount979
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
2
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"barely above a whisper"
1"slightly"
2"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount979
totalAiIsms21
found
0
word"scanned"
count1
1
word"weight"
count5
2
word"unspoken"
count1
3
word"silence"
count3
4
word"whisper"
count2
5
word"flickered"
count1
6
word"etched"
count1
7
word"trembled"
count1
8
word"echoing"
count1
9
word"tension"
count1
10
word"dance"
count1
11
word"familiar"
count2
12
word"unreadable"
count1
highlights
0"scanned"
1"weight"
2"unspoken"
3"silence"
4"whisper"
5"flickered"
6"etched"
7"trembled"
8"echoing"
9"tension"
10"dance"
11"familiar"
12"unreadable"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences80
matches
0"was bitter"
89.29% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences80
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"begin to"
1"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences110
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen28
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords977
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions6
wordCount779
uniqueNames4
maxNameDensity0.26
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Daniel"
discoveredNames
Silas2
Raven1
Nest1
Daniel2
persons
0"Silas"
1"Raven"
2"Nest"
3"Daniel"
places(empty)
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences57
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"felt like a tomb"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount977
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences110
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs50
mean19.54
std14.93
cv0.764
sampleLengths
077
112
227
39
426
545
644
78
815
918
105
117
1213
1325
1414
1511
1621
1710
1847
196
2016
2129
2214
232
2427
2539
2615
2711
2847
2914
3010
311
3215
3335
346
357
361
3718
3817
3933
4014
419
4229
439
4424
4514
4611
4712
4812
4946
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences80
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs152
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences110
ratio0.009
matches
0"“No. Just… different.” His gaze finally met hers, and for a moment, she saw the boy she’d once known—wide-eyed, restless, hungry for something he couldn’t name."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount781
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount27
adverbRatio0.034571062740076826
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.0076824583866837385
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences110
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences110
mean8.88
std5.98
cv0.674
sampleLengths
014
120
219
321
43
512
69
718
84
95
109
1112
125
134
1426
1515
169
1718
1817
198
2013
212
2214
234
242
253
264
273
287
296
302
317
329
337
348
354
362
3710
381
399
407
415
424
436
4417
4511
4619
476
4814
492
51.52% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats5
diversityRatio0.33636363636363636
totalSentences110
uniqueOpeners37
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences75
matches
0"Then he spoke, his voice"
1"Instead, she watched the shadows"
2"Instead, she reached for her"
3"Instead, he reached across the"
ratio0.053
17.33% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount38
totalSentences75
matches
0"She scanned the room, her"
1"Her breath hitched."
2"His voice was lower, rougher,"
3"She stepped closer, the floorboards"
4"He didn’t look up."
5"She reached the table, her"
6"His gaze finally met hers,"
7"She sat down, the chair"
8"he said, not unkindly"
9"Her smile was sharp, a"
10"He took a sip of"
11"His jaw tightened"
12"She didn’t touch it."
13"His eyes flickered to the"
14"She leaned forward, elbows on"
15"His laugh was bitter."
16"She studied his face, the"
17"His gaze dropped to her"
18"She tilted her head, studying"
19"He set the glass down,"
ratio0.507
13.33% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount67
totalSentences75
matches
0"Rory pushed through the swinging"
1"The air inside smelled of"
2"She scanned the room, her"
3"The man looked older, his"
4"Her breath hitched."
5"His voice was lower, rougher,"
6"She stepped closer, the floorboards"
7"The words felt too small,"
8"He didn’t look up."
9"The question hung between them,"
10"She reached the table, her"
11"A dry laugh"
12"His gaze finally met hers,"
13"She sat down, the chair"
14"The bartender nodded at Silas,"
15"The Raven’s Nest had always"
16"he said, not unkindly"
17"Her smile was sharp, a"
18"He took a sip of"
19"His jaw tightened"
ratio0.893
66.67% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences75
matches
0"Now his eyes were hollow,"
ratio0.013
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences25
technicalSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
69.44% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags18
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"he said, not unkindly"
1"He took, the ice clinking like a warning"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she muttered (mutter)"
dialogueSentences51
tagDensity0.118
leniency0.235
rawRatio0.167
effectiveRatio0.039
85.8203%