Run: 2026-02-26-01KJCS0VZSCQD1GAPBKH77RMZH

Run Details

Model:
LFM2 24B
Duration:
34.4s
Cost:
$0.000337
Provider:
Together

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rory pushed through the swinging doors of The Raven’s Nest, the neon green sign flickering like a dying heartbeat above her. The air inside was thick with smoke and the low hum of conversation, voices tangled together like old rope. She scanned the room, half-expecting to find Silas behind the bar, his silhouette familiar even in shadow. Instead, a woman stood near the back booth, her back to Rory, her shoulders rigid beneath a tailored coat. “Rory?” The voice was softer than she remembered, edged with something uncertain. Rory stepped closer, the worn wooden floorboards creaking beneath her boots. “Is it really you?” Her eyes searched the woman’s face, noting the faint scar along her jawline, the way her hair had gone silver at the temples. She looked older, but there was still a spark there—something that had once burned bright. The woman turned slowly. “You look the same.” A faint smile tugged at her lips, but it didn’t reach her eyes. “Or maybe I’ve changed more than you have.” Rory’s fingers curled into fists at her sides. “You always did have a way with words.” She hesitated, then added, “How long have you been gone?” “I left Cardiff two years ago.” The woman’s gaze dropped to the table between them, her fingers tracing the grain of the wood. “I heard you were here. That you’d moved back.” “Yeah.” Rory’s voice was quieter now, almost reluctant. “I thought… maybe we could talk.” The woman nodded once, slowly. “I’d like that.” She reached into her bag and pulled out a small leather-bound notebook, flipping it open with practiced ease. “I kept this.” Rory’s breath caught. “You kept everything?” “I kept what mattered.” The woman’s voice was steady, but there was a tremor beneath it, something raw. “You remember that night in the pub, the one where we got drunk and talked about leaving everything behind?” Rory’s throat tightened. “You said you’d help me.” “I did.” The woman’s eyes met hers, sharp and unflinching. “But I wasn’t the man you thought I was.” A silence stretched between them, thick with memory and something else—regret, perhaps, or the weight of choices unspoken. Rory studied the woman’s hands, the way they rested on the notebook, the faint calluses on her fingertips. She looked like someone who had lived a life of quiet decisions and careful restraint. “I didn’t know,” Rory said finally. “Not really.” The woman exhaled sharply, shaking her head. “You always were too clever for your own good.” She closed the notebook and set it aside. “I came here because I needed to see you. To see if you were still the same.” Rory’s pulse quickened. “You think I am?” “I think you’re still here.” The woman’s gaze softened, just slightly. “But not the girl who left Cardiff with nothing but a suitcase and a dream.” Rory laughed, but it came out brittle. “Dreams don’t last forever, do they?” The woman leaned forward, elbows on the table. “No. But some of us learn to carry them.” Outside, the city pulsed with distant sirens and the murmur of late-night conversations. Inside, the air felt heavier, as if the walls themselves were listening. Rory studied the woman’s face, searching for the girl who had once laughed until her cheeks hurt, who had argued with her father over politics and love alike. Now, that girl seemed buried beneath years of quiet decisions and unspoken apologies. “I didn’t know you stayed in touch,” Rory said, her voice barely above a whisper. “I didn’t either.” The woman’s lips pressed into a thin line. “But I remembered.” Rory shifted uncomfortably. “You always had a way of remembering things.” “I remember everything.” The woman’s eyes flickered with something like pain. “Except maybe not how it ended.” Rory’s stomach twisted. “What do you mean?” The woman hesitated, then reached into her coat pocket and pulled out a small photograph. She placed it on the table between them, the edges worn from years of handling. Rory picked it up carefully, her fingers brushing against the paper. It was a picture of them—two young women, arms wrapped around each other’s waists, standing in front of the old bookshop in Cardiff. Their smiles were wide, unguarded, alive in a way Rory hadn’t seen in years. “I took this the day before I left,” the woman said quietly. “Before I packed my bags and said goodbye.” Rory traced the edge of the photo with her thumb. “You never told me you kept it.” “I didn’t think you’d want it.” The woman’s voice cracked slightly. “Not after everything.” Rory looked up, meeting her gaze. “Everything?” The woman nodded. “The fight. The silence. The way you stopped calling.” Rory’s chest tightened. “I didn’t know how to fix it.” “I know.” The woman’s eyes glistened, but she refused to let them fall. “You were trying to protect me.” Rory swallowed hard. “I was trying to protect myself.” A long silence settled between them, broken only by the distant clink of glasses and the low murmur of conversation. Rory studied the woman’s face, searching for answers that wouldn’t come. She saw the weight of years in her expression, the way time had carved itself into the lines of her skin. “I don’t know if I can forgive you,” Rory admitted, her voice barely audible. The woman didn’t respond immediately. When she did, her tone was measured. “Neither can I.” Rory exhaled sharply, shaking her head. “I thought we were done with that.” “I thought so too.” The woman’s gaze dropped to the table. “But maybe we weren’t.” Rory studied her for a moment longer, then reached into her own coat pocket and pulled out a small, folded piece of paper. She unfolded it slowly, revealing a handwritten note. Her handwriting was neat, precise, the kind she had always been. “I kept this,” she said, placing the note beside the photograph. “From the night we left Cardiff.” The woman’s breath hitched. She picked up the paper, her fingers trembling slightly. Rory watched her, waiting. “I wrote it the morning after,” she continued. “I never gave it to you.” Rory’s heart pounded. “What does it say?” The woman hesitated, then read aloud, her voice steady despite the emotion beneath it. *“To Rory, wherever you are—don’t forget who you were. Don’t forget why you left. And if you ever come back, I’ll be here.”* The woman closed the note and set it down gently. “I never forgot.” Rory’s throat felt dry. “You never did.” The woman looked up, her eyes searching Rory’s face. “Neither did I.” Outside, the city lights blurred through the rain-streaked windows, casting shifting shadows across the table. The weight of the past pressed down on them, but neither of them moved to break it. Rory reached across the table, her hand hovering just above the woman’s. “Do you think we can still fix this?” The woman studied her for a long moment before nodding slowly. “Maybe.” The neon sign above the bar flickered once, then steadied, casting a faint glow over the two women seated across from each other. Somewhere in the distance, a door creaked open, and the night continued.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
33.33% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags20
adverbTagCount5
adverbTags
0"She hesitated then [then]"
1"Rory said finally [finally]"
2"The woman’s gaze softened just [just]"
3"the woman said quietly [quietly]"
4"The woman’s voice cracked slightly [slightly]"
dialogueSentences60
tagDensity0.333
leniency0.667
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.167
41.57% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1198
totalAiIsmAdverbs14
found
0
adverb"really"
count2
1
adverb"slowly"
count4
2
adverb"sharply"
count2
3
adverb"slightly"
count3
4
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count1
5
adverb"carefully"
count1
6
adverb"gently"
count1
highlights
0"really"
1"slowly"
2"sharply"
3"slightly"
4"barely above a whisper"
5"carefully"
6"gently"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
12.35% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1198
totalAiIsms21
found
0
word"scanned"
count1
1
word"familiar"
count1
2
word"tracing"
count1
3
word"practiced ease"
count1
4
word"silence"
count3
5
word"weight"
count3
6
word"unspoken"
count2
7
word"pulse"
count1
8
word"quickened"
count1
9
word"pulsed"
count1
10
word"whisper"
count1
11
word"flickered"
count2
12
word"stomach"
count1
13
word"traced"
count1
14
word"measured"
count1
highlights
0"scanned"
1"familiar"
2"tracing"
3"practiced ease"
4"silence"
5"weight"
6"unspoken"
7"pulse"
8"quickened"
9"pulsed"
10"whisper"
11"flickered"
12"stomach"
13"traced"
14"measured"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences79
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences79
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences117
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen28
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords23
totalWords1194
ratio0.019
matches
0"“To Rory, wherever you are—don’t forget who you were. Don’t forget why you left. And if you ever come back, I’ll be here.”"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions17
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions34
wordCount834
uniqueNames5
maxNameDensity3.6
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest1
Silas1
Rory30
Cardiff1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Silas"
2"Rory"
places
0"Cardiff"
globalScore0
windowScore0
22.88% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences59
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"looked like someone who had lived a life"
1"seemed buried beneath years of quiet decisions and unspoken apologies"
2"something like pain"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.838
wordCount1194
matches
0"not the girl who left Cardiff with nothing but a suitcase"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences117
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs53
mean22.53
std17.21
cv0.764
sampleLengths
076
112
253
329
426
532
614
729
86
937
108
1119
1251
138
1441
157
1626
1713
1817
1966
2015
2114
2211
2317
247
2578
2620
2717
2814
297
3012
3110
3219
339
3452
3514
3615
3713
3815
3942
4017
4117
4214
437
4414
4523
4613
477
4812
4932
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences79
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs148
matches
0"were listening"
69.60% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount3
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences3
totalSentences117
ratio0.026
matches
0"She looked older, but there was still a spark there—something that had once burned bright."
1"A silence stretched between them, thick with memory and something else—regret, perhaps, or the weight of choices unspoken."
2"It was a picture of them—two young women, arms wrapped around each other’s waists, standing in front of the old bookshop in Cardiff."
84.13% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount841
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small leather-bound notebook,"
adverbCount42
adverbRatio0.04994054696789536
lyAdverbCount18
lyAdverbRatio0.02140309155766944
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences117
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences117
mean10.21
std6.28
cv0.616
sampleLengths
021
119
217
319
412
511
627
715
84
917
108
118
1218
1323
149
158
166
175
1821
193
203
213
2218
2319
243
255
2610
279
2818
2918
3015
316
322
337
3417
3517
363
374
3811
3915
407
416
428
439
4413
4512
4628
4713
4815
4911
43.16% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.26495726495726496
totalSentences117
uniqueOpeners31
85.47% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences78
matches
0"Instead, a woman stood near"
1"Somewhere in the distance, a"
ratio0.026
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount15
totalSentences78
matches
0"She scanned the room, half-expecting"
1"Her eyes searched the woman’s"
2"She looked older, but there"
3"She hesitated, then added"
4"She reached into her bag"
5"She looked like someone who"
6"She closed the notebook and"
7"She placed it on the"
8"It was a picture of"
9"Their smiles were wide, unguarded,"
10"She saw the weight of"
11"She unfolded it slowly, revealing"
12"Her handwriting was neat, precise,"
13"she said, placing the note"
14"She picked up the paper,"
ratio0.192
4.87% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount71
totalSentences78
matches
0"Rory pushed through the swinging"
1"The air inside was thick"
2"She scanned the room, half-expecting"
3"The voice was softer than"
4"Rory stepped closer, the worn"
5"Her eyes searched the woman’s"
6"She looked older, but there"
7"The woman turned slowly."
8"A faint smile tugged at"
9"Rory’s fingers curled into fists"
10"She hesitated, then added"
11"The woman’s gaze dropped to"
12"Rory’s voice was quieter now,"
13"The woman nodded once, slowly."
14"She reached into her bag"
15"Rory’s breath caught."
16"The woman’s voice was steady,"
17"Rory’s throat tightened."
18"The woman’s eyes met hers,"
19"A silence stretched between them,"
ratio0.91
64.10% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences78
matches
0"Now, that girl seemed buried"
ratio0.013
53.57% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences32
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"She looked older, but there was still a spark there—something that had once burned bright."
1"She looked like someone who had lived a life of quiet decisions and careful restraint."
2"Inside, the air felt heavier, as if the walls themselves were listening."
3"Rory studied the woman’s face, searching for the girl who had once laughed until her cheeks hurt, who had argued with her father over politics and love alike."
50.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags20
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"The woman’s gaze dropped, her fingers tracing the grain of the wood"
1"Rory said, her voice barely above a whisper"
2"Rory admitted, her voice barely audible"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"The woman’s lips pressed (press)"
1"Rory admitted (admit)"
2"she continued (continue)"
dialogueSentences60
tagDensity0.117
leniency0.233
rawRatio0.429
effectiveRatio0.1
75.5015%