Run: 2026-02-26-01KJCS4DCWCTE4GEJB06QWFVEN

Run Details

Model:
LFM2 24B
Duration:
30.0s
Cost:
$0.000305
Provider:
Together

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rory pushed through the swinging door, the bell above it jangling like a warning. The air inside smelled of burnt coffee and old wood, a scent that clung to the back of her throat. She scanned the room, her eyes catching on a figure near the back, hunched over a glass of whiskey. The man looked older, his hair thinning, but the sharp angle of his jaw still carried the same defiance she remembered. Her breath hitched. “Rory?” His voice was lower, rougher, as if he’d been chewing gravel. She stepped closer, the floorboards creaking beneath her boots. “Eva said you’d be here.” The words felt too light, too hollow. He didn’t look up. “You didn’t think to ask?” The question hung between them, heavy with something unspoken. Rory’s fingers curled into the fabric of her coat. “I thought you’d be gone.” “Gone?” A dry laugh. “No. Just… different.” He finally met her gaze, his hazel eyes clouded with something like exhaustion. “You look the same.” “And you?” “Still got that limp.” He tapped his left knee, a habit she’d known since they were kids. “Still got that look.” The silence that followed was thick, punctuated by the clink of glasses and the low murmur of other patrons. Rory’s pulse thudded in her ears. She wanted to say something—anything—but the words stuck. The man she’d once known had become a stranger, and she wasn’t sure if she recognized him. “You’re working at the restaurant?” she asked, forcing a smile. “Golden Empress.” His mouth twitched. “Still serving the same crap. You still delivering orders?” “Sometimes.” She hesitated. “Why are you here?” He shrugged, but the movement was stiff, as if his body resented the motion. “Same reason you are.” The bartender slid a fresh drink toward Rory without asking. She didn’t touch it. “You ever think about leaving?” “Every day.” His answer was a shrug, but there was a tremor in it. “But where would I go? This place… it’s all I’ve got.” Rory studied him. The lines around his eyes weren’t from age alone. They were carved by choices, by nights spent chasing shadows. She wanted to reach out, to touch his arm, to say *I know you*, but the distance between them felt insurmountable. “You used to be fearless,” she said quietly. His laugh was bitter. “Fear’s a luxury. You learn that when you’re running from something.” The words landed like a slap. Rory’s throat tightened. She remembered the girl who’d once laughed at his recklessness, who’d dared him to jump off the dock into the river. That girl had vanished years ago, replaced by this man who carried the weight of the world in his shoulders. “What happened to Eva?” she asked, the question slipping out before she could stop it. His hand stilled on the glass. For a moment, she thought he wouldn’t answer. Then he exhaled, a sound like wind through broken glass. “She’s gone.” The room seemed to tilt. Rory’s vision blurred. “How?” “Accident.” The word was too easy, too clean. “Car crash. Night. She was driving.” Rory’s stomach dropped. She’d heard the story, but hearing it now felt like a betrayal. “Why didn’t you tell me?” “Because you’d have blamed yourself.” His voice cracked. “Again.” The admission hung between them, raw and unfiltered. Rory wanted to argue, to demand answers, but all she could do was stare. The man she’d trusted with her life had kept this secret, buried it deep, and now it was eating him alive. “You could’ve come for her,” she said, her voice barely above a whisper. “I couldn’t.” His jaw tightened. “You were there. You knew her. You couldn’t have saved her.” The truth of it hit her like a blow. She had been there, yes, but she’d frozen. The memory of that night was a wound she’d never let heal. She’d told herself it wasn’t her fault, that she’d done everything she could. But the guilt had festered, growing into something ugly and unyielding. “Why are you here, then?” she asked, her voice trembling. He looked away, toward the window where the city lights blurred into streaks. “To see if you’re still here.” Rory’s chest ached. The man she’d known had been a ghost for years, but here he was, standing in the same spot, carrying the same scars. She wanted to step closer, to bridge the gap, but the weight of years pressed down on her. “You changed,” she said, the words slipping out before she could stop them. He turned, his expression unreadable. “So did you.” The honesty of it stole her breath. She had expected anger, maybe even hatred, but this—this quiet acknowledgment—was worse. “What are you?” “Someone who’s tired of pretending.” His gaze dropped to her hands. “You?” She looked down. Her palms were pale, her nails bitten down to the quick. “I’m still trying.” A long silence stretched between them, filled with the hum of the bar and the distant clatter of dishes. Rory felt the ache of lost time, the ache of choices made and unmade. She thought of the girl who had once believed in miracles, who had danced through life with reckless abandon. That girl was gone, buried under the rubble of regret. “You ever think about leaving?” she asked again, softer this time. He shook his head. “Not yet.” His voice dropped. “But maybe I will.” The words were a promise, or a threat. Rory didn’t know. She only knew that the man beside her was no longer the boy she’d once known, and that neither of them would ever be the same. The bell above the door jingled again, but neither of them moved. The past lingered, thick and unyielding, and the future remained a question neither was ready to answer.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
60.47% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags17
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"The words felt too [too]"
1"she said quietly [quietly]"
2"she asked again [again]"
dialogueSentences43
tagDensity0.395
leniency0.791
rawRatio0.176
effectiveRatio0.14
94.83% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount967
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count1
highlights
0"barely above a whisper"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
48.29% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount967
totalAiIsms10
found
0
word"scanned"
count1
1
word"unspoken"
count1
2
word"silence"
count2
3
word"pulse"
count1
4
word"carried the weight"
count1
5
word"stomach"
count1
6
word"whisper"
count1
7
word"weight"
count1
8
word"unreadable"
count1
highlights
0"scanned"
1"unspoken"
2"silence"
3"pulse"
4"carried the weight"
5"stomach"
6"whisper"
7"weight"
8"unreadable"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"stomach dropped/sank"
count1
highlights
0"stomach dropped"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences79
matches
0"was bitter"
1"felt the ache"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences79
filterMatches
0"know"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences102
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen26
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords3
totalWords963
ratio0.003
matches
0"I know you"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions12
wordCount788
uniqueNames1
maxNameDensity1.52
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory12
persons
0"Rory"
places(empty)
globalScore0.739
windowScore0.667
60.71% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences56
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"something like exhaustion"
1"felt like a betrayal"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount963
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences102
matches
0"knew that the"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs41
mean23.49
std17.87
cv0.761
sampleLengths
077
112
221
39
423
524
62
721
850
910
1014
117
1218
1319
1425
1543
168
1715
1850
1915
2026
219
2214
2320
249
2543
2613
2716
2853
2910
3019
3144
3213
338
3422
3512
3617
3762
3811
3913
4066
96.38% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences79
matches
0"were carved"
1"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs160
matches
0"was eating"
1"was, standing"
86.83% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount4
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences102
ratio0.02
matches
0"She wanted to say something—anything—but the words stuck."
1"She had expected anger, maybe even hatred, but this—this quiet acknowledgment—was worse."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount792
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount24
adverbRatio0.030303030303030304
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.006313131313131313
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences102
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences102
mean9.44
std5.85
cv0.62
sampleLengths
014
120
219
321
43
512
69
712
84
95
109
119
125
134
1416
154
162
1717
184
1919
206
218
2217
2310
245
259
263
274
2814
294
3010
314
325
3314
3411
353
369
3710
3821
398
404
4111
426
433
4421
4520
4615
476
488
4910
55.23% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.3431372549019608
totalSentences102
uniqueOpeners35
42.74% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences78
matches
0"Then he exhaled, a sound"
ratio0.013
14.87% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount40
totalSentences78
matches
0"She scanned the room, her"
1"Her breath hitched."
2"His voice was lower, rougher,"
3"She stepped closer, the floorboards"
4"He didn’t look up."
5"He finally met her gaze,"
6"He tapped his left knee,"
7"She wanted to say something—anything—but"
8"she asked, forcing a smile"
9"His mouth twitched"
10"He shrugged, but the movement"
11"She didn’t touch it."
12"His answer was a shrug,"
13"They were carved by choices,"
14"She wanted to reach out,"
15"she said quietly"
16"His laugh was bitter."
17"She remembered the girl who’d"
18"she asked, the question slipping"
19"His hand stilled on the"
ratio0.513
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount75
totalSentences78
matches
0"Rory pushed through the swinging"
1"The air inside smelled of"
2"She scanned the room, her"
3"The man looked older, his"
4"Her breath hitched."
5"His voice was lower, rougher,"
6"She stepped closer, the floorboards"
7"The words felt too light,"
8"He didn’t look up."
9"The question hung between them,"
10"Rory’s fingers curled into the"
11"A dry laugh"
12"He finally met her gaze,"
13"He tapped his left knee,"
14"The silence that followed was"
15"Rory’s pulse thudded in her"
16"She wanted to say something—anything—but"
17"The man she’d once known"
18"she asked, forcing a smile"
19"His mouth twitched"
ratio0.962
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences78
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences32
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"The silence that followed was thick, punctuated by the clink of glasses and the low murmur of other patrons."
7.35% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags17
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"she asked, the question slipping out before she could stop it"
1"she said, her voice barely above a whisper"
2"she asked, her voice trembling"
3"she said, the words slipping out before she could stop them"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences43
tagDensity0.163
leniency0.326
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
77.8124%