Run: 2026-03-03-01KJTXYST1M0HRR7NJ90WVV43H

Run Details

Duration:
8.6s
Cost:
$0.003772
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The heavy scent of damp earth and rotting leaves clung to the air, thick enough to taste. My boots muffled the sound of my stride against the dense, overgrown roots of the Richmond Grove. Beyond the perimeter of standing stones, London continued its electric, humming existence, but here, the silence possessed a heavy, suffocating weight. I checked the Heartstone. The small, deep-crimson gemstone pulsated, a rhythmic, warm glow against my palm. The light was faster now, jagged and insistent, like a panicked heartbeat. "You're not supposed to be this active," I whispered to the cold metal chain. The trees seemed to lean in, their skeletal branches knitting together to blot out the moon. I scanned the perimeter. Shadows didn't just linger here; they lengthened and coiled around the base of the ancient oak stones like slick, black oil. A sharp, metallic rasping sound echoed from the darkness behind me. It sounded like a blade dragging against granite. I spun, my fingers tightening into a fist around the pendant. Nothing. Or at least, nothing that held a fixed shape. A flicker of movement at the corner of my vision vanished the moment I turned my head. It left behind the sensation of cold, stagnant air rushing against the back of my neck. "Enough," I murmured, searching for a trace of a footprint or a broken twig. "Show yourself." No answer. Just the rhythmic *thrum-thrum* of the Heartstone against my skin, accelerating until it vibrated in my grip. I needed to move. Staying in the centre of the grove felt like waiting for a trap to snap shut. I pushed forward, tracking the direction of the pendant's hum, navigating the chaotic maze of wildflowers that refused to wilt despite the lack of light. Something rattled in the canopy above. A handful of acorns pelted the ground around me, hitting with an unnatural, heavy thud. I looked up. The sky was an ink-black void between the swaying, gnarled limbs. There were no birds, no wind, yet the branches whipped back and forth with frantic intensity. A pale, translucent smear shifted mid-air, a smudge of white that didn't belong to the night. It moved with fluid, jerky grace, spiralling down toward the lower thickets. I followed it, my breath hitched in my chest. The grove shifted around me. The path I had just cleared seemed to twist, the trees rearranging their positions into a tighter, more jagged embrace. My heart hammered against my ribs, a dull rhythm that matched the frantic glow of the stone in my palm. "I know you're trailing me," I said, my voice sounding thin and hollow in the oppressive stillness. The silence grew heavy, filled with a sudden, sharp pressure that popped my ears. From the darkness ahead, a voice emerged. It wasn't human. It held the grating, tectonic friction of stone grinding against stone, yet it mimicked my own Cardiff lilt with haunting, oily precision. "Trailing? No, Carter. We are welcoming you." Every hair on my arms stood on end. I stopped, planting my feet firmly into the soft, yielding soil. My thumb traced the small, crescent-shaped scar on my left wrist, a nervous habit that usually calmed me. Now, the skin beneath the scar burned with a frantic heat. "Who's there?" I demanded, squinting into the gloom until my eyes watered. A figure detached itself from the shadow of a monolithic standing stone. It was tall, impossibly thin, wearing a tattered cloak that seemed to bleed into the surrounding darkness. It didn’t walk so much as it slid across the grass, its feet silent and light. "A delivery driver lost in the weeds," the figure rasped, its features obscured by a shimmering, smoke-like veil. "We have the payment ready for your services." The entity held out a hand. The skin was grey, brittle, and cracked like parched riverbeds. Inwardly, I cursed. I had come for the source of the anomalous energy reads, not a trade. "I don't deliver to the Grove," I said, stepping back until my heels struck the rough bark of an oak. "I'm leaving." "The Grove does not permit exits, only transformations." The air turned freezing. My breath bloomed in front of me, a frantic, grey cloud. The Heartstone in my hand grew scorching hot, a searing, bright red burst of light that illuminated the space for a single, terrifying second. In that flash, I didn't see a person. I saw a hollow, elongated jaw packed with rows of needle-thin, translucent teeth. I saw eyes that were nothing more than pits of swirling, abyssal liquid. It lunged. I threw my weight to the side, tumbling onto the thick, matted moss. My shoulder slammed into a root, and the jar of the impact tasted like iron in my mouth. I scrambled, pressing myself into the dirt, feeling the sharp sting of debris slicing into my palms. The creature’s hand tore through the space where my head had been, its fingers—long, splintered extensions of bone—tearing through the fabric of my jacket. I didn't think. I kicked out with everything I had, landing my boot in the mass of cold, shifting density that made up its chest. It didn't fight back so much as it dissolved, flowing around my strike like liquid shadow, before reforming behind me. I scrambled to my feet, lungs burning, the Heartstone practically vibrating in my hand now. It was pulling me, tugging my arm toward the centre of the clearing where the standing stones formed a perfect, oppressive circle. "You cannot carry fire into the dark, little girl," the voice hissed from everywhere at once. The circle of stones began to groan. A low, vibrating sound, deep enough to penetrate the ground beneath my feet, shook the entire area. The wildflowers at my feet blackened, curling into ash as the air grew vacuum-sealed tight. I looked at the stone. It was pulsing at a blinding, rapid pace, reflecting the flickers of movement that were now everywhere. They were gathering. The shadows at the edge of my vision weren't just shadows anymore; they were elongated, spindly limbs reaching out from the dark, clawing at the air. I bolted toward the stones. The weight of the pendant was dragging me forward now, an irresistible, magnetic tether. Every step felt like wading through thick, freezing sludge. The ground beneath me shifted, the roots humping up as if the trees were trying to entangle my ankles. I leapt over an exposed root, my fingers skimming the surface of the central standing stone. It was freezing, coated in a layer of unnatural, jagged frost. The moment my skin touched the cold granite, the Heartstone flared with a white-hot intensity, turning the surrounding world into a blinding, featureless wash of light. The ground dropped away. I didn't fall down. I fell *out*. The sensation of vertigo hit me like a physical blow, a spinning, sickening spiral that tore the air from my lungs. I reached out, my fingers grasping for something solid, something real, but the world was nothing but static and flickering, jagged geometry. Then, silence. The heavy, humid pressure of the Grove snapped off, leaving me standing on a plane of shifting, obsidian glass. The sky above was a bruised violet, occupied by two moons that bled flickering, pale light downward. I stood, my heart hammering, and looked behind me. There was no return. The standing stones were gone, replaced by a horizon that stretched endlessly into a grey, churning fog. I looked at the Heartstone, its crimson glow now steady and cold, dimming to a faint, ominous pulse. A shadow, much larger than the ones in the Grove, detached itself from the fog ahead. It didn't slither. It strode, its heavy boots clicking against the glass with a rhythmic, martial precision. "Finally," the figure said, stepping into the dim light. I gripped the pendant, backing away, but the obsidian floor was slick, shifting like liquid beneath my feet. Behind the newcomer, hundreds of glowing, pale eyes began to blink open in the depths of the fog. "Took you long enough, Aurora."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags8
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences14
tagDensity0.571
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1348
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1348
totalAiIsms31
found
0
word"electric"
count1
1
word"silence"
count3
2
word"weight"
count3
3
word"rhythmic"
count3
4
word"scanned"
count1
5
word"echoed"
count1
6
word"flicker"
count1
7
word"vibrated"
count1
8
word"navigating"
count1
9
word"chaotic"
count1
10
word"intensity"
count2
11
word"oppressive"
count2
12
word"lilt"
count1
13
word"firmly"
count1
14
word"traced"
count1
15
word"gloom"
count1
16
word"searing"
count1
17
word"abyssal"
count1
18
word"perfect"
count1
19
word"magnetic"
count1
20
word"churning"
count1
21
word"pulse"
count1
22
word"depths"
count1
highlights
0"electric"
1"silence"
2"weight"
3"rhythmic"
4"scanned"
5"echoed"
6"flicker"
7"vibrated"
8"navigating"
9"chaotic"
10"intensity"
11"oppressive"
12"lilt"
13"firmly"
14"traced"
15"gloom"
16"searing"
17"abyssal"
18"perfect"
19"magnetic"
20"churning"
21"pulse"
22"depths"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences102
matches(empty)
72.83% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount5
narrationSentences102
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences108
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen27
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans2
markdownWords2
totalWords1346
ratio0.001
matches
0"thrum-thrum"
1"out"
97.22% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions9
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"Beyond the perimeter of standing stones, London continued its electric, humming existence, but here, the silence possess…"
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions12
wordCount1276
uniqueNames5
maxNameDensity0.47
worstName"Heartstone"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Grove"
discoveredNames
Richmond1
Grove3
London1
Heartstone6
Cardiff1
persons
0"Heartstone"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Grove"
2"London"
3"Cardiff"
globalScore1
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences81
glossingSentenceCount5
matches
0"sounded like a blade dragging against gran"
1"felt like waiting for a trap to snap sh"
2"cloak that seemed to bleed into the surrounding darkness"
3"tasted like iron in my mouth"
4"felt like wading through thick, freezin"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1346
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences108
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs43
mean31.3
std18.74
cv0.599
sampleLengths
055
128
214
341
419
554
616
764
821
958
1054
1117
1246
137
1448
1512
1645
1726
1833
1922
208
2139
2234
232
2472
2545
2637
2716
2839
2951
3047
3153
324
337
3443
352
3636
379
3839
3933
409
4136
425
98.38% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences102
matches
0"were elongated"
1"were gone"
46.39% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount5
totalVerbs217
matches
0"was pulling"
1"was pulsing"
2"were gathering"
3"was dragging"
4"were trying"
63.49% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences3
totalSentences108
ratio0.028
matches
0"Shadows didn't just linger here; they lengthened and coiled around the base of the ancient oak stones like slick, black oil."
1"The creature’s hand tore through the space where my head had been, its fingers—long, splintered extensions of bone—tearing through the fabric of my jacket."
2"The shadows at the edge of my vision weren't just shadows anymore; they were elongated, spindly limbs reaching out from the dark, clawing at the air."
88.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1285
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"small, crescent-shaped scar"
1"needle-thin, translucent teeth."
adverbCount38
adverbRatio0.029571984435797664
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.0062256809338521405
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences108
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences108
mean12.46
std6.55
cv0.525
sampleLengths
017
117
221
34
412
512
614
716
84
921
1011
118
1211
131
149
1517
1616
1714
182
192
2017
214
2216
2325
246
2515
263
2711
2816
2916
3012
319
325
3320
3420
3517
3614
377
383
3922
407
418
4211
4318
4411
4512
4612
4717
4816
4918
37.04% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats14
diversityRatio0.2777777777777778
totalSentences108
uniqueOpeners30
68.03% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences98
matches
0"Just the rhythmic *thrum-thrum* of"
1"Inwardly, I cursed."
ratio0.02
20.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount49
totalSentences98
matches
0"My boots muffled the sound"
1"I checked the Heartstone."
2"I whispered to the cold"
3"I scanned the perimeter."
4"It sounded like a blade"
5"I spun, my fingers tightening"
6"It left behind the sensation"
7"I murmured, searching for a"
8"I needed to move."
9"I pushed forward, tracking the"
10"I looked up."
11"It moved with fluid, jerky"
12"I followed it, my breath"
13"My heart hammered against my"
14"I said, my voice sounding"
15"It wasn't human."
16"It held the grating, tectonic"
17"I stopped, planting my feet"
18"My thumb traced the small,"
19"I demanded, squinting into the"
ratio0.5
16.12% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount87
totalSentences98
matches
0"The heavy scent of damp"
1"My boots muffled the sound"
2"I checked the Heartstone."
3"The small, deep-crimson gemstone pulsated,"
4"The light was faster now,"
5"I whispered to the cold"
6"The trees seemed to lean"
7"I scanned the perimeter."
8"Shadows didn't just linger here;"
9"A sharp, metallic rasping sound"
10"It sounded like a blade"
11"I spun, my fingers tightening"
12"A flicker of movement at"
13"It left behind the sensation"
14"I murmured, searching for a"
15"I needed to move."
16"I pushed forward, tracking the"
17"Something rattled in the canopy"
18"A handful of acorns pelted"
19"I looked up."
ratio0.888
51.02% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences98
matches
0"Now, the skin beneath the"
ratio0.01
27.65% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences62
technicalSentenceCount10
matches
0"I pushed forward, tracking the direction of the pendant's hum, navigating the chaotic maze of wildflowers that refused to wilt despite the lack of light."
1"My heart hammered against my ribs, a dull rhythm that matched the frantic glow of the stone in my palm."
2"It was tall, impossibly thin, wearing a tattered cloak that seemed to bleed into the surrounding darkness."
3"The Heartstone in my hand grew scorching hot, a searing, bright red burst of light that illuminated the space for a single, terrifying second."
4"I saw eyes that were nothing more than pits of swirling, abyssal liquid."
5"It was pulsing at a blinding, rapid pace, reflecting the flickers of movement that were now everywhere."
6"The sensation of vertigo hit me like a physical blow, a spinning, sickening spiral that tore the air from my lungs."
7"I reached out, my fingers grasping for something solid, something real, but the world was nothing but static and flickering, jagged geometry."
8"The sky above was a bruised violet, occupied by two moons that bled flickering, pale light downward."
9"The standing stones were gone, replaced by a horizon that stretched endlessly into a grey, churning fog."
62.50% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags8
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"I said, my voice sounding thin and hollow in the oppressive stillness"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"I whispered (whisper)"
1"I murmured (murmur)"
2"I demanded (demand)"
3"the voice hissed (hiss)"
dialogueSentences14
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio0.571
effectiveRatio0.571
71.6225%