Run: 2026-03-03-01KJTY4CEBDWBT71Z94YHS504T

Run Details

Duration:
7.2s
Cost:
$0.003334
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The snap of the oak branch beneath my boot sounded far too loud in the oppressive silence of Richmond Park. I froze, breath hitching, my gaze darting toward the jagged silhouette of the monoliths rising from the earth like rotting teeth. The Heartstone pendant against my chest flared, a rhythmic, pulsing heat that seeped through my uniform shirt. It was warmer than it had any right to be. The air inside the boundaries of the Fae Grove didn't smell like pine or damp soil; it tasted like ozone and copper, an electric charge that made the hair on my arms stand straight up. "Right," I whispered, the sound dying seconds after it left my lips. "No turning back." I navigated the circle of standing stones carefully. The turf, usually well-kept during the day, felt spongy and wet beneath my soles here, almost organic, like standing on the skin of something dormant. My flashlight cut a pathetic, yellow swathe through the gloom, but the light seemed to hit a wall just a few feet ahead, reflecting back at me with a sickening shimmer. A rustle. Not the wind. Too deliberate. Something shifted in the periphery of my vision, a spindly, long-limbed smudge of darkness that dissolved the moment I turned my head. My fingers tightened on the strap of my delivery bag, the weight of the thermal box suddenly feeling like an anchor. "Isolde? You in here?" My voice betrayed me, cracking towards the end. I hadn't come for an order. The address on the scrap of paper tucked in my pocket had led me to the edge of the world, and now, my common sense was begging me to sprint for the park gates. *Pulse-pulse.* The pendant burned. I pulled it out from beneath my collar. The deep crimson gem was no longer just shimmering; it was glowing with a harsh, rhythmic brilliance, illuminating the gnarled bark of the ancient oak trees that ringed the grove. The shadows between the trees weren't static. They were reaching, thin, ink-black fingers of mist curling toward the warmth of the stone. "You shouldn't have brought that here, Carter." The voice didn't come from behind me. It came from the air itself, layered and dissonant, like a record skipping. I spun around, my boot catching on a protruding root. I fell hard, the thermal box clattering against stone, but I scrambled back, eyes scanning the darkness. Nothing. No one. Just the impenetrable wall of the night. "I have a delivery," I said, forcing my voice to remain steady. "Address said the Grove. Last stone on the north side." "A delivery." The voice chuckled, a sound like dry leaves skittering over pavement. "A courier for the dead. How fitting." I stood up, brushing the dirt from my trousers. The terror was there, a cold, knotted weight in my stomach, but I’d spent enough time running from things that went bump in the night to know that showing fear was an invitation. "I'm just doing my job," I countered, adjusting the strap on my shoulder. "If you're the one who ordered, pay up and I'm out of your hair." "Pay?" The air shifted, the temperature plummeting until my breath bloomed in front of me in thick, white plumes. A figure emerged from behind the central stone—or rather, it manifested from the darkness, a tall, gaunt shape draped in what looked like layered, grey rags. It lacked a face, at least in the traditional sense. Where features should have been, there was only a smooth, pale expanse of flesh, interrupted by a single, vertical slit that pulsed in time with my pendant. It stepped forward, its feet never quite touching the grass. "The price for entering the Grove isn't silver, Aurora," the thing whispered, its head tilting at an impossible ninety-degree angle. I took a step back, my heel sinking into a soft patch of moss that bled a dark, viscous liquid. "How do you know my name?" "We know the ripple in the water before the stone hits the surface." It drifted closer, the smell of formaldehyde and wildflowers overwhelming my senses. It pointed a long, tapering finger at the Heartstone dangling from my hand. "That trinket was pulled from a tomb that never should have been breached. You carry a burden you aren't equipped to shoulder." "It was a gift." "Was it?" The creature flickered, momentarily appearing inches from my face before darting back to the edge of the grove. Small, unseen things began to chitter in the canopy above, a chorus of high-pitched, mocking laughter. I felt a prickling sensation on the back of my neck, then the sharp, stinging snap of a thread pulling tight across my skin. "Rory," it hissed, the voice mimicking the cadence of my own mother's tone, Cardiff lilt and all. "Tell me, is Brendan still waiting for that call?" My pulse hammered against my ribs. *Don't look back. Don't let them move you.* "Leave my father out of this," I snapped, my hand reaching into my bag, fingers closing around the heavy, metal thermos I kept for my own tea. "You want to talk? Talk human. Or get out of the way." "Human is such a fragile mask," the entity murmured. It spread its arms, and the shadows in the grove surged, rising like a tide. The standing stones began to vibrate, a low, tectonic hum that rattled my teeth. "The Grove is hungry tonight, and you walked through the gates with a beacon pinned to your chest." The ground beneath me shuddered. The mossy earth I was standing on began to tear open, revealing not soil, but a void of shifting stars and absolute stillness. I had seconds. The pendant on my chest grew scorching, searing my skin through the fabric of my shirt. I didn't think. I swung the thermal bag with every ounce of frustration and fear I’d bottled up since leaving the apartment. It connected with something that felt like dried wicker and cold marble. The creature shrieked—a sound that shattered the silence into a thousand discordant shards—and the shadows recoiled, recoiling into the gnarled roots of the oaks. "You think a wooden box protects you?" The figure didn't fall. It simply reformed, taller now, its head brushing the low-hanging branches of an ancient oak. "The portal is open, Aurora. Look down." I glanced toward my feet. The void was widening, a hungry mouth in the earth, and the light from the Heartstone was being sucked into it, spiraling down like rainwater into a drain. My boots slipped on the crumbling edge. I clawed at the air, my fingers catching on the rough surface of a stone, but it was smooth, slick with an oily substance that defied my grip. The ground fell away entirely.
created_at"2026-03-03T22:47:05.961Z" 3/3/2026, 10:47:05 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags10
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences25
tagDensity0.4
leniency0.8
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
91.18% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1134
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"carefully"
count1
1
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"carefully"
1"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1134
totalAiIsms23
found
0
word"oppressive"
count1
1
word"silence"
count2
2
word"rhythmic"
count2
3
word"electric"
count1
4
word"navigated"
count1
5
word"gloom"
count1
6
word"weight"
count2
7
word"pulse"
count3
8
word"warmth"
count1
9
word"scanning"
count1
10
word"stomach"
count1
11
word"pulsed"
count1
12
word"flickered"
count1
13
word"lilt"
count1
14
word"beacon"
count1
15
word"searing"
count1
16
word"marble"
count1
17
word"shattered"
count1
highlights
0"oppressive"
1"silence"
2"rhythmic"
3"electric"
4"navigated"
5"gloom"
6"weight"
7"pulse"
8"warmth"
9"scanning"
10"stomach"
11"pulsed"
12"flickered"
13"lilt"
14"beacon"
15"searing"
16"marble"
17"shattered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences70
matches(empty)
61.22% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences70
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences85
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen35
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans2
markdownWords9
totalWords1131
ratio0.008
matches
0"Pulse-pulse."
1"Don't look back. Don't let them move you."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions9
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions8
wordCount951
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity0.32
worstName"Heartstone"
maxWindowNameDensity0.5
worstWindowName"Heartstone"
discoveredNames
Richmond1
Park1
Heartstone3
Fae1
Grove1
Cardiff1
persons(empty)
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Heartstone"
3"Fae"
4"Grove"
5"Cardiff"
globalScore1
windowScore1
11.11% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences54
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"tasted like ozone and copper, an electric"
1"looked like layered, grey rags"
2"felt like dried wicker and cold marble"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.884
wordCount1131
matches
0"not soil, but a void of shifting stars"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences85
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs35
mean32.31
std22.83
cv0.707
sampleLengths
041
162
215
364
47
543
64
748
81
963
107
1120
1237
1322
1420
1542
1627
171
1881
1910
2020
2126
2260
234
242
2558
2626
2714
2839
2956
3047
3158
3233
3368
345
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences70
matches
0"being sucked"
22.22% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs150
matches
0"was begging"
1"was glowing"
2"was standing"
3"was widening"
8.40% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount3
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences4
totalSentences85
ratio0.047
matches
0"The air inside the boundaries of the Fae Grove didn't smell like pine or damp soil; it tasted like ozone and copper, an electric charge that made the hair on my arms stand straight up."
1"The deep crimson gem was no longer just shimmering; it was glowing with a harsh, rhythmic brilliance, illuminating the gnarled bark of the ancient oak trees that ringed the grove."
2"A figure emerged from behind the central stone—or rather, it manifested from the darkness, a tall, gaunt shape draped in what looked like layered, grey rags."
3"The creature shrieked—a sound that shattered the silence into a thousand discordant shards—and the shadows recoiled, recoiling into the gnarled roots of the oaks."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount960
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"reaching, thin, ink-black fingers"
adverbCount36
adverbRatio0.0375
lyAdverbCount9
lyAdverbRatio0.009375
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences85
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences85
mean13.31
std8.88
cv0.668
sampleLengths
020
121
217
310
435
512
63
78
825
931
102
113
122
1322
1421
154
168
176
1834
191
203
218
2230
237
2415
257
267
2713
2810
2917
301
312
327
3312
3410
3513
367
379
3833
3913
4014
411
4218
4326
4410
4527
4610
4720
4820
496
49.41% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.35294117647058826
totalSentences85
uniqueOpeners30
51.28% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences65
matches
0"Just the impenetrable wall of"
ratio0.015
10.77% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount34
totalSentences65
matches
0"I froze, breath hitching, my"
1"It was warmer than it"
2"I whispered, the sound dying"
3"I navigated the circle of"
4"My flashlight cut a pathetic,"
5"My fingers tightened on the"
6"My voice betrayed me, cracking"
7"I hadn't come for an"
8"I pulled it out from"
9"They were reaching, thin, ink-black"
10"It came from the air"
11"I spun around, my boot"
12"I fell hard, the thermal"
13"I said, forcing my voice"
14"I stood up, brushing the"
15"I countered, adjusting the strap"
16"It lacked a face, at"
17"It stepped forward, its feet"
18"I took a step back,"
19"It drifted closer, the smell"
ratio0.523
6.15% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount59
totalSentences65
matches
0"The snap of the oak"
1"I froze, breath hitching, my"
2"The Heartstone pendant against my"
3"It was warmer than it"
4"The air inside the boundaries"
5"I whispered, the sound dying"
6"I navigated the circle of"
7"The turf, usually well-kept during"
8"My flashlight cut a pathetic,"
9"Something shifted in the periphery"
10"My fingers tightened on the"
11"My voice betrayed me, cracking"
12"I hadn't come for an"
13"The address on the scrap"
14"The pendant burned."
15"I pulled it out from"
16"The deep crimson gem was"
17"The shadows between the trees"
18"They were reaching, thin, ink-black"
19"The voice didn't come from"
ratio0.908
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences65
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences36
technicalSentenceCount9
matches
0"I froze, breath hitching, my gaze darting toward the jagged silhouette of the monoliths rising from the earth like rotting teeth."
1"The Heartstone pendant against my chest flared, a rhythmic, pulsing heat that seeped through my uniform shirt."
2"The air inside the boundaries of the Fae Grove didn't smell like pine or damp soil; it tasted like ozone and copper, an electric charge that made the hair on my…"
3"Something shifted in the periphery of my vision, a spindly, long-limbed smudge of darkness that dissolved the moment I turned my head."
4"The deep crimson gem was no longer just shimmering; it was glowing with a harsh, rhythmic brilliance, illuminating the gnarled bark of the ancient oak trees tha…"
5"The terror was there, a cold, knotted weight in my stomach, but I’d spent enough time running from things that went bump in the night to know that showing fear …"
6"It connected with something that felt like dried wicker and cold marble."
7"The creature shrieked—a sound that shattered the silence into a thousand discordant shards—and the shadows recoiled, recoiling into the gnarled roots of the oak…"
8"I clawed at the air, my fingers catching on the rough surface of a stone, but it was smooth, slick with an oily substance that defied my grip."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags10
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"I whispered, the sound dying seconds after it left my lips"
1"The voice chuckled, a sound like dry leaves skittering over pavement"
2"the thing whispered, its head tilting at an impossible ninety-degree angle"
3"It drifted, the smell of formaldehyde and wildflowers overwhelming my senses"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount6
fancyTags
0"I whispered (whisper)"
1"The voice chuckled (chuckle)"
2"the thing whispered (whisper)"
3"it hissed (hiss)"
4"I snapped (snap)"
5"the entity murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences25
tagDensity0.28
leniency0.56
rawRatio0.857
effectiveRatio0.48
63.5253%