Run: 2026-03-03-01KJTYF9800MSNRQJ2JV5K9F3S

Run Details

Duration:
6m 12s
Cost:
$0.005472
Provider:
Seed

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The bell above The Raven’s Nest door jingled soft, drowned out by the patter of rain slashing against the Soho awnings. Silas Blackwood wiped the same highball glass for the third time that hour, his left knee throbbing low enough to make his jaw tighten with each shift of his weight. The distinctive green neon sign above the entrance hummed, flickering to paint the scuffed oak bar a sickly lime when the power dipped low. The walls crammed with tattered Crimean War maps and faded black-and-white press photos—leftovers from his MI6 days, he’d never bothered to pack them away, even when he’d swapped briefing books for cocktail shakers. A single regular slouched at the far end booth, nursing a pint of bitter, his head nodding to the static crackle of a BBC Radio 4 news broadcast about a train delay in Kent. The bell jingled again, sharper this time, and Silas looked up. Rory Carter stood just inside the door, shaking rain off the hem of her waterproof jacket. Her straight black hair fell shoulder-length, the ends dark and curled slightly at the edges from the damp, no sign of the neon pink streaks she’d dyed her hair with at 17, back when she’d snuck into his bar to protest her dad’s pre-law lecture series. Bright blue eyes darted around the room, skimming the maps and photos, locking onto him after half a beat of hesitation. For a second, he thought he’d misremembered the scar—then she pushed a strand of hair behind her ear, and the small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist peeked out from the rolled cuff of her jacket. That scar was from when she was 12, fell off her rusted BMX into a fence post outside their Cardiff home, cried for an hour because she’d ripped the elbow out of her favorite denim jacket. He’d carried her to the house, Brendan had stitched her up at the kitchen table with a needle and thread and a splash of his favorite Jameson. Oh. It was Rory. The kid who’d climbed his oak trees behind the bar, who’d stolen his scotch when he was out of the room, who’d begged him to tell her spy stories until her mom called her inside for dinner. She was 25 now, he realized, tall and sharp and nothing like the lanky teen who’d once tried to sneak out of a wedding with a pocket full of his peanuts. He hadn’t seen her since 2021, when Brendan had called him to say Rory was moving to Cardiff for pre-law. He’d meant to reach out after that, to ask how she was doing, but his first overseas contract in three years had sucked up every hour of his day, and by the time he was free, she’d posted a single Facebook update: Left Cardiff. Don’t ask. Then her profile went private. She stepped further into the bar, her scuffed combat boots squeaking on the tile floor. She pulled off her jacket, folded it tight over her arm, and slid onto the bar stool farthest from the regular. An insulated delivery bag slung over one shoulder, the gold logo of Golden Empress restaurant blotted with rainwater and a faint smudge of red curry. “Silas?” Her voice was lower than he remembered, thick with the edge of London rain, sharp with the surprise of seeing someone she’d thought she’d left behind. “Is that you?” He set the glass down hard enough that a bead of Jameson sloshed over the edge onto the bar top. He twisted the silver signet ring on his right hand—worn every day since his Prague discharge, a habit he’d never broken—before gesturing to the empty stool next to him. “Rory. Christ. I didn’t know you were in London.” She slid onto the stool, her shoulders slumping a little like she’d been carrying a weight she didn’t realize until she sat down. “I’ve been here six months. Deliver for Golden Empress. Found the flat above the bar last minute, didn’t think to... tell anyone.” Her eyes flickered to the hidden bookshelf door at the back of the bar, the one he used for clandestine meetings, then back to his face. She’d always been good at reading people, even when she was 12. He reached for the locked glass cabinet behind the bar, fumbled with the key he’d hidden under a jar of peanuts, and pulled out a bottle of the same Jameson her dad used to pour for him back in those Cardiff dinners. He poured a two-finger pour, slid it across the bar to her. “On the house. Even if you did steal my whiskey when you were 16.” Her fingers wrapped around the glass, her knuckles white from the strap of the delivery bag. She took a sip, her nose crinkling slightly—she’d always hated straight whiskey, used to mix it with ginger ale until she could pretend it wasn’t burning her throat. She set the glass down with a soft thud. “Still hate neat whiskey?” She snorted, a dry, sharp sound that didn’t reach her eyes. “Didn’t have a choice tonight. Last delivery was an office in Leicester Square, traffic was a wreck, and I didn’t want to spill the curry. Needed something to calm my nerves.” She nodded at the delivery bag, then at the framed black-and-white photo on the wall behind him: a shot of him, Brendan, and Jennifer Carter at Rory’s cousin’s wedding, all smiling, Brendan’s arm slung over his daughter’s shoulder. “I forgot you were at that wedding. You gave me a lollipop and told me not to tell my mom I’d had it before dinner.” Silas laughed, a low, rough sound that vibrated in his chest. He remembered that day: Jennifer had chased him around the garden for ten minutes after she found the empty lollipop wrapper in Rory’s pocket. “Your mom chewed me out for an hour. Said I was corrupting the youth.” “Yeah, but she loved you. Everyone loved you.” She ran her finger along the scratch mark on the bar top, right where she used to rest her elbows when she was a teen, listening to him tell stories about his MI6 trips. “I used to come in here all the time before I moved to Cardiff. You’d let me play darts, even though I was too short to reach the board.” He nodded, remembering the phone book he’d stacked under her feet that first time. “You kept complaining it was cheating. Said I was rigging the game so you’d lose and buy you a ginger ale.” “Fair.” He leaned against the bar, his limp making him rest most of his weight on his right leg, and nodded at the delivery bag. “So delivery driver, then? Not pre-law anymore?” Her laugh died, and she stared into her whiskey glass, the neon light glinting off her wet eyelashes. “My dad kept pushing me. Said I’d be a waste of my education if I didn’t pursue it. Evan agreed. Said I needed to ‘stay grounded’.” Her voice dropped, and she gestured to the crescent scar on her wrist, then quickly pulled her sleeve back down. “I didn’t realize how much he controlled me until I was gone. I couldn’t even quit pre-law without him throwing a fit. Told me I was throwing my future away. That I’d never amount to anything without him.” Silas nodded, his jaw tightening. He remembered Evan—tall, blond, too smooth, always adjusting Rory’s hair when she wasn’t looking, always correcting her when she spoke in front of her dad. He’d mentioned to Brendan once that Evan was “too eager to please,” and Brendan had brushed it off, said Rory was old enough to choose her own partners. Stupid, stupid mistake. “Your mom called me two years ago. Said you left him and took off. She didn’t know where you went.” Rory’s eyes filled with tears, but she didn’t let them fall. She took another sip of whiskey, wiping at her eye with the back of her hand. “I didn’t mean to disappear. I just... I couldn’t go back. Cardiff was too much. Every street had his face, every coffee shop we used to go to had his stupid jokes. I slept on Eva’s couch for three months, then moved from flat to flat until I found this one above the bar. I didn’t want anyone to find me until I was safe.” “I’m sorry I didn’t look for you,” Silas said, quieter now. “I should have called. After your mom called.” She shook her head. “It wasn’t your fault. I didn’t want anyone to know. I didn’t want to be the kid who messed up again. The kid who left Cardiff, who quit pre-law, who can’t even hold a ‘proper’ job.” She gestured to the delivery bag. “I deliver pad thai and dumplings for a living now. That’s it. No lawyers, no rules, just... showing up on time.” Silas pulled out the stool next to her, sat down carefully, and nodded at the maps on the wall. “You know, those maps? You used to trace them with your finger when you were 12, asking me all about the spy missions I’d been on. You said you wanted to be a spy, just like me. Not a barrister.” She smiled, soft and real. “I still do. But delivery driving’s a good substitute. I get to navigate the city, find shortcuts, outwit traffic jams. It’s like a mini spy mission every day.” He laughed, and this time, it was easy, no weight attached. “You’ve always been good at outthinking problems. Better than most of the agents I worked with.” He gestured to the photo of him and her parents on the wall. “Your dad asked about you last Christmas. He was worried sick. Said he should have listened to you about Evan. That he never saw how bad it was.” Rory’s face fell, and she set her glass down hard enough that the ice clinked against the glass. “I haven’t talked to him since I left. I couldn’t. He kept defending him, saying I was overreacting. That Evan just cared about me.” Silas understood that pain. He’d seen too many people let their loved ones down by ignoring red flags, too many families torn apart by pride and denial. “I’ll send him your number. If you want. He’s been checking in every few months, asking if I’d heard anything.” She hesitated, then nodded, her fingers tracing the rim of her glass. “Yeah. That would be... good. I miss him. But I don’t know if I’m ready to talk about everything yet.” They sat in silence for a minute, listening to the rain tap against the windows, the radio playing a slow jazz track Silas had put on an hour earlier. The regular at the far end booth paid his tab, slipped on his coat, and left, the bell jingling as he went. The neon sign flickered again, and for a second, the bar was bathed in natural light from the streetlamp outside. Rory looked around the room, at the maps, at the photos, at him, and she smiled again, brighter this time. “I didn’t know you’d still be here. Running this bar. I thought you’d have moved on to something bigger.” Silas raised his glass, clinked it against hers. “Bigger means more lies, more secrets. This bar? It’s where people come to talk without being listened to. Where they can be normal for a minute. Just like you are now.” He nodded at her delivery bag, which was still sitting on the floor between her feet, the curry logo blotted with rain. “Even if you’re soaking wet and covered in curry sauce.” She laughed, and this time, it was loud and unguarded, like she hadn’t laughed in years. “Yeah. Well. The curry job was a nightmare. The customer wanted extra chili, then complained it was too spicy. I almost quit halfway through the delivery.” They sat there for another hour, talking—about her deliveries, about the bar, about the old days in Cardiff, about the things they’d missed while they were apart. Silas told her about his knee injury, about the MI6 cases he’d worked after she’d left, about the regulars who came to the bar every night. Rory told him about the best delivery routes in Soho, about the customers who tipped well, about the flat above the bar, which had a leaky faucet in the bathroom but a great view of the neon sign. When the rain slowed to a drizzle, Rory stood up, slinging her delivery bag over her shoulder. She brushed a hand over the bar top, the scratch mark still there just like she remembered. “I should go. I have to get up at 6 a.m. for the breakfast delivery run.” She paused, leaning against the bar, and smiled at him—bright, unguarded, the same smile he’d seen on a 12-year-old girl who’d just aced a game of darts with a phone book under her feet. “Thanks, Silas. I didn’t think anyone would remember me, after all this time.” He stood up, his left knee throbbing sharply, but he didn’t let it show. He clapped her on the shoulder, gentle, and twisted his silver signet ring on his right hand. “I’ll always remember you, Rory. The kid who stole my whiskey and drew spy maps on my case files. Don’t be a stranger, yeah?” She laughed, loud and bright, and pushed open the bar door. The rain hit her face, and she tilted her head up, letting the drizzle cool her skin. She waved over her shoulder as she walked down the wet Soho street, her boots tapping against the pavement, and vanished around the corner into the glow of the next neon sign.
created_at"2026-03-03T22:53:03.116Z" 3/3/2026, 10:53:03 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags12
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences37
tagDensity0.324
leniency0.649
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
89.14% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2303
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count2
1
adverb"quickly"
count1
2
adverb"carefully"
count1
3
adverb"sharply"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"quickly"
2"carefully"
3"sharply"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
73.95% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2303
totalAiIsms12
found
0
word"weight"
count4
1
word"flickered"
count2
2
word"clandestine"
count1
3
word"vibrated"
count1
4
word"glinting"
count1
5
word"navigate"
count1
6
word"tracing"
count1
7
word"silence"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"flickered"
2"clandestine"
3"vibrated"
4"glinting"
5"navigate"
6"tracing"
7"silence"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences78
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences78
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences103
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen71
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2295
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions24
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions58
wordCount1566
uniqueNames22
maxNameDensity0.77
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest1
Soho3
Blackwood1
Crimean1
War1
Radio1
Kent1
Silas10
Carter2
Cardiff5
Brendan6
Jameson3
Rory12
Facebook1
Left1
Golden1
Empress1
London1
Prague1
Jennifer2
Evan2
persons
0"Raven"
1"Blackwood"
2"War"
3"Silas"
4"Carter"
5"Brendan"
6"Jameson"
7"Rory"
8"Jennifer"
9"Evan"
places
0"Soho"
1"Kent"
2"Cardiff"
3"London"
4"Prague"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences68
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2295
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences103
matches
0"remembered that day"
1"understood that pain"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs35
mean65.57
std37.25
cv0.568
sampleLengths
0142
111
2182
3143
461
530
658
783
868
953
104
11105
1249
1371
1435
1532
16102
1781
1892
1919
2067
2159
2233
2368
2442
2547
2632
2771
2839
2971
3042
3191
3297
3355
3460
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences78
matches
0"was bathed"
63.39% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount5
totalVerbs244
matches
0"was moving"
1"was doing"
2"wasn’t burning"
3"wasn’t looking"
4"was still sitting"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount8
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences7
totalSentences103
ratio0.068
matches
0"The walls crammed with tattered Crimean War maps and faded black-and-white press photos—leftovers from his MI6 days, he’d never bothered to pack them away, even when he’d swapped briefing books for cocktail shakers."
1"For a second, he thought he’d misremembered the scar—then she pushed a strand of hair behind her ear, and the small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist peeked out from the rolled cuff of her jacket."
2"He twisted the silver signet ring on his right hand—worn every day since his Prague discharge, a habit he’d never broken—before gesturing to the empty stool next to him."
3"She took a sip, her nose crinkling slightly—she’d always hated straight whiskey, used to mix it with ginger ale until she could pretend it wasn’t burning her throat."
4"He remembered Evan—tall, blond, too smooth, always adjusting Rory’s hair when she wasn’t looking, always correcting her when she spoke in front of her dad."
5"They sat there for another hour, talking—about her deliveries, about the bar, about the old days in Cardiff, about the things they’d missed while they were apart."
6"“I should go. I have to get up at 6 a.m. for the breakfast delivery run.” She paused, leaning against the bar, and smiled at him—bright, unguarded, the same smile he’d seen on a 12-year-old girl who’d just aced a game of darts with a phone book under her feet."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1583
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount43
adverbRatio0.027163613392293114
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.003790271636133923
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences103
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences103
mean22.28
std13.4
cv0.601
sampleLengths
021
130
224
333
434
511
616
746
821
936
1036
1127
121
133
1437
1531
1620
1744
182
195
2015
2121
2225
2327
243
2520
2629
279
2823
2948
3012
3142
3212
3314
3416
3528
369
374
3811
3969
4025
4111
4224
4314
4442
4529
4614
4721
4825
497
41.10% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats11
diversityRatio0.3106796116504854
totalSentences103
uniqueOpeners32
87.72% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences76
matches
0"Bright blue eyes darted around"
1"Then her profile went private."
ratio0.026
0.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount47
totalSentences76
matches
0"Her straight black hair fell"
1"He’d carried her to the"
2"It was Rory."
3"She was 25 now, he"
4"He hadn’t seen her since"
5"He’d meant to reach out"
6"She stepped further into the"
7"She pulled off her jacket,"
8"Her voice was lower than"
9"He set the glass down"
10"He twisted the silver signet"
11"She slid onto the stool,"
12"Her eyes flickered to the"
13"She’d always been good at"
14"He reached for the locked"
15"He poured a two-finger pour,"
16"Her fingers wrapped around the"
17"She took a sip, her"
18"She set the glass down"
19"She snorted, a dry, sharp"
ratio0.618
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount71
totalSentences76
matches
0"The bell above The Raven’s"
1"Silas Blackwood wiped the same"
2"The distinctive green neon sign"
3"The walls crammed with tattered"
4"A single regular slouched at"
5"The bell jingled again, sharper"
6"Rory Carter stood just inside"
7"Her straight black hair fell"
8"That scar was from when"
9"He’d carried her to the"
10"It was Rory."
11"The kid who’d climbed his"
12"She was 25 now, he"
13"He hadn’t seen her since"
14"He’d meant to reach out"
15"She stepped further into the"
16"She pulled off her jacket,"
17"An insulated delivery bag slung"
18"Her voice was lower than"
19"He set the glass down"
ratio0.934
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences76
matches(empty)
ratio0
51.95% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences55
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"A single regular slouched at the far end booth, nursing a pint of bitter, his head nodding to the static crackle of a BBC Radio 4 news broadcast about a train d…"
1"The kid who’d climbed his oak trees behind the bar, who’d stolen his scotch when he was out of the room, who’d begged him to tell her spy stories until her mom …"
2"She was 25 now, he realized, tall and sharp and nothing like the lanky teen who’d once tried to sneak out of a wedding with a pocket full of his peanuts."
3"She slid onto the stool, her shoulders slumping a little like she’d been carrying a weight she didn’t realize until she sat down."
4"She took a sip, her nose crinkling slightly—she’d always hated straight whiskey, used to mix it with ginger ale until she could pretend it wasn’t burning her th…"
5"Silas told her about his knee injury, about the MI6 cases he’d worked after she’d left, about the regulars who came to the bar every night."
6"Rory told him about the best delivery routes in Soho, about the customers who tipped well, about the flat above the bar, which had a leaky faucet in the bathroo…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags12
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"He’d (would)"
dialogueSentences37
tagDensity0.054
leniency0.108
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.054
80.0416%