Run: 2026-03-03-01KJTZRC7MW8YZAT6YHW4FA1T2

Run Details

Duration:
9.3s
Cost:
$0.003713
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The glass in my hand rattled against the mahogany bar top, a rhythmic clicking that underscored the low, mournful hum of the jazz track playing somewhere behind the counter. I stared at the amber liquid, swirling the single ice cube until it chipped against the sides. The Raven’s Nest always felt like a tomb before midnight, all shadows and stale ambition. "You always did have a penchant for the bottom shelf, Rory." The voice hit my spine like a physical blow. It was smooth, devoid of the jagged edges I’d spent three years trying to forget. I turned slowly, my breath hitching in a throat that suddenly felt far too tight. Standing three feet away, leaning against the scarred wood with the casual arrogance of a man who owned the air he breathed, was Evan. He looked polished. Almost curated. The expensive wool coat draped over his arms screamed London wealth, a stark departure from the dishevelled, desperate boy I had fled in Cardiff. He signalled the bartender with a flick of his wrist, a gesture dripping with the same lazy authority that used to make me feel small. "I’m surprised you haven’t moved on to something stronger." "I like the burn," I said, my voice steady, though the crescent-shaped scar on my wrist throbbed with a phantom ghost-pain. "Reminds me not to drink anything that tastes like sugar." "Still holding onto that defiance? Even after everything?" "Defiance keeps me upright." He laughed, a soft, dry sound that didn't reach his eyes. Those eyes, once flickering with a frantic, possessive heat, were now cold, clinical, and watchful. He took the fresh pour from the bartender, a neat scotch, and tapped his glass against mine. The contact was deliberate, a boundary transgression that had my fingers tightening around my own drink until the knuckles turned white. "You look older," he noted, his gaze tracking from my hair, now chopped into sharp, shoulder-length strands, down to the worn leather jacket I’d pulled from the back of the closet. "London hasn't been kind to you." "London doesn’t owe me kindness. It’s a transaction. I work, I pay rent, I breathe. It’s an improvement over the alternative." "The alternative, as you call it, involved a future. A life you walked away from in the dead of night." "A cage with a view of the sea isn't a future, Evan. It’s a slow death by assimilation." I slid off the stool, intending to put distance between us, but he moved with a fluid, predatory grace, stepping into my path. The air between us became a thick, electrified wire. There was no warmth left, only the chilling history of things said in the dark and promises shattered against kitchen tiles. The bar darkened as the lights dimmed for the final set of the night. A smell of wet wool and ozone seemed to cling to him, or perhaps that was just the metallic tang of fear rising in my own senses. I backed away, my heel catching on the uneven floorboards, but I refused to break eye contact. "You think you’re hidden here?" He leaned in, his voice dropping to a register that barely cleared the ambient piano noise. "Silas has long fingers, I’ll give him that. He’s good at clearing up messes." "I’m not a mess, Evan. I’m a ghost. You don't get to haunt people who aren't afraid of the dark anymore." "You had a crescent-shaped scar on your wrist when you left." He gestured toward my hand. "It’s still there. Things that break don't heal perfectly. They just knit back together, crooked." I looked down at the pale, jagged line etched into my skin. It was the mark of a childhood fall, but he—he had tried to make it represent something else. Something proprietary. The memory of his thumb tracing that same skin, whispering about how I couldn't survive without him, flared with a white-hot intensity. "I like the scar," I said, meeting his gaze with a smile that felt razor-sharp. "It’s the only part of myself I actually managed to keep." "Then you’re as foolish as I remember. You’re trading a comfortable life for service to a man who deals in secrets." "Silas deals in truths. That’s a language you never learned." "Truth is a luxury for those who don’t have to fight to keep their place in the world," he spat, his composure finally slipping. "You’re playing house in a den of spooks, Rory. But don't mistake a safe house for a home. One day, you’ll look out of that window and realise you have nowhere left to run." "If I run, it’ll be over your throat." The silence stretched, heavy and suffocating. Silas emerged from behind the bookshelf at the back, his movements hampered by that rhythmic, uneven limp, his silver signet ring catching the dim neon glow of the green sign outside. He didn't look at us, but his presence was a wall of cold, immovable granite. Evan glanced at him, then back to me, the mask of indifference returning. He smoothed his coat, the fabric settling with an expensive, crisp sound that felt jarring in the gritty atmosphere of the Nest. "Funny how paths cross," Evan said, his tone shifting into something hollow. "I’m in town for business. A firm in Mayfair. We should catch up properly. Maybe over dinner? Somewhere with less... history." "I don't eat with strangers, Evan." "Cruel." He sighed, turning toward the door. "But expected. Just remember, Rory, some debts don't expire just because you crossed a county line." He didn't wait for a reply. He nudged the door open, letting in a brief, howling rush of London wind that sent empty glasses shivering on the bar. The green light blinked out for a second as the door groaned on its hinges. I stood there, my chest heaving, the bitter taste of the cheap scotch still coating my throat. I hadn't moved an inch, but I felt as though I had been dragged through miles of jagged glass. My hands were shaking, an involuntary reaction to the proximity of a man I had spent three years scrubbing from my subconscious. Silas reached the bar, his eyes tracking the doorway. He didn't ask questions. He never did. He simply took the empty glass from my trembling fingers and set it aside. He reached beneath the counter, his movements slow and deliberate, and pulled out a heavy lead-lined box. "He followed you, didn't he?" Silas said, his voice like grinding gravel. "He didn't follow me. He found me." "There is a distinction," Silas remarked, placing a small, black-handled blade on the scarred wood. "One is an accident of geography. The other is an invitation to a war." The front door didn't close properly. It swung halfway, caught by the latch, and began to creak in the draft. From the empty street outside, the screech of tyre rubber against wet tarmac echoed, followed by the heavy, ominous thud of a vehicle door slamming shut. Silas pulled a secondary lock across the entrance, the heavy iron bolt sliding home with a finality that made the whole building shudder. He looked at me, his hazel eyes clouded with something that resembled regret, though it was probably just calculation. "He isn't alone," Silas said, his hand resting on the holster concealed beneath his coat. "The shadow on the wall just shifted, Rory. Look." Across the street, reflected in the distorted gold mirror behind the bar, a man in a black coat stood beneath the stuttering green neon sign. He was watching the window, not moving, his face obscured by the brim of his hat. Then, he raised a hand and tapped the glass—three rhythmic strikes that vibrated through the frame. The lock on the door groaned as it began to give way.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags11
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences34
tagDensity0.324
leniency0.647
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
88.50% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1304
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
1
adverb"suddenly"
count1
2
adverb"perfectly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"suddenly"
2"perfectly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
38.65% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1304
totalAiIsms16
found
0
word"rhythmic"
count3
1
word"stark"
count1
2
word"throbbed"
count1
3
word"warmth"
count1
4
word"chilling"
count1
5
word"shattered"
count1
6
word"etched"
count1
7
word"tracing"
count1
8
word"intensity"
count1
9
word"comfortable"
count1
10
word"silence"
count1
11
word"mask of indifference"
count1
12
word"echoed"
count1
13
word"vibrated"
count1
highlights
0"rhythmic"
1"stark"
2"throbbed"
3"warmth"
4"chilling"
5"shattered"
6"etched"
7"tracing"
8"intensity"
9"comfortable"
10"silence"
11"mask of indifference"
12"echoed"
13"vibrated"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"knuckles turned white"
count1
highlights
0"knuckles turned white"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences61
matches(empty)
25.76% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences61
filterMatches
0"feel"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tried to"
2"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences84
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen34
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1302
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions15
wordCount926
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity0.65
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest2
Evan3
London2
Cardiff1
Silas6
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Evan"
3"Silas"
places
0"London"
1"Cardiff"
globalScore1
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences55
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"felt like a tomb before midnight, all s"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1302
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences84
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs40
mean32.55
std18.94
cv0.582
sampleLengths
061
111
263
354
49
531
68
74
864
937
1021
1120
1218
1353
1458
1535
1621
1731
1854
1926
2021
2110
2258
238
2452
2535
2633
276
2823
2943
3058
3147
3212
337
3429
3546
3642
3724
3857
3912
99.51% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences61
matches
0"been dragged"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs158
matches
0"were shaking"
1"was watching"
74.83% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences84
ratio0.024
matches
0"It was the mark of a childhood fall, but he—he had tried to make it represent something else."
1"Then, he raised a hand and tapped the glass—three rhythmic strikes that vibrated through the frame."
82.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount935
adjectiveStacks3
stackExamples
0"rhythmic, uneven limp, his"
1"heavy lead-lined box."
2"small, black-handled blade"
adverbCount24
adverbRatio0.025668449197860963
lyAdverbCount9
lyAdverbRatio0.009625668449197862
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences84
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences84
mean15.5
std7.15
cv0.461
sampleLengths
029
117
215
311
49
515
615
724
83
92
1024
1125
129
1321
1410
158
164
1711
1815
1917
2021
2131
226
2321
2420
2518
2623
279
2821
2914
3027
3117
3221
3314
3421
3516
3615
3712
3818
392
4022
4115
4211
4321
4410
4524
4634
478
486
4931
40.48% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats11
diversityRatio0.32142857142857145
totalSentences84
uniqueOpeners27
56.50% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences59
matches
0"Then, he raised a hand"
ratio0.017
3.05% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount32
totalSentences59
matches
0"I stared at the amber"
1"It was smooth, devoid of"
2"I turned slowly, my breath"
3"He looked polished."
4"He signalled the bartender with"
5"I said, my voice steady,"
6"He laughed, a soft, dry"
7"He took the fresh pour"
8"he noted, his gaze tracking"
9"I slid off the stool,"
10"I backed away, my heel"
11"He leaned in, his voice"
12"He gestured toward my hand"
13"I looked down at the"
14"It was the mark of"
15"I said, meeting his gaze"
16"he spat, his composure finally"
17"He didn't look at us,"
18"He smoothed his coat, the"
19"He sighed, turning toward the"
ratio0.542
2.37% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount54
totalSentences59
matches
0"The glass in my hand"
1"I stared at the amber"
2"The Raven’s Nest always felt"
3"The voice hit my spine"
4"It was smooth, devoid of"
5"I turned slowly, my breath"
6"He looked polished."
7"The expensive wool coat draped"
8"He signalled the bartender with"
9"I said, my voice steady,"
10"He laughed, a soft, dry"
11"Those eyes, once flickering with"
12"He took the fresh pour"
13"The contact was deliberate, a"
14"he noted, his gaze tracking"
15"I slid off the stool,"
16"The air between us became"
17"The bar darkened as the"
18"A smell of wet wool"
19"I backed away, my heel"
ratio0.915
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences59
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences39
technicalSentenceCount9
matches
0"The glass in my hand rattled against the mahogany bar top, a rhythmic clicking that underscored the low, mournful hum of the jazz track playing somewhere behind…"
1"Standing three feet away, leaning against the scarred wood with the casual arrogance of a man who owned the air he breathed, was Evan."
2"He signalled the bartender with a flick of his wrist, a gesture dripping with the same lazy authority that used to make me feel small."
3"The contact was deliberate, a boundary transgression that had my fingers tightening around my own drink until the knuckles turned white."
4"The memory of his thumb tracing that same skin, whispering about how I couldn't survive without him, flared with a white-hot intensity."
5"He smoothed his coat, the fabric settling with an expensive, crisp sound that felt jarring in the gritty atmosphere of the Nest."
6"He nudged the door open, letting in a brief, howling rush of London wind that sent empty glasses shivering on the bar."
7"Silas pulled a secondary lock across the entrance, the heavy iron bolt sliding home with a finality that made the whole building shudder."
8"He looked at me, his hazel eyes clouded with something that resembled regret, though it was probably just calculation."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags11
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"he spat, his composure finally slipping"
1"Evan said, his tone shifting into something hollow"
2"Silas said, his hand resting on the holster concealed beneath his coat"
61.76% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags8
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"he noted (note)"
1"he spat (spit)"
2"He sighed (sigh)"
dialogueSentences34
tagDensity0.235
leniency0.471
rawRatio0.375
effectiveRatio0.176
71.8915%