Run: 2026-03-03-01KJTZT1JNR5ABW988258KB9BX

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Duration:
5m 33s
Cost:
$0.005220
Provider:
Seed

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
She yanks the door open mid-turn of the third deadbolt, the brass key scraping sharp in the lock, and freezes. He’s leaning against the red brick wall flanking the door, one scuffed black boot propped against the crumbing mortar, ivory-handled cane resting thick across one shoulder. Tailored charcoal suit crisp even after an hour of London’s drizzle, platinum blond hair slicked back so tight it pulls at his temples. When he lifts his head, her breath catches: one eye amber, one black, like cracked obsidian and melted honey. A soft thud behind her makes her glance down. Ptolemy, Eva’s tabby cat, winds around her ankles, miaowing loud enough to compete with the distant clatter of curry pots from the shop two floors below. “Rory.” His voice is low, roughened at the edges, the soft Marseille lilt she’d memorized once, then tried to scrub from her memory. She steps back, the door swinging shut a fraction, and her black delivery bag slips off her arm, thudding onto the scuffed doormat. A carton of jalfrezi sauce clinks inside, the sharp, warm scent of turmeric and cumin curling through the gap between the door and the frame. “You shouldn’t be here.” Her voice is steadier than she feels, bright blue eyes locked on his cane. The ivory handle catches the streetlamp light, and she remembers the night in Marseille, six months and a lifetime ago, when he’d used that same cane to split a man’s jaw outside a waterfront bar. She’d been drunk on rosé, clinging to his arm, and he’d told her to close her eyes, but she’d seen the blood splatter his crisp white shirt. He pushes off the wall, one hand lifting from the cane before he remembers himself, and stops three feet away. “I didn’t want to ambush you. I tracked your delivery route—Golden Empress flagged this address as your last drop tonight.” “Golden Empress? I deliver there three nights a week. You could have called.” “I tried.” He shifts his weight, and the cane creaks softly under the pressure of his hand. “Your mobile number’s disconnected. Eva’s number—” He nods toward the back of the flat, where Ptolemy starts rubbing harder against her calf, demanding his evening tuna treat. “—doesn’t return calls from unknown numbers.” Eva’s voice carries from the cluttered back room, sharp with her usual no-nonsense edge, paper rustling under her arms: “Rory? Who were you talking to?” She flinches, then fumbles with the deadbolt, yanking it shut with a sharp click that echoes down the alley. “Nothing! Just a wrong delivery!” She turns back to Lucien, her hands clenched into fists at her sides, the crescent scar on her left wrist throbbing under the cuff of her frayed Golden Empress delivery hoodie. “Evan’s in London.” The words hit her like a cold splash of rain down the back of her collar. She’d thought she’d left him in Cardiff, thought the restraining order Eva had helped her file would keep him away. Thought she’d escaped the way he’d grabbed her wrist, the faint crescent scar throbbing like it had been squeezed tight all over again. “How do you know that?” “Tarot reader in Camden.” He leans in a fraction, and this time, she doesn’t step back. He looms a little over her, the five inches of height difference making her feel small, something she’d spent three months struggling to outrun. The scent of his cologne—sandalmwood and citrus—fills her nose, the same scent she’d dreamed about for months after she’d left him. “Said a man with a raven tattoo on his neck was asking after a woman with black hair and a tiny blue birthmark behind her ear.” She reaches up, touching the small blue mark behind her ear, one she’d forgotten he’d noticed once, on a drunken night on the Thames, when she’d fallen asleep on his shoulder. “I told no one about that. Not even Eva.” He stares at her, and for the first time, she sees the crack in his carefully polished composure. His hands white-knuckle the cane, his jaw tight enough to show the muscle along his temple, and she remembers the way he’d looked when she’d screamed those hurtful words to him, that he didn’t care about her, that she was just a fling for his rich, mysterious French life. She’d believed him then, when she’d packed her bags and caught the train to London. “You left without a word.” Her voice is quiet now, the anger melting into something raw and wounded, like a cut she’d thought was healed but was still tender to the touch. “I thought you’d ghosted me because I wasn’t enough for your world.” He reaches out, slow, like he’s approaching a skittish stray cat, and his fingers brush the crescent scar on her wrist. Her skin prickles under his touch, the old scar throbbing like it had when she was seven, when she’d fallen off her bike and scraped her wrist on a rusted bike rack. “I would never have left you if I had a choice.” He cuts himself off, then shakes his head, his platinum blond hair falling in front of his face for a split second. “My father. He’s dying. The demon blood in me— it’s eating him alive. I had to stay in Marseille to help my brother run the family business. I couldn’t tell you, because if I had, Evan would have found out about you, and he would have used you to get to me.” The back room door creaks open, and Eva steps out, her arms full of leather-bound scrolls and dog-eared books, her thick-rimmed glasses slipping down her nose. She stops when she sees Lucien, her eyes widening behind the lenses. “Lucien Moreau. The information broker who helped me track that cursed Solomon’s dagger last month. I thought you were in Paris.” Lucien lifts one hand in a half-wave, his smile small and rare, the kind that crinkles the corners of his amber eye. “I was. Came back as soon as I found out Evan had crossed the border.” Rory stares at him, the pieces clicking together. The way he’d vanished without a word, the way he’d always seemed to know things she shouldn’t, the way Evan had started appearing at her campus library right after she’d told Lucien she couldn’t handle his secrets. “You warned him about me.” The words are sharp, cutting through the scent of curry and sandalmwood. Lucien’s smile fades, and he slams his cane against the brick wall beside her. The ivory handle cracks against the mortar, a spiderweb of damage spreading across the smooth surface. “I did no such thing. I tried to scare Evan off, told him you were off-limits. He laughed.” He reaches into the inner pocket of his suit jacket, pulls out a folded piece of paper, and hands it to her. She unfolds it. It’s the restraining order Eva had helped her file against Evan, the one she’d paid for with her delivery wages, taped to her fridge above a stack of takeaway menus. Scrawled in his neat, tight handwriting on the back: Stay away from the fixer. He’s more dangerous than you are. Ptolemy leaps onto the cane, rubbing his head against Lucien’s hand, and Lucien’s posture softens, just a little. He reaches into his suit pocket, pulls out a tiny tin of tuna, and sets it on the doormat for the cat. A screech of tires cuts through the alley below, followed by a sharp, intentional knock on the back window of the flat. Rory’s head snaps toward the kitchen window, which overlooks the rear alley. A shadow falls across the glass, tall and broad, and when the person steps into the light, she sees the raven tattoo inked along his jawline, the same one the tarot reader had described. Evan. He’s leaning against the brick wall of the curry shop, grinning, and he raises a hand in a slow, mocking wave.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
18.18% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags10
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"she feels bright [bright]"
1"She turns back [back]"
dialogueSentences22
tagDensity0.455
leniency0.909
rawRatio0.2
effectiveRatio0.182
92.48% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1329
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
1
adverb"carefully"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"carefully"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
84.95% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1329
totalAiIsms4
found
0
word"lilt"
count1
1
word"weight"
count1
2
word"echoes"
count1
3
word"looms"
count1
highlights
0"lilt"
1"weight"
2"echoes"
3"looms"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"clenched jaw/fists"
count1
highlights
0"clenched into fists"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences52
matches(empty)
60.44% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences52
filterMatches
0"feel"
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
1"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences64
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen57
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1326
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions28
wordCount1077
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity0.65
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
London2
Eva5
Marseille2
Ptolemy3
Lucien7
Golden1
Empress1
Cardiff1
Thames1
French1
Evan3
Stay1
persons
0"Eva"
1"Ptolemy"
2"Lucien"
3"Evan"
4"Stay"
places
0"London"
1"Marseille"
2"Cardiff"
3"Thames"
globalScore1
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences50
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1326
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences64
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs26
mean51
std33.27
cv0.652
sampleLengths
020
168
235
31
470
580
640
713
850
925
1055
113
1259
135
14127
1582
1644
17138
1859
1937
2050
2182
2253
2340
2422
2568
91.77% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences52
matches
0"been squeezed"
1"was healed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs164
matches(empty)
98.21% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences64
ratio0.016
matches
0"The scent of his cologne—sandalmwood and citrus—fills her nose, the same scent she’d dreamed about for months after she’d left him."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1087
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount31
adverbRatio0.028518859245630176
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.0018399264029438822
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences64
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences64
mean20.72
std11.5
cv0.555
sampleLengths
020
126
223
319
49
526
61
722
823
925
1018
1135
1227
1320
1420
1513
1617
1727
186
1925
2019
2136
223
2316
2420
2523
265
2716
2824
2921
3057
319
3218
3349
3415
3532
3612
3721
3832
3933
4052
4126
4212
4321
4422
4515
468
4737
485
4912
66.15% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.40625
totalSentences64
uniqueOpeners26
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences51
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount29
totalSentences51
matches
0"She yanks the door open"
1"He’s leaning against the red"
2"His voice is low, roughened"
3"She steps back, the door"
4"Her voice is steadier than"
5"She’d been drunk on rosé,"
6"He pushes off the wall,"
7"He shifts his weight, and"
8"He nods toward the back"
9"She flinches, then fumbles with"
10"She turns back to Lucien,"
11"She’d thought she’d left him"
12"He leans in a fraction,"
13"He looms a little over"
14"She reaches up, touching the"
15"He stares at her, and"
16"His hands white-knuckle the cane,"
17"She’d believed him then, when"
18"Her voice is quiet now,"
19"He reaches out, slow, like"
ratio0.569
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount47
totalSentences51
matches
0"She yanks the door open"
1"He’s leaning against the red"
2"A soft thud behind her"
3"Ptolemy, Eva’s tabby cat, winds"
4"His voice is low, roughened"
5"She steps back, the door"
6"A carton of jalfrezi sauce"
7"Her voice is steadier than"
8"The ivory handle catches the"
9"She’d been drunk on rosé,"
10"He pushes off the wall,"
11"He shifts his weight, and"
12"He nods toward the back"
13"Eva’s voice carries from the"
14"She flinches, then fumbles with"
15"She turns back to Lucien,"
16"The words hit her like"
17"She’d thought she’d left him"
18"He leans in a fraction,"
19"He looms a little over"
ratio0.922
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences51
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences37
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"She steps back, the door swinging shut a fraction, and her black delivery bag slips off her arm, thudding onto the scuffed doormat."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags10
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
79.8503%