Run: 2026-03-03-01KJTZTGQKKAD8CXNBNTFBBQ3S

Run Details

Duration:
3m 32s
Cost:
$0.003727
Provider:
Seed

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The door swings open before my hand fully clears the brass deadbolt knob. Thermal delivery bags dig into my shoulders, the sharp scent of ginger and cashew nuts clinging to the collar of my coat. My left wrist catches on the door frame, the crescent scar throbbing where the metal scrapes over old skin. I yank my hand back, staring at the figure on the other side of the threshold. He’s broad-shouldered, scuffed black work boots caked in London grime, hair cropped short the way he wore it when we were together. A thin scar slices across his left cheek, from the night I headbutted him when he grabbed my arm too hard. He drops the crumpled note in his hand when he sees me, the paper fluttering to the linoleum floor. I back up, kicking a stack of Eva’s leather-bound grimoires across the hall. The tabby cat Ptolemy, curled on the windowsill, bolts under the sofa, hissing loud enough to make my ears ring. He steps inside, shutting the door behind him, and I hear the rattle of three deadbolts sliding home, one after another. His fingers shake as he turns the locks, like he’s afraid I’ll burst through the door and run. I’m pressed against the wall of books, Eva’s research notes spilling out of a cracked bindery when my shoulder hits it. "I’ve been looking for you six months." His voice is rough, like he hasn’t slept, and I can smell tobacco and whisky on his breath, the same scent that used to wrap around me like a blanket before the yelling started. "I’m done with that." My voice cuts sharper than I mean to. "You left the first time you should’ve. Now leave." He laughs, a sharp, bitter sound, and kicks one of the spilled scrolls across the floor. "You think I’m going to let you walk away again? After everything we had?" "We didn’t have anything. You had control." I reach down, picking up a spilled sweet and sour sauce packet, twisting it between my fingers until the plastic creaks. "You locked me in your flat for three days because I mentioned going to Cardiff to see my mum. That’s not control. That’s abuse." He flinches, running a hand through his hair, and I notice the split knuckle on his right hand, which he tries to hide by rubbing it against his jeans. "I was scared you’d leave me. I didn’t know what else to do." "You could’ve asked." I set the sauce packet down, my hand shaking. "Instead, you shouted at me when I tried to call my mum. You stopped me from leaving. You hit me when I tried to grab the phone." I don’t say the part where I spent two weeks hiding in the bathroom, too scared to come out, too scared he’d come back. I don’t say the part where I packed my bag in the middle of the night, slipping out the fire escape while he was passed out on the couch. I don’t say any of it, because he’s already leaning in, his face inches from mine, and I can feel the heat of his breath on my lips. My heart races, not with fear, but with something old, something that still aches. I should push him away. I should scream. Instead, I can’t move. "I’m sorry," he whispers, his thumb brushing the corner of my mouth. "I’ll change. I promise. I went to therapy. I—" "You don’t get to use therapy as an excuse for what you did." I pull back, but he catches my wrist, his fingers curling around the crescent scar. I flinch so hard I nearly cry out, the pressure sending a jolt of old pain up my arm. He lets go immediately, his eyes wide. "I didn’t mean to—" "Leave." I shove him away, hard enough that he stumbles back into the bookshelf, knocking a stack of volumes onto the floor. "Get out of my flat before I call the police." He stares at me for a long moment, his jaw tight, then picks up his crumpled note from the floor. He pauses at the door, hand on the handle, and says, "I’ll be back. I mean it." "If you come back, I’ll call the police." He nods, then steps outside, slamming the door behind him. I hear the rattle of the deadbolts disengaging, then the sound of his boots thudding down the rickety iron stairs. I sink to the floor, my head in my hands, and let out a shaky breath. The spicy scent of the curry house downstairs seeps through the floorboards, and I can hear Ptolemy’s soft purr under the sofa, a faint reminder that I’m not alone. Three sharp raps tap on the kitchen window. I jump, scrambling to my feet, and stare at the frosted glass, which looks out onto the alley behind the curry house. Another rap, sharp, deliberate. I creep over to the window, peeling back the tattered velvet curtain, and freeze. There’s a man standing on the fire escape, his charcoal suit tailored so tight it fits like a second skin, platinum blond hair slicked back from his face. One eye is amber, the other black, and he’s leaning on an ivory-handed cane. I spot the faint glint of metal along the length of the stick, the blade hidden just beneath the polished bone. He tilts his head, and his voice carries through the open window, smooth, accented, exactly the way I remember. "Rory Carter. You left your delivery manifest at Silas’ bar. Also, someone’s been asking after you. A man with a scar on his left cheek and a bad temper."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
88.89% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags7
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"I pull back [back]"
dialogueSentences18
tagDensity0.389
leniency0.778
rawRatio0.143
effectiveRatio0.111
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount947
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
84.16% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount947
totalAiIsms3
found
0
word"reminder"
count1
1
word"velvet"
count1
2
word"glint"
count1
highlights
0"reminder"
1"velvet"
2"glint"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences44
matches
0"t with fear"
12.99% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences44
filterMatches
0"hear"
1"notice"
hedgeMatches
0"tries to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences55
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen34
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords947
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions5
wordCount757
uniqueNames3
maxNameDensity0.26
worstName"Eva"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
London1
Eva2
Ptolemy2
persons
0"Eva"
1"Ptolemy"
places
0"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences40
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
94.40% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords1.056
wordCount947
matches
0"not with fear, but with something old, something"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences55
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs26
mean36.42
std20.49
cv0.563
sampleLengths
013
157
262
333
460
57
634
721
830
952
1042
1139
1281
1326
1421
1547
1611
1732
1837
198
2075
218
2240
2363
2419
2529
97.29% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences44
matches
0"was passed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs130
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences55
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount760
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount25
adverbRatio0.03289473684210526
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.005263157894736842
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences55
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences55
mean17.22
std7.8
cv0.453
sampleLengths
013
122
219
316
422
521
619
713
820
921
1018
1121
127
1334
1412
159
1616
1714
1828
1924
2029
2113
2212
2327
2424
2529
2628
2714
285
293
304
3112
329
3328
3419
357
364
3722
3810
3920
4017
418
4210
4320
4416
4529
468
4722
484
4914
41.82% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.32727272727272727
totalSentences55
uniqueOpeners18
75.76% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences44
matches
0"Instead, I can’t move."
ratio0.023
0.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount34
totalSentences44
matches
0"My left wrist catches on"
1"I yank my hand back,"
2"He’s broad-shouldered, scuffed black work"
3"He drops the crumpled note"
4"I back up, kicking a"
5"He steps inside, shutting the"
6"His fingers shake as he"
7"I’m pressed against the wall"
8"His voice is rough, like"
9"My voice cuts sharper than"
10"He laughs, a sharp, bitter"
11"I reach down, picking up"
12"He flinches, running a hand"
13"I set the sauce packet"
14"I don’t say the part"
15"I don’t say the part"
16"I don’t say any of"
17"My heart races, not with"
18"I should push him away."
19"I should scream."
ratio0.773
16.82% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount39
totalSentences44
matches
0"The door swings open before"
1"My left wrist catches on"
2"I yank my hand back,"
3"He’s broad-shouldered, scuffed black work"
4"A thin scar slices across"
5"He drops the crumpled note"
6"I back up, kicking a"
7"The tabby cat Ptolemy, curled"
8"He steps inside, shutting the"
9"His fingers shake as he"
10"I’m pressed against the wall"
11"His voice is rough, like"
12"My voice cuts sharper than"
13"He laughs, a sharp, bitter"
14"I reach down, picking up"
15"He flinches, running a hand"
16"I set the sauce packet"
17"I don’t say the part"
18"I don’t say the part"
19"I don’t say any of"
ratio0.886
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences44
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences31
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"I hear the rattle of the deadbolts disengaging, then the sound of his boots thudding down the rickety iron stairs."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags7
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"I set, my hand shaking"
1"he whispers, his thumb brushing the corner of my mouth"
94.44% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags1
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"he whispers (whisper)"
dialogueSentences18
tagDensity0.056
leniency0.111
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.111
80.2189%