Run: 2026-03-03-01KJV04WG220WAYPR367XJFCVV

Run Details

Duration:
7.2s
Cost:
$0.003589
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The heavy mahogany door of The Raven’s Nest swung shut behind me, cushioning the sharp bite of the London wind. Inside, the air hung thick with the ghosts of spilled ale and tobacco, a familiar scent that clung to the maps fading on the walls. "One neat scotch. Make it the expensive stuff, Silas," I said, sliding onto the stool at the far end of the bar. Silas peered over the rim of his glasses, his grey-streaked auburn beard neatly trimmed as always. He didn't move immediately. He held the bottle with a steady, clinical grip, his gaze tracing the small crescent-shaped scar on my left wrist where my sleeve had ridden up. "It’s been a long time, Aurora. The neon green sign outside usually serves as an invitation, not a final destination for the road-weary." "I’m not weary. Just passing through." "Passing through Soho at three in the morning matches the stride of a fugitive, not a casual traveller." He poured the liquid. The amber glow danced in the glass as he slid it across the wood. I took a sharp, burning sip. My fingers brushed against the cool silver signet ring he rested on the counter, a tactile reminder of a life I’d tried to shed like a second skin. "I heard the job in Cardiff turned sour," he observed, leaning against the back shelving unit. He wiped a glass with a rag, his movements practiced and slow, that slight hitch in his left leg betraying the ghosts of his own past. "Barrister’s daughter trading a courtroom gown for a delivery bike in London. Seems a significant downgrade." "The courtroom was a cage. I prefer the fresh air." "Or the obscurity." "People change, Silas." "Indeed. Sometimes they shed their names and their histories like a snake shedding dead weight. And sometimes, they just learn to bury things deeper." The door behind me creaked, but I didn't turn. I watched Silas’s eyes shift, his focus hitching for a fraction of a second toward the dark reflection in the mirror behind the bar. He placed the rag down with a deliberate, heavy thud. "You look different, Rory. The city has a way of sharpening the edges." "The city is a grinder. I’m just trying not to be dust." "And Evan? Has the grinder claimed him yet?" The name cut through the ambient gloom of the bar like a serrated blade. I gripped the cold glass until my knuckles turned porcelain white, the memory of that narrow, suffocating hallway in Cardiff rushing back with a familiar, sickening thrum. "I don’t talk about Evan." "You don’t have to. You wear the decision every time you check your shoulder." He gestured with his chin toward the entrance. A silhouette stood blocked by the green neon glow of the shopfront, the light casting jagged, long shadows across the floorboards. It was a man, tall and unmoving, silhouetted against the dark street. "You weren't followed, were you?" "I took the tube. Changed lines twice. Crossed the bridge on foot." "Amateur precautions for a city that remembers everything." Silas reached under the counter, his fingers grazing the wood. "In my experience, ghosts don't use the tube. They wait." He pulled out a heavy, locked ledger and dropped it onto the bar. The sound echoed, a final, percussive note in the quiet room. "You didn't come here for scotch, Aurora. You came because you’ve run out of road." "I came because you were the only one who didn't lie to me." "I lied to everyone," he corrected, his voice a low, gravelly rasp. "I just did it better than I let them see." He flipped the ledger open, revealing pages densely packed with handwriting—names, dates, locations, a history of the city written in ink and regret. He pointed to a singular, circled entry near the bottom of the page. "He’s been looking for nine months. Not for a barrister, not for a daughter, but for the girl who stole a specific, small key from a desk in Cardiff." My breath hitched. I felt the weight of the silver item hidden in my pocket, a cold, jagged piece of metal that felt like a burning coal against my skin. "He shouldn't know about the key." "He knows more than he should, because you stayed in one place too long." The man at the door pushed inward. The bell above the frame gave a sharp, lonely ring. He didn't step into the light immediately, but his presence was a physical weight, cold and intrusive. Silas didn't blink, his hand sliding beneath the bartop, resting near something heavy and metallic. "It’s not just a key, is it?" "It’s a leverage point," I said, my voice barely audible above the hum of the cooling unit. "Leverage is only useful if you’re willing to lose your hand to make the play." The stranger started forward. His boots clicked against the floor—measured, rhythmic, inevitable. He wore a coat that hung too long and a hat pulled low, obscuring the features that I had spent years trying to forget. "Silas," I breathed, sliding off the stool. "Don't," he commanded, his eyes fixed on the approaching shadow. "If you run now, you’re just a target. If you stay, you’re a player." "I'm not a player." "You’re a Carter. You were born one. You just forgot to look in the mirror." The man stopped ten feet from the bar, the green neon flickering against his neck. He reached up, his gloved hand moving toward the brim of his hat with a slow, agonizing precision. "Rory," the man said. The voice was smooth, familiar, and utterly devoid of anything resembling warmth. I turned. The distance between us felt like a chasm that had been widening for three years, a distance I had failed to cross no matter how fast I pedaled into the rain. "You look tired, Evan," I said, my voice steady despite the hammer of my heart against my ribs. "Life on the run does that to a person." He took another step, his eyes flickering past me to the ledger on the bar, then to Silas. "Silas Blackwood. I heard you retired." "I’m still open for business," Silas replied, his posture shifting ever so slightly, the limp in his leg vanishing as he prepared his weight. Evan didn't smile, but his hand moved toward his jacket, a gesture so practiced it spoke of a thousand rehearsals. "I’ve come for the key, Rory. And because certain debts don't just disappear, I’ve come for the rest of you." I felt the shape of the key in my pocket, hard and unyielding. The room seemed to shrink, the scent of stale ale and old photos replaced by the sharp, metallic tang of an ending. "The tab's not paid yet," I said, my fingers closing around the metal. "Then let's see how much you’re willing to spend," Evan replied, his hand finishing its transition from his pocket, revealing the dull glint of steel. Silas didn't hesitate. He swung the heavy ledger, knocking a bottle of scotch off the counter. The glass shattered, a spray of amber fire covering the floor between us, and in that split second of distraction, the lights in the bar flickered and died.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags13
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences42
tagDensity0.31
leniency0.619
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
91.74% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1211
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"utterly"
count1
1
adverb"ever so slightly"
count1
highlights
0"utterly"
1"ever so slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
25.68% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1211
totalAiIsms18
found
0
word"familiar"
count3
1
word"tracing"
count1
2
word"reminder"
count1
3
word"weight"
count4
4
word"gloom"
count1
5
word"porcelain"
count1
6
word"echoed"
count1
7
word"measured"
count1
8
word"rhythmic"
count1
9
word"warmth"
count1
10
word"glint"
count1
11
word"shattered"
count1
12
word"flickered"
count1
highlights
0"familiar"
1"tracing"
2"reminder"
3"weight"
4"gloom"
5"porcelain"
6"echoed"
7"measured"
8"rhythmic"
9"warmth"
10"glint"
11"shattered"
12"flickered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences55
matches(empty)
90.91% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences55
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
1"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences84
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen31
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1209
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions12
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions13
wordCount791
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity0.88
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest1
London1
Silas7
Cardiff1
Evan2
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Silas"
3"Evan"
places
0"London"
1"Cardiff"
globalScore1
windowScore1
45.83% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences48
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"felt like a burning coal against my ski"
1"felt like a chasm that had been widenin"
34.57% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.654
wordCount1209
matches
0"Not for a barrister, not for a daughter, but for the girl who stole a specific, small key from a desk in"
1"not for a daughter, but for the girl who stole a specific, small key from a desk in"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences84
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs53
mean22.81
std14.07
cv0.617
sampleLengths
045
122
246
323
46
518
652
758
810
93
103
1124
1243
1313
1412
158
1641
175
1814
1941
205
2112
2228
2324
2415
2513
2622
2736
2829
2930
306
3114
3249
337
3417
3515
3636
377
3824
394
4015
4133
4216
4333
4418
4533
4624
4720
4820
4935
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences55
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs122
matches(empty)
74.83% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences84
ratio0.024
matches
0"He flipped the ledger open, revealing pages densely packed with handwriting—names, dates, locations, a history of the city written in ink and regret."
1"His boots clicked against the floor—measured, rhythmic, inevitable."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount795
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount18
adverbRatio0.022641509433962263
lyAdverbCount9
lyAdverbRatio0.011320754716981131
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences84
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences84
mean14.39
std7.59
cv0.527
sampleLengths
020
125
222
316
44
526
623
76
818
94
1014
116
1228
1316
1426
1516
1610
173
183
1924
209
2124
2210
2313
2412
258
2614
2727
285
2914
308
3121
3212
335
3412
3518
3610
3713
3811
3915
4013
4112
4210
4323
4413
4529
463
4727
486
4914
38.49% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats11
diversityRatio0.30952380952380953
totalSentences84
uniqueOpeners26
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences54
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount31
totalSentences54
matches
0"I said, sliding onto the"
1"He didn't move immediately."
2"He held the bottle with"
3"He poured the liquid."
4"I took a sharp, burning"
5"My fingers brushed against the"
6"he observed, leaning against the"
7"He wiped a glass with"
8"I watched Silas’s eyes shift,"
9"He placed the rag down"
10"I gripped the cold glass"
11"He gestured with his chin"
12"It was a man, tall"
13"He pulled out a heavy,"
14"he corrected, his voice a"
15"He flipped the ledger open,"
16"He pointed to a singular,"
17"My breath hitched."
18"I felt the weight of"
19"He didn't step into the"
ratio0.574
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount53
totalSentences54
matches
0"The heavy mahogany door of"
1"I said, sliding onto the"
2"Silas peered over the rim"
3"He didn't move immediately."
4"He held the bottle with"
5"He poured the liquid."
6"The amber glow danced in"
7"I took a sharp, burning"
8"My fingers brushed against the"
9"he observed, leaning against the"
10"He wiped a glass with"
11"The door behind me creaked,"
12"I watched Silas’s eyes shift,"
13"He placed the rag down"
14"The name cut through the"
15"I gripped the cold glass"
16"He gestured with his chin"
17"A silhouette stood blocked by"
18"It was a man, tall"
19"Silas reached under the counter,"
ratio0.981
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences54
matches(empty)
ratio0
96.77% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences31
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"I felt the weight of the silver item hidden in my pocket, a cold, jagged piece of metal that felt like a burning coal against my skin."
1"He wore a coat that hung too long and a hat pulled low, obscuring the features that I had spent years trying to forget."
9.62% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags13
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"Silas reached, his fingers grazing the wood"
1"he corrected, his voice a low, gravelly rasp"
2"I said, my fingers closing around the metal"
78.57% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags10
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"he observed (observe)"
1"he corrected (correct)"
2"I breathed (breathe)"
dialogueSentences42
tagDensity0.238
leniency0.476
rawRatio0.3
effectiveRatio0.143
72.7008%