Run: 2026-03-06-01KK1GFX6KJ0YHBJY0QHF8BTSN

Run Details

Duration:
6.0s
Cost:
$0.002332
Provider:
Inception

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Aurora slipped the silver chain around her neck, the tiny crimson stone pressing against her skin. The pendant’s faint glow pulsed like a heartbeat, a warm thrum that seemed to sync with the rhythm of her own pulse. She stood at the edge of the ancient oak standing stones, their bark gnarled and dark, the silhouettes of the trees casting long, jagged shadows across the clearing. The night air smelled of damp earth and a sweet, metallic tang that she could not place. Wildflowers, bright even in darkness, swayed in a wind she could not feel. Aurora’s bright blue eyes scanned the perimeter, catching the glint of moonlight off the stones, then flicked to the ground where a thin veil of mist curled around her boots. She whispered, “I’m here, Carter. I’m not leaving until I find it.” The words hung in the air, swallowed by the silence. A low rustle cracked the stillness, a whisper of leaves that should not have moved. Aurora’s hand tightened around the pendant, the warmth spreading up her wrist where the crescent scar lay, a reminder of a childhood accident that had taught her to notice the smallest shift. A shape shifted at the edge of her vision, a dark smear that dissolved when she turned her head. She steadied her breath, listening. The rustle returned, now accompanied by a faint, metallic clink—like a chain dragging over stone. “Show yourself,” she said, voice low, steady. The words felt like a command, a thread pulling at the unseen. A low hum rose from the stones, a resonant vibration that seemed to emanate from the earth itself. The pendant’s glow intensified, a soft crimson flare that painted Aurora’s cheek with a ghostly hue. She felt the air thicken, as if the night were a veil being pulled tighter around her. A figure emerged from behind a stone, not fully formed, more a suggestion of shape. It hovered just beyond the reach of the moonlight, its outline flickering like a candle in a draft. Aurora’s breath caught, but she did not flinch. She stepped forward, the grass bending under her boots. “Who are you?” she asked, the question more a probe than a plea. The figure’s mouth opened, but no sound came out. Instead, a chorus of distant whispers rose, a chorus of voices that seemed to echo from the very stones. The whispers tangled, forming a pattern that brushed against her mind like cold fingertips. “You carry the stone,” a voice said, not from the figure but from the wind itself. It sounded like a child’s laugh twisted into a warning. Aurora’s eyes narrowed. “The Heartstone. I was given it. I need—” “Time does not belong here,” the voice interrupted, a ripple that seemed to pulse with the pendant’s glow. “An hour here can be days beyond.” The ground beneath the stones trembled, a subtle shiver that sent a ripple through the wildflowers. Aurora felt the world tilt, the night stretching, compressing, a sensation of being pulled apart and stitched together at once. She lifted her chin, the pendant’s glow now a steady ember against her throat. “I’m not leaving until I get the answer. Who sent me?” A soft sigh drifted through the grove, a sigh that sounded like leaves falling on a quiet lake. The figure dissolved into a spray of motes, each one flickering like fireflies caught in a glass jar. They hovered, forming a circle around Aurora, their light dying as they fell. A cold hand brushed her cheek, the touch of something unseen. Aurora flinched, but she did not turn away. She pressed the pendant harder against her wrist, feeling the warmth surge, a pulse that matched the rhythm of the unseen heartbeats around her. “The portal is near,” the voice whispered, now a chorus of many, each tone a different shade of dread. “You feel it in the stone, in the air, in the very bones of the earth.” Aurora’s gaze fixed on the central stone, its surface slick with dew, reflecting the moon in a way that seemed to bend reality. She stepped closer, the grass parting beneath her feet as if reluctant to let her pass. “Tell me where,” she said, the words sharp, cutting through the night’s hush. The stone cracked, a sound like a sigh breaking a glass bottle. From its fissure, a thin wisp of light rose, curling like smoke, spiraling upward. Aurora felt the pull, a magnetic tug that resonated with the pendant’s glow. She reached out, fingers trembling, and the wisp brushed her skin. The moment it touched, a flood of images surged—flashes of a hidden doorway, a doorway carved from ancient oak, vines coiling around it, a portal humming with unseen power. The grove around her seemed to close in, the standing stones leaning, their silhouettes forming a cage. A distant howl rose, not from any animal, but from the very air, a sound that made the hair on her arms stand up. Aurora’s voice steadied, “I’m not scared. I’m here for the portal. I need to close it.” The wisp pulsed, the light intensifying, the pendant’s glow matching its rhythm. The air grew colder, a breath that seemed to come from the earth itself, exhaling a fog that curled around her ankles. “Close it?” a voice murmured, this time from within the fog, a voice that sounded like her own mother’s lullaby twisted into a warning. “You cannot close what never opened.” Aurora’s eyes flicked to the edge of the clearing, where the mist thickened, forming shapes that resembled trees but moved like shadows. She heard a soft scraping, a sound like a nail on wood, coming from the darkness. She spoke, “If it’s open, I’ll seal it.” The fog swirled, forming a hand—transparent, skeletal, its fingers elongated like twigs. It reached toward her pendant, its touch cold as marble. Aurora felt the chill seep into her bones, the scar on her wrist tingling as if the stone recognized the contact. A low chuckle rose from the fog, a laugh that sounded like distant thunder rolled through a hollow. “You think a trinket can bind a portal? The Heartstone is a key, not a lock.” Aurora’s breath misted, the pendant’s glow flaring, a crimson burst that painted the fog in a ghastly hue. “Then give me the lock.” The fog recoiled, the skeletal hand dissolving into a spray of ash that fell to the ground, landing on the wildflowers, turning them a muted gray. The air shifted, the night feeling heavier, as though the darkness itself pressed against her ribs. A sudden crack split the silence, the sound of a branch snapping under the weight of something unseen. Aurora turned, her eyes catching a movement among the oak stones—shadows that slithered, elongated, forming a shape that resembled a figure but never fully coalesced. “Who’s there?” she demanded, her voice echoing off the stones, the pendant’s glow casting a sickly light over the clearing. The figure’s eyes—if they could be called that—were twin pits of darkness, absorbing the light. It spoke without moving its mouth, the words forming in the air like smoke. “You came for answers, but the grove gives only questions.” Aurora’s mind raced, the pendant’s warmth pulsing against her wrist, a steady drumbeat. She pressed the stone against the central oak, feeling the vibration travel up her arm, a resonance that seemed to align with the grove’s heartbeat. “Show me the portal,” she said, the command cutting through the oppressive silence. The figure dissolved into a swirl of leaves, each leaf whispering a fragment of a chant. The chant rose, a low hum that resonated with the stones, with the pendant, with Aurora’s own breath. The ground trembled, a low rumble that seemed to come from deep within the earth. A fissure opened at the base of the central stone, a crack that widened, revealing a darkness that seemed to swallow light. From within, a cold wind rose, carrying the scent of iron and old stone. The pendant’s glow dimmed, then flared, a crimson beacon against the black void. Aurora stepped forward, the mist curling around her ankles, the air thick with the scent of ozone. She placed the pendant against the fissure, the stone’s warmth seeping into the crack, a pulse that matched the heartbeat of the grove. “Close it,” she whispered, the words barely more than a breath. The fissure shivered, the darkness recoiling, a wave of cold that washed over her, the pendant’s glow intensifying, a bright flare that seemed to push back the night. The fog retreated, the skeletal hands disappearing, the shadows dissolving into the night sky. A sudden silence fell, heavier than any sound. Aurora stood alone, the pendant’s glow now a steady ember, the stones quiet, the wildflowers still. She felt the weight of the night pressing, her shoulders, the faint ache of the scar on her wrist reminding her of a childhood accident that had taught her to notice the smallest shift. She turned, the grove behind her a dark silhouette against the moonlit sky. The ancient oak standing stones loomed, their bark dark and unyielding, as if they had witnessed countless secrets. Aurora’s breath came out in short clouds, the night air cold against her cheeks. She heard a faint rustle, a whisper of leaves, a sound that seemed to come from the edge of her vision. She turned again, eyes scanning the darkness, the pendant’s glow pulsing faintly, a heartbeat in the night. “Is that all?” she asked, voice steady, though the words trembled like a thin thread. The night answered with a soft sigh, a sound that seemed to come from the earth itself, a sigh that carried the weight of centuries. The grove remained still, the stones unmoving, the wildflowers swaying in a wind that no one could see. Aurora felt the pull of the city beyond the park, the distant hum of traffic, the faint glow of streetlights. The portal, if it still existed, lay hidden beneath the stones, the Heartstone Pendant humming softly against her wrist, a reminder that some doors, once opened, never truly close. She took a step back, the night swallowing her silhouette, the pendant’s glow dimming as she moved away. The grove held its breath, the ancient oak standing stones watching, their silhouettes a silent jury. Aurora’s voice, low and resolute, cut through the night. “I’ll be back if needed. But for now, this place sleeps.” The night answered with a rustle of leaves, a sound that seemed to be both a farewell and a warning. Aurora turned, the path to the city ahead, the pendant’s faint glow a steady pulse against her skin, a promise that she would return when the darkness called again.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags14
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences23
tagDensity0.609
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
86.10% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1799
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"very"
count3
1
adverb"softly"
count1
2
adverb"truly"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"softly"
2"truly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1799
totalAiIsms42
found
0
word"pulsed"
count2
1
word"pulse"
count5
2
word"scanned"
count1
3
word"glint"
count1
4
word"flicked"
count2
5
word"silence"
count4
6
word"whisper"
count2
7
word"warmth"
count4
8
word"reminder"
count2
9
word"echo"
count1
10
word"trembled"
count3
11
word"magnetic"
count1
12
word"resonated"
count2
13
word"marble"
count1
14
word"chill"
count1
15
word"weight"
count2
16
word"echoing"
count1
17
word"raced"
count1
18
word"resonance"
count1
19
word"oppressive"
count1
20
word"beacon"
count1
21
word"loomed"
count1
22
word"scanning"
count1
23
word"carried the weight"
count1
highlights
0"pulsed"
1"pulse"
2"scanned"
3"glint"
4"flicked"
5"silence"
6"whisper"
7"warmth"
8"reminder"
9"echo"
10"trembled"
11"magnetic"
12"resonated"
13"marble"
14"chill"
15"weight"
16"echoing"
17"raced"
18"resonance"
19"oppressive"
20"beacon"
21"loomed"
22"scanning"
23"carried the weight"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
1
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
1"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences101
matches
0"felt the chill"
0.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount14
narrationSentences101
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences110
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen34
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1794
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
76.87% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions26
wordCount1641
uniqueNames3
maxNameDensity1.46
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Aurora24
Heartstone1
Pendant1
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Pendant"
places(empty)
globalScore0.769
windowScore0.833
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences95
glossingSentenceCount18
matches
0"thrum that seemed to sync with the rhythm of her own pulse"
1"felt like a command, a thread pulling a"
2"vibration that seemed to emanate from the earth itself"
3"voices that seemed to echo from the very stones"
4"sounded like a child’s laugh twisted into"
5"ripple that seemed to pulse with the pendant’s glow"
6"sounded like leaves falling on a quiet lak"
7"way that seemed to bend reality"
8"breath that seemed to come from the earth itself, exhaling a fog that curled around her ankles"
9"sounded like her own mother’s lullaby twis"
10"sounded like distant thunder rolled throug"
11"resonance that seemed to align with the grove’s heartbeat"
12"rumble that seemed to come from deep within the earth"
13"darkness that seemed to swallow light"
14"flare that seemed to push back the night"
15"sound that seemed to come from the edge of her vision"
16"sound that seemed to come from the earth itself, a sigh that carried the weight of centuries"
17"sound that seemed to be both a farewell and a warning"
88.52% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.115
wordCount1794
matches
0"not from the figure but from the wind itself"
1"not from any animal, but from the very air, a sound"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences110
matches(empty)
78.44% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs52
mean34.5
std14.65
cv0.425
sampleLengths
066
160
212
357
439
519
651
750
813
942
1026
1111
1225
1336
1425
1549
1643
1735
1839
1913
2039
2140
2241
2316
2434
2530
2638
278
2843
2934
3023
3142
3243
3320
3429
3510
3638
3713
3849
3949
4040
4111
4242
4358
4445
4538
4615
4743
4849
4934
98.32% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences101
matches
0"being pulled"
1"being pulled"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs254
matches(empty)
12.99% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount6
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences5
totalSentences110
ratio0.045
matches
0"The rustle returned, now accompanied by a faint, metallic clink—like a chain dragging over stone."
1"The moment it touched, a flood of images surged—flashes of a hidden doorway, a doorway carved from ancient oak, vines coiling around it, a portal humming with unseen power."
2"The fog swirled, forming a hand—transparent, skeletal, its fingers elongated like twigs."
3"Aurora turned, her eyes catching a movement among the oak stones—shadows that slithered, elongated, forming a shape that resembled a figure but never fully coalesced."
4"The figure’s eyes—if they could be called that—were twin pits of darkness, absorbing the light."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1646
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount34
adverbRatio0.020656136087484813
lyAdverbCount9
lyAdverbRatio0.0054678007290400975
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences110
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
90.38% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences110
mean16.31
std6.13
cv0.376
sampleLengths
016
122
228
317
413
530
612
710
815
932
1019
115
1215
137
1412
1518
1616
1717
1815
1918
208
219
2213
239
2419
2514
2616
2710
283
298
3018
317
3216
3320
3414
3511
3618
3718
3813
3911
408
4124
4219
4316
4423
4516
4613
4712
4814
4913
40.91% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats10
diversityRatio0.17272727272727273
totalSentences110
uniqueOpeners19
33.67% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences99
matches
0"Instead, a chorus of distant"
ratio0.01
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount28
totalSentences99
matches
0"She stood at the edge"
1"She steadied her breath, listening."
2"she said, voice low, steady"
3"She felt the air thicken,"
4"It hovered just beyond the"
5"She stepped forward, the grass"
6"she asked, the question more"
7"It sounded like a child’s"
8"She lifted her chin, the"
9"They hovered, forming a circle"
10"She pressed the pendant harder"
11"She stepped closer, the grass"
12"she said, the words sharp,"
13"She reached out, fingers trembling,"
14"She heard a soft scraping,"
15"It reached toward her pendant,"
16"she demanded, her voice echoing"
17"It spoke without moving its"
18"She pressed the stone against"
19"she said, the command cutting"
ratio0.283
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount96
totalSentences99
matches
0"Aurora slipped the silver chain"
1"The pendant’s faint glow pulsed"
2"She stood at the edge"
3"The night air smelled of"
4"Wildflowers, bright even in darkness,"
5"Aurora’s bright blue eyes scanned"
6"The words hung in the"
7"A low rustle cracked the"
8"Aurora’s hand tightened around the"
9"A shape shifted at the"
10"She steadied her breath, listening."
11"The rustle returned, now accompanied"
12"she said, voice low, steady"
13"The words felt like a"
14"A low hum rose from"
15"The pendant’s glow intensified, a"
16"She felt the air thicken,"
17"A figure emerged from behind"
18"It hovered just beyond the"
19"Aurora’s breath caught, but she"
ratio0.97
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences99
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences79
technicalSentenceCount21
matches
0"The pendant’s faint glow pulsed like a heartbeat, a warm thrum that seemed to sync with the rhythm of her own pulse."
1"Aurora’s hand tightened around the pendant, the warmth spreading up her wrist where the crescent scar lay, a reminder of a childhood accident that had taught he…"
2"A shape shifted at the edge of her vision, a dark smear that dissolved when she turned her head."
3"The whispers tangled, forming a pattern that brushed against her mind like cold fingertips."
4"They hovered, forming a circle around Aurora, their light dying as they fell."
5"She pressed the pendant harder against her wrist, feeling the warmth surge, a pulse that matched the rhythm of the unseen heartbeats around her."
6"Aurora’s gaze fixed on the central stone, its surface slick with dew, reflecting the moon in a way that seemed to bend reality."
7"She stepped closer, the grass parting beneath her feet as if reluctant to let her pass."
8"The grove around her seemed to close in, the standing stones leaning, their silhouettes forming a cage."
9"The wisp pulsed, the light intensifying, the pendant’s glow matching its rhythm."
10"Aurora felt the chill seep into her bones, the scar on her wrist tingling as if the stone recognized the contact."
11"The fog recoiled, the skeletal hand dissolving into a spray of ash that fell to the ground, landing on the wildflowers, turning them a muted gray."
12"The air shifted, the night feeling heavier, as though the darkness itself pressed against her ribs."
13"Aurora turned, her eyes catching a movement among the oak stones—shadows that slithered, elongated, forming a shape that resembled a figure but never fully coal…"
14"She pressed the stone against the central oak, feeling the vibration travel up her arm, a resonance that seemed to align with the grove’s heartbeat."
15"The fissure shivered, the darkness recoiling, a wave of cold that washed over her, the pendant’s glow intensifying, a bright flare that seemed to push back the …"
16"She felt the weight of the night pressing, her shoulders, the faint ache of the scar on her wrist reminding her of a childhood accident that had taught her to n…"
17"The ancient oak standing stones loomed, their bark dark and unyielding, as if they had witnessed countless secrets."
18"She heard a faint rustle, a whisper of leaves, a sound that seemed to come from the edge of her vision."
19"She turned again, eyes scanning the darkness, the pendant’s glow pulsing faintly, a heartbeat in the night."
20"She took a step back, the night swallowing her silhouette, the pendant’s glow dimming as she moved away."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags14
uselessAdditionCount5
matches
0"she said, voice low, steady"
1"she asked, the question more a probe than a plea"
2"she said, the command cutting through the oppressive silence"
3"she whispered, the words barely more than a breath"
4"she asked, voice steady, though the words trembled like a thin thread"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags13
fancyCount7
fancyTags
0"She whispered (whisper)"
1"the voice interrupted (interrupt)"
2"the voice whispered (whisper)"
3"a voice murmured (murmur)"
4"She spoke (speak)"
5"she demanded (demand)"
6"she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences23
tagDensity0.565
leniency1
rawRatio0.538
effectiveRatio0.538
62.4288%