Run: 2026-03-06-01KK1GG235FXPVJG4FSKG2T9D1

Run Details

Model:
GPT-5.4
Duration:
1m 35s
Cost:
$0.052158
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
By the time Detective Harlow Quinn reached the end of the disused service tunnel, the smell had changed. Up above, Camden had been wet pavement and diesel and the sour reek of overflowing bins after a Friday night. Down here, beneath a city that had paved over its own bones and pretended not to hear them rattle, the air turned old and metallic. Dust. Rust. Damp concrete. And under that, something sweeter and fouler at once, like cut flowers left too long in standing water. She stopped just beyond the police tape and let her eyes adjust. The old station platform opened out of the tunnel in a long curve, swallowed in shadows except where portable floodlights had been set up. Their harsh white glare made the tiled walls gleam in patches and left the rest in pits of black. Once, trains had run through here. Once, commuters had stood under the flaking station roundel and checked watches and newspapers. Now the tracks were furred with grime, the rails brown with neglect, and the platform had been colonized by tarps, collapsible tables, wooden crates, and hanging lanterns guttered out cold. An abandoned market, if you were being generous. A crime scene, if you were not. Uniforms moved in islands of light. A SOCO photographer crouched near the body. Two constables were trying not to look sick while pretending to catalog the contents of an overturned stall: stoppered vials, bundles of herbs tied with red thread, a tray of rings set with stones too cloudy to be worth much. A transit maintenance door at the far end stood open on darkness. Quinn took all of it in before she ducked beneath the tape. “Morning, ma’am.” DI Rowan Pike fell into step beside her. Early thirties, broad in the shoulders, expensive stubble, the kind of man who never seemed to get sweat marks no matter how bad the day became. His fluorescent vest looked indecently bright in the half-ruined station. “What have we got?” Quinn asked. “Male, unidentified as of now. Mid-fifties, maybe. Found at oh-six-twenty by a pair of urban explorers who came in through a maintenance hatch and nearly pissed themselves. We’ve got trauma to the chest. Likely homicide. Scene’s odd, but the simple version is probably some vagrant black-market nonsense gone wrong.” Quinn glanced at him. “Vagrant black-market nonsense.” He gave one shoulder the smallest lift. “You see the setup. Someone’s been using this place. Drug trade, stolen goods, whatever else people get up to underground. They spook each other, somebody pulls a knife, end of story.” She kept walking. “And the uniforms?” “One of them found some kind of token at the entrance tunnel. Bone, carved. Could be cosplay, could be gang insignia. There’s enough junk down here to stock a theatre.” Cosplay. Quinn said nothing. She had served long enough to know when a room wanted to lie to her. This one was lying from the minute she stepped into it. The body lay beside a stall draped in black cloth. The victim had gone over backward, one arm flung out, fingers curled as if still clutching for purchase. He wore a dark wool coat of good quality, a waistcoat beneath, shirt buttoned to the neck. Not vagrant. Not even close. His shoes were polished. His nails clean. His beard, silver and carefully trimmed, was stiff with blood where it had run down from his mouth. “Name?” Quinn asked. Pike shook his head. “No wallet. No phone. No keys. Pockets turned out.” “By the killer?” “Most likely.” Quinn crouched beside the corpse. The photographer leaned away to give her room. She pulled on gloves and studied the wound. At first glance Pike’s interpretation held. There was blood over the shirtfront and a tear in the cloth just left of center. A stabbing. Straightforward enough. But straightforward things did not usually leave behind this little mess. She looked around the body. Not much castoff. No arterial spray on the stall cloth. No drag marks. A dark pool had gathered beneath the torso, yes, but smaller than it should have been for a chest wound that apparently killed him where he lay. The blood itself had an odd look under the lights—thick in places, almost black, and in others iridescent at the edges, like oil in rainwater. “What did the pathologist say on scene?” “Can’t be sure until post,” Pike said, “but likely penetrative trauma between the ribs. Maybe punctured heart.” “Maybe.” She leaned closer to the rip in the shirt. The fabric had not been sliced. It had browned at the edges, curled inward as if singed. Beneath it, the skin around the wound was mottled gray. Quinn straightened very carefully. Pike saw her expression. “What?” “This wasn’t done with a knife.” He snorted. “Looks remarkably like it was.” “No.” She pointed. “A knife cuts cloth clean unless it’s jagged or blunt. This is scorched. See the edge? And if he’d been stabbed here with enough force to drop him on the spot, we’d have more blood around the wound and more on the person who did it. Instead we’ve got”—she looked again at the shimmering edge of the pooled blood—“something else.” Pike folded his arms. “Electrical?” “In a disused station with dead rails and no sign of an arc source?” she said. “You tell me.” He had the grace not to answer that. Quinn looked past the body to the stall. A dozen objects lay scattered where someone had swept them aside in a hurry. Small carved boxes. Wax-sealed packets. A string of cloudy beads. And half-hidden under the fallen cloth, something brass flashed green. “Don’t touch that,” she said sharply as one of the constables reached toward it. The young constable froze. “Sorry, ma’am.” Quinn moved around the body and lifted the edge of the cloth. Beneath it lay a small brass compass, no bigger than her palm. The casing wore a skin of verdigris. Sigils, etched fine as watchmaker’s work, circled the face beneath the grime. The needle did not point north. It quivered in frantic little jerks, then swung hard toward the dark maintenance door at the far end of the platform. Pike exhaled a soft, skeptical sound. “Cute.” Quinn did not share his amusement. She had seen things she could not explain and spent three years letting everyone around her call them grief, stress, trauma, bad light, bad memory. DS Morris had died in a locked room with every window sealed from the inside and frost climbing the walls in August. Her report had been edited until it looked sane. Now she looked at the brass compass and felt a cold, old pressure in her chest. “Bag it separately,” she said. “No one opens it, cleans it, or tests it until I say so.” Pike gave her a look. “It’s a compass.” “It’s evidence.” She moved on before he could answer. The stall itself had been arranged with care. Goods sorted by type. Prices, perhaps, though no signs remained. This had not been some opportunistic squat. People had come here regularly and expected customers. On the tiled wall behind the table, someone had chalked symbols in concentric loops, most of them smeared by a broad hand or coat sleeve. At the center of the loops a section of tile had cracked clean through, spidering outward. Quinn stepped closer. The crack pattern troubled her. Impact marks spread from force. This looked more like pressure from the wrong side, as if something had pushed against the tile from within the wall. “Find who first searched this area,” she said. A crime scene tech looked up from his notes. “That’d be me, ma’am.” “Did you move anything on this wall?” “No. Only marked it.” “Anyone touch the chalk?” “Not before photos.” Quinn nodded and crouched again. White dust had gathered at the base of the wall. Tile dust, yes—but mixed with something darker, like ash. She rubbed a little between gloved fingers. It smeared oily gray. Not ash. Residue. Her gaze shifted to the victim’s right hand. The fingers were stained with the same gray-black substance in the creases. Not much. A trace. As if he had touched the wall after it cracked—or reached into whatever had come through. “Rowan.” He joined her, impatient but trying not to show it. “What now?” She indicated the hand, then the wall. “He wasn’t robbed after an argument at the stall. He was here for this.” “For a cracked tile?” “For whatever happened to it.” Pike looked over the symbols, the dust, the old station around them. “You’re building a cathedral out of damp plaster. This place is collapsing. A bit of heat, a bit of panic, somebody gets stabbed in the middle of an illegal market. It doesn’t need to be more elaborate than that.” “Then where are the footprints?” He blinked. “The what?” She led him a few paces back. The platform dust held impressions beautifully near the floodlights: tread from police boots, one partial from the explorers, a dragged cable line from the generator. Closer to the body there should have been more. Sellers, buyers, killer, victim. But around the corpse the dust had been scuffed in chaotic circles and then, abruptly, there was almost nothing leading away from the wall. “The explorers came from the tunnel,” Quinn said. “Their prints are easy. Uniforms are later. The victim was likely standing here.” She indicated a position in front of the cracked wall. “He falls backward, knocks the stall, lands where he is. If someone attacked him at close range and rifled his pockets, they should have left us a route out.” Pike looked down. There were traces, yes, but wrong ones. A few partial impressions that began near the body and stopped after a stride or two. No full set continuing toward either tunnel. No overlap indicating several fleeing patrons. It was as if the scene had been occupied by a crowd until a certain moment, and then emptied without anyone walking away. Pike’s expression tightened despite himself. “Could’ve been disturbed.” “By whom? The explorers stayed at the entrance and called it in. The first uniforms came straight down the central path. You can follow their soles. These”—she pointed to the broken run of faint prints—“aren’t disturbed. They’re incomplete.” He opened his mouth, shut it. Quinn turned slowly, taking in the whole station now with the body as center. Stalls abandoned mid-sale. A cup toppled beside a cash box of old coins and new notes. A crate of apples split open, fruit rolled and bruising in the dust. A lantern still warm enough that the metal chimney had fogged the air when she’d first come in. People had left this place in a hurry so abrupt they had not even bothered to grab cash. But no one had run for the obvious exits. No clear stampede. No trail. She looked back to the brass compass in its little island beneath the cloth. The needle still strained toward the maintenance door. Or not the door, she corrected. Something beyond it. A voice came from the tunnel entrance. “Detective Quinn?” She turned. A young constable approached with a woman in civilian clothes just behind him. Twenty-something, short, freckled, curly red hair trying and failing to stay tucked back behind her left ear. Round glasses caught the floodlight. A worn leather satchel hung crosswise over her coat, swollen with books or files. She looked badly out of place in the station and not surprised enough by that fact. The constable said, “She says she’s from the British Museum. Asked for you by name.” Pike muttered, “Of course she did.” The woman took in the body, the stalls, the cracked wall, and went a shade paler without retreating. “Detective Quinn? I’m Eva Kowalski. I know this is irregular, but if this is where I think it is, you need to clear your officers from that far door.” Quinn held her gaze. Green eyes, intelligent and frightened, fixed not on the corpse but on the brass compass under the stall cloth. Recognition flared there too quickly to fake. “How do you know what this place is?” Quinn asked. Eva swallowed. Her fingers went automatically to her hair, tucking it behind her left ear. “Because that’s a Veil Compass. And because this station shouldn’t exist tonight unless someone used a bone token to open it.” Silence spread outward in a visible ripple. One of the constables laughed nervously, then stopped when no one joined in. Pike looked at Quinn as if waiting for her to shut the nonsense down. She thought of Morris in that frozen room. She thought of scorched cloth, incomplete footprints, a market hidden under Camden, and a wall that looked as though the city itself had been punctured from the inside. “What’s beyond the door?” she asked. Eva’s face tightened. “If the compass is pointing there, not a room. A breach. Maybe a small one. Maybe not stable.” Pike let out a short, incredulous breath. “This is absurd.” “Maybe,” Quinn said, still watching Eva. “Then explain the wound. Explain the blood. Explain where all these people went.” Pike had nothing. The station seemed to listen. Water dripped somewhere in the dark, slow and hollow. One of the floodlights buzzed. The compass needle gave another hard twitch toward the open maintenance door. Quinn looked at the cracked wall one last time and saw it clearly then: the crescent scuffs on the tiles at shoulder height, the victim’s stance in the dust, the singed hole in the shirt not from a blade but from something thrust through a thinning seam in the air. The market had not simply emptied. It had folded away from the violence, or been driven through whatever opening had torn here. The dead man had either tried to close it or profit from it. Someone else had gotten there first. Three years ago she would have forced the facts into a shape the paperwork could digest. Three years ago she might have called the rest impossible and gone home with another knot in her gut. Not today. She pulled off one glove, checked the worn leather watch on her left wrist, then looked at the officers nearest the maintenance door. “Everybody back from that threshold,” she said. Her voice cut through the station with military precision, crisp enough to snap spines straight. “No one crosses it. SOCO holds where they are. Pike, I want the tunnel sealed and every exit watched. If anyone leaves this site without my say-so, I’ll have your badge.” Pike stared at her. “You cannot be serious.” Quinn met his eyes. “That’s the first serious thing said down here all morning.” Then she turned to Eva Kowalski. “You’re going to tell me exactly what a Veil Compass is, what this market sells, and why a man died trying to touch that wall.” Eva tightened her grip on the satchel strap. Fear was there, certainly, but under it lay something steadier: the look of a person who had spent years reading about monsters and had finally walked into the footnote. “All right,” she said quietly. “But you’re already late. If there’s a breach, it won’t stay still.” From the darkness beyond the maintenance door came a sound too low to be a voice and too deliberate to be settling concrete. Quinn felt every eye on her and ignored them. The evidence had begun, finally, to add up. It added up to something ugly and impossible and very likely connected to the kind of truth that had killed Morris. Good, she thought. At least now the scene was honest.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags17
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"she said sharply [sharply]"
1"she said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences66
tagDensity0.258
leniency0.515
rawRatio0.118
effectiveRatio0.061
84.66% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2608
totalAiIsmAdverbs8
found
0
adverb"carefully"
count2
1
adverb"very"
count2
2
adverb"sharply"
count1
3
adverb"slowly"
count1
4
adverb"quickly"
count1
5
adverb"nervously"
count1
highlights
0"carefully"
1"very"
2"sharply"
3"slowly"
4"quickly"
5"nervously"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
92.33% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2608
totalAiIsms4
found
0
word"etched"
count1
1
word"quivered"
count1
2
word"chaotic"
count1
3
word"silence"
count1
highlights
0"etched"
1"quivered"
2"chaotic"
3"silence"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences200
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences200
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences249
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen60
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2605
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions21
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"Or not the door, she corrected."
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions54
wordCount1934
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity1.14
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Detective1
Harlow1
Quinn22
Camden2
Friday1
Rowan1
Pike16
Morris3
August1
Eva5
Kowalski1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Camden"
3"Rowan"
4"Pike"
5"Morris"
6"Eva"
7"Kowalski"
places
0"August"
globalScore0.931
windowScore0.667
91.41% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences128
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"est wound that apparently killed him where he"
1"It was as if the scene had been occupied by a crowd until a certain moment, and then emptied without anyone walking away"
2"as if waiting for her to shut the nonsense down"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords0.768
wordCount2605
matches
0"not on the corpse but on the brass compass under the stall cloth"
1"not from a blade but from something thrust through a thinning seam in the air"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences249
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs111
mean23.47
std23.32
cv0.994
sampleLengths
018
167
212
393
48
57
665
712
82
944
106
1149
127
1338
146
1530
164
1726
1875
193
2013
213
222
2321
2426
2511
2670
277
2817
291
3036
314
325
336
347
3563
365
3719
388
3942
4014
416
4270
437
4462
4516
4618
478
482
497
89.47% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount9
totalSentences200
matches
0"were furred"
1"been colonized"
2"been sliced"
3"was mottled"
4"been edited"
5"been arranged"
6"been scuffed"
7"been occupied"
8"been punctured"
9"been driven"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs320
matches
0"were being"
1"were trying"
2"was lying"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount3
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences3
totalSentences249
ratio0.012
matches
0"The blood itself had an odd look under the lights—thick in places, almost black, and in others iridescent at the edges, like oil in rainwater."
1"Tile dust, yes—but mixed with something darker, like ash."
2"As if he had touched the wall after it cracked—or reached into whatever had come through."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1943
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"same gray-black substance"
adverbCount71
adverbRatio0.03654143077714874
lyAdverbCount25
lyAdverbRatio0.012866700977869275
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences249
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences249
mean10.46
std9.25
cv0.884
sampleLengths
018
120
225
31
41
52
618
712
824
919
106
1114
1230
138
147
156
167
1740
1812
1912
202
218
2226
2310
246
2549
264
273
287
2931
303
313
3230
331
343
3515
3611
3710
3818
3917
402
413
424
433
4418
453
464
479
483
492
57.30% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats14
diversityRatio0.37751004016064255
totalSentences249
uniqueOpeners94
78.43% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences170
matches
0"Once, trains had run through"
1"Once, commuters had stood under"
2"Then she turned to Eva"
3"At least now the scene"
ratio0.024
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount39
totalSentences170
matches
0"She stopped just beyond the"
1"Their harsh white glare made"
2"His fluorescent vest looked indecently"
3"He gave one shoulder the"
4"She kept walking."
5"She had served long enough"
6"He wore a dark wool"
7"His shoes were polished."
8"His nails clean."
9"His beard, silver and carefully"
10"She pulled on gloves and"
11"She looked around the body."
12"She leaned closer to the"
13"It had browned at the"
14"He had the grace not"
15"she said sharply as one"
16"It quivered in frantic little"
17"She had seen things she"
18"Her report had been edited"
19"She moved on before he"
ratio0.229
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount122
totalSentences170
matches
0"She stopped just beyond the"
1"The old station platform opened"
2"Their harsh white glare made"
3"An abandoned market, if you"
4"A crime scene, if you"
5"Uniforms moved in islands of"
6"A SOCO photographer crouched near"
7"A transit maintenance door at"
8"Quinn took all of it"
9"His fluorescent vest looked indecently"
10"Quinn glanced at him."
11"He gave one shoulder the"
12"She kept walking."
13"Quinn said nothing."
14"She had served long enough"
15"This one was lying from"
16"The body lay beside a"
17"The victim had gone over"
18"He wore a dark wool"
19"His shoes were polished."
ratio0.718
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount4
totalSentences170
matches
0"By the time Detective Harlow"
1"Now the tracks were furred"
2"Now she looked at the"
3"As if he had touched"
ratio0.024
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences75
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"Down here, beneath a city that had paved over its own bones and pretended not to hear them rattle, the air turned old and metallic."
1"She thought of scorched cloth, incomplete footprints, a market hidden under Camden, and a wall that looked as though the city itself had been punctured from the…"
2"Fear was there, certainly, but under it lay something steadier: the look of a person who had spent years reading about monsters and had finally walked into the …"
3"It added up to something ugly and impossible and very likely connected to the kind of truth that had killed Morris."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags17
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags15
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Pike muttered (mutter)"
dialogueSentences66
tagDensity0.227
leniency0.455
rawRatio0.067
effectiveRatio0.03
95.1423%