Run: 2026-03-06-01KK1GPE8WXHYG03XKA0ZBZ5MX

Run Details

Duration:
1m 25s
Cost:
$0.050882
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The train tunnels under Camden held a damp cold that bit through wool and skin alike. Detective Harlow Quinn stood at the lip of the cracked platform and looked down over a scene no report had prepared her for. An abandoned Tube station spread beneath her torch beam, all soot-black tiles, flaking enamel signs, and old adverts blistered by time. Between the rusted tracks sat market stalls. Not makeshift tables dragged in by squatters. Proper stalls. Counters draped in dark cloth. Glass cabinets. Hooked poles. A butcher’s block with no butcher. Strings of bare bulbs hung from cables looped along the tunnel ceiling, though no power ran through the station. Half of them still glowed with a weak amber light that should not have existed. The rest swung in the stale air, clicking against one another with a dry little sound. At the centre of it lay the body. Quinn stepped down from the platform to the ballast between the rails. Her left wrist caught the torchlight, the worn leather strap of her watch dark with age and polish. Officers had already strung blue-and-white tape between iron pillars, though the tape looked absurd here, a bit of surface-world order dropped into a place that rejected it. “Morning, Quinn.” DI Peter Vale stood by the corpse with a paper cup in one hand and a look of strained calm on his face. His overcoat hung open. Dust marked one knee. He had the expression of a man who had made up his mind before she arrived and meant to keep it. “You’re contaminating the scene with coffee.” Vale glanced at the cup, then at the body. “Scene’s been contaminated for decades. You should’ve seen the entrance. We had to cut through a welded gate and shift three vagrants from a service passage.” Quinn crouched beside the dead man and let silence answer for her. He lay on his back across the sleepers, one arm folded under him, the other stretched wide as if he had reached for help and found none. Male. Late thirties. Dark suit, expensive but badly torn across the chest. No shoes. Socks soaked through with black grime. His throat had been opened in a clean red line from ear to ear, but there was far less blood than there should have been. Most of what remained had dried in narrow fans under his neck and in the grooves of the timber. His skin carried a waxy cast under the station filth. Not killed here. Quinn angled the torch. The dead man’s right hand was clenched around something small and metallic. “Did anyone open the hand?” “Not yet,” Vale replied. “Forensics are on their way down.” She looked up at the station. Uniforms clustered near the stairwell, each one keeping a healthy distance from the stalls. One constable stared at a rack of bottles stoppered with black wax. Another kept looking over his shoulder into the tunnel mouth. “Who found him?” “Transport worker. Council sent a survey team after complaints about sinkage above Camden High Street. One of the lads found an old maintenance hatch, followed the tunnel, came across this lot, came back up white as plaster.” Vale took a sip of coffee and eyed the nearest stall. “Looks like some underground trading site. Drugs, stolen antiques, ritual nonsense. We’ve got symbols all over the place. Could be a gang initiation gone strange. Or some fringe cult. Your favourite sort of circus.” Quinn rose and walked past him without comment. The nearest stall held trays of teeth sorted by size into velvet-lined compartments. Human, she thought first. Then she saw one too long, one serrated, one thin as a sewing needle. Beside them sat little discs carved from yellowed bone, each one pierced for a cord. Tokens. At the back hung scales with brass pans and iron weights stamped with marks she did not know. Her torch slid on to a second stall. Jars of powder. Bundles of dried herbs. A row of old keys, each tag written in a script that made her eyes snag and move on. She stopped at a patch of floor between the stalls where dust had been disturbed. Footprints. Plenty of them. Too many. Police boots had trampled the edges, but the centre still held enough. “Who came in before you locked it down?” Vale shifted behind her. “Two uniforms. Me. Scene of Crime tech did a first pass and then went back up when one of the bulbs burst over his head. He wasn’t keen to stay.” Quinn crouched again. The prints overlapped in muddy grey crescents and straight-edged impressions. Some belonged to modern boots. One set had a pointed sole with a raised heel. One was bare. Bare feet in a station this filthy would have picked up grease and grit. These prints looked almost clean. She moved her torch lower. The fine dust around them had dragged in odd directions, as if feet had turned sharply and slid, but there were no matching scuffs from a struggle. No knee marks. No handprints. No signs of weight dropping hard. “Body was moved,” she said. Vale gave a little shrug. “Likely. Kill him somewhere else in the station, dump him here for effect.” “No drag marks.” “Two people carrying him.” “They carried him over a floor this dusty and left this little disturbance?” Vale spread his free hand. “Careful killers.” Quinn looked beyond the corpse to the butcher’s block. The wood had split with age, yet its top shone dark and fresh, recently wiped. Around its base lay a ring of dark residue mixed with chalk. The chalk marks had been smeared by boots, though she could still make out fragments of circles and hooked lines. “Photograph that before anyone gets closer,” she called to the nearest constable. The young constable jumped. “Yes, ma’am.” Vale followed her gaze. “There you are. Ritual nonsense.” “Maybe.” She stepped to the block and bent. The dark residue held a metallic sheen under the torch. Blood, but not much. Too little for the throat wound. The chalk had not been drawn by one hand in one sitting. Some lines were thick, laid with pressure. Others looked scratched in after, correcting the shape. A correction. Or an interruption. Quinn straightened and swept the torch over the station walls. Posters peeled from the tiles: summer excursions to Brighton, a cigarette advert, a theatre bill from another decade. Between them, newer marks crawled over the ceramic surface. Charcoal sigils. Wax drippings. Thumb-sized nails hammered into grout. Then she saw what stopped her. One line of bulbs ran over the central aisle of the market, from the ticket hall arch to the far tunnel. Every bulb hung at equal intervals except one. Near the body, a bulb dangled lower than the rest on a twisted length of wire. The glass had blackened on one side. She walked under it. The ballast crunched beneath her boots. She lifted the torch to the ceiling. The wire had not slipped. Someone had yanked it down and fastened it back in haste. The insulation had melted near the fixing point. There, caught on the metal bracket, hung a thread of dark red wool. Quinn looked down at the corpse’s torn jacket. Not wool. Fine worsted. “Where’s the victim’s coat?” she asked. Vale frowned. “This is his coat.” “No. Jacket. Suit piece. If he came here tonight, he came dressed for the weather. Where’s the overcoat?” Vale took another drink, slower this time. “Missing. Along with wallet, phone, and shoes.” “His shoes weren’t taken for robbery.” She nodded at the clean bare prints on the dust. “Someone took them off before he came across this floor. Or he took them off because he knew the place.” Vale gave a short laugh with no humour in it. “You think our City gent popped down to the haunted car boot sale, removed his brogues out of respect, then got his throat cut?” “I think he wasn’t surprised by the location.” She returned to the body and knelt by his outstretched hand. Up close, his knuckles looked scraped but not bruised. No defence wounds. No skin under the nails. She examined the fist from three angles before slipping on gloves. “Bag ready.” A crime scene technician hurried over and held out an evidence pouch. Quinn pried the fingers open one by one. The dead hand resisted, then gave. A small brass compass dropped into her palm. Not standard issue. Too heavy for its size. Verdigris crusted the rim. Protective sigils, etched deep into the face, caught in the light. The needle shivered. Turned east. Then north. Then spun once and settled, not toward magnetic north but toward the black tunnel beyond the butcher’s block. Vale leaned in. “What’s that, a prop?” Quinn did not answer at once. The station had gone strangely quiet around her. Even the officers near the stairwell had fallen still. The compass needle trembled again, like a dog straining at a lead. She slid it into the evidence bag and held it up. “No initials. No maker’s mark. This matters to someone enough that he died with it in his hand.” “Or he stole it and got caught.” “Then where’s the fight?” Vale exhaled through his nose. “You’re making this into a locked-room puzzle. We’ve got a body in an illegal market under Camden. I’ve got jars of powders, strange symbols, and a missing phone. A dealer deal went bad. He ran. They cut him and dumped him here.” Quinn stood. “He wasn’t running.” She pointed the torch at the sleepers under the body. “No cast-off on the rails. No arterial spray on the cabinets, posts, or cloths. He bled before he got here. Someone cleaned the block, but they didn’t clean the route because there isn’t one. No trail from any direction. No pooled blood under nearby stalls.” She shifted the beam to the man’s socks. “And look at this. Soles wet, but the tops are nearly clean. If he walked any distance through this station in socks, that black grease would have climbed the fabric and packed into the weave. It hasn’t. He stood in muck after he was dressed down to his socks. Briefly.” Vale lowered his cup. “So he was carried.” “Then why is there dust on his shoulders and the back of his calves, but not along his spine?” Vale said nothing. She stepped around the corpse and showed him. The dead man’s suit held a pale film over the shoulder seams and lower legs, as if dust had settled on him while he lay somewhere exposed, then been brushed off in patches. His back, visible where the jacket had ridden up, showed only smears. “He lay flat somewhere cleaner than this. Then someone put him here upright enough to gather dust on the upper surfaces before he was dropped into final position. Or”—she looked back at the butcher’s block—“he was positioned here before he was dead, then removed, then returned.” Vale rubbed a hand across his mouth. “You can’t position a body twice without more transfer.” “Unless the first body wasn’t this body.” The words hung between the stalls. A constable at the tape shifted his weight. Vale stared at her. “That’s absurd.” “Then explain the chalk corrections. Explain the cleaned block with almost no blood. Explain why every stall shows signs of use except one.” She moved past him to the far side of the aisle. There, under a canopy of moth-eaten black cloth, stood a narrow cabinet with mirrored panels. Unlike the other stalls, this one had no dust on the counter. No goods. No signs. The mirror glass had cracked in a spiderweb from one corner, yet the floor before it remained almost untouched. Only one print marked it. A woman’s heel. Sharp, narrow, pressed deep at the toe as if she had turned fast. The red wool thread on the wire flashed in Quinn’s mind. She bent close to the print. Not recent-police issue. Not from any uniform on scene. Fine grit had sifted into its edges, but not enough to make it old. “Who logged footwear impressions from responders?” she asked without looking back. The technician lifted a notebook. “Not this pattern, ma’am.” Quinn studied the cabinet. The cracked mirror gave back the station in broken slices: the corpse, the dangling bulbs, Vale by the tracks, tape fluttering between columns. In one shard she caught the tunnel behind her and something scratched into the cabinet’s frame. Three letters. EVA. Not carved by age. Fresh. Gouged in with something sharp and hurried, deep enough to curl splinters from the wood. Quinn’s face did not change. She kept her breath even and looked at the surrounding frame. A second mark sat lower down, almost hidden by the cabinet leg. A circle cut through by a slash. She had seen that sign once before, on a page torn from DS Morris’s notebook after his death. He had labelled it with one sentence in cramped block capitals: MARKET ENTRY? BONE TOKEN REQUIRED. Vale came up beside her. “What have you got?” Quinn straightened. “An eyewitness. Or a target.” He looked at the scratched name. “Eva? The victim’s girl?” “No.” For the first time that morning, the answer came with weight in her chest. Eva Kowalski. British Museum archives. Old symbols. Questions that reached under London and came back with dirt under their nails. Vale squinted at the cabinet. “You know the name.” “Yes.” He turned to her. “You planning to share with the class?” Quinn held out the evidence bag with the brass compass inside. The needle had started to twitch again, jerking not toward the tunnel now but toward the cabinet, as if the object behind the cracked mirror pulled at it. “Not yet.” She angled the torch into the mirror’s fracture line. Behind the cabinet, hidden by its backboard, a narrow gap stood open where wood had failed to meet wall. Cold air breathed through it. Not tunnel draught. Something thinner. Sharper. It carried a smell beneath the dust and rot. Rain on stone. Singed metal. A scent from nowhere in the station. Quinn looked at the floor before the cabinet once more. One woman’s print going in. None coming out. “Get this moved,” she said. Vale looked from the cabinet to the body. “You’re leaving the victim?” “I’m following the scene.” He set the coffee on an empty stall and called for two uniforms. Quinn stayed by the cabinet as they approached, their boots crunching on ballast, their faces set in that flat look people wore when they had stopped trusting what stood in front of them. One officer gripped the cabinet’s side. “It’s heavier than it looks.” “Lift from the base,” Quinn replied. They heaved. Wood scraped tile. The cabinet came away from the wall with a wet sucking sound, as if old sealant or old grime had held it in place. Behind it, a door stood where no door should have been. Not a station maintenance door. No flaking green paint. No TfL stencil. This one had been made of black iron banded over pale wood, its surface crowded with the same hooked sigils cut into the brass compass face. In the centre sat a round recess the size of a large coin. A token slot. And at the threshold, half on the tile and half beyond the sill, lay a second body.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags8
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences60
tagDensity0.133
leniency0.267
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
98.06% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2573
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"sharply"
count1
highlights
0"sharply"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
82.51% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2573
totalAiIsms9
found
0
word"silence"
count1
1
word"velvet"
count1
2
word"weight"
count3
3
word"standard"
count1
4
word"etched"
count1
5
word"magnetic"
count1
6
word"trembled"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
1"velvet"
2"weight"
3"standard"
4"etched"
5"magnetic"
6"trembled"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences224
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences224
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"started to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences276
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen51
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2573
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions6
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions57
wordCount1928
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity1.09
worstName"Vale"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Vale"
discoveredNames
Camden1
Harlow1
Quinn20
Tube1
Peter1
Vale21
Brighton1
Morris1
Kowalski1
Museum1
London1
TfL1
One6
persons
0"Camden"
1"Harlow"
2"Quinn"
3"Peter"
4"Vale"
5"Morris"
6"Kowalski"
7"One"
places
0"Brighton"
1"London"
globalScore0.955
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences129
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords0.777
wordCount2573
matches
0"not toward magnetic north but toward the black tunnel beyond the butcher’s block"
1"not toward the tunnel now but toward the cabinet, as if the object behind the cracked mirr"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences276
matches
0"seen that sign"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs142
mean18.12
std18.95
cv1.046
sampleLengths
039
128
274
38
457
52
652
76
89
926
1012
11101
123
1316
145
1510
1642
173
1837
1911
2034
218
2265
2349
2418
258
264
2730
2831
2919
3043
315
325
3313
343
354
3613
375
382
3956
4012
414
422
434
445
451
4654
475
4846
496
94.30% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount7
totalSentences224
matches
0"been opened"
1"was clenched"
2"been disturbed"
3"been smeared"
4"been drawn"
5"been brushed"
6"been made"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs293
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences276
ratio0
matches(empty)
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1937
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"all soot-black tiles,"
adverbCount44
adverbRatio0.022715539494062985
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.003097573567372225
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences276
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences276
mean9.32
std8.29
cv0.889
sampleLengths
016
123
221
37
47
52
65
72
82
96
1019
1115
1216
138
1412
1518
1627
172
1823
194
204
2121
226
239
2426
2512
2627
271
282
299
302
316
3225
3319
3410
353
364
3712
385
394
406
416
4214
4312
4410
453
4637
4711
4834
498
64.37% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats9
diversityRatio0.4057971014492754
totalSentences276
uniqueOpeners112
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount7
totalSentences188
matches
0"Then she saw one too"
1"Too little for the throat"
2"Then she saw what stopped"
3"Too heavy for its size."
4"Then spun once and settled,"
5"Even the officers near the"
6"Only one print marked it."
ratio0.037
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount33
totalSentences188
matches
0"Her left wrist caught the"
1"His overcoat hung open."
2"He had the expression of"
3"He lay on his back"
4"His throat had been opened"
5"His skin carried a waxy"
6"She looked up at the"
7"Her torch slid on to"
8"She stopped at a patch"
9"She moved her torch lower."
10"she called to the nearest"
11"She stepped to the block"
12"She walked under it."
13"She lifted the torch to"
14"She nodded at the clean"
15"She returned to the body"
16"She examined the fist from"
17"She slid it into the"
18"She pointed the torch at"
19"She shifted the beam to"
ratio0.176
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount131
totalSentences188
matches
0"The train tunnels under Camden"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn stood at"
2"An abandoned Tube station spread"
3"Counters draped in dark cloth."
4"A butcher’s block with no"
5"Strings of bare bulbs hung"
6"Half of them still glowed"
7"The rest swung in the"
8"Quinn stepped down from the"
9"Her left wrist caught the"
10"Officers had already strung blue-and-white"
11"His overcoat hung open."
12"Dust marked one knee."
13"He had the expression of"
14"Vale glanced at the cup,"
15"Quinn crouched beside the dead"
16"He lay on his back"
17"Socks soaked through with black"
18"His throat had been opened"
19"His skin carried a waxy"
ratio0.697
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences188
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences81
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"He lay on his back across the sleepers, one arm folded under him, the other stretched wide as if he had reached for help and found none."
1"The dead man’s suit held a pale film over the shoulder seams and lower legs, as if dust had settled on him while he lay somewhere exposed, then been brushed off…"
2"Sharp, narrow, pressed deep at the toe as if she had turned fast."
3"Quinn stayed by the cabinet as they approached, their boots crunching on ballast, their faces set in that flat look people wore when they had stopped trusting w…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags8
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences60
tagDensity0.117
leniency0.233
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
93.3301%