Run: 2026-03-06-01KK1H0SJSA1DTJT1ZEGB4PBSP

Run Details

Model:
GPT-5.4
Duration:
1m 23s
Cost:
$0.048720
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Rain turned Soho mean. It slicked the pavements black and turned every light into a smear. It hissed in gutters, drummed on awnings, ran in silver ropes from the green neon sign above the Raven’s Nest and pooled in the cracked lip of the curb. Harlow Quinn stood half under the bar’s shallow overhang and watched the door as if she could force it to give something up by patience alone. At forty-one, she had learned the uses of patience. Learned them in interview rooms and stairwells and stakeouts that stretched into dawn. Learned them in the years before Morris died and in the three after, when patience became another word for carrying weight without dropping it. Rain beaded on her closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair and tracked cold fingers down the collar of her coat. Her left wrist rested near the butt of the torch clipped under her jacket, the worn leather watch dark with water. Inside the Raven’s Nest, the lamps were low and amber through the window glass. Shapes moved past old maps pinned to the walls, past black-and-white photographs gone grey with nicotine and time. She had spent two hours in there pretending to nurse a whisky she barely touched, watching a roomful of liars avoid one another’s eyes. Soho criminals wore polish now. Better shoes. Better lies. But they still gave themselves away in the same small ways—shoulders tightening at the wrong name, fingers lingering too long over a phone, glances flicking toward the exit before trouble had even entered the room. She had come for a fence named Calder who, according to a twitchy informant with a gambling problem and a split lip, had been moving impossible merchandise through the city: things that vanished from evidence lockers without broken locks, things witnesses described with the kind of language sober people did not use unless something had gone very badly wrong. Calder had not shown. Someone else had. He stepped out of the Raven’s Nest with his head down and his coat collar turned up, trying for ordinary and missing it by a mile. Tomás Herrera was hard to mistake if you knew what you were looking for. Olive skin gone pale under the streetlamp. Short curls plastered dark against his head by the rain. A lean medic’s build under a charcoal coat. He moved quickly but with care, one hand pressed against the front of his jacket as if protecting something tucked there. When he looked once over his shoulder, the neon flashed green across his face and caught the edge of the Saint Christopher medallion at his throat. Harlow straightened. Herrera. Former paramedic. Lost his licence after the sort of unauthorized treatment that got buried in disciplinary language because the truth sounded deranged. His name had been orbiting hers for six months, always one degree removed from people she could never quite pin down. He patched up the city’s shadows. He knew who bled where. He hit the pavement and turned east. Harlow moved. She let him build twenty yards before she stepped into the rain and fell in behind him. Her shoes splashed through shallow water. A bus exhaled at the corner, brakes squealing. Somewhere, a siren wailed and dopplered away. Herrera walked fast, not running, his shoulders tight. Twice he checked shop windows instead of turning his head, using the reflections. Good habit. She drifted to the far side of the pavement and let a pair of umbrella-drunk clubbers stagger between them. He crossed Greek Street against the light. Horns barked. A cyclist shouted abuse in two languages. Harlow slipped through on the red, hand up to a black cab that skimmed too close and sent a fan of dirty water over her trouser leg. Herrera cut down a narrow lane rank with spilled beer and wet cardboard. At the far end, he emerged onto Charing Cross Road and hesitated for half a heartbeat. That was the first real tell. A man going home didn’t hesitate. He chose north and broke into a run. “Damn it.” Harlow ran too. The city tightened around her. Wet air burned in her throat. Her coat slapped against her knees as she drove forward, dodging pedestrians who spun and swore after her. Herrera was quick. Quicker than she would have guessed from the file photograph. He vaulted a stack of bin bags split open by foxes, landed hard, kept moving. She followed with less grace and more efficiency, shoulder clipping a brick wall slick with rain. “Herrera!” she shouted. “Police!” He didn’t even glance back. So he knew exactly who was behind him. He tore across a side street into Fitzrovia traffic and nearly vanished under a delivery van. The driver laid on the horn. Harlow reached the kerb a second later, judged the gap, and went. For an instant headlights blinded her, white and huge. Then she was through, breath ragged, pulse punching at her temples. Herrera ducked into the mouth of an alley between a closed florist and an off-licence with iron shutters. Harlow hit the alley at speed and nearly went down. Water sheeted across broken concrete. The place stank of damp brick, urine, and old frying oil. He was ahead by maybe thirty feet, one hand on the wall to steady himself. She saw him glance back then, really look at her, and read the calculation in his face. Not fear. Not exactly. Urgency. He burst out of the alley onto Camden High Street, where the night opened up in sodium glare and rain haze. The market stalls were shuttered, graffiti shining wet on corrugated metal. Music thumped from somewhere behind a closed door. The canal wind knifed colder here. Herrera didn’t slow. He veered toward the entrance of a Tube station that should have been closed at this hour for maintenance. Its sign was dark. Metal barriers stood half-drawn across the top of the steps. A yellow notice flapped in the rain. He slipped through the gap sideways and disappeared below ground. Harlow reached the barriers three seconds later. She stopped at the top of the stairs, chest heaving, and looked down into the station’s throat. Fluorescent lights buzzed weakly far below, leaving the stairwell in bands of shadow. Rainwater ticked from the edge of the ceiling and pattered down the steps. The official sign said CLOSED TO THE PUBLIC. No trains. Engineering works. The ordinary language of ordinary concealment. She listened. No station announcements. No rumble of incoming trains. And under that, something else. A murmur too dense to be wind. Many voices, distant and low. A pulse of life where there should have been emptiness. Her hand went to the inside pocket of her coat where her warrant card sat in its leather fold, suddenly as useful as a prayer in a burning room. Three years ago, Morris had gone through a door first because they had both still believed doors led to places they understood. Basement in Bermondsey. Drug den, they’d thought. Human suspects. Human rules. Then the temperature had dropped hard enough to bite and the walls had seemed to breathe and Morris had screamed once—a sound cut off as if the dark itself had put a hand over his mouth. They found his body twenty minutes later with no marks that made any sense. The pathologist wrote words like cardiac event because there was no box for terror inflicted by something the room refused to remember. Harlow still dreamed of that basement. Of the way reality had bent and then snapped back, leaving paperwork where explanations should have been. She looked down the stairs. If Herrera was carrying what she thought he was carrying, if he was the thread that led to the clique she had been pulling at for months, this was the closest she had come. Backup was ten minutes away on a very good night, and the call she would have to make would invite questions she couldn’t answer without sounding unstable. Worse, if this was what she had begun to suspect existed in the blind spot beside the city, uniforms charging in blind could become casualties before they reached the ticket barriers. Her jaw tightened. She started down. Each footstep came back to her in a damp echo. Posters curled from tiled walls. The familiar Underground roundel had been pried half loose and hung crooked like a broken halo. At the first landing she found the first sign that this was no maintenance closure: chalk marks on the wall, symbols layered over transit notices in white and red. Not gang tags. Too deliberate. They made her eyes slide away when she tried to hold them in focus. At the bottom of the stairwell, the barriers had been shoved aside entirely. Beyond them the abandoned station concourse opened in a wash of strange light. Harlow stopped in the mouth of it, every trained instinct telling her she had crossed from known ground into something that had no reason to care about her badge. The Veil Market. She did not know the name yet, not formally, but she would later. In the moment it arrived as an assault of details that refused to fit together. The disused ticket hall had been transformed into a living bazaar. Tarpaulins were strung between old pillars to make awnings. Tables and crates and glass-fronted cabinets crowded the floor where commuters once queued. Naked bulbs hung beside lanterns that burned with smokeless blue fire. The air smelled of wet wool, rust, incense, frying meat, and an undertone like a hospital cupboard full of chemicals gone off. People moved through it in a low tide, and some of them were not, in any strict sense, people. A woman with a fox’s amber eyes argued over a tray of silver needles. A broad man in a butcher’s apron displayed jars full of things suspended in yellow fluid, each jar carefully labelled in a script Harlow did not recognize. A boy no older than sixteen sold brittle-looking flowers from a suitcase, their petals black as soot and rimed with frost despite the station’s stale warmth. On a blanket near the wall, old coins and human teeth lay sorted into neat concentric patterns. No one shouted. No one hawked. Business here moved under the surface, dangerous and practiced. Buyers leaned in close. Sellers watched everything. Herrera was twenty yards ahead, slipping through the crowd with his head low. Harlow stepped into the concourse. Conversations did not stop. That would have been easier. Instead they bent around her. Eyes landed and moved on with studied indifference, which was its own warning. She was an intruder, yes, but not one anyone intended to challenge openly until they knew what she was worth. She kept her hands visible and walked fast. Herrera threaded between a stall selling old books with clasps made of bone and a locked cabinet filled with small stoppered vials that glimmered faintly from within. He looked back once and saw her. His face changed—not surprise now, but frustration edged with fear. “Detective,” he called, not loudly. “Don’t.” His accent thickened under strain, the soft Andalusian edges roughened by years in London. He did not stop moving. “Herrera, stand still.” “You should leave.” “Not an option.” He swore under his breath and shoved past a hanging curtain of beadwork made from vertebrae or excellent imitations. Harlow increased pace, angling after him. A vendor shifted a crate into her path at the last second. She checked hard to avoid tripping and shot the man a look that should have blistered paint. He only smiled with too many small teeth and returned to arranging wrapped parcels tied in red string. Herrera reached an old escalator frozen in place. Its metal teeth were furred with rust, but the passage beyond had light in it: a service tunnel adapted into a corridor of private rooms and hidden dealings. He put a hand inside his coat again. Harlow’s pulse kicked. “Hands where I can see them.” He stopped. It happened so abruptly that she nearly overshot. He turned at the base of the dead escalator, rainwater still dripping from his coat hem onto filthy concrete. Up close she could see the strain around his warm brown eyes, the way his mouth had gone tight. His left sleeve had ridden back just enough to show the pale line of the scar along his forearm. The Saint Christopher medallion gleamed at his throat, a small gold witness. Around them, the market pretended not to listen. “Herrera,” Harlow said, quieter now. “What did you take out of the Raven’s Nest?” “Medicine.” “For who?” He looked past her, measuring exits she hadn’t seen. “For someone who will die if I stand here talking.” “That’s not good enough.” “It has to be.” She stepped closer. “You’ve been linked to stolen pharmaceuticals, black-market blood products, at least two suspects in open homicide investigations, and a list of names nobody in my department can explain. You run tonight, I assume guilt.” A humorless smile touched his mouth and vanished. “Then assume what you like, Detective Quinn.” He drew his hand from inside his coat slowly. Not a gun. A small parcel wrapped in oilskin and twine. No bigger than a paperback. He held it carefully, as if rough handling might wake it. Even from where she stood, she felt something faint and wrong move in the air around it, like static before a strike. Harlow’s skin tightened. “What is that?” “You don’t want the answer.” “Try me.” His gaze met hers. For a second, beneath the urgency, she saw pity. “No,” he said. “You really don’t.” A shape detached itself from the shadows at the mouth of the service tunnel behind him. Tall. Coat blacker than the dark around it. Harlow’s attention flicked there by instinct. The figure did not come fully into the light, but she had the strong impression of stillness so complete it was unnatural, as if motion had been edited out. The market around them had subtly gone even quieter. Herrera followed her glance and his face tightened further. “Detective,” he said, almost gently now. “This is the part where you decide if your badge matters more to you than your life.” Harlow felt the old fear rise, cold and disciplined. The basement. Morris’s cut-off scream. The knowledge that there were territories in her city mapped by no police unit, governed by no laws she could enforce. Every sensible instinct told her to back up the stairs, seal the station, call in whoever in Whitehall quietly handled things too strange for paper. Sensible instinct had also left too many dead and too many truths buried. Rainwater dripped from the hem of her coat onto the floor of the hidden market. Her hand hovered near her warrant card and found instead the steady pressure of the leather watch strap at her wrist, worn smooth by years. She took one more step toward Herrera. “Life would be easier,” she said, “if I started making decisions based on fear.” The shadow in the tunnel moved. And the market, all at once, seemed to lean in.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags6
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences26
tagDensity0.231
leniency0.462
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
80.19% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2524
totalAiIsmAdverbs10
found
0
adverb"very"
count2
1
adverb"quickly"
count1
2
adverb"really"
count2
3
adverb"suddenly"
count1
4
adverb"carefully"
count2
5
adverb"slowly"
count1
6
adverb"gently"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"quickly"
2"really"
3"suddenly"
4"carefully"
5"slowly"
6"gently"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
84.15% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2524
totalAiIsms8
found
0
word"weight"
count1
1
word"pulse"
count3
2
word"echo"
count1
3
word"familiar"
count1
4
word"warmth"
count1
5
word"flicked"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"pulse"
2"echo"
3"familiar"
4"warmth"
5"flicked"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences211
matches
0"d with fear"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences211
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tried to"
2"tended to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences231
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen59
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2521
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions67
wordCount2384
uniqueNames26
maxNameDensity0.76
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Harlow"
discoveredNames
Soho2
Raven3
Nest3
Quinn1
Morris4
Calder2
Herrera13
Saint2
Christopher2
Greek1
Street2
Charing1
Cross1
Road1
Fitzrovia1
Camden1
High1
Tube1
Bermondsey1
Underground1
Veil1
Market1
Harlow18
Andalusian1
London1
Whitehall1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Quinn"
2"Morris"
3"Calder"
4"Herrera"
5"Saint"
6"Christopher"
7"Market"
8"Harlow"
9"Andalusian"
places
0"Soho"
1"Greek"
2"Street"
3"Charing"
4"Cross"
5"Road"
6"Fitzrovia"
7"Camden"
8"High"
9"Bermondsey"
10"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences145
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"as if protecting something tucked there"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords0.793
wordCount2521
matches
0"not formally, but she would later"
1"not surprise now, but frustration edged with fear"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences231
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs90
mean28.01
std30.92
cv1.104
sampleLengths
04
167
285
3100
463
53
6112
72
855
97
102
1180
1272
1312
148
152
163
1773
184
195
208
2154
2276
234
241
2546
2643
2710
287
2961
302
318
3227
3329
34105
3523
365
3792
383
393
4079
4126
4229
433
4494
4519
4684
4722
4813
495
91.96% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount8
totalSentences211
matches
0"got buried"
1"were shuttered"
2"been closed"
3"been pried"
4"been shoved"
5"been transformed"
6"were furred"
7"been edited"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs410
matches
0"were looking"
1"was carrying"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount3
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences3
totalSentences231
ratio0.013
matches
0"But they still gave themselves away in the same small ways—shoulders tightening at the wrong name, fingers lingering too long over a phone, glances flicking toward the exit before trouble had even entered the room."
1"Then the temperature had dropped hard enough to bite and the walls had seemed to breathe and Morris had screamed once—a sound cut off as if the dark itself had put a hand over his mouth."
2"His face changed—not surprise now, but frustration edged with fear."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2398
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount91
adverbRatio0.03794829024186822
lyAdverbCount26
lyAdverbRatio0.010842368640533779
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences231
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences231
mean10.91
std8.72
cv0.799
sampleLengths
04
112
229
326
49
513
624
718
821
914
1018
1124
125
132
142
1535
1659
174
183
1926
2014
217
2210
238
2421
2526
262
271
282
2920
3021
316
325
337
342
3517
366
378
387
398
4013
412
4219
437
442
457
4627
4713
4816
496
60.03% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats13
diversityRatio0.3939393939393939
totalSentences231
uniqueOpeners91
88.65% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences188
matches
0"Somewhere, a siren wailed and"
1"Twice he checked shop windows"
2"Then she was through, breath"
3"Then the temperature had dropped"
4"Instead they bent around her."
ratio0.027
96.60% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount58
totalSentences188
matches
0"It slicked the pavements black"
1"It hissed in gutters, drummed"
2"Her left wrist rested near"
3"She had spent two hours"
4"She had come for a"
5"He stepped out of the"
6"He moved quickly but with"
7"His name had been orbiting"
8"He patched up the city’s"
9"He knew who bled where."
10"He hit the pavement and"
11"She let him build twenty"
12"Her shoes splashed through shallow"
13"She drifted to the far"
14"He crossed Greek Street against"
15"He chose north and broke"
16"Her coat slapped against her"
17"He vaulted a stack of"
18"She followed with less grace"
19"He didn’t even glance back."
ratio0.309
82.34% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount142
totalSentences188
matches
0"It slicked the pavements black"
1"It hissed in gutters, drummed"
2"Harlow Quinn stood half under"
3"Rain beaded on her closely"
4"Her left wrist rested near"
5"Shapes moved past old maps"
6"She had spent two hours"
7"Soho criminals wore polish now."
8"She had come for a"
9"Calder had not shown."
10"Someone else had."
11"He stepped out of the"
12"Tomás Herrera was hard to"
13"Olive skin gone pale under"
14"A lean medic’s build under"
15"He moved quickly but with"
16"His name had been orbiting"
17"He patched up the city’s"
18"He knew who bled where."
19"He hit the pavement and"
ratio0.755
53.19% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences188
matches
0"If Herrera was carrying what"
1"Even from where she stood,"
ratio0.011
49.06% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences99
technicalSentenceCount13
matches
0"Harlow Quinn stood half under the bar’s shallow overhang and watched the door as if she could force it to give something up by patience alone."
1"Learned them in interview rooms and stairwells and stakeouts that stretched into dawn."
2"She had come for a fence named Calder who, according to a twitchy informant with a gambling problem and a split lip, had been moving impossible merchandise thro…"
3"He moved quickly but with care, one hand pressed against the front of his jacket as if protecting something tucked there."
4"Lost his licence after the sort of unauthorized treatment that got buried in disciplinary language because the truth sounded deranged."
5"Twice he checked shop windows instead of turning his head, using the reflections."
6"Harlow slipped through on the red, hand up to a black cab that skimmed too close and sent a fan of dirty water over her trouser leg."
7"Her coat slapped against her knees as she drove forward, dodging pedestrians who spun and swore after her."
8"If Herrera was carrying what she thought he was carrying, if he was the thread that led to the clique she had been pulling at for months, this was the closest s…"
9"Harlow stopped in the mouth of it, every trained instinct telling her she had crossed from known ground into something that had no reason to care about her badg…"
10"Naked bulbs hung beside lanterns that burned with smokeless blue fire."
11"Herrera threaded between a stall selling old books with clasps made of bone and a locked cabinet filled with small stoppered vials that glimmered faintly from w…"
12"The figure did not come fully into the light, but she had the strong impression of stillness so complete it was unnatural, as if motion had been edited out."
41.67% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags6
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"he called, not loudly"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she shouted (shout)"
dialogueSentences26
tagDensity0.231
leniency0.462
rawRatio0.167
effectiveRatio0.077
90.9280%