Run: 2026-03-06-01KK1H95YGGEBEVXCFGX6GQTX3

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Duration:
6.6s
Cost:
$0.002551
Provider:
Inception

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The air in the abandoned tube station was thick with the smell of rust and stale incense, a perfume that clung to the concrete walls like a second skin. Fluorescent tubes flickered overhead, casting a pallid glow over the cracked tiles and the graffiti that pulsed with phosphorescent ink. Harlow Quinn stepped through the rusted gate, the weight of her worn leather watch thudding against her left wrist as she adjusted the strap. The watch was a relic from her early days on the force, its face scarred by countless arrests and late‑night stakeouts. She glanced at the time—02:13 a.m.—and felt the familiar surge of focus that came with the precision of a soldier. A crowd of cloaked figures huddled near the center of the market, their faces obscured by hooded jackets and the occasional flash of a lantern. In the middle of the throng lay a body, sprawled on a slab of oil‑slicked metal. The victim was a man in his thirties, his hair a tangled mess of black curls, a scar running down his left cheek. His eyes were open, glazed, and his throat was slit cleanly from ear to ear. A thin line of blood pooled around the wound, darkening the grime beneath it. Harlow crouched beside the corpse, her knees making a soft scrape against the tile. She lifted a gloved hand and examined the wound, noting the clean cut—no ragged edges, no hesitation. The knife was missing, but a faint imprint of a metallic edge lingered on the skin, like a ghost of a blade. She turned the victim’s head, revealing a small brass compass lodged in the palm of his left hand. The compass was tarnished, its casing a verdigris patina, and the face was etched with protective sigils that glowed faintly in the dim light. She lifted the compass, feeling the cool metal against her palm. The needle spun wildly, then steadied, pointing toward the far end of the market, where a wall of crates was stacked haphazardly. Harlow’s eyes narrowed. The Veil Compass—an artifact crafted by a Shade artisan—was attuned to supernatural energy, pointing toward the nearest rift or portal. It was not a weapon, but a tool, and its presence on a murder victim was a puzzle she could not ignore. A soft rustle behind her announced another presence. Eva Kowalski stepped forward, her round glasses catching the flickering light. Her curly red hair was pulled back into a loose bun, a few strands escaping and curling around her ears. She clutched a worn leather satchel that bulged with books and parchment, the leather cracked from years of travel. Eva’s freckled face was set in a mixture of concern and curiosity, her eyes darting between the corpse and the compass. “Detective Quinn,” Eva said, her voice low but steady. “I didn’t expect to find you here. I was looking for the Codex of Lumen—” “The Codex?” Harlow interrupted, her tone clipped. “You’re not here for a book, Eva. Someone’s dead, and this compass is… strange.” Eva’s fingers twitched, a nervous habit of tucking a stray curl behind her left ear. “The Compass is a key, Harlow. It points to a rift. The market moves every full moon, and the rift opens only when the moon is at its zenith. I think whoever took the compass tried to hide it.” Harlow lifted the compass again, watching the needle quiver. “A rift to what? The market is a place of illegal alchemy and cursed trinkets, but a rift… that’s beyond the usual contraband.” Eva’s eyes flicked to the crowd, then back to Harlow. “There’s a rumor that the Veil Market sits on a thin veil between worlds. The Shade artisans who crafted these tools are said to be able to sense the veil’s pulse. If the compass is pointing here, something is trying to cross.” Harlow’s mind raced. She recalled the night three years ago when her partner, DS Morris, vanished during a case that had turned supernatural. He had been chasing a lead on a portal that opened in an abandoned warehouse. The case had gone cold, and the memory of his last words—“the veil is… closing”—still haunted her. She felt a cold shiver travel down her spine as she considered the possibility that the same veil was at work now. She stood, the compass still clasped in her hand, and surveyed the market. The stalls were a jumble of curiosities: jars of phosphorescent fungus, vials of liquid that seemed to move on their own, and a table littered with cracked mirrors that reflected not the present but a dim, otherworldly landscape. The crowd seemed oblivious to the dead man, their heads bowed, their hands busy with transactions that Harlow could not decipher. “Who found the body?” she asked, her voice cutting through the murmurs. A lanky vendor with a scarred cheek stepped forward, his eyes darting nervously. “I… I was setting up my stall. I saw him… he was already… dead. I called the police, but the market moves, you know? It’s not like a normal crime scene.” Harlow’s jaw tightened. “Did you see anyone leave the area?” The vendor shook his head. “No. The market is… chaotic. People come and go. I didn’t see anything unusual.” She turned to Eva, her gaze sharp. “What about the compass? Who owns it?” Eva opened her satchel, pulling out a notebook filled with cramped, looping script. “I’ve been cataloguing the artifacts sold here for months. The Veil Compass is listed as a ‘navigation tool for the veil.’ It’s rare, only a handful exist, and they’re usually kept in private collections. I’ve never seen one in the market before.” Harlow pressed the compass against her palm, feeling the faint hum of supernatural energy. The needle, still pointing toward the crates, seemed to pulse in rhythm with her heartbeat. She took a step toward the crates, her boots echoing on the tile. The crates were marked with symbols—an interlocking triangle and circle—that matched the sigils etched on the compass face. She lifted the lid of the nearest crate, revealing a tangled mass of copper wires, glass vials, and a small, obsidian stone that seemed to absorb the light. The stone was warm to the touch, and as she held it, a whisper of wind brushed her ear, though the air was still. “Do you feel that?” Eva whispered, her voice barely audible. Harlow nodded, the stone’s chill seeping into her skin. “It’s a portal, or a fragment of one. The compass is pointing to it. Whoever killed the man wanted to keep this hidden.” A sudden clatter echoed from the far end of the market. Harlow’s eyes snapped to the source—a shadow slipped out from behind the crates, moving with a fluid grace that seemed to defy the cramped space. The figure was cloaked in a dark, tattered shawl, its face obscured. It paused, then turned, revealing a pair of eyes that glowed a faint amber, like coals under ash. “Detective Quinn,” the figure hissed, voice muffled by the hood. “You shouldn’t be here. The veil is closing, and the market will be… erased.” Harlow’s hand moved instinctively to the grip of her service pistol, but she hesitated. The figure was not a typical criminal; it moved with a purpose that felt ancient, as if it were a conduit of something beyond human comprehension. She lowered her weapon, instead reaching for the compass. The needle spun faster, then snapped to a fixed direction—straight at the figure. Harlow stepped forward, the compass’s needle a beacon. “Who are you?” she demanded, voice steady despite the tremor in her gut. The figure lowered its hood, revealing a face that was both human and not. Pale skin stretched over angular bones, and a thin scar traced a line from the temple to the jaw. The eyes, still amber, flickered with an inner fire. “I am a Keeper of the Veil,” the figure said. “The market is a conduit, a place where the veil thins. The compass was meant to guide those who seek the crossing. Your partner… he tried to close it. He failed.” Eva’s breath hitched. “Morris? He… he was here?” The Keeper nodded. “He was a seeker, like you. He believed the veil could be sealed. He was killed by those who profit from its openness. The compass was his last hope, to find the rift before it collapsed.” Harlow’s mind raced, the pieces snapping into place. The clean cut of the throat, the missing knife—none of it matched a random act of violence. The victim had been trying to hide the compass, perhaps to prevent the rift from being exploited. The market’s chaotic nature was a cover, a smokescreen for a deeper, supernatural trade. She turned to Eva, eyes blazing. “We need to close that rift. If the compass is pointing to it, we can use it to locate the exact point. But we need to act fast—once the moon reaches its zenith, the veil will seal, and whatever is on the other side will be trapped.” Eva’s fingers trembled as she pulled a battered notebook from her satchel, flipping to a page filled with sketches of sigils and diagrams of energy flow. “The sigils on the compass are protective. If we align them with the stone’s resonance, we can create a feedback loop that will collapse the rift.” Harlow placed the compass on the obsidian stone, feeling the hum intensify. The needle steadied, pointing directly at the center of the stone’s surface. A thin line of light emerged, spiraling upward like a filament of glass, connecting the compass to the stone. The light grew brighter, and the air around them seemed to thicken, as if the veil itself were breathing. The Keeper stepped back, eyes widening. “You cannot—” “Close it,” Harlow finished, her voice a low command. She felt the weight of her leather watch, the ticking of seconds reminding her that time was slipping away. She reached into her pocket, pulling out a small vial of silver dust—an alchemical agent she kept for emergencies. She poured the dust onto the stone, and the light flared, then collapsed into a vortex of darkness. A low, resonant hum filled the station, vibrating through the tiles and the bones of the market’s patrons. The vortex spun, pulling at the edges of the crates and the stalls, as if trying to swallow them whole. The Keeper raised its hands, chanting in a language that seemed to echo from the depths of the earth. Eva’s eyes widened, but Harlow’s focus never wavered. She pressed the compass against the stone, aligning the sigils with the vortex’s core. The needle sang, a high-pitched tone that resonated with the hum. The vortex shuddered, then began to contract, the darkness receding like a tide pulled back by an unseen force. The market’s lights flickered, and for a moment, the entire station was bathed in a blinding white light. Harlow felt a pressure in her ears, a sensation like being pulled through a tunnel of static. She clenched her jaw, feeling the familiar sting of adrenaline that had carried her through countless raids and firefights. When the light dimmed, the vortex was gone. The stone lay inert, its surface dull and cold. The compass needle quivered, then fell still, pointing nowhere. The Keeper’s hood fell away, revealing a gaunt figure with a thin, trembling hand. “It’s over,” the Keeper whispered, voice cracked. “The veil is sealed, for now.” Harlow stepped back, her breath ragged. She looked at the body of the man, now still and silent, his eyes closed. The compass lay in his palm, its purpose fulfilled. She turned to Eva, who was still clutching her notebook, eyes wide with awe. “Did you… did you see that?” Eva asked, voice trembling. Harlow gave a short, curt nod. “We stopped a breach. But there will be more. The market will move when the next full moon comes. And there will be others who want to exploit the veil.” The Keeper, now unmasked, bowed his head. “You have done what many could not. The balance is restored, but the price is high.” Harlow slipped the compass into her satchel, feeling the weight of the brass against her thigh. She glanced at her watch—02:45 a.m.—the second hand ticking steadily. She felt the familiar ache in her chest, the memory of Morris’s voice echoing in the darkness: “The veil is… closing.” She knew that the closing was never final; it was a cycle, a rhythm that she now understood more clearly. She turned to the market’s patrons, their faces now visible in the dim light, their eyes filled with a mixture of fear and relief. “Everyone’s free to leave,” she said, voice carrying authority. “The market will be sealed until the next full moon. No one is to cross the veil without proper clearance.” The crowd murmured, some nodding, others looking away. Eva slipped her satchel over her shoulder, the books inside rustling softly. “Thank you, Detective,” she said, her voice barely above a whisper. “I think I’ve learned more about the veil than I ever expected.” Harlow gave a thin smile, the sharpness of her jawline evident even in the low light. “Just keep your eyes open, Eva. The veil is a thin thing, and it has a way of slipping back in when you least expect it.” She stepped toward the exit, the metal gates of the abandoned tube station groaning as they opened. The night air hit her face, crisp and clean, a stark contrast to the stale, incense‑laden atmosphere inside. The city beyond was a tapestry of neon and fog, the sounds of traffic distant but ever‑present. As she walked away, the compass in her satchel pulsed faintly, a reminder that the veil was still out there, waiting for the next moon to rise. Her mind drifted to the case that had taken Morris, the unsolved mysteries that lingered like ghosts in the corners of her memory. She tightened the strap of her watch, feeling the familiar rhythm of time in her hand. The night was quiet, but Harlow Quinn knew that beneath the quiet lay a current of unseen forces, a world where the veil between reality and the uncanny was as fragile as a spider’s silk. She walked on, her steps measured, her resolve unshakable, ready to face whatever lay beyond the next shadow.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags13
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences38
tagDensity0.342
leniency0.684
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
93.79% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2415
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"nervously"
count1
1
adverb"softly"
count1
2
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count1
highlights
0"nervously"
1"softly"
2"barely above a whisper"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
6.83% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2415
totalAiIsms45
found
0
word"flickered"
count3
1
word"pulsed"
count2
2
word"weight"
count3
3
word"familiar"
count4
4
word"etched"
count2
5
word"flicked"
count1
6
word"pulse"
count2
7
word"raced"
count2
8
word"down her spine"
count1
9
word"otherworldly"
count1
10
word"chaotic"
count2
11
word"echoing"
count2
12
word"whisper"
count2
13
word"chill"
count1
14
word"echoed"
count1
15
word"beacon"
count1
16
word"traced"
count1
17
word"trembled"
count1
18
word"resonance"
count1
19
word"echo"
count1
20
word"depths"
count1
21
word"wavered"
count1
22
word"resonated"
count1
23
word"quivered"
count1
24
word"stark"
count1
25
word"tapestry"
count1
26
word"reminder"
count1
27
word"uncanny"
count1
28
word"silk"
count1
29
word"measured"
count1
30
word"resolve"
count1
highlights
0"flickered"
1"pulsed"
2"weight"
3"familiar"
4"etched"
5"flicked"
6"pulse"
7"raced"
8"down her spine"
9"otherworldly"
10"chaotic"
11"echoing"
12"whisper"
13"chill"
14"echoed"
15"beacon"
16"traced"
17"trembled"
18"resonance"
19"echo"
20"depths"
21"wavered"
22"resonated"
23"quivered"
24"stark"
25"tapestry"
26"reminder"
27"uncanny"
28"silk"
29"measured"
30"resolve"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches3
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count2
1
label"clenched jaw/fists"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
1"eyes widened"
2"clenched her jaw"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences123
matches
0"e with awe"
15.10% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount4
hedgeCount7
narrationSentences123
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences147
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen48
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2403
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions18
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions54
wordCount1830
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity1.31
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Harlow"
discoveredNames
Quinn2
Veil1
Compass1
Shade1
Kowalski1
Harlow24
Eva15
Morris3
Keeper6
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Compass"
2"Kowalski"
3"Harlow"
4"Eva"
5"Morris"
6"Keeper"
places(empty)
globalScore0.844
windowScore0.833
16.07% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences112
glossingSentenceCount6
matches
0"liquid that seemed to move on their own, and a table littered with cracked mirrors that reflected not the present but a dim, otherworldly landscape"
1"seemed oblivious to the dead man, their heads bowed, their hands busy with transactions that Harlow could not decipher"
2"stone that seemed to absorb the light"
3"grace that seemed to defy the cramped space"
4"as if trying to swallow them whole"
5"language that seemed to echo from the depths of the earth"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords0.832
wordCount2403
matches
0"not a weapon, but a tool"
1"not the present but a dim, otherworldly landscape"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences147
matches
0"knew that the"
1"knew that beneath"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs51
mean47.12
std24.64
cv0.523
sampleLengths
0114
193
295
378
479
524
621
754
832
952
1077
1172
1212
1344
1410
1519
1614
1755
1860
1952
2010
2132
2266
2324
2449
2534
2683
278
2839
2956
3053
3152
3262
338
3465
3565
3644
3754
3840
3913
4044
4110
4236
4323
4467
4553
4643
4742
4852
4966
79.59% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount9
totalSentences123
matches
0"was tarnished"
1"was etched"
2"was stacked"
3"was attuned"
4"was pulled"
5"was cloaked"
6"being exploited"
7"was bathed"
8"being pulled"
9"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs307
matches
0"were breathing"
1"was slipping"
2"was still clutching"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount15
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences12
totalSentences147
ratio0.082
matches
0"She glanced at the time—02:13 a.m.—and felt the familiar surge of focus that came with the precision of a soldier."
1"She lifted a gloved hand and examined the wound, noting the clean cut—no ragged edges, no hesitation."
2"The Veil Compass—an artifact crafted by a Shade artisan—was attuned to supernatural energy, pointing toward the nearest rift or portal."
3"The case had gone cold, and the memory of his last words—“the veil is… closing”—still haunted her."
4"The crates were marked with symbols—an interlocking triangle and circle—that matched the sigils etched on the compass face."
5"Harlow’s eyes snapped to the source—a shadow slipped out from behind the crates, moving with a fluid grace that seemed to defy the cramped space."
6"The figure was not a typical criminal; it moved with a purpose that felt ancient, as if it were a conduit of something beyond human comprehension."
7"The needle spun faster, then snapped to a fixed direction—straight at the figure."
8"The clean cut of the throat, the missing knife—none of it matched a random act of violence."
9"She reached into her pocket, pulling out a small vial of silver dust—an alchemical agent she kept for emergencies."
10"She glanced at her watch—02:45 a.m.—the second hand ticking steadily."
11"She felt the familiar ache in her chest, the memory of Morris’s voice echoing in the darkness: “The veil is… closing.” She knew that the closing was never final; it was a cycle, a rhythm that she now understood more clearly."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1842
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount42
adverbRatio0.02280130293159609
lyAdverbCount16
lyAdverbRatio0.008686210640608035
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences147
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences147
mean16.35
std8.62
cv0.527
sampleLengths
029
120
224
321
420
525
616
723
815
914
1014
1117
1222
1318
1424
1511
1622
173
1820
1922
208
2111
2220
2319
2421
259
2615
277
2814
2915
3039
319
3223
3310
3442
353
3620
3715
3817
3922
4013
4138
4221
4312
4413
4531
463
477
485
4914
39.12% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats16
diversityRatio0.19727891156462585
totalSentences147
uniqueOpeners29
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences123
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount36
totalSentences123
matches
0"She glanced at the time—02:13"
1"His eyes were open, glazed,"
2"She lifted a gloved hand"
3"She turned the victim’s head,"
4"She lifted the compass, feeling"
5"It was not a weapon,"
6"Her curly red hair was"
7"She clutched a worn leather"
8"She recalled the night three"
9"He had been chasing a"
10"She felt a cold shiver"
11"She stood, the compass still"
12"she asked, her voice cutting"
13"She turned to Eva, her"
14"She took a step toward"
15"She lifted the lid of"
16"It paused, then turned, revealing"
17"She lowered her weapon, instead"
18"she demanded, voice steady despite"
19"She turned to Eva, eyes"
ratio0.293
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount118
totalSentences123
matches
0"The air in the abandoned"
1"Harlow Quinn stepped through the"
2"The watch was a relic"
3"She glanced at the time—02:13"
4"A crowd of cloaked figures"
5"The victim was a man"
6"His eyes were open, glazed,"
7"A thin line of blood"
8"Harlow crouched beside the corpse,"
9"She lifted a gloved hand"
10"The knife was missing, but"
11"She turned the victim’s head,"
12"The compass was tarnished, its"
13"She lifted the compass, feeling"
14"The needle spun wildly, then"
15"Harlow’s eyes narrowed."
16"The Veil Compass—an artifact crafted"
17"It was not a weapon,"
18"A soft rustle behind her"
19"Eva Kowalski stepped forward, her"
ratio0.959
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences123
matches(empty)
ratio0
42.02% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences85
technicalSentenceCount12
matches
0"The air in the abandoned tube station was thick with the smell of rust and stale incense, a perfume that clung to the concrete walls like a second skin."
1"The compass was tarnished, its casing a verdigris patina, and the face was etched with protective sigils that glowed faintly in the dim light."
2"She clutched a worn leather satchel that bulged with books and parchment, the leather cracked from years of travel."
3"He had been chasing a lead on a portal that opened in an abandoned warehouse."
4"The stalls were a jumble of curiosities: jars of phosphorescent fungus, vials of liquid that seemed to move on their own, and a table littered with cracked mirr…"
5"She lifted the lid of the nearest crate, revealing a tangled mass of copper wires, glass vials, and a small, obsidian stone that seemed to absorb the light."
6"Harlow’s eyes snapped to the source—a shadow slipped out from behind the crates, moving with a fluid grace that seemed to defy the cramped space."
7"It paused, then turned, revealing a pair of eyes that glowed a faint amber, like coals under ash."
8"The figure was not a typical criminal; it moved with a purpose that felt ancient, as if it were a conduit of something beyond human comprehension."
9"The needle sang, a high-pitched tone that resonated with the hum."
10"She clenched her jaw, feeling the familiar sting of adrenaline that had carried her through countless raids and firefights."
11"She turned to Eva, who was still clutching her notebook, eyes wide with awe."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags13
uselessAdditionCount12
matches
0"Eva said, her voice low but steady"
1"Harlow interrupted, her tone clipped"
2"she asked, her voice cutting through the murmurs"
3"Eva whispered, her voice barely audible"
4"the figure hissed, voice muffled by the hood"
5"she demanded, voice steady despite the tremor in her gut"
6"Harlow finished, her voice a low command"
7"the Keeper whispered, voice cracked"
8"Eva asked, voice trembling"
9"She felt, the memory of Morris’s voice echoing in the darkness:"
10"she said, voice carrying authority"
11"she said, her voice barely above a whisper"
18.42% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags11
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"Harlow interrupted (interrupt)"
1"Eva whispered (whisper)"
2"the figure hissed (hiss)"
3"she demanded (demand)"
4"the Keeper whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences38
tagDensity0.289
leniency0.579
rawRatio0.455
effectiveRatio0.263
65.3645%