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Run: 2026-03-06-01KK1HHTDGM93RG17RSW9FH4TD
Run Details
Model:
Inception Mercury 2
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:
6.5s
Cost:
$0.002488
Provider:
Inception
Evaluation summary
Score
Evaluator
Details Link
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
(details)
87.15%
AI-ism adverb frequency
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism character names
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
(details)
0.00%
AI-ism word frequency
(details)
66.67%
Cliché density
(details)
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
(details)
50.69%
Filter word density
(details)
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
(details)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
(details)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
(details)
66.67%
Name drop frequency
(details)
0.00%
Narrator intent-glossing
(details)
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
(details)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
(details)
76.47%
Paragraph length variance
(details)
99.60%
Passive voice overuse
(details)
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
(details)
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
(details)
100.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
(details)
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
(details)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
(details)
42.75%
Sentence opener variety
(details)
0.00%
Adverb-first sentence starts
(details)
91.30%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
(details)
0.00%
Subject-first sentence starts
(details)
0.00%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
(details)
0.00%
Technical jargon density
(details)
0.00%
Useless dialogue additions
(details)
0.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
(details)
66.0435%
Overall
Model input
System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>
Model response
Messages
Meta
AI
Aurora slipped the silver chain
of the Heartstone Pendant over her neck, feeling the faint
pulse
against her collarbone.
The crimson gem glowed hotter
as the amber sky above the Grove thinned, the air humming with a low, resonant note.
She glanced at Nyx, whose
silhouette
flickered
between solid shadow and vapor, the violet glow of its eyes barely cutting through the
gloom
. “Feels like a heartbeat,”
Aurora muttered, her voice barely
rising above the
whisper
of
wind that seemed to come from nowhere
.
Nyx’s form steadied, a ripple
of darkness coalescing into a shape that could hold a candle. “The Veil thins where the old stones lie,”
it said, voice like a
sigh through reeds. “We walk where the world folds.”
Isolde stepped forward, silver hair
brushing the moss‑covered stones at her feet. Her pale lavender eyes
flickered
, reflecting the faint luminescence that seeped from the walls. “A river that runs backwards will guide you,”
she intoned, each word a
riddle that
hung in the air
like a scent. Aurora followed the narrow passage, the pendant’s
warmth
guiding her steps.
The walls were carved with
symbols that seemed to shift when she glanced away, patterns of vines and leviathan‑scale that pulsed in rhythm with the pendant
.
The ground beneath her boots
was cool, the stone slick with an unseen moisture that left a faint sheen on her shoes.
A low rumble echoed, reverberating
through the cavern like a distant drum. Aurora’s bright blue
eyes narrowed
. “Do you hear that?”
Nyx’s form flickered, its outline
blurring as it slipped into a crack in the wall. “A chorus of stone,” it whispered. “The ancient ones still sing.” Isolde’s hand brushed a glyph, and a soft chime rang out, as if a bell had
been struck
in a distant tower. “When the moon drinks the sun, the path opens,”
she said, her voice a
melodic
echo
that
seemed to
vibrate the
very
air. Aurora reached into her coat, pulling the moonsilver dagger from its sheath.
The blade was cold, a
thin leaf of light that caught the faint glow of the cavern.
She lifted it, feeling the
faint hum that
resonated
with the pendant. The blade’s edge
seemed to
cut through the
very
silence
, a thin line of moonlight slicing the darkness. The passage widened into a vaulted chamber, the ceiling disappearing into a swirl of violet mist. In the center stood a monolith of obsidian, its surface
etched
with runes that
pulsed
like a heartbeat. Around it, floating islands of
crystal
hovered, each reflecting the amber sky above in a
kaleidoscope
of colors. Aurora stepped closer, the pendant’s
pulse
quickening. “This is… a portal?”
she asked, her voice steadier
now. Nyx drifted ahead, its form solidifying as it hovered beside the monolith. “The Veil is thin here,” it said. “Rift points bleed through.” Isolde lifted her hand, and the
crystal
islands
began to
hum, a low vibration that
resonated
through Aurora’s bones. “The stone remembers the rain that never fell,”
she murmured, eyes closing as
if listening to an unseen melody. A sudden gust swept through the chamber, scattering dust that glittered like tiny stars. The mist swirled, coalescing into a shape that resembled a doorway, its edges shimmering with a faint silver light. The Heartstone Pendant flared, its crimson glow matching the doorway’s luminescence. Aurora felt the cold of the blade against her palm, the metal humming in response to the doorway. “We go through?”
she asked, not needing an
answer. Nyx’s shadow stretched, its form elongating like a finger pointing toward the portal. “The path is a thin thread,” it said. “Walk it, and the world will bend.” Isolde opened her eyes, the lavender
depths
reflecting the doorway’s light. “When the night swallows the day, the truth will be revealed,”
she said, a smile playing
on her lips. Aurora stepped forward, the pendant’s
warmth
spreading through her chest, a steady thrum that matched the rhythm of her heartbeat.
She placed the blade against
the doorway, the cold metal leaving a faint frost on the silver light. The portal shivered, and a ripple of energy surged outward, causing the
crystal
islands to vibrate in a chorus of chimes. The doorway opened wider, revealing a landscape that defied description. A sky of molten amber stretched over a field of vines that glowed with an inner fire. The air smelled of ripe fruit and a faint metallic tang, as if the scent of blood lingered beneath the sweetness. In the distance, towering structures of twisted stone rose like spires, each adorned with carvings of feasting demons and banquet tables overflowing with exotic delicacies. Aurora inhaled deeply, the scent filling her lungs. “We’re in Dymas,”
she whispered, the name tasting
like a promise and a warning. Nyx’s form
flickered
, its eyes glowing brighter. “Gluttony’s realm,” it said. “The Prince’s feast never ends.” Isolde stepped through the doorway, her feet barely touching the ground as she moved. “A garden of excess,”
she said, her voice echoing
in the alien sky. “Where the Veil drinks from the well of
desire
.” The trio moved across the field, the ground soft beneath their steps, each
footfall
leaving a faint imprint that faded as
quickly
as it appeared. The vines brushed against Aurora’s arms, their leaves warm and pulsing, as if alive. She felt a subtle tug, a
whisper
of hunger that rose from the soil. “Do you feel that?”
Aurora asked, her voice low
. Nyx’s shadow merged with the vines, becoming one with the living darkness. “It is the hunger of the realm,” it replied. “A force that feeds on longing.” Isolde’s hand hovered over a stone table laden with platters of food that
shimmered
with an
otherworldly
sheen.
She lifted a piece of
fruit, its skin translucent, the flesh glowing with a soft inner light. “Taste, and you shall know,”
she said, offering it to
Aurora. Aurora hesitated, then took the fruit, feeling its coolness against her palm.
She bit into it, the
flesh bursting with flavors that shifted with each chew—sweet, bitter, salty, and a hint of something metallic. The taste lingered, a
reminder
of the realm’s promise and its
peril
. A low chuckle rose from the shadows, a
sound that seemed to come from the very walls
. The Prince of Gluttony, a figure of excess, emerged from a banquet hall, his form composed of swirling wine and crumbs.
He wore a crown of
grapes, his eyes twin pits of darkness. “Welcome, travelers,”
he intoned, his voice a
blend of laughter and sigh. “You have entered my feast.” Aurora tightened her grip on the blade, the cold metal biting into her palm. “We seek passage,”
she said, her tone steady
. The Prince’s smile widened, revealing teeth made of
crystal
. “Passage is a dish to be savored,” he replied. “But first, you must taste my hospitality.” Nyx drifted forward, its shadow merging with the Prince’s form, creating a vortex of darkness that swirled around the trio. “The Veil trembles,” Nyx said. “Your presence disturbs the balance.” Isolde raised her hand, and the
crystal
islands above them sang a higher note, a
resonance
that
seemed to
vibrate the
very
fabric of the realm. “When the river runs dry, the stones will speak,”
she whispered, eyes fixed on the Prince
. The Prince lifted a goblet filled with a liquid that glowed like molten amber. “Drink,” he urged, “and you shall see the truth of
desire
.” Aurora glanced at Nyx, who nodded, his violet eyes reflecting the goblet’s light. “We will not drink,”
Aurora said, her voice firm
. “We have a purpose.” The Prince’s smile faltered, his form flickering. “Then you shall be fed,” he snarled, summoning a wave of shadowy tendrils that rose from the ground, coiling like serpents. The tendrils struck, wrapping around Aurora’s wrist, the scar on her left hand
glinting
as the tendrils brushed it. She felt a cold surge, a
whisper
of the childhood accident that left the crescent scar, a memory of pain that now
pulsed
in rhythm with the pendant. “Hold fast,”
Nyx shouted, its voice cutting through the roar
. It surged forward, its shadow form striking the tendrils, scattering them like ash. Isolde raised the Fae‑Forged Blade, its moonsilver edge catching the amber sky, a thin line of light that cut through the darkness. She thrust the dagger into the ground, and a flash of lunar light erupted, shattering the tendrils into glittering shards that fell like rain. The Prince recoiled, his form destabilizing. “You think you can break my feast?” he hissed. Aurora stepped forward, the Heartstone Pendant blazing, its crimson glow matching the Prince’s amber aura.
She placed the blade against
the monolith that had once marked the doorway, the cold metal leaving a frost that spread across the stone. The monolith cracked, a fissure widening, revealing a vortex of swirling colors. “The Veil cracks,”
Nyx said, its voice a low hum
. “The rift opens.” Isolde’s
eyes narrowed
, the lavender depth reflecting the vortex. “When the night swallows the day, the truth will be revealed,”
she repeated, her voice steady
. The vortex grew, pulling at the edges of the chamber, the amber sky above rippling like water. The Prince’s form dissolved into a cascade of wine and crumbs, his laughter fading into a distant
echo
. Aurora felt the pull, the
weight
of the portal tugging at her soul.
She glanced at Nyx, whose
shadow stretched, merging with the vortex, becoming a conduit. “We go through,”
she said, the words a promise
. Nyx’s form dissolved into the vortex, its violet eyes disappearing into the light. “The path is a thin thread,” it whispered, and then nothing. Isolde stepped into the vortex, her silver hair trailing behind like a comet. “When the river runs dry, the stones will speak,”
she said, and the vortex swallowed her
. Aurora took a breath, the Heartstone Pendant pulsing against her throat. She lifted the Fae‑Forged Blade, the cold metal biting into her palm, and stepped forward, the vortex’s light enveloping her. The world behind her blurred, the amber sky of the Grove fading into a swirl of colors. She felt the
weight
of the Veil, the thin barrier between realms, and the pull of something ancient and hungry. The pendant’s glow steadied, a steady rhythm that matched the beat of her heart. The blade’s cold seeped into her skin, a
reminder
of the Fae’s gift and the promise of protection. As she crossed the threshold, the vortex snapped shut behind her, leaving the ancient chamber silent, the
crystal
islands still humming, the monolith cracked, its fissure a wound in stone. The Heartstone Pendant dimmed, its crimson glow fading to a soft ember. Outside, the hidden grove breathed, the wildflowers swaying under a
sky that seemed to hold its breath
. Aurora emerged, the pendant warm against her chest, the blade cold in her hand. She glanced at the ancient oak standing stones, the boundary of the Grove, and felt the Veil’s
whisper
against her skin. Nyx’s voice lingered in the wind, a faint
echo
of a promise. “The Veil thins where the old stones lie,” it had said. “We walk where the world folds.” Isolde’s riddles floated in her mind, a puzzle waiting to be solved. “A river that runs backwards will guide you,” she had whispered. Aurora tightened her grip on the blade, the Heartstone pulsing faintly, a
reminder
that the journey had only begun. The ancient place behind her held secrets, its walls still humming with the
echo
of a feast long ended. She turned toward the path that led back to the Grove, the scent of ripe fruit and metallic tang lingering, a promise of more to come.
created_at
"2026-03-06T12:21:55.769Z"
3/6/2026, 12:21:55 PM
model
"inception/mercury-2-20260304"
app_id
182717
external_user
(null)
streamed
true
cancelled
false
latency
1718
moderation_latency
(null)
generation_time
6418
tokens_prompt
1816
tokens_completion
3780
native_tokens_prompt
1679
native_tokens_completion
3260
native_tokens_completion_images
(null)
native_tokens_reasoning
721
native_tokens_cached
1674
num_media_prompt
(null)
num_input_audio_prompt
(null)
num_media_completion
0
num_search_results
(null)
origin
"https://ncbench.com/"
is_byok
false
finish_reason
"stop"
native_finish_reason
"stop"
usage
0.0024881
router
(null)
provider_responses
0
endpoint_id
"c2a24e34-c306-4b4d-9e2f-b162c2d8bf0e"
id
"chatcmpl-4d56ac2e-8c50-46f9-a2fa-ce243b3c44fe"
is_byok
false
latency
108
model_permaslug
"inception/mercury-2-20260304"
provider_name
"Inception"
status
200
user_agent
"langchainjs-openai/1.0.0 ((node/v24.14.0; linux; x64))"
http_referer
(null)
api_type
"completions"
id
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upstream_id
"chatcmpl-4d56ac2e-8c50-46f9-a2fa-ce243b3c44fe"
total_cost
0.0024881
cache_discount
0.00037665
upstream_inference_cost
0
provider_name
"Inception"
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
34
adverbTagCount
0
adverbTags
(empty)
dialogueSentences
48
tagDensity
0.708
leniency
1
rawRatio
0
effectiveRatio
0
87.15%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount
1946
totalAiIsmAdverbs
5
found
0
adverb
"very"
count
4
1
adverb
"quickly"
count
1
highlights
0
"very"
1
"quickly"
100.00%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
0.00%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount
1946
totalAiIsms
47
found
0
word
"pulse"
count
2
1
word
"flickered"
count
4
2
word
"gloom"
count
1
3
word
"whisper"
count
4
4
word
"warmth"
count
2
5
word
"pulsed"
count
3
6
word
"echoed"
count
1
7
word
"echo"
count
4
8
word
"resonated"
count
2
9
word
"silence"
count
1
10
word
"etched"
count
1
11
word
"crystal"
count
6
12
word
"kaleidoscope"
count
1
13
word
"depths"
count
1
14
word
"echoing"
count
1
15
word
"desire"
count
2
16
word
"footfall"
count
1
17
word
"shimmered"
count
1
18
word
"otherworldly"
count
1
19
word
"reminder"
count
3
20
word
"peril"
count
1
21
word
"resonance"
count
1
22
word
"glinting"
count
1
23
word
"weight"
count
2
highlights
0
"pulse"
1
"flickered"
2
"gloom"
3
"whisper"
4
"warmth"
5
"pulsed"
6
"echoed"
7
"echo"
8
"resonated"
9
"silence"
10
"etched"
11
"crystal"
12
"kaleidoscope"
13
"depths"
14
"echoing"
15
"desire"
16
"footfall"
17
"shimmered"
18
"otherworldly"
19
"reminder"
20
"peril"
21
"resonance"
22
"glinting"
23
"weight"
66.67%
Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
3
maxInWindow
2
found
0
label
"eyes widened/narrowed"
count
2
1
label
"hung in the air"
count
1
highlights
0
"eyes narrowed"
1
"hung in the air"
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
124
matches
(empty)
50.69%
Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
8
narrationSentences
124
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
0
"seemed to"
1
"began to"
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences
138
gibberishSentences
0
adjustedGibberishSentences
0
longSentenceCount
0
runOnParagraphCount
0
giantParagraphCount
0
wordSaladCount
0
repetitionLoopCount
0
controlTokenCount
0
maxSentenceWordsSeen
30
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans
0
markdownWords
0
totalWords
1945
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions
33
unquotedAttributions
0
matches
(empty)
66.67%
Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions
81
wordCount
1675
uniqueNames
11
maxNameDensity
1.37
worstName
"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity
3
worstWindowName
"Prince"
discoveredNames
Heartstone
6
Pendant
5
Grove
4
Nyx
15
Isolde
11
Aurora
23
Prince
9
Gluttony
1
Blade
2
Veil
2
Fae
3
persons
0
"Heartstone"
1
"Pendant"
2
"Grove"
3
"Nyx"
4
"Isolde"
5
"Aurora"
6
"Prince"
7
"Veil"
8
"Fae"
places
(empty)
globalScore
0.813
windowScore
0.667
0.00%
Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences
107
glossingSentenceCount
7
matches
0
"wind that seemed to come from nowhere"
1
"symbols that seemed to shift when she glanced away, patterns of vines and leviathan‑scale that pulsed in rhythm with the pendant"
2
"echo that seemed to vibrate the very air"
3
"as if listening to an unseen melody"
4
"sound that seemed to come from the very walls"
5
"resonance that seemed to vibrate the very fabric of the realm"
6
"sky that seemed to hold its breath"
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches
0
per1kWords
0
wordCount
1945
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
0
totalSentences
138
matches
(empty)
76.47%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
54
mean
36.02
std
15.04
cv
0.418
sampleLengths
0
63
1
21
2
38
3
48
4
59
5
21
6
26
7
45
8
59
9
52
10
17
11
23
12
38
13
44
14
27
15
28
16
30
17
59
18
73
19
22
20
16
21
36
22
53
23
9
24
27
25
46
26
46
27
50
28
17
29
22
30
25
31
30
32
42
33
25
34
26
35
28
36
47
37
23
38
46
39
15
40
51
41
13
42
25
43
35
44
36
45
24
46
29
47
48
48
52
49
42
99.60%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount
2
totalSentences
124
matches
0
"were carved"
1
"been struck"
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
0
totalVerbs
296
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount
1
semicolonCount
0
flaggedSentences
1
totalSentences
138
ratio
0.007
matches
0
"She bit into it, the flesh bursting with flavors that shifted with each chew—sweet, bitter, salty, and a hint of something metallic."
100.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1676
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
32
adverbRatio
0.01909307875894988
lyAdverbCount
8
lyAdverbRatio
0.00477326968973747
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
138
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
138
mean
14.09
std
5.96
cv
0.423
sampleLengths
0
19
1
21
2
23
3
21
4
16
5
16
6
6
7
12
8
14
9
22
10
11
11
26
12
22
13
12
14
5
15
4
16
15
17
6
18
5
19
22
20
23
21
12
22
17
23
12
24
18
25
16
26
18
27
18
28
7
29
10
30
12
31
7
32
4
33
19
34
19
35
14
36
19
37
11
38
18
39
9
40
13
41
8
42
7
43
11
44
19
45
20
46
18
47
21
48
10
49
17
42.75%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
10
diversityRatio
0.2246376811594203
totalSentences
138
uniqueOpeners
31
0.00%
Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount
0
totalSentences
115
matches
(empty)
ratio
0
91.30%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount
37
totalSentences
115
matches
0
"She glanced at Nyx, whose"
1
"it said, voice like a"
2
"Her pale lavender eyes flickered,"
3
"she intoned, each word a"
4
"she said, her voice a"
5
"She lifted it, feeling the"
6
"she asked, her voice steadier"
7
"she murmured, eyes closing as"
8
"she asked, not needing an"
9
"she said, a smile playing"
10
"She placed the blade against"
11
"she whispered, the name tasting"
12
"she said, her voice echoing"
13
"She felt a subtle tug,"
14
"She lifted a piece of"
15
"she said, offering it to"
16
"She bit into it, the"
17
"He wore a crown of"
18
"he intoned, his voice a"
19
"she said, her tone steady"
ratio
0.322
0.00%
Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount
110
totalSentences
115
matches
0
"Aurora slipped the silver chain"
1
"The crimson gem glowed hotter"
2
"She glanced at Nyx, whose"
3
"Aurora muttered, her voice barely"
4
"Nyx’s form steadied, a ripple"
5
"it said, voice like a"
6
"Isolde stepped forward, silver hair"
7
"Her pale lavender eyes flickered,"
8
"she intoned, each word a"
9
"Aurora followed the narrow passage,"
10
"The walls were carved with"
11
"The ground beneath her boots"
12
"A low rumble echoed, reverberating"
13
"Aurora’s bright blue eyes narrowed."
14
"Nyx’s form flickered, its outline"
15
"Isolde’s hand brushed a glyph,"
16
"she said, her voice a"
17
"Aurora reached into her coat,"
18
"The blade was cold, a"
19
"She lifted it, feeling the"
ratio
0.957
0.00%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount
0
totalSentences
115
matches
(empty)
ratio
0
0.00%
Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences
82
technicalSentenceCount
17
matches
0
"Her pale lavender eyes flickered, reflecting the faint luminescence that seeped from the walls."
1
"Isolde lifted her hand, and the crystal islands began to hum, a low vibration that resonated through Aurora’s bones."
2
"A sudden gust swept through the chamber, scattering dust that glittered like tiny stars."
3
"The mist swirled, coalescing into a shape that resembled a doorway, its edges shimmering with a faint silver light."
4
"Nyx’s shadow stretched, its form elongating like a finger pointing toward the portal."
5
"Aurora stepped forward, the pendant’s warmth spreading through her chest, a steady thrum that matched the rhythm of her heartbeat."
6
"The doorway opened wider, revealing a landscape that defied description."
7
"A sky of molten amber stretched over a field of vines that glowed with an inner fire."
8
"The air smelled of ripe fruit and a faint metallic tang, as if the scent of blood lingered beneath the sweetness."
9
"She bit into it, the flesh bursting with flavors that shifted with each chew—sweet, bitter, salty, and a hint of something metallic."
10
"Nyx drifted forward, its shadow merging with the Prince’s form, creating a vortex of darkness that swirled around the trio."
11
"Aurora glanced at Nyx, who nodded, his violet eyes reflecting the goblet’s light."
12
"She felt a cold surge, a whisper of the childhood accident that left the crescent scar, a memory of pain that now pulsed in rhythm with the pendant."
13
"She thrust the dagger into the ground, and a flash of lunar light erupted, shattering the tendrils into glittering shards that fell like rain."
14
"The pendant’s glow steadied, a steady rhythm that matched the beat of her heart."
15
"Outside, the hidden grove breathed, the wildflowers swaying under a sky that seemed to hold its breath."
16
"She turned toward the path that led back to the Grove, the scent of ripe fruit and metallic tang lingering, a promise of more to come."
0.00%
Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags
34
uselessAdditionCount
15
matches
0
"she asked, her voice steadier now"
1
"she murmured, eyes closing as if listening to an unseen melody"
2
"she asked, not needing an answer"
3
"she said, a smile playing on her lips"
4
"she said, her voice echoing in the alien sky"
5
"Aurora asked, her voice low"
6
"he intoned, his voice a blend of laughter and sigh"
7
"she said, her tone steady"
8
"she whispered, eyes fixed on the Prince"
9
"Aurora said, her voice firm"
10
"Nyx shouted, its voice cutting through the roar"
11
"Nyx said, its voice a low hum"
12
"she repeated, her voice steady"
13
"she said, the words a promise"
14
"she said, and the vortex swallowed her"
0.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
30
fancyCount
11
fancyTags
0
"Aurora muttered (mutter)"
1
"it whispered (whisper)"
2
"she murmured (murmur)"
3
"she whispered (whisper)"
4
"she whispered (whisper)"
5
"he urged (urge)"
6
"he snarled (snarl)"
7
"Nyx shouted (shout)"
8
"he hissed (hiss)"
9
"she repeated (repeat)"
10
"it whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences
48
tagDensity
0.625
leniency
1
rawRatio
0.367
effectiveRatio
0.367
66.0435%