Run: 2026-03-06-01KK1HRSJWKAPV526TGT0BK2K0

Run Details

Model:
GPT-5.4
Duration:
1m 16s
Cost:
$0.038729
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The oak stones stood in a rough ring ahead, black with rain that had not touched the grass around them. Richmond Park lay behind Aurora in the ordinary shape of itself — damp earth, distant road noise, a dog barking somewhere beyond the trees — yet the air near the stones held still, as if sound had reached the boundary and thought better of crossing. Nyx moved first. Their body thinned, edges loosening into smoke, violet eyes suspended in the dark. “You brought iron?” Aurora patted her jacket pocket. “Keys. Coins. Usual city clutter.” “Leave the coins.” “Why?” The shadow of Nyx’s head turned towards the standing stones. “They bit the last man who jingled.” Aurora pulled out a fistful of change and dropped it at the root of an oak. The metal landed with a flat clatter that sounded too loud, then wrong, then far away. She rubbed her thumb over the crescent scar on her wrist and glanced at Isolde. The seer stood a few paces ahead in a long pale coat the colour of frost, silver hair trailing down her back without picking up so much as a leaf. Wildflowers grew around her boots in a thick spill of red and gold, though it was the dead turn of the year beyond the grove. “You could’ve led with that,” Aurora muttered. Isolde looked at her with those pale lavender eyes that never seemed to blink often enough. “The grove enjoys manners. It enjoys fear more, though less politely.” “That’s comforting.” “The sweetest fruit often grows beside the ditch.” Aurora let out a thin breath. “Right. Of course it does.” Nyx gave a sound like dry paper dragged across stone. With anyone else, she would have called it a laugh. The standing stones looked like old oak trunks cut and shaped by no tool she recognised. Their surfaces twisted in spirals and smooth channels, with knots set in patterns that made her eyes skip. One carried a seam of amber light through its grain, faint as a pulse under skin. The Heartstone pendant at her throat answered with a wash of warmth against her chest. She touched it through her shirt. Nyx’s gaze dropped at once. “It knows thresholds.” “It does that near Hel portals.” “Doors are cousins.” Isolde stepped between the first two stones. She left no print in the moss. The air behind her bent like heat above a road, only silver rather than wavering. The wildflowers there leaned inward, their heads turning to face a wind Aurora could not feel. “Come before it changes its mind.” Aurora swallowed and followed. Cold brushed her face first. Not winter cold. This felt older, cleaner, like water pulled from deep rock. Then warmth moved under it in a slow current, and the two sensations crossed through each other until her skin prickled and her ears rang. The world narrowed to that silver shimmer. She took one more step. The park vanished. Aurora stopped so hard her boots sank into soft ground. The grove opened around them in a clearing far larger than anything that could have fit between the park’s trees. The sky hung low and pearled, not clouded, not clear, but layered in sheets of colour that shifted from pale green to dusk-blue to a bruised violet that matched Nyx’s eyes. Light came from no single source. It soaked out of the air itself and lay over everything with the sheen of moonlight on milk. The trees nearest the boundary were oak in shape only. Their trunks rose smooth and white as bone, then split into branches braided with glass-clear vines. Leaves fluttered overhead, silver on one side, black on the other, flashing dark and bright with every movement. Beyond them, deeper in the grove, trunks glimmered in copper, gold, and a blue so rich it looked wet. Aurora turned in a slow circle. “This is in the park?” “No.” Isolde walked on. “Yes.” Aurora looked at Nyx. “That’s not an answer.” “The grove does not care what shape your questions take.” “That’s very useful.” “Useful things often arrive dressed badly.” “Have you two agreed to speak like this, or is it contagious?” Nyx drifted past her, the grass beneath them bending though they had no proper weight. The ground under Aurora’s feet felt springy, woven with roots under a skin of moss. Tiny flowers crowded every open patch, but these were no daisies or bluebells. Some held petals like strips of thin porcelain. Others looked carved from candle wax. One blossom the size of her thumbnail opened as she crouched near it and released a note, a clean single chime, before folding shut again. She stared. Nyx’s whisper skimmed over her shoulder. “Do not pick them.” “I wasn’t going to.” “The grove dislikes liars.” Aurora straightened. “I was thinking about it.” “I know.” They moved deeper. The sounds shifted with each step. At the boundary she had heard nothing but her own breath and the faint hush of leaves. Here, the air carried layers. Water murmured somewhere ahead. From high in the branches came a rustle like silk skirts brushing stone. Once, she heard a burst of laughter, bright and childlike, but when she turned she found only a stand of pale reeds swaying around a pool of black water. She went still. The pool sat in a hollow ringed by stones smooth as river pebbles and tall as gravemarkers. Its surface reflected not the strange sky above but a spread of stars in violent motion, constellations wheeling and tearing apart before her eyes. Something silver moved under the black. Aurora crouched at the edge. “What is that?” Isolde stopped without looking back. “A thirsty place.” “That’s not what I asked.” “Then ask the water.” Aurora squinted. The silver shape glided closer, long and narrow, like a fish made from polished knives. It turned just beneath the surface. No fins. Too many eyes. Each one blinked with a human lid. She took a sharp step back. The thing vanished. The stars on the water blurred and settled into darkness. Nyx’s form thickened beside her. “It smells your pulse.” “Brilliant. Good to know after I leaned over it.” “You leaned very far.” “I noticed.” Isolde glanced at the pool then at Aurora’s hand, where her fingers had curled around the pendant without her realising. “The red stone wakes where borders wear thin. Keep hold of it if the paths begin to multiply.” Aurora frowned. “Begin to?” No one answered. They had already started walking again. She hurried after them. The grove folded around each turn in ways that made her sense of distance come apart. A stand of trees far ahead remained far ahead no matter how long they walked; meanwhile, a cluster of stones she could have sworn lay on the horizon appeared suddenly at her elbow. Birds moved through the upper canopy, if birds they were: creatures with long ribbon tails and transparent wings, their bodies little more than flashes of opal and bone. They never landed. Every cry they gave came out in the voice of something else — a creaking gate, a woman singing through a wall, the snap of branches under a boot. Aurora paused by one tree where fruit hung from the lower limbs like blown-glass lanterns. Crimson sap moved inside each clear skin in slow spirals. One fruit knocked softly against another, and the sound came out as distant bells. “Tell me these aren’t edible,” she said. Nyx tilted their head. “Everything here is edible.” “Not helping.” “Few things here nourish what you are.” Aurora reached for one, then stopped before touching it. The fruit had no stem. It grew straight from the bark like an eye. She withdrew her hand. “Fine. I hate all of this.” “No, you do not.” She looked at Isolde’s back. “I hate enough of it to stay alert.” The seer’s hair drifted in a breeze Aurora still could not feel. “That is closer to truth.” Ahead, the trees opened into a broad glade. Aurora slowed, then forgot to breathe. Great arches of living wood rose from the earth in a circle, their branches meeting high overhead to form a crown. Beneath them stood stones shaped like thrones, altars, and broken doorways, each surface veined with a soft inner light. Threads of brightness ran between them through the grass, joining one stone to the next like roots of pure moonbeam. In the centre floated a cluster of lights the size of moths, though no wings moved. They spun around a single point above a patch of bare earth. As Aurora watched, the bare earth split with no sound. A thin line of silver opened in the soil. Not a crack. A seam. Light bled through it in a colour she had no name for, too rich for white, too thin for gold. Her pendant grew hot. She hissed and pulled it free of her shirt. The deep crimson stone glowed from within, beating once against her palm like a second heart. Nyx had gone still. Truly still. Even their edges stopped wavering. “The Veil is thin here.” Aurora’s fingers tightened around the Heartstone. “This is a rift point?” The word left her mouth before she could stop it. The seam in the earth quivered, as if it had heard itself named. Isolde finally turned to face them. In this light she looked less human than ever, skin almost translucent, eyes full of some reflection the glade itself did not cast. “A scar, not yet a wound.” Aurora looked from the seam to her pendant. “And this thing’s reacting because—” “Because doors speak to doors,” Nyx murmured. She shot them a look. “You’re both impossible.” The floating lights drifted closer. Not moths. Tiny figures, she realised with a jolt, each no longer than the last joint of her thumb. Their bodies shone through gauzy layers of petal-thin skin, all elbows and knees and sharp little faces. One hovered in front of Aurora’s nose and pressed both hands to an invisible wall of air between them. Its eyes were black seeds. Its mouth opened. The sound that came out was her own voice. “This is in the park?” Three more lights echoed it at once from different angles, mocking and musical. Aurora grimaced. “Oh, very funny.” The tiny creature bared needle teeth. Nyx stepped between it and Aurora. Shadow slid up their arms like smoke drawn backwards into fire. The little figure darted away, and the rest scattered with a burst of chiming shrieks. The seam in the ground widened by a hair. Aurora saw it happen. So did Nyx. Their whisper sharpened. “Do not let them bait you.” “I didn’t.” “You answered.” “That counts?” “In old places, everything counts.” A low tone rolled through the glade then, deep enough to be felt before heard. The lit veins in the grass brightened. One of the stone arches trembled. Dust, or pollen, or some glowing powder fell in a slow curtain from the branches above. Aurora’s hand went to her jacket instinctively, where the Fae-forged blade rested in its sheath against her ribs. Cold met her palm through the fabric. “What was that?” Isolde had turned towards the far side of the glade. Beyond the circle of arches, half hidden by blue-leaved trees, something immense shifted. Aurora caught a glimpse of antlers, branch-thick and silver, then an eye opening in the dark, vast and lambent as a lantern seen through fog. The ground gave another low note. Not warning. Recognition. Isolde raised one hand, not in fear, not in greeting, but as if answering a formality older than speech. “Walk softly now.” Aurora stared at the shape beyond the trees. “Is that part of the grove?” Nyx’s whisper brushed her ear. “Here, the question means less than you think.” The huge eye remained fixed on them. The silver seam in the earth pulsed once. In Aurora’s fist, the Heartstone answered.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags3
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences62
tagDensity0.048
leniency0.097
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
82.40% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1989
totalAiIsmAdverbs7
found
0
adverb"very"
count3
1
adverb"suddenly"
count1
2
adverb"softly"
count2
3
adverb"truly"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"suddenly"
2"softly"
3"truly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
52.24% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1989
totalAiIsms19
found
0
word"comforting"
count1
1
word"pulse"
count2
2
word"warmth"
count2
3
word"wavering"
count2
4
word"fluttered"
count1
5
word"weight"
count1
6
word"porcelain"
count1
7
word"whisper"
count3
8
word"silk"
count1
9
word"sense of"
count1
10
word"quivered"
count1
11
word"echoed"
count1
12
word"trembled"
count1
13
word"pulsed"
count1
highlights
0"comforting"
1"pulse"
2"warmth"
3"wavering"
4"fluttered"
5"weight"
6"porcelain"
7"whisper"
8"silk"
9"sense of"
10"quivered"
11"echoed"
12"trembled"
13"pulsed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences161
matches
0"t in fear"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences161
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences220
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen43
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1992
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions9
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
58.50% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions66
wordCount1694
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity1.83
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Park1
Aurora31
Nyx15
Isolde10
Heartstone3
Fae-forged1
One5
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Nyx"
2"Isolde"
3"Heartstone"
4"One"
places
0"Park"
globalScore0.585
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences109
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"looked like old oak trunks cut and shaped"
1"as if answering a formality older than speech"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches5
per1kWords2.51
wordCount1992
matches
0"not clouded, not clear, but layered in sheets of colour"
1"not clear, but layered in sheets of colour"
2"not the strange sky above but a spread of stars in violent motion, constellations wheeling"
3"not in fear, not in greeting, but as if answering a formality older than speech"
4"not in greeting, but as if answering a formality older than speech"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences220
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs124
mean16.06
std20.96
cv1.305
sampleLengths
065
116
23
310
43
51
610
77
847
955
107
1116
1211
132
148
1511
1620
1765
186
195
203
216
223
2345
246
254
2655
273
2810
2975
3063
316
325
331
343
351
368
3710
383
396
4012
4115
4267
432
446
454
464
474
487
492
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences161
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs261
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount3
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences3
totalSentences220
ratio0.014
matches
0"Richmond Park lay behind Aurora in the ordinary shape of itself — damp earth, distant road noise, a dog barking somewhere beyond the trees — yet the air near the stones held still, as if sound had reached the boundary and thought better of crossing."
1"A stand of trees far ahead remained far ahead no matter how long they walked; meanwhile, a cluster of stones she could have sworn lay on the horizon appeared suddenly at her elbow."
2"Every cry they gave came out in the voice of something else — a creaking gate, a woman singing through a wall, the snap of branches under a boot."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1698
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount63
adverbRatio0.037102473498233215
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.004711425206124852
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences220
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences220
mean9.05
std7.21
cv0.796
sampleLengths
020
145
23
313
43
55
65
73
81
910
107
1116
1216
1315
1430
1525
167
1716
1811
192
208
216
225
2310
2410
2516
2618
2716
2815
296
305
313
326
333
347
357
3615
3716
386
394
405
413
4210
4325
447
455
463
4710
4820
4931
52.73% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats9
diversityRatio0.3409090909090909
totalSentences220
uniqueOpeners75
90.70% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences147
matches
0"Then warmth moved under it"
1"Once, she heard a burst"
2"Too many eyes."
3"Even their edges stopped wavering."
ratio0.027
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount27
totalSentences147
matches
0"Their body thinned, edges loosening"
1"She rubbed her thumb over"
2"Their surfaces twisted in spirals"
3"She touched it through her"
4"She left no print in"
5"She took one more step."
6"It soaked out of the"
7"Their trunks rose smooth and"
8"They moved deeper."
9"She went still."
10"Its surface reflected not the"
11"It turned just beneath the"
12"She took a sharp step"
13"They had already started walking"
14"She hurried after them."
15"They never landed."
16"It grew straight from the"
17"She withdrew her hand."
18"She looked at Isolde’s back."
19"They spun around a single"
ratio0.184
62.04% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount117
totalSentences147
matches
0"The oak stones stood in"
1"Richmond Park lay behind Aurora"
2"Nyx moved first."
3"Their body thinned, edges loosening"
4"Aurora patted her jacket pocket."
5"The shadow of Nyx’s head"
6"Aurora pulled out a fistful"
7"The metal landed with a"
8"She rubbed her thumb over"
9"The seer stood a few"
10"Wildflowers grew around her boots"
11"Isolde looked at her with"
12"Aurora let out a thin"
13"Nyx gave a sound like"
14"The standing stones looked like"
15"Their surfaces twisted in spirals"
16"The Heartstone pendant at her"
17"She touched it through her"
18"Nyx’s gaze dropped at once."
19"Isolde stepped between the first"
ratio0.796
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences147
matches(empty)
ratio0
93.25% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences72
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"Richmond Park lay behind Aurora in the ordinary shape of itself — damp earth, distant road noise, a dog barking somewhere beyond the trees — yet the air near th…"
1"Their surfaces twisted in spirals and smooth channels, with knots set in patterns that made her eyes skip."
2"The sky hung low and pearled, not clouded, not clear, but layered in sheets of colour that shifted from pale green to dusk-blue to a bruised violet that matched…"
3"The grove folded around each turn in ways that made her sense of distance come apart."
4"Isolde raised one hand, not in fear, not in greeting, but as if answering a formality older than speech."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags3
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Aurora muttered (mutter)"
1"Nyx murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences62
tagDensity0.048
leniency0.097
rawRatio0.667
effectiveRatio0.065
86.3955%