Run: 2026-03-06-01KK1HVH5XQGFP93JTESDAC2PN

Run Details

Duration:
5.4s
Cost:
$0.002998
Provider:
Inception

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
A glass cracked, spilling amber across the bar. Aurora slipped through the neon‑green doorway, the scent of stale beer and old tobacco curling around her like a familiar shroud. She paused, eyes scanning the dim room, the flickering sign above the entrance casting a sickly glow on the polished wood. Silas stood behind the bar, his grey‑streaked auburn hair catching the light as he lifted a brass tap. His left leg bore a faint limp, the scarred knee hidden beneath a worn leather boot. A silver signet ring glinted on his right hand, catching the neon’s pulse. “Rory?” Silas said, his voice low, the words slipping out before he could mask them. “Silas,” Aurora replied, the name tasting like a long‑forgotten song. She set the delivery bag down with a soft thud, the strap slipping from her shoulder. The bar’s walls, a collage of faded maps and black‑and‑white photographs, seemed to close in as the two old friends faced each other. The hum of a distant jukebox blended with the occasional clink of glasses, a rhythm that tick‑tocked like a heart in a quiet room. “You look… different,” Silas said, eyes flicking to the crescent scar on her left wrist. “People change,” Aurora answered, a faint smile tugging at the corner of her mouth. “You still keep the same ring.” Silas chuckled, a dry sound that rattled the bottles. “This thing’s been on my hand longer than most of my jobs.” Aurora’s gaze drifted to the back of the bar, where a bookshelf leaned against the wall, its spines whispering secrets. “You still have that hidden room?” she asked, voice barely above a whisper. Silas’s eyes narrowed, a flicker of something—perhaps caution or nostalgia—crossing his face. “Only for those who know the right words.” A sudden thud echoed from the kitchen, the sound of a tray slipping from a hand. A young barista, cheeks flushed, hurried past, his footsteps muffled by the worn carpet. “Remember the night we ran the marathon through the city?” Silas asked, his tone shifting to a nostalgic cadence. Aurora laughed, a short, sharp sound. “You tried to outrun the police, and I… I was the one who stopped you.” Silas’s smile faded, the memory pulling at something deep inside. “You saved me from a bullet that never left the barrel.” “Or from a decision I wasn’t ready to make,” Aurora replied, her eyes narrowing. “You left the agency, didn’t you? The one in Prague?” Silas’s hand tightened around the tap, the metal cool against his palm. “A botched operation. A knee that never healed. A life that had to be rewritten.” Aurora’s fingers brushed the scar on her wrist, the crescent shape catching the neon light. “I left law for a reason too. I… I couldn’t stay in a world that kept stealing my voice.” Silas leaned forward, the bar’s wood creaking under his weight. “You always had a mind for puzzles, Rory. You solved the case of the missing ledger before anyone else even saw the numbers.” Aurora’s smile hardened, the edge of regret sharpening. “And you always had a way of making the shadows feel safe.” A sudden crash erupted from the back room, a shelf toppling over, books scattering like fallen leaves. The neon sign flickered, casting a strobe of green across the bar. “Someone’s here,” Silas muttered, his voice low, a hand moving to the hidden latch behind the bookshelf. Aurora’s eyes widened, a flash of adrenaline sparking. “What are you doing?” Silas glanced at her, the silver ring catching the light. “Closing a door that’s been open too long.” The bookshelf swung inward, revealing a narrow passage lined with old maps and a single, dim bulb. A faint scent of mildew rose, mingling with the bar’s stale perfume. “Let’s go,” Aurora said, stepping toward the opening, her coat rustling. Silas hesitated, his limp shifting as he placed a foot on the threshold. “You sure you want to see what’s inside?” “After all these years, I’m sure I’m ready,” Aurora replied, her voice steady. The hidden room was cramped, walls lined with filing cabinets that bore the weight of forgotten dossiers. A single desk sat in the centre, a stack of photographs beside a battered notebook. Silas pulled a drawer open, revealing a folded piece of paper, its edges frayed. “Remember this?” he asked, holding up a photograph of a younger version of himself, a badge glinting on his chest. Aurora’s breath caught, the image a mirror of a past she’d tried to forget. “That was the night the world changed for us.” Silas’s fingers brushed the paper, the ink smudged by time. “We made choices that night. Some we regret, some we keep hidden.” A sudden shout echoed from the bar’s main floor, a voice strained, urgent. “Hey! Who’s in there?” Silas’s eyes darted back, the tension in his shoulders tightening. “We need to go,” he said, voice low. Aurora hesitated, the weight of the photograph pressing against her palm. “What about the secrets we left behind?” Silas placed the silver ring on the desk, the metal clinking against the wood. “Some doors stay closed.” The bar’s neon sign flickered again, the green light pulsing like a warning. A figure emerged from the doorway, a tall silhouette with a coat pulled tight, a cigarette glowing between his fingers. “Silas,” the newcomer said, voice gravelly, “you’ve got a problem.” Silas’s hand moved to the hidden latch, his fingers trembling. “Not now,” he whispered, eyes locked on Aurora. Aurora’s heart hammered, the sound of her own breath louder than the jukebox’s music. “What do we do?” she asked, her voice barely audible. Silas stared at the newcomer, the silver ring catching the light once more. “We run.” The figure stepped forward, a glint of steel flashing in his hand. “You can’t hide forever.” A sudden crash erupted from the bar’s back, a glass shattering, the sound echoing through the hidden room. The neon sign sputtered, casting the room into a strobe of green and darkness. Aurora lunged toward the doorway, her coat flapping, the crescent scar on her wrist catching the fleeting light. Silas followed, his limp steadying as he pushed the hidden latch open, the secret room spilling into the main bar. The newcomer lunged, his hand reaching for the silver ring. Silas’s fingers clenched around the ring, his grip fierce. “Now!” Aurora shouted, her voice cutting through the chaos. A sudden, deafening crack split the air, a gunshot echoing off the walls, the neon sign flickering one last time before plunging the bar into darkness.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags16
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences36
tagDensity0.444
leniency0.889
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
95.44% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1097
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count1
highlights
0"barely above a whisper"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
13.40% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1097
totalAiIsms19
found
0
word"familiar"
count1
1
word"scanning"
count1
2
word"pulse"
count1
3
word"whisper"
count1
4
word"flicker"
count1
5
word"echoed"
count2
6
word"footsteps"
count1
7
word"weight"
count3
8
word"flickered"
count2
9
word"glinting"
count1
10
word"tension"
count1
11
word"glint"
count1
12
word"echoing"
count2
13
word"fleeting"
count1
highlights
0"familiar"
1"scanning"
2"pulse"
3"whisper"
4"flicker"
5"echoed"
6"footsteps"
7"weight"
8"flickered"
9"glinting"
10"tension"
11"glint"
12"echoing"
13"fleeting"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count2
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
1"eyes widened"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences65
matches(empty)
98.90% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences65
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences85
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen26
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1095
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
30.95% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions37
wordCount840
uniqueNames2
maxNameDensity2.38
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Aurora17
Silas20
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Silas"
places(empty)
globalScore0.31
windowScore0.5
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences61
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1095
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences85
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs48
mean22.81
std12.89
cv0.565
sampleLengths
08
189
215
326
447
515
620
721
833
920
1030
1119
1221
1321
1424
1527
1634
1733
1820
1929
2017
2112
2218
2329
2411
2521
2613
2746
2820
2923
3022
3117
3218
3318
3418
3533
3610
3718
3824
3915
4016
4132
4218
4320
4410
459
469
4726
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences65
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs143
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences85
ratio0.012
matches
0"Silas’s eyes narrowed, a flicker of something—perhaps caution or nostalgia—crossing his face."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount842
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount13
adverbRatio0.015439429928741092
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.004750593824228029
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences85
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
92.29% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences85
mean12.88
std4.9
cv0.381
sampleLengths
08
121
221
318
416
513
615
710
816
923
1024
1115
1214
136
149
1512
1620
1713
1812
198
2016
2114
2219
236
2415
2510
2611
2714
2810
2912
3015
3115
3219
3310
3423
358
3612
3717
3812
3917
408
414
4210
438
4417
4512
4611
4713
488
4913
47.45% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.3058823529411765
totalSentences85
uniqueOpeners26
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences65
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount8
totalSentences65
matches
0"She paused, eyes scanning the"
1"His left leg bore a"
2"She set the delivery bag"
3"she asked, voice barely above"
4"he asked, holding up a"
5"he said, voice low"
6"he whispered, eyes locked on"
7"she asked, her voice barely"
ratio0.123
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount65
totalSentences65
matches
0"A glass cracked, spilling amber"
1"Aurora slipped through the neon‑green"
2"She paused, eyes scanning the"
3"Silas stood behind the bar,"
4"His left leg bore a"
5"A silver signet ring glinted"
6"Silas said, his voice low,"
7"Aurora replied, the name tasting"
8"She set the delivery bag"
9"The bar’s walls, a collage"
10"The hum of a distant"
11"Silas said, eyes flicking to"
12"Aurora answered, a faint smile"
13"Silas chuckled, a dry sound"
14"Aurora’s gaze drifted to the"
15"she asked, voice barely above"
16"Silas’s eyes narrowed, a flicker"
17"A sudden thud echoed from"
18"A young barista, cheeks flushed,"
19"Silas asked, his tone shifting"
ratio1
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences65
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences43
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"The hum of a distant jukebox blended with the occasional clink of glasses, a rhythm that tick‑tocked like a heart in a quiet room."
1"Aurora lunged toward the doorway, her coat flapping, the crescent scar on her wrist catching the fleeting light."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount11
matches
0"Silas said, eyes flicking to the crescent scar on her left wrist"
1"Aurora answered, a faint smile tugging at the corner of her mouth"
2"she asked, voice barely above a whisper"
3"Silas asked, his tone shifting to a nostalgic cadence"
4"Aurora replied, her eyes narrowing"
5"Aurora replied, her voice steady"
6"he said, voice low"
7"the newcomer said, voice gravelly,"
8"he whispered, eyes locked on Aurora"
9"she asked, her voice barely audible"
10"Aurora shouted, her voice cutting through the chaos"
66.67% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags16
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"Silas muttered (mutter)"
1"he whispered (whisper)"
2"Aurora shouted (shout)"
dialogueSentences36
tagDensity0.444
leniency0.889
rawRatio0.188
effectiveRatio0.167
77.0591%