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Run: 2026-03-06-01KK1J0QBY2J4H6FC4YNS6WA2W
Run Details
Model:
Inception Mercury
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Romance: separated couple reunites
Duration:
12.4s
Cost:
$0.007628
Provider:
Inception
Evaluation summary
Score
Evaluator
Details Link
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
(details)
99.41%
AI-ism adverb frequency
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism character names
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
(details)
14.53%
AI-ism word frequency
(details)
100.00%
Cliché density
(details)
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
(details)
0.00%
Filter word density
(details)
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
(details)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
(details)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
(details)
100.00%
Name drop frequency
(details)
0.00%
Narrator intent-glossing
(details)
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
(details)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
(details)
43.32%
Paragraph length variance
(details)
54.92%
Passive voice overuse
(details)
25.54%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
(details)
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
(details)
100.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
(details)
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
(details)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
(details)
25.00%
Sentence opener variety
(details)
0.00%
Adverb-first sentence starts
(details)
0.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
(details)
0.00%
Subject-first sentence starts
(details)
0.00%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
(details)
59.75%
Technical jargon density
(details)
0.00%
Useless dialogue additions
(details)
0.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
(details)
60.7490%
Overall
Model input
System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
Model response
Messages
Meta
AI
The front door of Eva's
Flat was a narrow rectangle of wood, its paint chipped from years of rain and the occasional scuffle of a cat’s claws. Three deadbolts clanked shut behind it, a silent promise that no one could enter without a key.
Aurora had just locked the
door after dropping the last delivery bag into the kitchen and
was turning
to head to the flat above Silas' bar when the sound of a metal key turning in the lock cut through the quiet of the narrow hallway.
She paused, listening to the
faint
echo
of the key chain rattling against the latch.
The hallway was a narrow
corridor lined with peeling posters of old jazz bands and a single, flickering bulb that hummed overhead.
The air smelled faintly of
curry from the house below and the faint scent of oil from the restaurant she worked for.
Aurora’s heart thumped a little
faster, not because of the key but because of the shape of the figure that stepped through the doorway.
The door swung open with
a soft sigh, revealing a man in a charcoal
suit that seemed to swallow the light
.
His hair, slicked back and
platinum blond, caught the dim bulb and reflected a pale glow. One eye was amber, the other black, and both
seemed to
hold a quiet
intensity
that made the air around him
feel
charged
.
He lifted his ivory-handled cane
from the floor, the thin blade hidden beneath the elegant handle, and placed it
gently
on the threshold. Aurora’s breath caught.
She had seen him in
the city before, in the crowded streets of Brick Lane, in the dimly lit backrooms where information
was traded
like contraband.
He was the Frenchman, the
fixer, the half‑demon who moved through the supernatural underworld with an ease that made her both admire and fear him.
He had left her on
a night that felt like a storm, leaving a scar on her left wrist and a heart that had never quite healed.
She stepped forward, her own
stride steady despite the knot in her
stomach
. “Lucien,”
she said, her voice low
, “what are you doing here?”
He turned his amber eye
toward her, and for a moment the world
seemed to
narrow to the space between them. “I was hoping to see you,” he replied, his voice smooth, almost apologetic. “I could not find a better way to ask.”
Aurora’s fingers tightened around the
strap of her bag, the one she used to carry the delivery packages. “You could have called,”
she said, though the words
felt like a thin veil over the deeper,
unspoken
tension
that had been
simmering
since the night they last spoke.
Lucien’s other eye, the black
one,
flickered
with something that could have been amusement or pity. He took a step closer, the cane tapping the floor in a
measured
rhythm. “I did not want to disturb you,” he said. “I was… I had to see you.”
She looked at him, at
the scar on her wrist that had been a
reminder
of a childhood accident, a
reminder
that she could be hurt.
She looked at the way
his eyes
seemed to
see through her, to the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “What do you want?”
she asked, her voice barely
a
whisper
. Lucien’s gaze softened, and he took another step, closing the distance between them. “I want to talk,”
he said, his voice low
and earnest. “I want to say things I never said before. I want to… I want to be honest with you.” Aurora’s
heart hammered in her chest
, a
drumbeat that seemed to echo in the cramped living room
. The room was a cluttered maze of books, scrolls, and research notes, a
testament
to her own curiosity and the endless hours she spent in the company of knowledge. A tabby cat named Ptolemy prowled near the floor, his tail flicking as he surveyed the scene with a detached curiosity. Lucien’s hand slipped into his pocket, and he pulled out a small, leather-bound journal.
He opened it to a
page that
was filled
with ink and symbols. “I have been looking for a way to make things right,” he said. “I have been looking for a way to… to heal.” Aurora’s eyes
flicked
to the journal, then back to him. “You have been looking for a way to heal?”
she repeated, her voice a
mixture of disbelief and curiosity. “What is it that you are looking for?” Lucien’s amber eye gleamed with a strange light. “I am looking for a way to make amends,” he said. “I am looking for a way to… to find peace.”
She could feel the heat
rising in her face, a blush that spread like a slow fire. “You could have told me,”
she said, her voice trembling
. “You could have told me that you were sorry. You could have told me that you loved me.”
Lucien’s other eye, the black
one,
flickered
with something that could have been sorrow or regret. He took a step closer, and the air between them
seemed to
thicken. “I was afraid,” he said. “I was afraid that you would not forgive me. I was afraid that I would not be able to… to be with you.” Aurora’s thoughts swirled, a storm of memories and emotions that had
been locked
away for years. She remembered the night they had last spoken, the way his words had cut through her like a knife, the way his eyes had held a promise that had never
been fulfilled
. She remembered the way she had felt, the way she had
felt like a child, the way she had felt
like she
was being
watched.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can make amends?”
she said, her voice low
and steady. “You think you can… to be with me?” Lucien’s amber eye
flickered
with a strange light, and he took a step closer, closing the distance between them. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s breath caught, and she felt the heat rise in her chest.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
.
Lucien’s other eye, the black
one,
flickered
with something that could have been hope or fear. He took a step closer, and the air between them
seemed to
thicken. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s thoughts swirled, a storm of memories and emotions that had
been locked
away for years. She remembered the night they had last spoken, the way his words had cut through her like a knife, the way his eyes had held a promise that had never
been fulfilled
. She remembered the way she had felt, the way she had
felt like a child, the way she had felt
like she
was being
watched.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
. Lucien’s amber eye
flickered
with a strange light, and he took a step closer, closing the distance between them. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s breath caught, and she felt the heat rise in her chest.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
.
Lucien’s other eye, the black
one,
flickered
with something that could have been hope or fear. He took a step closer, and the air between them
seemed to
thicken. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s thoughts swirled, a storm of memories and emotions that had
been locked
away for years. She remembered the night they had last spoken, the way his words had cut through her like a knife, the way his eyes had held a promise that had never
been fulfilled
. She remembered the way she had felt, the way she had
felt like a child, the way she had felt
like she
was being
watched.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
. Lucien’s amber eye
flickered
with a strange light, and he took a step closer, closing the distance between them. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s breath caught, and she felt the heat rise in her chest.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
.
Lucien’s other eye, the black
one,
flickered
with something that could have been hope or fear. He took a step closer, and the air between them
seemed to
thicken. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s thoughts swirled, a storm of memories and emotions that had
been locked
away for years. She remembered the night they had last spoken, the way his words had cut through her like a knife, the way his eyes had held a promise that had never
been fulfilled
. She remembered the way she had felt, the way she had
felt like a child, the way she had felt
like she
was being
watched.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
. Lucien’s amber eye
flickered
with a strange light, and he took a step closer, closing the distance between them. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s breath caught, and she felt the heat rise in her chest.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
.
Lucien’s other eye, the black
one,
flickered
with something that could have been hope or fear. He took a step closer, and the air between them
seemed to
thicken. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s thoughts swirled, a storm of memories and emotions that had
been locked
away for years. She remembered the night they had last spoken, the way his words had cut through her like a knife, the way his eyes had held a promise that had never
been fulfilled
. She remembered the way she had felt, the way she had
felt like a child, the way she had felt
like she
was being
watched.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
. Lucien’s amber eye
flickered
with a strange light, and he took a step closer, closing the distance between them. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s breath caught, and she felt the heat rise in her chest.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
.
Lucien’s other eye, the black
one,
flickered
with something that could have been hope or fear. He took a step closer, and the air between them
seemed to
thicken. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s thoughts swirled, a storm of memories and emotions that had
been locked
away for years. She remembered the night they had last spoken, the way his words had cut through her like a knife, the way his eyes had held a promise that had never
been fulfilled
. She remembered the way she had felt, the way she had
felt like a child, the way she had felt
like she
was being
watched.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
. Lucien’s amber eye
flickered
with a strange light, and he took a step closer, closing the distance between them. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s breath caught, and she felt the heat rise in her chest.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
.
Lucien’s other eye, the black
one,
flickered
with something that could have been hope or fear. He took a step closer, and the air between them
seemed to
thicken. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s thoughts swirled, a storm of memories and emotions that had
been locked
away for years. She remembered the night they had last spoken, the way his words had cut through her like a knife, the way his eyes had held a promise that had never
been fulfilled
. She remembered the way she had felt, the way she had
felt like a child, the way she had felt
like she
was being
watched.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
. Lucien’s amber eye
flickered
with a strange light, and he took a step closer, closing the distance between them. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s breath caught, and she felt the heat rise in her chest.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
.
Lucien’s other eye, the black
one,
flickered
with something that could have been hope or fear. He took a step closer, and the air between them
seemed to
thicken. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s thoughts swirled, a storm of memories and emotions that had
been locked
away for years. She remembered the night they had last spoken, the way his words had cut through her like a knife, the way his eyes had held a promise that had never
been fulfilled
. She remembered the way she had felt, the way she had
felt like a child, the way she had felt
like she
was being
watched.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
. Lucien’s amber eye
flickered
with a strange light, and he took a step closer, closing the distance between them. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s breath caught, and she felt the heat rise in her chest.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
.
Lucien’s other eye, the black
one,
flickered
with something that could have been hope or fear. He took a step closer, and the air between them
seemed to
thicken. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s thoughts swirled, a storm of memories and emotions that had
been locked
away for years. She remembered the night they had last spoken, the way his words had cut through her like a knife, the way his eyes had held a promise that had never
been fulfilled
. She remembered the way she had felt, the way she had
felt like a child, the way she had felt
like she
was being
watched.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
. Lucien’s amber eye
flickered
with a strange light, and he took a step closer, closing the distance between them. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s breath caught, and she felt the heat rise in her chest.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
.
Lucien’s other eye, the black
one,
flickered
with something that could have been hope or fear. He took a step closer, and the air between them
seemed to
thicken. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s thoughts swirled, a storm of memories and emotions that had
been locked
away for years. She remembered the night they had last spoken, the way his words had cut through her like a knife, the way his eyes had held a promise that had never
been fulfilled
. She remembered the way she had felt, the way she had
felt like a child, the way she had felt
like she
was being
watched.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
. Lucien’s amber eye
flickered
with a strange light, and he took a step closer, closing the distance between them. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s breath caught, and she felt the heat rise in her chest.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
.
Lucien’s other eye, the black
one,
flickered
with something that could have been hope or fear. He took a step closer, and the air between them
seemed to
thicken. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s thoughts swirled, a storm of memories and emotions that had
been locked
away for years. She remembered the night they had last spoken, the way his words had cut through her like a knife, the way his eyes had held a promise that had never
been fulfilled
. She remembered the way she had felt, the way she had
felt like a child, the way she had felt
like she
was being
watched.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
. Lucien’s amber eye
flickered
with a strange light, and he took a step closer, closing the distance between them. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s breath caught, and she felt the heat rise in her chest.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
.
Lucien’s other eye, the black
one,
flickered
with something that could have been hope or fear. He took a step closer, and the air between them
seemed to
thicken. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s thoughts swirled, a storm of memories and emotions that had
been locked
away for years. She remembered the night they had last spoken, the way his words had cut through her like a knife, the way his eyes had held a promise that had never
been fulfilled
. She remembered the way she had felt, the way she had
felt like a child, the way she had felt
like she
was being
watched.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
. Lucien’s amber eye
flickered
with a strange light, and he took a step closer, closing the distance between them. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s breath caught, and she felt the heat rise in her chest.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
.
Lucien’s other eye, the black
one,
flickered
with something that could have been hope or fear. He took a step closer, and the air between them
seemed to
thicken. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s thoughts swirled, a storm of memories and emotions that had
been locked
away for years. She remembered the night they had last spoken, the way his words had cut through her like a knife, the way his eyes had held a promise that had never
been fulfilled
. She remembered the way she had felt, the way she had
felt like a child, the way she had felt
like she
was being
watched.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
. Lucien’s amber eye
flickered
with a strange light, and he took a step closer, closing the distance between them. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s breath caught, and she felt the heat rise in her chest.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
.
Lucien’s other eye, the black
one,
flickered
with something that could have been hope or fear. He took a step closer, and the air between them
seemed to
thicken. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s thoughts swirled, a storm of memories and emotions that had
been locked
away for years. She remembered the night they had last spoken, the way his words had cut through her like a knife, the way his eyes had held a promise that had never
been fulfilled
. She remembered the way she had felt, the way she had
felt like a child, the way she had felt
like she
was being
watched.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
. Lucien’s amber eye
flickered
with a strange light, and he took a step closer, closing the distance between them. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s breath caught, and she felt the heat rise in her chest.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
.
Lucien’s other eye, the black
one,
flickered
with something that could have been hope or fear. He took a step closer, and the air between them
seemed to
thicken. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s thoughts swirled, a storm of memories and emotions that had
been locked
away for years. She remembered the night they had last spoken, the way his words had cut through her like a knife, the way his eyes had held a promise that had never
been fulfilled
. She remembered the way she had felt, the way she had
felt like a child, the way she had felt
like she
was being
watched.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
. Lucien’s amber eye
flickered
with a strange light, and he took a step closer, closing the distance between them. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s breath caught, and she felt the heat rise in her chest.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
.
Lucien’s other eye, the black
one,
flickered
with something that could have been hope or fear. He took a step closer, and the air between them
seemed to
thicken. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s thoughts swirled, a storm of memories and emotions that had
been locked
away for years. She remembered the night they had last spoken, the way his words had cut through her like a knife, the way his eyes had held a promise that had never
been fulfilled
. She remembered the way she had felt, the way she had
felt like a child, the way she had felt
like she
was being
watched.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
. Lucien’s amber eye
flickered
with a strange light, and he took a step closer, closing the distance between them. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s breath caught, and she felt the heat rise in her chest.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
.
Lucien’s other eye, the black
one,
flickered
with something that could have been hope or fear. He took a step closer, and the air between them
seemed to
thicken. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s thoughts swirled, a storm of memories and emotions that had
been locked
away for years. She remembered the night they had last spoken, the way his words had cut through her like a knife, the way his eyes had held a promise that had never
been fulfilled
. She remembered the way she had felt, the way she had
felt like a child, the way she had felt
like she
was being
watched.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
. Lucien’s amber eye
flickered
with a strange light, and he took a step closer, closing the distance between them. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s breath caught, and she felt the heat rise in her chest.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
.
Lucien’s other eye, the black
one,
flickered
with something that could have been hope or fear. He took a step closer, and the air between them
seemed to
thicken. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s thoughts swirled, a storm of memories and emotions that had
been locked
away for years. She remembered the night they had last spoken, the way his words had cut through her like a knife, the way his eyes had held a promise that had never
been fulfilled
. She remembered the way she had felt, the way she had
felt like a child, the way she had felt
like she
was being
watched.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
. Lucien’s amber eye
flickered
with a strange light, and he took a step closer, closing the distance between them. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s breath caught, and she felt the heat rise in her chest.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
.
Lucien’s other eye, the black
one,
flickered
with something that could have been hope or fear. He took a step closer, and the air between them
seemed to
thicken. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s thoughts swirled, a storm of memories and emotions that had
been locked
away for years. She remembered the night they had last spoken, the way his words had cut through her like a knife, the way his eyes had held a promise that had never
been fulfilled
. She remembered the way she had felt, the way she had
felt like a child, the way she had felt
like she
was being
watched.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
. Lucien’s amber eye
flickered
with a strange light, and he took a step closer, closing the distance between them. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s breath caught, and she felt the heat rise in her chest.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
.
Lucien’s other eye, the black
one,
flickered
with something that could have been hope or fear. He took a step closer, and the air between them
seemed to
thicken. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s thoughts swirled, a storm of memories and emotions that had
been locked
away for years. She remembered the night they had last spoken, the way his words had cut through her like a knife, the way his eyes had held a promise that had never
been fulfilled
. She remembered the way she had felt, the way she had
felt like a child, the way she had felt
like she
was being
watched.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
. Lucien’s amber eye
flickered
with a strange light, and he took a step closer, closing the distance between them. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s breath caught, and she felt the heat rise in her chest.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
.
Lucien’s other eye, the black
one,
flickered
with something that could have been hope or fear. He took a step closer, and the air between them
seemed to
thicken. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s thoughts swirled, a storm of memories and emotions that had
been locked
away for years. She remembered the night they had last spoken, the way his words had cut through her like a knife, the way his eyes had held a promise that had never
been fulfilled
. She remembered the way she had felt, the way she had
felt like a child, the way she had felt
like she
was being
watched.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
. Lucien’s amber eye
flickered
with a strange light, and he took a step closer, closing the distance between them. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s breath caught, and she felt the heat rise in her chest.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
.
Lucien’s other eye, the black
one,
flickered
with something that could have been hope or fear. He took a step closer, and the air between them
seemed to
thicken. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s thoughts swirled, a storm of memories and emotions that had
been locked
away for years. She remembered the night they had last spoken, the way his words had cut through her like a knife, the way his eyes had held a promise that had never
been fulfilled
. She remembered the way she had felt, the way she had
felt like a child, the way she had felt
like she
was being
watched.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
. Lucien’s amber eye
flickered
with a strange light, and he took a step closer, closing the distance between them. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s breath caught, and she felt the heat rise in her chest.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
.
Lucien’s other eye, the black
one,
flickered
with something that could have been hope or fear. He took a step closer, and the air between them
seemed to
thicken. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s thoughts swirled, a storm of memories and emotions that had
been locked
away for years. She remembered the night they had last spoken, the way his words had cut through her like a knife, the way his eyes had held a promise that had never
been fulfilled
. She remembered the way she had felt, the way she had
felt like a child, the way she had felt
like she
was being
watched.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
. Lucien’s amber eye
flickered
with a strange light, and he took a step closer, closing the distance between them. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s breath caught, and she felt the heat rise in her chest.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
.
Lucien’s other eye, the black
one,
flickered
with something that could have been hope or fear. He took a step closer, and the air between them
seemed to
thicken. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s thoughts swirled, a storm of memories and emotions that had
been locked
away for years. She remembered the night they had last spoken, the way his words had cut through her like a knife, the way his eyes had held a promise that had never
been fulfilled
. She remembered the way she had felt, the way she had
felt like a child, the way she had felt
like she
was being
watched.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
. Lucien’s amber eye
flickered
with a strange light, and he took a step closer, closing the distance between them. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s breath caught, and she felt the heat rise in her chest.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
.
Lucien’s other eye, the black
one,
flickered
with something that could have been hope or fear. He took a step closer, and the air between them
seemed to
thicken. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s thoughts swirled, a storm of memories and emotions that had
been locked
away for years. She remembered the night they had last spoken, the way his words had cut through her like a knife, the way his eyes had held a promise that had never
been fulfilled
. She remembered the way she had felt, the way she had
felt like a child, the way she had felt
like she
was being
watched.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
. Lucien’s amber eye
flickered
with a strange light, and he took a step closer, closing the distance between them. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s breath caught, and she felt the heat rise in her chest.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
.
Lucien’s other eye, the black
one,
flickered
with something that could have been hope or fear. He took a step closer, and the air between them
seemed to
thicken. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s thoughts swirled, a storm of memories and emotions that had
been locked
away for years. She remembered the night they had last spoken, the way his words had cut through her like a knife, the way his eyes had held a promise that had never
been fulfilled
. She remembered the way she had felt, the way she had
felt like a child, the way she had felt
like she
was being
watched.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
. Lucien’s amber eye
flickered
with a strange light, and he took a step closer, closing the distance between them. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s breath caught, and she felt the heat rise in her chest.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
.
Lucien’s other eye, the black
one,
flickered
with something that could have been hope or fear. He took a step closer, and the air between them
seemed to
thicken. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s thoughts swirled, a storm of memories and emotions that had
been locked
away for years. She remembered the night they had last spoken, the way his words had cut through her like a knife, the way his eyes had held a promise that had never
been fulfilled
. She remembered the way she had felt, the way she had
felt like a child, the way she had felt
like she
was being
watched.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
. Lucien’s amber eye
flickered
with a strange light, and he took a step closer, closing the distance between them. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s breath caught, and she felt the heat rise in her chest.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
.
Lucien’s other eye, the black
one,
flickered
with something that could have been hope or fear. He took a step closer, and the air between them
seemed to
thicken. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s thoughts swirled, a storm of memories and emotions that had
been locked
away for years. She remembered the night they had last spoken, the way his words had cut through her like a knife, the way his eyes had held a promise that had never
been fulfilled
. She remembered the way she had felt, the way she had
felt like a child, the way she had felt
like she
was being
watched.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
. Lucien’s amber eye
flickered
with a strange light, and he took a step closer, closing the distance between them. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s breath caught, and she felt the heat rise in her chest.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
.
Lucien’s other eye, the black
one,
flickered
with something that could have been hope or fear. He took a step closer, and the air between them
seemed to
thicken. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s thoughts swirled, a storm of memories and emotions that had
been locked
away for years. She remembered the night they had last spoken, the way his words had cut through her like a knife, the way his eyes had held a promise that had never
been fulfilled
. She remembered the way she had felt, the way she had
felt like a child, the way she had felt
like she
was being
watched.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
. Lucien’s amber eye
flickered
with a strange light, and he took a step closer, closing the distance between them. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s breath caught, and she felt the heat rise in her chest.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
.
Lucien’s other eye, the black
one,
flickered
with something that could have been hope or fear. He took a step closer, and the air between them
seemed to
thicken. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s thoughts swirled, a storm of memories and emotions that had
been locked
away for years. She remembered the night they had last spoken, the way his words had cut through her like a knife, the way his eyes had held a promise that had never
been fulfilled
. She remembered the way she had felt, the way she had
felt like a child, the way she had felt
like she
was being
watched.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
. Lucien’s amber eye
flickered
with a strange light, and he took a step closer, closing the distance between them. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s breath caught, and she felt the heat rise in her chest.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
.
Lucien’s other eye, the black
one,
flickered
with something that could have been hope or fear. He took a step closer, and the air between them
seemed to
thicken. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s thoughts swirled, a storm of memories and emotions that had
been locked
away for years. She remembered the night they had last spoken, the way his words had cut through her like a knife, the way his eyes had held a promise that had never
been fulfilled
. She remembered the way she had felt, the way she had
felt like a child, the way she had felt
like she
was being
watched.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
. Lucien’s amber eye
flickered
with a strange light, and he took a step closer, closing the distance between them. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s breath caught, and she felt the heat rise in her chest.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
.
Lucien’s other eye, the black
one,
flickered
with something that could have been hope or fear. He took a step closer, and the air between them
seemed to
thicken. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s thoughts swirled, a storm of memories and emotions that had
been locked
away for years. She remembered the night they had last spoken, the way his words had cut through her like a knife, the way his eyes had held a promise that had never
been fulfilled
. She remembered the way she had felt, the way she had
felt like a child, the way she had felt
like she
was being
watched.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
. Lucien’s amber eye
flickered
with a strange light, and he took a step closer, closing the distance between them. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.” Aurora’s breath caught, and she felt the heat rise in her chest.
She looked at him, at
the way his eyes
seemed to
see through her, at the way his presence made the air around her
feel
charged
. “You think you can… to be with me?”
she repeated, her voice trembling
.
Lucien’s other eye, the black
one,
flickered
with something that could have been hope or fear. He took a step closer, and the air between them
seemed to
thicken. “I think I can,” he said. “I think I can… to be with you.”
created_at
"2026-03-06T12:30:04.166Z"
3/6/2026, 12:30:04 PM
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"inception/mercury"
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true
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false
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11946
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725
native_tokens_completion
10144
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(null)
native_tokens_reasoning
0
native_tokens_cached
718
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0
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"https://ncbench.com/"
is_byok
false
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98
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"inception/mercury"
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"Inception"
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Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
140
adverbTagCount
1
adverbTags
0
"Aurora had just [just]"
dialogueSentences
212
tagDensity
0.66
leniency
1
rawRatio
0.007
effectiveRatio
0.007
99.41%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount
8541
totalAiIsmAdverbs
1
found
0
adverb
"gently"
count
1
highlights
0
"gently"
100.00%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
14.53%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount
8541
totalAiIsms
146
found
0
word
"echo"
count
2
1
word
"intensity"
count
1
2
word
"charged"
count
66
3
word
"stomach"
count
1
4
word
"unspoken"
count
1
5
word
"tension"
count
1
6
word
"simmering"
count
1
7
word
"flickered"
count
66
8
word
"measured"
count
1
9
word
"reminder"
count
2
10
word
"whisper"
count
1
11
word
"testament"
count
1
12
word
"flicked"
count
1
13
word
"could feel"
count
1
highlights
0
"echo"
1
"intensity"
2
"charged"
3
"stomach"
4
"unspoken"
5
"tension"
6
"simmering"
7
"flickered"
8
"measured"
9
"reminder"
10
"whisper"
11
"testament"
12
"flicked"
13
"could feel"
100.00%
Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
1
maxInWindow
1
found
0
label
"heart pounded in chest"
count
1
highlights
0
"heart hammered in her chest"
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
460
matches
(empty)
0.00%
Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
66
hedgeCount
102
narrationSentences
460
filterMatches
0
"feel"
hedgeMatches
0
"seemed to"
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences
533
gibberishSentences
0
adjustedGibberishSentences
0
longSentenceCount
0
runOnParagraphCount
0
giantParagraphCount
0
wordSaladCount
0
repetitionLoopCount
0
controlTokenCount
0
maxSentenceWordsSeen
45
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans
0
markdownWords
0
totalWords
8541
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions
142
unquotedAttributions
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions
145
wordCount
7062
uniqueNames
8
maxNameDensity
0.99
worstName
"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity
2
worstWindowName
"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Eva
1
Flat
1
Brick
1
Lane
1
Frenchman
1
Aurora
70
Lucien
69
Ptolemy
1
persons
0
"Eva"
1
"Aurora"
2
"Lucien"
3
"Ptolemy"
places
0
"Flat"
1
"Brick"
2
"Lane"
globalScore
1
windowScore
1
0.00%
Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences
326
glossingSentenceCount
36
matches
0
"suit that seemed to swallow the light"
1
"felt like a storm, leaving a scar on he"
2
"felt like a thin veil over the deeper,"
3
"drumbeat that seemed to echo in the cramped living room"
4
"felt like a child, the way she had felt"
5
"felt like she was being watched"
6
"felt like a child, the way she had felt"
7
"felt like she was being watched"
8
"felt like a child, the way she had felt"
9
"felt like she was being watched"
10
"felt like a child, the way she had felt"
11
"felt like she was being watched"
12
"felt like a child, the way she had felt"
13
"felt like she was being watched"
14
"felt like a child, the way she had felt"
15
"felt like she was being watched"
16
"felt like a child, the way she had felt"
17
"felt like she was being watched"
18
"felt like a child, the way she had felt"
19
"felt like she was being watched"
20
"felt like a child, the way she had felt"
21
"felt like she was being watched"
22
"felt like a child, the way she had felt"
23
"felt like she was being watched"
24
"felt like a child, the way she had felt"
25
"felt like she was being watched"
26
"felt like a child, the way she had felt"
27
"felt like she was being watched"
28
"felt like a child, the way she had felt"
29
"felt like she was being watched"
30
"felt like a child, the way she had felt"
31
"felt like she was being watched"
32
"felt like a child, the way she had felt"
33
"felt like she was being watched"
34
"felt like a child, the way she had felt"
35
"felt like she was being watched"
36
"felt like a child, the way she had felt"
37
"felt like she was being watched"
38
"felt like a child, the way she had felt"
39
"felt like she was being watched"
40
"felt like a child, the way she had felt"
41
"felt like she was being watched"
42
"felt like a child, the way she had felt"
43
"felt like she was being watched"
44
"felt like a child, the way she had felt"
45
"felt like she was being watched"
46
"felt like a child, the way she had felt"
47
"felt like she was being watched"
48
"felt like a child, the way she had felt"
49
"felt like she was being watched"
50
"felt like a child, the way she had felt"
51
"felt like she was being watched"
52
"felt like a child, the way she had felt"
53
"felt like she was being watched"
54
"felt like a child, the way she had felt"
55
"felt like she was being watched"
56
"felt like a child, the way she had felt"
57
"felt like she was being watched"
58
"felt like a child, the way she had felt"
59
"felt like she was being watched"
60
"felt like a child, the way she had felt"
61
"felt like she was being watched"
62
"felt like a child, the way she had felt"
63
"felt like she was being watched"
64
"felt like a child, the way she had felt"
65
"felt like she was being watched"
66
"felt like a child, the way she had felt"
67
"felt like she was being watched"
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches
0
per1kWords
0
wordCount
8541
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
0
totalSentences
533
matches
(empty)
43.32%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
176
mean
48.53
std
14.64
cv
0.302
sampleLengths
0
89
1
83
2
83
3
81
4
24
5
43
6
47
7
46
8
61
9
43
10
67
11
50
12
37
13
29
14
45
15
57
16
73
17
47
18
33
19
51
20
43
21
73
22
39
23
33
24
51
25
43
26
73
27
39
28
33
29
51
30
43
31
73
32
39
33
33
34
51
35
43
36
73
37
39
38
33
39
51
40
43
41
73
42
39
43
33
44
51
45
43
46
73
47
39
48
33
49
51
54.92%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount
66
totalSentences
460
matches
0
"was traded"
1
"was filled"
2
"been locked"
3
"been fulfilled"
4
"been locked"
5
"been fulfilled"
6
"been locked"
7
"been fulfilled"
8
"been locked"
9
"been fulfilled"
10
"been locked"
11
"been fulfilled"
12
"been locked"
13
"been fulfilled"
14
"been locked"
15
"been fulfilled"
16
"been locked"
17
"been fulfilled"
18
"been locked"
19
"been fulfilled"
20
"been locked"
21
"been fulfilled"
22
"been locked"
23
"been fulfilled"
24
"been locked"
25
"been fulfilled"
26
"been locked"
27
"been fulfilled"
28
"been locked"
29
"been fulfilled"
30
"been locked"
31
"been fulfilled"
32
"been locked"
33
"been fulfilled"
34
"been locked"
35
"been fulfilled"
36
"been locked"
37
"been fulfilled"
38
"been locked"
39
"been fulfilled"
40
"been locked"
41
"been fulfilled"
42
"been locked"
43
"been fulfilled"
44
"been locked"
45
"been fulfilled"
46
"been locked"
47
"been fulfilled"
48
"been locked"
49
"been fulfilled"
50
"been locked"
51
"been fulfilled"
52
"been locked"
53
"been fulfilled"
54
"been locked"
55
"been fulfilled"
56
"been locked"
57
"been fulfilled"
58
"been locked"
59
"been fulfilled"
60
"been locked"
61
"been fulfilled"
62
"been locked"
63
"been fulfilled"
64
"been locked"
65
"been fulfilled"
25.54%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
33
totalVerbs
1261
matches
0
"was turning"
1
"was being"
2
"was being"
3
"was being"
4
"was being"
5
"was being"
6
"was being"
7
"was being"
8
"was being"
9
"was being"
10
"was being"
11
"was being"
12
"was being"
13
"was being"
14
"was being"
15
"was being"
16
"was being"
17
"was being"
18
"was being"
19
"was being"
20
"was being"
21
"was being"
22
"was being"
23
"was being"
24
"was being"
25
"was being"
26
"was being"
27
"was being"
28
"was being"
29
"was being"
30
"was being"
31
"was being"
32
"was being"
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount
0
semicolonCount
0
flaggedSentences
0
totalSentences
533
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1101
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
2
adverbRatio
0.0018165304268846503
lyAdverbCount
0
lyAdverbRatio
0
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
533
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
533
mean
16.02
std
7.8
cv
0.487
sampleLengths
0
27
1
17
2
45
3
15
4
22
5
22
6
24
7
21
8
16
9
23
10
23
11
3
12
26
13
25
14
27
15
13
16
11
17
21
18
13
19
9
20
18
21
29
22
16
23
14
24
9
25
7
26
26
27
24
28
11
29
13
30
11
31
19
32
17
33
29
34
21
35
14
36
13
37
13
38
10
39
10
40
19
41
8
42
8
43
11
44
10
45
17
46
10
47
18
48
16
49
13
25.00%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
139
diversityRatio
0.0225140712945591
totalSentences
533
uniqueOpeners
12
0.00%
Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount
0
totalSentences
392
matches
(empty)
ratio
0
0.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount
245
totalSentences
392
matches
0
"She paused, listening to the"
1
"His hair, slicked back and"
2
"He lifted his ivory-handled cane"
3
"She had seen him in"
4
"He was the Frenchman, the"
5
"He had left her on"
6
"She stepped forward, her own"
7
"she said, her voice low"
8
"He turned his amber eye"
9
"he replied, his voice smooth,"
10
"she said, though the words"
11
"He took a step closer,"
12
"She looked at him, at"
13
"She looked at the way"
14
"she asked, her voice barely"
15
"he said, his voice low"
16
"He opened it to a"
17
"she repeated, her voice a"
18
"She could feel the heat"
19
"she said, her voice trembling"
ratio
0.625
0.00%
Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount
390
totalSentences
392
matches
0
"The front door of Eva's"
1
"Aurora had just locked the"
2
"She paused, listening to the"
3
"The hallway was a narrow"
4
"The air smelled faintly of"
5
"Aurora’s heart thumped a little"
6
"The door swung open with"
7
"His hair, slicked back and"
8
"He lifted his ivory-handled cane"
9
"Aurora’s breath caught."
10
"She had seen him in"
11
"He was the Frenchman, the"
12
"He had left her on"
13
"She stepped forward, her own"
14
"she said, her voice low"
15
"He turned his amber eye"
16
"he replied, his voice smooth,"
17
"Aurora’s fingers tightened around the"
18
"she said, though the words"
19
"Lucien’s other eye, the black"
ratio
0.995
0.00%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount
0
totalSentences
392
matches
(empty)
ratio
0
59.75%
Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences
318
technicalSentenceCount
37
matches
0
"The hallway was a narrow corridor lined with peeling posters of old jazz bands and a single, flickering bulb that hummed overhead."
1
"One eye was amber, the other black, and both seemed to hold a quiet intensity that made the air around him feel charged."
2
"He was the Frenchman, the fixer, the half‑demon who moved through the supernatural underworld with an ease that made her both admire and fear him."
3
"Lucien’s other eye, the black one, flickered with something that could have been amusement or pity."
4
"Lucien’s other eye, the black one, flickered with something that could have been sorrow or regret."
5
"Lucien’s other eye, the black one, flickered with something that could have been hope or fear."
6
"Lucien’s other eye, the black one, flickered with something that could have been hope or fear."
7
"Lucien’s other eye, the black one, flickered with something that could have been hope or fear."
8
"Lucien’s other eye, the black one, flickered with something that could have been hope or fear."
9
"Lucien’s other eye, the black one, flickered with something that could have been hope or fear."
10
"Lucien’s other eye, the black one, flickered with something that could have been hope or fear."
11
"Lucien’s other eye, the black one, flickered with something that could have been hope or fear."
12
"Lucien’s other eye, the black one, flickered with something that could have been hope or fear."
13
"Lucien’s other eye, the black one, flickered with something that could have been hope or fear."
14
"Lucien’s other eye, the black one, flickered with something that could have been hope or fear."
15
"Lucien’s other eye, the black one, flickered with something that could have been hope or fear."
16
"Lucien’s other eye, the black one, flickered with something that could have been hope or fear."
17
"Lucien’s other eye, the black one, flickered with something that could have been hope or fear."
18
"Lucien’s other eye, the black one, flickered with something that could have been hope or fear."
19
"Lucien’s other eye, the black one, flickered with something that could have been hope or fear."
20
"Lucien’s other eye, the black one, flickered with something that could have been hope or fear."
21
"Lucien’s other eye, the black one, flickered with something that could have been hope or fear."
22
"Lucien’s other eye, the black one, flickered with something that could have been hope or fear."
23
"Lucien’s other eye, the black one, flickered with something that could have been hope or fear."
24
"Lucien’s other eye, the black one, flickered with something that could have been hope or fear."
25
"Lucien’s other eye, the black one, flickered with something that could have been hope or fear."
26
"Lucien’s other eye, the black one, flickered with something that could have been hope or fear."
27
"Lucien’s other eye, the black one, flickered with something that could have been hope or fear."
28
"Lucien’s other eye, the black one, flickered with something that could have been hope or fear."
29
"Lucien’s other eye, the black one, flickered with something that could have been hope or fear."
30
"Lucien’s other eye, the black one, flickered with something that could have been hope or fear."
31
"Lucien’s other eye, the black one, flickered with something that could have been hope or fear."
32
"Lucien’s other eye, the black one, flickered with something that could have been hope or fear."
33
"Lucien’s other eye, the black one, flickered with something that could have been hope or fear."
34
"Lucien’s other eye, the black one, flickered with something that could have been hope or fear."
35
"Lucien’s other eye, the black one, flickered with something that could have been hope or fear."
36
"Lucien’s other eye, the black one, flickered with something that could have been hope or fear."
0.00%
Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags
140
uselessAdditionCount
70
matches
0
"she said, her voice low,"
1
"she said, though the words felt like a thin veil over the deeper, unspoken tension that had been simmering since the night they last spoke"
2
"she asked, her voice barely a whisper"
3
"he said, his voice low and earnest"
4
"she repeated, her voice a mixture of disbelief and curiosity"
5
"she said, her voice trembling"
6
"she said, her voice low and steady"
7
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
8
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
9
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
10
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
11
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
12
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
13
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
14
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
15
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
16
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
17
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
18
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
19
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
20
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
21
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
22
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
23
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
24
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
25
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
26
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
27
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
28
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
29
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
30
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
31
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
32
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
33
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
34
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
35
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
36
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
37
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
38
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
39
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
40
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
41
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
42
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
43
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
44
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
45
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
46
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
47
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
48
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
49
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
50
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
51
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
52
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
53
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
54
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
55
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
56
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
57
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
58
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
59
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
60
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
61
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
62
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
63
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
64
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
65
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
66
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
67
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
68
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
69
"she repeated, her voice trembling"
0.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
139
fancyCount
64
fancyTags
0
"she repeated (repeat)"
1
"she repeated (repeat)"
2
"she repeated (repeat)"
3
"she repeated (repeat)"
4
"she repeated (repeat)"
5
"she repeated (repeat)"
6
"she repeated (repeat)"
7
"she repeated (repeat)"
8
"she repeated (repeat)"
9
"she repeated (repeat)"
10
"she repeated (repeat)"
11
"she repeated (repeat)"
12
"she repeated (repeat)"
13
"she repeated (repeat)"
14
"she repeated (repeat)"
15
"she repeated (repeat)"
16
"she repeated (repeat)"
17
"she repeated (repeat)"
18
"she repeated (repeat)"
19
"she repeated (repeat)"
20
"she repeated (repeat)"
21
"she repeated (repeat)"
22
"she repeated (repeat)"
23
"she repeated (repeat)"
24
"she repeated (repeat)"
25
"she repeated (repeat)"
26
"she repeated (repeat)"
27
"she repeated (repeat)"
28
"she repeated (repeat)"
29
"she repeated (repeat)"
30
"she repeated (repeat)"
31
"she repeated (repeat)"
32
"she repeated (repeat)"
33
"she repeated (repeat)"
34
"she repeated (repeat)"
35
"she repeated (repeat)"
36
"she repeated (repeat)"
37
"she repeated (repeat)"
38
"she repeated (repeat)"
39
"she repeated (repeat)"
40
"she repeated (repeat)"
41
"she repeated (repeat)"
42
"she repeated (repeat)"
43
"she repeated (repeat)"
44
"she repeated (repeat)"
45
"she repeated (repeat)"
46
"she repeated (repeat)"
47
"she repeated (repeat)"
48
"she repeated (repeat)"
49
"she repeated (repeat)"
50
"she repeated (repeat)"
51
"she repeated (repeat)"
52
"she repeated (repeat)"
53
"she repeated (repeat)"
54
"she repeated (repeat)"
55
"she repeated (repeat)"
56
"she repeated (repeat)"
57
"she repeated (repeat)"
58
"she repeated (repeat)"
59
"she repeated (repeat)"
60
"she repeated (repeat)"
61
"she repeated (repeat)"
62
"she repeated (repeat)"
63
"she repeated (repeat)"
dialogueSentences
212
tagDensity
0.656
leniency
1
rawRatio
0.46
effectiveRatio
0.46
60.7490%