Run: 2026-03-06-01KK1J2KHTNQK60042TKK6R4Q9

Run Details

Duration:
1m 18s
Cost:
$0.047418
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The station had been dead for decades, but it still smelled faintly of heat and brakes, as if the last train had passed only minutes ago and left its ghost behind. Detective Harlow Quinn paused at the foot of the service stairs and let the scene settle into her before she stepped into it. Old habit. Useful habit. People looked; she measured. The abandoned platform beneath Camden spread out under strips of temporary police lighting, every hard edge thrown into sharp relief—the tiled walls glazed with damp, the old enamel roundel half peeled from the far side, the rails sunk in a trench black with stagnant water and soot. Dust lay everywhere except where it didn’t. The uniforms had done what uniforms always did in strange places: overcompensated. Blue-and-white tape crisscrossed the platform in neat angles. Two constables stood guard by an iron gate hanging off one hinge. A SOCO team worked in white coveralls near the body, all of them speaking in voices too low to carry and moving with the stiffness of people who wanted badly not to seem rattled. Quinn took in the details while she stripped on gloves. The old advertisements on the tunnel wall had rotted into illegible blooms of color. A rusted kiosk sat on the platform like a coffin stood on end. The station clocks were frozen at 2:17. Somewhere deeper in the tunnel, water dripped with patient regularity. “Morning, guv.” She looked over. DI Ben Carver waited near the body, broad-shouldered and tired-eyed, hands shoved into the pockets of an overcoat too expensive for the hour. He had been with Major Crimes long enough to know better than to call before dawn unless he thought he had something worth her attention. “You said unusual.” Quinn started toward him, boots clicking on cracked concrete. “This qualifies.” Carver gave a humorless smile. “Homeless male, maybe forties, no ID on him. Found by a transport survey crew reopening the line for structural assessment. They came down at six, found him at the platform edge, and nearly pissed themselves.” Quinn’s gaze flicked to the corpse before she reached it. Male indeed. Thin under layers of grime-dark clothing. Supine on the yellowed platform line with his head turned sharply to one side. One arm flung out, fingers crooked, nails black with dirt. His throat was cut deeply enough to expose white cartilage. There was blood, certainly. But not enough. Not nearly enough. “Name?” she asked. “Nothing yet. No wallet, no phone. Couple of coins. String, bits of paper. Usual rough sleeper inventory.” “Usual rough sleeper inventory doesn’t include getting into a sealed station.” Carver tipped one shoulder. “Service gate upstairs had a new padlock cut clean through. Could be squatters. Could be kids. The city’s full of people where they shouldn’t be.” Quinn crouched beside the body. The dead man’s skin had the waxy cast of someone gone long enough to cool and settle but not long enough to truly stiffen the room around him. His eyes were open. Their expression bothered her less than the faint gray dust settled on his lashes, as if he’d been laid here after the air had already gone still. One of the forensic techs straightened. “Detective. Preliminary only, but lividity’s inconsistent with him dying on his back. More in the left side.” “So he was moved,” Quinn said. “Looks that way.” Carver made a small sound. “Or rolled. If some idiot found him and panicked.” Quinn ignored that. She leaned closer to the wound. The cut was savage in depth but oddly tidy in its line, running ear to ear with more control than frenzy. She had seen rushed murders, drunken murders, domestic murders full of tears and apology. This wasn’t any of those. Whoever had cut this man’s throat had known where to put the blade and how much pressure to use. But the blood pattern was wrong. The front of his coat was soaked, collar clotted black-brown, yet the platform beneath his neck held only a narrow crescent smear and a sparse scatter of drops. No arterial spray on the wall. No castoff on the tiles. Nothing like what the wound promised. She stood and turned slowly, letting her eyes travel over platform, wall, tracks, ceiling. “You searched for a secondary scene?” “Tunnel mouth both directions for a hundred meters,” Carver said. “Maintenance rooms too. Nothing. If he was killed elsewhere, we haven’t found the elsewhere.” A constable approached carrying an evidence bag. “This was under him, ma’am.” Quinn took the bag. Inside sat a small brass compass gone green around the edges, its casing filmed with verdigris. The face was wrong at once—not a standard cardinal rose but a ring of incised marks that looked decorative until you noticed their repetition and symmetry. Sigils, if you believed in that sort of thing. Quinn did not, officially. Unofficially, she had learned to distrust any object that made the skin at the back of her neck tighten. “Was this in his hand?” “Under his hip, ma’am. Like he landed on it.” Carver peered at it and snorted softly. “Tat from Camden Market. Mystic nonsense for tourists.” Quinn held the bag up to the light. The needle trembled. Then swung, not north, but toward the dark eastern tunnel, where no draft should have touched it. She kept her face blank. “Bag it separately. Prints, trace, the lot.” “Yes, ma’am.” The constable moved off. Carver watched Quinn watching the tunnel. “You’ve got that look.” “What look?” “The one that says everyone else in the room is about to become disappointing.” “Then don’t disappoint me.” She nodded toward the platform edge. “Walk me through your interpretation.” Carver blew out a breath through his nose, game enough to play. “All right. Rough sleeper gets access with others through the cut lock. They use the station as shelter. Something goes wrong. Fight over drugs, territory, whatever. He gets his throat cut. Mates panic, dump the body by the edge, scatter when the survey crew comes in.” “Why move him from where he was killed?” “To make it look like an accident? To get him away from bedding or belongings? To buy time.” “And where are the belongings?” He spread his hands. “Taken.” “By men panicked enough to abandon a body but calm enough to sanitize the rest of the scene?” Carver’s mouth flattened. “There’s blood on him. A wound on him. We have a corpse in a hole where nobody goes. It doesn’t need to be ceremonial.” “No,” Quinn said. “It needs to make sense.” She stepped carefully around the body and crouched at the platform lip. The stagnant water below reflected strips of white light in broken lines. Rats had been down there recently; their tracks marked the soot in delicate, frantic scribbles. Human tracks too, but not many. One clear set of work boots from the survey crew descended from the stair side and stopped abruptly short of the body. Another partial print near the service alcove, likely one of the uniforms who had contaminated the edge before the tape went up. And there, between the dead man’s outflung hand and the nearest rail, something else: a pattern in the dust where dust should have remained untouched. Not a shoeprint. Not exactly. More like a long smear resolving into nested crescents, as if several narrow points had pressed and dragged together. “Don’t step there,” she said sharply, and the nearest SOCO froze mid-movement. Quinn leaned lower. The marks repeated farther along the lip, almost invisible unless the light hit at an angle. A series of impressions, evenly spaced. Too regular for damage in the concrete. Too shallow for tool marks. Carver joined her, careful now. “What am I looking at?” “That,” Quinn said, “is a very good question.” He squinted. “Could be from a trolley. Equipment wheels.” “Show me the wheels.” “There aren’t any.” “Exactly.” She rose and moved toward the eastern tunnel. The compass, even through the evidence bag now resting on a nearby crate, seemed to tug at her awareness. Nonsense, she told herself. Pattern-seeking, fatigue, the old unresolved bruise in her head with Morris’s name on it. Three years gone and still there were nights when she woke seeing his blood on rain-slick pavement and hearing him insist, with his last bewildered breath, that there had been something in the alley with them. Not now. The tunnel mouth gaped black beyond the spill of police lights. Soot furred the curved walls. Cable conduits ran in rusted lines overhead. About ten feet in, on the tile where platform ended and tunnel proper began, Quinn saw a spatter the others had missed—five droplets no larger than pinheads, dried dark and almost lost against the grime. “Lights here,” she said. A tech brought a lamp. Under the stronger beam the droplets clarified. Not random. They formed a shallow arc, like blood shaken from moving fingers. Quinn followed the line with her eyes and found another stain on the wall at shoulder height, then a faint swipe lower down. “He didn’t die on the platform,” she said. Carver folded his arms. “We already knew he was moved.” “No.” She pointed. “He came from the tunnel. Bleeding, but not pumping. The big blood loss happened elsewhere, yes, but whoever brought him out paused here.” She looked at the wall smear. “Braced him, or set him down. Then dragged or carried him the last few yards.” “That still fits my version.” “Does it?” She turned back toward the body. “Look at the soles of his boots.” Carver frowned, then glanced to the corpse. “All right.” “Notice anything?” He took a few seconds. “Cleaner than they should be.” “Exactly. If he’d been living down here, those treads would be packed with tunnel dust, oil, rat filth, all the rest. They’re worn but comparatively clean. He walked somewhere paved recently, maybe indoors. And his coat—cheap, dirty, but the cuffs are frayed evenly, not shredded. No bedding fibers. No ash from fire cans. I don’t think he was sleeping rough.” “Could still have come down for a deal.” “Maybe.” Quinn looked once more at the platform, assembling and rejecting possibilities. “But then there’s the cut lock upstairs. Too neat for scavengers. And the body placement. And this station.” Carver gave her a sidelong look. “You think the location matters.” “I think people choose places for reasons.” One of the forensic photographers called from near the kiosk. “Detective Quinn? You should see this.” She crossed the platform. The kiosk’s metal shutter had rusted half open years ago, leaving a slit into darkness. The photographer pointed at the floor in front of it. At first glance it was just dust and flakes of paint. Then Quinn saw the circle scratched into the grime—roughly three feet across, almost erased by time and recent foot traffic. Around its edge, more of the same symbols etched onto the brass compass had been drawn in chalk or ash or something pale now half smeared away. At the circle’s center lay a tiny heap of black residue. Carver exhaled. “Well. That’s irritating.” Quinn crouched. The residue looked like burnt herbs, maybe cloth, maybe bone. She didn’t touch it. “Who found this?” “Photographer did. Kiosk was closed off from the main search because of the unstable frame.” “Anyone go inside?” “Not yet.” Quinn studied the circle. One section had been scuffed by a boot, but not the whole thing. Intentional disturbance, maybe. Or hasty. A few inches beyond the ring, she spotted another of those crescent impressions in the dust, deeper here, pressing partly over one of the symbols. Carver rubbed his jaw. “Teenagers with a seance kit?” “Teenagers don’t usually carry men in from tunnels and cut their throats with professional efficiency.” “You’d be surprised.” “I am rarely surprised. Irritated, yes.” She stood and glanced back toward the evidence bag holding the compass. The needle had settled, but not still. It quivered toward the tunnel, restless as an animal straining at leash. Her pulse ticked once, hard. She hated when the world leaned toward the shape of things she could not put in an evidence report. Morris had hated it too, right up until the moment disbelief stopped being an option. Quinn straightened to her full height. “We expand the search east. Full tunnel sweep, every alcove, every maintenance chamber, every cross-passage. I want track bed photographed for those impressions before anyone contaminates them further. Get me CCTV from every street access point within half a mile, especially any footage between midnight and dawn. And find out who else knew this station would be opened today.” Carver watched her. “You think the survey crew was bait?” “I think someone knew this body would be found.” She looked at the carefully arranged corpse on the platform edge, the almost theatrical presentation of it. “And wanted it found in a very particular way.” He followed her gaze. “Why?” Quinn’s eyes moved from the dead man to the half-erased circle, to the tunnel waiting beyond the lights, then finally to the brass compass with its impossible face. “Because,” she said, “this isn’t just disposal. It’s interruption.” Carver frowned. “Interruption of what?” Quinn listened to the drip in the tunnel, the hum of portable lamps, the uneasy breathing of everyone trying not to admit the place got under their skin. The evidence still didn’t align, but a shape had begun to emerge in the gaps. Someone had brought the man here after death or near enough. Someone had used the kiosk area for something deliberate. Someone had either been stopped mid-act or had staged the scene to look stopped. The marks in the dust were not from boots, wheels, or any tool she knew. And the little compass from a black market half the city pretended didn’t exist had ended up beneath a corpse in a station no one should have entered without planning. She kept her voice level. “That’s what we’re going to find out.” Then she stepped to the tunnel mouth and looked into the dark until it looked back.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags16
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"she said sharply [sharply]"
1"She turned back [back]"
2"Quinn looked once [once]"
dialogueSentences78
tagDensity0.205
leniency0.41
rawRatio0.188
effectiveRatio0.077
80.83% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2348
totalAiIsmAdverbs9
found
0
adverb"sharply"
count2
1
adverb"truly"
count1
2
adverb"slowly"
count1
3
adverb"softly"
count1
4
adverb"carefully"
count2
5
adverb"very"
count2
highlights
0"sharply"
1"truly"
2"slowly"
3"softly"
4"carefully"
5"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
80.83% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2348
totalAiIsms9
found
0
word"measured"
count1
1
word"flicked"
count1
2
word"standard"
count1
3
word"trembled"
count1
4
word"resolving"
count1
5
word"pumping"
count1
6
word"etched"
count1
7
word"quivered"
count1
8
word"pulse"
count1
highlights
0"measured"
1"flicked"
2"standard"
3"trembled"
4"resolving"
5"pumping"
6"etched"
7"quivered"
8"pulse"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences155
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences155
filterMatches
0"look"
hedgeMatches
0"started to"
1"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences217
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen61
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2343
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"Nonsense, she told herself."
79.36% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions52
wordCount1628
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity1.41
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Harlow1
Quinn23
Camden1
Ben1
Carver17
Major1
Crimes1
Morris2
One5
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Camden"
3"Ben"
4"Carver"
5"Major"
6"Morris"
places(empty)
globalScore0.794
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences97
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"looked like burnt herbs, maybe cloth, may"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords0.854
wordCount2343
matches
0"not a standard cardinal rose but a ring of incised marks"
1"not north, but toward the dark eastern tunnel"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences217
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs96
mean24.41
std25.41
cv1.041
sampleLengths
031
185
266
354
42
551
614
740
859
93
103
1117
1211
1329
1464
1523
166
173
1814
1968
2051
2120
2224
2312
2478
255
269
2715
2828
2912
302
3114
322
3314
3415
3558
368
3718
385
395
4018
4127
428
4389
4449
4512
4637
4710
488
499
93.94% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount5
totalSentences155
matches
0"were frozen"
1"been laid"
2"been drawn"
3"been scuffed"
4"been stopped"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs273
matches(empty)
63.86% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount4
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences6
totalSentences217
ratio0.028
matches
0"People looked; she measured."
1"The abandoned platform beneath Camden spread out under strips of temporary police lighting, every hard edge thrown into sharp relief—the tiled walls glazed with damp, the old enamel roundel half peeled from the far side, the rails sunk in a trench black with stagnant water and soot."
2"The face was wrong at once—not a standard cardinal rose but a ring of incised marks that looked decorative until you noticed their repetition and symmetry."
3"Rats had been down there recently; their tracks marked the soot in delicate, frantic scribbles."
4"About ten feet in, on the tile where platform ended and tunnel proper began, Quinn saw a spatter the others had missed—five droplets no larger than pinheads, dried dark and almost lost against the grime."
5"Then Quinn saw the circle scratched into the grime—roughly three feet across, almost erased by time and recent foot traffic."
97.19% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1643
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount71
adverbRatio0.04321363359707851
lyAdverbCount25
lyAdverbRatio0.015216068167985392
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences217
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences217
mean10.8
std9.82
cv0.909
sampleLengths
031
123
22
32
44
547
67
712
88
912
1034
1110
1214
1313
147
1510
162
173
1823
1925
2012
212
225
2335
2410
252
266
2714
2810
2910
304
313
323
333
3417
3511
364
3725
385
3928
404
4127
426
4317
446
453
465
479
483
496
70.51% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.4423963133640553
totalSentences217
uniqueOpeners96
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount8
totalSentences135
matches
0"Somewhere deeper in the tunnel,"
1"Unofficially, she had learned to"
2"Then swung, not north, but"
3"More like a long smear"
4"Too regular for damage in"
5"Too shallow for tool marks."
6"Then Quinn saw the circle"
7"Then she stepped to the"
ratio0.059
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount27
totalSentences135
matches
0"She looked over."
1"He had been with Major"
2"His throat was cut deeply"
3"His eyes were open."
4"Their expression bothered her less"
5"She leaned closer to the"
6"She had seen rushed murders,"
7"She stood and turned slowly,"
8"She kept her face blank."
9"She nodded toward the platform"
10"He spread his hands."
11"She stepped carefully around the"
12"she said sharply, and the"
13"She rose and moved toward"
14"They formed a shallow arc,"
15"She looked at the wall"
16"She turned back toward the"
17"He took a few seconds."
18"She crossed the platform."
19"She didn’t touch it."
ratio0.2
93.33% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount99
totalSentences135
matches
0"The station had been dead"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn paused at"
2"People looked; she measured."
3"The abandoned platform beneath Camden"
4"Dust lay everywhere except where"
5"The uniforms had done what"
6"A SOCO team worked in"
7"Quinn took in the details"
8"The old advertisements on the"
9"A rusted kiosk sat on"
10"The station clocks were frozen"
11"She looked over."
12"He had been with Major"
13"Quinn started toward him, boots"
14"Carver gave a humorless smile."
15"Quinn’s gaze flicked to the"
16"Supine on the yellowed platform"
17"His throat was cut deeply"
18"Carver tipped one shoulder."
19"Quinn crouched beside the body."
ratio0.733
37.04% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences135
matches
0"Whoever had cut this man’s"
ratio0.007
99.57% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences66
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"A SOCO team worked in white coveralls near the body, all of them speaking in voices too low to carry and moving with the stiffness of people who wanted badly no…"
1"Their expression bothered her less than the faint gray dust settled on his lashes, as if he’d been laid here after the air had already gone still."
2"Another partial print near the service alcove, likely one of the uniforms who had contaminated the edge before the tape went up."
3"More like a long smear resolving into nested crescents, as if several narrow points had pressed and dragged together."
93.75% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Quinn started, boots clicking on cracked concrete"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags9
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences78
tagDensity0.115
leniency0.231
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
93.0072%