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Run: 2026-03-06-01KK1J56MX12RGFMZM9C2W5DGF
Run Details
Model:
Inception Mercury 2
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Romance: separated couple reunites
Duration:
6.1s
Cost:
$0.002415
Provider:
Inception
Evaluation summary
Score
Evaluator
Details Link
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
(details)
94.62%
AI-ism adverb frequency
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism character names
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
(details)
24.69%
AI-ism word frequency
(details)
66.67%
Cliché density
(details)
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
(details)
100.00%
Filter word density
(details)
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
(details)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
(details)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
(details)
67.97%
Name drop frequency
(details)
80.56%
Narrator intent-glossing
(details)
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
(details)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
(details)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
(details)
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
(details)
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
(details)
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
(details)
100.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
(details)
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
(details)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
(details)
49.47%
Sentence opener variety
(details)
0.00%
Adverb-first sentence starts
(details)
0.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
(details)
0.00%
Subject-first sentence starts
(details)
0.00%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
(details)
100.00%
Technical jargon density
(details)
0.00%
Useless dialogue additions
(details)
100.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
(details)
76.1324%
Overall
Model input
System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>
Model response
Messages
Meta
AI
The knock came three times, each thud
echoing
off the plastered walls of Eva’s flat.
Aurora turned the deadbolt, the
metal clicking into place, then slipped the key into the lock.
The door swung open, revealing
the cramped hallway lined with stacks of battered books and crumpled scrolls.
A tabby cat, Ptolemy, flicked
his tail and slipped between her legs, his whiskers brushing her ankle. Lucien stood in the doorway, his charcoal suit catching the dim light from the hallway bulb. His cane, ivory‑handled and polished, rested against the doorframe. One eye, amber like a smoldering ember, stared at her; the other, black as midnight,
seemed to
weigh the moment. He lifted the cane
slightly
, the thin blade hidden within catching a
glint
. “Did you forget to lock the back door?”
he asked, his voice low, a faint French lilt slipping through
.
Aurora’s hand hovered over the
scar on her left wrist, the crescent‑shaped
reminder
of a childhood fall.
She pressed a fingertip to
the raised skin, feeling the faint sting of old pain. “I lock everything,”
she replied, eyes flicking to
the deadbolts. “Three of them. You’re not a thief.”
Lucien smiled, a thin line
that didn’t reach his eyes. “I’m not here to steal. I’m here because the rain won’t stop, and the city’s gutters are full of secrets.”
She stepped back, allowing him
to enter.
The cat leapt onto the
windowsill, his green eyes tracking Lucien’s movements. “You always bring trouble,”
Aurora muttered, closing the door
behind him.
He dropped the cane onto
the floor, the blade hidden beneath the ivory.
The sound of metal against
wood punctuated the
silence
. “You think I’m a storm,”
he said, his voice softer
now, “but I’m just a messenger.”
Aurora crossed the room, her
shoes thudding on the worn carpet.
She brushed past a stack
of research notes, the paper rustling like dry leaves. “What do you want, Lucien?”
He turned, his gaze landing
on the scar. “You still carry the mark,”
he said, his tone not
accusation but curiosity. “You’ve kept it hidden for years.” She lifted her left hand, the scar catching the light. “I keep it hidden because it reminds me of the day I left the law school. Because it reminds me of Evan.” Lucien’s
eyes narrowed
, the amber flickering. “Evan was a storm you couldn’t outrun.”
She laughed, a sound that
cracked the
tension
. “You always knew how to cut through my defenses.”
He stepped closer, the cane
now a prop against his leg. “I never wanted to cut you down,” he said, “but I cut the ties that bound us.” Aurora’s breath caught. “You left without a word.”
He looked at the books
piled high, the spines cracked, titles half‑forgotten. “I left because I feared the darkness inside me would swallow you.”
She pressed the scar with
her thumb, the skin turning pink. “You thought I’d be a victim?” Lucien shook his head,
a flicker of guilt
crossing his face. “I thought you’d be a survivor.” The cat Ptolemy hopped onto Aurora’s lap, purring against her thigh.
She stroked his fur, the
soft vibration grounding her. “You’ve been a ghost for months, Lucien.”
He lowered his gaze, the
black eye reflecting the dim light. “Ghosts don’t stay in one place. They drift, they haunt.” Aurora stood, the scar now a vivid line against her skin. “I’m not a ghost. I’m a delivery girl. I carry meals, not memories.”
He chuckled, a sound that
sounded like a blade being drawn
. “You always had a way of turning ordinary into something else.”
She turned away, her back
to him, the scar catching the light again. “What do you need from me?” Lucien stepped forward, his cane tapping the floor in a rhythm that matched the ticking of the old clock on the wall. “I need the ledger.” She raised an
eyebrow
, the scar
glinting
. “The ledger that the Golden Empress keeps hidden?” He nodded, his amber eye narrowing. “The ledger that lists the shipments to the underworld. I need it to protect someone.” Aurora’s shoulders tensed. “You think I’m still connected to that world?” He let out a soft sigh, his breath fogging the air. “I think you’ve always been connected, whether you liked it or not.” She turned, her gaze meeting his. “You think I’m still the same girl who ran from an abusive ex?” Lucien’s cane clacked against the floor as he shifted. “I think you’ve grown. I think you’ve learned to fight.” She laughed again, this time a bitter edge. “You always thought you could fix everything with a smile and a blade.” He lowered his cane, the ivory handle resting against his palm. “I never claimed to fix you. I only claimed to understand.” Aurora’s eyes
flicked
to the cat, Ptolemy’s tail flicking. “Understanding doesn’t erase the past.” He stepped closer, the black eye reflecting the room’s shadows. “No, it doesn’t. But it can guide us forward.” She felt the heat of his breath on her cheek, the scent of sandalwood and something darker. “You’re still the Frenchman, Lucien. Still half‑demon, still a fixer.” He smiled, a flash of amber. “And you’re still Aurora Carter, still Rory, still the one who can see through the fog.” She pressed her palm against the scar, the skin tingling. “You think I can see through the fog?” He placed his hand on top of hers, the cane’s tip resting against her wrist. “I think you can see the truth.”
The cat leapt onto the
coffee table, knocking over a stack of notes. Papers
fluttered
like startled birds. Aurora reached for them, her fingers brushing the ink‑stained edges. “What do you want with the ledger?” Lucien’s gaze hardened, the amber eye blazing. “I want to protect the people you care about.” She stared at the scar, the crescent shape a
reminder
of broken glass. “You think you can protect them by stealing?” He lifted his cane, the hidden blade catching the light. “I think I can keep them safe by knowing where the danger lies.” Aurora’s breath hitched. “You’ve always been dangerous.” He chuckled, the sound low and resonant. “And you’ve always been the one who walks into danger.” She turned, the cat now perched on the windowsill, watching the rain. “You came here because you needed me.” He nodded, the black eye deepening. “I came because I couldn’t stay away.” She pressed her palms together, the scar throbbing. “You left me with a broken heart.” Lucien’s cane tapped the floor, a steady rhythm. “I left you with a promise.” She stared at the scar, the memory of the accident flashing. “You promised to stay.” He stepped forward, his breath warm against her cheek. “I promised to return.” Aurora’s
eyes widened
, the amber flickering. “You think you can just walk back in?” He lowered his cane, the ivory handle resting on the floor. “I think I can.” She
felt a shiver
run
down her spine
, the scar tingling like a
pulse
. “You think we can pick up where we left off?” Lucien’s black eye softened, the amber flickering with
something like hope
. “I think we can start anew.” The rain hammered the brick walls, a steady
drum that seemed to sync with their heartbeats
. Aurora’s hand moved, the scar now a bright line against her skin. “You’re still the same, Lucien. Still the man who hides a blade in his cane.” He smiled, a flash of amber. “And you’re still the woman who hides a scar on her wrist.” She
let out a breath
, the
tension
easing. “We’re both hiding things.” He placed his hand on her shoulder, the cane’s tip pressing against her wrist. “Maybe we can stop hiding.” Aurora turned, the cat’s eyes
glinting
in the low light. “You think we can be honest?” He nodded, his black eye reflecting the rain. “I think we can.” She felt the scar
pulse
, a
reminder
of past wounds and future possibilities. “You think we can love again?” Lucien’s cane clacked
softly
as he shifted his
weight
. “I think we can.”
She laughed, a sound that
rose above the rain. “You always had a way of making the impossible sound simple.” He leaned in, his breath mingling with hers. “I always had a way of making you listen.” The cat brushed his fur against their legs, a soft purr reverberating. Aurora’s eyes met his, the scar catching the dim light. “You’re still a mess of contradictions.” He smiled, the amber eye brightening. “And you’re still the only person who can untangle them.” She reached for the cane, her fingers brushing the ivory. “You think you can trust me?” Lucien’s black eye softened, the amber flickering with a quiet certainty. “I think I can.” She placed her hand on his, the scar now a vivid line against her skin. “Then let’s start with truth.” He lowered his cane, the hidden blade disappearing into the handle. “Truth first.” Aurora’s eyes
flicked
to the ledger tucked beneath a pile of notes. “The ledger is hidden in the back of the pantry.” He turned, his cane tapping the floor in a
measured
rhythm. “Then we go there together.” She opened the pantry door, the scent of spices and rain filling the air. The ledger lay on a shelf, its leather cover worn. She pulled it out, the pages rustling like whispered secrets. Lucien reached for it, his hand hovering over the cover. “We’ll read it together.” She nodded, the scar pulsing under her skin. “We’ll read it together.” The cat jumped onto the ledger, his paws resting on the pages. Aurora smiled, the rain outside a steady rhythm. “You’ve always been a part of my life, Lucien.” He placed his cane beside the ledger, the ivory
glinting
. “And you’ve always been a part of mine, Rory.” She turned, her eyes meeting his, the scar now a bright line against her wrist. “Maybe this time we’ll stay.” He brushed his thumb against the scar, the amber eye reflecting the rain. “Maybe this time we won’t leave.” The rain fell harder, drumming on the roof, a steady
pulse
that matched their own. Aurora’s breath caught, the scar a
reminder
of past pain and present hope. “We’ll keep each other safe.” Lucien nodded, his black eye deepening. “We’ll protect each other.” She pressed her palm against his, the scar tingling with a new
warmth
. “No more secrets.” He squeezed her hand, the cane’s tip resting against his palm. “No more lies.” The cat purred, a soft vibration that filled the room. Aurora leaned into his shoulder, the scar now a bright line against her skin. “Let’s start now.” He wrapped his arm around her, the cane’s ivory handle resting against his side. “Now.” The rain outside continued its steady song, the city’s lights flickering through the window. Aurora’s eyes lingered on the ledger, the scar a vivid
reminder
of the night she fell and rose again. Lucien’s amber eye held a promise, the black eye a quiet
resolve
. Together, they stood in the cramped flat, the world outside a blur of rain and streetlights, the future a blank page waiting for their ink.
created_at
"2026-03-06T12:32:30.885Z"
3/6/2026, 12:32:30 PM
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generation_time
6074
tokens_prompt
1034
tokens_completion
3457
native_tokens_prompt
882
native_tokens_completion
3188
native_tokens_completion_images
(null)
native_tokens_reasoning
804
native_tokens_cached
873
num_media_prompt
(null)
num_input_audio_prompt
(null)
num_media_completion
0
num_search_results
(null)
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"https://ncbench.com/"
is_byok
false
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"stop"
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"stop"
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provider_responses
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false
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99
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"Inception"
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Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
6
adverbTagCount
0
adverbTags
(empty)
dialogueSentences
83
tagDensity
0.072
leniency
0.145
rawRatio
0
effectiveRatio
0
94.62%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount
1859
totalAiIsmAdverbs
2
found
0
adverb
"slightly"
count
1
1
adverb
"softly"
count
1
highlights
0
"slightly"
1
"softly"
100.00%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
24.69%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount
1859
totalAiIsms
28
found
0
word
"echoing"
count
1
1
word
"flicked"
count
3
2
word
"glint"
count
1
3
word
"lilt"
count
1
4
word
"reminder"
count
5
5
word
"silence"
count
1
6
word
"tension"
count
2
7
word
"flicker"
count
1
8
word
"eyebrow"
count
1
9
word
"glinting"
count
3
10
word
"fluttered"
count
1
11
word
"down her spine"
count
1
12
word
"pulse"
count
3
13
word
"weight"
count
1
14
word
"measured"
count
1
15
word
"warmth"
count
1
16
word
"resolve"
count
1
highlights
0
"echoing"
1
"flicked"
2
"glint"
3
"lilt"
4
"reminder"
5
"silence"
6
"tension"
7
"flicker"
8
"eyebrow"
9
"glinting"
10
"fluttered"
11
"down her spine"
12
"pulse"
13
"weight"
14
"measured"
15
"warmth"
16
"resolve"
66.67%
Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
3
maxInWindow
2
found
0
label
"let out a breath"
count
1
1
label
"eyes widened/narrowed"
count
2
highlights
0
"let out a breath"
1
"eyes narrowed"
2
"eyes widened"
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
2
narrationSentences
113
matches
0
"a flicker of guilt"
1
"felt a shiver"
100.00%
Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
2
narrationSentences
113
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
0
"seemed to"
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences
190
gibberishSentences
0
adjustedGibberishSentences
0
longSentenceCount
0
runOnParagraphCount
0
giantParagraphCount
0
wordSaladCount
0
repetitionLoopCount
0
controlTokenCount
0
maxSentenceWordsSeen
25
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans
0
markdownWords
0
totalWords
1859
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions
10
unquotedAttributions
0
matches
(empty)
67.97%
Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions
40
wordCount
1219
uniqueNames
5
maxNameDensity
1.64
worstName
"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity
2.5
worstWindowName
"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Eva
1
Ptolemy
3
French
1
Aurora
20
Lucien
15
persons
0
"Eva"
1
"Ptolemy"
2
"Aurora"
3
"Lucien"
places
(empty)
globalScore
0.68
windowScore
0.833
80.56%
Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences
108
glossingSentenceCount
3
matches
0
"sounded like a blade being drawn"
1
"something like hope"
2
"drum that seemed to sync with their heartbeats"
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches
1
per1kWords
0.538
wordCount
1859
matches
0
"not accusation but curiosity"
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
0
totalSentences
190
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
85
mean
21.87
std
11.04
cv
0.505
sampleLengths
0
65
1
58
2
19
3
49
4
30
5
30
6
38
7
30
8
27
9
32
10
13
11
17
12
28
13
8
14
24
15
17
16
17
17
27
18
21
19
24
20
22
21
19
22
26
23
15
24
21
25
11
26
23
27
19
28
19
29
21
30
22
31
14
32
19
33
27
34
22
35
18
36
22
37
35
38
16
39
21
40
23
41
7
42
17
43
19
44
13
45
15
46
14
47
15
48
13
49
14
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount
1
totalSentences
113
matches
0
"being drawn"
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
0
totalVerbs
216
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount
0
semicolonCount
1
flaggedSentences
1
totalSentences
190
ratio
0.005
matches
0
"One eye, amber like a smoldering ember, stared at her; the other, black as midnight, seemed to weigh the moment."
100.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1219
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
12
adverbRatio
0.009844134536505332
lyAdverbCount
2
lyAdverbRatio
0.0016406890894175555
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
190
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
190
mean
9.78
std
4.23
cv
0.432
sampleLengths
0
15
1
16
2
17
3
17
4
16
5
9
6
20
7
13
8
19
9
17
10
15
11
10
12
7
13
10
14
20
15
7
16
12
17
11
18
13
19
9
20
16
21
11
22
14
23
5
24
8
25
13
26
6
27
10
28
22
29
6
30
7
31
8
32
9
33
11
34
17
35
3
36
5
37
12
38
12
39
11
40
6
41
11
42
6
43
11
44
9
45
7
46
11
47
10
48
11
49
13
49.47%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
1
diversityRatio
0.1368421052631579
totalSentences
190
uniqueOpeners
26
0.00%
Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount
0
totalSentences
112
matches
(empty)
ratio
0
0.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount
62
totalSentences
112
matches
0
"His cane, ivory‑handled and polished,"
1
"He lifted the cane slightly,"
2
"he asked, his voice low,"
3
"She pressed a fingertip to"
4
"she replied, eyes flicking to"
5
"She stepped back, allowing him"
6
"He dropped the cane onto"
7
"he said, his voice softer"
8
"She brushed past a stack"
9
"He turned, his gaze landing"
10
"he said, his tone not"
11
"She lifted her left hand,"
12
"She laughed, a sound that"
13
"He stepped closer, the cane"
14
"He looked at the books"
15
"She pressed the scar with"
16
"She stroked his fur, the"
17
"He lowered his gaze, the"
18
"He chuckled, a sound that"
19
"She turned away, her back"
ratio
0.554
0.00%
Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount
110
totalSentences
112
matches
0
"The knock came three times,"
1
"Aurora turned the deadbolt, the"
2
"The door swung open, revealing"
3
"A tabby cat, Ptolemy, flicked"
4
"Lucien stood in the doorway,"
5
"His cane, ivory‑handled and polished,"
6
"He lifted the cane slightly,"
7
"he asked, his voice low,"
8
"Aurora’s hand hovered over the"
9
"She pressed a fingertip to"
10
"she replied, eyes flicking to"
11
"Lucien smiled, a thin line"
12
"She stepped back, allowing him"
13
"The cat leapt onto the"
14
"Aurora muttered, closing the door"
15
"He dropped the cane onto"
16
"The sound of metal against"
17
"he said, his voice softer"
18
"Aurora crossed the room, her"
19
"She brushed past a stack"
ratio
0.982
0.00%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount
0
totalSentences
112
matches
(empty)
ratio
0
100.00%
Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences
72
technicalSentenceCount
1
matches
0
"The rain hammered the brick walls, a steady drum that seemed to sync with their heartbeats."
0.00%
Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags
6
uselessAdditionCount
3
matches
0
"he asked, his voice low, a faint French lilt slipping through"
1
"she replied, eyes flicking to the deadbolts"
2
"he said, his voice softer now,"
100.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
6
fancyCount
1
fancyTags
0
"Aurora muttered (mutter)"
dialogueSentences
83
tagDensity
0.072
leniency
0.145
rawRatio
0.167
effectiveRatio
0.024
76.1324%