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Run: 2026-03-06-01KK1J9FFNQEEBXMTHR3YX04BN
Run Details
Model:
Inception Mercury 2
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Thriller: chase through city streets
Duration:
6.4s
Cost:
$0.002588
Provider:
Inception
Evaluation summary
Score
Evaluator
Details Link
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism adverb frequency
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism character names
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
(details)
0.00%
AI-ism word frequency
(details)
0.00%
Cliché density
(details)
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
(details)
74.36%
Filter word density
(details)
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
(details)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
(details)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
(details)
49.59%
Name drop frequency
(details)
90.94%
Narrator intent-glossing
(details)
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
(details)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
(details)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
(details)
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
(details)
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
(details)
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
(details)
100.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
(details)
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
(details)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
(details)
43.33%
Sentence opener variety
(details)
0.00%
Adverb-first sentence starts
(details)
100.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
(details)
0.00%
Subject-first sentence starts
(details)
0.00%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
(details)
40.82%
Technical jargon density
(details)
0.00%
Useless dialogue additions
(details)
36.36%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
(details)
71.1803%
Overall
Model input
System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>
Model response
Messages
Meta
AI
Rain hammered the cobblestones, turning the city’s veins into slick ribbons.
Neon flickered from a sign
that read “The Raven’s Nest,” its green glow reflected in puddles like a warning.
Harlow Quinn sprinted past the
doorway, her leather
watch
ticking against her wrist, the sound lost beneath the downpour.
She clutched the collar of
her coat, the fabric soaked through, her boots splashing in rhythm with her heartbeat.
She caught sight of a
figure slipping into the bar’s back alley, a shadow that moved with practiced haste.
The suspect—a lanky man with
a scarred cheek—glanced over his shoulder, eyes flickering like a cat in a streetlight. Quinn’s jaw tightened.
She pressed forward, her strides
cutting through the rain as if she
were slicing
through fog.
The alley narrowed, walls plastered
with old maps and black‑and‑white photographs of forgotten wars.
A gust of wind rattled
the frames, sending a cascade of dust across the puddles. The suspect turned a corner, disappearing behind a bookshelf that seemed out of place among the graffiti.
Quinn slammed her shoulder against
the wood, feeling the hidden latch give way.
The bookshelf swung open, revealing
a narrow passage lit by a single flickering bulb.
She slipped inside, the smell
of damp wood and stale cigarette smoke clinging to her lungs.
The passage led down a
staircase, each step
echoing
like a drumbeat.
The air grew colder, the
rain’s roar muffled by stone walls. At the bottom, a heavy iron door stood ajar, a faint green glow seeping through the cracks.
Quinn pushed the door, the
hinges groaning.
The room beyond was a
cavern of shadows, rows of stalls draped in tattered cloths. Lanterns hung from the ceiling, casting amber light on jars of strange powders and polished bones.
A low hum of whispered
bargaining filled the space.
The Veil Market sprawled before
her, a hidden world that
pulsed
beneath the city’s surface. She
scanned
the crowd. Figures cloaked in dark robes huddled around a stall where a woman in a silver mask offered a vial that glowed faintly. A man with a tattooed arm sold
charms that seemed to pulse with an inner light
. The suspect stood near a stall marked with a bone token, his hand gripping a small, wrapped parcel. Quinn’s breath fogged in the cold air.
She weighed the choice—follow the
man deeper into this labyrinth of the unknown or retreat to the safety of the streets above. The rain’s rhythm on the surface above
seemed to
echo
her own
pulse
.
She heard a voice, low
and urgent, cut through the market’s murmur. “Quinn, you shouldn’t be here.” The speaker stepped out from behind a stall, his eyes darting.
He wore a Saint Christopher
medallion that caught the lantern light. Tomás Herrera’s scarred forearm flexed as he
clenched his fists
. “Tommy,” Quinn replied, her tone flat, “I’m not here for you.” Tomás glanced at the suspect, then back at Quinn. “He’s not just a thief. He’s got a piece of the old case, the one that took Morris.” Quinn’s
eyes narrowed
. “What do you know?” Tomás shifted, his shoulders tensing. “The market trades in things that aren’t meant for ordinary eyes. He’s buying something that could open a door—” “Door to what?” Quinn snapped, stepping closer to the suspect. The suspect’s hand twitched, his fingers brushing the parcel. “You’re out of your depth, detective,”
he muttered, voice muffled by
the crowd. Quinn’s
jaw clenched
. “I’m not leaving without that parcel.” The suspect slipped the parcel into his coat, then darted toward a narrow tunnel that led deeper into the market. Tomás shouted over the din. “Quinn, the market isn’t a place for police. You’ll get swallowed whole.” Quinn stared at the tunnel, the rain’s
echo
still audible through the stone walls.
She felt the weight of
her worn leather
watch
, the tick a
reminder
of time slipping away.
She thought of Morris, of
the night the case turned supernatural, of the unanswered questions that haunted her. She turned to Tomás. “If I go, you stay here. Keep the medallion safe.” Tomás hesitated, his eyes flickering to the suspect’s retreat. “You’ll need a guide. I can’t stay.” Quinn nodded, her decision solidifying like a blade. “Lead the way.” Tomás slipped past the stalls, his movements fluid, as if he’d walked these passages his entire life.
He gestured toward a hidden
door behind a
tapestry
of faded maps. “The market moves. This way.” They slipped through the doorway, entering a corridor lined with copper pipes that hissed with steam. The air grew thicker, the scent of ozone mingling with damp earth. The rain’s roar faded into a distant thrum, replaced by the soft clink of metal on metal. Quinn kept her eyes on the path, her coat flapping against her legs. The suspect’s silhouette vanished ahead, a blur between stalls.
She heard a voice, a
whisper
that
seemed to
come from the walls themselves. “Turn back, detective.”
She turned, spotting a figure
cloaked in midnight, eyes
glinting
like polished obsidian. The figure raised a hand, revealing a small, silver blade that caught the lantern light. Quinn’s breath hitched. “Who are you?” The cloaked figure smiled, a thin line of teeth. “I’m the market’s keeper. You’re trespassing.” Quinn’s hand moved to the
watch
, feeling the leather strap tighten around her wrist.
She placed a palm on
the blade, feeling its cold edge. “I’m not leaving without what I came for.” The keeper’s smile widened. “You’ll pay a price.” A sudden crash
echoed
as a stall collapsed, sending a cascade of glass and metal onto the floor. The market’s patrons scattered, shouting, their voices a chorus of panic. The suspect seized the moment, sprinting toward a hidden exit marked by a glyph of a bone token. Tomás shouted, “Quinn, the exit is through the old subway tunnel!” Quinn darted forward, dodging a falling crate, her boots slapping against the wet stone.
She caught sight of the
tunnel’s entrance, a rusted metal door half‑buried in debris. The suspect slipped through the gap, his coat flapping like a dark flag. Quinn lunged, grabbing the door’s edge, pulling it open. The tunnel beyond was a narrow shaft, lit by phosphorescent fungi that glowed a sickly green. The rain’s
echo
returned, now muffled by the earth above.
She turned to Tomás, who
stood at the tunnel’s mouth, his medallion
glinting
. “You stay here. I’ll finish this.” Tomás nodded, his scarred forearm flexing as he tightened his grip on a small, brass pipe. “Be careful.” Quinn slipped into the tunnel, the cool air brushing her face. The suspect’s
footsteps
echoed
ahead, a rhythm that matched the
pounding
of her heart. She followed, the tunnel narrowing, walls closing in like a throat. The tunnel opened into a cavernous chamber, the ceiling vaulted high, dripping water onto stone pillars. In the center, a stone altar stood, its surface
etched
with runes that
pulsed
faintly. The suspect knelt before it, unwrapping the parcel. Inside lay a
crystal
, its facets catching the dim light, casting shards of color across the walls. Quinn halted, her eyes locked on the
crystal
. The suspect lifted it, his hands trembling. “This is the key,”
he whispered, voice reverberating off the stone
. Quinn stepped forward, her coat flapping. “Give it to me.” The suspect’s eyes
flickered
,
a flash of fear
crossing his face. “You don’t understand. It will open doors you can’t close.” Quinn’s jaw tightened. “I understand enough to stop you.” The suspect shoved the
crystal
toward her. It slipped from his grasp, rolling across the stone floor. Quinn lunged, catching it before it fell into a crack. The
crystal
vibrated
, a low hum resonating through her bones. A sudden crack split the chamber, a fissure widening across the altar. From the crack, a cold wind surged, carrying whispers that
sounded like distant screams
. The market’s keeper emerged from the shadows, eyes blazing. “You’ve taken what isn’t yours.” Quinn held the
crystal
aloft, its light intensifying. “I’ll decide what to do with it.” The keeper lunged, a blade flashing. Quinn sidestepped, the blade missing her shoulder by inches. She swung her wrist, the leather strap of her
watch
snapping, revealing a hidden blade she kept for emergencies. The blade sliced the keeper’s arm, drawing a spray of dark blood that sizzled on the stone. The keeper recoiled, his cloak swirling. “You’ll regret this.” Quinn pressed the
crystal
against the altar, the runes flaring. A burst of light erupted, blinding the chamber. The sound of shattering glass
echoed
, then
silence
fell. When the light dimmed, the keeper
was gone
, his form dissolved into ash that drifted to the floor. The suspect stared at the
crystal
, his expression a mix of awe and terror. “You… you stopped it,” he breathed. Quinn’s voice hardened. “I stopped it for now.” The suspect’s eyes darted toward the tunnel’s exit. “You can’t keep it. It belongs to the market.” Quinn tightened her grip on the
crystal
. “It belongs to no one.” A sudden rumble shook the cavern, the ground trembling beneath their feet. The tunnel’s entrance
began to
collapse, debris falling from the ceiling. Tomás’s voice
echoed
from above, “Quinn! Move!” Quinn turned, the
crystal
still warm in her palm. She glanced at the suspect, his face a mask of desperation. “You’re coming with me.” The suspect hesitated, then nodded, his shoulders slumping. Together, they sprinted toward the tunnel, the stone crumbling behind them. The rain’s roar returned as they burst through the tunnel’s mouth, the cold night air slapping their faces. They emerged onto the rain‑slick streets, the neon green sign of The Raven’s Nest flickering above them. The market’s hidden entrance sealed behind a wall of stone, the bone token embedded in the ground
glinting
faintly. Quinn glanced at the
crystal
, its light still pulsing.
She felt the weight of
the decision settle on her shoulders, the rain washing away the grime of the chase. She looked at Tomás, his medallion catching a stray beam of light. “Let’s get you back to the precinct,”
she said, her voice low
. Tomás nodded, his scarred forearm still trembling. “We’ll need to figure out what this does.” Quinn slipped the
crystal
into her coat, the leather pressing against her skin. She stared at the city’s skyline, the rain turning the streets into rivers of reflection. The night held secrets, but she had taken one step closer to the truth. She turned toward The Raven’s Nest, the neon sign casting a green halo over the wet pavement. The bar’s doorway beckoned, a place where the city’s underbelly met its surface. She pushed the door open, the
familiar
scent of stale ale and old photographs greeting her. Inside, the bartender glanced up, his eyes widening at the sight of the soaked detective. “You look like you’ve been through a storm,” he said, wiping a glass. Quinn smiled faintly, the edge of her mouth tightening. “I’ve been chasing a storm.” The bartender chuckled, sliding a glass across the bar. “Careful what you chase, detective. Some storms don’t end.” Quinn lifted the glass, the rain’s rhythm
echoing
in her ears. She took a sip, the bitter liquid grounding her. She placed the
crystal
on the bar, its glow casting shadows on the walls. The bartender leaned in, curiosity flickering. “What’s that?” Quinn stared at the
crystal
, its facets catching the neon light. “A key.” The bartender’s
eyes widened
. “Keys open doors.” Quinn’s gaze hardened. “Some doors should stay closed.” She turned, the rain still falling outside, the city’s lights reflecting off the wet pavement.
She felt the weight of
the night settle, the chase far from over, but the decision to step into the unknown already made. The streets waited, the rain whispered, and the night held its breath.
created_at
"2026-03-06T12:34:51.005Z"
3/6/2026, 12:34:51 PM
model
"inception/mercury-2-20260304"
app_id
182717
external_user
(null)
streamed
true
cancelled
false
latency
1411
moderation_latency
(null)
generation_time
6321
tokens_prompt
1140
tokens_completion
3676
native_tokens_prompt
970
native_tokens_completion
3128
native_tokens_completion_images
(null)
native_tokens_reasoning
518
native_tokens_cached
4
num_media_prompt
(null)
num_input_audio_prompt
(null)
num_media_completion
0
num_search_results
(null)
origin
"https://ncbench.com/"
is_byok
false
finish_reason
"stop"
native_finish_reason
"stop"
usage
0.0025876
router
(null)
provider_responses
0
endpoint_id
"c2a24e34-c306-4b4d-9e2f-b162c2d8bf0e"
id
"chatcmpl-64e6a58a-3eae-47ed-bab2-de8162499648"
is_byok
false
latency
49
model_permaslug
"inception/mercury-2-20260304"
provider_name
"Inception"
status
200
user_agent
"langchainjs-openai/1.0.0 ((node/v24.14.0; linux; x64))"
http_referer
(null)
api_type
"completions"
id
"gen-1772800491-XwAxQux7Yi4MP1dm2im4"
upstream_id
"chatcmpl-64e6a58a-3eae-47ed-bab2-de8162499648"
total_cost
0.0025876
cache_discount
9e-7
upstream_inference_cost
0
provider_name
"Inception"
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
10
adverbTagCount
0
adverbTags
(empty)
dialogueSentences
44
tagDensity
0.227
leniency
0.455
rawRatio
0
effectiveRatio
0
100.00%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount
1961
totalAiIsmAdverbs
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.00%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
0.00%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount
1961
totalAiIsms
45
found
0
word
"flickered"
count
2
1
word
"echoing"
count
2
2
word
"pulsed"
count
2
3
word
"scanned"
count
1
4
word
"pulse"
count
2
5
word
"echo"
count
3
6
word
"jaw clenched"
count
1
7
word
"weight"
count
3
8
word
"reminder"
count
1
9
word
"tapestry"
count
1
10
word
"whisper"
count
1
11
word
"glinting"
count
3
12
word
"echoed"
count
4
13
word
"footsteps"
count
1
14
word
"pounding"
count
1
15
word
"etched"
count
1
16
word
"crystal"
count
13
17
word
"vibrated"
count
1
18
word
"silence"
count
1
19
word
"familiar"
count
1
highlights
0
"flickered"
1
"echoing"
2
"pulsed"
3
"scanned"
4
"pulse"
5
"echo"
6
"jaw clenched"
7
"weight"
8
"reminder"
9
"tapestry"
10
"whisper"
11
"glinting"
12
"echoed"
13
"footsteps"
14
"pounding"
15
"etched"
16
"crystal"
17
"vibrated"
18
"silence"
19
"familiar"
0.00%
Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
5
maxInWindow
4
found
0
label
"eyes widened/narrowed"
count
2
1
label
"clenched jaw/fists"
count
1
2
label
"jaw/fists clenched"
count
1
3
label
"flicker of emotion"
count
1
highlights
0
"eyes narrowed"
1
"eyes widened"
2
"clenched his fists"
3
"jaw clenched"
4
"a flash of fear"
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
146
matches
(empty)
74.36%
Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
3
hedgeCount
4
narrationSentences
146
filterMatches
0
"watch"
hedgeMatches
0
"seemed to"
1
"began to"
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences
180
gibberishSentences
0
adjustedGibberishSentences
0
longSentenceCount
0
runOnParagraphCount
0
giantParagraphCount
0
wordSaladCount
0
repetitionLoopCount
0
controlTokenCount
0
maxSentenceWordsSeen
23
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans
0
markdownWords
0
totalWords
1958
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions
7
unquotedAttributions
0
matches
(empty)
49.59%
Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions
57
wordCount
1693
uniqueNames
10
maxNameDensity
2.01
worstName
"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity
3.5
worstWindowName
"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Quinn
34
Veil
1
Market
1
Saint
1
Christopher
1
Herrera
1
Tomás
13
Morris
1
Raven
2
Nest
2
persons
0
"Quinn"
1
"Saint"
2
"Christopher"
3
"Herrera"
4
"Tomás"
5
"Morris"
6
"Raven"
7
"Nest"
places
(empty)
globalScore
0.496
windowScore
0.5
90.94%
Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences
127
glossingSentenceCount
3
matches
0
"charms that seemed to pulse with an inner light"
1
"whisper that seemed to come from the walls themselves"
2
"sounded like distant screams"
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches
0
per1kWords
0
wordCount
1958
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
0
totalSentences
180
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
74
mean
26.46
std
17.37
cv
0.657
sampleLengths
0
68
1
57
2
73
3
56
4
62
5
60
6
42
7
12
8
5
9
32
10
11
11
27
12
7
13
24
14
10
15
22
16
9
17
25
18
12
19
49
20
14
21
16
22
11
23
34
24
45
25
36
26
3
27
28
28
6
29
15
30
33
31
8
32
47
33
11
34
41
35
35
36
19
37
18
38
36
39
56
40
26
41
10
42
21
43
9
44
37
45
35
46
5
47
15
48
51
49
9
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount
1
totalSentences
146
matches
0
"was gone"
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
1
totalVerbs
317
matches
0
"were slicing"
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount
3
semicolonCount
0
flaggedSentences
2
totalSentences
180
ratio
0.011
matches
0
"The suspect—a lanky man with a scarred cheek—glanced over his shoulder, eyes flickering like a cat in a streetlight."
1
"She weighed the choice—follow the man deeper into this labyrinth of the unknown or retreat to the safety of the streets above."
100.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1696
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
24
adverbRatio
0.014150943396226415
lyAdverbCount
6
lyAdverbRatio
0.003537735849056604
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
180
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
180
mean
10.88
std
4.99
cv
0.459
sampleLengths
0
11
1
19
2
19
3
19
4
19
5
19
6
3
7
16
8
14
9
15
10
17
11
13
12
14
13
16
14
12
15
11
16
17
17
7
18
15
19
16
20
9
21
15
22
4
23
22
24
16
25
18
26
7
27
22
28
13
29
12
30
5
31
11
32
11
33
10
34
11
35
9
36
18
37
3
38
4
39
5
40
19
41
10
42
9
43
13
44
3
45
6
46
20
47
5
48
12
49
14
43.33%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
12
diversityRatio
0.2
totalSentences
180
uniqueOpeners
36
0.00%
Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount
0
totalSentences
144
matches
(empty)
ratio
0
100.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount
36
totalSentences
144
matches
0
"She clutched the collar of"
1
"She caught sight of a"
2
"She pressed forward, her strides"
3
"She slipped inside, the smell"
4
"She scanned the crowd."
5
"She weighed the choice—follow the"
6
"She heard a voice, low"
7
"He wore a Saint Christopher"
8
"he muttered, voice muffled by"
9
"She felt the weight of"
10
"She thought of Morris, of"
11
"She turned to Tomás."
12
"He gestured toward a hidden"
13
"They slipped through the doorway,"
14
"She heard a voice, a"
15
"She turned, spotting a figure"
16
"She placed a palm on"
17
"She caught sight of the"
18
"She turned to Tomás, who"
19
"She followed, the tunnel narrowing,"
ratio
0.25
0.00%
Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount
136
totalSentences
144
matches
0
"Neon flickered from a sign"
1
"Harlow Quinn sprinted past the"
2
"She clutched the collar of"
3
"She caught sight of a"
4
"The suspect—a lanky man with"
5
"Quinn’s jaw tightened."
6
"She pressed forward, her strides"
7
"The alley narrowed, walls plastered"
8
"A gust of wind rattled"
9
"The suspect turned a corner,"
10
"Quinn slammed her shoulder against"
11
"The bookshelf swung open, revealing"
12
"She slipped inside, the smell"
13
"The passage led down a"
14
"The air grew colder, the"
15
"Quinn pushed the door, the"
16
"The room beyond was a"
17
"Lanterns hung from the ceiling,"
18
"A low hum of whispered"
19
"The Veil Market sprawled before"
ratio
0.944
0.00%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount
0
totalSentences
144
matches
(empty)
ratio
0
40.82%
Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences
91
technicalSentenceCount
13
matches
0
"She caught sight of a figure slipping into the bar’s back alley, a shadow that moved with practiced haste."
1
"She pressed forward, her strides cutting through the rain as if she were slicing through fog."
2
"The suspect turned a corner, disappearing behind a bookshelf that seemed out of place among the graffiti."
3
"He wore a Saint Christopher medallion that caught the lantern light."
4
"She thought of Morris, of the night the case turned supernatural, of the unanswered questions that haunted her."
5
"Tomás slipped past the stalls, his movements fluid, as if he’d walked these passages his entire life."
6
"The figure raised a hand, revealing a small, silver blade that caught the lantern light."
7
"Quinn darted forward, dodging a falling crate, her boots slapping against the wet stone."
8
"The tunnel beyond was a narrow shaft, lit by phosphorescent fungi that glowed a sickly green."
9
"She turned to Tomás, who stood at the tunnel’s mouth, his medallion glinting."
10
"The suspect’s footsteps echoed ahead, a rhythm that matched the pounding of her heart."
11
"She swung her wrist, the leather strap of her watch snapping, revealing a hidden blade she kept for emergencies."
12
"She turned, the rain still falling outside, the city’s lights reflecting off the wet pavement."
0.00%
Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags
10
uselessAdditionCount
4
matches
0
"Quinn replied, her tone flat,"
1
"he muttered, voice muffled by the crowd"
2
"he whispered, voice reverberating off the stone"
3
"she said, her voice low"
36.36%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
8
fancyCount
5
fancyTags
0
"Quinn snapped (snap)"
1
"he muttered (mutter)"
2
"Tomás shouted (shout)"
3
"he whispered (whisper)"
4
"he breathed (breathe)"
dialogueSentences
44
tagDensity
0.182
leniency
0.364
rawRatio
0.625
effectiveRatio
0.227
71.1803%