Run: 2026-03-06-01KK1JA3Q70NEKFBW89MFV0GWP

Run Details

Duration:
1m 23s
Cost:
$0.048960
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Rain slicked Soho into a smear of black glass and neon. Harlow Quinn drove through it with the wipers hammering a frantic tempo across the windscreen and the taste of stale coffee still sharp at the back of her tongue. Friday night traffic clogged Wardour Street, headlights glaring in the wet, pedestrians bunching under umbrellas that turned inside out in the wind. On the pavement ahead, under the green neon wash of The Raven’s Nest sign, a man in a dark coat shoved out through the bar’s door and broke into a run. Quinn saw the face only in pieces. Olive skin. Short dark curls plastered by rain. The flash of a chain at his throat as he turned. Then he was moving fast, head down, shoulder cutting through the crowd. “Damn it.” She jerked the car toward the kerb, ignored the horn that blasted behind her, and threw it into park half on the double yellows. By the time she was out, rain had already found the gap at the back of her collar. Cold water slid down her spine. She slammed the door, one hand under her jacket at the small of her back out of habit, then started after him. “Herrera!” If he heard, he gave no sign. Tomás Herrera ran with the loose, efficient economy of someone used to emergencies, never wasting a stride. Quinn knew him by reputation before she’d put a name to the face. Former paramedic. Quiet. Useful. The sort of man who made other people’s secrets survivable. He had been seen coming and going from places tied to her open inquiries, including the Nest, always at odd hours, always with that watchful, ready-to-leave look. Tonight she had waited in a car opposite the bar for three sodden hours because an informant had sworn Herrera was carrying something out for someone who did not want to be seen with it. Now the informant was probably drinking off his fee, and Quinn was sprinting through rain after a man who should have been answering questions. She shoved between two tourists stalled under an awning and nearly lost her footing on the glossy pavement. Her left wrist banged the brick wall; the leather strap of her watch darkened with water. Ahead, Herrera cut across the street against a red signal. A taxi braked hard and skidded, its tyres hissing. The driver leaned on the horn and shouted abuse out the open window. Herrera did not so much as glance back. Quinn did. It was training, not caution. Read the whole field. Glass-fronted shop to the left, locked. Alley to the right, too narrow for a clean approach. Drunk couple under scaffolding. No obvious accomplice. She hit the street at a run, rain lashing her face, and reached the opposite kerb two seconds behind him. He darted down an alley between a shuttered record shop and a takeaway. Quinn followed into darkness thick with bin stink and wet cardboard. Her shoes splashed through standing water. Somewhere above, a loose drainpipe clanged in the wind. Herrera vaulted a chain stretched between two bollards. She went over it a beat later, one hand on the wall for balance. At the alley’s mouth he risked a glance over his shoulder. In that instant she got him clear. Tomás Herrera. Twenty-nine, maybe. Warm brown eyes gone wide and hard in the sodium light. Rain flattening his curls to his skull. The scar along his left forearm white against wet olive skin where his sleeve had ridden up. Around his neck, a Saint Christopher medallion flashed and vanished. He looked less like a criminal than a man late to save somebody’s life. Then he slammed through a side gate into a narrow service yard and disappeared. Quinn’s breath burned. She pushed harder. Three years ago, Morris had turned a corner on a pursuit and never really come back. Not the same man, not even before he died six days later in hospital with blood in his lungs and a look on his face she still woke to some nights, because terror that deep did not belong to any ordinary street violence. The file had holes in it. Witnesses contradicted each other. CCTV corrupted at the exact wrong times. Officially, DS Morris had chased an armed suspect into a condemned warehouse by the river. Officially, the structure had partially collapsed. Officially was a load-bearing lie. Since then, whenever a case developed too many shadows and too few facts, her superiors found reasons to move resources elsewhere. Quinn had stopped asking permission to keep digging. Herrera burst from the yard onto a broader road and cut left toward the station entrance half-hidden behind scaffolding and roadworks barriers. Camden side streets now. He had covered more ground than she’d clocked. Either he knew shortcuts through the warren or she had underestimated how badly he wanted distance between them. The station sign above the stairwell was dead, the roundel cracked, the ticket hall closed for renovation months ago. Temporary fencing leaned open where workmen had clearly left off in a hurry before the weather turned. Herrera slipped through a gap in the hoarding and vanished underground. Quinn slowed for the first time. Rain hammered the plywood and pooled on the broken concrete. Beyond the gap, steps dropped into a throat of yellowing tile and shadow. No passengers. No station staff. No cameras she could immediately see. The city noise dulled at the entrance as if the hole in the ground swallowed sound. She drew a breath and keyed her radio. Static. Then dispatch, thin and irritated through interference. “Unit seven-two, say again?” “Detective Quinn,” she said, already knowing this was going nowhere. “I’m in pursuit of a male suspect, Tomás Herrera, entering disused access at Camden. Possible connection to active organized crime inquiry. I need transport and uniforms to—” The signal tore into white noise so abruptly it raised the hair on her neck. “Control?” Nothing but hiss. She lowered the radio. Rain ran off her brow into her eyes. The smart move was to hold the perimeter, call it in by mobile, wait for backup and a warrant and proper support. The smart move was what Morris had not done. It was also how suspects disappeared in London—into side doors, service tunnels, false names, and all the cracks a city offered those who understood them. Herrera had run because he was hiding something. The question was whether the thing he was hiding was evidence or fear. Quinn stepped through the gap in the fencing and started down. The air changed halfway to the bottom. Rain and petrol stink gave way to damp mineral cold touched with stranger notes: hot metal, old dust, incense, something sweet and rotten underneath. The station should have been dark. Instead a low amber glow pulsed somewhere below, not electric exactly, more like lantern light filtered through smoke. She reached the ticket hall and stopped dead. The abandoned station had become something else. Canvas awnings and patched tarps sprawled between cracked pillars. Old kiosks had been turned into stalls. Light spilled from oil lamps, naked bulbs rigged to illegal cables, candles set in bottles, and one hovering globe of pale green fire that drifted over a table laden with stoppered jars. Figures moved through the space in coats and hoods and expensive suits, carrying parcels wrapped in waxed cloth, cages covered with blankets, crates stencilled in symbols Quinn did not recognize. The air buzzed with voices in half a dozen languages and others that were not languages at all, sounds more like rustling paper or distant water over stone. A child no older than ten darted past her with a tray of steaming cups. His eyes reflected gold in the dimness like an animal’s and then looked ordinary on the second blink. At the far platform edge, a woman with silver rings all the way to her elbows argued over the price of a knife that seemed to ripple in its sheath as if breathing. One stall displayed strings of teeth threaded on red cord. Another offered little glass vials full of liquids that glowed blue, violet, blood-dark red. Quinn stood very still and let shock pass through her without owning her. Eighteen years on the job had taught her that disbelief was a luxury, and panic was for later if there was time. The Veil Market, she thought, though she had only heard the name in fragments from sources who sobered up and denied everything by morning. Hidden market. Moves every full moon. Entry by token. Fairy tale rubbish, except here it was under Camden, busy as Borough Market on a Saturday. And she had just walked in without invitation. A man near the stairs noticed her first. Heavyset, bald, butcher’s apron over a wool coat. His gaze dropped to her face, then her wet suit jacket, then the unmistakable line of her shoulder holster under the fabric. His expression sharpened. Conversation around his stall faltered. Like a stain spreading through water, attention shifted. Quinn scanned for Herrera. There—thirty yards ahead, moving fast along the old platform, angling between a stall selling black glass bottles and another piled with books bound in cracked hide. He looked back once. Even at this distance she read the conflict in him: surprise that she had followed, and something a lot closer to alarm than guilt. “Herrera!” Heads turned. Someone laughed, low and ugly. Someone else hissed for quiet. Herrera stopped. For one second she thought he might actually surrender. His chest rose and fell. Rainwater dripped from his coat hem onto the concrete. Then two men in long grey coats stepped out between them as if from nowhere. Not police. Too smooth, too deliberate. One wore gloves despite the heat underground. The other smiled without warmth. Herrera looked at Quinn and said, very clearly, “You shouldn’t be here.” The gloved man turned his head a fraction. “Neither should she.” Everything in Quinn’s body tightened into one clean line. She moved before thought caught up. “Police. Step aside.” That got her the laugh again, louder this time, from somewhere to her right. The crowd had begun to peel back, not in fear but with interest, creating a rough ring of space as if expecting entertainment. No one looked inclined to help. Several looked actively eager not to. The man without gloves took one step toward Herrera, hand slipping inside his coat. Quinn drew her weapon. The market inhaled. A dozen reactions hit at once. Gasps. Swearing. A stallholder yanked a tarp over a display of shining beetles. The child with the cups vanished like smoke. The gloved man froze, eyes narrowing. Herrera’s face drained. “Don’t,” he said. Quinn kept the muzzle steady, first on the man reaching inside his coat, then on the space between both men. “Hands where I can see them.” What came out of the coat was not a gun. It was a slim length of bone carved with tiny marks that crawled when she tried to focus on them. The temperature seemed to drop around it. The hairs rose on her arms. The man smiled wider. “You’re out of your depth, Detective.” So he knew her. Good. That made him a person who could bleed and be arrested. “Drop it.” Herrera took a single urgent step forward. “Quinn, listen to me. If you fire that in here, you won’t be shooting your way out.” “Then give me a better option.” “Put the gun down.” “Not happening.” The gloved man’s eyes slid toward the stairwell behind her, calculating distance, exits, witnesses. Or predators. Quinn could not tell which fit the room better. She heard movement at her back and pivoted just enough to catch three more figures drifting into place near the base of the stairs, cutting off her retreat without pretending otherwise. A trap, then. Not for her necessarily, but she was in it now. Herrera saw it too. He swore in Spanish under his breath, then reached under his own coat. Quinn snapped the gun toward him. “Don’t.” He stopped instantly, palms opening. “It’s the token.” “The what?” “The only reason they haven’t closed on you already.” He moved with exaggerated care and brought out a small object pinched between two fingers. White, rough, coin-sized. Bone. A token. Quinn understood in the same instant that she should have asked herself a more obvious question at the top of the stairs: if this place required entry, what had her unauthorized entrance just made her? Not a customer. Not neutral. Prey, maybe. Or contraband. Herrera held the token out toward her, but the grey-coated men shifted to block the line between them. “He came to trade,” said the one with the carved bone wand. “She came to hunt. Different rules.” Quinn’s jaw set. “I’m taking Herrera out of here.” Herrera let out a short, disbelieving breath. “Detective, with respect, right now I’m the closest thing you have to an escort.” Around them the market waited. Lamps smoked. Shadows quivered along tiled walls where old advertisements peeled in strips. Somewhere deeper in the tunnels a train screamed on tracks that should have been dead for years. Quinn measured the room, the numbers, the oddness she could not file into any known threat assessment. Her pulse thudded slow and hard. She hated ignorance more than danger, and she had both in abundance. She could back down, lower the gun, accept help from a man she had chased half across London and trust he was not leading her deeper into a grave. Or she could try to force an exit through a crowd that looked increasingly amused by the possibility of violence. Morris had gone into the dark blind. She would not make that mistake. Without lowering the weapon, Quinn shifted one step sideways until she had a pillar at her back and Herrera in clearer view. “Fine,” she said. “You talk. Fast.” His eyes flicked to the men in grey, to the watchers around them, then back to her. “There’s a buyer here tonight,” he said. “Not for drugs. For information. About the thing that killed your partner.” For the first time since she had entered the station, Quinn forgot the rain, the gun in her hand, the dozens of watching strangers. The world narrowed to Herrera’s face and the quiet certainty in his voice. The man with the carved bone clicked his tongue, annoyed now. “That wasn’t yours to sell.” Herrera did not look at him. “No,” he said. “But she followed me anyway.” The gloved man moved first, a blur from the corner of her vision. Quinn fired into the tiled ceiling. The shot cracked through the station like lightning in a crypt. Plaster rained down. Lamps swung. Screams burst from the stalls. The green fire globe snuffed out. In the shockbeat that followed, Herrera lunged, slammed his shoulder into the gloved man, and thrust the bone token into Quinn’s free hand. “Now you belong here,” he said, grabbing her sleeve. “Run.”
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags7
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences35
tagDensity0.2
leniency0.4
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
94.01% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2504
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"really"
count1
1
adverb"very"
count2
highlights
0"really"
1"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
74.04% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2504
totalAiIsms13
found
0
word"down her spine"
count1
1
word"efficient"
count1
2
word"structure"
count1
3
word"pulsed"
count1
4
word"electric"
count1
5
word"scanned"
count1
6
word"warmth"
count1
7
word"calculating"
count1
8
word"quivered"
count1
9
word"measured"
count1
10
word"pulse"
count1
11
word"grave"
count1
12
word"flicked"
count1
highlights
0"down her spine"
1"efficient"
2"structure"
3"pulsed"
4"electric"
5"scanned"
6"warmth"
7"calculating"
8"quivered"
9"measured"
10"pulse"
11"grave"
12"flicked"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences220
matches
0"t in fear"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences220
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tried to"
2"try to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences247
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen43
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2502
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions9
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
94.16% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions78
wordCount2328
uniqueNames19
maxNameDensity1.12
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Soho1
Quinn26
Wardour1
Street1
Raven1
Nest2
Herrera22
Saint1
Christopher1
Morris4
London2
Veil1
Market2
Camden2
Borough1
Saturday1
Spanish1
Rain5
Officially3
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Raven"
2"Herrera"
3"Saint"
4"Christopher"
5"Morris"
6"Rain"
places
0"Soho"
1"Wardour"
2"Street"
3"London"
4"Market"
5"Borough"
6"Spanish"
globalScore0.942
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences154
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"as if breathing"
1"knife that seemed to ripple in its sheath as if breathing"
2"as if expecting entertainment"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords0.799
wordCount2502
matches
0"not in fear but with interest, creating a rough ring of space as if expectin"
1"Not for her necessarily, but she was in it now"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences247
matches
0"surprise that she"
1"make that mistake"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs90
mean27.8
std26.41
cv0.95
sampleLengths
093
138
22
370
41
5113
624
774
854
961
1018
1163
1214
136
14102
1529
1652
1747
186
1950
2016
214
2237
2315
241
253
2668
2721
2811
2955
308
317
32106
3390
3435
3549
368
3754
384
3954
401
4112
422
4356
4412
4511
469
479
4849
4914
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences220
matches
0"been seen"
1"been turned"
62.54% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount8
totalVerbs388
matches
0"was carrying"
1"was probably drinking"
2"was sprinting"
3"was training"
4"was going"
5"was hiding"
6"was hiding"
7"was not leading"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences3
totalSentences247
ratio0.012
matches
0"Her left wrist banged the brick wall; the leather strap of her watch darkened with water."
1"It was also how suspects disappeared in London—into side doors, service tunnels, false names, and all the cracks a city offered those who understood them."
2"There—thirty yards ahead, moving fast along the old platform, angling between a stall selling black glass bottles and another piled with books bound in cracked hide."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2339
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"white against wet olive"
adverbCount82
adverbRatio0.035057716973065416
lyAdverbCount21
lyAdverbRatio0.00897819581017529
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences247
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences247
mean10.13
std8.02
cv0.792
sampleLengths
011
129
222
331
47
52
66
711
812
92
1024
1118
126
1322
141
157
1617
1713
182
191
201
2110
2227
2335
2424
2518
2616
2710
289
2913
308
312
325
334
346
3510
364
373
3820
3913
4011
416
429
438
4414
4511
467
472
482
4911
65.18% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats14
diversityRatio0.4251012145748988
totalSentences247
uniqueOpeners105
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount11
totalSentences192
matches
0"Then he was moving fast,"
1"Somewhere above, a loose drainpipe"
2"Then he slammed through a"
3"Officially, DS Morris had chased"
4"Officially, the structure had partially"
5"Officially was a load-bearing lie."
6"Then dispatch, thin and irritated"
7"Instead a low amber glow"
8"Then two men in long"
9"Too smooth, too deliberate."
10"Somewhere deeper in the tunnels"
ratio0.057
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount35
totalSentences192
matches
0"She jerked the car toward"
1"She slammed the door, one"
2"He had been seen coming"
3"She shoved between two tourists"
4"Her left wrist banged the"
5"It was training, not caution."
6"She hit the street at"
7"He darted down an alley"
8"Her shoes splashed through standing"
9"She went over it a"
10"He looked less like a"
11"She pushed harder."
12"He had covered more ground"
13"She drew a breath and"
14"she said, already knowing this"
15"She lowered the radio."
16"It was also how suspects"
17"She reached the ticket hall"
18"His eyes reflected gold in"
19"His gaze dropped to her"
ratio0.182
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount133
totalSentences192
matches
0"Rain slicked Soho into a"
1"Harlow Quinn drove through it"
2"Friday night traffic clogged Wardour"
3"Quinn saw the face only"
4"The flash of a chain"
5"She jerked the car toward"
6"She slammed the door, one"
7"Tomás Herrera ran with the"
8"Quinn knew him by reputation"
9"The sort of man who"
10"He had been seen coming"
11"Tonight she had waited in"
12"She shoved between two tourists"
13"Her left wrist banged the"
14"A taxi braked hard and"
15"The driver leaned on the"
16"Herrera did not so much"
17"It was training, not caution."
18"Alley to the right, too"
19"She hit the street at"
ratio0.693
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount5
totalSentences192
matches
0"By the time she was"
1"If he heard, he gave"
2"Now the informant was probably"
3"Either he knew shortcuts through"
4"Even at this distance she"
ratio0.026
97.26% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences94
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"Now the informant was probably drinking off his fee, and Quinn was sprinting through rain after a man who should have been answering questions."
1"Light spilled from oil lamps, naked bulbs rigged to illegal cables, candles set in bottles, and one hovering globe of pale green fire that drifted over a table …"
2"The air buzzed with voices in half a dozen languages and others that were not languages at all, sounds more like rustling paper or distant water over stone."
3"At the far platform edge, a woman with silver rings all the way to her elbows argued over the price of a knife that seemed to ripple in its sheath as if breathi…"
4"Another offered little glass vials full of liquids that glowed blue, violet, blood-dark red."
5"The crowd had begun to peel back, not in fear but with interest, creating a rough ring of space as if expecting entertainment."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags7
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Herrera looked (look)"
dialogueSentences35
tagDensity0.2
leniency0.4
rawRatio0.143
effectiveRatio0.057
96.0400%